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Chapter 1 Websites related to writing SOPs

Chapter 2 General guidelines for writing an SOP

Chapter 3 221 SOP Examples and Reviews

The material presented in this ebook is a compilation of the material in the thread http://www.pagalguy.com/forum/prep-resources/1501-the-art-of-writing-sop.html The objective of this ebook is to help students prepare SOPs for institutes such as IIMB, IIMK, FMS, IIFT, GLIM, IITD, etc This ebook contains 221 SOPs and their expert reviews. SOPs were written by students applying to institutes such as IIMB, IIMK, FMS,etc. SOP experts in PaGaLGuY.com later reviewed these SOPs and gave tips for their improvement. These reviews give an excellent insight into what makes a great SOP. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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Chapter 1 Websites related to writing SOPs

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http://www.pagalguy.com/forum/prep-resources/1501-the-art-of-writing-sop.html http://www.statementofpurpose.com/ http://www.accepted.com/grad/ Chapter 2 General guidelines for writing an SOP

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1) Brevity is the wit of soul. Don't go off on a tangential. Each sentence should directly affect the question being asked. Don't attempt to "build" a story. Don't beat around the bush. Be to the point and direct. After each sentence you write, ask yourself "Is this reqd. ? Does it answer the question ? Is it relevant ?" A) eg. "I have conducted XYZ, ABC, PQR etc. etc. in college". Now your resume/certificates might also reflect that. So go on to something like "My experiences in conducting various competitions from software programming to trivia quizzing, have given me very useful insights into managing a diverse team and the necessity of cross-functional exposure". B) Try clubbing together 2 or more sentences into 1 to create a more direct "punch". eg. "In college, I managed to be in the top 10%ile of my graduating class. It was tough to juggle my academics and exta-curriculars. But at the end of the day, I managed to do both of them with distinction". could be "Juggling academics and extra-curriculars, have helped me hone my skills of time-management, prioritizing......." 2) Be more direct, dramatic and use active voice instead of passive. For example, something like "I was afflicted with a rare disease as a child and the doctor had said I would never be able walk" could be ""You will never walk, run or play like other children" this was what the doctor's pronouncement was, as I stood stunned in my chair in the children's ward at Nanavati Hospital." 3) Never used hackeneyed words/phrases etc. they loose charm and everything seems affected. For example, a cursory glance around the posts, and I seen everyone has written "esteemed" institute etc. Frankly it has lost its appeal and value. Stick to being obedient, not subservient. 4) Always get the spellings, grammar etc. doubly checked. The worst thing you can do to yourself is write "....in the enterance exam......." And yes, British english, not American please. The idea is to stick to the point and answer the question : Why MBA ? Why me (why not, say, Chandoo) ? Why you (ie. IIM-B) ? Why now ? (believe me its imp - Why not last year ? Why not next year ?) etc. etc. Also be specific about your goals (not to the point of saying I want to be the CTO of Infy by 2020 :mg: ) and tell them you know what the college is good in (ie.

specialization) and what you have thought of doing (you can always change it later, unless its SPJIMR). FMS specific guidelines

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Re-read your SOP and answer the following questions (putting yourself into the shoes of FMS faculty) 1) How does the first para (including the quote) and the second para tell me anything about applicant's career goals? What would the faculty think? My guess "The applicant has wandered too much and doesn't know how to write to the point. Also we have NOT asked his biodata/achievments (past) but his goals (future) which he seems to have missed completely" 2) How does the third para helps me in getting to know the career goals of the applicant? My guess about faculty's thoughts "Oh come on this guy wants to tell me, what management is and what manager does...too bad i am still groping to find his career goals 3) How does the fourth para tells me about the applicant's choice of FMS? Faculty's thoughts -- Oops..I still dont know what the applicant's goals are but it seems he has written all the cliche statements about how FMS is great...(I know it boy...thats why I am teaching here :mg: )..oh finally in the last line i seem to get that the applicant wants to "manage business". Does that lead me anywhere? Oh now I need a strong coffee dose to read zillion other SOPs.... The FMS SOP structure should follow : 1) Your career goals 2) What you need to do to achieve those goals 3) Explaining that MBA is a logical step for achieving your goals 4) Why MBA from FMS What I want to do --> The current skills I have --> What other skills I need to acquire to achieve what i want -->Why and How FMS can help me acquire those skills --> What can I give back to FMS.

Chapter 3 221 SOP Examples and Reviews

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SOP1 - IIM B

“The mind is the limit. As long as the mind can envision the fact that you can do something, you can do it-as long as you really believe 100 percent. “ - Arnold Schwarzenegger I foresee myself as a global entrepreneur in the future. I dream of becoming an enterpriser from the skills and knowledge obtained from a reputable management institute and from the experiences gained throughout my career, as a student as well as an employee. With a robust technical background and an active participation in the extra curricular activities, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to excel in all aspects. I was the Chief Organizer of many events such as PECOFES ’03 and GENESIS ’04 and I am the Editor of the College magazine. These experiences have given an insight into my capabilities as a competent manager. For achieving my career goals, I need to back my graduate degree with formal management education so that I can enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. With its cutting edge management theories and practice, esteemed faculty, latest technologies and a highly rated student exchange program, IIM B is my natural option. I am confident that my strategic and analytical abilities along with the PGP at IIM B will help me achieve my dream. SOP1 - Review1

“The mind is the limit. As long as the mind can envision the fact that you can do something, you can do it-as long as you really believe 100 percent. “ - Arnold Schwarzenegger The Arnold thing is the only novelty. Otherwise somehow the quote seems kind of hackeneyed.

I foresee myself as a global entrepreneur in the future. OK

I dream of becoming an enterpriser from the skills and knowledge obtained from a reputable management institute and from the experiences gained throughout my career, as a student as well as an employee. SENTENCE IS TOO LONG, LOSES IT COHESION AND READABILITY. SPLIT IT IN 2

SENTENCE. "OBTD FRM A REPUTABLE MGMT INSTI" CAN BE REPLACED BY "FROM A

QUALITY MBA PROGRAM". ALSO, "EXPERIENCES GAINED THROUGHOUT MY

CAREER.........AS AN EMPLOYEE" CAN BE REPLACED BY "VARIED EXPERIENCES

GAINED, BOTH AS A STUDENT AND A PROFESSIONAL"

With a robust (ROBUST ??) technical background and an (REPLACE : AS WELL AS THROUGH) active participation in the extra curricular activities (SOUNDS BIT DULL, LACKS "PUNCH") , I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to excel in all aspects (ITS KINDA VAGUE, DOESNT SEEM VERY CLEAR). My experiences in organizing many events such as PECOFES ’03 and GENESIS ’04 have given an insight into m4y capabilities as a competent manager. (AGAIN, NO NEED TO MENTION THE EVENT NAME, UNLESS ITS SOMETHING LIKE OLYMPIC GAMES :mg:) For achieving my career goals, I need to back my graduate degree with formal management education so that I can enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence.(VERY NICELY PUT AND COMPLETELY ADDRESSES THE QUESTION) With its cutting edge (BLEEDING EDGE SEEMS TO HAVE MORE "PUNCH" AND "SHOCKVALUE" :) )management theories and practice(SINGULAR ??), esteemed (CUT THIS ESTEEMED THING, SOUNDS FAKE, ESP IF U GO THRU A 1000 ESSAYS EACH HAVIN THE SAME WORD) faculty, latest (BETTER ADJECTIVE) technologies and a highly rated student exchange program, IIM B is my natural option. I am confident that my strategic and analytical abilities along with the PGP at IIM B will help me achieve my dream. (HOW ABOUT SOMETHING WHICH WOULD LEVERAGE YOUR WORKEXP ?)

SOP1 - Review2

“The mind is the limit. As long as the mind can envision the fact that you can do something, you can do it-as long as you really believe 100 percent. “ - Arnold Schwarzenegger. And in my mind, I foresee myself as a global entrepreneur in the future. I am sure that the skills from a reputable management institute and the experiences as a student as well as an employee would sculpt me into a successful enterpriser. With a robust technical background and an active participation in the extra curricular activities, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to excel in various fields. I was the Chief Organizer of many events such as PECOFES ’03 and GENESIS ’04 and I am the Editor of the College magazine. These experiences have given me an insight into managerial field and I am confident of becoming a competent manager. For achieving my career goals, I need to strengthen my graduate degree with formal management education. This will allow me to enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical and practical skills, which will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. With its cutting edge management theories and practices, esteemed faculty, latest technologies and highly rated student exchange program, IIM B is my natural choice. I am confident that the PGP at IIM B will enhance my strategic and analytical abilities that will help me immensely in achieving my dream.

SOP2 - IIM B

Success is the power to drive change. It is the pursuit of this success, at the helm of a world-class company, that has driven me towards seeking the PGP-M at the esteemed IIM B. With its eclectic student community, the largest student exchange program and a strategic location at the hub of technological activity in India, IIM B offers a unique oppurtunity to enrich oneself with myraid perspectives, while also imbibing management principles from the best in the field. For my part, I have prepared myself for this significant step-up in my career by consistently aiming at and achieving an all-round development of my personality. A successful academic jaunt, culminating in a 11th rank at University in the BE finals, and an active participation in extra-curricular field, which included being part of the college cricket team and the students' council and the college magazine editor, have sublimated their own set of values and lessons. These, in combination with my experiences in a company which is truly driving change - Reliance Infocomm, and the experiences/knowledge that IIM B can offer should help me have an exciting career as a successful manager SOP2review

Good One Chris.. :D :D Just make them into 2 paras.. easy on the eyes!!! :D :D But ya.. the flow

is good.... All the very best... See if u want to use some quotes about dreams... ambition etc etc...

goto quoteland.com !!!

SOP3 - IIT D

Technical and management aspects of life are cross functional and are conjoint entities.As I am about to complete my technical education, my natural inclination is towards improving my knowledge and skills by accquiring a management degree. Management is key to the success of any organization and this aspect has always appealed to me, because it requires a combination of creativity, strategic and analytic ability - all qualities that I feel I possess. I dream of graduating as an able manager, from a reputable institute like the Indian Institute of Technology, Delhi with its world class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, richly experienced faculty,excellent management research base and its special emphasis on Entrepreneurship Development.I hope to carve a niche for myself in being an entrepreneur and I am sure that I will excel under the excellent facilities and exposure offered by IIT Delhi SOP3reviewed

I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With a robust technical background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to blend in both aspects. I am confident that my creative, strategic and analytical abilities will aid me in becoming an able manager. Indian Institute of Technology, Delhi – One of the pioneering institutes with world-class infrastructure, superior

industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management research base appeals to my professional interests. Its special emphasis on ‘entrepreneurship development’ will definitely cater to my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur. I wish to carve a niche for myself in the corporate world and sincerely hope that the excellent facilities and exposure at IIT Delhi will assist me in realizing my dreams. SOP4 – Any Bschool

[not reviewed] It is said "Any sufficiently advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic." I agree completely agree with Arthur C. Clarke on that. I strongly feel that the Technology is what drives a company and it is through efficient management of technological resources a company can grow ten fold within a short span of time. * Having completed my bachelors in Engineering (if IT mention it!!), this field has always fascinated me. My astute thinking and strong analytical abilities have helped me in topping my class/ branch (if nothing – don’t mention academics.. show it where it exists!!) * After my degree studies, I started working with an IT firm. This opened up a fascinating world of science and technology to me. Being in a junior position, it always struck me how inefficiently technology was managed. It has been more than a dream to understand the subtle nuances of this field and make a career in this field. Your esteemed institution with its…. (Talk about infrastructure – faculty – students – alumini – whatever u consider important!! -> pls visit the website & spend atleast an hour on it jotting down whats what!!)… Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work & dedication. Etc etc… Make it a lil personal.. let ur dreams/ heart talk….okie????!!!! SOP5 - FMS

[not reviewed] The 4-year integrated M.Sc(Tech) Finance programme, that i'm presently doing in BITS PILANI has given me a good foundation in the field of finance. At the same time, the freedom and the flexibility attached with the course allowed me to explore my other interests through the projects and electives. So, at the end of 3 years, thanks to this programme, i have done courses in various disciplines like engineering, computer programming (Unix, C, PL/SQL, OOP (Java) ), mathematics and management. I've also done a course each on Legal Environment of Business, Corporate Taxation, Dynamics of Social change and Public Administration, apart from the regular courses in finance. Though i have been helped by these courses to get broad viewpoint, i have no practical experience in the field of finance. I am currently doing a 6 month internship in the human resource development department of the central bank of india, mumbai but even here my project is based on software application and no way related to finance.

So now, as the time has come for me to enter the corporate world, i feel the need to equip myself with practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. I believe that the MBA programme from FMS, with its intimate faculty and oppurtunities to work on projects in real life, will add value to my skills as a manager. After completion of the programme from FMS, i see myself in the field of investment banking, where i plan to assess my potential and strive towards actualizing it. SOP6 - IIM B

[not reviewed] Lao Tse said, “Take a step towards your goal. The journey of a thousand miles begins with one step”. My career goal is to own a technology-driven firm and I believe a management degree to be the first step towards attaining it. In my view, the key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and a comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. I have been a boarder since I was six years old. Having to cope on my own from such a tender age, I have cultivated a sense of independence coupled with an adaptability to respond to transient environments. Moreover, my experience as a hostel boarder has instilled in me an aptitude for teamwork which helps me to gel with any set of individuals effectively. My drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records. I was ranked first in class in standard X and XII board exams, and this trend has continued throughout my undergraduate studies at IIT Kharagpur. Besides being consistently ranked 1st in my department, I have had ample scope to organize and participate in various extra-curricular activities. Apart from heading various dormitory teams, I also served as the Governor of “Alankar”, the annual literary publication of IIT and was responsible for designing its online version. In my final year, I was a member of the Steering Committee for Ideon 2003, the IIT techfest. It was the final decision-making body responsible for the staging of the whole event right from logistics to actual planning and execution. I was also selected for a summer internship at Georgia Technology University, where I headed a multinational group of eight, which gave me further grounding in managing people and group conflicts. My inter-personal skills and aptitude for teamwork coupled with my career goal, earmark management as the ideal career option for me. I sincerely believe that IIM B, with its emphasis on “development of global managers” using management practice, would provide me the requisite platform for realizing my ambition. SOP7 - General

The value of an idea lies in the using of it", remarked Thomas Edison. I have always believed in the power of ideas. Coming from an engineering background I have always been fascinated by

the application of ideas to the betterment of our lives. Working in a "knowledge" industry has, however, made me realise that there is many a slip between the cup and the lip. Shaping a great idea into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills and intimate knowledge of business. These are also the pre-requisites that I require for taking up roles that affect, directly, the strategic business decisions of an organsation. I believe that your esteemed institution, with its world class faculty, infrastructure and students can provide me with the skills and knowledge, required to fulfill my objectives. SOP7review

hey Vishal.. Thats one of the NEAT essays i have seen till date... :D :D Very TRUE... Very nice...It has a good ring to it... See if u can tune it up a lil bit more.. try to elaborate on ur dreams etc etc...As u have said... try to bring in ur backgroud.. link it up to what u have done till date.. what u wanna do.. where u see urself & why IIMB for all these!! I really cant help u here... U are almost there.. U just need to tune it up a lil bit & it will be fine... :D :D SOP8 - IIM B

I have always been inspired by Steve Jobs to start a company which is at the cutting edge of technology and makes a difference to lives of people around me. I chose to pursue engineering from a premier institute like IT-BHU so that I can learn about technology. But during my time in the engineering college and also during my summer internships, I realized that just begin at the forefront of technology does not guarantee success in today’s world. As David M. Ogilvy pointed out “ In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative original thinker unless you can also sell what you create. Management cannot be expected to recognize a good idea unless it is presented to them by a good salesman.” I have been trying to inculcate in myself the various qualities needed to be a successful manager. I have been a part of the various events happening at my college at various levels rite from my first year. In my final year, I have been part of organizing committee of “Autochondriac ‘04” and “Spardha ‘04”. In both of these events I was overseeing the publicity and co-ordination between various members. I believe this gave me some experience in managing people and groups. I believe that IIM-B, with its world class faculty, infrastructure, competitive environment along with its location in the “Silicon Valley” of India will help me achieve my career objective. I would be learning the nuances of management as well be close to the best things happening in the technological field in India giving me a broader prospective. SOP8review

Listen.. dont u think u are using too many big wigs names here.. I would rather be happy with u quoting somethings.. but ppl... Hmmm... not really sure about this!!! I would rather U talk more

about ur dreams & what u wanna do thing... I can work on this if u are sure that U need these guys in ur SOP!!! Let me know... SOP9 - IIM B

[not reviewed] My ambition is to setup a software solutions company down the line fifteen to twenty years. I want to work as a manager with reputed organizations at various levels for considerable amout of time to gain the required expertise and networking abilities. With this goal in my mind, I have done diploma and engineering in computer science. Later while working as a software engineer with Xinthe Technologies, I have realized the importance of a formal management education. It can help me in honing my quantitative, qualitative, analytical and interpersonal skills which are necessary for a budding manager. IIM-B can help me in reaching my goals through its excellent faculty, infrastructure, curriculam (especially Enterpreneurship courses) and high quality intake. My past achievements such as State First Rank in ECET'99, National level prizes in software competitions and my organizational abilities and leadership skills prove that, given a chance to pursue PGP from IIM-B, I would strive to be best there too. SOP10 - IIM B

To manage you need to learn and listen. iim-b can allow me an intense and proactive interaction with a diverse and lively peer group to enable me to learn from them.I believe the competitive dynamic and fulfilling environment, with the chance to be tempered by the master craftsmen of the art of management will enable me to pursue my aim in the ocean that is management successfully. listening to them will help me shape my career. SOP10review

Confucius said, "I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand." And I strongly believe that to manage efficiently, action is important, which comes from learning and listening. This learning and listening is what I seek for in IIM-B. IIM-B gives me the opportunity to work in an intensive and proactive environment. I am eager to interact with a diverse and lively peer group. I feel that the learning, which comes form a competitive, dynamic and fulfilling atmosphere, will enable me to take up challenging roles in the field of management. It has been my dream (talk about ur dream – working in a senior positions in what.. maketting.. finance etc etc OR staring ur own firm etc etc) and IIM-B is my first step towards achieving my dreams.

SOP10corrected

the learning, which comes form a competitive, dynamic and fulfilling atmosphere, will enable me to take up challenging roles in the corporate world. to this end i have already completed my bachelors in business mgt. i have tried to hone my skills to the corporate world and would like to perfect them at iim-b SOP11 - SJPIMR Template

[not reviewed] "Through my experience as a software developer, I have observed that any organization requires strong leadership from upper management to succeed. For this reason, I want to be part of that leadership someday. My MCA training however, has not prepared me to deal with the broad strategic issues faced by executives. I need outstanding general management skills and leadership development to help me effect a successful transition from technical expert to visionary business leader. SPJIMR's rigorous MBA program, in particular the Information Management track, will give me a thorough understanding of how to lead an organization while sharpening my ability to analyze technological innovations in the context of strategic planning, organizational design and global competition." SOP12 - General

During most of my academic life, I have been studying various concepts related to science and technology. Hence I did not have much opportunity to learn concepts related to business and economy. Learning such concepts is essential in today’s rapidly changing corporate scenario. Considering that I see my self as an entrepreneur after about 15-20 years, this knowledge will be very useful. A MBA would be one of the most suitable ways to gain more exposure to these concepts. Also a MBA would mean an opportunity to interact with a variety of people, coming from varied backgrounds. As some of my batch mates may have work experience, they can give me valuable inputs about the industry .All this would certainly contribute to an overall development of my personality and my soft-skills. One of my short term goals is to work in a renowned firm, preferably in the consumer electronics industry and most companies coming to this campus certainly do fit in my scheme of things. Hence an MBA from this institute will certainly lead me towards a better future. The balance between conceptual learning and industrial practices as well as the sensitivity of the curriculum towards new trends in managerial practices are some features that attract me towards this program.

SOP12r

learn business and economy still this line doesnt seem fit here SOP13 - IIMB

When I go higher up in my career as team leader, apart from managing the technical aspects of the project I will have to build teams, make critical decisions, communicate with customers who are from different geography and culture and co-ordinate with other teams. When the growth extends to managing huge projects and clients, I will also have to work on other functional aspects like budgeting, managing larger teams, resource planning, operations management, delivery, focusing issues from customer’s perspective, manage joint ventures and partnerships, etc. Also, my Vision to create employment for at least 1000 people and the promising opportunities that I could foresee in the technology arena through my experience in the Communication Software Industry, inspire entrepreneurial desires in me. With my experience in the industry, I feel that I have acquired the requisite amount of knowledge in the nitty-gritty of software product design, development and testing and now it’s time to take the next step in fulfilling my lifetime goals. Being from technical background, I perceive the need to undergo formal management education which would equip me with the right abilities to tackle the challenges that I may face while growing up in my profession and give me the opportunity to come closer with like-minded people from whom I can share and learn. SOP13r

As I go higher up in the corporate ladder first as team leader then as a project manager, apart from managing the technical aspects of the project, I will have the responsibility of building strong teams, making critical decisions, communicating with distinct customers from different backgrounds and coordinating with other team members to work towards a common goal. I feel that as the growth encompasses huge projects and clients, I would be working on other functional aspects like budgeting, managing larger teams, resource planning, operations management, delivery, focusing issues from customer’s perspective, manage joint ventures and partnerships, etc. Also, I envision creating employment for at least 1000 people by generating promising opportunities in the technology arena through my experience in the Communication Software Industry. This inspires my entrepreneurial desires. With my experience in the software industry, I feel that I have acquired the requisite amount of knowledge in the nitty-gritty of software product design, development and testing and now it is time to leverage my skills and gain some managerial education.

Being from technical background, I perceive the need to undergo formal management education which would not only equip me with the right abilities to tackle complex challenges that I might face later in my profession but also give me the opportunity to network with like-minded people from whom I can share and learn. SOP14 - FMS

I've always been fascinated by computers and took admission in BE (Information Technology) to get an in-depth knowledge of the software world. During the five-months of my training program in last semester of graduation, I worked for a software development firm and we developed an ONLINE BILLING SYSTEM for the company. Apart from the development of the project, the workings of the company interested me a lot, but by observation I found certain voids, which if filled could take the company to a much higher position. This experiences helped me realize what potential an Software-Management amalgam held. This is the time when I decided to establish a firm if my own and to make it a benchmark of quality and technology. To fulfill this goal, what I need is concrete knowledge base and experience. To establish my knowledge base I need a university with outstanding faculty and one which believes in teaching through practical field work, thus making Faculty of Management studies with its faculty from different sectors and of high strata of the corporate world the best choice. I believe that FMS' rigorous MBA program, in particular the "Information Technology Management" track, will give me a thorough understanding of how to lead an organization while sharpening my ability to analyze technological innovations in the context of strategic planning, organizational design and global competition. Having my own firm is a dream that I’ll realize slowly and steadily taking careful steps in the proper direction, and hope to be standing at par with Mr. Narayan Murthy and Ms. Kiran M Shaw someday. SOP14r

Computers have always fascinated me and I intend to work on this fascination to build a strong IT organization that will be a benchmark of quality and technology. I hope to stand at par with Mr. Narayan Murthy, Ms. Kiran M Shaw and the likes. My bachelor studies in ‘Information Technology’ have provided me adequate technical know-how. Five months of my training program during last semester gave me an opportunity to develop an online billing system for a software firm, which helped me in understanding the nuances of software development. Though the workings of the company interested me a lot, I found that certain voids existed, which if filled could take the company to a much higher position. I realized the importance of a ‘Software-Management amalgam’. To work towards actualization of my dream, I need management skills and practical business exposure. Faculty of Management Studies with its faculty from different sectors and high

echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice. I believe that FMS' rigorous MBA program, in particular the ‘IT Management’ track, will give me a thorough understanding of how to lead an organization while sharpening my ability to analyze technological innovations with regard to strategic planning and global competition. FMS would be my first stop towards converting my vision into reality. SOP15 - TAPMI

I am about to complete the basic degree in Electronics and Communications Engineering at DVR College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to Jawaharlal Nehru Technological University, Hyderabad, India. Right from school level, I have been identified as a promising student with deep interest in Mathematics and General Sciences. In my college, I am acknowledged to play a leading role in all the activities. I was the natural choice of the management for each occasion when any event was organised. The college festival EMBLAZON, the freshers’ meet AARAMBH for incoming students every year and such other occasions can be cited as instances where I was called upon to shoulder the responsibilities as a leader in organising the events and I acted as the emcee at the above mentioned events. The cultivation of interpersonal skills during the course of pregraduate and graduate education built upon the natural traits of character has elevated me to be one distinguished from the rest. I have been acclaimed to possess adequate communication abilities, which spot me as a preferred candidate when the occasion demanded. The camaraderie, developed over the years with my peers as well as my faculty members focuses me as an outstanding member of any team. I was actively involved in the NSS-Blood Donation Camps organized at our college.I was involved in the organisation part of these Camps. I have been applauded as a developer of teams and a mentor for juniors. I have been chosen as the Team Leader for the Anti Ragging Committee of my College. I was an outstanding student throughout my school days. I was elected as the Speaker (Parliament) of the school.To cite an instance, during the Winter Session of the House there was a lot of commotion over an issue and me along with the help of others in the Cabinet resolved the issue.I was an active member in all sports activities at school and college.I also took part in the ICSE Sports meet held at Hyderabad in 1998. Having attained technical skills in my engineering course I aspire to obtain a degree in the field of Management because that would equip me fully to face the challenges that I would come across in my work field.My long term goal is to see myself as a successful manager in a top notch company. And for me to achieve the above I need to do a Management course and also my activities such as participation in the organisation of events at school level and college level and also being the Team Leader on several occasions make me believe that Management arena is where I belong to.

WHY THIS INSTITUTION AMONGST ALL OTHERS? I am specifically interested in doing my course at TAPMI because of the Holistic Approach provided towards Management Education. The presence of Extra Curricular activities and the thought of working in teams make me all the more interested in joining TAPMI.After my two year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I will be able to fulfill my long term goals to perfection.I am confident that your institution will provide the stimulation and support environment that I am eagerly looking for. To sum up, an PGDM Degree from a reputed institution such as yours would equip me with specialized skills to propel my career in the desired direction. SOP15r

I am about to complete (will be graduating with) the basic degree in Electronics and Communications Engineering at DVR College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to Jawaharlal Nehru Technological University, Hyderabad, India. Right from school level, I have been identified as a promising student with deep interest in Mathematics and General Sciences. In my college, I am (was) acknowledged to play a leading role in all the activities. I was the natural choice of the management for each occasion when any event was organised. The college festival EMBLAZON, the freshers’ meet AARAMBH for incoming students every year and such other occasions can be cited as instances where I was called upon to shoulder the responsibilities as a leader in organising the events and I acted as the emcee at the above mentioned events. The cultivation of interpersonal skills during the course of pregraduate (shld it be undergraduate!?) and graduate education built upon the natural traits of character has (distinguished me from others) elevated me to be one distinguished from the rest. I have been acclaimed to possess adequate communication abilities, which spot me as a preferred candidate when the occasion demanded. (With good communication skills, I was always the preferred candidate ). The camaraderie, developed over the years with my peers as well as my faculty members focuses me as an outstanding member of any team. (Delete this!!) I was actively involved in the NSS-Blood Donation Camps organized at our college.I was involved in the organisation part of these Camps. I have been applauded as a developer of teams and a mentor for juniors. I have been chosen as the Team Leader for the Anti Ragging Committee of my College. I was an outstanding student throughout my school days. I was elected as the Speaker (Parliament) of the school.To cite an instance, during the Winter Session of the House there was a lot of commotion over an issue and (with the help of other Cabinet members I was able to resolve the issue) me along with the help of others in the Cabinet resolved the issue.I was an active member in all sports activities at school and college.I also took part in the ICSE Sports meet held at Hyderabad in 1998.

Having attained (gained) technical skills in my engineering course I aspire to obtain (for a degree in Mgt) a degree in the field of Management because that would equip me fully to face the challenges that I would come across in my work field. My long term goal is to see myself as a successful manager in a top notch company. And for me to achieve the above I need to do a Management course and also my activities such as participation in the organisation of events at school level and college level and also being the Team Leader on several occasions make me believe that Management arena is where I belong to. (I belong) WHY THIS INSTITUTION AMONGST ALL OTHERS? (hope this is not a part of the SOP.. if it is, dont give a seperate heading!!) I am specifically interested in doing my course at TAPMI because of the Holistic Approach provided towards Management Education. The presence of Extra Curricular activities and the thought of working in teams make me all the more interested in joining TAPMI.After my two year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I will be able to fulfill my long term goals to perfection.I am confident that your institution will provide the stimulation and support environment that I am eagerly looking for. To sum up, an PGDM Degree from a reputed institution such as yours would equip me with specialized skills to propel my career in the desired direction. SOP16 - FMS

"I am seeking, I am striving, I am in it with all my heart." - Van Gogh. My long-term career goal is to manage and adapt organizations for a global & changing environment and also to engineer such changes. I also yearn to have a life long association with education. I have always had a propensity towards management, be it organizing blood donation camps at college or as a secretary of the annual intercollegiate fest during engineering at KREC. Precisely why I opted for a management trainee post at L&T in lieu of software jobs as was the trend. At L&T, based on performance and potential, I have been rated consistently for past three years as among the top 5 % talent under L&T's prestigious Management Leadership Plan. This apart from bolstering my confidence has provided me with wide ranging assignments in international projects, an overall initiation to business environment, good foundation in teamwork, analytical and practical problem-solving skills. An MBA from a top notch school like FMS with its highly acclaimed curriculum, interaction with some of the best faculty and fellow students, and the academic rigor in general, is I believe a natural step toward getting a broader and more focused knowledge of business concepts, decisions making, global best practices etc and inline with my career objectives. My multicultural and multinational industrial experience, will I believe help me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better. SOP16r

"I am seeking, I am striving, I am in it with all my heart." - Van Gogh. My long-term career goal is to manage organizations that will adapt swiftly to a global changing environment and to engineer such positive changes. I always had a strong inclination towards management, be it in organizing blood donation camps or acting as ‘Secretary’ in intercollegiate fest during college. That is precisely why I opted for a management trainee post at L&T in lieu of a lucrative software job, as was the general trend. At L&T, based on my performance and potential, I have been consistently rated amongst the top 5 % talent under L&T's prestigious Management Leadership Plan for the past three years. This has bolstered my confidence by providing challenging assignments in international projects, an overall initiation to business environment, good foundation in teamwork and strong analytical problem-solving skills. An MBA from a top notch school like FMS with its highly acclaimed curriculum, exceptional faculty members and fellow students, rigorous academic programme will help me in getting focused knowledge of business concepts and shrewd practices, which is inline with my career objectives. I am confident that my multicultural and multinational industrial experience will help me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better to deliver innovative solutions in the competitive business environment. SOP17 - FMS

The world is changing rapidly. I have realized that the more I learn the easier I'm able to adapt to the change. I want to be an innovative leader with vision. My career goal is to lead a team of dedicated employees who will succeed in their chosen field. I hold a Bachelors degree in Electronics engineering from Anna University, which gave me the opportunity to work at Infosys. Having worked at Infosys for more than a year has helped me to understand that learning is a never-ending process. My tenure at Infosys taught me that to be a leader I had to have a sound knowledge of management basics and people management skills. The knowledge base at FMS is a definite advantage that will foster my growth. The chance to work with like-minded people with burning ambitions would be an added advantage. I'm certain that when I complete my education at FMS, I will be armed with the right knowledge that will help me to attain my goal. SOP17r

The world is changing rapidly. I have realized that the more I learn the easier I'm able to adapt to the change. I want to be an innovative leader with vision. My career goal is to lead a team of dedicated employees who will succeed in their chosen field. I hold a Bachelors degree in Electronics engineering from Anna University, which gave me the opportunity to work at Infosys. My experience here has taught me two lessons. First is that

learning is a never-ending process. The second is that to be a leader I had to have a sound knowledge of nuances of management, specifically people management. The knowledge base at FMS is a definite advantage that will foster my growth. The chance to work with like-minded people with burning ambitions would be an enormous learning experience. I'm certain that when I complete my education at FMS, I will be armed with the right knowledge that will help me to attain my goal. SOP18 - FMS

I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand - Confucius. Every organisation needs a strong leader to lead from the front and for that one has to be innovative and able to adapt oneself to changes. Developing such qualities go beyond theoretical learning and therefore should be balanced with some exposure to the “real world”. My goal to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in future requires understanding people and such an experience, I’m sure I can gather from an esteemed institution like FMS. I chose to be a commerce graduate to develop some theoretical knowledge of the subject and now I would like to gain knowledge in depth about the practical aspect of the same relating to a specialized field. My enthusiasm in learning new skills and acquiring up-dated information in every field combined with the School’s curriculum and hands-on experiences combined with the international associations and internships provide this balance which is confirmed by the success of its alumni. I believe that such an institution will help me explore my interest, equip me with the right capability to tackle challenges that I will face later in my career and thereby change my vision into reality. SOP18r

"Every organisation needs a strong leader to lead from the front and for that one has to be innovative and be able to adapt oneself to changes. Developing such qualities go beyond theoretical learning and require real-world exposure. My goal is to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in this rapidly changing world. " Okay so far This necessiates me to understand people and such an experience, I’m sure I can gather from an esteemed institution like FMS. Frankly the above sentence doesn't make sense. It doesn't go down with the preamble. "Though I am a commerce graduate with a modest educational background I lack some important skills and experiences in specialized fields like finance and marketing where I have only limited theoretical familiarity through my curriculum. " No one is a master but no need to be so explicit about it. Rather than saying what you don't know. Tell them what you want to know !

"I am an enthusiastic person and enjoy learning new skills and acquiring up-dated information in every field, as they help me enrich my experiences, explore my interest, and give me a job with bright prospects for the future." I can correct grammar and sentence structure only when I understand what is being talked about. Try reading the above sentence and tell me if it makes any sense to you, it didn't to me atleast ! "Also the emphasis on teamwork, interaction with your world-class faculty and international connections make the program more fascinating and valuable. At the end of my two years in your institution I am sure I will emerge more equipped and ready to pursue my goal than I am at present." Talk to the guys at the instis to see what are the key drivers of the insti. I would probably use those instead of using words like "international connections" (with Dawood in Karachi ? j/k :mg:) which frankly sound hollow to me. Try to hit those points hard. Also the end conclusion should stop at "my goal" don't include "than I am at present" Work on the above and get back. I will try fine-tuning it then. SOP18rr

I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand - Confucius. Every organisation needs a strong leader to lead 1) from the front and 2) for that one has to be innovative and able to adapt oneself to changes. Developing such qualities go beyond theoretical learning and 3) therefore should be balanced with some exposure to the “real world”. 4)My goal to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in future requires understanding people and such an experience, I’m sure I can gather from an esteemed institution like FMS. 5) I chose to be a commerce graduate to develop some theoretical knowledge of the subject and now I would like to gain knowledge in depth about the practical aspect of the same relating to a specialized field. My enthusiasm in 6) learning new skills and acquiring up-dated information in every field combined with the School’s curriculum and hands-on experiences combined with the international associations and internships provide this balance which is confirmed by the success of its alumni. I believe that 7)such an institution will help me explore my interest, equip me with the 8)right capability to tackle challenges that I will face later in my career and thereby 9)change my vision into reality. 1) seen anyone "lead from back" ....lead implies leading from front isnt it? 2) Rewritten as : Being able to innovate and quickly adapt to any potential changes are the essential traits of a leader. 3) change it to " requires an "

4) Rewritten as :My goal to inspire and lead a team of committed individuals require an expertise in inter-personal skills. I believe that an esteemed institute like FMS will help me gain such an expertise. 5) change it , it is too crude 6) bad sentence structure. Read it aloud and you would realise. Its way too long and repetitive use of 'combined' makes it boring 7) what is this?? change it to 'FMS' 8 ) Only one capability?? make it capabilities 9) you dont change a vision to reality. Replace it with "thereby actualizing my vision to reality" SOP19 - FMS

Liar’s poker, a brilliant novel on investment banking by Michael Lewis was my introduction to investment banking and I’ve been captivated ever since. I aspire to work with a leading investment bank. With technology forming an indispensable part of the contemporary finance world, I envision a techno-managerial career for myself by leveraging my two years of work experience as an assistant systems engineer at Tata Consultancy Services Ltd. I believe an MBA would be a bridge between my aspirations and reality( too cliche ). Without discounting the importance of the academic knowledge given in the classrooms, an MBA is important to me for the other intangibles like the highly intellectual milieu and the exchange of thoughts that takes place between people. The rigorous induction procedure at FMS ensures that. Picking up a line from the FMS brochure “ the difference is due to the people” – I hope to learn from the vast community of teachers, students and alumni of the institute. SOP19r

The begining lines are very good. I think the line you picked up from the brochure is extremely good. This is what an SOP is all about, being specific to the college. Most SOPs look like they could have been used for ANY college. IB is not a techno-managerial career. You are contradicting yourself. Instead of saying what you learned in TCS put it as what you got as "real-time" exp. Don't start the second para with "without discounting....." say something like "Over and above blah-blah....I think xyz is also needed" SOPrr

1)Liar’s poker, a brilliant novel on investment banking by Michael Lewis was my introduction to investment banking and I’ve been captivated ever since. 2)I aspire to work with a leading investment bank. With technology forming an indispensable part of the contemporary finance world, I envision a techno-managerial career for myself by leveraging my two years of work experience as an assistant systems engineer at Tata Consultancy Services Ltd. I believe an MBA would be a bridge between my aspirations and reality3)( too cliche ).

4)Without discounting the importance of the academic knowledge given in the classrooms, an MBA is important to me for the other intangibles like the highly intellectual milieu and the exchange of thoughts that takes place between people. The rigorous 5)induction procedure at FMS ensures that. Picking up a line from the FMS brochure “ the difference is due to the people” – I hope to learn from the vast community of teachers, students and alumni of the institute. 1) If the novel introduces you to IB, then it is obviously about IB...isnt it implied? The sentence can be changed to Liar’s poker, a brilliant novel by Michael Lewis was my introduction to investment banking 2) The second and third sentence can be merged as follows. Also third line is toooooo long.... [You can incorporate the suggestions from Arun...i am not aware of what IB exactly is and why it is NOT a techo-managerial job.. Arun can explain a bit here] With technology forming an indispensable part of the contemporary finance world, I envision a techno-managerial career for myself with a leading investment bank. I also plan to leverage my two years of work experience as an assistant systems engineer at Tata Consultancy Services Ltd. 3) Nope...a perfect fit 4) Bad start ..change it 5) I doubt whether only the induction procedure will help you build your "other intangibles "...it has to be the complete program.... SOP20 - FMS

My long term goal is to become top executive of a firm where decisions taken by me becomes its crucial lifeline. The firm could be well entrenched or a start up. I desire myself to be known as a person who in spite of all odds is able to take right decisions, exactly when it is most desired. I want to inculcate within me all the qualities that are prerequisite for such aims. I have a firm belief that these qualities could be learnt and developed with proper training and guidance. I seek admission at this institute as I believe that my zeal if pursued in the proper atmosphere like that of yours will definitely bring out the best I have to offer. The institute is known to provide students the opening to develop and apply functional, management and cross-cultural skills and concepts in global business contexts. It would also help me achieve my long term intellectual aspirations and goals. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the program offered at your institute. It is with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life.

SOP20r

My long term goal is to become a part of the strategic management of a firm, where I am taking crucial decisions. The firm could be well entrenched or a start up. I want to be known as a person who, in spite of all odds, is able to take right decisions. The second sentence is a repetition I want to inculcate within me all the qualities that are prerequisite for such aims. I have a firm belief that these qualities could be learned and developed with proper training and guidance. I seek admission to your institute as I believe that my zeal if pursued in the proper atmosphere like that of yours will definitely bring out the best I have to offer. Make it a more meaningful sentence by changing the structure. I wish to develop and apply functional, management and cross-cultural skills and concepts in global business contexts thereby helping me achieve my long term intellectual aspirations and goals. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the program offered at your institute. It is with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life. SOP20rr

Ability to appreciate problems and take decisions needs as much a sound knowledge base as confidence to deal with them. I aspire to become a part of strategic management, where my primary role is to take crucial decisions that would shape the future course of the firm. I want to inculcate within me all the qualities that are prerequisite for such an aim. I have a firm belief that these qualities could be learnt and mastered with proper training and guidance. I seek admission to your institute as I believe that my zeal if pursued in the proper atmosphere like that of yours will definitely bring out the best I have to offer. FMS encourages its students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the day they join the institute. The institute is known to reward initiative, novelty and thinking outside the box. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the program offered at your institute. It is with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life. SOP20rrr

Ability to focus on problems and to take appropriate decisions to deal with them, needs a sound knowledge base and a high level of confidence. I aspire to become a part of strategic management team, where my primary role is to take crucial decisions that would shape the future course of the firm. I want to inculcate in me all the essential qualities that are prerequisite for such an aim. I have a firm belief that these qualities could be learnt and mastered with proper training and guidance.

I seek admission to a challenging and competitive environment of FMS that will definitely bring out the best I have to offer. I am drawn towards FMS because of its unique concept of encouraging students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the day they join the institute. The institute is known to reward initiative, novelty and thinking outside the box. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the MBA program. It is with this aim in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life. SOP21 - FMS

"We are told never to cross a bridge until we come to it, but this world is owned by men who have 'crossed bridges' in their imagination far ahead of the crowd." These thoughts of Anon have always inspired me to strive for excellance and innovation. On my path to pursuance of excellance, I became the state topper from Gujarat. This gave me the opportunity of getting into an esteemed institute like REC Surathkal. The competitive peer group and highly experienced faculty here inculcated in me a confidence in my creative, strategic and analytical skills. With this confidence, I cherished to get into the industry and prove my mettle there. Through Infosys I got this break and got to face the real world of business. However my stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys has made me realize that Industry is not all about Technology. An industry is based on two important pillars of Technology and Management. Without sound management, technology is like gold in a mine. A manager is the one who can polish this gold and make it worth its value. My experience in SCM packages made me realise the various knitty gritties of Supply chain and whetted my appetite for a sound functional knowledge. Thus I need to complement my Techological skills with an MBA from am esteemed institute like FMS. An MBA from FMS will equip me with sound management practises which will fill in the hiatus in my professsional career. I am sure that FMS, with its world class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, richly experienced faculty,excellent management research base and its stress on Leadership, Excellance and Innovation can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence. In FMS, I find an avenue which can unleash my leadership qualities and hone them to help me in managing business with a positive attitude and confidence. SOP21a

"We are told never to cross a bridge until we come to it, but this world is owned by men who have 'crossed bridges' in their imagination far ahead of the crowd." These thoughts of Anon have always inspired me to strive for excellance and innovation. And WHO THE HELL IS ANON ?? :mg::mg::mg::mg::mg: Looking into the future is having a vision and being proactive. Striving "for excellance (sic) and innovation" are not.

On my path to pursuance of excellance, I became the state topper from Gujarat. This gave me the opportunity of getting into an esteemed institute like REC Surathkal. The competitive peer group and highly experienced faculty here inculcated in me a confidence in my creative, strategic and analytical skills. With this confidence, I cherished to get into the industry and prove my mettle there. Through Infosys I got this break and got to face the real world of business. Kunalbhai tamme gujarat topper hatha ?? :) Aur haan duniya ka har organization ke pehle "esteemed" lagane ki zarrorat nahi bhai. Baaki the whole effect looks kinda exaggerated. Im sorry to say but REC Surathkal is def up there in the top. But if you had said the same for something like IIT-Kanpur Computer Science dept it would have looked better. In your case, give some example maybe to buttress your argument. However my stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys has made me realize that Industry is not all about Technology. An industry is based on two important pillars of Technology and Management. Without sound management, technology is like gold in a mine. A manager is the one who can polish this gold and make it worth its value. My experience in SCM packages made me realise the various knitty gritties of Supply chain and whetted my appetite for a sound functional knowledge. Make it more concise like "However my stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys has made me realize that an industry (??) is based on two important pillars of Technology and Management." Your experience with SCM sounds as if its force fitted with the preceeding lines. Talk about just ur exp with SCM and how it helped you figure out the "business side" of things. Just a suggestion. Thus I need to complement my Techological skills with an MBA from am esteemed institute like FMS. An MBA from FMS will equip me with sound management practises which will fill in the hiatus in my professsional career. I am sure that FMS, with its world class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, richly experienced faculty,excellent management research base  and its stress on Leadership, Excellance and Innovation can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence. In FMS, I find an avenue which can unleash my leadership qualities and hone them to help me in managing business with a positive attitude and confidence. Frankly apart from the spelling mistakes (its "excellence" btw) I don't see anything "technically wrong" with the whole thing. But the wordings sound so very boring. The "esteemed insti" line esp :mg: SOP22 - FMS

They say, "U hav an apple. ur friend has an apple. If u exchange them, u still have only 1 apple each. But u have an idea and ur friend has an idea. If u exchange it, u both have 2 ideas each". Success in life is thus all about evolving continuously through observation and interaction and ultimately realizing one's true potential. I am a man with technical aptitude and an interest in management. My BTech in electronics and communication stream has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills. I believe that

specific technical knowledge is not sufficient to shoulder the challenges of the dynamic business world. Business is a multi faceted activity requiring knowledge of accounting, commerce, economics, law, human psychology and various other skills. Hence an MBA study comes as an obvious choice to me aiming to be a true and responsible corporate professional with a great sense of Management, leadership and mentorship. What will I get at FMS -> A COMPETITIVE ENVIRONMENT where we will be pushed to our potential and Relatively small batch size will ensure magnified individual attention. -> A large closely knit and mutually beneficial NETWORK OF USEFUL CONTACTS which is greatest source of expanding one's business opportunities, domain, and ideas. ->COST TO RETURN RATIO which is highest in the country and its STRATEGIC LOCATION in NCR which is fastly developing into a major hub for commercial activity in the country. SOP22r

They say, "U hav an apple. ur friend has an apple. If *u exchange them, u still have only 1 apple each. But u have an idea and ur friend has an idea. If u exchange it, u both have 2 ideas each". And u crib about the words limitation ? :mg: Frankly change this. Doesnt give the needed "impact". Success in life is thus all about evolving continuously through observation and interaction and ultimately realizing one's true potential. Sounds okay to me if you can think of a better starting. I am a man with technical aptitude and an interest in management. My BTech in electronics and communication stream has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills. Congrats !! You happen to be the millionth guy who SOP has these "being a Btech has given my analytical skills" crap !!! :mg: :mg: I believe that specific technical knowledge is not sufficient to shoulder the challenges of the dynamic business world. Business is a multi faceted activity requiring knowledge of accounting, commerce, economics, law, human psychology and various other skills. Hence an MBA study comes as an obvious choice to me aiming to be a true and responsible corporate professional with a great sense of Management, leadership and mentorship. I understand these are all valid points but somehow it sounds as if I have heard them a million times before. Maybe from the same SOPs you have tepofied So keep the same spirit but try to write in your own words. The sincerity should shine through. What will I get at FMS -> A COMPETITIVE ENVIRONMENT where we will be pushed to our potential and Relatively small batch size will ensure magnified individual attention. -> A large closely knit and mutually beneficial NETWORK OF USEFUL CONTACTS which is greatest source of expanding one's business opportunities, domain, and ideas. * *

*->COST TO RETURN RATIO which is highest in the country and its STRATEGIC LOCATION in NCR which is fastly developing into a major hub for commercial activity in the country. I don't think I would put it point-wise. Be more poetic and weave it into a sentence. SOP23 - MDI

“Things haven’t changed much here for few thousand years” But one right mould can change it forever. Change is far more profound than what we can sense. To meet these changes and the challenges in this competitive environment, with a decisive victory; a quandary emerges as to how to canalize and direct this. This best exemplifies my purpose for further graduate study from Management Development Institute. My aim in life is to create and manage one of the world’s most competitive and successful corporate houses. Cherishing these dreams in my mind, I have chalked out my academic life. My graduation in B.Com (Accounting Honors) and C.A. Intermediate have given me a relatively sufficient academic base to provide aesthesis to my dreams. Though finance has been my forte, I feel that a further study in new areas along with a diverse exposure at this school would surely add to my academic, managerial and interpersonal strength. This program will be the ideal bridge from my present state to my desired goal since it offers extra-ordinary learning opportunities by converging basic business fundamentals with the advance learning and developing entrepreneurial skills necessary to be a successful corporate leader. SOP23r

“Things haven’t changed much here for few thousand years” Somebody said it.. or u feel so!! If its ur thought, then combine it with the next para. But one right mould can change it forever. Change is far more profound than what we can sense. To meet these changes and the challenges in this competitive environment, with a decisive victory; a quandary emerges as to how to canalize and direct this. This best exemplifies my purpose for further graduate study from Management Development Institute. this what??? Quandary? Victory?? I would rather u re-write a clear one... I am not able to pin point what u are trying to say!! My aim in life is to create and manage one of the world’s most competitive and successful corporate houses. Cherishing these dreams in my mind, I have chalked out my academic life. My graduation in B.Com (Accounting Honors) and C.A. Intermediate have given me a relatively sufficient academic base to provide {{aesthesis}} to my dreams. Wrong word!!

