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HowtoAvoidBadWritingPart2
Wecontinueourlookatthekindofthingsthatcausebadwriting,andwaystoavoidthemsothattheynevercropupagain.Aswithmostthings,onceyoulearntorecognisethem,youllbebetterequippedtodealwiththemwhenediting.
InPart1,welookedatsequenceofactionsandseparatingcharacteractionsinordertoachievebettersentencestructuresandavoidsomeoftheflawswhicharecommonplaceinfictionwriting.
Thisweekwelltakeadetailedlookatacoupleofmorebadwritingexamples,andwaystoeliminatethemfromyournarrative.
UnnecessarySpeechAttribution
Thereisonethingthatmanywritersstilldowhenitcomestowritingdialoguetheycontinuetogetsentencestructureincorrectbyattributingspeechtagswhentheyarenotactuallynecessary.
Inlaymenstermsspeechtags,orattributions,areawayofidentifyingthespeaker.
Foragentsorpublishersitcanbeespeciallyinfuriatingwhenwritersdothis,becausedialoguestructurereallyisntdifficulttodo,andforwritersseekingafootinthedoortobeingpublished,itcanbethedifference
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betweenrejectionandacceptance.
HeresasimpleexamplewhichisverysimilartothetypeIseeallthetime,especiallyinselfpublishedstories,wherethewriterhasnttakenthetimetolearnthecraftofwriting,norunderstoodtheprocessofediting:
Johnpointedandsmiled.Haha,hetittered.
Thisisaclassicmistake.Firstly,thewriterhasdenotedwhoisspeakingJohnbyplacingtheactionaheadofthedialogue.ThereisnofurtherneedforspeechattributionandthereforehetitteredisnotrequiredbecausewealreadyknowthatJohnisspeaking.
Inthisexample,theattributionbecomessuperfluousandthewritingsuffersbecauseofit.Thecorrectstructureisasfollows:
Johnpointedandsmiled.Haha.
Thisisclearandconcise.Theactionbeforethedialoguetellsthereaderwhoisabouttospeak,andbecauseitsclearwhoisspeaking,thereisnoneedtoaddspeechtags.
Heresanotherexample:
Anothertimeperhaps,andIwouldhavepaidmoreattention,Johnsaid.Heshrugged.ButIguessIwasjusttoobusyconcentratingonotherthings,headded.
YoucanseethatthewriterhasmadeitclearthatJohnisspeakingbytheJohnsaidattribution.Thenaftertheaction,thewriterhasmadethemistakeofaddingafurtherattributionofheaddedwhichissurplustorequirementsandshouldnotbeplacedinthesentence.Thisshowsthewriterslackofskillindialoguestructureandtheresultisbadwriting.
Thecorrectstructureshouldbe:
Anothertimeperhaps,andIwouldhavepaidmoreattention,Johnsaid.Heshrugged.ButIguessIwasjusttoobusyconcentratingonotherthings.
Ifyouhavealreadydenotedwhoisspeaking,youdonthavetoputhesaidorshesaidetc.Speechattributionsarejustthat,theytellthereaderwhois
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speaking.
Anyinstanceofthiskindoferrorisasignofbadwriting.Makesurethatyoufullyunderstandactionversusdialoguestructure.Itsimperativethatsomethingasbasicandasfundamentalasthisispresentedcorrectlywhensubmittingyourworktoagentsandpublishers,otherwiseyouwillfailtoimpressthem.
ShiftingPointofView
Anothercommonfauxpas,andasuresignofbadwriting,istheeverchangingPOV.
ThisisanothercommonerrorbywriterswhohavenotstudiedhowPOVworks.Theresultisthatscenesswapviewpointfromcharactertocharacterandthereforehavenocohesion.
POVisfixedforwhichevercharacteryouareconcentratingoninanyrunningsceneorchapter.Ifyoustartachapterwithonecharacter,youshouldsticktothatcharacterspointofviewuntilyouhaveachancetoswapviewpointwithanewsceneoranewchapter.
