Writing Packet #3 Week 11, Wed 11/4/15

Todd Windisch, Fall 2015

Final Draft WRITING PACKET #3

• You have 35 minutes to finish your final draft and turn it in to me • It is due at 2:50! • If it is late, I will take off 5 points!

• Remember to edit your paper carefully for grammatical errors – I will be grading based on more grammar that we practiced in class

• Please staple all parts of the writing packet together in this order: • PAGE 1: Pre-writing First draft Self-edit Peer-edit • LAST PAGE: Final draft

Announcements

• Last day for writing packet #2 extra 5 points is 11/9

• Computer lab on Wednesday: • Building 26B, Room 1555

IMPORTANT ANNOUNCEMENT!

• We will not have class on Monday 11/9

• I have a personal obligation, and unfortunately, a substitute is not really an option

• Instead, you will have a special at-home assignment (Reading Response #2)

• We will have our next grammar quiz on Monday 11/16

Today’s Agenda

• Summarizing/Paraphrasing

• Compare/Contrast

Citing Sources

• Citing the sources you use for your research paper is important for several reasons: • It helps you avoid plagiarism. Plagiarism is the use of work by another person

without clear acknowledgment. Simply put, plagiarism is stealing another person's ideas and work. It is a form of academic dishonesty. Properly attributing and documenting your sources will help you avoid inadvertently taking credit for another person's ideas.

• It allows others to find your research sources.

• It provides evidence to support your ideas and adds credibility to your work by showing that you have consulted reliable sources.

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Direct Quotes

• One common way to cite a source is with a direct quote: • Dennis Sauers of the New York Times in his article, Bullying in the 21st

Century, wrote, “…”

• Mark Twain once said, “The two most important days in your life are the day you were born and the day you find out why.”

• The words inside the quotation do not change, you should keep them exactly as they appear in your text.

• You should use direct quotes when you are citing a small portion of text or when the words are very specific, special, or impactful

Paraphrasing https://owl.english.purdue.edu/exercises/32/41

• Paraphrasing refers to rewriting a given sentence using your own words

• When we need to use a sentence in our writing that someone else wrote, we paraphrase it • That is, we use the same idea(s) in that sentence and write it differently

• In addition to using different words, we use different grammar

• The main purpose of paraphrasing has to do with being able to use someone else’s ideas while we write our own texts

• It is required that any writer acknowledges the original source using the proper citation format.

How to Paraphrase

• Payless is closed because of the bad weather conditions. • How can I paraphrase this?

• Is this OK? • Payless is closed due to the bad weather.

• NO!

• Since the weather is bad, Payless isn’t open.

Which Paraphrases Are Successful?

• Ronny told his aunt that a bear had attacked him, which she found hard to believe. • Ronny’s aunt was astonished that he was attacked by a bear.

• Do we know if he was actually attacked in the original sentence?

• Ronny’s aunt thought that the fact that a bear hurt Ronny was unbelievable.

• It is unbelievable for Ronny’s aunt to trust him that he was attacked by a bear.

• Ronny’s aunt thought it was unbelievable that a bear attacked Ronny.

Which Paraphrases Are Successful?

• Anyone who has ever driven through the Mojave Desert knows that one should always carry a supply of extra water. • Having driven through the Mojave Desert, I can tell how important it is to carry extra

water.

• Carrying a supply of extra water is known to be important by anyone who has driven through the Mojave Desert.

• We should bring extra water when we drive through the Mojave Desert.

• It is necessary to bring water when people drive through the Mojave Desert.

• People should know they have to bring some extra water for the Mojave Desert after they have driven through it.

Which Paraphrases Are Successful?

• Of the 138 million acres of land that Native Americans owned in 1887, 90 million acres were taken away by whites by 1932. • Over half of the 138 million acres were forced to leave their land which they began

to live on in 1887 when whites came to the land in 1932.

• In 1932, white people took away 90 million of the 138 million acres of land that was owned by Native Americans in 1887.