Though finance has been my forte, I feel that a further study in new areas along with a diverse exposure at this school would surely add to my academic, managerial and interpersonal strength. Instead of schools, write MDI pls! This program will be the ideal bridge from my present state to my desired goal since it offers extra-ordinary learning opportunities by converging basic business fundamentals with the advance learning and developing entrepreneurial skills necessary to be a successful corporate leader. business fundamentals with advance learning and development of entrepreneurial skills.. SOP24 - FMS

“Death Equalizes Life” – At end irrespective of ones material possessions, enjoyments, everyone becomes equal again. This sums up my life vision. Career goal has to be in tune with life goal. I want to maximize my contribution to the society and to myself. In this life, I have to achieve the highest state of perfection. Career would act as step towards that life goal. Now coming to career, I look myself as global, flexible person suitable for all kind of work. Technology is useless without application. After acquiring technical knowledge, its time for me to get business domain knowledge. I visualize an end to coding jobs in next decade with software tools doing 99% of work of coder. Acquisition of business knowledge will not be an option but compulsion in future. Marketing is life of any activity. I have marketing experience in my college days selling time shares worth in lakhs to clients and I remember how I and my clients enjoyed conversing over any topic under sun helping me click the deal. My commerce background helps me appreciate accounts and its value. My interest in people helps me understand and empathize with them easily. I have observed how people dynamics changes with environment and need to handle it effectively. Summing up, my abilities in understanding people, familiarity with finance and commerce( Bcom + C.A.Inter ), and my specialization in technology(MCA) makes me a suitable candidate for generalized management. FMS with its many advantages over other institutes definitely can catapult me towards my career and life goals. SOP24r

1)“Death Equalizes Life” – At end irrespective of ones material possessions, enjoyments, everyone becomes equal again. This sums up my life vision. 2) Career goal has to be in tune with life goal. I want to maximize my contribution to the society and to myself. 3)In this life, I have to achieve the highest state of perfection. Career would act as step towards that life goal. 4)Now coming to career, I look myself as global, flexible person suitable for all kind of work.

5) Technology is useless without application. After acquiring technical knowledge, its time for me to get business domain knowledge. I visualize an end to coding jobs in next decade with software tools doing 99% of work of coder. Acquisition of business knowledge will not be an option but compulsion in future. 6)Marketing is life of any activity. I have marketing experience in my college days selling time shares worth in lakhs to clients and I remember how I and my clients enjoyed conversing over any topic under sun helping me click the deal. 7)My commerce background helps me appreciate accounts and its value. My interest in people helps me understand and empathize with them easily. I have observed how people dynamics changes with environment and need to handle it effectively. Summing up, my abilities in understanding people, familiarity with finance and commerce( Bcom + C.A.Inter ), and my specialization in technology(MCA) makes me a suitable candidate for generalized management. 8)FMS with its many advantages over other institutes definitely can catapult me towards my career and life goals. My take on your SOP : 1) Why this philosophy? What are you trying to tell? What does "equal" means? 2) Does NOT relate with why you are an MBA aspirant? Does MBA a prerequiste for social contribution? 3) A discontinuity ....what kind of perfection? (its too high a funda, which atleast I am NOT able to understand) 4) Is this your career ==> "doing any kind of job" ? Boy you need to do a real introspection 5) Come on ...why there is a need to predict the future..... your last line indicates that since it is anyway going to be a compulsion (as per you) thats why you want to get business knowledge.....you are conveying a bad impression 6) Atleast the FMS question does NOT ask for your experience, then why elaborate on sth which is NOT asked....this entire para does not give anything to the reader...(Remember he is much more expert in "skimming" and "skipping" techniques than any of us and he has hundreds of other 'relevant' SOPs to read) 7) So what?? You are NOT suppossed to convince the reader entirely here that you are suitable person for MBA in their institute...lets keep that for the PI....he is asking for what your career goals are and how this particular program (& institute) will help you in achieving it. 8 ) Expand this...what is FMS has that aligns with your goals. (I feel that it is best NOT to compare various institutes, atleast in the SOP) SOP25 - FMS

An idea has the potential to change the life of millions. But an idea, besides needing the technical know how, also needs the skills to handle the complex real life situations. The technical

knowledge can tell where to enter but not how to handle intricate issues? I have always dreamed about implementing ideas to real life. An urge to be an entrepreneur, to successfully marry science with a commercial enterprise, which can also benefit the mankind, has always been a fascinating thought. I want to make this dream into a passion, a reality that can be a success. An inclination towards managing things and organizing events, groups such as founding of entrepreneurship club in the college further convinced me that I should go in this field. A brief stint with a firm to inculcate the subtlety of business and then standing on my own is what I envision for myself. An MBA from FMS can help me in learning the nuances of management, besides learning various courses, which can’t be covered in a technical college. FMS has the advantage of having a relatively small but cohesive group. It also has a vibrant and active student alumni network. It has the perfect setting for incubation of an idea. SOP25r

An idea has the potential to change the life of millions. But an idea, besides needing the technical know how, also needs the skills to handle the complex real life situations. The technical knowledge can tell where to enter but not how to handle intricate issues? I have always dreamed about implementing ideas to real life. Very well written, seems to be from the heart and honest. Just 2 things : (a) "?" after issues (b) ideas "to" real life An urge to be an entrepreneur, to successfully marry science with a commercial enterprise, which can also benefit the mankind, has always been a fascinating thought. I want to make this dream into a passion, a reality that can be a success. An inclination towards managing things and organizing events, groups such as founding of entrepreneurship club in the college further convinced me that I should go in this field. A brief stint with a firm to inculcate the subtlety of business and then standing on my own is what I envision for myself. (c) Sentences too long. (d) Im not too sure about the grammar of "groups such as founding of entrepreneurship club in the college " An MBA from FMS can help me in learning the nuances of management, besides learning various courses, which can’t be covered in a technical college. FMS has the advantage of having a relatively small but cohesive group. It also has a vibrant and active student alumni network. It has the perfect setting for incubation of an idea. * (e) Cannot help noticing that all your sentences start with the same "an" (f) learning "though" rather than "besides" (g) drop the technical college thing........steer clear of negatives

(h) "FMS has the advantage of having a relatively small but cohesive group." seems kinda well........for lack of better word - not cohesive :mg: Apart from that one of the best essays I have read in a while :) SOP26 - FMS

When I joined the Industrial Engineering course at College of Engineering, Thiruvananthapuram all I wished for was to get a ?software job? during my final year. But when I was introduced to some of the facets of management as part of my course I realized that management is my career destination.(I KNOW THIS NEED TO BE REPHRASED...SUGGESTONS PLZZ...MEBBE CONNECTING THIS WITH THE QUOTE) However, what I learn as part of my undergraduate course is just the tip of the iceberg. In order have a deeper insight of the corporate world, I need join a top management post-graduate programme in the country. The message from Prof.Bhalla, says that Fms provides its students with the opportunities to be leaders, team players, managers and above all responsible corporate citizens. It is this opportunity which I need to attain my dream career, to be placed high on the corporate ladder and be part of the strategic decision making process of an organization. FMS being the oldest management institution in the country will provide me the best chance of realizing my dreams. SOP27 - FMS

I have learnt some of the most valuable and unforgettable lessons while working and interacting with fellow students in my university. I have always been awestruck with what can be achieved while working as a team. Following my undergraduate studies has been one of the most enriching experience of my life, and I wish to further that experience. I want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody around him to chase their dreams with all the passion in one's heart. I want to have the confidence to take decisions on behalf of the people who work with me and I want those people to have that kind of confidence in me. I believe that at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork b/w the students, faculty, staff and alumni, I will have the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. From designing of my own curriculum to managing of the recruitment process I will have numerous opportunities to hone my skills and to develop the confidence that is so important in order to be a good manager. SOP27r

I have learnt some of the most valuable and unforgettable lessons while working and interacting with fellow students in my university. I have always been awestruck with what can be achieved while working as a team. My undergraduate study has been one of the most enriching experience of my life, and I wish to further that experience. (u want to continue ur undergrad... what u want to convey is not conveyed here!)

I want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody around him to chase their dreams with all the passion in their heart. I want to have the confidence to take decisions on behalf of the people who work with me and I want those people to have that kind of confidence in me. I believe that at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork amongst the students, the faculty, the staff and the alumni, will give me the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. From designing my own curriculum to managing the recruitment process, I will have numerous opportunities to hone my skills in management and also to develop the confidence that is so important in order to be a successful manager. SOP28 - FMS

Money has always been very close to me .This is one which takes my imagination to the sky. Though i dont have the requisite skills and a firm grounding the theortical concepts i often find myself unequql for the challenges that lie ahead.Being from the engineering background from the U.V.C.E Bangalore.During the graduation what started as a hobby to know more about stocks and shares has now turned out to be overriding passion of my life .This is one thing which now makes me to seriously considering a career in equity and stocks by been a investment banker which is my career goal.Also the family business which is in distbution of Fmcg com has helped me to build a sence of marketing. The hands on support of my uncle who is in stock broking also helped to built on my passion.this is why i thought of doing MBA. When i thought of MBA the first institute to my mind was FMS.FMS with a very small batch size will give me the maxamim exposoure to bring out my skills . SOP28r

I developed an intense passion for finance and monetary affairs during my formative years. It was this passion that made me seriously contemplate a rewarding career in finance. I hope to realize my aspirations in this regard in near future. The 4-year rigorous engineering course that I have been pursuing has been an integral part of my intellectual development. The Computer Science course requires the student to possess analytical and logical abilities of the highest order. These skills that I have developed over the past 4 years are indispensable for a career in finance as well. Cross-functional knowledge of different aspects of management is my forte.Hailing from a business background,I have had hands-on experience of equity trading as well as distribution and marketing of FMCG products.My IT education has bestowed me with rudimentary knowledge of Systems as well. Ten years down the line, I see myself as a high-flying number-crunching Investment Banker. On the flip side, I do not have a firm grounding in the theortical aspects of Management. As a result , I often find myself unarmed when I think about facing the challenges ahead of me. This is where FMS comes into the picture. Pursuing a management course in FMS shall undoubtedly

help me in gaining the requisite theoretical knowledge as well as the soft skills that are critical for any manager with high aspirations. SOP29 - FMS

Belonging to a marwari family, business has always fascinated me. As a child I always dreamt of managing a business of some widely used product. In my unempirical childhood-mind, this product happened to be cement. Why Cement? Because I used to see a lot of construction-work happening and felt that this world cant do without cement. Though with age, the cement part has vanished but the desire of managing a big company still remains. However, to be able to achieve this target, I need to have a strong grounding on the various facets of management and I am sure an MBA can help me achieve this objective. As a state topper from Gujarat and Engineering from REC, Surathkal, my academic performance has given me enough confidence to be able to handle the responsibilites and challenges of a manager with aplomb and confidence. My industry experience includes a stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys where I am working on SCM packages. With this experience I have got to learn a lot about the IT Industry, supply chains of manufacturing companies and the role played by sound management in the success of an organisation. This has whetted my appetite ever more for an MBA. With an MBA from FMS, I am sure I will be able to fulfill my long-cherised dreams. My interaction with a few almunae of FMS has given me enough confidence to achieve these targets. With the stress given on leadership skills and innovation in FMS, I look myself as a successful manager with the confidence to lead a team of people and contribute to the success of an organisation. SOP29r

Belonging to a marwari family, business has always fascinated me. As a child I always dreamt of managing a business of some widely used product. In my unempirical childhood-mind, this product happened to be cement. Why Cement? Because I used to see a lot of construction-work happening and felt that this world cant do without cement. Though with age, the cement part has vanished but the desire of managing a big company still remains. However, to be able to achieve this target, I need to have a strong grounding on the various facets of management and I am sure an MBA can help me achieve this objective. (a) Cut out the 1st sentence........start with "As a child....." (b) "unempirical childhood-mind" ?? what does it mean ? (c) Your first 4 sentence sound very colloquial. You may keep the same concept of cement but make it more prosaic.

(d) "sound grounding on various facets of management" kinda boring but then ....... :) As a state topper from Gujarat and Engineering from REC, Surathkal, my academic performance *has given me enough confidence to be able to handle the responsibilites and challenges of a manager with aplomb and confidence. (e) My superior (some other word ?) academic peformance has given.......blah blah. Im sure they have a copy of your resume where you have nicely highlighted this. (f) But still academic performance and responsibilities and challenges of a mgr are quite different. Doesnt gell. My industry experience includes a stint of 1.5 yrs in Infosys where I am working on SCM packages. With this experience I have got to learn a lot about the IT Industry, supply chains of manufacturing companies and the role played by sound management in the success of an organisation. This has whetted my appetite ever more for an MBA. (g) "includes 1.5yrs in Infy" im sure u have other exp too. Just to check. (h) change "about the IT Industry, supply chains of manufacturing companies and the role played by sound management in the success of an organisation" to "about the role played by sound management in the success of an organisation, specifically in the IT Industry" With an MBA from FMS, I am sure I will be able to fulfill my long-cherised dreams. My interaction with a few almunae of FMS has given me enough confidence to achieve these targets. With the stress given on leadership skills and innovation in FMS, I look myself as a successful manager with the confidence to lead a team of people and *contribute to the success of an organisation. (i) Ideally should be "these" long cherished dreams. I mean should be a continuation from your cement dream. (j) interaction shouldnt give you "confidence" rather should make you more aware of the insti and how well you "fit" into it. SOP30 - FMS

I always envisioned myself as playing the leading role in the success of an organization. Success of an organization requires a perfect blend of technology and strong, self-motivated leadership. Besides, I have a strong inclination towards the analytical and reasoning aspect of learning. So my natural choice for graduation was Engineering. During my graduation my goal transformed into passion as I honed my skills of working in a team and managing and participating in various events (both technical and cultural) with an attitude of creativity to produce new ideas and approaches. Thus, the next logical step would be to complement my technological skills with an MBA. It is my dream to do my MBA from FMS, the institute which gives not just the environment and opportunities, but also the freedom. Freedom to explore, to be bold and most importantly, to be

creative. This holistic approach is very well reflected in the fact that FMS has included “self-development courses” in the orientation phase of its course structure. The pedagogy of FMS to encourage students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the day they join inculcates a strong sense of self-motivation. This I feel is the perfect foundation for a strong inspired leadership, and so I am looking forward for an opportunity of a lifetime, an MBA from an institute which does not put boundations on creativity and learning. SOP30r

I always envisioned myself as playing the leading role in the success of an organization. Success of an organization requires a perfect blend of technology and strong, self-motivated leadership. Besides, I have a strong inclination towards the analytical and reasoning aspect of learning. 1)So my natural choice for graduation was Engineering. During my graduation my goal transformed into passion as I honed my skills of working in a team and managing and participating in various events (both technical and cultural) with an attitude of creativity to produce new ideas and approaches. Thus, the next logical step would be to complement my technological skills with an MBA. 2)It is my dream to do my MBA from FMS, the institute which gives 3)not just the environment and opportunities, but also the 4)freedom. Freedom to explore, to be bold and most importantly, to be creative. This holistic approach is very well 5)reflected in the fact that FMS has included “self-development courses” in the orientation phase of its course structure. The pedagogy of FMS to encourage students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership right from the day they join inculcates a strong sense of self-motivation. This I feel is the perfect foundation for a strong inspired leadership6), and so I am looking forward for an opportunity of a lifetime, an MBA from an institute which does not put boundations on creativity and learning. A good one. Crisp and to the point. A few things you can look into for improvement 1) Is it possible for you to break it in two equally lengthy sentences? 2) Replace it with " I aspire to pursue my MBA from FMS" 3) Check the idiomatic usage (I am not sure about it) 4) Club it together (make it continuous). Also check out the grammatical structure. 5) replace it with "reflected by the “self-development courses” in the orientation phase at FMS" 6) Put a full stop here SOP31 - FMS

During my last three years in the knowledge industry I was immensely touched by the love and the respect I got from my students and a immense sense of self satisfaction once they actually tasted success with my help. However at some points of time I also felt aggrieved when some constraints like time and resources actually came in the way of imparting the best quality

available. It is that point of time that I decided to do a course which will give me insights into the intricacies of running a business while not losing touch with my teaching and knowledge skills. That way I will be able to take a much more active role in finding a perfect balance between constraints and quality as well as derive high profitability out of it. Five years from now I see myself leading a knowledge and training providing institution which will be numero uno in this field not only in terms of healthy financial figures but also helping thousands of people achieve their career objectives. The part time MBA program of FMS caters for my requirements perfectly. FMS which has a well researched academic curriculum and exceptionally knowledgeable faculty strength will surely help in getting the right mix of concepts and theory as well as business acumen as I remain in touch with my basic skill of teaching and research. The enviable track record of FMS since its inception in producing hugely successful corporate leaders gives testimony in my firm believe in the institution helping me achieving my objectives. SOP32 - FMS

Rome was not build in one day. It is a multi-step process. My Degree in Engineering was the first step towards achieving my vision, a vision of becoming an entrepreneur to reckon with in the Software Development industry. I want to serve the society by way of leading a company engaged in creation of wealth which benefits the nation and society at large besides fulfilling my own needs. I believe that my stint at FMS will help me in developing my managerial skills and hone my business acumen. I believe that studying with a small batch of around 90 people will ensure a high level of camaraderie between us, the students, which will facilitate free flow of information and ideas among some of the best minds. It will also inculcate in me Teamwork, Communication, Interpersonal skills and the right kind of competition that will motivate me to perform to my utmost potential. The pedagogical approach followed combined with the fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on concepts will encourage my intellectual curiosity and open my mind to the adventure of ideas. I believe that I will learn smart and innovative ways of managing in today’s radically unpredictable business environment and the ways to innovate, communicate and respond in real time and to move ahead with control, confidence and agility. SOP33 - SPJAIN

Q1.) What are your Principal interests, if any, outside your academic pursuits and/or career? How have they influenced your personality? I have been actively involved in sports, namely cricket and Table Tennis. They have enabled me to channelize my energy towards achieving my goal. It has given me the mental strength and a strong feeling of competitiveness. It has taught me a lot of things - to believe in my abilities, to adopt a never say die attitude, to take initiatives, and the ability to fight back from difficult

situations. I have realized the importance of focus, hard work, team-work, dedication, patience and perseverance. These qualities, I believe, have been instrumental in bringing out in my personality the importance of strategizing to achieve the success. SOP33r

Frankly, too many points. Im lost !! You have mentioned *every* good point in the book to get those extra brownie points. By the time I am done, I am like "Wheew.... I don't know what kind of guy he is. I don't know how his doing something like cricket and TT has helped him" Q2.) If you had the freedom, what career or activity would you like to pursue in life? Throughout my life there has been no pressure on me regarding my career choices. The decision to pursue a career in management is purely a conscious one and out of my free will. Through this career, I want to surge ahead in the corporate fraternity, to have a greater sense of achievement and to attain a greater self esteem. I want to serve the society by way of leading a company engaged in creation of wealth which benefits the nation and society at large. SOP33r

Ok. But mention even your undergrad i.e that you did even your engg/bsc/bcom/ba out of free will. But if I were you I would say something like maybe a poet/writer/scientist etc. Im sure all of us have an inner urge to do something "different". This would help in bringing out your personality. In that aspect your answer seems "tame". Q3.) Describe an incident from the recent past when you had to overlook ethics to get your work done? After passing from one of the premier colleges of India I was expecting to have offers of a good position in the software industry immediately upon graduation. But I realized that having an Electronics background was a disadvantage especially during the slow software market in 2003. Setting aside my ethics of not asking a favor from anybody, I had to ask my relatives and friends for assistance to find a suitable job for me. Ultimately I was able to find the job of my choice without any help that gave me a deep sense of self satisfaction. SOP33rr

Finding a job using your network is name of the game dude. What is unethical about it ? Infact one of the top 3 reasons to do an MBA (atleast outside India) is the network that you build. Infact Peter Drucker rates it as the numero uno must-haves in his power list of "what it takes to be successful in life". He calls it the Rolodex Power.

Q4.) If you had a choice, what attribute of your character would you like to change? I have an apparent inability to give attention to details. This characteristic can be detrimental in certain situations where it is important to give due consideration to various facets of a situation. However, I believe that this requires an experience of some real life situations. I am making due efforts to overcome this by not hasting my decisions and giving due consideration to various aspects. SOP33r

Basically you are the Mr.look-at-the-large-picture guy, which isn't too bad if you are going to do an MBA. Maybe you should focus on how you gloss over some points and in the end you misinterpret things. Q5.) What is your understanding of the term “values”? Mention three values that you implement in your daily life. Illustrate at least one with an example? Values for me are the principles and the ethics which are inculcated in a person through his upbringing. For me hard-work, compassion and non-violence are the values which I implement in my daily life. I feel sympathy for people who live in distress and in poverty. When In college, we had a boy in his teens working in the canteen. I, along with some of my friends, was able to convince his parents about the importance of primary education. I also took the initiative to ensure that his education (next 4years bole toh till what std ?) was taken care of by generous sponsorships from our whole class. SOP33r

Im sorry but non-violence sound outright crappy :) Q6.) Describe a situation where you as an individual, set your sight on a difficult target and saw it through to completion despite obstacles? During my high school, I realized the importance of hard work. I wanted to get admission into one of the premier colleges in India. Inspite of setbacks, inspite of having to deal with adverse circumstances beyond my control I never gave up and after burning the midnight oil for months together I was able to get an AIR 226 in Delhi College of Engineering, one of the top- rung engineering college in the country. SOP33r

Boss, you were dangerously off-track in your original version. Q7.) Give an example of how you worked effectively in a team to accomplish an important task.

In my final year of college I was part of a team of three students who were chosen to do an original project work on newly launched microcontrollers. There was little information about the product available since it was new. We had just one source- the product details of the company. But we were determined and worked very hard towards interpreting the details. We complemented each other extremely well and worked as a cohesive unit. After brain-storming on the different modules of the project, many possibilities of implementation, and the best ways to complete the project in the stipulated time, we were able to complete the project successfully in the stipulated time through our hard work and team work. SOP33r

As mentioned above, Im not going too much in finding out faults. Im working on an overall perspective. So far this is the best question you have answered. Q8.) Provide an accurate and detailed description of the job responsibilities at your Current/Last place of employment. I currently work for Xansa India Limited as a Technical Systems Trainee. It is a UK based BPO and IT Services Company which creates and delivers IT services and solutions. After a month of initial training, I was inducted in a project for a client Boots, a UK based pharmacy and retail store company. We are a team of four people responsible for delivering the solution to the client. We are currently designing an intranet based application for them. I have the responsibility of coding some of the part of an application, documenting the program specifications and making appropriate test cases for the application. SOP33r

I think you have described the company more elaborately than your own job requirement. Does it require interacting directly with the client ? Do you report to the manager or the lead ? Does your job involve working long hours and over weekends ? Do you mentor new people inducted in the team ? Is there any knowlege management initiative ? There are countless of things you can mention here.......pick and choose the ones you have done and best describe you. SOP34 - FMS

It has been said that while the Japanese expend 9 months in planning and just 3 months in successful execution, the rest invariably do it the other way, there by invariable laboring more than required. In today’s competitive world there is no place for complacency and inefficiency. I believe, poor project management and execution, which till now was directly affecting the bottom lines, has now made the difference between those who survive and those who perish. Also projecting and utilizing India as just a low cost talent basket shall back fire especially when other low cost countries perfect their English language skills.

This is where I want to make a difference.( or This is where I see myself playing a critical role.). A Management perspective with a grasp of technology will enable me to deliver high quality services/products. As a part of my work experience I have been able to prove my grasp of technology, handling of crisis, working with latest technologies and driving a team. What drives me to the MBA FT course at FMS is the healthy faculty-student ratio. I believe FMS can bring to my disposition a global perspective and broaden my horizons. This is what I need to achieve my dreams. SOP34r

It is said that while the Japanese expend 9 months in planning and just 3 months in successful execution, others (if it is a saying then, dont change it!!) invariably do it the other way, there by invariably laboring more than it is required. In today’s competitive world there is no place for complacency and inefficiency. I believe, poor project management and execution, which till now was directly affecting the bottom lines, has now made the difference between those who survive and those who perish. Also projecting and utilizing India as just a low cost talent basket shall back fire especially when other low cost countries perfect their English language skills. (U sound like a CNBC reporter... Are u sure u want to say this - this long...!) This is where I see myself playing a critical role. A Management perspective with a grasp of technology will enable me to deliver high quality services/products. I dont see the connection between the 2nd & 3rd para...Bring about some connection pls. How will u play a critical role etc etc As a part of my work experience I have been able to successfully prove my grasp of latest technology, crisis management and team building skills. What drives me to the MBA FT course at FMS is the healthy faculty-student ratio. I believe FMS can bring to my disposition a global perspective and broaden my horizons. This is what I need to achieve my dreams. SOP35 - General

My experience in a coaching centre over the last three years has given me an immense sense of self satisfaction. I am touched by the love and the respect I get from my students and the feeling

of exhilaration that surfaces when I see them succeed is beyond explanation. However at times, I feel sad when some constraints like time and resources actually came in the way of imparting the best quality (quality what?? teachin?) available. To cover these loop-holes, I have decided to do my masters in management that will give me insights into the intricacies of running a business while letting me not to lose with my teaching and knowledge skills. I wish to find a perfect balance between constraints and quality and get high profitability out of it. Five years from now I see myself leading a knowledge and training institution which will be numero uno in this field not only in terms of healthy financial figures but also in helping thousands of people achieve their career objectives. SOP36 - FMS

Challenges have always been a driving force in my life and have motivated me in performing better at anything I do.I find no greater challenge then,than pursuing my dream of making it to the top echelons of the corporate industry.A more immediate and logical step therefore, would be to become a manager- someone not only a part of the decision making heirarchy, shaping the future course of a firm ,but also someone who can inspire everybody around him to chase their dreams with all the passion in their heart. Though a integral part of my intellectual development and helping me hone my anlytical and logical skills,I think my technical education degree will never quite make the grade in giving me a stimulating,challenging and growth oriented career.This,I have come to believe is the prerogative of an MBA degree and hence is my ernest zeal in pursuing it. This is where FMS comes in.With its world class faculty and infrastucture, and more importantly its focus on leadership and creating an environment of excellence,team spirit and professional integrity,I believe FMS is the place to pursue my dreams- a place where this ugly catterpillar can change into a butterfly,ready to take on the world. SOP36r

*Challenges have always been a driving force in my life and have motivated me 1)in performing better at anything I do.I find no greater 2)challenge then,than pursuing my dream of making it to the top echelons of the corporate industry.A 3)more immediate and logical step therefore, would be to become a manager- 4)someone not only a part of the decision making heirarchy, shaping the future course of a firm ,but also someone who can inspire everybody around him to chase their dreams with all the passion in their heart. *5)Though a integral part of my intellectual development and helping me hone my anlytical and logical skills,I think my technical education degree will never quite make the grade in giving me a stimulating,challenging and growth oriented career.This6),I have come to believe is the prerogative of an MBA degree and hence 7)is my ernest zeal in pursuing it. * 8)This is where FMS comes in.With its world class faculty and infrastucture, and more importantly its focus on leadership and creating an environment of excellence,team spirit and professional integrity,I 8a)believe FMS is the place to pursue my dreams- a place where this 9)ugly catterpillar can 10)change into a butterfly,ready to take on the world.

1) replace it by "to give out my best" (why NOT use the superlative degree :mg: ) 2) replace it by " a challenge" 3) Nope your more immediate goal is to enter FMS.Remove it 4) replace it by "someone who is" 5) A negative statement reagrding your undergrad studies....gives a really bad impression. You might change it to My technical undergraduate studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development. They have helped me to hone my anlytical and logical skills. But I believe that ..........(Now write a statement which indicates that this has not prepared you for managerial position) 6) Remove it 7) replace it by "my earnest zeal to pursue it." 8 ) Remove this line..does not convey what you want to .... 8a) replace it by "believe that FMS" 9) 'Tiny' is a better word than 'ugly' 10) replace it by "be metamorphosed into a beautiful and large butterfly" SOP37

To accomplish great things, we must not only act, but also dream; not only plan, but also believe."-Anatole France Even as the ebullient sixth-graders trooped out of the computer lab after the first class of the session, one young lad stayed back to pester his teacher with more questions about the sublime machine and its seemingly limitless potential. That was my formal introduction to the world of computers, and my fascination for them has grown ever since. I was convinced that I wanted to have a career in Information Technology by the time I reached 10th grade. I have a dream – to own an indigenous software solutions company that takes up innovative ideas and converts them into marketable products and services, generating wealth for its stakeholders and lasting value for its clients. My first step towards this goal was gaining grassroots level experience and technical know-how while working with two indusrty leaders – Infosys and Oracle. The next logical step will be completing a professional management programme from a reputed institution, so that instead of relying only on intution I can leverage established scientific methodologies to solve the problems in management of an organisation. Throughout my college life, I made a conscious effort to hone my people and organisational skills via a wide variety of activities ranging from participating in social service initiatives to organising the departmental seminar. In today’s competitive world, these ‘soft’ skills are a must-have for any aspiring entrepreneur.

FMS, with all its advantages of a premier management institute, also gives its students a chance to leverage the inputs from the other departments and faculties in the university. These inter-disciplinary interactions will help any student in broadening his vision beyond mere academic pursuit of management principles. Also, the relatively small batch size, flexibility of the curriculum and ample opportunities for students to experiment and learn are factors that will definitely enhance the personality of its students. Thus, FMS emerges as my first choice B-school SOP37r

"To accomplish great things, we must not only act, but also dream; not only plan, but also believe."-Anatole France (This quote does NOT go well with the following content...my suggestion remove it...not because I do not encourage quotes but because it does not go well here) Even as the ebullient sixth-graders trooped out of the computer lab after the first class of the session, one young lad stayed back to pester his teacher with more questions about the sublime machine and its seemingly limitless potential. That was my formal introduction to the world of computers, and my fascination for them has grown ever since. I was convinced that I wanted to have a career in Information Technology by the time I reached 10th grade. My dream is to own an indigenous software solutions company that takes up innovative ideas and converts them into marketable products and services, generating wealth for its stakeholders and lasting value for its clients. My first step towards this goal was gaining grassroots level experience and technical know-how while working with two indusrty leaders – Infosys and Oracle. The next logical step will be to complete a professional management programme from a reputed institution, so that instead of relying only on intution I can leverage established scientific methodologies (controversial --> Is management a logical/scientific method? make sure you can defend this in PI) to solve the problems in management of an organisation. Throughout my college life, I made a conscious effort to hone my people and organisational skills via a wide variety of activities ranging from participating in social service initiatives to organising the departmental seminar. In today’s competitive world, these ‘soft’ skills are a must-have for any aspiring entrepreneur. (Are you trying to convey that you are suitable for being an entrepreneur. is it necessary at this point.... keep this for PI) FMS, with all its advantages of a premier management institute, also gives its students a chance to leverage the inputs from the other departments and faculties in the university. These inter-disciplinary interactions will help any student in broadening his vision beyond mere academic pursuit of management principles. Also, the relatively small batch size, flexibility of the curriculum and ample opportunities for students to experiment and learn are factors that will

definitely enhance the personality of its students. Thus, FMS emerges as my first choice B-school. SOP38 - FMS

“Life is growth, and, after some time, growth is life”. The zeal to explore is the only spark and catalyst to the process of growth and continued learning is its only proof. The “hunger to know”, therefore, is the ruling principle from which all others emanate. From being the principle representative of school for public speaking, to leading it as the Head-Girl and finally holding the post of Secretary of the Commerce Union at college, it is this principle and objective that has acted as teacher, motivator and propeller. Furthering this journey of intellectual and personal growth is the challenge to widen and deepen my understanding of management thought and the intricacies if the contemporary business environment. Flexible curriculum, the touted student-faculty proximity that stretches beyond the classroom, corporate mentoring by stalwarts from a valuable alumni network and collaborative and exchange programmes with various institutions abroad reaffirm my faith in FMS. From making an impact through the mike on an audience at school, to influencing a global people through business leadership, I trust FMS to guide me in this journey of learning, and therefore, Growth. SOP39 - FMS

“What I do is imp coz I’m giving it a day of my life. What I achieve must be worthwhile coz the price is high.” The measure of perseverance in the pursuit of excellence determines “achievement”. I aim to build an exemplary culture of corporate excellence, thought-leadership and adaptability to the ever-changing business environment. It is the passion for living my potential coupled with the hunger to learn that drives me towards zeroing in on FMS as the first step to realizing this dream. Being the Head-Girl and Secretary at school and college respectively introduced me to the challenges of leading and building a team. Building on the profound academic insight given by graduation in Commerce, working at GE Consumer Finance further solidified my comprehension of management challenges. It is from here that I plan to work at equipping myself with the diverse range of skills and intimate knowledge of business. The emphasis on learning though live projects, collaborative and exchange programmes with international institutions, vast community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students, the “rewarding network of academe and alumni”, flexible curriculum, rigorous induction process, and the impetus on “self-discovery” reinforce my faith in FMS to be the Business School of choice.

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1)“What I do is imp coz I’m giving it a day of my life. What I achieve must be worthwhile coz the price is high.”The measure of perseverance in the pursuit of excellence determines “achievement”. 2)I aim to build an exemplary culture of corporate excellence, thought-leadership and adaptability to the ever-changing business environment. It is the passion for living my potential coupled with the hunger to learn that drives me towards zeroing in on FMS as the first step to realizing this dream. Being the Head-Girl and Secretary at school and college respectively introduced me to the challenges of leading and building a team. Building on the 3) profound academic insight 4)given by graduation in Commerce5), working at GE Consumer Finance further solidified my comprehension of management challenges. It is from here that I plan to work at equipping myself with the diverse range of skills and 6)intimate knowledge of business. 7)The emphasis on learning though live projects, collaborative and exchange programmes with international institutions, vast community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students, the “rewarding network of academe and alumni”, flexible curriculum, rigorous induction process, and the impetus on “self-discovery” reinforce my faith in FMS to be the Business School of choice. 1) Do NOT write short forms like "coz" etc....also this quote does not relate well with the content 2) Which business environment? My personal suggestion...dont use flowery language...you will NOT be given points for writing jargons, but will be graded on your clarity of thought and conciseness of expression, which I feel is missing here 3) Be throughly prepared then to be grilled on this in PI 4) replace it by "Building a profound academic insight during my" 5) replace it by "alongwith working" 6) replace it by "an intimate" 7) Break this down into minimum of two sentences....better if three.. SOP40 - FMS

Three years of Bachelor of Management Studies (BMS) has developed in me a keen interest in finance as a subject. It is this interest which made me contemplate a career in finance. I envision myself as a part of strategic decision making process of an organization. On a long term perspective I would like to be a consultant. My interests in literature, music and travel have helped me gain a broad perspective. I have excelled in projects, desk research, workshops, class discussion and also other extra curricular activities. Academically I have had a consistent performance throughout. Certain assignments

have helped me understand the necessity of good organization structures and appreciate the significance of systems .The time limitation on each assignment has inculcated in me the importance of time management. At the same time, having to defend my analyses and recommendations during discussions and presentations has taught me to think rigorously and creatively. Extensive use of computers for analysis and preparation of presentations and reports has made me computer savvy. All these experiences have developed my interpersonal and communication skills. I have only been able to gain an insight into the field of management, and could not study specific business and technology - related issues in depth. To do so, I need a better understanding of the various facets of management; the interlinkages between different functional areas and between different business entities. I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical and analytical skills and general management orientation. I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments and complement all with a respected management degree. SOP40r

Three years of Bachelor of Management Studies (BMS) has developed in me a keen interest in finance as a subject. It is this interest which made me contemplate a career in finance. I envision myself as a part of strategic decision making process of an organization. On a long term perspective I would like to be a consultant. (a) "has developed a keen interest for finance in me" - rephrased it for clarity also "as a subject" sounds as if your not interested in other aspects (b) "part of the strategic" (c) if long term is being a consultant than is being part of the strategic team short term ? My interests in literature, music and travel have helped me gain a broad perspective. I have excelled in projects, desk research, workshops, class discussion and also other extra curricular activities. Academically I have had a consistent performance throughout. Certain assignments have helped me understand the necessity of good organization structures and appreciate the significance of systems .The time limitation on each assignment has inculcated in me the importance of time management. At the same time, having to defend my analyses and recommendations during discussions and presentations has taught me to think rigorously and creatively. Extensive use of computers for analysis and preparation of presentations and reports has made me computer savvy. All these experiences have developed my interpersonal and communication skills. (d) broad perspective of what ? it sounds incomplete try add to it. (e) "Academically I have had a consistent performance throughout". Consistently poor ? :mg: Change to "I have performed above average consistently through out my academic life" (f) Something that seems as if I can trim the last few sentences. But I am not able to put a finger on it right now. Will look into it later if reqd.

I have only been able to gain an insight into the field of management, and could not study specific business and technology - related issues in depth. To do so, I need a better understanding of the various facets of management; the interlinkages between different functional areas and between different business entities. (g) "I have only been able to gain an insight into the field of management, and could not study specific business and technology - related issues in depth." (h)How were you able to gain the insight ? Through the previous paragraph right ? Then try to make it more cohesive. I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical and analytical skills and general management orientation. I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments and complement all with a respected management degree. Otherwise everything else sounds good ! SOP41 - FMS

They say the difference between dreams and reality is the desire. Since my childhood I have this dream of running a big corporate house. And this dream has taken the form of my career goal now. Someday I would like to start a consultancy firm and take it to great success levels(read...gettin it listed on the stock exchange). But before that I would want to hone my skills working in a company where I can contribute to its growth and gain the market experience.(Q...i dont have any exp as of now....shd i still write this????) After completing my Bachelors in Engineering, I have to come to realize that to get a strong foothold in the market, one needs to have a good managerial aptitude as well as the business acumen. This is where, FMS as an institution comes in. With its world class infrastructure, I will be able to develop my managerial skills. I would also benefit being in the company of scholarly peers and the knowledgeable teachers. The vast network of alumni that the FMS has will also provide us with deep insights on the paths they treaded. After completing my MBA from FMS, Ill be armed with the right knowledge which will help me in achieving my goal. SOP41r

They say the difference between dreams and reality is the desire. Since my childhood I have had this dream of running a big corporate house. And this dream has taken the form of my career goal now. Someday I would like to start a consultancy firm and take it to great success levels(read...gettin it listed on the stock exchange)- delete it!!. But I need to hone my skills by working in a company where I can contribute to its growth and gain the market experience.(Q...i dont have any exp as of now....shd i still write this????) - its ok!! write it

After completing my Bachelors in Engineering, I have realized that to get a strong foothold in the market, one needs to have a good managerial aptitude and shrewd business acumen. This is where, FMS as an institution comes in. With its world class infrastructure, FMS will help me develop my managerial skills. I wish to benefit from scholarly peers and knowledgeable teachers. The vast network of alumni will provide me with deep insights on the paths they have treaded. After completing my MBA from FMS, I will be armed with the right knowledge which will help me in achieving my goal. SOP42 - FMS

“Give me a lever long enough and a fulcrum on which to place it and I shall move the world”. This quote made by Archimedes aligns well with my life-objectives. I dream to be a significant player in the Indian corporate sector, in years to come. My career objective is to lead a giant firm, managing individuals with burning ambitions, have a strong say in the market and serve the society by creating wealth and opportunities. As I am about to complete my engineering, I am aspiring to effect a successful transition from being a technical expert to a visionary business leader. So I need to blend my robust technical knowledge to formal management education, the two being conjoint entities. My aim is to be “jack of all and master of one” – later for which I can take pride and feel contented. My drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records. To foster an atmosphere of intellectual excitement among entire university community is unique with FMS. With intellectually rich and small-sized batches, superb industry interaction, experienced faculty, vibrant alumni and excellent research base, education here is both an opportunity and a privilege. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the MBA program in FMS. I find FMS to be ‘my lever and fulcrum’ which can hone my business acumen and make me all set ‘to move the world’. SOP42r

“Give me a lever long enough and a fulcrum on which to place it and I shall move the world”. This quote made by Archimedes aligns well with objectives. I dream of being a significant player in the Indian corporate sector. I wish to lead a giant firm, manage individuals with high ambitions, have a strong say in the market and serve the society by creating wealth of opportunities. As I am about to complete my engineering, I am aspiring a successful transition from being a technical expert to a visionary business leader. So I need to blend my robust technical knowledge

to formal management education, the two being conjoint entities. My aim is to be “jack of all and master of one” – later for which I can take pride and feel contented. - Delete this pls! My drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records. FMS provides an atmosphere of intellectual excitement. Intellectually rich and small-sized batches, superb industry interaction, experienced faculty, vibrant alumni and excellent research base, FMS education is both an opportunity and a privilege. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the MBA program in FMS. I find FMS to be ‘my lever and fulcrum’ which can hone my business acumen and make me all set ‘to move the world’. SOP42r

“Give me a lever long enough and a fulcrum on which to place it and I shall move the world”. 1)This quote made by Archimedes aligns well with my life-objectives. I dream to be a significant player in the Indian corporate sector, in years to come. My career objective is to lead a 2)giant firm, managing individuals with burning ambitions, have a strong say in the market and serve the society by creating wealth and opportunities. 3)As I am about to complete my engineering, I am aspiring to effect a successful transition from being a technical expert to a visionary business leader. So I need to blend my robust technical knowledge to formal management education4), the two being conjoint entities. 5)My aim is to be “jack of all and master of one” – later for which I can take pride and feel contented. 6)My drive to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic records. 7)To foster an atmosphere of intellectual excitement among entire university community is unique with FMS. With intellectually rich and small-sized batches, superb industry interaction, experienced faculty, vibrant alumni and excellent research base, education 8)here is both an opportunity and a privilege. I am confident of contributing meaningfully to the MBA program 9) in FMS. I find FMS to be ‘my lever and fulcrum’ which can hone my business acumen and make me all set ‘to move the world’. 1)I dont see how this quote aligns with your goals, until I read the last line.... Isnt something out of place? 2) replace it by "multinational giant, to manage and drive a team of dedicated individuals with burining ambitions, to have a significant influence on the contemporary market and simultaneously to serve " 3) No need to write this...it is anyway clear from your porfile 4) cut this out 5) Does not give the intended impact....either remove it or re-write it 6) Unnecessary....no one asked you to tell about your qualities 7) A sudden discontinuous statement (re-write it)

8 ) replace it by "at FMS" 9) replace it by "at/of FMS" SOP43 - FMS

To want to be what one can be is purpose in life – Cynthia Ozick. My career goal is to be at the helm of the corporate world. In the three years of my college education, business management is just one of the 13 subjects. I want to do my post graduate in business management as I love this subject. I want to be a CEO or a Managing Director of a reputed concern. I like to be an effective player in the corporate world. This needs a sense of determination, leadership qualities, team skills, creativity, diligence and a lot more. Like a galleria, all these qualities can be acquired and augmented at FMS. With a healthy student-faculty ratio, quality education, world-wide exposure, field projects etc., it also helps to gain practical experience through internships. The business environment is full of competitions. To face this boldly, I need to equip myself with powerful weapons. Only a formal management education can equip me with the weapon of knowledge required to face the multi-faceted business environment. Therefore the right choice would be an MBA from FMS. SOP43r

To want to be what one can be is purpose in life – Cynthia Ozick. My career goal is to be at the helm of the corporate world. In the three years of my college education, business management is just one of the 13 subjects. I want to do my post graduate in business management as I love this subject. (I would not say this!) I want to be a CEO or a Managing Director of a reputed concern. I like to be an effective player in the corporate world. This needs a sense of determination, leadership qualities, team skills, creativity, diligence and a lot more. Like a galleria, all these qualities can be acquired and augmented at FMS. With a healthy student-faculty ratio, quality education, world-wide exposure, field projects etc., it also helps to gain practical experience through internships. The business environment is full of competitions. To face this boldly, I need to equip myself with powerful weapons. Only a formal management education can equip me with the weapon of knowledge required to face the multi-faceted business environment. Therefore the right choice would be an MBA from FMS. SOP44 - FMS

Being from technical background, I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. Management is life of any activity. Shaping a great idea into a

reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills and intimate knowledge of business. I strongly feel the need to undergo formal management education, which would equip me with the right abilities & skills to grow up in my profession, which I pursue and provide me the opportunity to interact with variety of people. My career goal in life is to become a person who could handle any typical business situation. One who could manage his life and people around himself. I want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody around him to chase their dreams with all the passion in their heart. I want freedom to explore, to be bold and most importantly, to be creative. FMS being a reputed and esteemed institute with superior industry interaction, richly experienced faculty, excellent management research base and its stress on Leadership, Excellence and Innovation can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence. Also it offers for the development of one’s potential, which will help me to build right attitude towards managing my skills and therefore, achieving my goal. SOP44r

Being from technical background, I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. Management is the life of any activity. Shaping a great idea into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills and intimate knowledge of business. I strongly feel the need to undergo formal management education, which would equip me with the right skills to pursue my desired profession and provide me the opportunity to interact with various people. My career goal in life is to become a person who could handle any typical business situation confidently. One who could manage his life and people around him. I want to be a good manager, a person who can inspire everybody to chase their dreams with all the passion and enthusiasm. I want the freedom to explore, to be bold and most importantly, to be creative. FMS being a reputed and esteemed institute with superior industry interaction, richly experienced faculty, excellent management research base and its stress on Leadership, Excellence and Innovation can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence. Also FMS helps in the development of one’s potential, which will help me to build right attitude towards managing my skills and therefore, achieving my goal. SOP45 - FMS

"Our generation has had no Great Depression, no Great War. Our war is spiritual. Our depression is our lives." these are the wordz i wrote When we rehearsed in a friend's garage.during my years as an guitarist in the band i felt Learning to play an instrument was difficult; learning to play an instrument while learning how to play with a band was a test of sheer endurance and willpower. However, through

persistence, patience, teamwork my playing ability developed rapidly.this experience made me a firm beliver to think that Technical and management aspects of life are cross functional and are conjoint entities As I completed my technical education in information systems,I strongly feel that both these aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With a robust technical background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to blend in both aspects. I am confident that my creative,strategic and analytical abilities will aid me in becoming an able achiever.therefore I dream of graduating as an able manager, from a reputed institute like FMS under the guidance of richly experienced faculty and excellent management research.where the knowledge base will definitely foster my future growth. I hope to carve a niche for myself in being an able leader. SOP46 - FMS

the world is chging rapidly and the more i learn , the more ill b able to adapt to the chges. my long term goal is that i want to b a leader of hardworking and sincere men. i want to establish my own business empire . im pursuin my btech in com sci frm ipu and in these 4 years of dealing with people of diff bckgrds ive learnt that a sound knowlwdge of management especially people management is a prerequisite to sucess. software knowledge coupled with nuances of management will help me to carve out my own niche. to b able to achieve my goal , to learn about management as a whole i need a b scholl thats the best in its own way. the knowledge gained at fms wil help me in fostering my growth. fms has advantage of having a small and cohesive grp and a vibrant alumni n/w. the holistic approach of this esteemed institute is reflected in the fact that it included" self development courses" in the orientation phase. so im looking at the oppurtunity of a lifetime , an mba frm fms were there are no boundaries on creative thkin and so an mba w/o boundaries so that i can open my wings aftr 2 years and aim higher and higher in professional environent. SOP46r The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to adapt to the changes. My dream is to establish an entire business empire. My long term goal includes leading and driving a team of hardworking and dedicated individuals. While pursuing my undergraduate studies I have experienced handling people from various background. I have realized that a sound knowlwdge of management especially people management is a prerequisite for sucess. Technical knowledge in software coupled with ability to handle any nuances of management will help me to carve out my own niche.

