Outline, Thesis Statement & Quotation

1. Outline and Thesis Statement2. Separate QUOTATION 3. Integrated QUOTATION4. Using ellipsis

2005/10/25Ref. http://www.eng.fju.edu.tw/research/documentation.html

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Outline

1. Outline2. Thesis Statement3. Quotation: Purposes4. Separated, but not indented.5. Separated, and indented. 6. Integrated. 7. Practice:1, 2, 3, 4. 8. Ellipses References

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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 The thesis: Accomplishment needs

cooperation to fulfill.? Slogan:

愛情需要兩個人百分之百合作， 和平需要跟對手百分之百合作， 成就需要跟努力百分之百合作， ? 健康需要跟身體百分之百合作． ? 百分之百的時候到了，番茄合作社．

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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 -Outline

Ideas of polarization Status of characters are designed to be

the opposite situations? Color Movement of characters? Scene design Music?

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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 – Outline (2)

Ideas of cooperation –Why here? Love needs cooperation from each

genders Peace needs two sites’ cooperation Award needs one’s hard work (?) Health needs the unification with the

body(?)

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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 – Outline (3)

The suggestive meaning –Why here? 100% means accomplishment though the

original condition is not harmonious; the ingredient is definitely pure.?

Complement can make the situation different.?

“Cooperative association” has the meaning of cooperation and also it is a selling place, to sell foods, to sell health

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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 – Revised Thesis

To sell the ideas of 100% and cooperation, the CF shows the apparently opposing things working well together, though neither their opposition is real nor the idea of cooperation.

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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 – Revised Structure Key words: 100% and cooperation, false

opposition. 1. Opposition2. false opposition:

1. diligence and “I” 100% diligent?,2. health and I 100% healthy bodies?

3. Cooperation1. Cooperation, friendship, 2. Cooperation company, corporation a happy world of tomato juice?

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Thesis Statement (2) Thesis statement: to express there are too

many unnatural things on the world, and people almost forget the original and true side of everything, including the affections.

The song expresses both through the lyrics and the melody that modern people are exhausted by all kinds of artificial things they use, put on themselves, turn themselves and their love into.

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3. Quotation: Purposes Purposes: avoid plagiarism, increase credibility

by giving evidence or support, for close analysis.

Kinds: paraphrase and direct quote (further divided into: separated and integrated)

Things to Consider: Whether the quotes are supportive or

distractive. (Don’t let the quotes to speak for you.)

Punctuation & format; Smoothing the syntax with transitions, etc. USING ELLIPSES and other alterations of

sources.

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3-1. Separated Quotation

St. Paul declared, "It is better to marry than to burn."

In his first epistle to the Corinthians, St. Paul commented on lust: "It is better to marry than to burn.“ (a separate unit of the sentence.)

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3-2. Separated and Indented As for the novels, Atwood's debut The Edible Woman locates her vital position in Canadian literature. [transition] For Atwood, "literature is a means to cultural and personal self-awareness. … In her opinion, Canada's central reality is the act of survival: Canadian life and culture are decisively shaped by the demands of a harsh environment. Closely related, in Atwood's view, to this defining act of survival is the Canadian search for territorial identity"([who said it?] 21). Thus in Atwood's novels, the characters, especially the female protagonists, are the representation of seeking for survival and quest for self-identity.

(The quote 1) should be more than four lines and thus put in a separate paragraph with indentation; 2) is too long.)

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3-2. Separated and Indented –Correction

As for the novels, Atwood's debut The Edible Woman locates her vital position in Canadian literature. [transition] For Atwood,

“[. . .] Literature is a means to cultural and personal self-awareness. […] Canada's central reality is the act of survival: Canadian life and culture are decisively shaped by the demands of a harsh environment. Closely related, in Atwood's view, to this defining act of survival is the Canadian search for territorial identity.“ ([who said it?] 21)

Thus in Atwood's novels, the characters, especially the female protagonists, are the representation of seeking for survival and quest for self-identity. (The quote still is too long, and the paragraph not coherent.)