Neverswitchviewpointsduringascene.Inotherwords,dontstartoffthescenewithCharacterAsviewpointandthenswaptoCharacterBsviewpointhalfwaythrough.Itcausesuntoldconfusionforthereadertryingtofollowthestory,thecharactersandtheplotpointsetc.,andtheydontwantthetaskmademoredifficultwitheverchangingPOVs.Italsomakesthestorydisjointed,whichmeansthereaderwillfindithardtoempathiseorconnecttoanycharacters.
Theotherrealdanger,ofcourse,isthatyoumaywellendupinadvertentlylettinganothercharactertakeoverthestorycompletely.
Writerswhoarenotcarefulsometimesfindthatsecondarycharacterstakeoverthestory,leavingthemaincharacterwhosestoryyouaretellingoutinthecold.Ortheymightfindthatduringthereadingstage,anothercharacterseemstohavemorescenesorchaptersthanthemaincharacter.
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TherearesomanygoodreasonsforkeepingatightreinonPOV.Itimprovesstorycohesionbyallowingthereadertofollowthemaincharactersjourney,ithelpsyourreaderkeeptrackofyourcharacters,ithelpsthemconnectwiththosecharactersandaboveall,itensuresyourmaincharacterremainsthedominantcharacterthroughout.
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HowtoAvoidBadWritingPart1
Weveallbeenguiltyofbadwritingatsomepointduringourwritingcareers,moresoatthestartofourwritingjourney,whenitsallnewanddauntingandwelacktheexperience.Infact,badwritingisallpartofthatjourney.Weallhavetowritebadlyinordertoimproveandbecomebetterwriters.
Thatsaid,therearemanyaspectsofstorytellingthatwritersstillhaventgottogripswith,thekindofthingsthatareeasilyrectified,butmoreimportantly,areeasilyavoidable.Unfortunately,manywritersjustcantbebotheredtocorrectbadwritingor,worsestill,theyignorantlythinkitsokay.
Badwritingmaybeokayforanobliviouswriter,butnotforadiscerningagentorpublisher.
Andbecausetherearesomanymisdemeanourswherebadwritingisconcerned,IvecollatedtogethersomethatIhavecomeacrossfromtimetotimewhilecritiquing.
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Writersconstantlyaskmeaboutthis.Itseemstofoilanumberofbeginners,whichisunderstandable,butmoreexperiencedwritersfallfoul,too.
Onceyouunderstandtheprincipalsbehindcorrectsentencestructuring,however,themistakesbecomeavoidable.Therearenoexcusesforgettingthiswrong.
Firstly,writersshouldbeawareofandrecognisethatthefictionalworlddiffersfromtherealworldinmanydifferentways.Onesuchwayisthewayweportrayactions.
Intherealworld,wedoseveralthingsatoncewepickupaphonetomakeacallwhileeatingormovingthingsaroundadesk,whileatthesametimechattingtosomeonenearbyalldonewithoutevenconsciouslythinkingaboutit.Thesearemultipleactionscarriedoutunconsciously.
Inthefictionalworldthesemultipleactionscanttakeplace.Iknowthisdoesntmakemuchsense,butthereisagoodreasonwhy:itsbecauseofthewayfictioniswritten.Thestructureandorderofactionsneedstobeclearforthereadertofollow,andmoreimportantly,itneedstobesequential,ratherthanajumbleofactions,andespeciallysoiftheyarereadingaboutseveralcharactersinonescene,alldoingvariousactions.
Clarityisalwayskeytowriting,andsosequenceofactionsareimportanttomaintainthatclarity.
Thereasonwedonthavecharactersdoingadozenthingsatonceistoavoidlackofclarity,ambiguity,readerconfusionandultimately,badwriting,forexample:
Johnheardthedoorbellandwalkedovertothedoorandanswereditwiththetoasthalfwayoutofhismouth,whichhewaschewing,andhegesturedtothewomanonthefrontdoorsteptoenter,lickingthebutteroffhisfingersandmovingasidetoletherin...
Thecharacterisdoingtoomuchforthescene,whichmeansthewritercantrelatetheseactionsclearly,(notwithoutaddingafewextraparagraphsofexposition).Itbecomestoobusy,disjointedandconfusing.Itsalsoambiguous.
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Nowcompareitwithaversionthatleavesoutthenonsenseandconcentratesonsequentialactions.