I have realized that to be able to achieve my goal and to learn about overall business management, I need to enter the hallowed portals of FMS, one of the country's best business schools. The knowledge gained at FMS wil help me in fostering my overall personal as well as professional growth. FMS has the distinct advantage of having a small and cohesive group and a vibrant alumni network. The holistic approach of this esteemed institute is reflected in the fact that it included "self development courses" in the orientation phase. I believe that it is an oppurtunity of a lifetime pursuing an mba from FMS, where there are no boundaries on creative thinking. I believe that i can open my wings after two years and aim higher and higher in my professional endeavor. SOP47 - FMS

"Prediction is difficult, especially the future" - Niels Bohr. Difficult it may be, but the anxiety about the unknown makes it worth the effort. And, to what extent the prediction stays true, becomes a testimony of the expertise. Number crunching and analyzing data has been my hobby and passion since an early age. And now, I look forward to a career in actuarial studies and market research. My father's being an investment consultant, and his earlier associations with banking and finance, attracted me towards similar disciplines. The desire to apply my analytical skills led me to engineering - during which, I came across an elective course in Operations Research. Its tremendous potential fascinated and motivated me towards a course in management. In the corporate world, my sincerity and optimism will hold me in good stead. But, before that, I want to be equipped with practical managerial knowledge. For this, I regard FMS as the ideal institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its emphasis on ethics; hands-on pedagogy, which makes an exemplary teacher, as I experienced during my final year project. No doubt, it also makes sound business sense, considering the ROI factor! SOP47r "Prediction is difficult, especially the future" - Niels Bohr. Difficult it may be, but the anxiety about the unknown makes it worth the effort. And, to what extent the prediction stays true, becomes a testimony of the expertise. Number crunching and analyzing data has been my hobby and passion since an early age. And now, I look forward to a career in actuarial studies and market research. My1) father's being an investment consultant, and his earlier associations with banking and finance, attracted me towards similar disciplines. The desire to apply my analytical skills led me 2)to engineering - during which, I came across an elective course in Operations Research. Its tremendous potential fascinated and motivated me towards a course in management.

In the corporate world, my sincerity and optimism will hold me in good stead. But, before that, I want to 3)be equipped with practical managerial knowledge. 4)For this, I regard FMS as the ideal institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its emphasis on ethics;5) hands-on pedagogy, which makes an exemplary teacher, as I experienced during my final year project. No doubt, it also makes sound business sense, considering the ROI factor! ************************************************** ************************************************* Good one... I liked it... Simple and neat..... Few suggestions for improvement 1) You dont intend the possessive case... do you? Better replace the entire sentence as follows "Being a child of a successful investment consultant, attracted me towards a similar disciplines of banking and finance." 2) Doesnt convey appropriately.... replace it by "to prusue my undergradutaion in engineering studies." 3) replace by "equip myself" 4) replace by "To achieve this" 5) Unclear due to improper sentence construction 6) About the last line...I am NOT sure whether it will be OK ....but yes it is definetly a sound reason for opting FMS.... and I believe FMS is proud about it too(their website claims that)..also its a HATKE reason from other SOPs :mg: ....Just change the sentence to convey the proper meaning....you can re-write it like following: " Considering my financial penchant, it really makes a strong business sense to pursue my post graduate studies at FMS with its highest Return On Investment across the entire globe. " SOP48 - FMS

Being an ENGG. grad my strong points have always been to solve practical problems with a high degree of accuracy and empirical estimations. Towards the end of my class i started to set face the bigger question of life"What i want to be"and then i decided to do an MBA and aspire to become future business manager/leader.

MBA provides me an opportunity to holistically look at business entity and powerfully harness my ability to understand the technical core of it. A cross functional exposure to diff. domains wat being an Engg i look for. I want to do MBA in Marketing as understanding the Tech details of the product under consideration as well as the consumers requirement, comforts & discomforts would make me effective business solution provider supplemented by my empirical ability which is omnipresent in any business enterprise. Being at FMS which offers not only a regular program but also a residential campus wud help in 1) Appreciating the imporatnce of interpersonal skills, team building which r essential prequisities 2 succees in corporate world. 2) Well established curriculum designed with emphasis on adequate exposure to real business world involving corpoarte and alumni participation. 3)Excellent palcements. Thus its resonable to conclude . an MBA at FMS completes my individual's academic goals & widens my professional scope in today's dynamic world. SOP49 - FMS

My undergraduate study has enriched me with a lot of invaluable lessons. More than the technical knowledge that I've garnered in this time, it is the priceless communication skills and real-world challenges that I've faced that have convinced me to pursue a higher education degree in Management. I was at the forefront of the organization of a mammoth cultural event("Carpe Diem - '04") and a national-level technical event("Navachaitanya - '04") spanning 3 days and 12 fields of engineering. These events have given me the confidence to work in a team, to meet deadlines, to work under pressure, to trust in myself to have the ability to overcome the worst obstacles and to come out successful. I believe I have what it takes to be a manager, to be both a great leader and team player. My experiences have taught me skills that if sharpened with cutting-edge education at a high-profile B-School would make me a good manager. I want to have the confidence to take decisions for my team and I want my team to have confidence in me. This can only be achieved with a sound knowledge in the functional areas of management, by learning the structured principles of teamwork, by interaction with a wide variety of departments and faculties, by looking beyond books/classrooms and by a constant proximity to the best in the business. FMS, then, is the perfect place to realize my dream. FMS has all these qualities and thereby is the institute that can give me the tools to take on business in the real world.

SOP50 - FMS

My philosophy of life is that the journey should be as interesting as the destination. Growth of personality, outlook, confidence and maturity are as important as meeting career objectives. Technical education has helped me to become aware of the technical tools available to support business, and to develop an analytical and disciplined approach to problems. As Secretary of the Rotaract Club, which has more than 400 members, I learnt how to lead people, tackle pressure, sell ideas and manage time. Industrial training at Electrosteel Castings, and Sify Corporation for 2 weeks each has given me a broad idea of the way in which organizations work. I strive to create a professional, challenging, dynamic and growth based environment around my workplace. The ever-increasing need of professionalism in Indian corporations, as the global markets are opening up, presents a great opportunity to do the same. It is this understanding of technology, confidence in my leadership skills and urge to meet people and challenges that an MBA course best suits my skills and aspirations. FMS is the ideal business school for me because of its world class faculty, flexible curriculum, and its inter-disciplinary environment and most importantly its relatively small batch size. SOP51 - SPJAIN

If you had a choice, what attribute of your character would you like to change? Generally, in my school days, whatever responsibility I used to take up, I used to make sure that I perform it to my utmost satisfaction. But after getting into business, I realized that I had to delegate the task among my co-workers and see that everyone performs to their level best. This transformation would take a little more time. The next attribute that I would like to change is that I am a person who appreciates tasks being performed in a perfect manner. This quality makes me expect my co-workers to perform to their best. It really puts me down when I see them not performing to their level best. This is a question about negative attributes, then why expose more than one? I think you need to refine you language a bit. What is your understanding of the term “values”? Mention three values that you implement in your daily life. Illustrate at least one with an example. “Values”, I believe, are the foundation on the basis of which a person’s life is built. A man without any values is the one who is playing a lost game.(this line not needed) Firstly, I believe in never giving up hope. The minute I lose my faith is the minute to my downfall. I always remember that it is easy to lose hope than holding on to it. Secondly, I believe in the power of thought. I firmly believe that if I really want something very badly and it is worth achieving, I would achieve it. I might have to shift my entire strength towards it. Thirdly, I believe that hard work should be respected. Thereby I am far off from piracy of books. The writers take so much pain to put down their thoughts. Just in order to respect their efforts, I buy second hand original book, borrow from my friends or if worth it, buy a copy myself.

I think you are being unnecessary verbose.... you need to be precise not only in terms of language but also in terms of content. Describe a situation where you, as an individual, set your sight on a difficult target and saw it through to completion despite obstacles. This was what had happened when I was in XIIth Std. I felt that the only difference that I could be in a better college depends on my score in my board examination. Therefore, I started working hard to see that I score really good marks. As my best subjects were Computer science and Commerce, I wanted to maximize my score in those subjects. Just a month before the board examination, I came down with a viral fever. It was difficult to concentrate on my revision exams. I had to devote a little less time to my papers, which resulted in getting 80% in revision papers. But I knew that I could really do better and didn’t lose my hope. I got well in a week. On the day of the exam, I did my best. I really feel that hard-work works. After a month I got my results and I was very happy that I had scored centum in both the papers. I think I should explain you by re-writing this essay as to how you need to re-work on your language and avoid being too wordy. In India, board examination, especially XIIth std, is considered extremely crucial, since a high score guarentees admission into a good graduation college. I set a goal to surpass my own academic excellence uptill now. This was a harder job, considering the amount of competition and the diverse level of education provided to different students. With just a month before the board exams, I had a severe viral attack, which rendered me incapable of pursuing my daily study schedule. Even with all these obstacles, I did not lost hope and faith in my capabilities. I did my best during the exams. When the results were declared, I was pleasently surprised to see that I managed to score 100% in two papers with, exceptional marks in rest. This might NOT fit exaclty, but notice a continuous flow and NO content wise repetition in the essay. I suppose you can re-write all the essays better now. SOP52 - FMS

I foresee my career as one that would be intimately connected with people, their unsatisfied needs as well as their potential and changing needs. In pursuance of the above I would have to acquire a holistic understanding of fantasy and behaviour as they interact in the marketplace and also, develop an insight into the subtly inter-related influences of cultural, social and generational changes on consumer behaviour and how it shapes our marketing practices. Possessing thorough knowledge of marketing, especially marketing research would be essential to substantiate this vision into a reality.

Pursuing a management degree at a reputed school as the Faculty of Management Studies would doubtlessly endow me with the basic technical and managerial skills. But, more importantly, the flexibility the institute offers in terms of the curriculum and learning methodologies inspires an increased sense of responsibility and a desire to understand mistakes and learn from them. Increased independence brings along with it a spirit of adventure and nurtures a creative mind, two qualities which are absolutely indispensable in the realm of marketing. SOP53 - MICA

1. state briefly how people who know you would describe you.What would they say about your interests, achievements, special traits , stengths and weaknesses? ans.--- I m known among friends as a gregarious girl who gives her best till the last , Belives in not just hard work but also smart work , actively participates in both technical and cultural extra curricular activities , has very good organisational skills and believes in team work. Her biggest strength is her ability to give the best and most creative and innovative ideas.Has the quality of spontaneous creativity and is passionate for doing new creative things. Her weaknesses comprise impatience at times and sleflessness , which at times backfires. 2.Briefly state your academic and career interests in communication and how would the programme be helpful to you?? ans--The filed of communication always excites me.My goal is to be a successful career woman in the field of advertising or marketing . The major reason being strong inclination for creativity.Besides, the"people factor" associated with advertising also attracts me.It is about influencing and convincing people which requires a perfect blend of Emotional quotient and intelligence quotient which i feel , i possess.MICA, being the numero uno in this field is my dream institute.It is the pioneer C-school, which focusses on creative comunication and synthesizesprofessionalism through an impeccably structured curriculum covering the whole gamut of skills reqd in integrated marketing communications. 3.state briefly your extra curricular interests.please indicate what you read, how you spend your leisure time, and other extra curricular activities that you have been involved with?? ans-- I have immense interest in working creatively on a given concept or idea.i thoroughly analyse it covering all the aspects and try to present it with an innovative approach to leave an impact.This has helped me in winning many prizes(some at state level as well) in events like on the spot paper collage,

face painting , funny algorithms , theme dance choreography, and theme based drawing contests.i m very keen in participating in all kinds of extra curricular activities. i spend my leisure time in a variety of ways like painting , with friends and at times , contructively- i sometimes teach my house hold maid's son in my leisure time. SOP54 - GRE

Four years ago, when i had to choose my career path, i chose mechanical engineering. why? i had a conviction that this was an area which would never fall short of innovations and felt that i could enjoy working in it.Fortunately, this conviction has only strengthened with time. During my graduation i found that it requires not only good fundamentals but also an amazing amount of flexibility of thought to succeed in this profession. I realised that mechanical engineering is the closest we can come to merging knowledge, innovation and practicality. For me the beauty of this idea can be guaged by the fact that an idea as simple as a one-way valve finds itself irreplaceable in a design as grand as a rocket engine, surely one of the prime examples of human ingenuity. In this vast field of mechanical engineering, i have found my niche in the areas of fluid mechanics and thermal engineering. These interest me because they represent one of the most challenging questions still facing us; how to predict the behaviour of fluids? There is a lot of experimental work being done in this area in almost all major universities around the world. The focus ranges from design of heat engines to missile bodies. The only constraint is the availability of good resources, both in terms of hardware and specialists. In my graduation, I did not face either of the two problems. My supervisor, Dr. S.A.Khan personally took our group to the aerospace experimental laboratory of Prof. E.Rathakrishnan at Indian Institute of Technology (IIT), Kanpur. It is the best researching facility in India and we did our project experiments there. Both Dr.Khan and Prof.Rathakrishnan are the premier researchers in Gas Dynamics in India. It was a real eye opener for me because I realised that I needed better researching facilities for further studies. After working in one of the best facilities in India, it is natural for me to look abroad for higher studies.This leads me to the university of XXXX. It really is an automatic choice because you have some really good research work going on in the deptt. of mechanical engineering. Researchers like Prof. X are rated quite high in their own fields, currently pursuing projects in which i would be very much interested. To be honest, it would be quite an honour to work with people like them. Also, coming from Aligarh Muslim University, one of the oldest and finest educational institutions in India with a chequered, century-old history, makes me look for great traditions in a prospective university. And the University of XXX fits the bill.

SOP54r Four years ago, when i had to choose my career path, i chose mechanical engineering. why? Okay, sounds different. Whets the apetite. But can you use more hit-you-in-the-face approach ? If you don't know what it is don't worry, even I cannot explain :mg: Just that it seems a little placid. i had a conviction that this was an area which would never fall short of innovations and felt that i could enjoy working in it.Fortunately, this conviction has only strengthened with time. Frankly, even a janitor's job is full of challenges if you think about it :P So I think that to say that *only* mech has the innovations is not too great an idea. And also you need to validate why you "enjoy working in it". If you have written that below.......well Im getting there :) During my graduation i found that it requires not only good fundamentals but also an amazing amount of flexibility of thought to succeed in this profession. I realised that mechanical engineering is the closest we can come to merging knowledge, innovation and practicality. For me the beauty of this idea can be guaged by the fact that an idea as simple as a one-way valve finds itself irreplaceable in a design as grand as a rocket engine, surely one of the prime examples of human ingenuity. If this thing is original then I welcome you to join us in the informal SOP editing committee :mg: Seriously I think this piece is cool. In this vast field of mechanical engineering, i have found my niche in the areas of fluid mechanics and thermal engineering. These interest me because they represent one of the most challenging questions still facing us; how to predict the behaviour of fluids? There is a lot of experimental work being done in this area in almost all major universities around the world. The focus ranges from design of heat engines to missile bodies. The only constraint is the availability of good resources, both in terms of hardware and specialists. Wheew !! You are not giving me an opportunity to nitpick ! :gm: In my graduation, I did not face either of the two problems. My supervisor, Dr. S.A.Khan personally took our group to the aerospace experimental laboratory of Prof. E.Rathakrishnan at Indian Institute of Technology (IIT), Kanpur. It is the best researching facility in India and we did our project experiments there. Both Dr.Khan and Prof.Rathakrishnan are the premier researchers in Gas Dynamics in India. It was a real eye opener for me because I realised that I needed better researching facilities for further studies. Okay dude, say something wrong so I can nitpick :mg: After working in one of the best facilities in India, it is natural for me to look abroad for higher studies.This leads me to the university of XXXX. It really is an automatic choice because you have some really good research work going on in the deptt. of mechanical engineering.

Researchers like Prof. X are rated quite high in their own fields, currently pursuing projects in which i would be very much interested. To be honest, it would be quite an honour to work with people like them. Also, coming from Aligarh Muslim University, one of the oldest and finest educational institutions in India with a chequered, century-old history, makes me look for great traditions in a prospective university. And the University of XXX fits the bill. Okay so finally you gave me some work :gm: (1) "After working in one of the best facilities in India, it is natural for me to look abroad for higher studies." Rather put it as - some stuff I can do only there. Don't take the india comparison thingy. (2) "It really is an automatic choice because you have some really good research work going on in the deptt. of mechanical engineering. Researchers like Prof. X are rated quite high in their own fields, currently pursuing projects in which i would be very much interested." rephrase to "univ XXX becomes an automatic choice because of the research work going on at the department of mechanical engineering by profs like prof. I am very excited to get involved in .......blah blah" (3) "To be honest, it would be quite an honour to work with people like them. " Your being honest true but putting it as a seperate sentences doesnt look too cool. (4) "Also, coming from Aligarh Muslim University, one of the oldest and finest educational institutions in India with a chequered, century-old history, makes me look for great traditions in a prospective university. And the University of XXX fits the bill." Chequered history ? Baap kyon yeh sab bol raha hai :mg: I think I get what you are trying to convey but this sentence really doesnt bring it out. SOP55 - IITD

"It’s not only weakness needs support. Strength needs it far more" - Madame Swetchine. This has always leaded me to improve on my weaknesses and utilize my forte to achieve my goals at every stage of life. Myself, being amiable, a good team worker, a good communicator, a leader, one who likes being a pioneer in doing things, one with ability to convince others. While working as a consultant for two years with Kanbay software Pvt Ltd, one of the top notch software consultancy companies, I have been trying to further hone up these skills and have learned various functional areas of corporate world.

I believe that to achieve my long term goal of being an entrepreneur, in addition to qualities mentioned above I need to equip myself with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. So my strengths require aid of knowledge of the subtle nuances of management aspects of an organization to help me to achieve my goal. Indian Institute of Technology, Delhi – One of the pioneering institutes with its world-class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, renowned and experienced faculty, and excellent management research base appeals to me. I hope, nay I am confident that two year MBA program at this esteemed institute would take me places. SOP55r 1)"It’s not only weakness needs support. Strength needs it far more" - Madame Swetchine. This has always leaded me to improve on my weaknesses and utilize my forte to achieve my goals at every stage of life. 2)Myself, being amiable, a good team worker, a good communicator, a leader, one who likes being a pioneer in doing things, one with ability to convince others. While working as a consultant for two years with Kanbay software Pvt Ltd, one of the top notch software consultancy companies, I have been trying to further hone up these skills and have learned various functional areas of corporate world. 3)I believe that to achieve my long term goal of being an entrepreneur, in addition to qualities mentioned above I need to equip myself with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. 4)So my strengths require aid of knowledge of the subtle nuances of management aspects of an organization to help me to achieve my goal. 5)Indian Institute of Technology, Delhi – One of the pioneering institutes with its world-class infrastructure, superior industry interaction, renowned and experienced faculty, and excellent management research base appeals to me. 6)I hope, nay I am confident that two year MBA program at this esteemed institute would take me places. 1) The quote does not go well here and it surely lack the punch you intended 2) The sentence structure and content is BAD......you seem to have every good quality in the book..... you can break this into two sentences as below I am an amicable person with good communication skiils and a excellent team worker. My leadership abilities stems from my involvement in pioneering things and an ability to convince others 3) Break it into two sentences 4) The structure of sentence is wrong...you can re-word it something like this

I believe that to achieve my goal, my current strengths need addition of the knowledge of various cross-functional areas of business and an understanding of the nuances of managing an organization. 5) Too cliched....re word it and add some unique thing about IIT-D 6) Spruce up this sentence SOP56 - IITKgp

"Whether you believe you can do a thing or not, you are right." This is something my father has kept repeating to me whenever I’m in a tough situation and it has always helped me achieve what I’ve set out for myself. I believe that one’s destiny lies in one’s own hand and that there is nothing unachievable once you set your sight on it. My Engineering degree has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills since architecture with the creativity also involves lot of understanding of the complex structures and the application of basic math skills. I had also been working part time with my family firm, NRK Enterprises for two years before joining it full time around 9 months back. I have also assisted in establishing a enterprise wide data collection and management system at Divyesh Desai and Associates, an Architectural firm. I have been doing a lot of freelance interior and architectural projects along with all this. More than what I’ve studied in school and college, it has been these experiences that have shaped the person that I am today. This blend has given me a broad perspective and a good understanding of life and a goal to aim for. Among other things, I have this diversity of experiences to offer to IIT Kharagpur. SOP56r (1) Remove the Divyesh Desai dna NRK part, no point using the SOP like a reusme. Anyways they would get to know these details. So just say got a lot of real-time exposure or something. (2) The last para sounds kinda incomplete. I mean it should drive home the point. The finishing lines are like the final overs of an ODI, they more or less give the feel to the reader on the WHY part.

SOP57 - IITD

To do an MBA from an institute of repute is my dream for long. I always possessed the qualities like decision-making, teamwork and communication skills. I also acquired some analytical and reasoning skills during engg. And by the time I completed it I have become emotionally more mature. During my job I realized that a good manager should possess certain fundamental managerial skills to prosper. I find MBA at IITD best to develop that business acumen. With the ongoing research and a good industry interface it keeps students at par with the current developments. The expertise and diverse background of the faculty ensures holistic development of the student. Studying at IIT means interacting with some of the best brains of India. Moreover Delhi quickly being a hub for corporate world makes IITD best place to study. SOP58 - IITD

The growing challenge in today’s business environment is to manage an enterprise in the face of ever increasing complexity and unpredictability due to both internal and external factors. To succeed in this environment, one not only requires a detailed understanding of corporate workings, people and the business scenario, but also an ability to visualize the impact of one’s decisions. Being a boarder since the age of twelve, has inculcated in me the trait of adaptability to respond to transient environments. An Engineering degree has enhanced my analytical skills. Working with Tata Motors for the past two and a half years has given me an insight into the complexity and dynamics of a world-class organization. MBA course sets to equip individuals with a competitive edge with the development of strategic thinking being of central importance. The MBA course curriculum at IIT Delhi is a melting pot of ideas meant to nudge participants towards making a mature judgment. SOP59 - General Having completed my Bachelors of Engineering in Electronics and Telecommunication and gaining a work experience of a year and a month thereafter, in a MNC IT company, I now look forward to pursue a management degree from a premier institute. Taking into consideration, the larger picture and my long term aspirations, I very strongly feel that technology and management go hand in hand and they share a symbiotic relation with one another. Hence, my decision to pursue MBA. I completed my graduation from ******** in ^^^^^. The college education has given me a plethora of technical knowledge and made my thinking process very much analytical and logical.

The art of analyzing problems and arriving at their logical solutions has become a much easier process than before. After graduation, I worked for a year and a month with ****** . ****** is a global IT consulting company which provides high-quality, high-value solutions to the insurance, banking, lending, credit card, and capital markets industries. The experience with ****** was definitely one of it’s kind and also my first tête-à-tête with the corporate world. The company, being a very open and transparent organization, provided a lot of healthy and positive interaction between all levels of management. The corporate experience, together with my educational background, has made me realize my potential and motivated me to go ahead with my plans to pursue MBA from a premier B-school, which would ultimately enable me to hone my skills as a manager and a team player. This will eventually make my career-growth as well as personal development follow a focused and streamlined path, and make me climb up the various rungs of the corporate ladder rather smoothly and with poise. SOP60 - IITD "What I am today is a consequence of choices I made yesterday; what I shall be tomorrow will depend on choices I make today" I strongly believe that the course of one's life is determined by the efforts one puts in, in the choices one has made. Throughout my journey towards excellence I have always tried to take the best choice & put in the best in terms of efforts. Whether it be topping my school in IX standard or being the Head Boy in XII or being the coordinator of IEEE Quiz ENIGMA or being the main coordinator of ALGORHYTHM, the inaugural fest of CSI in JAMIA or being the Joint Secretary of CSI Jamia Chapter I have always tried to make full use of choices I undertook to develop my faculties. As a first step towards realizing my vision of being the CEO of a professionally well managed IT firm, I joined Jamia Millia Islamia for my graduation in Comp. Engg. & after having undergone a four year course in technical studies, as a next step I would like to undergo a management course in systems. IIT Delhi, with a Management course focusing on systems & especial emphasis on analytical problem solving skills will than be an ideal destination for my Post Graduation.With its diverse students background, the highly qualified faculty & the competence & the strive for excellence that naturally associates with an IIT, IIT Delhi I believe is the place that will best cater to my ambition.

SOP61 - IITD "Dreams when put into action causes miracles." I strongly believe that just having a dream is not enough what is required is the conviction in that dream, the courage to act upon that dream & the persistence to keep working when the dream seems impossible. Whether it be topping my school in IX standard or being the Head Boy in XII or being the coordinator of IEEE Quiz ENIGMA or being the main coordinator of ALGORHYTHM, the inaugural fest of CSI in JAMIA or being the Joint Secretary of CSI Jamia Chapter I have always had conviction in my dreams & tried my best to convert those dreams into reality. As a first step towards realizing my dream of being the CEO of a professionally well managed IT firm, I joined Jamia Millia Islamia for my graduation in Comp. Engg. & after having undergone a four year course in technical studies, as a next step I would like to undergo a management course in systems. IIT Delhi, with a Management course focusing on systems & especial emphasis on analytical problem solving skills will than be an ideal destination for my Post Graduation.With its diverse students background, the highly qualified faculty & the competence & the strive for excellence that naturally associates with an IIT, IIT Delhi I believe is the place that will best cater to my ambition. SOP62 - IIMB Write a short essay on yourself. You may wish to talk about your background, significant events, accomplishments, extracurrics, relationships with friends and family, career plans and how PGPM from IIM-B fits into your dreams and ambitions. Please make sure that your essay forms a coherent whole. I come from a middle class family, rich in values and traditions. My father is an executive at NTPC while my mother is a home maker. It is from them that my learning in life started. They inspired me to develop an all-round personality and seek pleasure in whatever I do. My cheerfulness also stems from the happy environment that I have been brought up in. Apart from trying to maintain a decent academic record throughout, I have actively taken part in multiple extracurrics like quizzes, debates, skits representing both my school and college at various events like the All India University meet. Since my Head Boy days till QRIOSITY”-2003,2004, I have

also been very much into organizational activities. From Don Bosco, Delhi to D.P.S-Farakka to Jadavpur University-Kolkata, I think I have learnt how to adapt to different situations and people. Upon self-introspection ,I have observed that challenges always inspire me to give in my best. It is this love for challenges that drives me towards IIM-B. With the world class faculty and the rich experience that it has in imparting high quality education, it would be my privilege to be a part of the PGPM program at IIM-B. Not only will it expose me to challenges of various kind,but also help me master the art. The sound knowledge base that I would develop will surely help me in the corporate world,with the IIM-B name making me stand apart from the rest. SOP63r Will just give you few pointers.... 1) Your SOP lacks the 'punch'....It will be 'just' another SOP 2) Few unnecessary lines....(thats a waste of precious space from SOP point of view) ....e.g It is from them that my learning in life started. This is true with everybody...so what.... 3) My cheerfulness also stems from the happy environment that I have been brought up in.Thats a very bad sentence....the first thing that strikes me after reading this is " Hmm...so cheerfulness is not this guy's quality....anyone who will be brought up in a HAPPY environment would be cheerful...... bad....ain't there many people who are cheerful despite difficulties in life" 4) The second paragraph is loads of BS.....you missed the entire question Where is a) significant events, accomplishments? b) relationships with friends and family? c) how PGPM from IIM-B fits into your dreams and ambitions.? You didnt described any of these...... Sorry......but this is just another run of the mill SOP You need to work on the content as well on the language....(see previous pages of this thread ...and especially look at the language used by Arun and Simba) SOP64 - TISS

I believe in the character of "Ardhenarishwar" soft outside fire inside, constant learning and subsiquent application is the most important virtue of a Human Being. For me Loving, Caring, Creating and Adventuring are four most important wheels on which life moved, this is most important than being a successfull Entrepreneur or an expert in any field. My prep for IIT JEE was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch The poverty of the slums through which i moved, suffering of the people, young naked children playing in open air. It was a painful yet enlightening transformation. I realized success is measured by no. of smiles that i can bring on their faces. I pledged to make positive changes in the life of 1000 people. My 4 years in MERI was another learning experience to stay away from my parents, to live in a highly disciplined environment, to livbe harmoniously with people from various cultural backgrounds, and most importantly to accomplish the task in all circumstances were the lessons I learned the hard way. I learned that it is a collective growth which is of prime importance. SOP64r You forgot to mention the exact question asked and the word limit... anyway here goes my inputs... 1) Do a spell check and grammer correction. (I found few errors) 2) Also break your sentences....a lenghty sentence makes the reader sleepy 3) Remove redundant lines...for example My prep for IIT JEE was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch. What is the use of this sentence except to eat away the precious space.....Your intention is not clear.... Do you want them to know that you "prepared for IIT JEE and for that you travelled 18 KM at a strech"...(useless information...if you are an IITian then they already know this...if you are not then it tells them about your failure...and if you want them to know that during your travel you experienced the poverty...then why mention the prep part....)...........you might mention this in the interview.... 4) Word the sentences properly so that it is crystal clear what exactly you intend to convey 5) I pledged to make positive changes in the life of 1000 people. Why only 1000....why not 100000?? Probably what you meant was I pledged to make positive changes in the life of atleast 1000 people.

I repeat...word you sentences carefully so that they convey what you want them to convey.... 6) Your one single sentence make the entire last para....break it into short and succinct sentences.... 7) BTW if this is an SOP, then it is also supposed to mention a) What are your goals (short term & long term) and ambitions b) Why TISS c) How does this program aligns with your goals I am not entirely sure what TISS expects...current students or alums on PG might help you... SOP65 - IIMB “The roots of true achievement lie in the will to become the best that you can become” these words by Harold Taylor define my philosophy in life. I believe that for me to achieve my potential, I must pursue a field that excites me. My interactions with the field of management, in the form of case studies, business plan competitions and literature, have been thoroughly stimulating and have strengthened my conviction to pursue a career in the same. An avid blogger and a voracious reader, my belief in the power of ideas stems from my upbringing, particularly because of my brother, whom I see as my idol. Coming from a family having strong belief in the values of humility and altruism I have tried to contribute my bit to society as a teacher and mentor to homeless children. My experiences in organizing various competitions in college and being part of the editorial team of the college magazine have given me useful insights into managing diverse teams and have hardened me as a manager. With a stress on Global as well as Local, Current as well as emerging, conceptual as well as Analytical, IIMB will equip me with all the essential ingredients for effective management. SOP65r “The roots of true achievement lie in the will to become the best that you can become” these words by Harold Taylor define my philosophy in life. I believe that for me to achieve my potential, I must pursue a field that excites me. My interactions with the field of management, in the form of case studies, business plan competitions and literature, have been thoroughly stimulating and have strengthened my conviction to pursue a career in the same.

Well...to be honest.... I would straight away reject you with this SOP.... you seem to have written the SOP in a casual manner ......and nothing can irritate the SOP reader than a casual attitude on part of the applicant....especially when he/she have hundreds of other (better) SOPs to read..... [Ain't this thing been stressed enough in the last few pages of this thread] The impression after reading this para is .... you want to do PGP course from IIMB simply because it "excites/stimulates" you........... You will be grilled like hell on this.... Where are your ambitions which makes your decision to pursue the PGP course as a logical step.... (this too have been stressed so many times....) An avid blogger and a voracious reader, my belief in the power of ideas stems from my upbringing, particularly because of my brother, whom I see as my idol. Coming from a family having strong belief in the values of humility and altruism I have tried to contribute my bit to society as a teacher and mentor to homeless children. My experiences in organizing various competitions in college and being part of the editorial team of the college magazine have given me useful insights into managing diverse teams and have hardened me as a manager. With a stress on Global as well as Local, Current as well as emerging, conceptual as well as Analytical, IIMB will equip me with all the essential ingredients for effective management. Hey ...the SOP is always about you...you future plans, how you going to achieve it and why this course and why this b-skool.... In your SOP EVERYTHING is missing..... The things you have written about your interests...you "idol" brother...your family values..your blogging...all this is secondary....[I believe that today almost all people who are applying to bschool are blogger...so whats different... everyone would have one "idol" in their family...so what.... everyone have strong family values...]...Its not clear what differentiates you.... WHY YOU...why not any other TOM, D*** or HARRY :mg: Sorry to be harsh...but I would just throw your SOP out of the window.... SOP66 - IIMB I see life as a journey and not as a destination. A journey that began with my birth but will not end with my death. A journey followed by utmost passion, and at the same time carefully guided by the strong ethical and moral values. Engineering provided me an opportunity to add various dimensions to my personality. As a treasurer Audio & Lights club I learned to manage things and shoulder responsibility. My academic projects taught me group dynamics and importance of time management. I dream to reach a position of responsibility and dignity where I can freely exercise

my creative and analytical skills to create an impact on society and make my journey immortal. IIM-B, being a pioneer institute, will provide me the requisite skills and the competitive advantage to reach such a position and thus will become a major milestone in my journey SOP67 - IIMB I will be graduating with the basic degree in Electronics and Communications Engineering from DVR College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to Jawaharlal Nehru Technological University, Hyderabad. During engineering, I was selected by the college management to organize most events such as the “EMBLAZON”, the freshers’ meet and so on. Recently, I was also selected to serve on the “Anti-Ragging Committee”. I was also actively involved in organizing the NSS-Blood Donation Camps organized at our college. My active participation in the above mentioned events helped me to enhance my inter personal skills to a great level. During my course of Engineering I have developed on the technical front and now I would like to learn Management to be a part of the decision making team of an organization. The attitude and the knowledge level that is built up in the students of an institution plays a pivotal role in the way a person handles his work pressure. The world class infrastructure and the excellent student-faculty interface at IIM would provide me the desired stimulation and support environment. To sum up, my two-year stint at a world class institution such as IIM Bangalore would equip me with the necessary skills to propel my career in the desired direction. What influenced you to choose a career in management? The crucial aspect of timely decision making by the executive body ultimately leads the organization onto the success path. The main source of inspiration for me has always been the fact that I have always wanted to be a part of the executive team which takes vital decisions to lead the organization on the success path. SOP68 - IIMB My career goal is to become a business leader, to lead a s/w organization and play key role in its growth. I’ve the technical knowledge but I lack an understanding of the business environment. An mba from iim b will provide me a sound grasp on the business fundamentals and enhance my analytical skills which will make me a better decision maker. Also at IIM b I will learn from the best faculty and work in a highly competitive and challenging environment which will groom me for the future. I am a focused and proactive person and always strive for excellence in my endeavours.I’ve excelled in academics throughout my schooling. In college I’ve maintained a judicious balance b/w academics and extra curricular activities. I’ve won scholarship for my academic performance and also honed my leadership and communication skills by engaging

myself in event organization, presentations etc. I believe that by blending both my present skills and the knowledge i will gain at IIM B , I'll be able to carve out a successful career. SOP68r 1) Never use abbreviations (e.g s/w for Software or b/w for between) 2) Always write IIM, Banglore (not IIM b or IIM B) 3) Do a grammer and spell check 4) Your structure of SOP seems to be okay...but the choice of words does not convey your passion for the course or institute.... 5) There are some redundant sentences...(waste of space), for example I’ve excelled in academics throughout my schooling. This statement is unnecessary....they already know your academic details...isnt it? rest you can speak in interview...this is not the place for it... 6) You have written too many generalised statements...its better to write specific details..example I’ve won scholarship for my academic performance. Not very convincing...which scholarship? When? Write details.... SOP69 - TISS I believe in the character of "Ardhenarishwar" soft outside fire inside, constant learning and subsiquent application is the most important virtue of a Human Being. For me Loving, Caring, Creating and Adventuring are four most important wheels on which life moved, this is most important than being a successfull Entrepreneur or an expert in any field. My prep for IIT JEE was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch The poverty of the slums through which i moved, suffering of the people, young naked children playing in open air. It was a painful yet enlightening transformation. I realized success is measured by no. of smiles that i can bring on their faces. I pledged to make positive changes in the life of 1000 people. My 4 years in MERI was another learning experience to stay away from my parents, to live in a highly disciplined environment, to livbe harmoniously with people from various cultural backgrounds, and most importantly to accomplish the task in all circumstances were the lessons I learned the hard way. I learned that it is a collective growth which is of prime importance. SOP69r

I believe in the character of "Ardhenarishwar", soft outside fire inside. Constant learning and its subsiquent <subsequent> application is the most important virtue of a human being. I believe that Loving, Caring, Creating and Adventuring are four most important wheels on which life moves. <this is most important than being a successfull Entrepreneur or an expert in any field. My prep for IIT JEE was an eye opener as i had to travell by cycle 18 Kms at a stretch> <These lines are unnecessary. Why you need to mention IIT-JEE..... If you passed from IIT, then they know it....and if you failed...it indicates your failure...> <This statement is left hanging...complete it> The poverty of the slums through which i moved, suffering of the people, young naked children playing in open air. It was a painful yet enlightening transformation. I realized success is measured by<no abbreviations please> no. of smiles that <Hey I am not going to do these grammatical and structural errors..'i' needs to be in capital 'I' > i can bring on their faces. I pledged to make positive changes in the life of 1000 people. <Why 1000, why not 1000000??...you forgot to add the magic word 'atleast'> My 4 <four> years in MERI <Write full college name> was another learning experience to stay away <bad structure> from my parents, to live in a highly disciplined environment, to livbe harmoniously with people from various cultural backgrounds, and most importantly to accomplish the task in all circumstances were the lessons I learned the hard way. I learned that it is a collective growth which is of prime importance. 1) Lots of spelling, grammatical and structural errors 2) Why you write "long" sentences I do not know... (example see last sentence).... why not break them into short and sweet sentences.... its easy on the reader. 3) I do not find the answers to the questions a) Why TISS b) Why the particular course c) What is your goal (ambitions...5 years down the line...10 years ) d) How does TISS fit into your scheme of life The SOP is ofcourse about "you", but not about your experiences only...it is about your goals and your logical step of pursuing this course.... You need to do a LOT to spruce up your SOP.... I suggest... give yourself 5 hours and study this thread from first post to this one... and then start with your SOP.....My honest suggesstion.... SOP70 - FMS "The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer... He can visualize something, and when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen." -Robert L. Schwartz

Technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With an indomitable technical background, a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to blend both of these aspects. After graduating as a Computer Science Engineer, I got through Caritor India Pvt Ltd, (CMI level 5 etc...) one of the leading Multi National Companies in the world. My innovative, strategic and analytical abilities along with my leadership and decision-making skills helped me experience a very fast career growth in the company. Within a barely short period of six moths of joining as a fresher, I was entrusted the responsibility of a technical lead for a project at client location in Florida, US. My stint at the Client location not only was a boost technically but it further enhanced my leadership qualities and gave me a good exposure to diverse cultures & methodologies followed globally. I learnt how to interact with Customers worldwide, negotiate and manage resources and adhere to strict deadlines on this onsite assignment. Though I knew that I was doing well, I also realized that my career is soon going to be at a standstill and in order to move ahead in the Corporate ladder, I need a MBA degree from a reputed B School which would bridge this gap. FMS – One of the pioneering institutes, and being one among the top B schools in the country although being one of the oldest in India with excellent infrastructure, superior industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and exceptional management research base appeals to my professional interests. I wish to carve a niche for myself in the corporate world and sincerely hope that the excellent facilities and exposure at FMS Delhi will assist me in realizing my dreams and fulfill my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur. SOP70r "The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer... He can visualize something, and when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen." -Robert L. Schwartz no doubt, the intention of putting in a quote to start the SOP is a noble one, yet the choice of the quotation isn't quite well explained. the quote starts off with an entrepreneur, while the rest of the SOP doesnt mention entrepreneurship anywhere.makes i kinda superflous & redundant. either you put in entrepreneurship somewhere..or just delete the stuff. Technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With an indomitable technical background, a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to blend both of these aspects.

tell me, where is the indomitable technical background mentioned? i am not sure what you mean by indomitable anyway. if you want to mention a strong academic background, that would be ok. but then, that will hafta be mentioned in the rest of the sop. second, you talk about "enhance my innate qualities" & "blend both aspects". but which innate qualities are you seeking to blend with ur engineering? from what you have written, doesnt it appear as if a MBA is like engineering extended. you need an MBA to blend ur innate qualities with ur technical skills..something that should have been done in the tech school itself. :) After graduating as a Computer Science Engineer, I got through Caritor India Pvt Ltd, (CMI level 5 etc...) one of the leading Multi National Companies in the world. two things. first, remove "etc..." & second, if possible, complete the sentence "one of the leading multinational companies in ____ ". that would be kinda more forceful My innovative, strategic and analytical abilities along with my leadership and decision-making skills helped me experience a very fast career growth in the company. Within a barely short period of six moths of joining as a fresher, I was entrusted the responsibility of a technical lead for a project at client location in Florida, US. arent innovative, strategic, analytical, leadership, decision-making too many words in one sentence. :mg: if i may make a suggestion, just remove the strategic part..or else, substantiate ur case with something more. just a one line mention of what has happened after the first six months in the company..for buttressing the existing points. however its not necessary. My stint at the client location not only was a boost technically but it further enhanced my leadership qualities and gave me a good exposure to diverse cultures & methodologies followed globally. I learnt how to interact with customers worldwide, negotiate and manage resources and adhere to strict deadlines on this onsite assignment. well written. mind the caps though. i have only edited the capital letters. just as an aside.. On "customers worldwide". arent u already working for a client? or are you working for the client's clients as well ? :mg: Though I knew that I was doing well, I also realized that my career is soon going to be at a standstill why do you feel this is not good work? you are negating all the power words that you had written in the earlier paragraphs. can you explain the rationale behind this thinking a bit more ?? and in order to move ahead in the Corporate ladder, I need a MBA degree from a reputed B School which would bridge this gap. standard line. i guess its there in every resume. :D

FMS – One of the pioneering institutes, and being one among the top B schools in the country although being one of the oldest in India with excellent infrastructure, superior industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and exceptional management research base appeals to my professional interests. I wish to carve a niche for myself in the corporate world and sincerely hope that the excellent facilities and exposure at FMS Delhi will assist me in realizing my dreams and fulfill my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur. frankly, you have made too many assumptions and judgements about FMS without (or with ?? ) any knowledge. if, after reading this, the prof who is interviewing you asks "tell me what is the management research done last year in FMS? " would you be able to answer this. dude, you have said things that even i would be wary of saying, even thogh i am in FMS :mg: :mg: infact, this whole fact about FMS can either be deleted or just streamlined. you could talk about the extreme selection ratio of 400:1 or the only 60 open seats ..the idea is to say something you know..rather than which you claim. hope you get my point. :mg: overall, i feel that your sop doesnt have the real "you" in it. i still dont know what have u done, what you are good at ..or what ae your objectives in life. could you add these to the SOP and edit out other parts? i feel that would make the resume tighter and better to read SOP70rr "Technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With a strong technical background, a management degree will both enhance my flair for interacting with people as well as provide me with an opportunity to blend both of these aspects. After graduating as a Computer Science Engineer, I got through a leading software services company - Caritor India Pvt Ltd. My ability to innovative and think analyticaly along with my leadership and decision-making skills helped me experience a very fast career growth in the company. Within six moths of joining, I was entrusted with leading a small team for a project at the client location in Florida, US. This onsite project was not only a great learning experience technically but it also honed my leadership qualities and gave me a good exposure to diverse cultures & methodologies followed globally. I learned how to interact with customers worldwide, negotiate and manage resources and adhere to strict deadlines . Though I knew that I was doing well, I also realized that my career is soon going to be at a standstill and in order to move ahead in the Corporate ladder, I need a MBA degree from a reputed B School which would bridge this gap.(futher elabore this. What do you want to be ? why will it be a standstill without an MBA ? Just mention that you feel that an MBA will (a) equip you with the necessary skills and (b) give you a good boost in terms of brandname, networking essential to growth as a manager) FMS – One of the pioneering institutes, and being one among the top B schools in the country although being one of the oldest in India with excellent infrastructure, superior industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and exceptional management research base appeals to my

professional interests. ( you have just mentioned stuff which looks bland and can be copied off any page from their website. Give it a personal touch) I wish to carve a niche for myself in the corporate world (again as i have mentioned before. how do you hope to do it. tie this together with "why fms") and sincerely hope that the excellent facilities (dont talk about facilities in this point just exposure is fine) and exposure at FMS Delhi will assist me in realizing my dreams and fulfill my long-term aspirations of becoming a global entrepreneur.(there you go but how come you never mention) You had used words like "innate" and "indomitable" etc. Did you actually know the meanings of the word or had just put them together ? I think you need to make the changes I have suggested in the penultimate paragraph and club it together with what you have written in the last para. I will finetune finally." SOP71 - FMS I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an enterprise. Success in today's business environment, due to its ever increasing complexity and unpredictability, not only requires creativity, analytical ability, management skills but also a complete understanding of business. My strong inclination towards analytical and reasoning aspects of learning made Engineering my natural choice for Graduation. Juggling academics and extra-curriculars helped me hone my analytical and management skills. By the time i joined Oracle attainment of my goal transformed into a passion. My experience with Oracle gave me an insight into the complexities and Dynamics of a world class organization. The next logical step towards the attainment of my goal would be pursuing a professional management course from an institute that has a course structure aligned with the business requirements in today's scenario. FMS emerges as my first choice B-School as the time perfected MBA course at FMS has an unique combination of a flexible curriculum, a wide array of learning opportunities and a conducive academic environment that distinguishes this program from others. It allows me to explore, to be bold and to be creative. I am looking forward to an opportunity of a lifetime, a MBA from FMS. SOP71r i think the essay is pretty good; focussed is the keyword. :) i am just formatting some part of it..though i assume any Word application worth its download can do the same. :mg: :mg:

I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an enterprise. I believe that success in today's business environment, due to its ever increasing complexity and unpredictability, not only requires creativity, analytical ability, management skills but also a complete understanding of business. >>> would you like to specify the enterprise ? or just keep it open ? >>> instead of starting like, " Success in ..." , a better approach can be "I feel that success in today's...". makes it much more personal & authentic. again, thats what i feel :mg: :mg: >>>management skills & understanding of business..hmm.. difficult to differentiate. can u really differentiate between the two..or have put it because it sounds good ? A strong inclination towards analytical and reasoning aspects of learning made me choose engineering for graduation. Juggling academics and extra-curriculars helped me hone my analytical and management skills. By the time i joined Oracle, attainment of my goal transformed into a passion. My experience with Oracle gave me an insight into the complexities and dynamics of a world-class organization. The next logical step towards the attainment of my goal would be pursuing a professional management course from an institute that has a course structure aligned with the business requirements in today's scenario. >>>changed the underlined sentence. i think it sounds better this way, but its ur choice :) >>>attainment of ur goal becane a passion..ok. but isnt every goal which is set, set with a passion. i am talking about personal goals only. could be reconsidered :mg: >>>overall, the first two paragraphs are pretty good. anybody who loves a structired essay would take u in ASAP :mg::mg: FMS emerges as my first choice B-School as the time perfected MBA course at FMS has an unique combination of a flexible curriculum, a wide array of learning opportunities and a conducive academic environment that distinguishes this program from others. It allows me to explore, to be bold and to be creative. I am looking forward to an opportunity of a lifetime, a MBA from FMS. >>> here is where most aspirants go haywire. to be frank, whatever is written is purely hearsay. specially this bit about "differentiates this program". now, u mention flexible curriculum, wide array of learning & acad environment as differentiating factors. how do u jusify this ? AFAIK, this reeks of a IIM A SOP rather than a FMS one. yes, this program is different..but the pedagogy is different. infact, the second underlined statement is more true than the earlier one. just relax, u dont hafta sell the FMS MBA program to the admission committee, u hafta sell yourself :mg: :mg: >>>last line (italized) looks like an ad jingle. u made an awesome sop. why ruin it with histronics. be confident of ur first two paras..they are good enough to let u through :gm: :gm:

SOP71rr I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an organization. I believe that success in today's business environment, due to its ever increasing complexity and unpredictability, not only requires creativity and analytical ability but also a complete understanding of business. A strong inclination towards analytical and reasoning aspects of learning made me choose Engineering for Graduation. Juggling academics and extra-curriculars helped me hone my analytical and management skills. My experience with Oracle gave me an insight into the complexities and Dynamics of a world class organization. The next logical step towards the attainment of my goal would be pursuing a professional management course from an institute that has a course structure aligned with the business requirements in today's scenario. FMS emerges as my first choice B-School as the time perfected MBA course at FMS provides a wide array of learning opportunities. The flexibility of the curriculum will allow me to explore, to be bold and to be creative. I am confident that an MBA from FMS will give me the necessary impetus required towards the realization of my goal. SOP71rrr 1) I guess extra-curriculars does not make sense. Write extra-curricular activities. 2) You suddenly seem to capitalize the first letter in the middle of a sentence.... 3) My experience with Oracle ==> Dont you mean your working experience with Oracle Corp. or Oracle India Pvt Ltd or whatever.... Someone can read it as your experience with Oracle Database Software :-) .... In an SOP NEVER use short forms/abbreviations.. Also its good to give the number of exp (unless they are less than one) ....You can correct it as following: Working for 'x' years in Oracle India Pvt Ltd provided me with an insight into the complexities and dynamics of running a world class organization. 4) Correct the errors in the sentence as follows The next logical step towards attainment of my goal is to pursue a professinal management course from an institute that has a course structure aligned with today's business requirements. 5) FMS emerges as my first choice business school since its time-perfected MBA course provides a ..... 6) If you write a sentence like this The flexibility of the curriculum will allow me to explore, to be bold and to be creative.

