Here we go again…Step 1

• Review your “pros” chart from yesterday. Add some adjectives, and add some concrete, sensory details.

• Find FIVE spots in your essay to develop.

Step 2Annie Dillard said, “All of the action on the page happens in the verbs.  Verbs control when something is happening in the mind of the reader.”

• Circle all of your verbs, including am, is, are, was, were. See if you can substitute stronger, more vivid verbs for the ones you have.

• Revise (at least) FIVE.

Step 3

• Read your paper to EDIT any misspellings, run-ons, fragments, comma splices, or other punctuation issues.

Step 4• Revise for

hedgers, gushers, and absolutes. Find ‘em and cross ‘em out.

Hedgers:Maybe, might, kind of,

sometimes, it seems like…

Gushers:Very, so, really,

overwhelmingly….Absolutes:Always, never, all the

time…