Johnheardthedoorbell.Hefinishedthelastmouthfuloftoastwalkedovertothedoorandansweredit.Hegesturedtothewomanonthefrontdoorsteptoenterandmovedasidetoletherin
Thisversionismuchbetter.Itsclearandorderedanddoesntcarryanyconfusionorambiguityinthecharactersactions.Hisactionshappeninaspecificorder.Thatspreciselywhycharactersshouldreallyonlydoonethingatatimeinfiction.
SeparateYourCharacterActions
Anotherexampleofsentencemuddlingiswherewritersunwittinglycreateambiguitywithmultipleactions,whereactionsarenotclearlydefinedforthecharacter.Writersmustrememberthatcharactersshouldnotdotwothingsatonceinfiction.Thisgoesagainstwhatwedoinreallifeanddoesntmakesense,butasalreadypointedoutcharacteractionsmustbesequentialorordered.
Forexample:
Lizknewtimewasoftheessence.Shecalledtheambulanceanddrovetothehospital.
Lizmanagedtodotwothingssimultaneously.Shecalledtheambulanceanddrovetothehospital.Whileinourmindswecanlogicallymakesenseofthisweunderstandshecalledtheambulanceandthenshedrovetothehospitalbutthewayitiswrittencausesconfusionandambiguityforthereader.
Toavoidthis,thesentencemightbebetterstructuredasfollows:
Lizknewtimewasoftheessence.Shecalledtheambulance.Afterwards,shedrovetothehospital.
HeresanotherexampleofwhatIseeallthetime.
Shekissedhimandracedtothedoor.
Again,weknowshekissedhimandthenracedtothedoor,butitdoesntreadwellbecauseofthewaythesentenceisstructured.Butimprovingthestructurebringsclarity.
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Shekissedhim.Excited,shethenracedtothedoor.
Thereisonecommondenominatoratworkherethewordand.Thisiswhatcausestheactionstobecomesimultaneous.Removetheandandrearrangethestructureofasentenceandyouwillfindthesimultaneousactionswilldisappear,astheexamplesaboveshow.Byremovingandfrombothexamples,theybecomeclearer.
Whereverpossibletrytoavoidsimultaneouscharacteractions,andthinkcarefullyaboutthesequenceofcharacteractionsifyouwanttoeliminatebadwritingandimprovesentencestructuring.
Theyreallyaresimpleerrorsandyetsomanywritersstillwritelikethis.
InParts2and3welllookatafewmoreexamplesofthekindsofthingsthatlendtobadwritingandwaystoavoidthem.
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LiterarydevicesImproveyournarrativePart2
Inpart1,welookedatthemostcommonliterarydevicesthekindthatmostofushaveusedregularlyperhaps,thingslikesymbolism,metaphororforeshadowing.
Therearelesswellknownonestoo,oneswemayhaveheardofbutprobablydontknowtoomuchabout.Butknowingaboutthemandhowtheycanenlivenyournarrativeisapositivething,afterall,themoreknowledgethewriterhas,thebetterthewritingingeneral.Therefore,anoverallknowledgeofasmanyliterarydevicesaspossibleisagoodthing.
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So,whicharethelesscommonones,andwhatdotheydo?
EuphonyConnotationAllusionAssonanceMotif
Euphonyreferstopleasantsoundscreated,particularlywithsoftvowelsandsoftconsonants.ItderivesfromtheGreekwordeuphonos,whichlooselymeanssweetvoiced.Inotherwords,itsaboutwordsorphrasesthatarenotedfortheircharm,harmonyormelodyinthesoundsthattheycreate.
Itisoftenfoundinliterarynovelsorpoetryandwritersuseittomakethenarrativemelodiousandlovelysothatthewordsinthesentencereallydorolloffthetonguewhenyoureadthem.Forexample,acoupleoflinesfromAlfredLordTennysonsTheLotosEaters:
Inwhichitseemedalwaysafternoon.Allroundthecoastthelanguidairdidswoon
Ofcourse,youdonthavetobealiteraryauthortoencompasseuphony.Whateverthegenre,euphonywilldefinitelymakeyournarrativesoundmoremelodiousandpleasant.