It implies that you are well aware of the flexibilities offerred by the course and you can be asked what are these flexiblities etc etc so be prepared... a safer sentence would be I believe that the flexibility of the course curriculum at FMS will allow me to explore, to be bold and to be creative. 7) This is minor but sometime important. Is the degree offerred by FMS is an MBA? If no then a sentence like this ....an MBA from FMS..... would cause them to ask unnecessary questions... I guess once someone was asked in some IIM inteview whether he wanted to do an MBA? He replied in affirmative and then the next question was IIMs dont give MBA degree... .... I think the rest of it is good... Just another small query...My personal opinion is that the first sentence I envision myself playing a key role in the success of an organization needs some modification......I am actually not very sure what that modification can be... In an organization every body is a key player in the success... even a mere small technical lead in a s/w company plays a key role.... so i guess you can change it to something like following if you like it.... I envision myself leading at the highest level and playing a key role in the sucess of an organization. SOP72 - FMS My natural curiosity has helped me develop an analytical bent of mind from a very early age. After pasing out of Asia’s biggest school with a splendid academic record, I took up electrical engineering in a prestigious university. My days at the engineering college went beyond performing experiments and writing exams. I was exposed to the requirements of the modern industry and realized that mere technical skills were not enough to survive in this competitive world. It’s like power without control. In a practical scenario, the skills to manage resources is of paramount importance. The choice of MBA as a career option followed naturally. Looking back in retrospect, I feel fortunate that the activities that I have been involded with till date – sometimes just for the sake of exploring a new thing- have actually sharpend the qualitites which are requires of a manager. I was born to parents who were both working professionals.So,

from a tender age,I inculcated the indispensable quality of self reliance.I further developed a sense of responsibility during my years of service with Tata Consultancy Services where I was part of several mission critical applications. My trekking adventures in the high Himalayas as a student also weathered me against adversity. With TCS, I had the privilege to volunteer in various social activities and explore the nobler side of my persona. Going forward, I would like to see myself as a leader leading change and driving growth. I look to be a part of FMS to realize my dreams. With its highly acclaimed faculty,academic resources and industrial programmes, not to mention its legacy of producing business leaders and entrepreneurs, FMS is a class apart from the other B schools in India. Last but not the least,being a part of FMS would enable me enjoy the enlightened company of a brilliant peer group, which FMS ensures through its rigorious selection process. SOP72r 1) SOP is not meant for boasting. So dont write "Asia's biggest school" and "prestigious universtiy".... write actual names.... FMS faculty is much smarter than you and they are voracious reader.. so they already know about Asia's biggest school and whatever university you passed ..... 2) Word limit seems to be your biggest problem... the SOP is way beyond 200 words (~ 300 words). 3) Your reasoning for MBA is way weired... it goes like "since to survive in competitive world you need skills to manage resources and hence you are going for an MBA".... If I were a faculty I could easily run through your defence :-) .... for completing the course at FMS you *require* the skill to manage your resources anyway... and this is not a formal training FMS provide... 4) With 200 words its hard to narrate like a novel writer... you need to be precise like a business writer... so sentences like Quote: My days at the engineering college went beyond performing experiments and writing exams OR It’s like power without control. unnecessarily eat up your precious space.... 5) Also the thought process seem to be incoherent.... for example, you talk of working in TCS and then you talk about trekking and then again you jump at what other thing you did while at TCS.... Another example you talk about your goal of "being a leader leading change and driving growth" and then you suddenly stop and talk about why FMS... SOP72rr

I was born to working parents. So, from a tender age, I have developed a sense of responsibility ,self-reliance and above all, a liking for people. Accordingly, my dream job consists in being at the forefront of critical decision making and an opportunity to enjoy diverse public interaction. The choice of an MBA, as a career option follows naturally. Having pursued science at the South point High school and later engineering at the Jadavpur university, basic managerial skills-namely analytical and communicational- were a given for me. Eighteen months with the Tata Consultancy services as an application developer has exposed me to various CMM level 5 business processes and process improvement methodologies like Six Sigma.To cap it all, I had the opportunity to handle various challenging real life crises while organizing and participating in college fests, social activities and adventure sports.I believe that the platform for a management career has been laid very nicely. FMS, with its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of producing business leaders and entrepreneurs is a natural choice for me. And above all, I deem it an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its rigorous selection process. SOP72rrr I was born to working parents. So, from a tender age, I have developed a sense of responsibility ,self-reliance and above all, a liking for people. What is the idea of starting an SOP with such a weired statement? I guess more than half of the people applying to FMS might have working parents... so whats new? Not a good way to speak about your qualities..... Accordingly, my dream job consists in being at the forefront of critical decision making and an opportunity to enjoy diverse public interaction. The choice of an MBA, as a career option follows naturally. I really could not understand how MBA as a career options follows naturally? There are umpteen number of career options which would allow diverse public interaction...so why MBA? Also could not understand how the qualities you mention in the first line lead to your "dream job"....totally incoherent Having pursued science at the South point High school and later engineering at the Jadavpur university, basic managerial skills-namely analytical and communicational- were a given for me. Extremely dangerous statement... dont say that some of the skills are "given for you"... FMS faculy will just tear you apart on this one...

Eighteen months with the Tata Consultancy services as an application developer has exposed me to various CMM level 5 business processes and process improvement methodologies like Six Sigma. So what? I could not understand the relevance of this.... these are quality processes (more specifically software quality processes)... this has nothing to do with management......these are not the tools used by managers but more specifically engineers/developers... (I might be wrong here...but this is what my understanding is!!) To cap it all, I had the opportunity to handle various challenging real life crises while organizing and participating in college fests, social activities and adventure sports.I believe that the platform for a management career has been laid very nicely. You really are assuming too much.... if the platform for management career has already been laid out nicely.. then why do MBA....I fail to understand your reasoning at all.... FMS, with its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of producing business leaders and entrepreneurs is a natural choice for me. And above all, I deem it an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its rigorous selection process. Finally something which sounds good.... SOP73 - FMS To be an entrepreneur of a business establishment that can contribute to the growth of the nation, this has been my long cherished dream. It is my belief that the achievement of this goal requires a detailed understanding of corporate workings, people and the business scenario both Indian and global. I wish to work in a reputed company initially before venturing into starting my own business establishment so as to enhance my knowledge in distinct sectors of an organization. During the three and a half years, studying for Mechanical Engineering (Production and Management) at NIT Calicut I have been able to have a sound knowledge in academics as well as participate in extra circular activities. The MBA(FT) offered by Faculty of Management studies would provide me with a firm grounding in management fundamentals. It is my belief that the practical application of the acquired knowledge at FMS itself will help me in achieving my goal. The eclectic mix of students at FMS will also enhance my intellectual and inter-personal skills , fortifying the qualities needed to face the challenges thrown up by the corporate world with confidence. SOP73r

I am just re-writing the entire SOP to give you a feel of how the same sentences can be twisted around to look nicer.... My long cherished dream has been to establish a business that can significantly contribute to the growth of the nation. I believe that to achieve this goal, requires an understanding of the intricate details about working of a business entity. It would also require understanding of the people and the business scnearios both Indian as well as global. My short term goal after post-graduation is to work in an established and renouned organization before venturing into my own establishment to fulfill my long term goal. During my three and half years of engineering studies at NIT Calicut, I acquired a sound technical knowledge as well as participated in extra-curricular activities. The MBA offerred by FMS, Delhi will provide me with a firm understanding of the business fundamentals. I believe that the practical application of the knowledge acquired at FMS will enable me to achive my goal. The eclectic mix of students at FMS will also enhance my intellectual and inter-personal skills , fortifying the qualities needed to face the challenges thrown up by the corporate world with confidence. This is far from what you can actually submit. I wrote it just to show that sentences can be well arranged to show coherency and clear thoughts.... there is still lot of sprucing up to be done on this SOP before you can send it across.....so take another look at this from your standpoint... give some thoughts.... and come back with the update.... SOP74 - FMS Graduating from a premier institute VNIT Nagpur, I stepped in professional life, starting my career as an Associate Consultant. While working on Morgan Stanley applications, I realized that I display a passion for finance and money matters. During my brief stints in IT consultancy and journalism, I came to understand that technical knowledge complimented with robust management would propel an organization on success path. This realization has translated into a decision to pursue a formal education in management with specialization in finance. I was searching for an institute with state-of-the-art infrastructure, world-class faculty, competitive and diverse peer group, a sensitive-to-change and flexible curriculum, a commendable Exchange programme, , strong alumni network and an institute with a good placement record. My search ended at FMS Delhi, which provides a perfect blend of all my expectations. My enthusiastic involvement in various college activities, on-job trainings and workshops and my impressive academics prove suitability of my candidature for the programme. At FMS, I hope to undergo a rigorous MBA programme facilitating a holistic growth and imbibing in me decision-making, problem solving skills, with regard to strategic planning and global competition, suited for present-day complex business environment.

This would embattle me achieve my short-term goal of working in established financial institutions, gaining experience and exposure. Eventually I would embark on a journey to see fruition of my long-term goal of managing and guiding an organization founded by me .As Disraeli said, “The secret of success is constancy of purpose”. I have taken another step towards purpose of my life by seeking admission in FMS. SOP74r 1) The SOP does not reveal coherency. The first para does not mention your goals, so its not clear why you want to do an MBA in Finance. The last para talks about your goals... 2) The last line needs some tweaking... "purpose of life" is much bigger and greater than "long-term goals".... 3) In your second para you are going overboard talking about FMS... do your research first... FMS does not have "state-of-the-art infrastructure".. althought they have sufficient infrastructure....what do you mean by sensitive-to-change curriculam?? Also if my personal opinion is that this "search" thing is not very suitable....[My search ends at FMS....].... Its just not giving me right gut feeling...(purely my personal opinion)....You can re-word it like "I was looking for X,Y,Z qualities and FMS seems to be a perfect blend of all these expectation" 4) You could use your strong learning ability by mentioning that you mastered six languages.. I would start an SOP from something interesting than the usual boring stuff.... like One of my friend said, "Learning a new language is difficult.". I proved him wrong by mastering six languages, which shows my passion and an exceptional learning ability. 5) Have yet not checked for spelling errors and grammatical mistakes SOP74rr After graduating from a premier institute VNIT Nagpur, I started my professional career as an Associate Consultant (in organization & functional area??) . While working on Morgan Stanley applications: Passport, MSPA, KeyContent etc. I realized that I have a passion for finance and money matters. During my brief stints in IT consultancy and journalism, I came to understand that technical knowledge complimented with robust management would propel an organization on success path. This realization has translated into a decision to pursue a formal education in management with specialization in finance. 1. changed the opening sentence a bit.

2. "During my brief..." & "formal education": it appears to me that from your job you have some amount of professional managerial experience..which was quite lacking/unsupported in depth/range which can be provided by a MBA course. is that right? if it is, you could remove the first underlined part and replace it with your own professional experience recounting the bits where you felt that you need a professional course in order to suceed at what you are/were doing. :) I was searching for an institute with state-of-the-art infrastructure, world-class faculty, competitive and diverse peer group, a sensitive-to-change and flexible curriculum, a commendable Exchange programme, strong alumni network and with a good placement record. 1. the three underlined phrases are leading statements. you dont want the interviewer to grill you on this. because, this is his/her home territory. they know it better than you. in any case, the SOP is about you..not the insti. why waste breath (and words) on something that they already know. 2. Bold & Red Statements: actually, only writing these two would suffice. its always safe to write about alumni because every insti retains good contacts with alums. (they are the ones who make placements possible anyway :wink: ). also, everybody has such awesome placement stats..feed them their own propaganda. trust me, nobody would ask you about placements. This is true for every MBA/PGDM institute in the country :mg: :mg: My search ended at FMS Delhi, which provides a perfect blend of all my expectations. My enthusiastic involvement in various college activities, on-job trainings and workshops and my impressive academics prove suitability of my candidature for the programme. 1. actually, a bit less about FMS & a bit more about YOU is needed in this SOP. so..all the college activities that you have relegated to one-word wonders..could be expanded a bit. :) At FMS, I hope to undergo a rigorous MBA programme facilitating a holistic growth and imbibing in me decision-making, problem solving skills, with regard to strategic planning and global competition, suited for present-day complex business environment. 1. whoa! please delete all such stuff ASAP. there just too much about the insti here. plus, words like strategy do not even enter your lexicon till the second year :mg: ...and global competition ?? its just noise on the SOP, doesnt really contribute anything. infact, you have already said that the insti offers you fulfillment of your expectations. why add more ? This would embattle me achieve my short-term goal of working in established financial institutions, gaining experience and exposure. Eventually I would embark on a journey to see fruition of my long-term goal of managing and guiding an organization founded by me .As Disraeli said, “The secret of success is constancy of purpose”. I have taken another step towards purpose of my life by seeking admission in FMS.

1. embattle me :whatthat: :whatthat: i am a bit rusty in english, but this is not the word that you are looking for. 2. aha! taking the entrepreneural route to MBA :mg: good! but be ready for questions on that. i already wrote some stuff on the pm. basically, what is topping you from founding an organization now? take our PG for instance..last time i checkd, he wasnt an MBA..still, he is an entrepreneur and runs India's largest b-school portal :mg: :mg: P.S. inspite of what i have written about SOP ..its still pretty good SOP74rrr Graduating from a premier institute VNIT Nagpur, I stepped in professional life, starting my career as an Associate Consultant. While working on Morgan Stanley applications, I realized that I display a passion for finance and money matters. During my brief stints in IT consultancy and journalism, I came to understand that technical knowledge complimented with robust management would propel an organization on success path. This realization has translated into a decision to pursue a formal education in management with specialization in finance. I started off my professional career with XYZ as an Associate Consultant. The work entailed blah blah including working on Morgan Stanley applications (viz. ???). *Write a line about what the work in MS was all about* This was when I realized that I had a passion/natural flair for finance (I don't know if "money matters" fits....what do the others say ?). I also realized that technical knowledge complimented with robust management is the key to an organization's success. *I don't know what the brief stint in IT consultancy and journalism is about...knock it off if not needed OR elaborate on it.* I was searching for an institute with state-of-the-art infrastructure, world-class faculty, competitive and diverse peer group, a sensitive-to-change and flexible curriculum, a commendable Exchange programme, , strong alumni network and an institute with a good placement record. My search ended at FMS Delhi, which provides a perfect blend of all my expectations. Hmm.......see FMS is known for being an old insti hence a very strong alum network. Apart from that it has built a brand equity esp in the North. Because of this it has good placements. Finally, the quality of students passing out is also good since the entrance requirements are stringent. Apart from this everything else I have no clue but am sure is not top of the world. Quint might throw some light on it :mg: So maybe you can spin your story around these points instead of the others. My enthusiastic involvement in various college activities, on-job trainings and workshops and my impressive academics prove suitability of my candidature for the programme.

Hmm.....academic credentials yes but "enthusiastic involvement in various college yadda yadda ....." ??? I would suggest you change it something on the lines of "Not only did I exceed in academics but also volunteered for various college activities." And "My real-world exposure is not restricted to the work after college but also the on-job training I underwent". Obviously these statements I am giving are raw so you might want to work on it. At FMS, I hope to undergo a rigorous MBA programme facilitating a holistic growth and imbibing in me decision-making, problem solving skills, with regard to strategic planning and global competition, suited for present-day complex business environment. Frankly this sentence somehow does not gel with the rest of the essay. This looks like a girl in a miniskirt among a group of behenjis. This would embattle me achieve my short-term goal of working in established financial institutions, gaining experience and exposure. Eventually I would embark on a journey to see fruition of my long-term goal of managing and guiding an organization founded by me .As Disraeli said, “The secret of success is constancy of purpose”. I have taken another step towards purpose of my life by seeking admission in FMS. What is embattle ? :whatthat: Last sound though a bit cliched sounds okay to me. I would like the Benjamin Disreli quote to fit elsewhere. The penultimate sentence being a quote doesnt look great somehow. SOP75 - FMS I see myself at the helm of a growing organization in my years to come. I have approached my studies with this purpose in mind. I did my schooling in Alpha Matriculation and passed out in flying colours. I took up mechanical engineering at College of Engineering, Guindy (Anna University). The past 3 years studying in mechanical engineering has nourished my creativity and analytical skills. Besides Academics, I also involved myself in other activities. I was the co – founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small classroom club dedicated to help students excel in aptitude tests and improve vocabulary and communication skills. During my summer vacations, I had gone on industrial visits to companies such as Saint Gobain and TVS – Lucas. These visits gave me a brief insight into the functioning of an organization and made me realize the value of management to lead such an organization. I have come to realize how much more I need to equip myself before I can truly become a great professional. Technical knowledge and aptitude alone are not sufficient to transform me into the leader I aim to be. I need to learn a lot more from a world class institute which can shape my skills and mould me into a great leader. FMS exceeds my expectations from a top class management institute and I would be proud to gain more knowledge from FMS.

SOP75r I envision myself at the helm of an organization propelling it towards growth and sucess. Alongwith strong analytical skills and creativity reflected by my exceptional academic results during my schooling from Alpha Matriculation and engineering studies at College of Engineering, Guindy (Anna University), I have good communication and inter-personal skills which were further honed by being a co – founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small classroom club dedicated to help students. During some industrial visits to Saint Gobain and TVS – Lucas, I received a brief insight into the functioning of an organization that made me aware of the growing importance of management in successfully leading any organization. I believe that to equip myself for achieving my long term goal of leading an oragnization I need to enrich my present skillsets and hence a formal management education is the next logical step. ..Add why FMS.. SOP75rr My vision is to be at the helm of an organization propelling it towards growth and success. Being the leader of a burgeoning firm demands an understanding of the people and the processes involved in business. To achieve my goal, I have developed strong analytical skills and creativity, reflected by my excellent academic results during my engineering studies at College of Engineering, Guindy (Anna University). I also have good communication and inter-personal skills, which were further honed by being a co – founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small classroom club dedicated to help students. During my industrial visits to Saint Gobain and TVS – Lucas, I received a brief insight into the functioning of an organization that made me aware of the growing importance of management in successfully leading any organization. I believe that to equip myself for achieving my long term goal of leading an organization I need to enrich my present skills and hence a formal management education is the next logical step. FMS has a diverse and highly talented student community and a world class faculty, which ensures a highly competitive and motivating environment. FMS also provides a good exposure to current business trends – both Indian and global. Combined with a good alumni network and impeccable placement record, FMS emerges as my preferred B School. SOP75rrr My vision is to be at the helm of an organization propelling it towards growth and success. Being the leader of a burgeoning firm demands an understanding of the people and the processes

involved in business. To achieve my goal, I have developed strong analytical skills and creativity, reflected by my excellent academic results during my engineering studies at College of Engineering, Guindy (Anna University). I also have good communication and inter-personal skills, which were further honed by being a co – founder and organizer of “ApTiClub”, a small classroom club dedicated to help students. During my industrial visits to Saint Gobain and TVS – Lucas, I received a brief insight into the functioning of an organization that made me aware of the growing importance of management in successfully leading any organization. I believe that to equip myself for achieving my long term goal of leading an organization I need to enrich my present skills and hence a formal management education is the next logical step. FMS has a diverse and highly talented student community and a world class faculty, which ensures a highly competitive and motivating environment. FMS also provides a good exposure to current business trends – both Indian and global. Combined with a good alumni network and impeccable placement record, FMS emerges as my preferred B School. First things first... please do not use "blue" or "red" colors while posting SOP... allow them to be used by us only.... thanks. Okay... few things which I can point straightaway.... 1) There is difference in meaning between "envision" and "vision". The first one more or less means "imagine", while second one is a much broader and longer thingie.... so the start of your sentence now does not make sense..... 2) The second sentence unncessarily introduces noise... it is too impersonal... there is no need for it... 3) The last paragraph talks about why you choose FMS, try to link it with your long term goal.... BTW you are close to finishing your SOP writing... I guess it now sounds much better than your first version....and you have used a better and simpler english which is always preferred... if you want to add some punch then you can have some starting quote which relates with your goal... dont make it too fancy or out of whole context..... SOP76 - FMS I will be graduating with the basic degree in Electronics and Communications Engineering from DVR College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to Jawaharlal Nehru Technological University, Hyderabad. The attitude and the knowledge level that is built up in the students of an institution plays a pivotal role in the way a person handles his work pressure. The world class infrastructure and the excellent student-faculty interface at FMS,Delhi would provide me the desired stimulation and support environment. The course would groom the mind in the right

direction by providing valuable insights into the organization part of a company and the various innovative practices adopted. To sum up, my two year stint at a world class institution such as FMS,Delhi would equip me with the necessary skills to propel my career in the desired direction. The crucial aspect of timely decision making by the executive body ultimately leads the organization onto the success path. The main source of inspiration for me has always been the fact that I have always wanted to be a part of this top brass of an organization. At the end of the day I would like to be a Senior Level Executive Manager rather than be a Technical Analyst. SOP76r I will be graduating with the basic degree in Electronics and Communications Engineering from DVR College of Engineering and Technology, affiliated to Jawaharlal Nehru Technological University, Hyderabad. 1. the information given is a bit to prolix :mg: all this is already written in your application form. dont hafta repeat it in the SOP. doesnt add anything to it anyway. The attitude and the knowledge level that is built up in the students of an institution plays a pivotal role in the way a person handles his work pressure. The world class infrastructure and the excellent student-faculty interface at FMS,Delhi would provide me the desired stimulation and support environment. The course would groom the mind in the right direction by providing valuable insights into the organization part of a company and the various innovative practices adopted. 1. "desired stimulation..." the question here is..for what ? basically, i fail to see any rationale here. there is no reason for MBA & its written in too impersonal a fashion.A statement like "the mind in the right direction" is very vague; basically after reading the first two paragraphs, i still dont know why do u want to pursue post-grad studies, whats the motivation and what are the rewards/gains expected from the course. To sum up, my two year stint at a world class institution such as FMS,Delhi would equip me with the necessary skills to propel my career in the desired direction. 1. again, nothing has been really said, so the sum up thingy doesnt hold here. 2. ok..if you talk about necessary skills which will propel your career, why not outline them out. which skills are you looking to add. where does the course help you. am i being clear here or not ? The crucial aspect of timely decision making by the executive body ultimately leads the organization onto the success path.<<<<<<<>>>>>> The main source of inspiration for me has always been the fact that I have always wanted to be a part of this top brass of an organization. At the end of the day I would like to be a Senior Level Executive Manager rather than be a Technical Analyst.

1. there is no connection between the first line & the rest of the para. infact, you could add this one earlier, to the skills part, that you want to develop your decision-making skills. 2. if possible, could you outline which kind of organization are you targetting? thats not necessary, but it might add substance to an otherwise generic set of statements. 3. ok. so you want to be a senior-level executive manager. what is the role of such a person, in any organization? what does he do? why do you think a MBA degree is necessary to make a jump from technical analyst to S-L Ex.Mgr. 4. overall, i would say that this SOP really wont do, friend. :) do browse through some of the earlier SOPs written by people and ty to garner a general idea about the structure.Although SOP writing isnt an exact science, i can encapsulate the fundamentals in the following points. if you can address most of these questions successfully, we can have a workable sop. SOP77 - FMS To inspire and drive a team to achieve a common end,which can be a goal as small as organizing a party or as large as taking a corporation to new heights, to learn from every experience that comes my way, and to adventure into new ideas is my continuous aspiration. A highly competitive,diverse peer group at RVCE, Bangalore provided me the first push in my quest to become the best individual that I can become. My employment at Cognizant Technology Solutions helped me learn how important soft-skills, adaptability and change management are to the success of any system. I believe that a well structured MBA course and a competitive and dynamic atmosphere, will help me to take up challenging responsibilities in management. For inculcating a global perspective, I trust the emphasis on learning through live projects, the flexibility in curriculum and collaborative and exchange programmes with international institutions at FMS. A rigorous induction process gives me the edge of being in a lively, diverse community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students which is an ideal environment for personal growth that will help in bringing out the best that I have to offer which makes FMS easily a business school of choice. SOP77r My aspirations have always been to creatively pursue new ideas through inspiring and driving a team of individuals, thereby taking the corporation to greater heights. This is reflected by my penchant to lead even a small team for as inconsequential goal as organizing a party.

Working at Cognizant Technology Solutions is an absolute eye-opner allowing me to understand the importance of soft-skills, adaptability and change management to the sucess of an individual as well as of any organization. I believe that to equip myself for handling the challenging responsibilities in an organization, a well structured formal MBA course in a competitive and dynamic atmosphere is the next step. FMS provides a gloabl business perspective through its emphasis on learning through live projects, the flexibility in curriculum and collaborative and exchange programmes with international institutions, which perfectly aligns with my aspirations. A rigorous induction process ensures a lively and diverse community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary peer group which is an ideal environment for personal growth that will help in bringing out the best that I have to offer. SOP77rr To inspire and drive a team to achieve a common end,which can be a goal as small as organizing a party or as large as taking a corporation to new heights, to learn from every experience that comes my way, and to adventure into new ideas is my continuous aspiration. I continuosly aspire to do XYZ such as A, B and C. Where XYZ explains what it is (frankly you have written too many things to be threaded together cogently) and A, B, C being examples you have used. A highly competitive,diverse peer group at RVCE, Bangalore provided me the first push in my quest to become the best individual that I can become. My employment at Cognizant Technology Solutions helped me learn how important soft-skills, adaptability and change management are to the success of any system. I believe that a well structured MBA course and a competitive and dynamic atmosphere, will help me to take up challenging responsibilities in management. "Best individual I can become" sounds a bit weird. Maybe my ear is not trained for it, but bounce it off someone else. I would most certainly take it off. Knock off "My employment" start with "At CTS, I learned...". Also success of any organization (not system). Take up "the challenging responsibilities" or just "challenging responsibilities" ? I don't know. Just check it up. The former means "known" and latter is "unknown" For inculcating a global perspective, I trust the emphasis on learning through live projects, the flexibility in curriculum and collaborative and exchange programmes with international institutions at FMS. Exchange programs are fine but how does live projects enable you to have "global perspective" A rigorous induction process gives me the edge of being in a lively,

diverse community of multi-cultural and multi-disciplinary students which is an ideal environment for personal growth that will help in bringing out the best that I have to offer which makes FMS easily a business school of choice. Is it "edge of being in a lively....." ? See Im studying for GMAT so "being" is most definitely wrong :mg: But I might be wrong !! Also "egdge of" sounds, and to quote OG, "unidiomatic" :mg: Finally, "help bring out the best in me" sound better. And knock off the "which makes FMS easily a business school of choice" part Overall I think this is a pretty decent essay. Nothing fancy but more importantly nothing wrong either. SOP78 - FMS “Growth itself contains the germ of happiness.”It’s the drive for growth that makes me wish to have a bigger share in shaping business, to form and implement strategies that take corporations to greater heights . My experience as a Software Engineer has made me aware about how a company’s fortunes depends on the new dimensions and roles that it can envisage for itself and how the role of the management in this context is of paramount importance. I have therefore set upon the quest to acquire a profound understanding of managament and the subtle nuances involved, as a first step to achieve my goal of leading a large corporation. The communication and leadership skills that I honed during my time as School Captain and as a member of the Corporate Football team should stand me in good stead when I embark upon a managerial path. Yet the company I work for, HCL Capital Market Services, has gone a long way in making me realise how important functional and financial knowledge are in bringing about effective management. I clearly see that the intricate knowledge and fresh perspectives that I would be able to acquire in pursuing an MBA from a renowned institute, will equip me with the right resources for my endeavours. FMS with its rich history, its commitment to thought leadership coupled with an interesting pedagogy is a natural choice for any management aspirant. A dynamic and lively atmosphere guaranteed by virtue of interaction with peers selected through a rigorous selection process is an added incentive. The pursuit of academic excellence at such an institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me. SOP78r

“Growth itself contains the germ of happiness.”It’s the drive for growth that makes me wish to have a bigger share in shaping business, to form and implement strategies that take corporations to greater heights . 1. mebbe its my running nose :wink:, but i really dont find any connection between the quote at the start and the rest of the paragraph. i am sure that there is some really god thread of reason running through it, but its not apparent here My experience as a Software Engineer has made me aware about how a company’s fortune depends on the new dimensions and roles that it can envisage for itself and how the role of the management in this context is of paramount importance. I have therefore set upon the quest to acquire a profound understanding of managament and the subtle nuances involved, as a first step to achieve my goal of leading a large corporation. ok. great english usage. but what does it mean ? apart from showing that you have a flair for writing well, nothing more. u are joining a course..not a knight errand in search of a quest. if there is something that you would like to explain about your quest, please do that. what i wish to point out here is that the first part of the paragraph is sufficiently general and tells me in a vague sorta manner, wht you have learnt while working. fair enough, even though it can be tightened a bit. after that, you need to be specific. in a 200 word essay, there isnt really much space to build up a scenario. :) The communication and leadership skills that I honed during my time as School Captain and as a member of the Corporate Football team should stand me in good stead when I embark upon a managerial path. the examples quoted arent quite the strongest indicators of communication & leadership. in the former, you were quite young and in the latter, i dont think that there is much scope of leadershop & teamwork. after all, its not a profesional football team. these are just hobbies. better not put them on a SOP. again, irrelevant language.. embarking Yet the company I work for, HCL Capital Market Services, has gone a long way in making me realise how important functional and financial knowledge are in bringing about effective management. I clearly see that the intricate knowledge and fresh perspectives that I would be able to acquire in pursuing an MBA from a renowned institute, will equip me with the right resources for my endeavours. too vague. basically, it just restates your learnings from the job. you've already said that earlier in the SOP. FMS with its rich history, its commitment to thought leadership coupled with an interesting pedagogy is a natural choice for any management aspirant. A dynamic and lively atmosphere guaranteed by virtue of interaction with peers selected through a rigorous selection process is an added incentive. The pursuit of academic excellence at such an institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me.

fair enough, but then talking about FMS isnt the only thing that you hafta do in the SOP. after reading through it, i cannot get the "real" you, in the SOP. just a set of generic/vague statements. SOP79 - FMS The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to adapt to the changes. Learning new thgs and inculcating them inside me is somthg which ive done throughout my academic career. This includes the experiences which ive had in my engg life in coordinating the literary and technical societies of my college to organizing fests, and quizzes which has given me useful insights into managing a diverse team and the necessity of being a good manager . juggling academics,with responsibilities of being a coordinator in college and also completing a one year course in a foreign language helped me hone my skills in time management, prioritizing thgs and sticking to schedules which is a must for a management course. My long term goal includes leading and driving a team of hardworking and dedicated individuals. Number crunching and analyzing data has been my hobby and passion since an early age. And now, I look forward to a career in market research and. analysis.I have realized that a sound knowledge of management skills( both theoretical and practical) is a prerequisite for sucess. Technical knowledge in software coupled with ability to handle any nuances of management will help me to carve out my own niche. I have realized that to be able to achieve my goals and to learn about overall business management, FMS as the ideal institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its emphasis on ethics and hands-on pedagogy. FMS has the distinct advantage of having a small and cohesive group and a vibrant alumni network. The holistic approach of this esteemed institute is reflected in the fact that it included "self development courses" in the orientation phase. No doubt, it also makes sound business sense, considering the ROI factor! I believe that it is an oppurtunity of a lifetime pursuing an mba from FMS, where there are no boundaries on creative thinking. I believe that i can open my wings after two years and aim higher and higher in my professional endeavor. SOP79r The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to adapt to the changes. <<whats the connection between this line and the next ? the line starts with learning, but in the next sentence you talk about "changes making you learn" rather than the other way round. >> Learning new thgs and inculcating them inside me is somthg which ive done

throughout my academic career. <<illustrate this. when have u done this in your career?? co-ordinating activities is not a career dude." This includes the experiences which ive had in my engg life in coordinating the literary and technical societies of my college to organizing fests, and quizzes which has given me useful insights into managing a diverse team and the necessity of being a good manager . <<same grouse, no connection with the ealrier line. its not written badly, but it does not fit earlier comments. if you've talked about career at first, stick with it. these are supplementary>> juggling academics,with responsibilities of being a coordinator in college and also completing a one year course in a foreign language helped me hone my skills in time management, prioritizing thgs and sticking to schedules which is a must for a management course. <<actually the best line in the first para (no surprise because it comes from PsychoD's comments :mg: ). it is better not because it has more "punch", but also, because it packs in the "co-ordinating" part of the earlier sentence and hints at extra curricular responsibilities taken & accomplished>> My long term goal includes leading and driving a team of hardworking and dedicated individuals. <<fair enough, but is it really ur long term goal..surely, you dont want to work all life with people. mebbe you want to create something :mg: >>Number crunching and analyzing data has been my hobby and passion since an early age. And now, I look forward to a career in market research and. analysis. <<well frankly, you need to join some M.Phl in Maths or some other course, they are more suited to the type of job that you want to do.>> I have realized that a sound knowledge of management skills( both theoretical and practical) is a prerequisite for sucess. <<<success of what? and how did ths realization dawn upon u :mg: ? >>Technical knowledge in software coupled with ability to handle any nuances of management will help me to carve out my own niche. <<u've already said that u want to do MR..then here you are again going back to a generic statement. AFAIK, its not adding anything to ur SOP>> I have realized that to be able to achieve my goals and to learn about overall business management, FMS as the ideal institute – not just because of its stature, but also because of its emphasis on ethics and hands-on pedagogy.<<better be prepared about this, boy :mg: do you really understand tyhe meaning of hands-on pedagofy anyway :mg: :mg: ?? because, i dont :wink:>> FMS has the distinct advantage of having a small and cohesive group and a vibrant alumni network.<<dude you dont know how correct you are here :) quite ok. the only line worth salvaging, i must say :mg: >> The holistic approach of this esteemed institute is reflected in the fact that it included "self development courses" in the orientation phase. <<two things. first, what are these self-development courses and second, why do you need them ? if you dont know the answer to either/both questions, then answer a third one..why write it then :mg: >> No doubt, it also makes sound business sense, considering the ROI factor! <<weird/insigtful (?) statement :mg:>> I believe that it is an oppurtunity of a lifetime pursuing an mba from FMS, where there are no boundaries on creative thinking. I believe that i can open my wings after two years and aim higher and higher in my professional endeavor. <<basically nothing but noise, you can as well delete it, and still it wont hurt the SOP>>

SOP80 - FMS Jared Diamond in his book 'Guns, Germs and Steel' identifies the receptivity of society to innovation as one of the main reason for it's development. I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and I look forward to playing an important role in one such organization. Right from my school days, I have been fascinated by the various inventions and their impact on mankind. In pursuit of developing a strong technological focus, I did my BTech at IIT, Madras, which helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement. After my BTech, I desired to get acquainted with the workings of a technological organization. So I accepted an offer from Infosys Technologies. At Infosys, I was lucky to be in the same project throughout my tenure as I was able to quickly master the technological aspects and focus on some of the other aspects. I got the opportunity to see the project during various phases of development and maintenance and perform different roles in the project. Having obtained complete working knowledge at the level of an individual project, I now seek to move on to a higher level. For this transition, I see the need for a MBA. As a leading management institute in India, that has been producing world class managers for half a century, I see FMS as an ideal institute for my education. SOP80r Jared Diamond in his book 'Guns, Germs and Steel' identifies the receptivity of society to innovation as one of the main reason for it's development. I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and 1) I look forward to playing an important role in one such organization. 2)Right from my school days, I have been fascinated by the various inventions and their impact on mankind. 3)In pursuit of developing a strong technological focus, I did my BTech at IIT, Madras, which helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement. 4) After my BTech, I desired to get acquainted with the workings of a technological organization. So I accepted an offer from Infosys Technologies. At Infosys, I was lucky to be in the same project throughout my tenure as I was able to quickly master the technological aspects and focus on some of the other aspects. I got the opportunity to see the project during various phases of development and maintenance and perform different roles in the project. 5)Having obtained complete working knowledge at the level of an individual project, I now seek to move on to a higher level. For this transition, I see the need for a MBA. As a leading management institute in India, that has been producing world class managers for half a century, I see FMS as an ideal institute for my education.

Good start..atleast something fresh 1) .... but this line can be rewritten as : and I envision playing an important role in such an organization. 2) Re-arranging gives it a better look... I have always been fascinated by the numerous inventions and their impact on mankind, right from my childhood. 3) Re-arranging it... My gradutaion at IIT, Madras not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement. 4) From here onwards you suddenly go out of focus and you loose control over your writing.... You are not writing a story or a novel... so why waste precious space... your business like sharp writing suddenly goes out of window .....dis-appointing.... 5) This is totally weired reason for doing an MBA (seeking to move at higher level...what the heck is this??) and also you sum up why FMS in a single line.... the depth of writing is suddenly gone... and so is your fit with FMS.....again highly dis-apoointing.... After reading first few lines I thought this one is something which I would like...but down the line you just go haywire..... try once more....and give a solid reason to do MBA which you started with in the fist para.... SOP80rr Jared Diamond in his book 'Guns, Germs and Steel' identifies the receptivity of society to innovation as one of the main reason for it's development. I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an important role in such an organization.I have always been fascinated by the numerous inventions and their impact on mankind, right from my childhood. My graduation at IIT, Madras not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement. My tenure with Infosys has given me experience in implementation and management of a technical project and also an opportunity to work in a cross cultural environment. A thorough grounding in the principles of management would add finishing touches in the development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the business of transforming ideas into reality. FMS, with its history of producing world class managers for half a century and the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its

alumni network as well as cross disciplinary expertise from the Delhi University in addition to the excellent faculty, is an ideal institute for the education I seek. SOP80rrr Jared Diamond in his book 'Guns, Germs and Steel' identifies the receptivity of society to innovation as one of the main reason for it's development. I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an important role in such an organization.I have always been fascinated by the numerous inventions and their impact on mankind, right from my childhood. My graduation at IIT, Madras not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement. My tenure with Infosys has given me experience in implementation and management of a technical project and also an opportunity to work in a cross cultural environment. A thorough grounding in the principles of management would add finishing touches in the development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the business of transforming ideas into reality. FMS, with its history of producing world class managers for half a century and the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its alumni network as well as cross disciplinary expertise from the Delhi University in addition to the excellent faculty, is an ideal institute for the education I seek. Good one... neat and clean... short and crisp... I like it.. .just change one sentence.... I belive that a thorough understanding of the principles of management is essential in the development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the business of transforming ideas into reality. Otherwise rest is fine.. a good SOP .... SOP81 - FMS “An Invasion of Armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come”-Victor Hugo Innovation and Ideas are the key elements in the foundation of a successful organization. Shaping a great idea into reality and turning it into a successful venture requires a diverse range of managerial skills. My career goal is to be a part of a business empire which has innovation has as its backbone and encourages the growth of an individual. Hence, the paramount necessity to inculcate the required skills; skills I can learn from a top-notch institute like FMS. My technical background has given me a strong analytical foundation, apart from drilling in the importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition. Also, exposure to various workshops on leadership and time management while being a member of the Entrepreneurship Development Cell of my college has given me an insight into various nuances involved in management.

To quote a line from the FMS brochure,” the difference is due to people”- it is a statement which I believe in, the power of a creative individual with sound managerial skills. The unique teaching approach at FMS, which is a blend of fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on concepts, will encourage my exploration of new ideas. The emphasis on Excellence, Leadership and Innovation at FMS will provide me with skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. SOP81r “An Invasion of Armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come”-Victor Hugo 1)Innovation and Ideas are the key elements in the foundation of a successful organization. Shaping a great idea into reality and turning it into a successful venture requires a diverse range of managerial skills. My career goal is to be a part of a business empire which has innovation has as its backbone and encourages the growth of an individual. Hence, the paramount necessity to inculcate the required skills; skills I can learn from a top-notch institute like FMS. My technical background has given me a strong analytical foundation, apart from drilling in the importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition. Also, exposure to various workshops on leadership and time management while being a member of the Entrepreneurship Development Cell of my college has given me an insight into various nuances involved in management. To quote a line from the FMS brochure,” the difference is due to people”- it is a statement which I believe in, the power of a creative individual with sound managerial skills. The unique teaching approach at FMS, which is a blend of fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on concepts, will encourage my exploration of new ideas. The emphasis on Excellence, Leadership and Innovation at FMS will provide me with skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. BTW if this is your first SOP then kudos... you are more or less bang on target... a good attempt... 1) This line is of no help.. remove it... 2) It is good to quote something from FMS brochure...but the second part of your sentence needs to make some sense with the first part.... Otherwise a really good SOP.... SOP81rr "An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come" courtesy Victor Hugo. Idea and imagination, as I believe, is the driving impulse for mankind. Coming from an

engineering background, the exciting world of ideas, which influence humanity in some way or the other, has been my area of interest. Working in a technical job (TCS) for the past couple of years has made me realize the hitches of the corporate world. Great ideas are invaluable only when they are presented and applied efficiently, more so when the stakes are high and diversified. It demands theoretical and practical knowledge alongwith varying skills sets. These are the essential qualities that I require, to make a difference in tough business scenarios where strategy plays the role of a protagonist. I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering management institutes with world-class infrastructure, notable industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management research base can provide me with the skills and knowledge, required to fulfill my objectives. SOP82 - FMS In this era of globalization, marketing plays a crucial role in determining the success of an idea/product. With close to four year of experience in two widely varied lines (Field Sales at Godrej and Software Development at Infosys), I want to leverage my experience to pursue a career in the Marketing of Software Services. I view an MBA as the ideal vehicle, as it complements my current skills and gives me a solid grounding in the fundamentals of Business Management. My stint at Godrej gave me the opportunity to study various industries and to interact with people at all levels. This helped me to understand the decision making process in the corporate world and allowed me to evolve as a negotiator. Infosys provided me with the opportunity to work on high-end development projects for international clients. The tight schedules helped me develop my skills in stress management and time management and my leadership skills. With its world-class faculty and excellent pedagogy FMS would equip me with all the required tools to enable me to achieve my goals. Also, as FMS attracts the best and the brightest minds, it ensures a competitive peer group and am confident that FMS would provide the ideal environment to bring out the best in me. SOP82r I envision myself playing an important role in the field of marketing of software services. I believe that my four years of diversified experience in entirely varied areas, as in field sales at Godrej <add full company name> and software development at Infosys Technologies Pvt. Ltd, can be successfully leveraged to pursue a career of my choice. My stint at Godrej gave me the opportunity to not only study various industries and to interact with people at all levels, but also in understanding the decision making process in the corporate world. The work experience at Infosys gave me a thorough understanding of the technical domain. Also the tight schedules helped me develop my skills in stress management and time management along with honing my leadership skills.