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3-3. Separated -Correction (getting a topic sentence; reducing irrelevant parts) In Atwood's novels, the characters, especially the female protagonists, seek for survival and self-identity. For Atwood, "Canada's central reality is the act of survival: Canadian life and culture are decisively shaped by the demands of a harsh environment. Closely related, in Atwood's view, to this defining act of survival is the Canadian search for territorial identity"(Name 21). For instance, Atwood's debut, The Edible Woman, deal with a woman’s attempt to survive in a city where humans are ‘eating’ up one another. (More on this novel, or the other novels by Atwood. )

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3-4. Integrated Quotations Separated: As ~ points out, “For Mrs. Warren to be a prostitute

and want her daughter to be respectable would be hypocritical only if her original motive for entering the ‘profession’ had been an innate love for it, rather than a realization that solid material foundations are the precondition for any hope of a better life” 74 .﹙ ﹚

Integrated: (syntax smoothed) Mrs. Warren is not hypocritical in wanting her

daughter to be ‘respectable,’ since her motivation for going into the business of prostitution is not, as ~ put it, “an innate love for it” but “a realization that solid material foundations are the precondition for any hope of a better life” 74 .﹙ ﹚

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3-4. Integrated As a professor of history, Tony tells her students, “history is a construct,…any point of entry is possible and all the choices are arbitrary”(4).Correction: As a professor of history, Tony tells her students that “history is a construct, [. . .] ,any point of entry is possible and all the choices are arbitrary”(4).

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3-4. integrated…it points out in Critical that “it was inevitable that Humanist interest in the Latin and Greek classics should also produce a new kind of English tragedy”(221).Corrections: Critical Reader points out that “it was inevitable that Humanist interest in the Latin and Greek classics should also produce a new kind of English tragedy”(221). Emphasis placed on a certain idea: Critical Reader points out that with contemporary humanist interest in the Latin and Greek classics, producing a new kind of English tragedy was “inevitable”(221).

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3.5 Practice (1)

c. the “broken man who she live with”—A plastic surgery doctor who has

suffered burning and part of him is polystyrene

d. the “narrator” himself—*unnecessary

A man who loves “She” in the lyrics but confusing whether she is real or not.

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3.5 Practice (2)

c. The young man hysterically asks him, “Is it because we’re all going to die?” He answers, “No, you don’t know what you ask of me.” However, finally, he tells them why he is lying down there, and, after knowing the answer, all of them do so.

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3.5 Practice (3) c.Lyrics: A green plastic watering can

For a fake chinese rubber plantIn the fake plastic earth

That she bought from a rubber manIn a town full of rubber plansTo get rid of itself

It wears her out, it wears her out

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3.5 Practice (3)

Quotation: All the world, the lyrics shows, is filled with

plastic objects; such as, a plastic watering can, a rubber plant and the “fake plastic earth.” Even human beings can be made of rubber and a town can be full of rubber plans, which the town uses “[to] get rid of itself.”

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3.5 Practice (4)

Lyrics: “Just” by Radiohead You do it to yourself, you do

And that's what really hurtsIs that you do it to yourselfJust you and no one elseYou do it to yourselfYou do it to yourself

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3.5 Practice (4)

Quotation 1: A man may fall on his slippery liferoad

and hope to get sympathy. However, he might be intended to fall though he already knows there is an obstacle ahead as the lyrics of the band Radiohead puts it, ‘you just do it to yourself.’ (Sentence Structure)

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3.5 Practice (4)

Quotation 1: --CorrectionIn life a man may fall on a slippery road

and expect to get sympathy from others. However, he may intend to fall, although he already knows there is an obstacle ahead. As the lyrics of “Just” (by Radiohead) puts it, ‘you just do it to yourself.’

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3.5 Practice (4)

Quotation 2: In Radiohead’s lyrics, people

misunderstand what they are afraid of uncertain things come from outside, but instead “you do it to yourself, you do and that’s what really hurts,’ which indicated these uncertain things comes out of ourselves. (Run-on S)

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3.5 Practice (4)

Quotation 2:Correction In Radiohead’s lyrics, people thought

that what they are afraid of came from outside, and it is hurting to realize that “[they] do it to [themselves].” (Run-on S)

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3.5 Practice (4) --Good!

Quotation 3: (The blue parts have been corrected.)

By repeating the words, “you do it yourself,” Radiohead illustrates the idea that we often suffer from the consequences that are actually caused by ourselves, because it is ‘just you and no one else” that have brought about such consequences.

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3.6 Ellipsis

Improper: Besides, in “this is my greatest performance and all of the actresses who won my parts will say….” The life for women is like to play a role for performance; life is an image for others. Even when one of the women disappears, there are still many women eager to take her role.

Meaning incomplete (like some email writings. )

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Ellipsis -revised

Another source of constraint in this woman’s life is that of playing roles, of which even her death is one. Upon her death, the other “actresses” who will take over her role praise it by saying: “how wonderful to let yourself go that mad, how wonderful [. . .] ,“ as if it were a matter of performance on the stage.

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Reference: Quotation

Types of quotation & punctuation: http://www.eng.fju.edu.tw/con&com_databank/Marguerite/SSW3.htm

Verbs to use; proper format and varying sentence structure. http://www.eng.fju.edu.tw/con&com_databank/Marguerite/SSW2.htm