Youmayhaveheardofconnotation,butexactlydoesitmean?Connotationistheassociationpeoplemakewithwordsthatareinadditiontoitsliteraldefinition.Thoseassociationscouldbeemotionalandcultural,personaloruniversal,goodorbad.
Forexample,takethewordkill.Everyoneknowswhatitmeans.Butithasotherconnotations.Ohmygodthatjokekilledme!orthepainiskillingme.WhataboutIcouldkillforadrinkorYouresofunny,youjustkillme.
Thinkoftheconnotationsofotherwordstheyarenotnecessarilywhatyouthinktheymean.Blueisntjustacolour.Itsamood,astateofemotionalbeing,too.
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Animalcanmeandifferentthingsacreature,oritcansymboliseanegative,primitivehumantrait.
Aswriterswedontalwaysseetheseconnectionswhenwriting,butifyouwanttogiveyourreadersomethingmoretothinkabout,thereisnoreasonwhyyoushouldntuseconnotationsreaderswillusetheirownpersonalemotionsinassociationwithcertainwordstointerpretthosemeanings.
Allusionmeanstheauthorismakingareferencetoasubjectmattersuchasaplace,eventorpersoninordertomakeapointorgetamessageacross.Itcanbeareferencetoprettymuchanythingitcanbeinferredordirectanditisinterestingwaytoengagethereader.
Forexample,bycomparingacharactertoMotherTeresa,whetherthroughdescriptionofdialogue,theallusionisthatthecharacterinquestionissomeonewhoismorallysoundandgood.Ifyoucomparedsomewheretolookinglikethedesolatesandsofadesert,thenthereaderwouldsensesomewherethatisbarrenandlifeless.
Readanybookanditwillbesprinkledwithallusions.Somearesubtle,somearequiteobvious,buttheyareawayforwriterstomakeapoint,onesthatreaderswillremember.
Assonanceisanotherliterarydeviceyoumayhaveheardof,butprobablydontrealisetheroleitcanplayincreativenarrative.Itreferstotherepetitionofcertainsoundsproducedbyvowelswithinneighbouringwordsinasentenceorphrase.
Althoughitisverysimilartoalliteration,assonanceisabouttherepetitionofvowelsinwordsandisparticularlyattractivetopoeticorliterarywriters,whospendagreatdealoftimeandeffortgivingtheirnarrativesuchflourishes.
Heresasimpleexample:Wavespushedagainstthebow,tocrushthesoundtoasimperinghush.Herethevoweluisrepeatedinneighbouringwords,giving
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thesentenceaslightharmony.
Thethingaboutassonanceisthatisitaboutsoundandthewaywewantthenarrativetosoundtothereader.Itisyetanothercreativewaytoaddthoselovelybrushstrokestootherwiseflatstorytelling.
Whatisamotif?Playwrightsandliteraturegraduatesshouldbefamiliarwiththisparticularliterarydevice,becauseitappearsalotinplaysandliteraryworks.Amotifisanysubject,object,actionorsoundthatispresentthroughoutthestory.Writersuseittoestablishamoodoradevelopingtheme,somethingthatwillresonatewiththereader.
Motifsarenottobeconfusedwithsymbolism,becausesymbolsshouldappearonlyafewtimesinthestorytoevokeimageryandemotionhoweveramotifisarecurringelementwithinthestory.
Theycanbeanything,aslongastheyappearasaconstantthroughoutthestory,soforinstanceafullmooncouldbeamotif.Orapaintingcould.Maybetheoceanisthemotif,orevenacolourorsound.Justmakesurethatthemotifispartofthestoryandthereforehelpsdevelopthemainthemeorcharacters.
Asprinklingofthesedifferentliteraryflourishesonlyenhancesandenrichesyournarrative.Somehappenquitenaturallyduringthecourseofwriting,othersneedsomethought,buthoweveryoudoit,theyaddafreshdimensiontothestory,themesandthecharacters.
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kindofelementsthatwritersemploytoenrichandimprovethenarrativeinordertogivegreaterdepthandmeaningtoastory.Inotherwords,theyhelpthereaderreadbetweenthelines.