• Native Americans owned 48 million acres after the invasion of whites in 1932.

• Compared with the 138 million acres of land Native Americans owned in 1887, 90 million acres became whites’ land by 1932.

• 90 million out of the 138 million acres of land that Native Americans owned in 1887 was occupied by whites by 1932.

Which Paraphrases Are Successful?

• A woman who was nominated by the president to head the department was quickly approved by the board of trustees. • A board of trustees approved that she was the president.

• Who is she???

• The president chose a woman who will head the department as soon as she was

approved by the board of trustees.

• The board of trustees elected a woman president to choose the head of the department.

• The president-nominated woman was readily approved by the board of trustees to head the department.

Paraphrase Practice

• “In the United States, about six out of ten students in graduate schools are women. The same is true of today’s young adults who already have a degree beyond college. As a result, the Census Bureau expects that more women than men will hold professions such as doctors, lawyers and professors.” (Women Edge Past Men in Getting Doctorates, Voice of America, learningenglish.com)

• “The Human Relations Commission (HRC) was established by the City of West Lafayette to protect the rights of our citizens and to ensure that West Lafayette remains a fair and inclusive community.” (What is the Human Relations Commission?, City of West Lafayette Indiana, westlafayette.in.gov)

• “The years after World War One were an important turning point in the making of the American nation. The country turned away from the problems of Europe. Now it would deal with problems of its own.” (American History Series: The United States Turns Inward After World War One, Voice of America, learning English.voa.com)

How to Summarize

• “The movement toward education by computer is developing fast. Massive Open Online Courses, called MOOCs, are changing how people learn in many places. For years, people could receive study materials from colleges or universities and take part in online classes. But such classes were not designed for many thousands of students at one time, as MOOCs are.” (MOOCS Are Moving Forward , Voice of America, learningenglish.voanews.com) • How can I summarize this? • Is this OK?

• “Computer education is growing fast. MOOCs are influencing how we study. People received materials from universities for a long time to be able to take classes online. MOOCs are the only ones thousands can take at a time.”

• NO! It’s too long. This is a paraphrase.

Summarizing

• A summary should be a short version of a longer original source

• Its main goal is to present a large amount of information in a short and concise text that includes only the most important ideas of the original text

Better Summary

• “The movement toward education by computer is developing fast. Massive Open Online Courses, called MOOCs, are changing how people learn in many places. For years, people could receive study materials from colleges or universities and take part in online classes. But such classes were not designed for many thousands of students at one time, as MOOCs are.” (MOOCS Are Moving Forward , Voice of America, learningenglish.voanews.com)

• According to a Voice of America article, a fast-growing MOOCs movement allows thousands to take online classes at once, changing how we learn.

Summarizing Practice

• “Business is the most popular subject for international students in the United States. At last count, 21% of foreign students at American colleges and universities were studying business and management.” (Business English Speakers Can Still be Divided by a Common Language, Voice of America, learningenglish.voanews.com)

• “There were more victories for supporters of the Tea Party movement. This movement centers on cutting taxes and government spending. It brings together conservatives and libertarians -- strong believers in individual liberty.” (More Wins for TEA Party Activists, but Will They Win in November?, Voice of America, learningenglish.voanews.com)

• “In the years after World War I, new technologies changed America. Technology made it possible for millions of people to improve their lives. It also brought great changes in American society.” (Movies Become Big Business in the 1920s, Voice of America, learningenglish.voanews.com)

HOMEWORK

• When I assign homework from English Grammar, there is a specific way I would like you to do your homework: • Complete the homework on a separate sheet of paper (not in your book) • Correct your own homework using the answer key in the back of the book • Try to understand why you got the answer wrong; if you cannot find out why,

make a note and ask me during class

• Tonight’s homework: • Reading Response #2 (Find online) E-MAIL TO ME BY 5:00PM on Monday

11/9 • Writing Packet #4 pre-writing due Monday 11/16