To complement my current skills and to give me a solid grounding in the fundamentals of business management, an MBA is an absolutely ideal vehicle.FMS with its world-class faculty and excellent pedagogy would equip me with all the required tools to enable me to achieve my goal. Also, my diverse skills and penchant for learning complements the competitive peer group that FMS ensures by attracting the best and the brightest minds. SOP83 - FMS "A man is a success if he gets up in the morning and gets to bed at night, and in between he does what he wants to do." Bob Dylan Why an MBA? Pardon the cliché, but at the end of the day I want to be successful and happy. What I want is a creative challenge and sufficient skills to bring success within my reach. The creative challenge that I am looking for can be best provided by a top level job in the field of Marketing. I believe that my strengths enhanced by an MBA from FMS would equip me to reach this desired level of achievement. One of my biggest strengths is my keen desire to acquire knowledge that I try to satiate by reading extensively. My thirst for knowledge has helped me become a successful quizzer; I have represented my college as a team captain and also conducted various quizzes. These experiences along with my involvement with the dramatics society in college have put to test my ability to manage people who are undoubtedly the most valuable resource in a company today. I pursued a course in Applied Organizational Psychology in IIT Kharagpur which deeply interested me and I topped my class in the same. Further, I demonstrated the practical applications of this subject when I single-handedly managed a crew of 56 people for a theatre production. Micromanagement was necessary and I believe I was successful as I won the best director award for the play. I believe that my thirst for knowledge, ability to manage people, creativity and innovation combined with my willingness to work diligently for what I wish to achieve will lead me up the path to success and satisfaction. An innovative pedagogy and an emphasis on the practical applications appeal to me. FMS is the institution that I believe would best meet my needs and help me exploit my potential to the maximum. SOP83r "A man is a success if he gets up in the morning and gets to bed at night, and in between he does what he wants to do." Bob Dylan Why an MBA? Pardon the cliché, but at the end of the day I want to be successful and happy. What I want is a creative challenge and sufficient skills to bring success within my reach. The creative challenge that I am looking for can be best provided by a top level job in the field of Marketing. I believe that my strengths enhanced by an MBA from FMS would equip me to reach this desired level of achievement.

First of all, a great quote to start with. But the "Why an MBA ? Pardon the cliche'...." thing though undoubtedly bold and out of the box, might also work against you. I, for one, would not find it offending, but don't know how the adcom would view the same. Infact its an interesting point as I amd deliberating the use of humour in my own essays for ISB and SBS. I tend to be humorous (even in real-life) but need to make sure that the essays I write don't have anything to do with rhetorics and sarcasm, and least of all sound frivolous. BTW you might want to tone down the "creative" part. I mean, believe me, MBA marketing is not a way to express your creativity. You can be creative in writing code, working in a call-center, those most mind-numbing jobs you can think of. OTOH, if you are so creative why not become a pianist ? a poet ? a writer ? Okay I know what you are talking about but just wanted to drive home the point :mg: One of my biggest strengths is my keen desire to acquire knowledge that I try to satiate by reading extensively. My thirst for knowledge has helped me become a successful quizzer; I have represented my college as a team captain and also conducted various quizzes. These experiences along with my involvement with the dramatics society in college have put to test my ability to manage people who are undoubtedly the most valuable resource in a company today. I pursued a course in Applied Organizational Psychology in IIT Kharagpur which deeply interested me and I topped my class in the same. Further, I demonstrated the practical applications of this subject when I single-handedly managed a crew of 56 people for a theatre production. Micromanagement was necessary and I believe I was successful as I won the best director award for the play. "One of my biggest strengths is my keen desire to acquire knowledge that I try to satiate by reading extensively." what does "that" refer to ? keen desire to acquire knowledge (I know it is) or one of my biggest strengths (but english grammar does not) Also agar itna "thirst" hai toh why not Phd ? :mg: I know what you are saying but expect his when you use the term thrice in your essay. Dramatics and quizzing does not teach you test your ability to "manage people". Somehow this argument does not seem to fit here. "I pursued a course in Applied Organizational Psychology in IIT Kharagpur which deeply interested me and I topped my class in the same" <<<<< Excellent example of putting stuff on your essay which your resume cannot reflect. But unfortunately you don't build on it saying how you can relate it to management. I know what it means but better you tell me. Did you produce it (which would need the management part) or direct it ? Make it clear. I believe that my thirst for knowledge, ability to manage people, creativity and innovation combined with my willingness to work diligently for what I wish to achieve will lead me up the path to success and satisfaction. An innovative pedagogy and an emphasis on the practical applications appeal to me. FMS is the institution that I believe would best meet my needs and help me exploit my potential to the maximum.

Well put last lines. Kind of summarizes what you have been talking all along. But again Why FMS is not so strong. BTW the pedagogy word is kinda weird. I mean I would immediately notice such words if I were not Dr. Samuel Johnson himself :mg: Otherwise pretty cool. Answers all except for Why FMS pretty convincingly. SOP84 - FMS Today, in a rapidly changing environment,an uncertain future awaits us, challenging our capabilities. To meet these emerging challenges with a decisive victory, we must incessantly strengthen our roots and stretch our reach. But a quandary emerges as to how to canalize and direct this change within the structures, And the best riposte to this fix is "education". Like Odysseus in his great work, Resolutions, Quoted. "……. Follow knowledge, like a sinking star, Beyond the utmost bound of human thought. Perhaps beyond that utomost bound, Is more Knowledge, and more And more, and more!" And this, perhaps, best exemplifies my purpose for doing an MBA; the pursuit of knowledge, the need for erudition and the want of edification. Being an engineering student, shaping ideas into reality has been my focus and an envisioned dream and I a management course will help me in developing my competencies needed to pursue this. FMS, with its history of producing world class managers for half a century and the unique teaching approach- a blend of fieldwork and case studies with a strong emphasis on concepts, will encourage my exploration of new ideas and provide me with skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. SOP84r Amazing how people just dont learn.... given the choice of your vocab, I guess rather than MBA you need to think about being a nonfiction writer .... do you really think that using such "uncommon" words give you an advantage .... you are totally wrong... the stress should me more on content rather than anything else... and the SOP you have written lacks the most basic content...the entire first para makes a good initial for a novel but not SOP... these are totally impersonal statements...reading them doesnt give me an iota of hint about *YOU* as a person... or whats your purpose...and the reason for your MBA seems to very very amusing... "pursuit of knowledge, the need for erudition and the want of edification" ...why dont you go for a Phd then (may be in psychology perharps or spiritual science)... may be you will get more knowledge there....

also if I remember correctly, the first sentence of last para has been plagiarised from one of the previous SOP...:mad: ... I hate to say this ... but this is one of the worst SOP I ever saw...[If you see my comments.. I am usually not harsh ]... you simply are way off tangential than what needs to be written... the essense of SOP is to market yourself for the mba course in a business like crisp and to the point language... (why do you think FMS has put a word limit... if they really wanted a flowery language then they would have given unlimited space.....)... SOP85 - FMS Having graduated with a good academic record from South point high school and later from the Jadavpur university with electrical engineering, I have developed strong analytical and communication skills. Simulataneously I have inculcated the passion and the guts to excel in a highly competitive environment. These qualities are further litmus tested in my job with the Tata Consultancy services where I lead a team of developers in developing mission critical applications for G.E. However, I always feel an urge to be at the forefront of critical decision making that propels an organization towards growth and success. With considerable industry exposure under my belt and the urge to explore new boundaries still at its peak, I feel this is the best time to pursue an MBA degree. I believe that an MBA from an acclaimed institute like FMS would be the ideal stepping stone to a rewarding career in management. With its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of producing business leaders and entrepreneurs, FMS offers a unique blend of unmatched excellence. And I deem it an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its rigorous selection process. SOP85r Having graduated with a good academic record in electrical engineering from Jadavpur university , I have developed strong analytical and communication skills. <<necessary line. edited it a bit. though definitely not eye-catching>> << somehow, the logic is not very strong in this case>> <<edited school bit. felt it was unnecessary>>

Simulataneously I have inculcated the passion and the guts to excel in a highly competitive environment. These qualities are tested in my job with the Tata Consultancy services where I lead a team of developers in developing mission-critical applications for G.E. <<edited the overall sentence>> <<again..write ur mission critical applications>> However, I always feel an urge to be at the forefront of critical decision making that propels an organization towards growth and success. <<if u are at the "team lead" state, u are already at the forefront of critical decision-making. >> With considerable industry exposure under my belt, I feel this is the best time to pursue an MBA degree and explore new boundaries. <<this one's ok..agan, edited it to make it tighter>> I believe that an MBA from an acclaimed institute like FMS would be the ideal stepping stone to a rewarding career in management. <<generic line>> With its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes and its legacy of producing business leaders and entrepreneurs, FMS offers a unique blend of unmatched excellence with...??? <<question: name atleast two business leaders & entrepreneurs to come ot of this place :) >> <<IIMA has produced more business leaders than FMS? then why write it here. try to use the USP of an institute in the SOP. with due respects..this is definitely not FMS's USP>> And I deem it an honour to be with the best minds in India, which FMS ensures through its rigorous selection process. <<sigh! ok. but no punch in the SOP dude. its quite ok..the way it is, but its very banal. though its loads better than having a bad SOP :mg: >> SOP85rr Having graduated with a good academic record in electrical engineering from Jadavpur university , I have developed strong analytical and communication skills. Not a strong start as well not convincing reason as to how electrical engg got anything to do with communication skills.....this has already been pointed by QuintEssence...but it seems you didnt taken his suggestions into account.... so i guess even my suggestion would go unheard :mg:

Simulataneously I have inculcated the passion and the guts to excel in a highly competitive environment. How, why, where? This, as well as the indispensable quality of motivating a team are tested in my job with the Tata Consultancy services where I lead a team of developers in developing mission-critical applications for G.E. (I cannot name the mission critical applications as it wud mean just naming my project which is not useful.If you want, I can remove the line altogether) The sentence structure doesnt give it a punch...it can be worded better ....just what I could come up with instantly... I lead a team of 'x' developers at G.E. that was involved in developing some mission-critical applications. This taught me the indispensible skills of motivating the team during the most desperate situations. PS: 'x' ==> number of developers... leading a team of 10 people and 100 people is different and unless the team you lead has less than 10, do mention the number of ppl. However,I feel a continuous urge to be at the helm of an organization and propel it towards growth and success. Again why, when you are already at a lead position... same comment given by QE isnt it?:mg: thats a natural question... so you can imagine that even the FMS faculty would pose a similar query... be prepared.. is are not changing this line :mg: I also believe that an MBA is one of those areas of education which best shapes up the overall personality of an individual. This has prompted me to pursue a career in manamgement. So you doing MBA to improve your personality...hmm...you know what i am going to say..aint you? With considerable industry exposure under my belt, I feel this is the best time to learn about the fundamentals of business mangament and explore new boundaries. With so much exp, your SOP is still punch less....something is really amiss... With its highly acclaimed faculty, extensive industrial programmes , its diverse and brilliant peer group shortlisted through a rigorous selection process and above all, its unmatched teacher student ratio, FMS is an ideal place to master the skills required in business management. A tenure of two years at this institute would be the ideal stepping stone to a rewarding career in the corporate world. Okish..... I guess you need to *really think*, why you want to do MBA... i guess you are following the herd and dont have solid reasons for doing MBA... you really need some introspection.... SOP86 - FMS

You live only once, but if you live right, once is enough. The same truth applies to one's career decision because the career you choose is going to live with you through out your life & the education you perceive was, is & will be your most loyal friend and which will help you achieve your career goals. I have been fortunate enough to be born in a family where equal emphasis is paid on sound academics and good extra-curriculars.I have been a meritorious student throughout, managing equally well at other fronts like literary works,dramatics etc. thereby grooming my inter-personal, time-management and communication skills. Being an engineering student, shaping ideas into reality has been my focus and an envisioned dream and a management course will help me in developing my competencies needed to pursue this. FMS ,as it mission affirms,aims at inculcating academic excellence and leadership in university based management education in India through high quality teaching, research, case development, innovative courses and pedagogy of learning and will be the best place for me develop my competencies, will encourage my exploration of new ideas and provide me with skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. SOP86r Okay this one seems to be better than previous one.. but lacks the following : 1) Your long term goal is missing...[shaping ideas into reality is a vague statement... ] 2) Your reason for doing MBA is not very convincing... 3) The first para does not tell me anything about you...these are totally impersonal statements... why waste precious space when you can write moer about yourself... 4) It is usually considered better if you can provide concerete examples of your extra-curricular achivements.. (literary works,dramatics etc.. can you give some examples) SOP87 - FMS The field of Information Technology has always fascinated me and I had cherished to pursue my Career in this field. After graduating from Visvesvaraya National Institute of Technology, Nagpur I joined Tata Consultancy Services Limited to pursue my dream. I am working with GE Commercial Finance as my Client. My 15 months of experience in IT has shown me that management of resoureses in IT Industry is the only way one can have an edge in this continously changing Industry. I have aquired manegerial skills from my eduaction as well as My stay at TCS. However I need to fine tune them and channelise them so that I can optmize my competencies and well as optimize the output of the tem I will work with. For this I need to learn the skills from the best in the industry. FMS is one of the best place in the country to sharpen one's skills and enhance one's capability in

Management of Information Technology. As such I want to pursue my MBA in FMS so that I can be armed with all the skills needed to lead the IT Industry. SOP87r The field of Information Technology has always fascinated me and I had cherished to pursue my Career in this field. If this is for FMS then whats the deal about IT being your dream ? After graduating from Visvesvaraya National Institute of Technology, Nagpur I joined Tata Consultancy Services Limited to pursue my dream. I am working with GE Commercial Finance as my Client. Half this sentence is filled with long words that can also be found in your resume. Just say that I joined TCS and GE comm Finan was my first client. Or something like that. My 15 months of experience in IT has shown me that management of resoureses in IT Industry is the only way one can have an edge in this continously changing Industry. I have aquired manegerial skills from my eduaction as well as My stay at TCS. However I need to fine tune them and channelise them so that I can optmize my competencies and well as optimize the output of the tem I will work with. For this I need to learn the skills from the best in the industry. A strong argument indeed for "Why MBA ?" Need to polish it a bit: "Over a year of being in this industry has shown me that managing resources is one of the most effective ways to have an edge in this dynamic industry. I have continuosly been exposed to various management principles - both during my education as well as during my employment with TCS. However, I need to fine-tune and channelise them so that I can optmize my competencies and well as optimize the output of the team that I will work with. For this I need to learn the skills from the best in the industry. " Not the best I have done but atleast better than the earlier version :mg: FMS is one of the best place in the country to sharpen one's skills and enhance one's capability in Management of Information Technology. As such I want to pursue my MBA in FMS so that I can be armed with all the skills needed to lead the IT Industry. What is "As such I want to pursue my MBA ......." ??? Infact the last sentence sucks royally :mg: Also knock of the caps in management. SOP88 - FMS “Dictionary is the only place where success comes before work” – a quote which has guided me through my teenage and inspires me to leave no stone unturned till success is achieved. It is by

virtue of hard and smart work that I find myself equipped with all the qualities imperative for an MBA from as prestigious a B-School as FMS. Having completed my Bachelor’s degree in the field of Computer Science & Technology, I joined the Indian software giant TCS to get the feel of corporate world. It’s truly fascinating to discover this new world fresh from a college. As someone has truly pointed out” Its never too late to learn” , I want to expand my knowledge base and pursue a career in the field of management. I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering management institutes with world-class infrastructure, notable industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management research base is the right place for me to make my dreams come true. I see a capable and inspirational manager in me in the coming times. SOP89 - FMS My BBM degree has helped me prepare for the academic rigors of the FMS MBA programme. At my undergraduate level, where I specialize in finance, I have taken a variety of different subjects like business finance, statistics, accountancy, marketing, economics etc. This has sharpened my quantitative skills and critical thinking abilities - not to mention the important ability to work efficiently with limited sleep. Though my experience in college has been rewarding - both personally and professionally, I realize I have only scratched the surface. I would like to continue my education at FMS's MBA program. Moreover, besides giving me theoretical and practical training, the programme will strengthen my cross-functional abilities, an essential quality in this field. In short, I desire the holistic view of the business and financial community that an MBA education would provide. I am very enthusiastic to apply here for a variety of reasons: a student teacher ratio of 3:1 - the best among similar programmes in India, the freedom and flexibility that comes as being part of the university system, and finally a degree is awarded on completion (as opposed to a diploma) – a fact that greatly enhances prospects for further education. SOP98r The first paragraph you have entirely devoted to your under-grad subjects... this is way off tangent than what an SOP should be... (unless these are some unique subjects...which i guess they are not)... if you have a BBA degree then it would be by default known that you studies these subjects....

When you write "quantitative skills and critical thinking abilities"...these would be written by almost 90% junta... since most enggineering applicants would only mention these skills...I assume that BBA applicants would be less(not sure though)... so why not write something which is unique... you got an advantage of already studying business administration... so leverage it out properly....- Also writing something like "not to mention the important ability to work efficiently with limited sleep." has many interpretations..... and it is not considered a "skill"....If you sleep less than what your body requires due to work/study-pressure it is usually considered that you are less efficient to finish your work/study during day time....There can be no convincing reason for having less sleep :mg: Also your reason for doing MBA is vague... (your entire second para is vague) The reason you have given for choosing FMS seems to be better than what other people write... So just re-do first two paragraph... BTW make sure you are prepared for explaining your "further education" thingie.....:mg: SOP90 - FMS The illiterate of the 21st century will not be those who cannot read and write, but those who cannot learn, unlearn, and relearn. - Alvin Tofler The pursuit of quality education and the ability to use it as a riposte to todays' changning environment is inevitable and I have been fortunate enough to be born in a family where extreme emphasis is laid on it. Blending meritorious academics with laudable extra-curriculars has shaped my inter-personal, time-management and communication skills. Being an engineering student, I posess the ability to analyse and interpret the situations well and envision the dream of shaping ideas into reality which can be used aptly in the field of management as in the new era of dynamic and discontinuous change, every organization requires continual reassessment of its routines to ensure that the decision-making processes, as well as underlying assumptions, keep pace with the dynamically changing business environment. FMS, with its high quality teaching, research, case development, innovative courses and pedagogy of learning will be the best place for me to develop my core competencies, will encourage my exploration of new ideas and provide me with skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. SOP91 - FMS No matter how good you get you can always get better and that's the exciting part. This quote by tiger woods epitomizes the view I have of FMS and my own ambitions. A perfect match. After

obtaining a degree in engineering I joined Irevna research services (equity research) as a research analyst. My experiences there convinced me that in spite of my creativity, versatility, communication skills and a thirst for learning and excellence, I was an uncut diamond. To achieve my full potential I need training which offers flexibility for my wide range of interests, and excellent environment both in terms of faculty and peers which is matched by the program offered. As David M. Ogilvy pointed out “In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative original thinker unless you can also sell what you create. Management cannot be expected to recognize a good idea unless it is presented to them by a good salesman.” And I aspire to be the best of them with help from this program. SOP91r 1) No matter how good you get you can always get better and that's the exciting part. This quote by tiger woods epitomizes the view I have of FMS and my own ambitions. A perfect match. After obtaining a degree in engineering I joined Irevna research services (equity research) as a research analyst. My experiences there convinced me that in spite of my creativity, versatility, communication skills and a thirst for learning and excellence, I was an uncut diamond. 2) To achieve my full potential I need training which offers flexibility for my wide range of interests, and excellent environment both in terms of faculty and peers which is matched by the program offered. 3) As David M. Ogilvy pointed out “In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative original thinker unless you can also sell what you create. Management cannot be expected to recognize a good idea unless it is presented to them by a good salesman.” 4) And I aspire to be the best of them with help from this program. 1) A blunder... if you are applying the quote to FMS, you are indeed hinting that FMS is good, but it can get better... thats cockeyed 2) Weired reason for doing your MBA.... 3) Too many quotes.... useless... remove it.... 4) A disconnect... SOP92 - FMS The later years of the 20th century have witnessed a growing convergence of disparate streams of human knowledge with their ever-greater dependence on each other. Among other consequences, this has resulted in an appreciable change in the constitution as well as the scope of many contemporary academic fields. And I want a merger of Technology and Management. My bachelor study in Information Technology has provided me adequate technical knowledge. However, my long term goals being managing and leading the organization that will have its say and influence the other organizations. In short, it being an epitome of its category. Here the management ladder will definitely place me cut above the rest. I have chosen FMS as an institution compatible with my interests and goals. This coupled, with extensive facilities and a

learned faculty, all ensconced in the rich cultural backdrop of the city of Delhi, forms an ideal milieu for my endeavors. SOP92r 1) The later years of the 20th century have witnessed a growing convergence of disparate streams of human knowledge with their ever-greater dependence on each other. Among other consequences, this has resulted in an appreciable change in the constitution as well as the scope of many contemporary academic fields. 2) And I want a merger of Technology and Management.3) My bachelor study in Information Technology has provided me adequate technical knowledge.4) However, my long term goals being managing and leading the organization that will have its say and influence the other organizations. In short, it being an epitome of its category. 5) Here the management ladder will definitely place me cut above the rest. 6) I have chosen FMS as an institution compatible with my interests and goals. 7) This coupled, with extensive facilities and a learned faculty, all ensconced in the rich cultural backdrop of the city of Delhi, forms an ideal milieu for my endeavors. 1) Not a perfect way to build your story.. too many impersonal statements.. more onto philosophical side.... not needed 2) Now what this means? Does this apply to your skills or aspirations.. i couldnt fathom what you mean by this statement... 3) Finally something about you...Phew!! 4) First correct the grammatical mistakes and then make the intention clear... its pretty confusing statment... 5) An extrememly bland way to say what you intend. 6) You need to show "how it is compatible" 7) What the heck "culture of delhi" to do with your MBA? SOP93 - FMS I will be graduating with a basic degree in chemical-bio engineering from Andhra University. Apart from being a meritorious student all through my academic career, I have passion for arts like Carnatic music and Bharatnatyam. I have also been a leader at my school and interacted with lower grade students, helped in instilling confidence and inculcating discipline in them. This shaped my personality into being an interactive and diverse woman. In todays rapidly changing corporate scenario I understand the value of business management apart from technicality. Having had a good grip in the technical details of my subject, I look forward to shape up my skills in business management. I wish to make it to the top position in the industry. I understand that it requires hard work, determination and emotional balance and I am ready to be dedicating this and more to achieve my goal. Being a fresher, I may need to have a closer interaction with faculty. The high student to faculty ratio at this institute insures such an opportunity. FMS, being a premier institute in India in the

field of business management and with scholarly pedagogue, would definitely help me in my way to fulfill my dreams and give the world my best. SOP93r I will be graduating with a basic degree in chemical-bio engineering from Andhra University. Apart from being a meritorious student all through my academic career, I have passion for arts like Carnatic music and Bharatnatyam. I have also been a leader at my school and interacted with lower grade students, helped in instilling confidence and inculcating discipline in them. This shaped my personality into being an interactive and diverse woman. 1. first-line, you have already mentioned this elsewhere in your application form.so, instead of a bland line, try clubbing two sentences together to give it more punch. an example can be " Coming from a chemical-bio engineering background, i've simulatneously inculcated a passion for carnatic music & bharatnatyam."..or something of this sort. ->though i am not sure whether putting in a hobby in a SOP is beneficial or not. Unless you've done it at some competitive level ..and been successful. 2. Were you the school captain..or had some specific post..or just a senior in general. if its the former, write that. 3. there is a big difference between lower grade students & students of lower grade :mg: :mg: to remove any confusion, say that you've instilled values like confidence & discipline in students and you believe that all this diversity has made you a more active person. In todays rapidly changing corporate scenario I understand the value of business management apart from technicality. Having had a good grip in the technical details of my subject, I look forward to shape up my skills in business management. I wish to make it to the top position in the industry. I understand that it requires hard work, determination and emotional balance and I am ready to be dedicating this and more to achieve my goal. 1. Some very weak/powerful arguments here..depending on how you look at it. Its weak because its too generic..basically its the same old line of "supplementing technical knowldge with management skills". nothig wrng with it..but its been used so many times that i doubt that they would even bother reading this paragraph. On the other hand, if u really wish to be at the top in ur industry..make sure u know all about "how" u are going to achieve that. Being a fresher, I may need to have a closer interaction with faculty. The high student to faculty ratio at this institute insures such an opportunity. FMS, being a premier institute in India in the field of business management and with scholarly pedagogue, would definitely help me in my way to fulfill my dreams and give the world my best.

1. underlined statement--> what is this ?? remove ASAP :mg: 2. the ensuing logic from the first line is specious. 3. Last lines..generic again :mg: SOP94 - FMS A Chinese proverb goes like :" I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand"; I strongly believe that to manage efficiently, action is important, which comes from learning and experience, which I propose to do at FMS. Coming from a engineering background,I have a technical knowledge but a management degree with hone my other managerial and leadershipqualities. My medium term career goal is to have a exciting career in the field of financial services and for achieving my career goal, I need a formal management education. My engineering degree along with a management one will go well with each other and help me in imparting my technical and management skills in companies/firms effectively. FMS being one of the premier B-school in India, backed by a strong faculty, excellent infrastructure, sprawling campus.. I am sure that with FMS, I will be moulded into a successful manager and will help me to realize my personal and career goals. SOP95 - FMS-MS “Man’s mind stretched to new horizons cannot go back to its old dimensions.”- Oliver Wendell Holmes I am always bubbling with ideas, but to be able to effectively shape them into reality, I need a sound understanding of principles of management and develop cutting edge skills as an innovator to make a remarkable difference to my work and achievements. A Bachelor of Engineering in Information Technology has given me a strong grounding in the technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies, has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge industry and people involved here. Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective communicator and team player and handle the stress and tight time schedules which form the part and parcel of any MBA graduate’s life. I have considerable experience in organizing events and coordinating with people at different levels. Have organized events at the Wipro-Shell collaboration meet, at college and school I have organized debates, fashion shows, skits, dance performances. Also I ve been an active participant in all these activities.

Only FMS offers the program, which develops business leaders with a clear focus at the service industry. It’s world-class faculty, interactive corporate experience, vibrant student activity, makes it my business school of choice. I wish to be a part or a learning process that will be invaluable for the rest of my life. SOP95r “Man’s mind stretched to new horizons cannot go back to its old dimensions.”- Oliver Wendell Holmes A good quote...but what is the relevance of this quote with what you wrote next.... I am always bubbling with ideas, but to be able to effectively shape them into reality, I need a sound understanding of principles of management What kind of ideas? It is way too general.... if these are busines ideas.. then what kind of business ideas?....you need to mention something more concrete about what you want to shape into reality.....hawa mein baatein kar ke nahi chalega :mg:... What are those ideas which need "sound understanding of principles of management"..... and develop cutting edge skills as an innovator to make a remarkable difference to my work and achievements. If you care to read once again... this line does not gel well with the previous line.... A Bachelor of Engineering in Information Technology has given me a strong grounding in the technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies, has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge industry and people involved here. Good sentence.... Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective communicator and team player and handle the stress and tight time schedules which form the part and parcel of any MBA graduate’s life. What the heck do you mean by "part and parcel of MBA graduate's life".... if you already possess the skills which an MBA gradutate have ...then why do an MBA?...Its okay to talk about the skills that you bring at the table...but the beauty of first part of the sentence is spoiled by the last part.... I have considerable experience in organizing events and coordinating with people at different levels. Have organized events at the Wipro-Shell collaboration meet, at college and school I have organized debates, fashion shows, skits, dance performances. Also I ve been an active participant in all these activities. So what....does that realtes anything with what is your "statement of purpose".... havent you already mentioned this in your application form... so whats new....SOP is not the place to talk in details about your extra-curicular activities..unless you want to show what you learn from these which would be useful during FMS course or for achieving your career goals....

Only FMS offers the program, which develops business leaders with a clear focus at the service industry. Are you sure that this course is only offerred by FMS? May be there are some not-so-well-known colleges which would offer a similar course... have you checked all the lists of colleges in India and confirmed this.... If not then why you wanna take a chance.... Instead write that this course has a got a different focus towards services industry.... which is what aligns with your goal...(this is missing)..... It’s world-class faculty, interactive corporate experience, vibrant student activity, makes it my business school of choice. I wish to be a part or a learning process that will be invaluable for the rest of my life. Okay.... I guess you can really spruce this up to the next level.... try to be more specific about your goals...and somehow link the FMS course with your goals... you will come up with excellent SOP... BTW dont change the language you are using...it is good... simple and crisp.... SOP95rr “Man’s mind stretched to new horizons cannot go back to its old dimensions.”- Oliver Wendell Holmes In the next five years, I visualize myself as a successful manager in the service industry learning about new business domains, processes, improving upon the existing ones and adding value at work every day. That is the idea I seek to pursue. A Bachelor of Engineering in Information Technology has given me a strong grounding in the technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies for over a year, has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge industry and people involved here. Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective communicator and team player and handle the stress and tight time schedules. I seek to do MBA from FMS for I believe that it can provide me with the diving board, from where to take off my dream career. Its close interaction with various departments of DU is bound to offer a broader perspective of management and deeper understanding of intricacies. Moreover it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice. I wish to be a part of a learning process that will be invaluable for the rest of my life. SOP95rrr

“Man’s mind stretched to new horizons cannot go back to its old dimensions.”- Oliver Wendell Holmes In the next five years, I visualize myself as a successful manager in the service industry learning about new business domains, processes, improving upon the existing ones and adding value at work every day. That is the idea I seek to pursue. Your goals are okay.. to be a "successful manager"...but is an MBA necessary for that... dont u want to achieve something higher or bigger... I guess even without an MBA within five to ten years you would be a successful manager....where exactly you look yourself after say 10-15 years... A Bachelor of Engineering in Information Technology has given me a strong grounding in the technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. And working at Wipro Technologies for over a year, has allowed me to gain an excellent insight into the working of the knowledge industry and people involved here. Also it has helped me develop my capabilities as an effective communicator and team player and handle the stress and tight time schedules. Good...dont change it... I seek to do MBA from FMS for I believe that it can provide me with the diving board, from where to take off my dream career. Its close interaction with various departments of DU is bound to offer a broader perspective of management and deeper understanding of intricacies. Good sentence.. but the last one "deeper understanding of intricacies" ....intricacies of what?? [intricacies == barikiya] Moreover it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice. I wish to be a part of a learning process that will be invaluable for the rest of my life. It is okay....good one... SOP96 - FMS “Too many crooks spoil the broth” may be true for cuisines, but diverse experience in different sectors might definitely be a boon for a Consultant, which is my long-term goal. As a part of the service industry throughout my career, I gained sufficient insights about the Manufacturing industry, while working with Jabil circuits in the Manufacturing and the Quality departments and then working in a support and enhancement project in MBT. To achieve my long-term aspiration, I would like to lead a team of professionals directly interacting with clients of various domains to develop their functionalities and later on to convert their ideas into tangible assets. Also bridging the gap between IT and non-IT sectors is one of my dreams. An MBA providing valuable business insights, intricacies and a management perspective would go a long way in achieving my goals.

The flexibility of customizing programs as per student’s profile, the attitude of “believing in doing… and in believing” through a host of practical and real life situations, the strong alumni with constant industry interaction and the mutually beneficial peer-leaning at FMS would be the ideal path to success. SOP96r “Too many crooks spoil the broth” may be true for cuisines, but diverse experience in different sectors might definitely be a boon for a Consultant, which is my long-term goal. Good start... simple and direct... As a part of the service industry throughout my career, I gained sufficient insights about the Manufacturing industry, while working with Jabil circuits in the Manufacturing and the Quality departments and then working in a support and enhancement project in MBT. Okay... what kind of insights you got... you should talk about that ....also the sentence structure could be made more readable... Working in the service industry with Jabil Circuits in the Manufacturing and Quality Department and with MBT in a support and enhancement projects, gave me sufficient insights into.......blah blah blah.... To achieve my long-term aspiration, I would like to lead a team of professionals directly interacting with clients of various domains to develop their functionalities and later on to convert their ideas into tangible assets. Not very clear... you already talked about being a Consultant as a long term goal... and FMS faculty is well aware with that term... if you want to add specific then reshuffle this line along with first... and also bring some clarity into your statements... Also bridging the gap between IT and non-IT sectors is one of my dreams. Hey where does this popped up suddeny... and what would you mean by this... either write something more about it....or remove it... An MBA providing valuable business insights, intricacies and a management perspective would go a long way in achieving my goals. Okayish.... The flexibility of customizing programs as per student’s profile, the attitude of “believing in doing… and in believing” through a host of practical and real life situations, the strong alumni with constant industry interaction and the mutually beneficial peer-leaning at FMS would be the ideal path to success. Well you intention was good of writing something different here...but it has not come out clearly... also this does not answer the "why FMS" very convincingly....

SOP97 - FMS “Success is a ladder that can not be climbed with your hands in your pockets.” This defines the reason and the will behind the drive to improve my ways and means of life. My experience through working in the corporate environment has taught me a lot about the complexities of the management involved in everyday work. Pursuing a degree in business administration will teach skills to survive in this environment to get the best out people and processes. My goal for the short term is to develop a career in the field of marketing most preferably in the FMCG sector. My experience in organizing events as a member of a technical society in college and in the annual technical fest has helped develop an interest in the field of marketing. My long term goal is work is as an independent consultant in this field, so that I have the independence to decide the kind of work to do. The vastly different style of pedagogy coupled with the best in class faculty provides for an immensely invigorating study environment at FMS, in which to pursue an MBA. FMS also has the advantage of being in the city seeing fast development with lot of corporates setting shop in Delhi making the student industry interaction highly plausible and effective. The pursuit of academic excellence at such your institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me. SOP97r “Success is a ladder that can not be climbed with your hands in your pockets.” This defines the reason and the will behind the drive to improve my ways and means of life.[there seems to be no connection between this line and the rest of your essay] My experience through working in the corporate environment has taught me a lot about the complexities of the management involved in everyday work. Pursuing a degree in business administration will teach skills to survive in this environment to get the best out people and processes. My goal for the short term is to develop a career in the field of marketing most preferably in the FMCG sector. My experience in organizing events as a member of a technical society in college and in the annual technical fest has helped develop an interest in the field of marketing.[this is not convincing. Experience in organizing events would foster ur interest in event management.....maybe you would want to elaborate here] My long term goal is work is as an independent consultant in this field, so that I have the independence to decide the kind of work to do.[this field?...which field...also having independence to do the kind of work i want to do ' is a very vague statement........Have you really thought about what you wish to do in the long term/] The vastly different style of pedagogy coupled with the best in class faculty provides for an immensely invigorating study environment at FMS, in which to pursue an MBA. FMS also has the advantage of being in the city seeing fast development with lot of corporates setting shop in

Delhi making the student industry interaction highly plausible and effective. The pursuit of academic excellence at such your institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me. SOP97rr “Success is a ladder that can not be climbed with your hands in your pockets.” This defines the reason and the will behind the drive to improve my ways and means of life. Okay... My experience through working in the corporate environment has taught me a lot about the complexities of the management involved in everyday work. What kind of experience? How much? Care to give details... Pursuing a degree in business administration will teach skills to survive in this environment to get the best out people and processes. So you want the degree for "surviving"... not a convincing reason... you would agree..... My goal for the short term <"short-term goal" sounds better> is to develop a career in the field of marketing most preferably in the FMCG sector. most preferably...what do you mean by this.... dont hang in between.... either leave the industry...or be specific..... My experience in organizing events as a member of a technical society in college and in the annual technical fest has helped <me> develop an interest in the field of marketing. How? What role you played in the tech society? My long term goal is work is as an independent consultant in this field, so that I have the independence to decide the kind of work to do. Okay the long term goal is okay...but there is no need to give such a silly reason... If I tell you that the kind of work you do being an independent consultant will still not be decided by you...but by other business/financial constraints...then?... The vastly different style of pedagogy coupled with the best in class faculty provides for an immensely invigorating study environment at FMS, in which to pursue an MBA. Change the sentence structure...the content is good...but sounds awkward.... FMS also has the advantage of being in the city seeing fast development with lot of corporates setting shop in Delhi making the student industry interaction highly plausible and effective. The pursuit of academic excellence at such your institution will undoubtedly bring out the best in me. Change the sentence structure...the content is good...but sounds awkward....

SOP98 - FMS Apart from being a meritorious student all through my technological career, I have simultaneously inculcated a passion for arts. I have a keen interest in carnatic music, which helps me in keeping my mind fresh and creative. I have also been an active organizer at many school and college functions. Being a house leader at my school, I tried to instill values like discipline and confidence among students. I believe all this activity shaped my personality into being an active and diverse woman. ‘The wheel turns and turns and turns: it never stops and stands still.’ The world is continuously changing and learning is the only thing, which helps one to adapt to this perpetual change. I aspire to carve a niche for myself in this Big World. To shape up my dream into reality and to make it successful I require profound knowledge of business apart from proficient technical and analytical skill. It is my dream to do such learning process from a ‘pioneering institution’ FMS, which gives me not only the ambience and opportunity to prove myself but also the latitude to be creative and nurture the entrepreneurial spirit in me. The way FMS links theory to practice and its various programs, to ensure that its students are comprehensively ready to step into the enterprising world, is fascinating. SOP99 - FMS The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe business organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and provides a platform for successfully harnessing these new ideas thereby contributing to the personal as well to the success of society in larger perspective. My technical studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development.They have helped me to hone my analytical and logical skills. This has been substantiated by my decent academic records and by my campus selection in two very reputed organisations. So far so good.I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe this stand alone technical skills will recieve a huge fillip if coupled with an excellent managerial skills.A thorough understanding of the managerial fundaes will help a long way in understanding the bits and pieces of management aspects and in the functionalities of the corporate world.Hence this MBA degree will keep me in good stead in this competitive world and would surely help me in realising my long term goal. This decision of mine has brought me to FMS.I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical and analytical skills and general management orientation.I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experinces, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments and to above all complement them with a respected management degree.

SOP99r The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe business organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and provides a platform for successfully harnessing these new ideas thereby contributing to the personal as well to the success of society in larger perspective. What the heck this blabbering got to do with your "statement of purpose"?? My technical studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development.They have helped me to hone my analytical and logical skills. Okay This has been substantiated by my decent academic records and by my campus selection in two very reputed organisations. We all know how campus selections are done at reputed organizations :mg:.... does not tell anything to me that you are stud.....and you are not the only one who gets two jobs from campus.... So far so good. Cmmon...are you writing a story...whats this?... I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe this stand alone technical skills will recieve a huge fillip if coupled with an excellent managerial skills. Poor choice of word...as well as sentence structure.... A thorough understanding of the managerial fundaes will help a long way in understanding the bits and pieces of management aspects and in the functionalities of the corporate world. Again poor choice of words...dont use colloquial words... Hence this MBA degree will keep me in good stead in this competitive world and would surely help me in realising my long term goal. Okaish This decision of mine has brought me to FMS. Absolutely pathetic sentence....i am really shocked...:wow: I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical and analytical skills and general management orientation.I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experinces, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments and to above all complement them with a respected management degree. Thank god..finally something which is good.... BTW your career goals are not vey clear here.....

SOP99rr The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe that business organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas.Hence my aspiration is to be placed high up in one of these organisations,utilize my ideas in its decision making and planning process,and thereby become successful in life. My technical studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development.They have helped me to hone my analytical and logical skills. This has been substantiated by my decent academic records and my active participation in extra-curricular activities. I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe that the achievement of my goal requires a detailed understanding of corporate workings,people and the business scenarios.I wish to get myself equipped with all the business and corporate world skills before embarking on a journey here.Thus an MBA degree from a reputed business school will keep me in good stead in this competitive world and would surely help me in realising my long term goal. I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical and analytical skills and general management orientation.I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments and to above all complement them with a respected management degree. SOP99rrr The ability to convert ideas to things is the secret of outward success. I believe that business organisations lead the way in pioneering new ideas.Hence my aspiration is to be placed high up in one of these organisations,utilize my ideas in its decision making and planning process,and thereby become successful in life. nothing wrong with this per se :mg: but somehow the punch is missing. it sounds so... general. try modifying some part of it, read some older sops. u will get an idea My technical studies have been an integral part of my intellectual development.They have helped me to hone my analytical and logical skills. This has been substantiated by my decent academic records and my active participation in extra-curricular activities. 1. ofcourse. useless line 2. how,- when - where ? I have sight MBA as my next career goal as i believe that the achievement of my goal requires a detailed understanding of corporate workings,people and the business scenarios.I wish to get myself equipped with all the business and corporate world skills before embarking on a journey here.Thus an MBA degree from a reputed business school will keep me in good stead in this competitive world and would surely help me in realising my long term goal.

1. I see MBA as a next career move (not goal)..etc 2. you havent really defined your goal earlier, you know. so how can u say that you want to achieve that goal. 3. try writing your expectations from the course rather than giving generic results. I am impressed with the emphasis FMS places on technical and analytical skills and general management orientation.I hope to become a part of this dynamic culture which will help me gain a diversity of experiences, network with a variety of people, to accept challenging assignments and to above all complement them with a respected management degree. 1. define define define.. :mg: plz understand, the bane of most sops is that they are just in-between..neither statements of magnificent visions nor an accountant's :mg: report. take a stand, dont be afriad of it 2. get some useful stuff about FMS to write..if you dont get that, dont write anything. but dont wrte something you know nothing about..it shows :mg: SOP100 - TAPMI "'Atlas shrugged', a brilliant novel by Ayn Rand was my introduction to the world of business and i've been captivated since. I aspire to be placed high up in the corporate ladder,and to be involved in the decision making and planning processes of an organization. It is my belief that the achievement of this goal requires a detailed understanding of corporate workings, people and the business scenario - Indian and global. I wish to enhance my knowledge in distinct sectors of an organisation and would like to bring together this understanding for a sound growth in me as well the workplace I would be working in. The Post Graduate Programme in Management offered by TAPMI would provide me with a firm grounding in these.The Holistic Approach provided towards Management Educationat TAPMI,the presence of Extra Curricular activities and the thought of working in teams make me all the more interested in joining TAPMI.After my two year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I will be able to fulfill my long term goals to perfection.I am confident that your institution will provide the stimulation and support environment that I am eagerly looking for." SOP100r "'Atlas shrugged', a brilliant novel by Ayn Rand was my introduction to the world of business and i've been captivated since. You are on a dangerous ground... Altas Shrugged is more about Ayn Rand's objectivism philosophy rather than "business"....and it is entirely fictional....

I aspire to be placed high up in the corporate ladder,and to be involved in the decision making and planning processes of an organization. good...simple and neat... It is my belief that the achievement of this goal requires a detailed understanding of corporate workings, people and the business scenario - Indian and global. Restructure the sentence.... I wish to enhance my knowledge in distinct sectors of an organisation and would like to bring together this understanding for a sound growth in me as well the workplace I would be working in. What do you mean by "distinct sectors"...do you mean different functions .... also what this "brining together this understanding" got to do with "sound growth in me and workplace".... totally confusing.... The Post Graduate Programme in Management offered by TAPMI would provide me with a firm grounding in these.The Holistic Approach provided towards Management Educationat TAPMI,the presence of Extra Curricular activities and the thought of working in teams make me all the more interested in joining TAPMI. Pathetic sentence...also why capitalize "Holistic Approach"... "Management Education".... also not strong reasons for showing interest in TAPMI... I guess the college is reputed enough to have other distinguishing characterstics....so why not quote them... (you need to search for them first) After my two year stint at TAPMI I am certain that I will be able to fulfill my long term goals to perfection. Really poor choice of sentence structure....... I am confident that your institution will provide the stimulation and support environment that I am eagerly looking for." "Your institution"... who you are talking to? make it "TAPMI" Does not make clear "why TAPMI" and how it aligns with your goals..... SOP101 - FMS "Leadership, A quality on display" This was the comment about me by corporate Trainer at the end of psychometric test on my first day of job. I have displayed my leadership skills at all stages of my life, be it arranging informal student clubs or alumni meets. Excellent academics coupled with Extra-curricular provided me an opportunity to get in to IT corporate world, straight out of the college. I was absorbed into a globally spread out software development team based on my robust technical knowledge and good soft skills. Being a part of

small team involved in every aspect of wireless device development, I experienced the intricacies involved in dealing with customers and in the process I could hone my negotiation skills and crisis handling abilities. I foresee myself as an entrepreneur in consultancy arena. A technical graduation with one and half years experience has put me on the right track towards my goal. A formal management degree is a necessity for me to get into the field I aspire to be in. FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness such as relatively small batch size and flexible curriculum fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution. SOP101r 1) "Leadership, A quality on display". This was the comment about me by corporate Trainer at the end of psychometric test on my first day of job. "Leadership, A quality on display". It was the comment by our corporate trainer at the end of my psychometric test on the first day of job. 2) I have displayed my leadership skills at all stages of my life, be it arranging informal student clubs or alumni meets. I have displayed my leadership skills at all stages of my life, be it organizing small informal student clubs or the entire alumni meets on a large scale. 3) Excellent academics coupled with Extra-curricular provided me an opportunity to get in to IT corporate world, straight out of the college. <not needed..same thing mentioned in next line> 4) I was absorbed into a globally spread out software development team based on my robust technical knowledge and good soft skills. I was absorbed into a globally spread out software development team of a large organization based on my robust technical knowledge displayed by excellent academics and good soft skills shown by extra-curricular activites. 5) Being a part of small team involved in every aspect of wireless device development, I experienced the intricacies involved in dealing with customers and in the process I could hone my negotiation skills and crisis handling abilities. I understood the intricacies involved in dealing with critical customers as a part of small team involved in every aspect of wireless device development. This has honed my negotiation skills and crisis handling abilities. 6) I foresee myself as an entrepreneur in consultancy arena. A technical graduation with one and half years experience has put me on the right track towards my goal.