Someliterarydevicesareobviousmetaphor,symbolismorforeshadowing.Butthereareplentyofotherliterarydevicesavailablethatarelesswellknown,andsometimeslesscommonlyused,buttheystillemphasiseandbringstrengthtothenarrativethingslikeassonance,euphony,connotationandallusionetc.
Literarydevicesarenumerous,andwritersdonthavetouseeveryoneinexistenceorusethemoneverypage.Theyonlyneeduseafewdottedthroughoutanoveltoenhancethestoryandgiveitdeepermeaningforthereader.
Ineffect,theyaretheretobenefitthewritingasmuchasthewriterandreader,ifwritersarewillingtousethem.
Mostwritersrarelythinkaboutanythingdeeperthanthebasicstructureandflowofthestory.Howmanyofusconsciouslythinkaboutmetaphororsymbolism?Howmanyofuspondertheassonanceofsentences?Howmanyofusmuseaboutmakinganalogies,orforeshadowing?
Theanswerisnotmany.
Butshouldwe?Thethingforwriterstorememberisthatwritingisntjustaboutstringingastorytogether.Somuchmoreisinvolved.Whilewecantalwaysconsciouslyremembereverythingthereistoknowaboutthecraft,wecantrytorememberasmuchaspossiblewhenitcomestoaddingthoseflourishesateditingstagetogivethestorymoresubstance.
Theyarethere,afterall,theretomakethestorysomuchmorethanjustmerewordsonawhitebackground.Iftheopportunityarisestocreateametaphor,doso.Ifyoucancreateassonance,thendoso.Ifyouhavethechancetoforeshadow,thengoforit.
Theliterarydevicesthatyouwillprobablybefamiliarwithareasfollows:
MetaphorAnalogyForeshadowing
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SimileSymbolismCharacterisationAlliteration
Letslookattheminmoredetail.
Almostallwriterswillhaveheardwhatmetaphoris,eveniftheydontalwaysunderstandit.
Metaphorsareagreatwaytoaddcolourfulbrushstrokestothenarrative,waystoengagethereaderbeyondthewordstheyread.Theyareusedbywriterstomakeacomparisonbetweenpeople,things,animals,orplacesandtheyrangefromthesimpletocomplex,butsomefamousexamplesarelifeisaboxofchocolates,alltheworld'sastageandalightintheseaofdarkness.
Eachoneoftheseexampleshasadeepermeaningifyoulookbeyondthesurface.
Analogyisalsoacommondeviceusedbywriters.Theyareusedwhenevertheywanttoshowcomparisonsbetweentwodifferentthingstoshowasimilarity.Forinstance,likeafishoutofwaterisawellknownanalogy.Inotherwords,beinginasituationthatisalienoruncomfortablemakeyouliterallylikeafishoutofwater.
Foreshadowingisafamousliterarydevice,andoneofmyfavouritewaystoshowthereaderthethingsthatmighthappenlaterinthestory.Itsnotjustabouttellingthestoryoutrightitsaboutbringingeverylayerofthestorytolifeforthereader.Foreshadowingasaliterarydeviceisagreatwaytoallowthereadertodigbeneaththedifferentlayersanddiscoverstuffforthemselves.
Thesimplestexampleistheuseofdarkcloudsapproaching.Thiscouldforeshadowbadthingstohappenlaterinthestory.Theuseofaraveniscommonplacedeathalwaysfollows.Orperhapsyoucanuseitindialoguebetweencharacterswhomayhintatsomething.
Simileissimilartometaphor,butworksslightlydifferently,becauseitisafigureofspeechthatcomparestwothingsorpeople,butwhicharenotsimilar.Forinstance,brightasabuttonisafigureofspeech,andwegenerallyunderstanditsmeaningdespitethetwoaspectsbrightandbuttonbeing
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completelydissimilar.
Youdonthavetousesimile,butiftheopportunityisthere,thenaddit.
Anotherfavouriteofmineissymbolism.Iusethisalotinmyfiction.Itallowsthewritertohintatcertainthemeswithoutbeingtooobvious,byveilingdeepermeaningsinthenarrativeandmakingthereaderdelvedeeperintothetext.
