what is my message? is my message clear? is my message interesting? do i have enough information?
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What is my message?
Is my message clear?
Is my message interesting?
Do I have enough information?
TOPIC - What we want to write about
DETAILS - information about our topic
My favorite dessert - ice cream
best flavors
how you eat it where to buy it
who likes it
ice cream
kids, grandparents,
mom and dad, my dog
Popsy, Mimos. on the street, Olympica
in a cone, in a cup, a banana
split, a shake
chocolate, coconut, strawberry
Ice cream is the most delicious dessert. Everyone likes it from my grandparents to my dog! You can buy it at many places but I get my ice cream at Mimo's. My favorite way is in a banana split. with chocolate, coconut, and strawberry flavors. I wish I had ice cream right now!
Read the story below -
I went on vacation this summer. It was a lot of fun. We camped at night and hiked during the day. It was exciting to be in the woods and I hope that I go again next year.
Was this an interesting story? It needs a little more! Can you answer these questions?
Where did the writer go? Who else went? What made it fun? What was the weather like? What is the most memorable event?
Write the revised story.
Birthday Party for
Cathy
my brothers and sisters
cho
colate cake an
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oo
l Aid
silly
fun
happy
in the kitchen
three years old
party hats
funn
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at th
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mer
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only family
waitin
g o
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add
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me
whe
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re th
e pr
esen
ts?
• Hook the reader with your beginning
• Surprise your reader with a true statement
• Use details to describe where the story takes place
• Use a sound heard by the main character
• Begin with dialogue or use it in your story
• Start with a question or ask question several times in your story
• offer the reader advice in your story
• use quotes from people that relate to your story
• tell or show how the main character feels
• give the reader something to think about at the end
Use a graphic organizer to put all these ideas
together so they make sense, and, so you
don’t forget something!