I foresee myself as an entrepreneur in consultancy arena. A technical education coupled with one and half years of industry experience has put me on the right track towards my goal. 7) A formal management degree is a necessity for me to get into the field I aspire to be in. I believe that a formal management degree is the next logical step in my scheme of venturing into the desired field. 8) FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness such as relatively small batch size and flexible curriculum fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution. FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness of having a relatively small batch size and flexible curriculum, fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution. SOP102 - FMS To me, there is only one form of human depravity - the man without a purpose." That quote from Atlas Shrugged concisely states my attitude towards life as well as career. After having worked in the software industry for more than two years now, I am ready to take a step forward towards achieving my career goal of being a top CEO of the world. I’m fascinated by the enormous progress India has seen in the last decade because of the outsourcing and particularly Information Technology industry. I want to make it big in this industry which has enormous potential. I’m looking forward to a managerial career in the IT industry and I see myself heading a globally known software company one day. A formal education in management can go a long way in helping me achieve my career goal. FMS being one of the oldest and most reputed institutes and having vastly experienced and learned faculty is my preferred choice to pursue a management degree. FMS has the unique advantage of being a part of the Delhi University and is strategically located in the capital city. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution. “To me, there is only one form of human depravity - the man without a purpose." That quote from Atlas Shrugged concisely states my attitude towards life as well as career. 1. u wouldnt want to start of with negating a negative..depravity in the first line seems out of place. no doubt, the quote is good..but try putting in a better one After having worked in the software industry for more than two years now, I am ready to take a step forward towards achieving my career goal of being a top CEO of the world. 1. CEO of the world? be realistic dude....goto HBS. I’m fascinated by the enormous progress India has seen in the last decade because of the outsourcing and particularly Information Technology industry. I want to make it big in this industry which has enormous potential. 1. mostly redundant info. outsourcing & IT need not be the same, you know :wink:

I’m looking forward to a managerial career in the IT industry and I see myself heading a globally known software company one day. 1. what stops you from having a managerial career in IT right now ? A formal education in management can go a long way in helping me achieve my career goal. 1. how? outline the gains that you percieve from this course rther than making an assertion based on ur opinion. FMS being one of the oldest and most reputed institutes and having vastly experienced and learned faculty is my preferred choice to pursue a management degree. FMS has the unique advantage of being a part of the Delhi University and is strategically located in the capital city. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution. 1. generic lines about FMS actually. you could replace FMS with IIM A or any other good b-school and still the same words would hold. :) SOP103 - FMS Swami Vivekananda said, “Arise, Awake and Stop not till you have reached your goal”. My long-term career goal is to successfully manage an organization and I believe that pursuing an MBA degree from a reputed institute is the first step in this direction. Academics have been my forte and my consistent performances since high school stand testimonial to the fact. I was placed within the top 0.4% in the Andhra Pradesh engineering entrance exam and secured an admission for the Electrical and Electronics Engineering course in REC Calicut, one of the premier engineering institutions in the country. Pursuing the engineering course in an REC helped in an all round development of my personality. Apart from performing well in academics (I stood 3rd in a class of 65), I also actively participated in extra curricular activities. I was selected to my college cricket team for my leg spin bowling and batting abilities. I have held the post of Treasurer of the Telugu Cultural Association, Calicut chapter. My interaction with peers with diverse backgrounds from all over the country helped me get different perspectives. Working in organizations like Delphi and Symbol enhanced my problem solving, analytical skills and helped me become a good team player. I learned that in a technology driven company, the technical and management aspects are complementary for a successful organization. Having taken up roles of a project coordinator for a few projects, I came to appreciate the significance of management in an organization. I sincerely believe that the MBA course would enrich my skills in management and help me attain my goal. I believe that FMS, well known for academic excellence and a good reputation of producing world-class managers, strong alumni network and a good placement record is the right institute for the MBA education I seek.

SOP103r SOP104 - FMS An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come" courtesy Victor Hugo. Idea and imagination, as I believe, is the driving impulse for mankind. Coming from an engineering background, the exciting world of ideas, which influence humanity in some way or the other, has been my area of interest. Working in a technical job as a software developer for the past couple of years has made me realize the hitches of the corporate world. Great ideas are invaluable only when they are presented and applied efficiently, more so when the stakes are high and diversified. It demands theoretical and practical knowledge alongwith varying skills sets. These are the essential qualities that I require, to make a difference in tough business scenarios where strategy plays the role of a protagonist. I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering management institutes with world-class infrastructure, notable industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management research base can provide me the skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. SOP104r "An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come" courtesy Victor Hugo. Idea and imagination, as I believe, is the driving impulse for mankind. Good sentence..but grammatical mistakes... Coming from an engineering background, the exciting world of ideas, which influence humanity in some way or the other, has been my area of interest. okay... Working in a technical job as a software developer for the past couple of years has made me realize the hitches of the corporate world. What do you mean by hitches? What kind of projects you saw/lead which made you realise the hitches.... simply being a coder wont give you much exposure to business side of an organization....isnt it? so elaborate.... Great ideas are invaluable only when they are presented and applied efficiently, more so when the stakes are high and diversified. presented and applied?? or implemented?? confusing...."stakes are high"...what the heck...which stakes?? It demands theoretical and practical knowledge alongwith varying skills sets.

"varying skill sets"...curious word... what do you mean... do you mean "variety of skill sets" ?? also what kind or variety of skills? You are just being vague.... These are the essential qualities that I require, to make a difference in tough business scenarios where strategy plays the role of a protagonist. Boy boy... why are you going for hi-fi words... without any connect between them....an absolute no no statement....BTW even the intention/mearning is not very clear.... I believe that FMS, one of the pioneering management institutes with world-class infrastructure, notable industry interaction, highly experienced faculty and excellent management research base can provide me the skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. the usual run-of-the-mill sentence....BTW FMS does not have world-class infrastructure... A so-so SOP....but can be improved a lot... SOP105 - FMS "Knowing is not enough, we must apply, willing is not enough, we must do. My short term ambition includes getting into a premium B School and be a beneficiary of excellent pedagogy and diverse interactions, And then get into a corporation where I will hone my skills as a manager and learn the intricacies of management be it people management or process management. My long term ambition is to have my own business to satisfy the entrepreneur in me. I am a computer engineer with a decent academic record and hence my logical and analytical skills are quite groomed. I used be in charge for the marketing of the events in college and bring in sponsorships. This cultivated my interest in marketing and motivated me to choose a marketing job in T.I.M.E. Bhopal, rather than going for a software job. The experience at TIME helped me to look at marketing from ground level and it enhanced my communication skills and developed a convincing approach of communication in me. I was made the Centre Manager in eight months and was in charge for marketing and administration. This gave me in hand experience of managing an organisation holistically. At this point, I developed an interest in stock markets and with some stock market simulation games I was able to learn about the basic functioning of stock markets and a company also. This captivated my interest in finance and hence influenced me to pursue my MBA in Marketing and finance (dual). FMS can help me by giving my raw capabilities a professional and corporate touch, which can prepare me for the rigours of corporate world. And I am pretty sure that FMS with its sound pedagogy, revered faculty and excellent infrastructure is more than capable of doing it. Also the interaction with variety of people from India and abroad and the various co curricular activities at FMS will result in an all-round development of my personality. The pursuit of MBA at your esteemed institute will bring out the best in me…." SOP105r You want to stuff too much into the limited space...:mg:

Cut the quote...since not relevant...also cut the crap about short-term goal...since it is obvious...your SOP in thier hands itself imply that you are looking to get into a B-school.....cut also the crap continuing sentence after the short-term goal.... The start can be from your long term goal.... My long term goal is to become an entrepreneur. My gradution in computer science has undoubtly sharpened by logical and analytical skills. You are not writing your autobiography..."I used to be incharge of..blah blah blah...." cut this crap... its more important as to what you learned from your marketing roles in cultural fests...write that down.... You can write choosing the marketing domain over s/w job in a more effective manner... try to restructure the sentence to give it some punch... atleast you got different exp than a usual techie... so you are at an advantage... leverage it properly... Why you made incharge of a center in eight months... make it sound like you did something extra-ordinary and the result is your promotion to center manger.... Hey cut the entire crap of stock simulation games....no b-schools care about stock inverstors... and unless you enter "real stock market" you dont understand the meaning of "burning yourself"... there are hunderds of people who play such simulation games... so these are not the skills with which you can impress the faculty....(it might back-fire on you if they start asking questions about this during PI)....also "finance" functionality is not restricted to only stock market, it is entirely different and wide.... In the last para... the sentence sturcture is not very impressive...change it.... Being a center manager you should have lot more to say in your SOP than this... you are not using your exp properly..... SOP106 - FMS " If you can imagine it, You can achieve it; If you can dream it, You can become it." - William Arthur Ward. I have always imagined myself getting the BEST ENTERPRENUR of the year award for my dream project, my own technology-driven firm. My zeal to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic record and my co-cullicular activities. After getting distinctions in X & XII Board Exams I choose Computer Engineering and completed the same with distinction. In Sports I took up BOXING in juinor college and went on to represent North Mumbai at National level. My stint as the General Secretary of the

Dramatics group of our Degree College,where I lead a team of 15 people,gave me useful insights into manpower and resource management. The next milestone I achieved was getting into AMDOCS,the largest CRM and Billing company in the world. AMDOCS being a global company,we had clients from all over the world and this experience has made me understand the subtle nuances that go into the functioning of global corporations. Finally,to achieve my dreams your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed cirricclum, faculty from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice for me. SOP106r " If you can imagine it, You can achieve it; If you can dream it, You can become it." - William Arthur Ward. I have always imagined myself getting the BEST ENTERPRENUR of the year award for my dream project, my own technology-driven firm. Pretty strong opening lines :mg: My zeal to excel in whatever I do is reflected in my academic record and my co-cullicular activities. After getting distinctions in X & XII Board Exams I choose Computer Engineering and completed the same with distinction. In Sports I took up BOXING in juinor college and went on to represent North Mumbai at National level. My stint as the General Secretary of the Dramatics group of our Degree College,where I lead a team of 15 people,gave me useful insights into manpower and resource management. spelling of curricular. Also, the distinction waalah funda is vague. Either you are a goldmedallist or you just mention that you have a strong academic record and leave it at that. The structure of the above paragraph would be more cogent if you put it as "Academically I have done blah blah .........and on the co-curricular front I have excelled in boxing, dramatics". Now anyone reading your resume is going to know that you represented North Mumbai yadda yadda or GS of yadda yadda. So chop those details out. Now since you have done this stuff, tell us what you have learned from it ? Was it time management ? Was it ability to multitask ? Was it people skills (what you have mentioned) ? If yes, then how does it tie to your becoming entrepreneur ? Also, you were interacting with colleagues and peers right ? "Do you call them manpower ? Or resource ? So why say "manpower and resource mgmt" ? The next milestone I achieved was getting into AMDOCS,the largest CRM and Billing company in the world. AMDOCS being a global company,we had clients from all over the world and this experience has made me understand the subtle nuances that go into the functioning of global corporations.

Next milestone ? I'm sorry but I missed out on the earlier ones ? :mg: Where have you mentioned them ? Atleast write one point saying "My first milestone was......." then this is justified. Also, AMDOCS being the largest CRM and billing co in the world or being a global company has little to do with YOU as a person. So how did it help YOU ? Did you interact with clients ? Did you meet tight schedules ? Did you have to put up with a grouchy boss ? :mg: Put YOUR perspective into it. Again, who does it tie back into your dream to become an entrepreneur ? Finally,to achieve my dreams your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed cirricclum, faculty from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice for me. Spell check karo yaar. As a punishment I am not going to review the last para and point out the many glaring errors it has :mg: Now I know how I managed to piss off my school teachers :mg: SOP106rr " If you can imagine it, you can achieve it; If you can dream it, you can become it." - William Arthur Ward. I have always imagined myself getting the BEST ENTERPRENUR of the year award for my dream project, my own technology-driven firm. Academically I have always been in the cream of my Alma matter, while on the co-curricular front I have excelled in boxing and dramatics. Playing boxing at national level has taught me never to get pushed down in life and to come up with renewed strength and energy when pushed to the limits. My stint as the general secretary of our dramatics group, where I led a group of 15 people, showed me how difficult managing people and funds can be and awoke the manager within me . Being in AMDOCS the largest CRM and Billing Company in the world was a truly learning experience. Handling clients from Australia exposed me to the concept of ‘glocalization’, i.e., being globally active but local to the specific need of the client. Having to cope with stringent deadlines and tremendous work pressure has made me disciplined and further strengthened my urge to pursue management. I definitely believe that your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed curriculum, faculty from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice for me SOP106rrr " If you can imagine it, you can achieve it; If you can dream it, you can become it." - William Arthur Ward. I have always imagined myself getting the BEST ENTERPRENUR of the year award for my dream project, my own technology-driven firm.

Good... Academically I have always been in the cream of my Alma matter, while on the co-curricular front I have excelled in boxing and dramatics. Playing boxing at national level has taught me never to get pushed down in life and to come up with renewed strength and energy when pushed to the limits. My stint as the general secretary of our dramatics group, where I led a group of 15 people, showed me how difficult managing people and funds can be and awoke the manager within me . Being in AMDOCS the largest CRM and Billing Company in the world was a truly learning experience. Handling clients from Australia exposed me to the concept of ‘glocalization’, i.e., being globally active but local to the specific need of the client. Having to cope with stringent deadlines and tremendous work pressure has made me disciplined and further strengthened my urge to pursue management. Okay...its good to talk about your qualities...but you are overdoing it... the entire above para talks about what you learned....but it does not connect with how you are going to achieve you goal that you mentioned earlier....I guess you can cut down some part here ... and tell how all these skills can help you achive your goal...and what are the things which are missing ...which makes MBA as the next step for you.... I definitely believe that your esteemed institution with its highly acclaimed curriculum, faculty from different sectors and high echelons of the corporate world is indeed the best choice for me since your goals and skills and why mba are not clear in the SOP... this line is not making much sense here.... SOP107 - FMS Ability to focus on problems and to take appropriate decisions to deal with them needs a sound knowledge base and a high level of confidence. I aspire to become a part of strategic management team, where my primary role is to take crucial decisions that would shape the future course of the firm. I want to inculcate in me all the essential qualities that are prerequisite for such an aim. I have a firm belief that these qualities could be learnt and mastered with proper training and guidance. My technical background has given me a strong analytical foundation, apart from drilling in the importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition. My experience working with a MNC call center and small scale industry manufacturing machine tools has given me an insight into various nuances involved in management both globally and locally. FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness of having a relatively small batch size and flexible curriculum, fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution. Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work dedication

SOP107r Ability to focus on problems and to take appropriate decisions to deal with them needs a sound knowledge base and a high level of confidence. I aspire to become a part of strategic management team, where my primary role is to take crucial decisions that would shape the future course of the firm. I want to inculcate in me all the essential qualities that are prerequisite for such an aim. I have a firm belief that these qualities could be learnt and mastered with proper training and guidance. Knock of "ability" in the first sentence. It should read "To focus on .....and to take... needs a ........" "I aspire to be a part of the strategic mgmt team" instead of whatever else. Also you might want to tell which sector or type of organization if you are clear about it. "....where my primary role......." hmm.........rather keep it like "strategic mgmt team which would require me to take crucial decisions" or ""strategic mgmt team where I would need to take crucial decisions" Also, "inculcate" not "inculcate in me" "for this" instead of "for such an aim" "can be" instead of "could be" My technical background has given me a strong analytical foundation, apart from drilling in the importance of hard work, which is required in the face of robust competition. My experience working with a MNC call center and small scale industry manufacturing machine tools has given me an insight into various nuances involved in management both globally and locally. Technical background = strong analytical foundation is too trite. See if you can cook up something better. Also, if I were you, I would love to rant about the customer focussed delivery that I had in the call-center. Maybe you want to mention about the turnaround times, your performance, your perception of client in global business etc. FMS, being one of the oldest and finest B-schools in India, with its uniqueness of having a relatively small batch size and flexible curriculum, fascinates me. I would consider it a privilege to be part of this prestigious institution. Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work dedication "FMS, one of the oldest and finest Bschools in India, has fascinated me with its relatively smaller batch sizes and a very flexible curriculum." Sounds better "I would consider it a .............till the end" is almost anitclimatic. I think it kind of lets down the tone you had set up by using banal words. Work on it, I am sure you will be able to come up with something better. SOP108 - GLIM Please tell us how a management degree fits in your personal goal for the future.(400)

My Goal is to set up a software solution company five to ten years down the line, which would be at the cutting edge of technology. In order to prepare myself for this, not only would I like to get the formal education in management but I would also like to work with reputed organizations at various levels of management so as to understand the practical aspects of management and gain required expertise. I did my engineering in computer science from a very reputed college SGSITS Indore, now a deemed university, which gave me a sound understanding of science and technology. I joined HSBC software development India Pvt Ltd as a software engineer straight from the campus and have now worked for almost two years in this organization. This period has once again highlighted the importance of formal management education, which will help me in honing my quantitative, qualitative analytical and interpersonal skills, which are necessary for a budding manager. My job in HSBC has exposed me to the ground realities of corporate world and taught me to apply theory by finding feasibility and viability. HSBC being a huge organization has exposed me to varied and diverse functions and taught me how a business runs. In my view the key of being a successful entrepreneur is having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With robust technical background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to blend both the aspects. Great lakes institute of management can help me in reaching my goals through its excellent faculty, scientifically planned curriculum and high quality (experienced) intake. Elective courses from fifth term onwards lay due emphasis on entrepreneurship development and strategy making which will definitely cater to my long-term aspirations of becoming global entrepreneur and with its excellent placement record, GLIM would give me a right launching platform. SOP108r My Goal is to set up a software solution company five to ten years down the line, which would be at the cutting edge of technology. In order to prepare myself for this, not only would I like to get the formal education in management but I would also like to work with reputed organizations at various levels of management so as to understand the practical aspects of management and gain required expertise. Why is G in goal capital ? Since when have software solution companies been on the cutting edge of technology ? Give me 1 example. Think about it. Only the googles and the other product based companies can afford making a claim like it. Also, what will be your USP ? Why Software why not anything else ? Read some magazines, gartner reports etc. to give you food for thought.

A lot of questions are unanswered. This is NOT a FMS 200 word SOP. 400 words allow you more time to build up a story. So tell us your goal. I did my engineering in computer science from a very reputed college SGSITS Indore, now a deemed university, which gave me a sound understanding of science and technology. Have already read it up in your essay. Knock off this entire sentence. I joined HSBC software development India Pvt Ltd as a software engineer straight from the campus and have now worked for almost two years in this organization. This period has once again highlighted the importance of formal management education, which will help me in honing my quantitative, qualitative analytical and interpersonal skills, which are necessary for a budding manager. "I have been working in HSBC software development India Pvt. Ltd as a software engineer right from the time I passed out from college, almost two years ago." sounds better. "a budding manager" eh ? You just said you want to be an entrepreneur ? Where is that spin ? Also what is "quantitative, qualitative analytical" (sic) ? My job in HSBC has exposed me to the ground realities of corporate world and taught me to apply theory by finding feasibility and viability. HSBC being a huge organization has exposed me to varied and diverse functions and taught me how a business runs. In my view the key of being a successful entrepreneur is having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand. With robust technical background, I feel that a management degree will enhance my innate qualities and give me the opportunity to blend both the aspects. "taught me to apply theory by finding feasibility and viability" ???? What is that supposed to mean ? :whatthat: Talk about the blending part (techno-managerial function) in a more direct manner. Tell what you want to learn and how it will fit into your entrepreneurial venture. Great lakes institute of management can help me in reaching my goals through its excellent faculty, scientifically planned curriculum and high quality (experienced) intake. Elective courses from fifth term onwards lay due emphasis on entrepreneurship development and strategy making which will definitely cater to my long-term aspirations of becoming global entrepreneur and with its excellent placement record, GLIM would give me a right launching platform. This says "Why GLIM ?". If it can be addressed elsewhere you might want to stick to just "Why MBA ?" here and give more convincing reasons as I have mentioned in my comments for the previous paragraph. SOP109 - GLIM Assume that you are on the admission panel of great lakes. Which of your qualities would compel you as panel member to offer yourself admission

Although my experience and knowledge does not suffice to answer this question but I strongly believe that following are my qualities which would compel me as a panel member to offer myself the admission The burning desire to learn new things to grasp information and ability of convert this information into knowledge, as at this stage there is no scope for spoon-feeding there could only be the torch of knowledge to guide you through and it is you who has to make the path. The flexibility to go through the grueling schedule of a B school, which would enable me to succeed in highly competitive environment. Good interpersonal and communication skills and the spirit to hail through difficulties, sustain the pressure, meet the commitments make me a person who will ensure that the deadlines are met. The ability to be energetic to not only carry myself through but to induce energy in other people around gives me an edge as far as team work is concerned and supports my candidature. And last but not the least being patient and good listener has always paid dividends to me, so listening to people and respecting them for what they are and what they opine has become an inseparable part of my personality. These qualities I think would enable me to not only secure admission in a reputed institute like yours but will also help me succeed throughout my life. SOP109r Although my experience and knowledge does not suffice to answer this question but I strongly believe that following are my qualities which would compel me as a panel member to offer myself the admission Why do you want to say that you will not have enough experience and knowledge. I think starting off an essay on a negative foot doesn't look nice. Just my $0.02 The burning desire to learn new things to grasp information and ability of convert this information into knowledge, as at this stage there is no scope for spoon-feeding there could only be the torch of knowledge to guide you through and it is you who has to make the path. Excellent. Now give an example of when you did that. Was it something you learned through a very difficult phase of the project when you had little idea about the scope, did you get to go onsite for requirement gathering ? was it tough clients who were dealing with getting layed off themselves hence unwilling to share info ? what was it that you can claim to say this ? The flexibility to go through the grueling schedule of a B school, which would enable me to succeed in highly competitive environment. Good interpersonal and communication skills and

the spirit to hail through difficulties, sustain the pressure, meet the commitments make me a person who will ensure that the deadlines are met. The ability to be energetic to not only carry myself through but to induce energy in other people around gives me an edge as far as team work is concerned and supports my candidature. So you have great teamworking abilities and communication skills. How can you substantiate it ? Have you had to deal with people working across geographies ? a bad boss ? incompetent subordinates ? how did you over come it ? what did it teach you ? And last but not the least being patient and good listener has always paid dividends to me, so listening to people and respecting them for what they are and what they opine has become an inseparable part of my personality. You are objective and a good listener (im sure my wife wished for those qualities in me :mg:). Great ! Have you taught some place ? Have you had to deal with situations where it was important to absorb knowledge ? Was there an experience that changed you into becoming like this ? Share it. These qualities I think would enable me to not only secure admission in a reputed institute like yours but will also help me succeed throughout my life. Good. But as I have mentioned above this is a very generic essay. It says nothign about the person YOU. Give more examples and give it that personal touch. SOP110 - FMS I completed my bachelor's degree in science (Mathematics, Electronics and Computer Science) from Bangalore university in 2004. Subsequently, I had taken up various MBA entrance exams and applied to some B-schools(including FMS) in 2004. I had a score of 94 percentile on CAT and 89 percentile on XAT, but unfortunately could not convert these scores and GD/PI calls from TAPMI,MICA and NIRMA into a final admission offers. I have been working for the past four months as a graduate trainee for IL&FS Depositry Services. Given my present qualifications and background, I feel I need a qualification which would help me stand out in the job market. I feel a management course at FMS would help me achieve these goals. While a well-qualified and experienced faculty, excellent infrastructure, and the brand value of FMS would be invaluable, I also want to have the chance to interact with a varied spectrum of bright students with various backgrounds to add to my knowledge pool. I feel I have the requisite ability to leverage fully the advantage offered by a management course at FMS, and hence want to pursue the same at your esteemed institute.

SOP111 - FMS Apart from being a meritorious student all through my technological career, I have simultaneously inculcated a passion for arts. I have a keen interest in carnatic music, which helps me in keeping my mind fresh and creative. I have also been an active organizer at many school and college functions. Being a house leader at my school, I tried to instill values like discipline and confidence among students. I believe all this activity shaped my personality into being an active and diverse woman. ‘The wheel turns and turns and turns: it never stops and stands still.’ The world is continuously changing and learning is the only thing, which helps one to adapt to this perpetual change. I aspire to carve a niche for myself in this Big World. To shape up my dream into reality and to make it successful I require profound knowledge of business apart from proficient technical and analytical skill. It is my dream to do such learning process from a ‘pioneering institution’ FMS, which gives me not only the ambience and opportunity to prove myself but also the latitude to be creative and nurture the entrepreneurial spirit in me. The way FMS links theory to practice and its various programs, to ensure that its students are comprehensively ready to step into the enterprising world, is fascinating. SOP111r ‘The wheel turns and turns and turns: it never stops and stands still.’ These lines from Anita Desai's novel <put name of novel> wonderfully conveys the ever-changing world and learning is the only thing, which helps one to adapt to this perpetual change. I aspire to carve a niche for myself in this Big World <What big world?? it is vague... put something concrete..you need to talk about your dreams... >. My strong technical and analytical skills are reflected by excellent academic records. I have a keen interest in carnatic music which not only allow me to remain energetic and creative, but provides an entirely different dimension to my personality. I believe that to shape up my dream into reality <assuming you did mentioned about your dreams in the first para> I require not only strong technical and analytical skill but also thorough knowledge of business aspects. I believe that a ‘pioneering institution’ like FMS is the perfect platform to puruse my business learning process. With an amazing student-faculty ratio FMS will provide me not only with the ambience and opportunity to prove myself but also the latitude to be creative. I aspire to nurture my entrepreneurial spirits during the course of study. The way FMS links theory to practice, ensuring that it's students are comprehensively prepared to step into the enterprising world, is fascinating. This is still far from complete... you need to put properly 'what are your goals' and to modify it as per the content you want to include....This is just what I can come up with instantly.... SOP112 - FMS

Leadership qualities are very important for an individual to survive in this highly competitive world. All that matters is how effective a leader proves himself in implementing his skills. One needs to learn special skills to hone his leadership qualities. My career objective is to become an inspirational leader backed by thorough knowledge of management skills in my field of interest. At present I am pursuing Computer engineering degree from the Sardar Patel College of Engineering, Mumbai. I have participated and won in a no. of extracurricular activities. I have been an active member in organizing intra and inter college festivals for our college. My leadership abilities came to the fore when I was appointed the Magazine Secretary of our college for the academic year 2004-05. This has helped me to develop analytical, reasoning, organizational and leadership skills. As John F. Kennedy has said “Leadership and learning are indispensable to each other” Good leaders develop through a never-ending process of self-study, education, training, and experience.The quality of leadership, more than any other single factor, determines the success or failure of an organization. Your innovative techniques of dealing with real time problems will help me to gain confidence and empower me as an individual. The strong Alumni strength along with the location of your institute gives me a great chance of interacting with the corporate world. I feel a management course at FMS would help me achieve my objectives. While a well-qualified and experienced faculty, excellent infrastructure, and the brand value of FMS would be invaluable, I also feel that I have the requisite ability to take optimum advantage offered by a management course at FMS, and hence want to pursue the same at your esteemed institute. SOP112r Leadership qualities are very important for an individual to survive in this highly competitive world. Does it really make sense...if everyone needs leadership skills...who will be the followers......A good follower usually succeeds more than a poor leader..... All that matters is how effective a leader proves himself in implementing his skills. One needs to learn special skills to hone his leadership qualities. Absolutely avoidable statements... remove it asap. My career objective is to become an inspirational leader backed by thorough knowledge of management skills in my field of interest. You field of interest...which is?? hawa mein batein... give details buddy... At present I am pursuing Computer engineering degree from the Sardar Patel College of Engineering, Mumbai. What does this convey...nothing...isnt the form you are filling have the same information...so why waste space??

I have participated and won in a no. of extracurricular activities. I have been an active member in organizing intra and inter college festivals for our college. No short forms please.... also the sentence structure is weired... and what do you mean by active member... every member is an active memebr...right? details required to corroborate ... My leadership abilities came to the fore when I was appointed the Magazine Secretary of our college for the academic year 2004-05. This has helped me to develop analytical, reasoning, organizational and leadership skills. How? When you say "leadership skills came to the fore"... you need to give examples...of what you did... its all looks like bluffing.... As John F. Kennedy has said “Leadership and learning are indispensable to each other” Good leaders develop through a never-ending process of self-study, education, training, and experience.The quality of leadership, more than any other single factor, determines the success or failure of an organization. Oh my god...tu tou leadershio ke piche haath dho ke pad gaya :mg: ... what these statements tell about yourself, your goals, your plan to do mba, your choice of FMS.....I guess nothing....so its useles... isnt it? Your innovative techniques of dealing with real time problems will help me to gain confidence and empower me as an individual. Your?? Whose?? If you mean FMS faculty...then you should talk about FMS and not the individual faculty... What kind of real time problems? How do you know? The strong Alumni strength along with the location of your institute gives me a great chance of interacting with the corporate world. replace "your institute == FMS". "Alumni = alumni". I feel a management course at FMS would help me achieve my objectives. While a well-qualified and experienced faculty, excellent infrastructure, and the brand value of FMS would be invaluable, I also feel that I have the requisite ability to take optimum advantage offered by a management course at FMS, and hence want to pursue the same at your esteemed institute. Does not make much sense...why you want to complicate things for FMS faculty. Why not keep simple sentences...everyone likes to read simple sentences.... SOP112rr My career objective is to be part of a reputed organization in a position where I can make significance difference to it backed by a thorough knowledge of management skills. I want to succeed in this highly competitive world and that’s why I think a management course (irrespective of the field) at FMS would help me achieve my objectives.

Studying in a premier institute like FMS will help me improve my leadership skills and gain thorough knowledge of the world of business. It will teach me how to act and think like a business person. It will help me gain confidence and empower me as an individual. FMS has a high profile faculty and excellent infrastructure. The strong alumni strength along with the location of FMS will give me a great chance of interacting with the corporate world. Pursuing a course at FMS will help me gain confidence to deal with any complex business situations. The current trends in placements at FMS are very encouraging and will help me gain the right start at the beginning of my career. I believe FMS will help me gain the desired skills to become successful in this world and that’s why I want to join it. SOP112rrr My career objective is to be part of a reputed organization in a position where I can make significance difference to it backed by a thorough knowledge of management skills. ah dude! have u really said anything here at all. this is as global as global can be :mg: if u are not comfortable discussing career objectives then dont put in a line just for the sake of it being there :) I want to succeed in this highly competitive world and that’s why I think a management course (irrespective of the field) at FMS would help me achieve my objectives. why & how would a management course help? Studying in a premier institute like FMS will help me improve my leadership skills and gain thorough knowledge of the world of business. It will teach me how to act and think like a business person. It will help me gain confidence and empower me as an individual. instead of giving general gyaan, why not say something specific? FMS has a high profile faculty and excellent infrastructure. The strong alumni strength along with the location of FMS will give me a great chance of interacting with the corporate world. this bit is ok..but then its one of the easier biits to be put in a sop. :mg: Pursuing a course at FMS will help me gain confidence to deal with any complex business situations. The current trends in placements at FMS are very encouraging and will help me gain the right start at the beginning of my career. already written this earlier. plus, no need to talk about placements. they might start asking you questions on it. I believe FMS will help me gain the desired skills to become successful in this world and that’s why I want to join it.

same lines written all over again dont help ur SOP. read some of the earlier SOPs posted to get a general feel of writing. SOP113 - FMS My goal is to a better businesswoman than even I can imagine - to be among the best in the world of finance. Tough times don’t weaken me, they make me grin and spur me on. I’m the one who keeps her head on when everyone around me is losing theirs. I am not the kind of person who’d be comfortable taking orders from countless people forever. No, I want to be at the top, and am ready to work for it. So, what can FMS do for me? FMS can teach me what risks are worth taking and which ones are not. It can teach me how to make sense of myriad accounts and complex terms, and then use them to my advantage. Studying in a premier academy like FMS will definitely help hone my leadership skills, and my understanding of the world of business and finance. It will give me a rich source of wisdom and knowledge to draw upon: an opportunity to learn from the some of the best. It will teach me how to talk, act, and THINK like a businessperson. Best of all, FMS will give me a world-class community I will always belong to. SOP113r My goal is to a better businesswoman than even I can imagine - to be among the best in the world of finance. Tough times don’t weaken me, they make me grin and spur me on. I’m the one who keeps her head on when everyone around me is losing theirs. I am not the kind of person who’d be comfortable taking orders from countless people forever. No, I want to be at the top, and am ready to work for it. Okay..you need to do some grammer check...(I am not doing it)...The first line sounded me bit weired... how can *your goal* is something which you yourself can not imagine. [We are not talking about dreams...but goals]... Need to little bit modify the structure of the sentence.... Otherwise a good and different approach....but not very clear why MBA? Do you think for becoming a "better businesswoman" requires MBA? Just need to add something which tells that why you are looking for MBA So, what can FMS do for me? FMS can teach me what risks are worth taking and which ones are not. It can teach me how to make sense of myriad accounts and complex terms, and then use them to my advantage. Okay it is usually good to be different/unique....but not weired... what kind of risks you are talking about? or what accounts?? what complex terms? Needs something more concrete than a stylistic writing...need content...

Studying in a premier academy like FMS will definitely help hone my leadership skills, and my understanding of the world of business and finance. It will give me a rich source of wisdom and knowledge to draw upon: an opportunity to learn from the some of the best. It will teach me how to talk, act, and THINK like a businessperson. Best of all, FMS will give me a world-class community I will always belong to. Wonderful....bang on target about why FMS? [although a generic para which could be applied to any b-school...but better than the usual run of the mill sentences of "esteemed faculty", "world-class infras" blah blah.....] BTW I like you appraoch of writing in a different style...dont change that.... SOP114 - FMS B. Quilliam has said ‘There is a fine line between dreams and reality, it's up to you to draw it’. I believe that if one has the desire to succeed, all dreams can be achieved and with this belief at the back of my mind, I aspire to start a business of my own. After completing my B.E from BIT, Ranchi, the knowledge that I have acquired and the experience that I have gained during my tenure at TCS has given me an understanding of the various factors involved in efficiently running a high profile project. The highly competitive environment has also helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented mindset towards every work that I do. The three Customer Satisfaction Awards that I have received in the last two years are a testimony to that. The skills that I have acquired so far, coupled with a thorough understanding of the principles of management, can transform my vision into reality. FMS, with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, and a strong alumni network, in addition to an excellent faculty, is an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream. SOP114r No change needed..send it....congrats !! SOP115 - FMS " Learning "is an on ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve! FMS is an abode where learning is accompanied by pragmatic approach -the keyword to success.The HEADY BLEND of both will phoenix- ENTREPRENEUR.

As an entrepreneur, i'm expected to venture multifarious tasks in corporate world. FMS would instill in me the following ingredients :- 1)TEAM LEADER- in lml ltd as an mt . or team -worker,i'm fine tuning my skills to be a TEAM LEADER. BUT TO BE TEAM LEADER I OUGHT TO MOTIVATE MY COLLEAGUES WHICH REQUIRES "RIGHT MINDSET" WHICH WILL BE FOSTERED BY FACULTY OF FMS VIA "LEARNING BY DOING PROCESS" & CONGENIAL TEACHER:STUDENT RATIO OF 1:3. 2)PERPICACIOUS-"SURVIVAL OF THE FITTEST" is the buzzword of corporate sectorwhich i realised in lmlltd.being keen-minded at fms will facilitate mine applying the awesome case-study approach to real business bottlenecks , emperically.hence i'll surmount corporate glitches. 3)GREGARIOUS-As a team in lml ltd, my output aggrndized tremendously.FMS ensures interaction not only within the batch mates to motivate me to preform to my utmost potentialbut with strong alumni-network as well. thus it becomes conducive for me to enhance social circle & keep abreast with latest corporate knowhow. 4)AWESOME PLACEMENTS-MANAGER IS AN ASSET to an organization as he is loaded with skillsets required to accomplish goals.& thus the price-tag is obvious & fms has since its inception (1954)spearheaded in PLACEMENTS. SOP115r " Learning "is an on ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve! FMS is an abode where learning is accompanied by pragmatic approach -the keyword to success.The HEADY BLEND of both will phoenix- ENTREPRENEUR. Why the caps ? Why are you shouting ? "Miles to achieve" ?? Sure this is the orginal quote ? "by a pragmatic...." Phoenix ?? Wasn't that an Egyptian bird that rose from its own ashes. What is it got to do with your entrepreneurship ??? As an entrepreneur, i'm expected to venture multifarious tasks in corporate world. FMS would instill in me the following ingredients :- "venture multifarious tasks" ?? Does that mean "play various roles" in simple english ? :mg: 1)TEAM LEADER- in lml ltd as an mt . or team -worker,i'm fine tuning my skills to be a TEAM LEADER. BUT TO BE TEAM LEADER I OUGHT TO MOTIVATE MY COLLEAGUES WHICH REQUIRES "RIGHT MINDSET" WHICH WILL BE FOSTERED BY FACULTY OF FMS VIA "LEARNING BY DOING PROCESS" & CONGENIAL TEACHER:STUDENT RATIO OF 1:3. What is this thing with caps ? :crazy: What is "lml ltd as an mt . or team -worker" ??

BTW knock off i'm and say "I am...." "Learning by doing process" ??? Duh ? 2)PERPICACIOUS-"SURVIVAL OF THE FITTEST" is the buzzword of corporate sectorwhich i realised in lmlltd.being keen-minded at fms will facilitate mine applying the awesome case-study approach to real business bottlenecks , emperically.hence i'll surmount corporate glitches. Did you even do a simple grammar check ? It is horrendously written ? You have not even taken care to remove the space between sector and which in the first line. 3)GREGARIOUS-As a team in lml ltd, my output aggrndized tremendously.FMS ensures interaction not only within the batch mates to motivate me to preform to my utmost potentialbut with strong alumni-network as well. thus it becomes conducive for me to enhance social circle & keep abreast with latest corporate knowhow. aggrndized ? preform ? potentialbut ? Whats going on here ? 4)AWESOME PLACEMENTS-MANAGER IS AN ASSET to an organization as he is loaded with skillsets required to accomplish goals.& thus the price-tag is obvious & fms has since its inception (1954)spearheaded in PLACEMENTS. pricetag ? You want to tell that to an MBA college ? That they have a pricetag on the managers ? Plus you want to tell them that a "manager is an asset.......loaded with skillsets......." SOP115rr "Learning"is an ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve!I visualise myself as a successful manager-5 years down the line .As a "manager", I have to be abreast with various business processes, value-addition techniques and their corresponding applications as well.I seek to persue this as a dream. Technical experience as a Graduate-trainee in LML Ltd. has rendered me a strong grounding in technical nuances of rapidly growing automobile industry. I have gained an excellent insight into the concept of "GLOCALIZATION" and into the working-conditions of manufacturing sector.Besides, I have further honed my inter-personnel skills,team-playing and working-under-stress capabilities.By working with EKTAPATH- an ngo dedicated to promote sanitation and social equality-I have furthered my social responsibility . FMS is the appropriate LAUNCH-PAD for my dreams to materialise.Its relatively smaller batch-size and a very flexible curriculum ,fascinates me .The committed faculty at FMS has always shouldered the responsibility to instill "RIGHT MINDSET"- an indispensable asset to a manager . The case-study approach accompanied by unique "learning by doing process" focuses at understanding of subtle-nuances of corporate sector. Its "Strong ALUMNI ASSOCIATION" and interaction with various departments in DU is bound to offer a broader perspective of management education.

SOP115rrr "Learning"is an ongoing process, it has no destination but miles to achieve!I visualise myself as a successful manager-5 years down the line .As a "manager", I have to be abreast with various business processes, value-addition techniques and their corresponding applications as well. I seek to persue this as a dream. 1. why do people have these sudden technicolor dreams ? business processes, value-adds, applications.. :huh: i am sure these are just the buzzwords which are popular nowadays. with rime, they might even grow obsolete. the point is, that thse are just the tools that you use. to take an example, you would like to be an uber-gamer rather than dream about the kind of machine that you will buy. similarly, these are just the processes. what really drives you here ? Technical experience as a Graduate-trainee in LML Ltd. has rendered me a strong grounding in technical nuances of rapidly growing automobile industry. I have gained an excellent insight into the concept of "GLOCALIZATION" and into the working-conditions of manufacturing sector.Besides, I have further honed my inter-personnel skills,team-playing and working-under-stress capabilities.By working with EKTAPATH- an ngo dedicated to promote sanitation and social equality-I have furthered my social responsibility . ok. pretty good intro about yourself. covering most of the points anyway. however, you could quantify the amount of time you've worked for in LML. instead of just saying "insights", you could just point out some lacunae. anyway..just suggestions :) FMS is the appropriate LAUNCH-PAD for my dreams to materialise.Its relatively smaller batch-size and a very flexible curriculum ,fascinates me .The committed faculty at FMS has always shouldered the responsibility to instill "RIGHT MINDSET"- an indispensable asset to a manager . The case-study approach accompanied by unique "learning by doing process" focuses at understanding of subtle-nuances of corporate sector. Its "Strong ALUMNI ASSOCIATION" and interaction with various departments in DU is bound to offer a broader perspective of management education. ... frankly, too much space is being allocated to describe the institute. instead of telling the adcom what the B-school offers you, better tell them what you want from the b-school. info about the insti is already there in the brochure, right? so, just pick the parts that you think are important and present them as your convictions/desires/needs SOP116 - FMS Being an engineer, the cultic figure of my boyhood dreams, is a decision of my heart, which my mind readily followed considering the good career prospect.

Presently I manage the maintenance activity in a critical machine line at Tata Motors. With time I realised here that the maintenance job is confined into a very small domain of overall plant activity. My interest now spreads out to the science behind running a plant, the nitty-gritty of operations - the wider horizon of understanding the business, which moves the plant. Two years in a management institute would help me develop this awareness. Understanding business calls for expertise in finance besides operations. In schooldays I marvelled both in science and accountancy. My boyhood dream dragged me into the world of engineering. An MBA study would allow me to understand the finance problems, which I was once fond of doing. My goal in life is to manage an entire plant successfully on my own. Using cutting-edge technology, building people, understanding the market force - I want to lead this business process. FMS with its unique advantage of prime location, affordable course fee, favourable teacher student ratio, high student empowerment and 50 years old alumni network emerges as my dream management institute which would catapult me in the right direction to fulfil my aim. SOP117 - FMS “Great dreamers’ dreams are never fulfilled: they are always transcended “.Being an aeronautical engineer, my dream, my vision, had always been to establish an aeronautical industry in our country and to use my knowledge for the betterment of the society and the country. This vision calls for the best of the management and decision making skills that can be demanded .A masters in business administration is the first step that will supplement my efforts in attaining this goal. Presently pursuing my final year in aeronautical engineering from the Madras Institute of Technology, Anna University, I have exhibited my organizational skills at various levels, apart from a very good academic track record. My appointment as the Students Secretary of the Computer Society of our college only reiterates this. A strong foundation in my chosen field, with a never dying passion for the flying machines, is what drives me constantly towards my goal. FMS, with its time perfected course, an excellent corporate interface, top of the class faculty, and an eclectic mixture of students, is the right choice to pursue my MBA,as this ensures that when I take the first step towards my dream , I put my best foot forward. SOP117r “Great dreamers’ dreams are never fulfilled: they are always transcended “.Being an aeronautical engineer, my dream, my vision, had always been to establish an aeronautical industry in our country and to use my knowledge for the betterment of the society and the country. This vision calls for the best of the management and decision making skills that can be demanded .A masters in business administration is the first step that will supplement my efforts in attaining this goal.

1. this is not a speech..remove either dream or vision 2. what does "an aeronautical industry" mean? try to be as specific as possible in areas where u can give specific answers. 3. logically complete ur analogy of the first para..how would u transcend ur dream? Presently pursuing my final year in aeronautical engineering from the Madras Institute of Technology, Anna University, I have exhibited my organizational skills at various levels, apart from a very good academic track record. My appointment as the Students Secretary of the Computer Society of our college only reiterates this. A strong foundation in my chosen field, with a never dying passion for the flying machines, is what drives me constantly towards my goal. 1. u talked about a very-very tech-oriented field (aero) in the first para. so when u are introducing yourself..try justifying ur interest or showcasing ur tech calibre. 2. just say that you have enjoyed responsible positions in college. 3. thats something that even pilots would say...so u want to be a pilot ?? FMS, with its time perfected course, an excellent corporate interface, top of the class faculty, and an eclectic mixture of students, is the right choice to pursue my MBA,as this ensures that when I take the first step towards my dream , I put my best foot forward. 1. insufficient generics here. this para can be written to describe any college. SOP118 - FMS "Advertisements..be it print or TV commercials, they have always caught my fancy.It not only fascinates me but also propels me to work towards a high-flying career in the field of advertising and marketing. Having completed my graduation in economics from delhi university, one of the most revered institutions in India, it endowed me with a good foundation as well as developed my interest in the field of consumer market and behaviour. Apart from regular courses, owing to my personal interests, I chose to study something out of the realm of my academic curriculum like web designing,so that i could get to learn the nuances of managing a website. But marketing will always remain close to my heart and I wish to embark upon a fulfilling career in this field. For this, I need to back my graduate degree with a MBA programme from a top-class college so that I can enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. FMS, with its eminent faculty and diverse real life projects has been my first choice. I am sure with FMS, I can actualize my dreams in my chosen area. " SOP118r

"Advertisements..be it print or TV commercials, they have always caught my fancy.It not only fascinates me but also propels me to work towards a high-flying career in the field of advertising and marketing. fair enough opening. :) but advertising is not marketing, it represents a small portion of marketing..so if u want a marketing major, rather than an advertising one, you better make a better choice of words :mg: Having completed my graduation in economics from delhi university, one of the most revered institutions in India, it endowed me with a good foundation as well as developed my interest in the field of consumer market and behaviour. Apart from regular courses, owing to my personal interests, I chose to study something out of the realm of my academic curriculum like web designing,so that i could get to learn the nuances of managing a website. But marketing will always remain close to my heart and I wish to embark upon a fulfilling career in this field. For this, I need to back my graduate degree with a MBA programme from a top-class college so that I can enter the corporate world fully equipped with all theoretical / practical skills that will aid me in facing the complex business environment with confidence. hey pretty good. must say that this SOP dont need no editing :mg: FMS, with its eminent faculty and diverse real life projects has been my first choice. I am sure with FMS, I can actualize my dreams in my chosen area. the SOP is as good as ready..you could send it right away. SOP119 - FMS "I am an engineer/food technologist working with coca cola inc.the one year training program at the company provided insight into the manufacturing and also into cross functions vi z. Sales,finance, HR,Logistics,Information Syatems.Having undertaken various improvement projects helped in gaining extensive technical knowledge.I want to incorporate the same with managerial skills and contribute better to the industry as my full potential would be realised. In order to achieve the above i want to take up a management course with a focus on(now i am hell confused as to go for operations or finance) and work in the food/allied sector. FMS with its unique profile centric program,world class infrastructure,extensive industrial interface and wide alumni network wil help me achieve my goal. SOP119r "I am an engineer/food technologist working with coca cola inc.the one year training program at the company provided insight into the manufacturing and also into cross functions vi z. Sales,finance, HR,Logistics,Information Syatems.Having undertaken various improvement projects helped in gaining extensive technical knowledge.