Writersdothisbyusingcolour,sounds,objects,weatherandsoon.Forinstance,Ifindtheuseofcolourtobequiterevealing,soIusethistosymbolisedifferentthemesinastory,particularlythecoloursredandblack,becauseoftheirassociationswithlife,deathormortality.
Characterisationissomethingeverywriterwillknowallabout.Youprobablythinkcharacterisationdoesntcountasaliterarydevice,butitdoes,becauseitisvitaltoanystory.
Goodcharactersdriveyourstory,somakethemstandout,makethemmemorable,makethemdifferent.Makethereadercareaboutthem.Thebetteryourcharacterisation,thebetterthestoryyoucreate.
Alliterationisagreatliterarydevice,andnotalwaysusedtopotential.Wordsthatstartwiththesamesoundandareusedclosetogetherinaphraseorsentenceisalliteration.Forexample,theskyseemedtosigh,softagainstthebreeze.Thessoundmakesthesentencecomealiveitcreatesimageryforthereader.Orwhataboutclean,coldandclinicalorbeneathbarbedbushes,hewaited...
Theuseofalliterationgivesapoeticfeeltosentences.
Withtheexceptionofcharacterisation,whichisaconstantthroughoutthestory,youcanuseanyofthesedevices,butdontoverloadthenarrative.
Thereare,ofcourse,lessknownliterarydevicesavailabletowriters,andarenotusedasmuch,buttheyreeffectivenonetheless:
EuphonyConnotationAllusionAssonanceMotif
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Inpart2welltakeacloserlookattheselessknownliterarydevices,andhowtheycanaffectthenarrativeinapositiveway.
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HowtoAvoidAuthorIntrusion
Ivewrittenaboutthissubjectinthepast,butIkeepgettingaskedaboutit,soitsworthanothervisit,especiallyifyouarenewtowritingandyouwanttounderstandwhatauthorintrusionis,andmoreimportantly,howtoavoidit.
Newwriters,inparticular,sometimeshaveatendencytointrudethenarrative.Itsnottheirfaultitissometimesdonewithoutrealising,andthatsbecausemanynewwritersarentarmedwithawealthofknowledgeandexperiencetoalwaysknowthesethings.
Thatswherethebeautyofeditingcomesin.Wecanspottheanomaliesandcorrectthem.Notonlythat,butallwritershavedoneitatsomestageintheirwritingcareers,soitisquiteacommonoccurrence.
WhatdoesAuthorialIntrusionmean?
Inbasicterms,authorintrusionhappenswhentheauthorlosessightofthestoryandspeaksdirectlytothereaderthroughthenarrativeorcharacters.Theyinadvertentlyprojecttheirownbeliefs,opinionsorideasintothestory.Inotherwords,anysocial,politicalorreligiousbeliefsshouldcomefromyourcharacters,incontextwiththestory,andnotfromyoudirectly.
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Italsomeansthatsometimesauthorsunintentionallyprojectthemselvesintothenarrative.Theauthorbecomesthestaroftheshow,notthecharacters.Newwritersdothisalotbecausetheonlytruecharactertheyknowisthemselves,ratherthancreatingamultidimensionalcharacterfromscratch.Again,thisisnotuncommon.
HowdoIidentifyit?
Thebestwaytolookforauthorintrusionistofirstfinishwritingyourstory/novelandthenputitasideforawhile,perhapsaweekortwo.Youcanthencomebacktoitwithfresheyesandafreshperspective,andtreatthestorylikeaneditorwould.Youwillsoonnoticeanyunwarrantedintrusion.
Sometimessuchintrusionsaresubtleandnotalwaysovert.Theymayconsistofcertainwordsoraxiomsthatseemoutofplacewithinthecontextofthestory.Inotherwords,theyjustdontfitwithinthestory,andcertainlydontfitwithyourcharacterperhapsbecausetheymaynotbewordsorphrasesyourcharacterwouldeveruse.Learntospotthese.
Othertimes,asmentioned,theauthormightdriftintoautomaticmodeanddescribethethingstheypersonallyenjoy,projectingtheirownlikes,pastimesorhobbiesintothenarrativeandcharacters,wheninfactthemaincharactertheyhavecreatedmayactuallybediametricallyopposite.
