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Chapter 9Chapter 9Lecture SlidesLecture SlidesChapter 9Chapter 9Lecture SlidesLecture Slides
Revising Written MessagesRevising Written Messages
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Learning Objective 1Learning Objective 1Learning Objective 1Learning Objective 1
List the steps in the systematic List the steps in the systematic revision processrevision process
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Actual Newspaper Headlines
• Police begin campaign to run down jaywalkers
• Miners refuse to work after death
• Drunk gets nine months in violin case
• Iraqi head seeks arms
Source: Source: http://english.glendale.cc.ca.us/badheds.html
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Frame of Mind for Proofreading
• Attempt to see things from your audience’s perspective rather than from your own.
• Revise your documents until you cannot see any additional ways to improve them.
• Be willing to allow others to make suggestions for improving your writing.
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Systematic Procedures for Revision
1. Print a draft copy2. Proofread three times:
- Once for content, organization, and style- Again for mechanical errors- A third time, right to left or out loud
3. Edit format and layout4. Spell check5. Print on high-quality paper
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Avoid Writing Errors:
Don’t Do This!!• Subject and verb always has to
agree.• Proofread carefully to see if you
any words out. • Writing carefully, dangling
participles must be avoided.• If any word is improper at the end
of a sentence, a linking verb is. • Don't use commas, that, are
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Source: Don’t Do This: http://www.plainlanguage.gov/examples/humor/writegood.cfm
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Learning Objective 2Learning Objective 2Learning Objective 2Learning Objective 2
Discuss ways to communicate Discuss ways to communicate ethically and responsiblyethically and responsibly
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Ensuring Ethical CommunicationLook for: • Truthfully stated information• Exaggerated or embellished
facts• Clarity and exact meaning• Objective supporting facts• Tactful statements toward
receiver• Carefully designed graphics
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Learning Objective 3Learning Objective 3Learning Objective 3Learning Objective 3
Identify ways to develop logical Identify ways to develop logical and unified messagesand unified messages
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Structuring Strong Messages
• Strong messages come from clear organization.
• Unified messages have paragraphs arranged in a systematic sequence.
• A summary ties the end back to the beginning and brings all major points together.
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Writing Effective Paragraphs
To write effective paragraphs, you must learn to
• Develop deductive or inductive paragraphs consistently,
• Link ideas to achieve coherence• Keep paragraphs unified• Vary sentence and paragraph
length
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Paragraphs: Broken Text
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Paragraphs: Broken Text
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Topic Sentence Placement
• Deductive placement:– Topic sentence precedes details
• Inductive placement:– Topic sentence follows details
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Tips for Linking Sentences:
• Repeat a word used in the previous sentence
• Use a pronoun for a noun used in the previous sentence– …take this responsibility. It can be
shared…• Use connecting words:
– However – Therefore– nevertheless, – in addition
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Vary Sentence and Paragraph Length
Short sentences – are easier to read– May sound
elementary or monotonous
Longer sentences– Compound or
complex– Provide variety– Give short
sentences emphasis
Short paragraphs in letters, memos, and email – Longer paragraphs
in business reports
Short first and last paragraphs– Others average 6
lines– No longer than 8-10
lines.
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Learning Objective 4Learning Objective 4Learning Objective 4Learning Objective 4
Apply techniques for developing Apply techniques for developing effective, powerful sentenceseffective, powerful sentences
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Crafting Powerful Sentences
• Use correct sentence structure
• Rely on active voice• Emphasize important
ideas
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Types of Clauses
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Construction Errors to Avoid
• Sentence Fragment As the president reported this morning. As the president reported this morning, sales increased in May.
• Run-on or fused Sentence A new printer has been ordered it should be delivered tomorrow. A new printer has been ordered, and it should be delivered tomorrow.
• Comma Splice The number of questions has been reduced, the survey will require less time to complete. Because the number of questions has been reduced, the survey will require less time to complete.
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Rely on Active Voice
Active voice– Emphasize the doer– Simplify
comprehension
“Our sales reps transfer reports electronically from remote locations to the home office.”
Passive voice– Emphasize the
action– Useful in delivering
an unpleasant thought
“Reports are transferred electronically from remote locations to the home office.”
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Ways to Emphasize Ideas• Simple Sentences
– Use independent clauses in compound sentences
• Repetition of key words• Use labeling words to
emphasize significance– Most important; less significant
• Position first or last in sentence or paragraph
• Give important information more space
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Learning Objective 5Learning Objective 5Learning Objective 5Learning Objective 5
Identify factors affecting readability Identify factors affecting readability and revise messages to improve and revise messages to improve
readabilityreadability
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Improving Readability
To improve readability:• Understand readability
measures• Use contemporary language• Use simple, informal words• Be concise• Use visuals to aid
comprehension
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Readability: Use StatisticsFlesch-Kincaid Evaluates sentence length and word difficulty to produce approximate grade level necessary for reader understanding.
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Use Contemporary Language
– Outdated expressions• Pursuant to your
request• enclosed please find• very truly yours
– Clichés• Pushed the envelope• Cover all the bases• That sucks!
– Jargon
ELIMINATE :
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Use Contemporary Language
– Original expressions• As you requested• Enclosed• Sincerely
– Fresh language• Took a risk• Get input from everyone• That needs improvement
– Common words
USE:
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Simple Words
Simple words are:• Less distracting• More emphatic
Formal Words
Informal Words
Terminate End
Procure Get
Remunerate Pay
Corroborate support
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Communicate Concisely
•Eliminate redundancies•Use active voice•Pay attention to
relevance and receiver needs
•Eliminate clichés•Shorten sentences•Use compound adjectives
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Use Visual Enhancements
– Bulleted lists– Hierarchical, informative
headings– Tables and graphs– Partition with lines and
borders– Highlight information with
relevant images
Generate text breaks with chunking
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Learning Objective 6Learning Objective 6Learning Objective 6Learning Objective 6
Identify ways to project a positive, Identify ways to project a positive, tactful tonetactful tone
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Project Positive Tone• State ideas using positive
language.• Avoid using second person
when stating negative ideas.• Use passive voice to convey
negative ideas.• Use subjunctive mood.• Include pleasant statement
in the same sentence.
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Have International Sensitivity
Avoid• Sports analogies
– The top gun
• Formal language• Jargon• Slang• Abbreviations• Red flag words• Political
judgments
Use• Simple, precise
language– Swift vs. fast
• Figures for expressing numbers
• Metric system • The full month name• Correct letter or
memo format
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