1. be specific about ur cross-functional exposure 2. were there any learnings fom your projects..if there were, what were those ?? write them here. I want to incorporate the same with managerial skills and contribute better to the industry as my full potential would be realised. In order to achieve the above i want to take up a management course with a focus on(now i am hell confused as to go for operations or finance) and work in the food/allied sector. 1. u are one confused dude (assuming u are a dude :mg: ) finance in food sector ?? whats the reasoning behind it. and what is operations in food sector? is it raw food or finished & packaged good? write something dude FMS with its unique profile centric program,world class infrastructure,extensive industrial interface and wide alumni network wil help me achieve my goal. 1. which profile centric program ?? 2. generic lines which can suit any college. SOP120 - FMS "I hail from a medical family. From early in life, my parents have inculcated in me values of sincerity, perseverance, and social responsibility. But most importantly being independent professionals themselves, they have always inspired me to strive for excellence. During my undergraduate studies at Delhi College of Engineering, I have excelled at academics and balanced that with a plethora of extra curricular activities. Organizing technical festivals, student industry meets, entrepreneurial development programs have helped me refine my leadership & interpersonal skills, and develop as a team player. Most importantly, they have helped me develop into a confident person and define my long term goals. My ambition is to start a retail venture and build it into a global business enterprise. My desire to make it big generates a great deal of energy, enthusiasm and a keen willingness to learn. I was one of the 40 students from Asia who were selected for the Asia Pacific Student Entrepreneurship Society (ASES) Summit at Stanford University, in April 2005. I am also actively involved in the establishment of the ASES chapter in my college. MBA from FMS will help me greatly to crystallize my ambitions into tangible goals. With its expert faculty, and a vast network distinguished alumni, FMS provides a consummate learning environment none other. Studying amongst the best students in the country will provide me with the most appropriate platform to develop my core competencies and will empower me to realize my full potential. I believe success at any task is a direct function of the aspirations, proper guidance, and the endeavors put in to see our goals come to fruition and an MBA from this institution will be the brightest guiding light for my dreams." SOP120r I hail from a medical family. From early in life, my parents have inculcated in me values of sincerity, perseverance, and social responsibility. But most importantly being independent professionals themselves, they have always inspired me to strive for excellence.

1. pretty good opening :) you talk about values, upbringing and the works. During my undergraduate studies at Delhi College of Engineering, I have excelled at academics and balanced that with a plethora of extra curricular activities. Organizing technical festivals, student industry meets, entrepreneurial development programs have helped me refine my leadership & interpersonal skills, and develop as a team player. Most importantly, they have helped me develop into a confident person and define my long term goals. 1. too verbose. use discernible acronyms like DCE. plus, why qualify the extra-currics with "balanced that with a plethora of extra curricular activities". you have already written about them in the next few lines. 2. not sure, but a long term goal making strategy doesnt always work. i dont know the amount of conviction that you have for this project of yours, but it can be a serious drawback in interviews. My ambition is to start a retail venture and build it into a global business enterprise. My desire to make it big generates a great deal of energy, enthusiasm and a keen willingness to learn. I was one of the 40 students from Asia who were selected for the Asia Pacific Student Entrepreneurship Society (ASES) Summit at Stanford University, in April 2005. I am also actively involved in the establishment of the ASES chapter in my college. 1. you could start ur SOP with this as the first line and then continue with the rest of the SOP. if u are so focussed on something, why hold it back till the end of the SOP. probably, the framing could be different like " to build a global retail venture is a goal that i intend to achieve". 2. you talk about ASES for about 4 lines. do u realize that you havent said anything about what ASES does? i mean, i might be an ignoramus here, but thats likely about the adcoms as well. tell us what u achieved rather than what you did/were selected for. MBA from FMS will help me greatly to crystallize my ambitions into tangible goals. 1. totally totally wrong statement to make. no insti will ever crystallize ur ambition. it means that the ambition is nebulous at present. going with a sop like yours, which sounds extremely focussed, this is quite a letdown. thats why i put it in a separate line. FMS/ any other b-school will only provide you with the tools that you feel are necessary for success. basically, you want to go into an endeavor and what to give it your best shot. frame it that way. With its expert faculty, and a vast network distinguished alumni, FMS provides a consummate learning environment none other. Studying amongst the best students in the country will provide me with the most appropriate platform to develop my core competencies and will empower me to realize my full potential. I believe success at any task is a direct function of the aspirations, proper guidance, and the endeavors put in to see our goals come to fruition and an MBA from this institution will be the brightest guiding light for my dreams." 1. the reaction that i get after reading this para gives me the impression of flowery language and no substance. coming from a series of quite focussed sentences that you ave written ealier, this seems like an eyesore. AFAIK, this is no better than any other bit written about FMS. if you have the time, read some of the earlier comments specifically on this part of the SOP.

overall..quite ok..but marred by the language at the end SOP121 - FMS The foundation for a management career was laid early in my life. Staying away from home since the past five years has made me independent and enabled me to take crucial decisions of my life on my own. Interacting with people from various parts of the globe having diverse backgrounds, at my college (NIT Calicut) and later at TCS, has equipped me with interpersonal skills essential for good team work. My roles as the Placement representative and an executive member of Students Parliament have imbibed in me many values and lessons. Organizing various events in college gave me an early insight into the intricacies of management. The lessons I learnt in this period, are being put to test at TCS Ltd., where I lead of team of developers who support mission critical applications for General Electric. I feel this is the right time for the transition from a technical expert to a business leader. To achieve this objective, I need to equip myself with theoretical and practical skills which will prepare me to face any challenge with confidence. FMS, with its rigorous MBA program, highly acclaimed curriculum, excellent faculty and fellow students, can certainly arm me with the necessary management skills and practical business knowledge. FMS can provide me the right platform for this major step-up in my career. SOP121r The foundation for a management career was laid early in my life. Staying away from home since the past five years has made me independent and enabled me to take crucial decisions of my life on my own. 1. come to think of it..around half of the graduates in this country can say this :) howwever, if u took some really crucial/independent decisions write them here...like When my father told me to join a medical college, i said that i would rather have a fulfilling life in management than in medication :mg: :mg: Interacting with people from various parts of the globe having diverse backgrounds, at my college (NIT Calicut) and later at TCS, has equipped me with interpersonal skills essential for good team work. 1. too generic lines. nothing wrong, but nothing special either :wink:

My roles as the Placement representative and an executive member of Students Parliament have imbibed in me many values and lessons. Organizing various events in college gave me an early insight into the intricacies of management. 1. why write down such formal sounding designations when they do nothing but eat space. The lessons I learnt in this period, are being put to test at TCS Ltd., where I lead of team of developers who support mission critical applications for General Electric. 1. which lessons..specify 2. which applications..mission critical i.e. I feel this is the right time for the transition from a technical expert to a business leader. 1. loaded..loaed staement to make. use this only if u are totally sure about ur tech knowledge. To achieve this objective, I need to equip myself with theoretical and practical skills which will prepare me to face any challenge with confidence. FMS, with its rigorous MBA program, highly acclaimed curriculum, excellent faculty and fellow students, can certainly arm me with the necessary management skills and practical business knowledge. FMS can provide me the right platform for this major step-up in my career. 1. i'll CCP some of my earlier comments for this one as well : frankly, too much space is being allocated to describe the institute. instead of telling the adcom what the B-school offers you, better tell them what you want from the b-school. info about the insti is already there in the brochure, right? so, just pick the parts that you think are important and present them as your convictions/desires/needs SOP122 - FMS A goal becomes reality only when you strive for it and I feel that FMS provides me with the right impetus to accomplish this. My long-term career goal is to be an innovative leader running a big corporate house. Since my childhood the works of many great leaders like Mahatma Gandhi, Sam Pitroda and Narayanamurthy to name a few has inspired me and I have always envisioned to be one in the future. In this pursuit I feel that an excellent managerial program like the one in FMS is essential to hone my leadership and managerial abilities. I will be graduating with a Bachelor’s degree in Electronics and Communication and my astute thinking and strong analytical skills have helped me to be among the top 10 percent in my department. Over and above my academic performance I have also actively participated in many quizzes and other cultural events. Sport is another field where I have performed well and have even captained my department football and school volleyball teams. I got the opportunity to shoulder responsibilities as a leader in organizing the events in the inter college national level symposium held at my college. Also being the department’s placement coordinator provided me with ample opportunities to organize the recruitment process in the college with an achievement of 80 percent placements for my department.

In my quest to achieve my goal I am drawn towards FMS because of its unique concept of encouraging its students to take up positions of responsibility and leadership. Also with its flexible curriculum, highly acclaimed faculty and a vast alumni network it will be the most befitting business school for me to shape my future in the right way. SOP123 - FMS My ultimate career goal is to be a successful entrepreneur and business leader of tomorrow’s world. It is this dream of heading a corporate organization which made me take up commerce as my subject. Now when I have the base I need to broaden my horizon by acquiring an mba degree. FMS will be my canopy till I m growned in the latest technicalities of management skill. Under the guidance of skilled and updated experts of this field of knowledge that FMS will provide I will excel in the answering, ethics, integrity, and strength to face the competitive world. FMS one of the India’s premier b –school will help me to acquire exceptional business acumen and skills in order to gain a competitive advantage in the business arena. At FMS I will b able to equip myself with modern management theories which will enable me to know what’s, when’s, and why’s of management. FMS is no doubt one such fountain head which will help me to grow and achieve my dreams. SOP124 - FMS Edward Young once said, “Too low they build who build beneath the stars.” I have got my goals set beyond the stars. My Degree in Engineering from Netaji Subhas Institute of technology, one of the pioneer institutes in India, was the first step towards achieving my vision of becoming an entrepreneur to reckon with in the Software Development industry. While doing my Engineering, I was always fascinated by the software world. Working in Xansa (I) Ltd. has helped me in gaining an insight into the functioning of the software industry. It has also helped me to develop into a good communicator as well as a team player. I believe that my stint at FMS will help me in developing my managerial skills and hone my business acumen. Studying with a small batch and with a unique pedagogical approach of FMS of providing a right blend of fieldwork and case studies will facilitate free flow of information and ideas among some of the best minds. It will also inculcate in me the right kind of competition that will motivate me to perform to my utmost potential. I believe that in FMS, I will learn ways of managing in today’s radically unpredictable business environment and the ways to innovate, communicate and respond in real time and to move ahead with control, confidence and agility. SOP124r

Edward Young once said, “Too low they build who build beneath the stars.” “Too low they build who build beneath the stars.” - Edward Young I have got my goals set beyond the stars. Are yaar.. hawa mein baatein kyo? This is the reason you not able to reduce the SOP to appropriate lenght... and this sentence serves nothing.... My Degree in Engineering from Netaji Subhas Institute of technology, one of the pioneer institutes in India, was the first step towards achieving my vision of becoming an entrepreneur to reckon with in the Software Development industry. Wow...what a complex way of saying something very simple... I believe that my engineering degree from Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology, is the first step towards becoming an entrepreneur in the software industry. Dont make things complex...noone likes to read complex sentences/strucutre.... While doing my Engineering, I was always fascinated by the software world. useless sentence....tells me nothing... Working in Xansa (I) Ltd. has helped me in gaining an insight into the functioning of the software industry. Okay... It has also helped me to develop into a good communicator as well as a team player. How? Why? Give details...did you worked with clients...did you worked in a team of 100 ppl....how can I (FMS faculty) believe that you really have developed these skills..... I believe that my stint at FMS will help me in developing my managerial skills and hone my business acumen. Studying with a small batch and with a unique pedagogical approach of FMS of providing the right blend of fieldwork and case studies will facilitate free flow of information and ideas among some of the best minds. Sentence ko complex kar diya...make it simple...break it in two sentences... It will also inculcate in me the right kind of competition that will motivate me to perform to my utmost potential. A bland statement...but thik hai... I believe that in FMS, I will learn ways of managing in today’s radically unpredictable business environment and the ways to innovate, communicate and respond in real time and to move ahead with control, confidence and agility. An extremely bad sentence structure... reread it and you will realise .... I again say...dont try to write long sentences...its easier on eyes and brain to read small, to the point and crisp sentences....why make things complex? SOP125 - FMS

Being the one with an analytical bent of mind, I was always inclined towards the sciences for they provided the answers to almost every question that cropped in my mind. This inquisitiveness routed me towards an engineering degree from the Delhi College of Engineering, where I learnt the nuances of team work, coordination and the importance of effective communication. Evidently, being the President of the college Dramatics society, I was blessed with some of the required skills in the real-world, namely social and presentation skills. After representing India for the first time in an international car design and racing competition, Mini Baja, held in South Africa, I joined HCL Technologies for a first hand insight in the workings of an Indian MNC. There and then, working in teams, I witnessed the amalgamation of the technical know-how with the team-work and the decision-making process. I realized I wanted to be a part of the decision making, whereby, I could influence the lives of many a people and work towards the betterment of the industry, and hence, the country as a whole. As, “With great decisions, come great responsibilities”, and more importantly, come great risks, I want to be fully equipped with all the tools and resources I might require for attaining my goal. FMS, with its academic excellence, innovative pedagogy of learning and unique relationship with India’s finest university, presents the right platform for me to realize my potential and showcase my talents. I share the vision with FMS to make Indian schools world class which is possible if we provide the opportunities to the deserved. SOP126 - FMS Right from childhood, the passion to work in a team and to lead it has always been present within me. From organising fun-fairs and annual days to at school to being part of teams of various sport events at inter as well as intra college levels, the ability to get accustomed to their various demands along with different people has been easy for me. The passion to achieve individually has always been there but to guide a group of people and to succeed is something of a challenge which I would love to do. During my graduation in electrical engineering from Gujarat University, I learnt from friends and peers alike, of how things were being mismanaged at various levels of an organisation. There is a need to inculcate the qualities of a successful manager and to teach the technicalities and skills required to achieve what is being lacked today in various organisations – good managers. (Being in groups and relating to people has never been a problem for me right from childhood). FMS through its programmes being taught by very eminent faculty along with its alumni association and infrastructure will certainly help me achieve my dream of becoming a good manager and heading a very successful team. SOP126r Right from childhood, the passion to work in a team and to lead it has always been present within me. Okay...but can you be more specific...which kind of team? which industry? which domain? This becomes too generic statement....

From organising fun-fairs and annual days to at school to being part of teams of various sport events at inter as well as intra college levels, the ability to get accustomed to their various demands along with different people has been easy for me. Okay you wanted to talk about some of your qualities which you gained from particicapting in these events...right? But why you are being vague... "accustomed to their various demands"..."their" ?? whose? what kind of demands? What do you mean by "along with different people"... It is not clear as to what kind of qualities you want to talk here...be crystal clear... use short sentences....whenever a sentence spans more than three lines...cut it down....makes easy on reader.... The passion to achieve individually has always been there but to guide a group of people and to succeed is something of a challenge which I would love to do. Dont you think you are being repetative....this has been stated as your primary goal....isnt it? why you are wasting space here then? During my graduation in electrical engineering from Gujarat University, I learnt from friends and peers alike, of how things were being mismanaged at various levels of an organisation. Now this sentence has no place here.... what do you mean by "learnt from friends and peers"... what was your experience...that is more relevant...an experience is always subjective...also how can you learn about any organizational mismanagement during your gradutaion? What responsibilities you held to know about this? Were you involved in college administration? Then simply being a studnet wont give you an overall picture....also dont write something which you would regret during your PI :mg: There is a need to inculcate the qualities of a successful manager and to teach the technicalities and skills required to achieve what is being lacked today in various organisations – good managers. Wow...you talk like you have worked all your life in various organizations and realise the things which are lacking....What are the experiences which made you realise that there are very few good managers....you just putting impersonal statements.... SOP is about you...your experiences, what you learn, whats your goal, how you wnat to achive it...its all about YOU.... FMS through its programmes being taught by very eminent faculty along with its alumni association and infrastructure will certainly help me achieve my dream of becoming a good manager and heading a very successful team. Bad sentence structure...correct the grammer.... BTW where is the logic which tells why you want to do MBA? Do you think MBA is essential to become a good manager? SOP127 - FMS

I strongly believe that Education inherently implies cultivating one’s strengths, learning self-discipline, listening, and desiring to learn. At this point of time, I can confidently say that I have learnt to learn. In fact I feel that learning a Degree is more important than Earning a Degree. Apart from being a meritorious student throughout my educational career, I have also been a leader. Being School Captain for two successive years and then an active member of the Organizing Committee of a National Symposium gave me opportunity to interact with different kinds of people. These activities have helped me refine my leadership & interpersonal skills, and develop as a team player. I am driven by the need to make a mark in the corporate world and to lead an organization successfully is my dream. Studying in a premier academy like FMS will help hone my leadership skills, and my understanding of the world of business and finance. FMS provides a challenging environment, giving students freedom to display their skills and develop their innovative minds.FMS, with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, is an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream.I hope my credentials are considered worthy of admission. SOP127r I strongly believe that Education inherently implies cultivating one’s strengths, learning self-discipline, listening, and desiring to learn. At this point of time, I can confidently say that I have learnt to learn. In fact I feel that learning a Degree is more important than Earning a Degree. Not clear why you wasting so much space... what you want to tell here are purely impersonal useless sentences in an SOP....talk about YOU buddy.... Apart from being a meritorious student throughout my educational career, I have also been a leader. Being School Captain for two successive years and then an active member of the Organizing Committee of a National Symposium gave me opportunity to interact with different kinds of people. These activities have helped me refine my leadership & interpersonal skills, and develop as a team player. Okay...correct some minor setence structure errors I am driven by the need to make a mark in the corporate world and to lead an organization successfully is my dream. Studying in a premier academy like FMS will help hone my leadership skills, and my understanding of the world of business and finance. FMS provides a challenging environment, giving students freedom to display their skills and develop their innovative minds.FMS, with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, is an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream.I hope my credentials are considered worthy of admission. Remove last line....it is up to them to decide your credentials.... otherwise an okay SOP... but frankly...no punch at all...just another run-of-the-mill SOP.....

SOP128 - FMS An idea has the potential to change the life of millions. It has been an ardent desire of mine to be involved in the decision making and planning processes of an organization involved in delivering path-breaking technologies. This interest of mine led to my graduation in electrical engineering. However, during my study, I realised that many existing beneficial technologies have still not reached the masses because engineers, not managers, are managing the companies. Apart from the technical knowledge, what is required is to have a good managerial aptitude and shrewd business acumen. This is where, FMS as an institution comes in. The knowledge gained at FMS, besides helping develop my managerial skills, will help me in fostering my overall personal as well as professional growth. I wish to benefit from scholarly peers and knowledgeable teachers. The vibrant and active alumni network will provide me with deep insights on the paths they have treaded. In addition, the excellent infrastructure, vibrant student activities and the locational advantage makes me even more interested in joining FMS.After my two-year stint at FMS I shall have the right knowledge, which will help me realize my dreams. SOP128r An idea has the potential to change the life of millions. It has been my ardent desire to be involved in the decision making and planning processes of an organization delivering path-breaking technologies. This interest led me to pursue my graduation in electrical engineering. However, during my undergraduate studies, I realised that many existing beneficial technologies have still not reached the masses because engineers, not managers, are managing the companies. Apart from the technical knowledge, a good managerial aptitude and shrewd business acumen is essential to successfully implement technology. Hence an MBA from FMS comes as a natural choice to me. The knowledge gained at FMS, besides developing my managerial skills, will help me in fostering my overall personal as well as professional growth. I wish to benefit from scholarly peers and knowledgeable teachers. The vibrant and active alumni network will provide me with deep insights on the paths they have treaded. In addition, the excellent infrastructure, vibrant student activities and the locational advantage makes me even more interested in joining FMS.After my two-year stint at FMS I shall have the right knowledge, which will help me realize my dreams. Good one indeed.... Go ahead...send it....Best Luck. SOP129 - FMS "we are what we repeatedly do.Excellence,then,is not an act,but a habit." - Aristotle That is why I want to pursue an M.B.A degree from FMS.They have been at the pinnacle of business education for about half a centuary now,and given the ever changing bussiness and

management scene,it is not an easy task.I am sure that FMS will enhance my leadership,decision making and managerial skills.All of this coupled with the excellent analytical skills I cultivated during my engineering will ensure that I stay ahead of the pack in the corporate jungle. Engineering taught me the nuances of the electronic world,but management is whole new ball game,as I learnt while organising my departments national level symposium commet'04 and commet'05.The experience lit a flame in me,and thats when I decided to do an M.B.A.With an M.B.A I get the best of both the worlds and with that the power to change the entire world.This will ultimately help in fulfilling my long time dream,to start a company utilising cutting edge technology,use it to make the world a better place to live in and leave an indelible mark in the sands of time. SOP129r "we are what we repeatedly do.Excellence,then,is not an act,but a habit." - Aristotle That is why I want to pursue an M.B.A degree from FMS. No clear...what reason? They have been at the pinnacle of business education for about half a century now,and given the ever changing bussiness and management education scene,it is not an easy task. About whom you are talking? Atleast write something which makes sense.... Do you imply FMS? are baba....SOP is about YOU and not FMS....the faculty know much more about FMS than you.... talk about yourself... I am sure that FMS will enhance my leadership,decision making and managerial skills.All of this coupled with the excellent analytical skills I cultivated during my engineering will ensure that I stay ahead of the pack in the corporate jungle. What the heck "stay ahead of the pack"... you writing some novel or what? no coherence with what you wrote earlier...stay ahead in what sense? Engineering taught me the nuances of the electronic world,but management is a whole new ball game, as I learnt while organising my departments national level symposium commet'04 and commet'05. The choice of words is not very good..."whole new ball game" etc is a colloquial term... not usually used in business writing.... The experience lit a flame in me,and thats when I decided to do an M.B.A. Okay.... so you dont have any clear reason for doing MBA...what do you mean by "lit a flame"... With an M.B.A I get the best of both the worlds and with that the power to change the entire world. Doesnt make sense...disconnected...which two worlds you talking about...it seems you copied various sentences from various SOPs posted here... is that true?

This will ultimately help in fulfilling my long time dream,to start a company utilising cutting edge technology,use it to make the world a better place to live in and leave an indelible mark in the sands of time. Oh...finally something about you...your dream...phew!! .... SOP130 - FMS My experiences have taught me that life is to dwelt with at different levels at different times.To me each and every moment is worth nurturing. My graduation degree(which is literature)will help me in not losing the perspective of life.Having an ingenuous mind,a business school's rigorous handlings will provide the apt environment to broaden my vision to a more pragmatic one.Therefore,an MBA will not only help me in realizing the different sets of hurdles at an early age but also make a stronger and better person out of me.It will be a rehersal of what there is to come. FMS is the best choice to actualise my dreams because of the enriching environment provided by a helpful alumni(this doesnt sound perfect to me,all other things sounded really cliche').With FMS,it will be a healthy growing experience of my life. SOP130r My experiences have taught me that life is to dwelt with at different levels at different times.To me each and every moment is worth nurturing. Could not understand the idea of including the above sentences.... I feel these are not needed... My graduation degree(which is literature)will help me in not losing the perspective of life. How? Why? Relevance? BTW You can rather write "My gradutaion degree in literature" ... Having an ingenuous mind,a business school's rigorous handlings will provide the apt environment to broaden my vision to a more pragmatic one. What do you mean by pragmatic? In what sense pragmatic? This sentence tells me nothing about YOU ....Give examples to tell that you have ingenuous mind.... :mg: .. BTW are you sure "ingenuous" is the word you were looking for?? :mg: Therefore,an MBA will not only help me in realizing the different sets of hurdles at an early age but also make a stronger and better person out of me.It will be a rehersal of what there is to come. My god!!! Is this the reason you want to do MBA? I am truly amazed !! Dont you realise that MBA is not a panacea to all your problems... FMS is the best choice to actualise my dreams because of the enriching environment provided by a helpful alumni(this doesnt sound perfect to me,all other things sounded really cliche').With FMS,it will be a healthy growing experience of my life.

Dreams?? Which dreams? Did you talked about your dreams somewhere ?? enriching environemnet by alumni?? wow... alumni dont reside in the campus... so what kind of enriching experience....the majority of exp you can gain from your peer groups and not alumni... "Healthy growing experience of life "?? :wow: I suggest you to rewrite your entire SOP..... SOP131 - FMS In this era of rapid globalization, we can feel corporate management permeating into almost all facets of life. Any process in life must involve a certain degree of management in order to ensure a profitable success. I was and still am inspired by the lives of great entrepreneurs like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs who have shown exceptional skill in the area of management. As my undergraduate degree in engineering draws to a close, I am won over by the idea of pursuing an MBA degree to hone my managerial skills. I feel that my engineering background has helped me to develop a keenly adaptive and analytical approach to problem solving. I envision myself working in the forefront of a large corporation where my skills would be properly utilized. I am particularly interested in marketing as I feel it offers me a lot of scope to explore myself and the world on a first hand basis. FMS, with its awesome infrastructure and amazing faculty would help me realize my goals. Studying at FMS would prove really beneficial for me as it has a great history of producing path breaking managers for over 50 years which in turn has resulted in the establishment of a brand equity of its own. SOP132 - FMS “Yesterday is but a dream, and tomorrow is only a vision; But today, well lived, makes every yesterday a dream of happiness and every tomorrow a vision of hope.” The wisdom of myriad realms has been condensed in these verses by Kalidasa. The limitless potential of technology never ceases to mesmerize me. I have always cherished a dream of one day pioneering and leading a company affianced in the use of the state-of-the-art to make available products - like the ‘Windup Radio’ pioneered by Trevor Baylis in Africa to spread AIDS-Awareness – an ingenious and yet economical idea that can change the lives of the unfortunate across the world. Juggling between academics, which have always been my forte, and extra-curricular activities, I’ve strived for excellence. As General Secretary, Student Council, I’ve been leading, innovating and inspiring everybody around. Organizing and managing an array of events, I’ve nurtured my communication skills & creative faculties. To realize my dreams, I need to have sound rudiments of technology and management. An engineering background has given me a strong insight into the technical nuances of things. Only

an MBA from the most prestigious institutes can impart the vital theory and practice sought and be a springboard towards a highly didactic experience in the enigmatic corporate world. One of the oldest and sovereign business schools, FMS will be my beacon. The master craftsmen of the art of management & the dynamic & competitive milieu of FMS will mould my managerial skills & business acumen. FMS’s ‘strong’ alumni network and vibrant student activity, & small batch size will ensure a high level of camaraderie between us. Swami Vivekananda’s words echo in my being: “Awake, arise and stop not till the goal is achieved.” SOP133 - FMS My ultimate career objective is to be known as a good business leader heading an organization of international repute. I believe that working at a managerial-level position in a top company will provide me with the necessary practical experience and expertise required in order to meet my objective. Hence I would like to start off my career at such a position. I decided to pursue Engineering in the Computer Science stream primarily because of an avid interest in computers. However, an Engineering degree alone is not sufficient in order to obtain the position I yearn for. A formal education in the principles of Business Management is required to achieve the same. I am sure, therefore, that pursuing an MBA is the ideal choice as it will provide with me such an education. FMS, widely recognized in the student as well as the corporate world to be among the best business schools in India, is a dream destination for any MBA aspirant and I am no different. It’s well-qualified faculty, a smart and dynamic student community, an active and well-formed alumni network and extremely affordable cost of education are some factors that set it apart from most other institutes and make it the school of choice for me. I am confident, therefore, that completing my MBA from FMS will provide me with the right knowledge, which will help me achieve my goal. SOP133r My ultimate career objective is to be known as a good business leader heading an organization of international repute. I believe that working at a managerial-level position in a top company will provide me with the necessary practical experience and expertise required in order to meet my objective. Hence I would like to start off my career at such a position. There is a slight confusion between a beacon bearing leader (which is what you aim to be) and an operational manager. But I think this should not matter too much. You have mentioned your long term goal, your short term goal and finally how you want to get there. Why don't you say that an MBA will helpe me get there ?

I decided to pursue Engineering in the Computer Science stream primarily because of an avid interest in computers. However, an Engineering degree alone is not sufficient in order to obtain the position I yearn for. A formal education in the principles of Business Management is required to achieve the same. I am sure, therefore, that pursuing an MBA is the ideal choice as it will provide with me such an education. Hmm.....see this is like a ladder. Doing an MBA will help you jump a couple of rungs but essentially everyone has to use the same ladder. So say that it will help you reach the point X faster or something to that effect. So knock off stuff like "A formal education in .....blah blah is reqd to be a manager" crap :mg: FMS, widely recognized in the student as well as the corporate world to be among the best business schools in India, is a dream destination for any MBA aspirant and I am no different. It’s well-qualified faculty, a smart and dynamic student community, an active and well-formed alumni network and extremely affordable cost of education are some factors that set it apart from most other institutes and make it the school of choice for me. I am confident, therefore, that completing my MBA from FMS will provide me with the right knowledge, which will help me achieve my goal. ------------------------------------------------------------------------- It's is abbreviation for It is NOT the possessive Its which you mean here. Last sentence is bland. Make it more cogently appealing. SOP134 - FMS i believe technical expertise and management aptitude within an organisation go hand in hand. i belong to an academic family which taught me that determination always pays off. through my life I have been sincere and goal oriented i participated in a no. of events particularly in college, where i was team leader in model making and technical paper presentation. during this course i recognize certain skills inherent within me which led me to believe I require a broader platform to enhance the same.To work in an organisation so as to grow individually as well as to assist others in realizing their dreams. Service sector is the new age management that requires effective leadership of knowledge workers, to enhance human potential and collective growth.FMS high student faculty ratio provides me an environment of diverse interest and experiences. its faculty Which has a strong and diverse induatrial interface , as well as their involvement in research work will provide me a platform for enhancing my knowledge base and broadening my outlook. It will help me in complementing my strength and ionizing what ever weaknesses of youth and inexperience , thus enabling me to justify this natures gift called life. SOP135 - FMS

My goal is to work towards a career in the field of finance viz. corporate banking, investment banking, etc. I have done commerce in my higher secondary school and currently pursuing B.COM (Hons.), I have always been interested in dealing with numbers and money matters have been my area of interest. It has helped to develop my analytical skills. MBA degree from a top B-school will provide me two different kinds of benefits: the personal benefits (how the degree will help me grow as individual), and the intellectual benefits (what I will be able to learn). It will help me to build strong communication and interpersonal skills. MBA program will also help in developing my quantitative and management skills. During my school days and currently at my college level I have been introduced with the basic knowledge of management task and functions on one hand and fundamental exposure to the concepts, theories and practices in the field of management on the other. (MBA program will further on add to my knowledge.) I am applying to FMS because it provides a fine tuned education in an environment that encourages students to extend their leadership capabilities. It enables students to gain broad managerial skills and develop specialized expertise in the business discipline that best suits their career aspirations. FMS with its distinguished faculty and diverse real life projects will help me in entering the corporate environment with confidence. An excellent placement record will further make accomplishment of my goals more realistic. SOP135r My goal is to work towards a career in the field of finance viz. corporate banking, investment banking, etc. I have done commerce in my higher secondary school and currently pursuing B.COM (Hons.), I have always been interested in dealing with numbers and money matters have been my area of interest. It has helped to develop my analytical skills. 1. already implied in b.com reference 2. numbers and money matters arent necessarily the same, u know :) 3. how has it develpped ur analytical skill? isnt it supposed to be the other way round..good analytical skills leads to better judgement while dealing with money matters. MBA degree from a top B-school will provide me two different kinds of benefits: the personal benefits (how the degree will help me grow as individual), and the intellectual benefits (what I will be able to learn). It will help me to build strong communication and interpersonal skills. MBA program will also help in developing my quantitative and management skills. 1. good beginning..but then you fall under the twin evils of communication & interpersonal skills :mg: see here..thses things are definitely not taught anywhere..the point is that we learn this naturally rather than through a spoon-fed program of daily communication. u need a bit more of introspection on the "personal" and "intellectual" benefits of this program.

During my school days and currently at my college level I have been introduced with the basic knowledge of management task and functions on one hand and fundamental exposure to the concepts, theories and practices in the field of management on the other. (MBA program will further on add to my knowledge.) this para says nothing at all I am applying to FMS because it provides a fine tuned education in an environment that encourages students to extend their leadership capabilities. It enables students to gain broad managerial skills and develop specialized expertise in the business discipline that best suits their career aspirations. <too verbose> FMS with its distinguished faculty and diverse real life projects < do you know of any? > will help me in entering the corporate environment with confidence. An excellent placement record will further make accomplishment of my goals more realistic. 1. you've never mentioned that placement is a goal of yours anywhere else. drastic re-editing required. a step-by-step approach is ok..but then you need to give answers which are intelligible and which can be integrated together. think about that :) SOP136 - FMS I contemplated a lot over my future plans during my graduation days. Only two things kept occuring to me time & again, "hotel" and "business". I wanted to straight away go in for hotel management as suggested by many. But I realised that for establishing a business, it is essential to acquire a holistic perspective of running and managing it at various stages of development. So “business” management was my obvious choice. With the desire to get myself acquainted with corporate world I landed at a job in Satyam computers where I got a lot of opportunities to work in a team, and to hone my communication and time management skills. Frequent interactions with the client helped me in understanding their business requirments. Also, my managers’ effective and efficient handling of business and client requirements inspired me and heightened my desire to pursue management. Now, in order to achieve my goal I need to learn the nuances of managing a business effectively. FMS with its highly experienced and erudite faculty will surely provide me with the complete understanding of all the business related processes. Further through the live projects, summer internships at highly reputed firms and case studies of various business scenarios, I am sure of equipping myself with all the skill and experience required to manage and run a business successfully. SOP137 - FMS My keen interest and excellence in areas like science and mathematics made up mind to select engineering as a career option.My four years of engineering contributed for my strong foundation in technical and analytical skills and also honed up my leadership skills through the

various activities I involved. My first job was trainee engineer in Bajaj Auto Ltd where I got wide opportunities from production line to management decisions. This taught me the language of business i.e. how to handle people effectively. It also taught me how large business manages their sourcing, manufacturing and distribution functions. To move ahead in my area of interest I joined TCS a leading software firm. The various roles I performed there inspired me to become technology consultant and hence pursue a degree in management. I am confident that FMS is right fit for my ambition because of its academic excellence, international reputation and alumni network. I plan to capitalize on its strengths by taking course in system management. After this I hope to join a strategic consultation firm to gain more experience. Ultimately I will seek a leadership position in a global corporation where I can fulfill my dream of becoming a leader in technological change. SOP138 - FMS Through my experience as a software developer, I have come across numerous instances where a management consultant has made a huge impact in the client's business. A Fraud Management system for Tata Teleservices Ltd. which helped to boost the firm's revenue, a change from perpetual to subscription licence model for Synopsys which resulted in a more predictable revenue model were all masterminded by consultants. My dream is to be associated with a renowned consultancy firm. My innate strengths are to: view a problem from different perspectives, develop a pragmatic approach to the problem, have a tendency to help others and honor commitments. Additionally from my work experience, I have learnt to: work as a team towards a goal under time and resource constraints, communicate clearly and efficiently with geographically distributed teams, encourage contrarian thinking. An MBA at this stage will help me to groom my personality, hone my leadership skills in a structured way, gain knowledge about the nuances of the management, network with an eclectic peer community, thereby making a consummate consultant in me. FMS, with a good student faculty ratio, unique avenues like Consulting Club for peer-learning, electives like "Government Business Interface", "Strategic Management of Information Technology" embracing the current economic trends, excellent industry interface and an affordable fee will be the ideal launch pad to kick-off my dream career. I see the next 2 years of my life away from work as a great investment for lifetime. SOP139 - FMS William Arthur Ward has said," If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it." And I dream of being a significant player in the Indian Corporate Sector. I wish to lead a giant firm, manage individuals with high ambitions and serve the society by creating wealth of opportunities.

During my B.E. internship for construction of Road-over-bridge, I got to learn the nuances of management while leading different teams over the various assignments through the experiences which included negotiating and condescending with the workers and acting as an important link of communication between them and the ones placed high in the corporate ladder. Besides, the experience that I have gained in the highly competitive environment during my tenure at Infosys has helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented mindset towards every work that I do. The skills that I have acquired so far, coupled with a thorough understanding of the principles of management, can transform my vision into reality. FMS, with its rich history, commitment to though leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, and a strong alumni network, has been my first choice. I am sure its an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream. SOP139r During my B.E. internship for construction of Road-over-bridge, I got to learn the nuances of management while leading different teams over the various assignments through the experiences which included negotiating and condescending with the workers and acting as an important link of communication between them and the ones placed high in the corporate ladder. I am sure you dint mean what you said. Folks, these are stuff you need to take care of before posting on this thread.You would be helping Ketan/Arun/QE just as much as you would be helping you. :) Since college days I've been aspiring to be placed high up the corporate ladder where I can be part of planning and decision making processes Err....Like I had said before, me no expert, but this definitely sounds..err...patronizing....You might have to put this in a more subtle manner.... A switch to a two member project with minimal external support provided me the challenge or rather the opportunity to manage the project on my own. This includes pre- planning and spacing of smaller deadlines to achieve the final target. A challenge when overcome, becomes an opportunity for growth, else a constraint....It can't be a challenge or opportunity...I get your intent, but it somehow felt outta place :mg: And I am also not sure if throwing a question back at the adcom is a good idea (like u did at the end of the essay).. @tanmay ...Phew...That was some heavy-duty stuff ;) My dream in life is to have a business venture of my own (some day).For this reason a post graduate degree in Management is a must Why?? I think an MBA from a reputed institute as FMS would help me to develop entrepreneurial and managerial skills, which would be necessary to run a successful enterprise. An MBA degree from FMS could be the catalyst in achieving my dreams.

Two things....Entrepreneurial skills??? What are those...Don't use words for the sake of using them. And yea, If you feel the FMS MBA "could" be a catalyst, that means you yourself aren't sure...Why should the adcom be? ;) Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me and I desire to be someone who is a decision maker in critical times, one who applies all his strategic and analytical abilities to tackle issues related to the same Whoa !! Monetary, decision maker, strategy, analytical....What jargon have you spared?? ;) SOP139rr William Arthur Ward has said," If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it." And I dream of being a significant player in the Indian Corporate Sector. I wish to lead a giant firm, manage individuals with high ambitions and serve the society by creating wealth of opportunities. During my B.E. internship for construction of Road-over-bridge, I got to learn the nuances of management while leading different teams over the various assignments through the experiences which included negotiating and condescending with the workers and acting as an important link of communication between them and the ones placed high in the corporate ladder. Besides, the experience that I have gained in the highly competitive environment during my tenure at Infosys has helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented mindset towards every work that I do. The skills that I have acquired so far, coupled with a thorough understanding of the principles of management, can transform my vision into reality. FMS, with its rich history, commitment to though leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, and a strong alumni network, has been my first choice. I am sure its an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream. SOP139rrr William Arthur Ward has said," If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it." And I dream of being a significant player in the Indian Corporate Sector. I wish to lead a giant firm, manage individuals with high ambitions and serve the society by creating wealth of opportunities. Good start... And I dream of leading a giant firm, managing individuals having high ambitions and serving the society by creating wealth of opportunities. During my B.E. internship for construction of Road-over-bridge, Can you be more specific? Where? When? Project name?

I got to learn the nuances of management while leading different teams over the various assignments through the experiences which included negotiating and condescending with the workers and acting as an important link of communication between them and the ones placed high in the corporate ladder. Boy boy...you just messed up here... why you want to go for loooooooonnnnnnnng sentences... break this one in 3-4 sentences which would be easy on reader and would effectively conveys what you learned... Besides, the experience that I have gained in the highly competitive environment during my tenure at Infosys has helped me hone my time-management skills and acquire a quality-oriented mindset towards every work that I do. Good.. The skills that I have acquired so far, coupled with a thorough understanding of the principles of management, can transform my vision into reality. transform my dream into reality [you talked about your dreams right??] FMS, with its rich history, commitment to though leadership, corporate interaction through live projects, and a strong alumni network, has been my first choice. I am sure its an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream. Ok-ish.... SOP140 - FMS Since college days I've been aspiring to be placed high up the corporate ladder where I can be part of planning and decision making processes. Being part of the editorial team of the college Technical magazine, hunting for sponsors and organizing National level technical symposiums turned out to be fun yet educative. After joining WIPRO being part of a large fresher team taught me how to be a team player. A switch to a two member project with minimal external support provided me the challenge or rather the opportunity to manage the project on my own. This includes pre- planning and spacing of smaller deadlines to achieve the final target. With good reasoning skills and work experience, I believe I am now qualified to undergo a formal management training that would help me achieve great heights in professional life and help me contribute to the society. It is my belief that "The best of one's ability comes to the fore in the company of the best people". What other institute could be more suitable for this than FMS which attracts the cream de la crème across the country, provides well-qualified staff and has a vibrant Alumni Network?

SOP141 - FMS I have completed my graduation in management studies (B.M.S) from the University of Mumbai with specialization in Finance and International Finance. I plan to pursue a career in Finance and so I feel that an MBA will develop the necessary skills in me to make me a complete manager. During my undergraduate days, I was an active participant in various extra-curricular activities of the college. I have won several chess tournaments at the inter-collegiate level in 2003 and 2004. An MBA would be a logical extension to my graduation studies. An MBA, through its practical approach to learning, would polish my skills and help in my overall development as a manager. Being part of a challenging and competitive corporate environment is what i look forward to and i believer that Faculty of Management Studies (FMS) will help me gain the knowledge and instill in me the skills required to fulfill my objectives. The unique approach adopted by FMS witha strong emphasis on conceptual learning through a melange of fieldwork and case studies will help me in becoming a successful manager. SOP142 - FMS-MS ‘VASUDHEV KUTMBAKAM’ [the whole world is my family / the whole world under a single roof (umbrella governing body)] a Vedic slogan, a vision propagated by Dr. Rajendra Prasad , is my inspiration. I too believe that unison and co-operation is the solution to most of the world’s problems. And thus I intend to devote my life in the spread of this message & development of a united world. This I mean to accomplish through a public sector org., an NGO or established body like UN. What ever be the path but to accomplish the goal , the first thing I need is to learn to manage resources and market the notion efficiently . FMS with it's close interaction with various departments of DU, is bound to offer a broader perspective of management education. Moreover FMS provides a global business perspective through its emphasis on learning through live projects,collaborative and exchange programmes with international institutions etc. , which perfectly aligns with my aspirations. My goals may seem tall , but similar is the motivation and commitment . A School house Captain, co-founder of the college wall magazine which perhaps was the beginning of a creative movement in a 50 yr. old college; and presently the coordinator of the executive committee of a national level tech-cult festival to be held in our college after 10yr , I have honed my skills as a leader and an entrepreneur ; apart from being a meritorious student throughout my educational career among other things. I see life as a privilege rather than a gift . it will be an honour to have a unique course such as MBA(MS) at FMS as my beacon as I embark upon my path in public service sector

SOP143 - FMS I have completed my Bachelor’s degree in Aeronautical Engineering from Punjab Engineering College, Chandigarh. Where I have been able to develop as well as hone my analytical and logical skills. I have good academics coupled with excellent extra curricular activities. My leadership qualities came to forefront when I helped setup India’s first collegiate chapter of Aeronautical Society of India (AeSI) in our college. Also I was chosen Student’s Secretary for the same. I have also received the College Appreciation Award for my work done as the founding member of the society. I have also been an active member in organizing intra and inter college festivals for our college. My dream in life is to have a business venture of my own (some day).For this reason a post graduate degree in Management is a must. FMS is one of the oldest and finest institutes in the country withan amazing student-faculty ratio and an excellent curriculum. I think an MBA from a reputed institute as FMS would help me to develop entrepreneurial and managerial skills, which would be necessary to run a successful enterprise. An MBA degree from FMS could be the catalyst in achieving my dreams. SOP144 - FMS Play to win". Something that has been imprinted on my mind always. That combined with my passion and tendency to be a perfectionist has always driven me to be one of the best, whether it has been a football field or a classroom, and I have achieved that.. Always encouraged by my parents, ofcourse for morally correct and legal aims, my interests have been diverse giving me an oppurtunity to experience and handle pressure in numerous aspects of life. A B.E from Mumbai University, advanced my technical know-how. It also honed my time management and analytical skills and, though it seemed impossible, taught me to work harder. Following my graduation, I was placed with Patni Computer Systems. Seventeen months with Patni made me face up to daunting challenges, and tested me greatly, be it my adaptability, my knowledge, my decision making or my inter-personal skills. It also exposed me to the ERP package, and gave me insights to the workings of a business. Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me and I desire to be someone who is a decision maker in critical times, one who applies all his strategic and analytical abilities to tackle issues related to the same. I believe that FMS with its emphasis on concepts, stimulating teaching techniques, excellent summer placements and efficient feedback mechanism is an ideal institution to teach me the necessary skills to become an indispensable component of an organisation's machinery. SOP145 - FMS

“No matter how good you get you can always get better and that's the exciting part. “ Tiger Woods. This quote, coming from one of the most inspiring men of our times, has been a spurring motivation that I live by. For me, life has always been a struggle, to get the best out of me. And that is precisely what has driven me towards seeking a MBA at the prestigious FMS, with its high quality teaching and unique pedagogy. The stress on learning, the excellent opportunities for students and the flexibility offered by FMS are truly unparalleled and offer the maximum leverage in making a winner out of each and every student. I intend to become an entrepreneur, an effective leader; who takes his organization to global levels of excellence. Excellence, foremost, in terms of character. My inherent strength has been my integrity and character and I believe that FMS, with its focus on a sustained overall development of a manager, will provide me with the power to succeed as a manager par excellence. SOP145r Seems to me as good and neat.... send it :gm: Just replace "manager" in last line with "leader" SOP146 - FMS The Olympic motto goes: “Litius, Altius, Fortius” (Faster, Higher, and Stronger). True to this world of constant transition where in the one who is Faster, aims Higher, and emerges Stronger in the face of tough competition is the one who wins. The desire to motivate people and drive them towards achieving excellence, to turn every experience into a lesson learned, to adventure into new ideas and to lead a organization towards newer heights is a my constant aspiration. Juggling academics and extra curriculars, during school and college, has helped me hone my skills of time-management and prioritizing. My experiences in participating in various team events such as Science Projects, Robotics competition, Basketball Tournaments, Group Songs and Dance etc. have given me a useful insight into team spirit, group functioning and cross-functional exposure. My technical background has provided me with a strong analytical foundation and reasoning skills along with instilling the importance of hardwork and self-discipline. My current training at L&T (Sargent-Lundy) has proved to be an immense learning experience. A highly competitive and dynamic work atmosphere and a diverse and extremely talented peer group has incorporated in me the urge for perfection and delivering my best. Working as a project team has taught me the basic rules of efficient group functioning. I believe a well-structured MBA course will go a long way in further enhancing my soft skills. And FMS, with its history of producing world class managers, for half a century, offers the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its strong alumni base, along with a

highly effective and flexible curriculum and a diverse, multi-cultured student community and erudite faculty and hence is is an ideal institution for pursuing my MBA. SOP146r The Olympic motto goes: “Litius, Altius, Fortius” (Faster, Higher, and Stronger). True to this world of constant transition where in the one who is Faster, aims Higher, and emerges Stronger in the face of tough competition is the one who wins. How about "changes to situations/circumstances faster"/ "aims for blah blah higher and emerges, in the face of tough competition, stronger." This kinda looks nicer. The desire to motivate people and drive them towards achieving excellence, to turn every experience into a lesson learned, to adventure into new ideas and to lead a organization towards newer heights is a my constant aspiration. As Ketan mentions in almost every other post. Hava mein baatein. Tell something concrete and back it up with some example of what you have done. Juggling academics and extra curriculars, during school and college, has helped me hone my skills of time-management and prioritizing. My experiences in participating in various team events such as Science Projects, Robotics competition, Basketball Tournaments, Group Songs and Dance etc. have given me a useful insight into team spirit, group functioning and cross-functional exposure. Exactly what the doctor ordered :mg: My technical background has provided me with a strong analytical foundation and reasoning skills along with instilling the importance of hardwork and self-discipline. My current training at L&T (Sargent-Lundy) has proved to be an immense learning experience. A highly competitive and dynamic work atmosphere and a diverse and extremely talented peer group has incorporated in me the urge for perfection and delivering my best. Working as a project team has taught me the basic rules of efficient group functioning. I would say the rest sounds good but knock off the "My technical background has provided me with a strong analytical foundation and reasoning skills " though it might be true we have seen it a billion times in this thread already. The FMS SOP readers will faint :mg: I believe a well-structured MBA course will go a long way in further enhancing my soft skills. And FMS, with its history of producing world class managers, for half a century, offers the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its strong alumni base, along with a highly effective and flexible curriculum and a diverse, multi-cultured student community and erudite faculty and hence is is an ideal institution for pursuing my MBA.