Youmightfindyourcharactersgoingonandonaboutaparticularsubjectthroughoutthestorythathasnothingtodowiththeactualstoryorthemes,particularlyinajudgementalway.Thatsintrusionbecauseyouareusingyourcharactersasamouthpieceforyourownpersonalviewpoint.
Heresasimpleexample.Ipersonallyhavenoreligiousbelief.AsanatheistIdonotidentifywithreligionhoweverthatdoesntmeanIdontlikeit.Irespectthosewhodohavebeliefs,becausewearealldifferent.ThatmeansIshouldnothaveeverysinglecharacterthatIcreatebeareligioushaterorsomeonewhoconstantlyrejectsreligion.Wecreatecharacterswithdifferentbeliefsandopinionstoourown,becausetheyshouldbeasindividualasweare.Therefore,ifI
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havemycharactersgoingonabouthowmuchtheyarehatereligion,thenIwouldbeguiltyofauthorintrusion.
Authorintrusionmightalsooccurifyourcharacterhasknowledgeheorshewouldntnormallypossessinordinarydaytodaylife(unlessitreallyispartofthecharactersmakeupandtheyjusthappentobesuperhuman,extraordinarypeople).Forinstance,alowlysalesmaninastoryaboutgreedandsuccesswonthaveanencyclopaedicknowledgeofthelatestmilitaryweaponsorwillknowhowtobreakintoahighsecurityfacilityarmedwithonlyasafetypin.
Thatkindofthingshouldstickout.Itmeanstheauthorhasprojectedunrealisticknowledgeandresearchontothecharacterandthereforecompromisedthestructureandcontextofthestory.
Inreallifeweallhavelimitedknowledgeweknowabitaboutalotofthings.Wemaylearnaboutcertainsubjectsthatinterestus,sowegainmoreknowledge.Iknowalotaboutfictionwriting,literature,artandthesciences,butIknownothingaboutcarengines,engineeringorhowtocarryoutheartsurgery.
Beparticularlycarefulinhistoricalfiction.Dontletyourmodernviewscreepintotheerayouarewritingabout.Itjustdoesntfit.
Andonethingwritersshouldneverdoisinterruptthenarrativeandaddressthereaderdirectlywithinthestory.Thiswasonceacceptableinliterature,butoverthelast80years,literaturehaschanged,andthiskindofintrusionisnolongeracceptable.
Learntorecognisetheseanomaliesinyournarrative,huntthemdownandweedthemout.
HowdoIavoidauthorintrusion?
Onethingshouldalwaysbeclearfromtheoutsetwhenwritingyourstoryitbelongstoyourcharacters,notyouasawriter.Thatmeansyourpersonalbeliefs,opinionsorideasshouldneverappear.Forthatreason,writersmustneverusefictionasapersonalsoapboxorcrusadeagainstsomethingtheyopposeordontlike.
Inreallifeyoumaynotlikethewayyourgovernmentis
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runningyourcountry.Youmaynotagreewithwarandconflicthoweveryoumustputasidetheseopinionswhendealingwithyourcharactersandplot.Yourmaincharactershouldnthateoneparticularpoliticalpartybecauseyoudontlikethem,norshouldtheybeapacifistagainstwarwhenitsnotinyourcharactersnatureandtheymighthavetoengageinfightscenesaspartofthestory.
Writersshouldtreatthenarrativeobjectivelyanddispassionately.Yourcharactersopinionsmatter,notyours.Theirbeliefsrelatetothestory,notyours.
Thismightseemstrange,consideringthattheomniscientnarratorwillknoweverythingwithinthestory,butitshouldnotsoundlikethenarratorispreachingasermontothereader.Thenarratorissimplyrelayingthestoryobjectively.
Withexperienceyouwilllearntostandbackfromyourfictionalworldandletyourcharactersspeakforthemselvesandtoformtheirownviewsandopinionsaspartoftheongoingstoryitsanaturalprogression.
Yourfictionalstoryshouldneverbeaboutyourpersonalagendaotherwiseyourstorywillfail.Editorswilleasilyspotitandrejectonthatbasis,becauseitisasignofbadwriting.
Bethoroughwhenyouedityourworkandlearntospotauthorintrusion.
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