Personal Statement Tips

or, How to Write a Kick-Butt College Essay

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**Unless otherwise cited, Mr. Afram took all the pictures in this presentation.

Tip #1: Focus on One Event

Focus on one event! It provides your essay with a focus and eliminates confusion for the reader.

A singular focus allows you to:

fully develop and explain one quality/experience; and

make the applicant (you!) more memorable—you become the “kid who traveled to Greece” or the “student who volunteered at the library.”Cal State LA

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Tip #2: Reflect on the Event

Remember to reflect on that event! What did you learn? Be clear and specific—identify one to three lessons.

Then, show how you apply those lessons at: SPHS, college, and/or your future occupation!

Reflection makes my eyes hurt.

Tip #3: Catch the Reader’s Attention!

Open your essay with a simple, relevant hook.

Admissions officers read thousands of essays—stand out!

Caution: Don’t write an overly-involved hook. Quickly invite the reader into the situation, then address the prompt.

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Tip #4: Watch the Language!

Watch your vocabulary! You want to sound intelligent, yet personable. Don’t OD on SAT!

Minimize flowery or poetic language—be direct. Some figurative language is acceptable, but be careful.

Don’t over-use of the pronoun “I” or “you”!

Methinks I should use better diction!

Tip #5: Proofread!

The old cliché is true: You never have a second chance to make a first impression!

Have several readers review your spelling and grammar—you won’t regret receiving additional feedback!

Boston: College Town, USA

Tip #6: Don’t Neglect the Details!

Don’t forget a creative, relevant title!

Watch the word limit! Depending on the school, most essays are between 450—600 words.

For Afram’s class, type the prompt across the top of the page!

Afram at MIT!

One Last Tip…

If you’re confused, stumped, or need some advice…

Don’t do anything drastic! Mr. Afram is eager to help.