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Level 5 exemplars and comments
Paper 1
Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
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Sample 1:
Part I, Section A, Question 4
Comments
This response examines a great variety of symbols, including the conch, the fire, the meat, the beast
and Piggy’s glasses, demonstrating a good understanding of their implications and the ways they
reinforce themes and contribute to plot development in Lord of the Flies. The section on how certain
symbols are associated with key characters is also very detailed, but could have been further
enhanced by indicating clearly what symbols Simon is connected with, and how they serve to reveal
his character.
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
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Sample 2:
Part II, Question 22
Comments
This insightful essay explores how mental and physical suffering are presented in Othello and The
Painted Veil from a wide range of perspectives. It shows the candidate’s thorough grasp of the topic
by analysing not only the characters’ thoughts and actions, their speeches and facial expressions, but
also how cinematography and imagery are used to create impact. It also clearly distinguishes how
these forms of suffering lead to different endings in the two texts.
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Paper 2
Sample 1:
Section B, Question 5
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Section B, Question 5
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Sample 1:
Section B, Question 5
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Sample 1:
Section B, Question 5
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Sample 1:
Section B, Question 5
Comments
(i) A very well-written, analytical response here. Points out similarities and differences in the
external influences. Commentary about sexual connotations in both poems very impressive.
An understanding of relevant poetic techniques is also woven into the answer.
(ii) Correctly identifies voice of “the Knight” and explains this as a structuring device,
providing insight into his predicament.
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Sample 2:
Section A, Question 1
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Sample 2:
Section A, Question 1
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Sample 2:
Section A, Question 1
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Sample 2:
Section A, Question 1
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Sample 2:
Section A, Question 1
Comments
(i) A very strong response in the way it is structured, developed and supported throughout.
This candidate points out the more obvious strategies but develops the answer further in
identifying Iago’s use of ambiguity, facial expressions, etc.
(ii) Demonstrates a clear understanding of not only Othello’s precise feelings here, but also the
ironic significance and foreshadowing in terms of later plot events.
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Paper 3
Sample 1:
Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
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Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
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Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
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Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
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Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
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Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
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Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
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Sample 1:
Extended Essay: Narrative and Voice in The Catcher in the Rye
Comments
The candidate has established a central thesis right at the beginning and succeeds in following this
line of argument throughout the essay. The essay follows a central argument which is
well-substantiated with detailed textual references. The essay displays a very thorough
understanding of the text, especially the narrative styles of the author. Ideas are presented succinctly
and confidently and are well-supported. The writing style is analytical and the essay is
well-structured. Completely fulfills the requirement of the task.
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Sample 2:
Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
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Sample 2:
Creative Writing: Head in the Clouds
Comments
An original short story with a sense of humour and suspense maintained throughout. The choice of
diction and description of the setting are appropriate to the theme and plot. Some thoughts are put
into developing the main character and the storyline. The story is well-structured with a twist of plot
towards the end. The ending echoes with the theme and the opening of the story. Engages the reader.
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