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THURSDAY, OCTOBER 22, 2015DO NOW:

① Sit with your partner from yesterday.

② Take out your Peer Conferencing packet and rough draft.

① Copy objective:

In order to make sure our work is not a hot mess, Miss Hessler wants us to “be able to evaluate peer informative writing for effectiveness in language and conventions” (Hessler 22).

HW: FINAL ESSAY DUE TOMORROW / VISUAL NARRATIVE DUE TOMORROW

THURSDAY, OCTOBER 22, 2015DO NOW:

① If you have your rough draft completed, sit next to your partner from yesterday on the left side of the room (near the door).

② If you do not have your rough draft, sit on the right side of the room (near the window).

③ Take out your Peer Conferencing packet and rough draft.

④ Copy objective:

In order to make sure our work is not a hot mess, Miss Hessler wants us to “be able to evaluate peer informative writing for effectiveness in language and conventions” (Hessler 22).


OBJECTIVE: TSWBAT evaluate strategies for argumentative writing and revision.

HW: Revise “Riqueza” paragraphs (Due Monday).

OBJECTIVE: TSWBAT evaluate peer informative writing for effectiveness in integration of evidence.

HW: Revise essay for Thursday (Final Draft due Friday) / Visual narrative (due Friday)

Now, pretend you are trying to disguise this quotation as a part of your own writing. This structure is how you integrate a quotation.

POORLY INTEGRATED QUOTE:The angel stayed peaceful, even though the townsfolk kept tormenting him. “The angel was the only one who took no part in his own act” (Garcia Márquez, “Very Old Man” 4).

STRONGLY INTEGRATED QUOTE:Even though the townsfolk kept tormenting him, the angel stayed peaceful, remaining “the only one who took no part in his own act” (Garcia Márquez, “Very Old Man” 4).

CITATIONS



Because our works are all by Gabriel Garcia Márquez, for this paper our citations should be formatted as follows: § (Garcia Márquez, “Very Old Man” #)

§ (Garcia Márquez, “Handsomest” #)

§ (Garcia Márquez, “Solitude” #)

For this paper, use the appropriate citation above IN FULL every time you pull material from that source.

OBJECTIVE: TSWBAT evaluate peer informative writing for effectiveness in language and conventions.


CLAUSES





DEPENDENT: (an incomplete thought)§ ex. “Because Europe was judging them”

INDEPENDENT: (a complete thought)§ ex. “Latin America felt isolated.”

Combine the two with a comma to make a complex sentence:

“Because Europe was judging them, Latin America felt isolated.”

“When Márquez talks about solitude, he means that they felt alone.”

DEPENDENT MARKER WORDS



A dependent marker word is any word that signals the beginning of a dependent clause.

LIST OF DEPENDENT MARKER WORDS:

§ After§ Although§ As§ Because§ Before§ Even if§ Even though§ In order to§ Since

§ Though§ Unless§ Until§ Whatever§ When§ Whenever§ Whether§ While

NOW, WITH YOUR ROUGH DRAFT

1. Every time you begin a sentence with one of these words, circle the word.

2. Underline the dependent clause that follows it (everything before the comma).

3. Count the number of dependent clauses you underlined.

4. Write this number of the top of your draft.



COMMON CONVENTION ERRORS



Common conventions errors we are making repeatedly in our writing include:

§ Comma splices

§ Run-ons

§ Fragments

§ Unclear syntax

§ Improper capitalization



COMMA SPLICE



Comma Splice: Joining two independent clauses with a comma

WRONG: We have written so many essays in the last few weeks, I’m glad Miss Hessler is not giving us another one this weekend.

SOLUTION: Add a semicolon or a comma + conjunction (FANBOYS)

RIGHT: We have written so many essays in the last few weeks; I’m glad Miss Hessler is not giving us another one this weekend.

RIGHT: We have written so many essays in the last few weeks, so I’m glad Miss Hessler is not giving us another one this weekend.



RUN-ON SENTENCE



Run-on: A sentence that contains too many clauses joined improperly

WRONG: First we wrote an essay about magical realism, next we wrote an essay about love, now we have to write an essay about solitude, and on top of all of that we had to write our own story and create a visual to go with it.

SOLUTION: Split into multiple sentences.

RIGHT: First, we wrote an essay about magical realism; next we wrote an essay about love. Now we have to write an essay about solitude. On top of all of that, we had to write our own story, and create a visual to go with it.



SENTENCE FRAGMENT



Fragment: An incomplete thought (not a full sentence)

WRONG: When we are done studying magical realism.

SOLUTION: Add ideas to create a full sentence.

RIGHT: When we are done studying magical realism, we will begin studying Asian literature, starting with a murder mystery about a samurai warrior.



UNCLEAR SYNTAX



Unclear syntax: Wording that makes your point difficult to understand

WRONG: In this essay, what Miss Hessler wants us to do is, in our claim, she wants us to define solitude.

SOLUTION: Rearrange your sentence for clarification.

RIGHT: In the claim of our essays, what Miss Hessler wants us to do is define solitude.



IMPROPER CAPITALIZATION



Improper capitalization: Not capitalizing proper nouns (or capitalizing common nouns)

WRONG: The story “a very old Man with enormous Wings” is about an Angel who gets exploited by the Townsfolk.

SOLUTION: Rearrange your sentence for clarification.

RIGHT: The story “A Very Old Man with Enormous Wings” is about an angel who gets exploited by the townsfolk.



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