Just enhance your softskills ? Im sure you might want to add a couple of more adjectives there. Doesn't it give you the tools to realize your dream ? BTW that reminds me you have not mentioned your goals/dreams/aspirations so far. Maybe it can go into the first para (hawa mein baaton waala :mg:) Also, GMS mein erudite faculty sounds creepy. Try replaceing it or knock it off completely. SOP147 - FMS Having done my graduation in Mass Media specializing in Advertising, I wish to pursue a career related to Marketing. In the marketing domain, I would like to function as a Brand Manager as I am enamored by the concept of branding. A structured and focused learning about the marketing domain will further strengthen my knowledge base and provide me with the necessary tools to excel in this stream. FMS has a long tradition of imparting relevant education and equipping its students with a sense of confidence and belief that puts them on the threshold of a successful career. Also I shall have the opportunity to network with the best brains amongst my peer group and also develop under the guidance of the professors. SOP148 - FMS Harold Taylor has said "The roots of true achievement lie in the will to become the best that you can become." During my college days working in marketing division for SPIC-MACAY IT-BHU Chapter I realized my way for life and since then marketing has been close to my heart. I wish to embark upon a fulfilling career in this field. After completing my B.Tech from IT-BHU, one of the most revered institutions in India and the experience that I have gained during my tenure at Infosys has given me a good foundation in technical and analytical skills. Achievement of Infosys Quarterly Award in the very first year of joining the company is a testimony to that. Apart from robust technical and analytical skills I need a thorough knowledge of business aspects. FMS with its rich history, commitment to thought leadership, corporate interaction through live projects and a strong alumni network, in addition to an excellent faculty, is an ideal place to take the first step towards realizing my dream SOP149 - FMS "If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it." -William Arthur Ward

I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an important role in such an organization. My graduation at IIT- Bombay has not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement An internship at IIM-Bangalore gave me an exposure to the field of Management. The International exposure by working at Czech Technical University, Prague has given me experience in implementation and management of a technical project and also an opportunity to work in a global cross cultural environment. I believe that a thorough understanding of the principles of management is essential in the development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the business of transforming ideas into reality. FMS, with its history of producing world class managers for half a century and the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its alumni network as well as cross disciplinary expertise from the DelhiUniversity in addition to the excellent faculty, is an ideal institute for the education I seek. SOP149r "If you can imagine it, you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it." -William Arthur Ward I believe business organizations lead the way in pioneering new ideas and I envision playing an important role in such an organization. My graduation at IIT- Bombay has not only provided me a strong technological focus, but also helped me in developing an analytic bent of mind and a desire for achievement. Boy ! IIT-Bombay haina ? So write strong stuff like - drive/verve/passion for technology, an environment that was a teeming with activity apart from just studies, competition stiffer than getting a place to sit in the 7am Virar fast.......:mg: An internship at IIM-Bangalore gave me an exposure to the field of Management. The International exposure by working at Czech Technical University, Prague has given me experience in implementation and management of a technical project and also an opportunity to work in a global cross cultural environment. "field of management" bahut bada hai bhai. Be specific what exactly did you do in management. How did it help. I believe that a thorough understanding of the principles of management is essential in the development of core competencies needed to pursue my dream of getting into the business of transforming ideas into reality.

Okay. FMS, with its history of producing world class managers for half a century and the unique advantage of drawing industrial expertise through its alumni network as well as cross disciplinary expertise from the DelhiUniversity in addition to the excellent faculty, is an ideal institute for the education I seek. I would say, and I could be terribly wrong. You have a very strong focus with the IIT-B tag and international exposure and IIM-B internship. So keep the Why FMS story to just a 1-line. Say that its one of the oldest and hence strong alum network which will help you in building your business. Apart from say great faculties who will equip you with the necessary tools (you know tech now you need to know the language of business - eco/finance/acc etc.). Get the gist ? SOP150 - FMS The importance of good decision-making,problem solving and interpersonal skills were revealed to me as early as my school days when I was the captain of the cricket team. Imbibing such values are of paramount importance not just on a cricket pitch or a corporate office but for every other aspect of day to day life. The concept of managementdegree is something that is in demand not just for the perks that it offers but for the sheer completeness it offers to an individual. Management is important not just at the highest level of a corporate office but at every single stage of an institution. In the present day scenario, no single individual is a complete professional without good managerial ability.It is for this very reason that I have chosen to pursue an M.B.A. from F.M.S.I believe that apart from the quality of education that FMS imparts and the values that it inculcates into students(such as importance of team work,dynamicism and responsibility),a degree from one of India's oldest and most prestigious institutions will also add to my brand value.An Engineering degree has honed my analytical and technical skills and I believe that an MBA degree will give me the edge of being a complete professional. SOP150r The importance of decision-making,problem solving and good interpersonal skills were revealed to me as early as my school days when I was the captain of the cricket team. "The importance of making right decisions, thinking on ones' feet and strong interpersonal skills were revealed to me early as the captain of my school cricket team." Imbibing such values are of paramount importance not just on a cricket pitch or a corporate office but for every other aspect of day to day life. The concept of management is something that has been growing in demand not just for the perks that it offers but for the sheer completeness it offers to an individual. Management is something that is of prime importance not just at the

highest level of a corporate office but at every single stage of an institution. In the present day scenario, no single individual is a complete professional without good managerial ability. Quitting talking in the air (hawa mein baatein karna literally translated :mg:). What is it about the previous 3 sentences that talk about you. Even I could have written it and it would have been correct. So just say that these are important qualities that are required to succeed in the corporate world - though I have imbibed this I think I need to equip myself with the right tools to use them in a managerial capacity - something to this effect. It is for this very reason that I have chosen to pursue an MBA from FMS. I believe that apart from the quality of education that FMS imparts and the values that it inculcates into students(such as importance of team work,dynamicism and responsibility),a degree from one of India's oldest and most prestigious Management school will also add to my brand value. Sentence is too long and convoluted. Also since when have *you* started having a brand value, one which you hope to increase after your MBA ? :mg: Keep it as either couple of shorter ones or take out a point or two. FMS chaps won't be unduely worried if you praise them less :mg: Having been through the rigours of an Engineering degree which has honed my analytical and technical skills, I believe that an MBA degree will allow me to broaden my horizon and give me the edge of being a complete professional. As mentioned elsewhere this is extremely cliched: analytical and technical skills part. But then what the heck ? Its okay. SOP151 - FMS It’s a difficult task, trying to sum up the purpose of my education and the direction of my life in such few words. At first glance it seems to belittle my goals and aspirations, to subject them to such brevity. But in reality it is even more arduous a task, elaborating my skills and my personality into a few hundred words. These are things ingrained within my life and my persona and I’ve never believed in expressing them in any other way except through my actions. A certain line by Ayn Rand sums up the purpose of my life. This unique philosopher of objectivism states that, “A creative person is motivated by the desire to achieve, not by the desire to beat others.” Although quite contrary to the education system and academic lives we have all led as children and adults, it is, however, something I want to keep striving to accomplish. Before retiring, my father was a senior manager at a nationalized bank, transfers were therefore a regular feature in my life. While annoying as a child to move around making new friends every few years, it is this exposure that gave me such a diverse and broad perspective in life. It’s no mean feat either, adjusting into a new school, a new circle of friends every few years and yet continue to achieve a certain level of success.

I excelled as a student in all my schools and achieved several commendations in academic and extra-curricular activities. I took part in a variety of events like public speaking, quiz, essay writing, dramatics, sport events and achieved success in all of them, having several certificates and awards to show for it. I gave my major school examinations in Ahmedabad, Gujarat and I am pursuing my bachelor’s education in the field of Information Technology from Government Engineering College in Gandhinagar. The engineering education has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills. It’s given me the ability to think about any problem and tackle it in the best way, to get to a resolution in the most efficient way. During my college years I again participated in several extra-curricular events. Apart from this, I also successfully organized and hosted several school and college events. My major accomplishment in the past year was succeeding in the Gujarat state Times of India Public speaking contest. Being recognized as the best among several hundred participants was flattering. But what was even more satisfying was that feeling of expressing my beliefs and convictions in front of several thousand people. Always being in the thick of action made me realize how much I enjoy communicating and interacting with people. Combined with a burning desire to succeed, MBA thus seemed inevitable after a point. I apply today to your esteemed institute to further this cause. I believe there are few institutes today that mould better managers and individuals than FMS does. I look forward to a lasting relationship with an eminent and experienced faculty and students from varied backgrounds. A management degree from an institute like FMS would ensure that success continues to be a friend of mine all my life. More significantly, I’m positive that an academic experience from your institute would help me stand by my convictions and principles and inculcate them eventually into my professional life. SOP151r It’s a difficult task, trying to sum up the purpose of my education and the direction of my life in such few words. At first glance it seems to belittle my goals and aspirations, to subject them to such brevity. But in reality it is even more arduous a task, elaborating my skills and my personality into a few hundred words. These are things ingrained within my life and my persona and I’ve never believed in expressing them in any other way except through my actions. Okay I guess the reason you are not able to squeez this huge SOP into the stipulated 200 words is because you are assuming your SOP to be "You talking in front of FMS faculty".... which is not the case....you are not supposed to write in a fashion you would go on describing during a tete-a-tete. Keep that for PI...saying something like "Oh.. Its difficult for me to squeze my skills/achivements in just few words is impossible and blah blah blah...." This entire paragraph doesnt give me an iota of hint as to why your applied to FMS, what you are seeking for in an MBA degree, What skills you possesss.... Nothing at all....

A certain line by Ayn Rand sums up the purpose of my life. This unique philosopher of objectivism states that, “A creative person is motivated by the desire to achieve, not by the desire to beat others.” Although quite contrary to the education system and academic lives we have all led as children and adults, it is, however, something I want to keep striving to accomplish. Again the same thing... you are not having a conversation with them... come straight to the point... again nothing in this para which I might call useful or to the point.... Before retiring, my father was a senior manager at a nationalized bank, transfers were therefore a regular feature in my life. SOP is about you.....no point in writing a statement like this...keep your focus on you.. While annoying as a child to move around making new friends every few years, it is this exposure that gave me such a diverse and broad perspective in life. It’s no mean feat either, adjusting into a new school, a new circle of friends every few years and yet continue to achieve a certain level of success. A single statement could have said the same thing.... With my father having a transferrable job, I had to acquire early on the skills of adaptability and flexibility to adjust to newer and newer environments year after year. I am NOT saying that this is the sentence you should add...I am just trying to give you a flavour of the precise and to the point sentences you need to frame...it is about you and your skills.....read it and compare... you will realise the difference.. I excelled as a student in all my schools and achieved several commendations in academic and extra-curricular activities. I took part in a variety of events like public speaking, quiz, essay writing, dramatics, sport events and achieved success in all of them, having several certificates and awards to show for it. Again a looooooooonnnnnnnnng sentence for something you could have written in few words... the essence is not to "show off" ... but to talk about your learnings... there are people who have been national players/champions applying to FMS...so college level certificates/awards would not be something which would impress the faculty... so just talk about what you learned from all these extra-curricular activities.... I gave my major school examinations in Ahmedabad, Gujarat and I am pursuing my bachelor’s education in the field of Information Technology from Government Engineering College in Gandhinagar. This has already been talked in your application form..why repeat it...wastage of space... The engineering education has given a strong foundation to my analytical skills. It’s given me the ability to think about any problem and tackle it in the best way, to get to a resolution in the most efficient way. Now you are on track...this tells me something about you.... good During my college years I again participated in several extra-curricular events. Apart from this, I also successfully organized and hosted several school and college events. My major accomplishment in the past year was succeeding in the Gujarat state Times of India Public

speaking contest. Being recognized as the best among several hundred participants was flattering. But what was even more satisfying was that feeling of expressing my beliefs and convictions in front of several thousand people. Didnt you wrote similar things in your FMS form... dont waste SOP space for it....write it in the form.... Always being in the thick of action made me realize how much I enjoy communicating and interacting with people. Combined with a burning desire to succeed, MBA thus seemed inevitable after a point. Why? How? Not clear why MBA is inevitable?? What are your goals...how does MBA fits into the scheme?? I apply today to your esteemed institute<replace by FMS> to further this cause. I believe there are few institutes today that mould better managers and individuals than FMS does. No conversation please... talk to the point... why FMS? Dont compare it with other institutes... I look forward to a lasting relationship with an eminent and experienced faculty and students from varied backgrounds. A management degree from an institute like FMS would ensure that success continues to be a friend of mine all my life. Cmmon buddy...no poetic statements like this....you need to write razor-sharp and crisp statments which shoots the target....directly... More significantly, I’m positive that an academic experience from your institute <FMS> would help me stand by my convictions and principles and inculcate them eventually into my professional life. SOP152 - FMS Learning is an ongoing process and must never stop. I have always been fascinated by knowledge and this zeal has prompted me to go for higher studies. I have always wanted to be in a good and respectable position in industry where, people recognize me by my name for the quality of work I do, and this is possible only if I study and learn more and gain enough knowledge to fulfill my dreams. My failure to gain a promotion in my last job on basis of lack of a good qualification to back my hard work also has inspired me to go for higher studies. FMS, being one of the best and premier institutions in business teaching in India, can provide me with this opportunity to fulfill my dreams. Its reputation in Indian industry has always been a stepping stone to success of its students and this platform will surely provide me with an opportunity to prove my ability and enhance my performance. Moreover it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice. SOP152r

Learning is an ongoing process and must never stop. I have always been fascinated by knowledge and this zeal has prompted me to go for higher studies. I have always wanted to be in a good and respectable position in industry where, people recognize me by my name for the quality of work I do, and this is possible only if I study and learn more and gain enough knowledge to fulfill my dreams. My failure to gain a promotion in my last job on basis of lack of a good qualification to back my hard work also has inspired me to go for higher studies. Fascinated ranks among the top 10 all-time fav words of FMS SOP writers. I can see a story here but am not sure that you can build on it inside 200 words. I really am not able to figure out how you can best utilize it to your advantage. FMS, being one of the best and premier institutions in business teaching in India, can provide me with this opportunity to fulfill my dreams. Its reputation in Indian industry has always been a stepping stone to success of its students and this platform will surely provide me with an opportunity to prove my ability and enhance my performance. Moreover it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice. "reputation in Indian industry has always been a stepping.........its students" is crappy. Coming back to the earlier point. You have solid reason - was looked over for promotion because you did not have an MBA. Believe it or not, I can relate to this as I have faced something similar which motivated me to think of an MBA myself. But you need to write more than what you have written. But sorry I am not able to think beyond this. Shall edit my post if I am able to think of a better way to put it (in the given constraints of words and time). SOP153 - FMS-MS I have always been fascinated by knowledge and this zeal has prompted me to go for higher studies. I have always wanted to be in a good and respectable position in industry where, people recognize me by my name for the quality of work I do, and this is possible only if I study and learn more and gain enough knowledge to fulfill my dreams. Being from the hospitality background with bachelor’s degree in hotel management, FMS MS should prove helpful for me to gain a reputed place in service industry. It’s a unique program of its own kind and hence should be very handy for candidates of service industry. And FMS being the pioneer institution to start this course along with business teaching can provide me with this opportunity to fulfill my dreams. Its reputation in Indian industry has always been a stepping stone to success of its students and this platform will surely provide me with an opportunity to prove my ability and enhance my performance. Moreover it’s renowned faculty, strong alumni network and vibrant student activity makes it my business school of choice. SOP154 - FMS It has always been my dream to start a company which is at the cutting edge of technology that makes a difference to lives of people around me. As computers fascinate me the most I chose to

pursue computer engineering at my UG level. This has given me a strong grounding in the technical nuances of the rapidly growing software industry. But during my time in the engineering college and also during my summer internships, I realized that just being at the forefront of technology does not guarantee success in today’s world. It is because success is guaranteed only when we sell what we create. Since then I have been trying to inculcate in myself the various qualities needed to be a successful leader. My experiences in organizing and conducting various competitions from software programming to trivia quizzing, have given me very useful insights into managing a diverse team, tackle pressure, sell idea and manage time. This was even recognized when I was elected the President of the Association Of computer engineers (ACE) which further strengthen my leadership skills. I believe FMS with its world class faculty, infrastructure, competitive environment and flexible curriculum is the place for me and doing an MBA at FMS will be my first step towards realizing my dream. SOP155 - FMS I am currently pursuing my Bachelor of Management studies degree, which has provided me a strong foundation in the field of Business Management. It has also helped me build my analytical and soft skills through various case-presentations, and strategy competitions that I have participated in. I aspire to reach the top echelon of the corporate organization where I would be able to make strategic decisions and contribute towards the success of my organization. I love challenges and managing a company is one big challenge that excites me. MBA is not only a logical extension to the skills and the knowledge that I have acquired, but also a medium to enter the dynamic corporate world and fulfill my aspiration of reaching the top management . In today’s world, the importance of flexibility and adaptability cannot be overemphasized. MBA course enables one to assimilate, practice and enhance those skills. This is what makes MBA a must-do for me. FMS, which is one of the best known MBA colleges, with its brand name , infrastrucure, learned faculty and a strong alumni network , will provide me the right environment to broaden and consolidate my learning through a combination of classroom and on-field activities. I look forward to be a part of FMS MBA student community. SOP156 - FMS I have always gravitated towards roles of high accountability that require strong communication and interpersonal skills. Moving forward, I want a career as a multi-faceted management professional, with a wide range of skill sets that can be applied across domains.

In my alma mater, I successfully balanced academics with a keen involvement in extra curricula activites ranging from: being the secretary of the IEEE chapter of our college to co-ordinating Finance and sponsorship activites for our Inter and Intra collegiate festivals. These among other experiences brought to the fore my love for inititiating, organizing and executing activites and being at the heart of the action. My current role as a Software Testing Engineer enables me to study concepts and impementations of Quality control. I would like to continue this journey of learning at FMS as well. With a strong alumni network, encouragement of industry interaction and a pro active student body will not only widen my horizons, but also help me embark on my goals. SOP157 - FMS If you can imagine it you can achieve it. If you can dream it, you can become it…." I dream of starting and leading an institution which provides knowledge and training using scientific techniques/methods, promoting creative thinking and spreading education in rural areas where the need and scope for improvement is tremendous. Having an analytical and creative bent of mind, I was always fascinated by the sciences as it answered most of my questions and this inquisitiveness lead me to engineering. There I learned about formulating an idea, teamwork and coordination. As a result of this exposure I realized that though technology is important for change, also imparting these skills and imbibing the skill sets through a sound education is almost pivotal. I joined the knowledge industry, got hands on experience in teaching, content development and planning. I was touched by the love and respect I got from the students and a deep sense of satisfaction on their success. In order to understand the nuances of the various business processes involved and their real time implications, MBA is the logical next step towards my goal. With emphasis on learning through live-projects, flexible curriculum, and impetus towards ' self- discovery' and experimentation, combined with eminent faculty, highly driven students and strong alumni, FMS will provide me the requisite knowledge and training essentials for the realization of my dreams. SOP158 - FMS-MS My career goal is to gain enough experience to start my own enterprise preferably in the service sector. I believe that India needs more of job creators than job seekers. Doing my four year B.Tech in Electronics and Communications has honed my analytical skills and developed my ability to visualize situations and arrive at a practical solution. Having studied

at a self financing engineering college in Kerala has taught me to make the most of frugal resources. In an MBA (MS) from FMS (South Campus) I look for theoretical and practical knowledge in areas like finance, economics, marketing, operations and everything else to help me in my future endeavors. I believe having a globally recognized brand like FMS associated with me can open a lot of closed doors. I also look forward to the quality exposure to the industry which FMS is famous for. Moreover being located at Delhi, the capital city with a bustling economy, will give me ample opportunity to observe and learn from, the economic, political and corporate faces of India. SOP159 - FMS “A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step”- a step I took right after my matriculation by taking up summer projects in sales and marketing divisions of ‘Chetna Arts’ and ‘Dukens Coffee Mfg. Co.’ for 6 months each. This was the beginning towards realizing my long term goal of establishing a diversified consultancy firm. My keen technical and financial interests coupled with leadership and time management workshops helped me hone my skills in event and stocks / portfolio management and be chosen as Class Representative for 4 semesters. This was additional to excelling in my engineering exams, emerging as the ‘University Topper’. Even after college my zest was not dampened. My work experience not only includes 16 months of work in embedded systems for Wipro Technologies, but also in tasting the bitter-sweet teething phase of establishing my own firm ‘Akshaya Consultancy Services’. An MBA at FMS, a revered institute having 5 decades of academic excellence, vibrant alumni network, live industrial projects, multicultural environment and brand equity as its USP, will complement my current skills with solid fundamentals .Using them I will lay my career layer by layer, proving to be an instrumental manager in an MNC in the short-term and then eventually accomplish my long term goals. SOP160 - General Ques: How a management degree fits into your personal goals for future? ( 400 words) ANS: Most of the engineers are created in their early teens.It becomes a natural destination for the ones who awe about the way scientific principles are implemented.I was no exception.Keen interest in natural sciences and a fliar for mathematics led me to the career of mechanical engineering. In my academics I was always above average, that helped me in getting an off campus placement as a trainee piping engineer with a reputed consultancy in chennai.During my stint as a piping

engineer for 3 years,not only I came across the technical nuances of piping but also about how a project is being executed. My grooming as a piping engineer included Meeting deadlines, Technical negotiation with clients, Making Presentations and motivating my subordinates. I started as a team member just contributing the work assingned to me but in course of time I graduated to more responsibilites and at the time of resignation I was the right hand of my project lead. Though I relish the challenge of being a piping engineer,may be before an year or so I started thinking about having an MBA.I would like to visaualise myself as a master motivator,trainer and thinker. Down the line I want to pursue a career in consulting, research, teaching and perhaps even writing.For opening doors to all my dreams I find a postgraduation in management an obvious step.Before venturing into my longterm goals I need to understand the way an organisation works,economic implications of a decision,budjeting,strategy management,HR practices etc in a formal atmosphere. From an MBA like this which is targeted to experienced people I definitely expect a great amount of peer to peer learning.When you interact with persons from diverse backgrounds your vision and outlook about life as a whole broadens. My shortterm goal after this MBA is to work with a organisation for a span of 7-8 years.I want to apply the knowledge and skills I earned through the course and my past experience fruitfully in my next move.Also I would like to be a parttime faculty in some of the good Bschools.Then I would like to do my doctorate in management when I am able to meet both the family and financial commitments.After that I would like to move to a full fledged career in academics and consultancy. In a nutshell My short term goal-A job with more responsibility and financial security My long term goal-A Challenging rewarding career as an academic with industry experience An MBA I feel is a stepping stone for both of these goals. SOP161 - IIFT Limit = 100words "If you can imagine it,you can achieve it,If you can dream it,you can become it" I dream of expanding my family business beyond the realms of local comptetion to competing at national and international level. In this era of globalization where the difference between domestic and international markets is fast disappearing, skills and knowledge realting to International Business become extremely important. IIFT with its focus on International Business will help me in undestanding global business trends and markets and help me in acquiring the skill set which will take me towards my dream of taking a domestic company beyond national boundaries. SOP162 - IITKgp

"The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer. He can visualize something, and when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen." - Robert L. Schwartz I have a vision – a vision to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in an organization which is at the cutting edge of technology and makes a difference to the lives of people around me. My quest for technology made me pursue electronics and communication engineering. But during my learning period, I realized that just being at the forefront of technology does not guarantee success in today’s world. Shaping a great idea into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills, a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and a comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. I believe I possess some of the diverse range of skills required for being an entrepreneur. By being the school captain at school level and by being the class representative at college, I acquired the skills of leadership. By organizing an industrial tour for my batch mates, I realized the importance of coordination, management and control. By developing a library management system for a private engineering college, I realized the importance of teamwork and acquired the necessary team skills. But, I feel that only a thorough understanding of the principles of management will help me develop the core competencies needed to realize my dream and at the same time, enhance my innate qualities. In order to understand the nuances of the various management principles involved and their real time implications, MBA is the next logical step towards my goal. Professionally, an MBA degree will begin my journey towards my goal. My short term goal after an MBA would be to work with an organization for a span of 6 to 7 years. This would give me the opportunity to apply the knowledge and skills I would have learnt through the course. The experience thus gained would help me in realizing my long term goal – my vision to be an entrepreneur. Thus an MBA from VGSOM, IIT Kharagpur will equip me with sound management practices would be the first step in achieving my goals. I believe that VGSOM, with its world class infrastructure, richly experienced faculty, excellent career development facilities and its stress on industry-specific knowledge and a thorough process-level understanding can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence. In VGSOM, I find an avenue which can unleash my leadership qualities and hone them to help me in managing business with a positive attitude and confidence and ultimately help me in making my vision come true. SOP162r "The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer. He can visualize something, and when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen." - Robert L. Schwartz

Okay... I have a vision – a vision to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in an organization which is at the cutting edge of technology and makes a difference to the lives of people around me. My quest for technology made me pursue electronics and communication engineering. But during my learning period, I realized that just being at the forefront of technology does not guarantee success in today’s world. The sentence structure does not fit properly... few pointers a) vision is something on a much higher platform... the correct word here would be aspiration..... b) organization "which is at the" cutting edge.. nope.. doesnt sound appropriate...may be you wanted to say "organization working on the cutting edge technology" c) Why lives of people "only" around you.. d) This is a vague statement.. "success" is really a subjective thing... and it is not clear what kind of thing defines "success" for you... You can probably club this sentence with the first line of next para below... But during my learning period, I realized that Shaping a great idea into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills, a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and a comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. Just added from above... I believe I possess some of the diverse range of skills required for being an entrepreneur. By being the school captain at school level and by being the class representative at college, I acquired the skills of leadership. By organizing an industrial tour for my batch mates, I realized the importance of coordination, management and control. By developing a library management system for a private engineering college, I realized the importance of teamwork and acquired the necessary team skills. Okay... It seems childish that by being "school captain" or "college respresentative" you learned all the "leadership skills/team skills" etc etc... make it sound like that you understood the importance.. rather than projecting yourself as expert in all these skills...... But, I feel that only a thorough understanding of the principles of management will help me develop the core competencies needed to realize my dream and at the same time, enhance my innate qualities. Oh.. how everyone hates "MBA jargons" ... why cannt people use simpler language... what do you mean by "develop the core competencies" ... make it simple buddy... In order to understand the nuances of the various management principles involved and their real time implications, MBA is the next logical step towards my goal. Okaish... BTW everything said above seems to answer "Why MBA?" and NOT "personal / career goals"... so just give a thought wehter you are going on right track or not....[assuming career golas post MBA] Professionally, an MBA degree will begin my journey towards my goal. My short term goal after an MBA would be to work with an organization for a span of 6 to 7 years.

The first line is just seems to be filler line.. what is the essence of that line... BTW what is the idea of writing 6-7 years.. they didnt ask how much you will work in your first company? :mg: This would give me the opportunity to apply the knowledge and skills I would have learnt through the course. The experience thus gained would help me in realizing my long term goal – my vision to be an entrepreneur. okay.. Thus an MBA from VGSOM, IIT Kharagpur will equip me with sound management practices would be the first step in achieving my goals. Re-read and correct the structure... I believe that VGSOM, with its world class infrastructure, richly experienced faculty, excellent career development facilities and its stress on industry-specific knowledge and a thorough process-level understanding can help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence. In VGSOM, I find an avenue which can unleash my leadership qualities and hone them to help me in managing business with a positive attitude and confidence and ultimately help me in making my vision come true. Why you want to burden your reader.. why not write simple and neat sentences... what is the need of wriitng "lenghty" senteces.. this essay is NOT TO show off your literary skills.. but rather to get the reader interested in you...... common sense tells us that small but catchy lines gets stuck in readers mind... [An example "Just do it" ... you already know which brand we are talking about]... thats the funda applied here too... write small simple sentences which proivde the essence... SOP162rr "The entrepreneur is essentially a visualizer and an actualizer. He can visualize something, and when he visualizes it he sees exactly how to make it happen." - Robert L. Schwartz I aspire to become an entrepreneur and my aim is to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in an organization which is working on the cutting edge of technology and makes a difference to the lives of people. My quest for technology made me pursue electronics and communication engineering. But during my learning period, I realized that shaping a great idea into a reality and making it successful requires a diverse range of skills, a sound knowledge of business fundamentals and a comprehensive understanding of the functioning of an organization. I believe I possess some of the diverse range of skills required for being an entrepreneur. I understood the importance of being a good leader by being the school captain at school level and by being the class representative for three consecutive years at college. By simultaneously pursuing a diploma in Information Technology alongside my engineering course, I learnt the importance of time management and I realized the importance of planning, coordination and control by planning and organizing an industrial tour for my batch mates. But, I feel that only a

thorough understanding of the principles of management will help me realize my goal and at the same time, enhance my innate qualities. In order to understand the nuances of the various management principles involved and their real time implications, I believe that an MBA would begin my journey towards my goal. My short term goal after an MBA would be to work with a reputed organization which would give me the opportunity to apply the knowledge and skills I would have learnt through the course. The experience thus gained would help me in realizing my long term goal – my aspiration to become an entrepreneur. Personally, I wish to mingle with different people and get accustomed to new cultures. I have had many unanswered questions about the quality of education in our country right from my childhood and I hope to do my part in developing the education field by ensuring a policy of each employee teaching an illiterate child, in my future organization. The main and only reason why I want to be an entrepreneur is to make a difference to the lives of people, to create more and better employment opportunities, to use technology for rural upliftment and to play a role in promoting education of the masses. Hence, an MBA from VGSOM, IIT Kharagpur which will equip me with sound management practices would be the first step in realizing my goal. I believe that VGSOM, with its stress on blending management with technology can mould and help me in facing the real industry with aplomb and confidence and ultimately in realizing my goals. SOP162rrr I aspire to become an entrepreneur and my aim is to direct and inspire a team of committed employees in an organization which is working on the cutting edge of technology and makes a difference to the lives of people Firstly, "directing" people is radically different from inspiring people....And i am not really sure, the both of 'em go hand in hand....Forgive me, but the whole theme of making a difference is so much cliched than even your bollywood lines..and you put it along with high-technology ??? :roll: :roll: To me, thats just an attempt, and a bad one at that, to try and come across as *sensitive*..... I understood the importance of being a good leader by being the school captain at school level and by being the class representative for three consecutive years at college. How??? By simultaneously pursuing a diploma in Information Technology alongside my engineering course, I learnt the importance of time management Again, How?? I realized the importance of planning, coordination and control by planning and organizing an industrial tour for my batch mates. But, I feel that only a thorough understanding of the principles of management will help me realize my goal and at the same time, enhance my innate qualities.

First part convoluted and jargon....Second part....u justifying the need for more jargon ;) :mg: :mg: And yea, don't "feel" , start "believing" :mg: In order to understand the nuances of the various management principles involved and their real time implications, I believe that an MBA would begin my journey towards my goal Isn't the MBA supposed to be en route to your goal....You backtrack saying you are gonna start working towards your goal after MBA..When in reality you have earlier said that you would need an MBA to realize your long-term goal..Contradictory... Personally, I wish to mingle with different people and get accustomed to new cultures. I have had many unanswered questions about the quality of education in our country right from my childhood and I hope to do my part in developing the education field by ensuring a policy of each employee teaching an illiterate child, in my future organization. The main and only reason why I want to be an entrepreneur is to make a difference to the lives of people, to create more and better employment opportunities, to use technology for rural upliftment and to play a role in promoting education of the masses Forgive me, but that sounds straight out of one of the year-end reviews that b-mags and other mags carry out with pearls of wisdom from filmstars or models who believe India is just one sentence away from all ills plaguing it..... :| You may really feel for it, but this is definitely not the way of putting it across....The reader should have got a feel for this by now...But my plugging in so many in a few sentences, i feel the import behind that is lost... SOP163 - IITD Through my industry experience as Software Engineer in my current organization, I’ve seen the technical aspect of the business. The work experience has brought out & enhanced my man-management, communication & team skills. I am a good team player, initiator & a good listener. Working as a technical resource has provided me the unidimensional view i.e. the technical aspect but at the same time shown me glimpses of the other aspects which lie beyond my scope in particular & a techie in general. I am drawn towards the organizational, behavioral, functional & financial aspects of the business & have developed a keen inquisitiveness in them. Thus to pursue my interest & fully unlock my potential, I’ve chosen a management career. I need to enhance, channelize/canalize & formalize my soft skills. But more importantly, I need to acquire specific skills provided by a formal education And this is where an MBA stepped in. An MBA will equip me with those specific skills & help me in moving to a role which will give me greater responsibilities. Such a role would allow better utilization of my skills. A management career will provide me the flexibility & maneuverability in terms of roles in the industry. Thus I had a long-term perspective in mind while opting for an MBA. My decision was further vindicated by the experiences of people (both in my organization & society in general)

who are struggling to maintain the pace of their career. An MBA will provide a life-long momentum to my career. Undeniably, money too is an important consideration. An MBA will help me in reaching a position where money will be an outcome. To add to all these, there is something which has less to do with the business world, management & money but more to do with me as a person; something very close to my heart. The 4 yrs. of engineering were not just about the degree/qualification I got. It was a life-time experience & ironically this realization came more after those 4 years. I am looking forward to a similar enriching experience at your institute. Meeting new people, making new friends, imbibing the culture & living another life-experience. It is an irresistible proposition which I’m dying to accept :smile: SOP164 - IITs If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them. -Henry David Thoreau To say that I always wanted to get into a business school would be incorrect. All through my formative years I was interested in science, a sense of amazement and curiousness showing the way for me in my pursuits. These factors were what i think lead me to take up engineering as a natural choice for my Bachelors degree. But alongside this,I also began to take an active interest in Business and Management, such as understanding Business terms and news. The fact that i am an avid reader, coupled with my enthusiasm for knowledge, catapulted me into the world of shares and brands - a world where a single decision can have enormous consequences. But looking back now, its not surprising that i took such an interest in business - My dad is managing a business. His business consists of manufacturing and distribution of paints. This has, in no small measure, helped me a lot in understanding what businees means. I always had a first-hand look at the process of running a business organisation. During the last couple of years i transformed from a passive onlooker to an active participant, helping my dad run his business. I started to appreciate the different nuances of businesses such as Dealer-Company relationship, bureaucratic and labour hurdles and the like. All through my education I have been fortunate to study in institutions, which imprinted in my mind to have a positive outlook on life, which has been my biggest asset. My engineering course also gave me ample scope for developing my skills. I played a proactive role in all college activities, including organising inauguration of college fests and programmes like quizzes. My

extra curricular activites like quizzes, mock interviews, mimes and sports has further broadened my all round skills. Now that i am about to complete my graduation, i plan to lay a solid foundation to my life by undergoing a course in MBA. I envision myself, during the coming years, efficently managing a company, especially the marketing aspect, which I think is my forte. I know that in this globalised world, you need to be good at everything especially technology-driven innovation. An MBA from IIT ----- is tailormade for aspiring managers who understand that the coming century would be driven by technolgy. Given my skills and and aptitude, I hope that I am able to study in exalted halls of IIT -----. SOP165 - NMIMS “You cannot dream yourself into a character, you must hammer and forge yourself into one”- James A. Froude. Working in frontline sales is no-one’s first choice for a job but I had to start my career as a Business Development Executive with an IT infrastructure vendor. Responsible for finding and creating opportunities and handling the entire sales process for clients which included the Software MNCs, BPOs and large educational institutes, I learnt the mental, physical and emotional preparedness required for a hardcore sales job. Interaction with a couple of NMIMS students enlightened me on the sunrise industry of life insurance. Very soon, I joined a Leading life insurance company as Unit manager responsible for recruiting and managing business from Financial advisors who work as freelancers. Training them on selling skills, underwriting, consumer behaviour, concepts of insurance, sensex dynamics, taxation aspects and the ethics of selling is an integral part of the profile. Managing them has improved my people skills, convinced me on the importance of boundaryless bahviour and taught me to be a mountain of patience. However, on the personal front I have kept myself involved with my love for theatre, choreography,fashion-shows,amteur modelling, toastmasters, and association with a School for the Handicapped and Blind. I have done a world class workshop on Theatre, Voice Modulation and also on Attitudinal skills and Personality development. NMIMS with its philosophy of versatile management training and its strategic location, reputed faculty, enviable reputation and a closely knit alumni network would be an ideal place for me to equip myself with the requisite skills and pursue my MBA to catapult my career in the corporate world. SOP165r Dude. how can u say "Working in frontline sales is no-one's first choice of job but i had to...." ??? U trying to say u made a heroic sacrifice or are u very bluntly demeaning the profession of Sales ???

Imagine the adm panel going thru that ? Fine, maybe it was a 'by chance entry" into the profession but you have gotto atleast project it in a better light (in fact, u even mention somewhere before that 'it has become a choice'!) Must say, u hv a very interesting exp profile - but oh "mountain of patience', why do u need an mba ? the biographical sketch is bit sketchy in that respect - as in, u hv nicely put in ur past & present - but wot abt ur future goals ? expected profile ? "catapult my career in the corporate world" sounds really vague in that respect ! SOP166 - IITD I aspire to become a management consultant in which I can leverage my diverse work experience across differnt industries. What I enjoy most about the consulting world is being the agent of change. The diversity of assignments undertaken by a consultant and the opportunity to network with top corporates of various industrial sectors have aroused in me a great passion for consulting. My innate strengths like generating ideas, approaching a problem pragmatically, honoring commitments coupled with my 3 years of professional work experience have provided a great platform to launch my dream career. A rigorous MBA programme at this stage shall help in moulding me into a consummate consultant by grooming my personality, by honing my leadership skills in a structured way besides inculcating in me the nuances of management. A great brand name, an excellent industry interface, courses aligning with current economic trends, the opportunity to be involved in the department's consulting assignments will make IIT Delhi the ideal place to pursue my MBA. I am confident that IIT Delhi, with its eclectic student community and high profile faculty, will make my next two years a great investment for lifetime. SOP167 - IITM "The secret of joy in work is contained in one word - excellence. To know how to do something well is to enjoy it. Pearl S. BUCK" My foremost goal is to enjoy my work and be expert in what I learn from hereon I desire to be in decision making cadre of an organization and prove myself in long run. I believe that technical knowledge and managerial skills go together. With a technical degree that I have and management degree that I am aspiring will help me in becoming a better manager. I started my career with Godrej & Boyce Mfg. Co. Ltd and saw significant development of my maturity and markedly improved self-discipline towards. My career goals I strongly believe that I have some innate qualities to be successful manager I have also been trying to inculcate in myself the various qualities needed to be a successful manager. One of distinguishing characteristics is my versatility. I have never been a great performer but never been a poor performer either. After my school I focused on my personality grooming and went on to win Prince Lucknow’01 (Congeniality). ). Few months after joining Godrej & Boyce I was chosen as specialist for a new product ahead of my senior colleagues. I have tried to revamp current working environment of my division by taking care of dealers’ miseries. I have

been actively focusing on brand building of product for which I have been specialist. I have passion for traveling and keenness to interact with people from different background, this has broadened my outlook. IIT-Madras is a renowned institution with fineness in teaching methodology, superior industry interaction, world class infrastructure, experienced faculty and excellent research base which go in hand with my professional dream SOP168 - General Please detail the five-year plan for your career including the jobs you would like to have, how you would leverage your education, and how you would otherwise prepare yourself for this path. Tell us why your goals make sense given your plan and your background On passing out in 2004 from the __Engineering College, Mumbai, I was determined to pursue a career that would give something more than the routine desk job.My search, though frustrating, was fruitful as I was offered a job as a Senior Officer in ICICI Bank Ltd., the largest private sector bank in India in its Retail Asset and Product Group. Making my mark at the bank was going to be a tough ask, as I had little knowledge of the industry and most of my colleagues were armed with MBA degrees. A training on Basics of Finance and Banking at Institute of Finance & Management Research, Chennai, set me on my way and there was no looking back since then. I worked as a Collection Manager in the Credit Card Department heading the third bucket of delinquency, a portfolio size of over $4 million for 3 regions. Apart from challenging my analytical and logical skills, this job introduced me to various aspects of management like people and time management, planning, delegation and multitasking. Managing a team of 25 executives and 2 collection agencies was a challenge but never a problem as I had performed jobs with huge responsibilities in the past, as the Finance head of the college for inter college cultural fests, as the Secretary of IEEE and as the Organizer for inter college technical fests. Improvising at every step was my motto thus researching for new and creative ways of performing the required tasks. As I started handling more responsibilities I grew from strength to strength, improving my decision-making skills, human resource management skills, public relations skills and understanding organizational psychology and behavioral patterns. Finance is the lifeblood of business. With a freak encounter with a book ‘Beating the Street’ on Equity Markets by the legendary Peter Lynch and my own small investments in the financial markets I started following the markets on a regular basis and then decided to pursue a career in the Financial Services industry. A perfect opportunity to begin this transformation arose in the form of a position as an Associate at Bonanza Portfolio Ltd. Here I worked in the Risk Management Group, monitoring the trading activities of different branches and taking important risk management decisions. I am also involved in opening up branches at different locations and ensuring their smooth operations.

Through this assignment I learned a tremendous amount about business, and gained useful exposure to the world of Finance. I successfully completed certification programs in Capital Markets, Derivatives Core Module and Commodities Module offered by the National Stock Exchange, Mumbai. I also went through various training programs like Technical Analysis and Stock Market operations conducted by the Bombay Stock Exchange. The very idea of applying my newly acquired knowledge in the industry excites me. My education and work experience have provided me with an excellent introduction to business and have sparked my interest in finance. However, a strong foundation is required before I tread into that territory and thus the need for an MBA- to broaden my horizon and not restrict myself to any particular domain in the Financial Services industry. Given that finance drives business, this makes financial specialists integral to every major business decision. On passing out from (School-name) School of Business, I wish to embark on a career with one of the leading investment banking firms of global repute. A career in investment banking is fast, challenging, exciting and extremely demanding. In three to five years, once I have become adept in financial analyses, drafting prospectuses, preparing business presentations and other financial advisory work, I will move into a senior associate position. Here I will develop my abilities to anticipate client needs and to engineer solutions that address these needs. Its unarguable that different individuals see the world with a unique perspective since every individual undergoes a unique process of learning and comes from a different background and the same applies to me. But my academic background, leadership qualities, diverse experience, ideology, aspirations, career goals and a never-say-die attitude towards learning and improvising make me a suitable candidate for graduate study at your university. SOP168r On passing out in 2004 from the __Engineering College, Mumbai, I was determined to pursue a career that would give something more than the routine desk job.My search, though frustrating, was fruitful as I was offered a job as a Senior Officer in ICICI Bank Ltd., the largest private sector bank in India in its Retail Asset and Product Group. Instead of frustrating write something which means "difficult" Making my mark at the bank was going to be a tough ask, as I had little knowledge of the industry and most of my colleagues were armed with MBA degrees. A training on Basics of Finance and Banking at Institute of Finance & Management Research, Chennai, set me on my way and there was no looking back since then. I worked as a Collection Manager in the Credit Card Department heading the third bucket of delinquency, a portfolio size of over $4 million for 3 regions. Apart from challenging my analytical and logical skills, this job introduced me to various aspects of management like people and time management, planning, delegation and multitasking.

Managing a team of 25 executives and 2 collection agencies was a challenge but never a problem as I had performed jobs with huge responsibilities in the past, as the Finance head of the college for inter college cultural fests, as the Secretary of IEEE and as the Organizer for inter college technical fests. Improvising at every step was my motto thus researching for new and creative ways of performing the required tasks. As I started handling more responsibilities I grew from strength to strength, improving my decision-making skills, human resource management skills, public relations skills and understanding organizational psychology and behavioral patterns. The last para needs a lot of snipping off. Esp stuff to do with college time. Re-read the question its oriented towards the future - what you want to be and what you want to do etc. While you are still stuck with the past so far. I understand you are developing "ground" for what you want to say but still this is way too long. Finance is the lifeblood of business. With a freak encounter with a book ‘Beating the Street’ on Equity Markets by the legendary Peter Lynch and my own small investments in the financial markets I started following the markets on a regular basis and then decided to pursue a career in the Financial Services industry. A perfect opportunity to begin this transformation arose in the form of a position as an Associate at Bonanza Portfolio Ltd. Here I worked in the Risk Management Group, monitoring the trading activities of different branches and taking important risk management decisions. I am also involved in opening up branches at different locations and ensuring their smooth operations. Through this assignment I learned a tremendous amount about business, and gained useful exposure to the world of Finance. I successfully completed certification programs in Capital Markets, Derivatives Core Module and Commodities Module offered by the National Stock Exchange, Mumbai. I also went through various training programs like Technical Analysis and Stock Market operations conducted by the Bombay Stock Exchange. You are talking about your past till *now*. That is waaaaay too much detail. Try preparing a crisp resume where you put in all the trainings. So you can just remove the details over here. No one is interested to know the *exact* name of the course and where you did it and stuff. That is resume stuff. The very idea of applying my newly acquired knowledge in the industry excites me. My education and work experience have provided me with an excellent introduction to business and have sparked my interest in finance. However, a strong foundation is required before I tread into that territory and thus the need for an MBA- to broaden my horizon and not restrict myself to any particular domain in the Financial Services industry. Given the nature of the question your answer should be more tightly bound. And you got a very, very strong reason (from what I can judge), you are not doing justice to it in this paragraph. Try reading more sample essays to know hwo you can more clearly articulate what you want to do with the background.

Given that finance drives business, this makes financial specialists integral to every major business decision. On passing out from (School-name) School of Business, I wish to embark on a career with one of the leading investment banking firms of global repute. A career in investment banking is fast, challenging, exciting and extremely demanding. In three to five years, once I have become adept in financial analyses, drafting prospectuses, preparing business presentations and other financial advisory work, I will move into a senior associate position. Here I will develop my abilities to anticipate client needs and to engineer solutions that address these needs. I have NFI about IB but could it be possible to give more detials. For example in MC you might want to say which domain, what type etc. But you are just saying IB. Add more details. More depth to the job description. Its unarguable that different individuals see the world with a unique perspective since every individual undergoes a unique process of learning and comes from a different background and the same applies to me. But my academic background, leadership qualities, diverse experience, ideology, aspirations, career goals and a never-say-die attitude towards learning and improvising make me a suitable candidate for graduate study at your university. Have they asked you how you would contribute to the class with your exp ? Why answer somethign that has not been asked in the 1st place ? :) SOP169 - IITD “A dream becomes a goal when action is taken towards its achievement – Bo Bennett”. My medium term goal for the next 8-10 years would be to work for a business consultancy firm which provides me an ample opportunity to grow as a professional and to do a lot of process learning. This will help me to work towards my long term goal which is to set up a firm that can fill the slot in few areas of the rural India besides providing employment to few people and of course to gain some profit as well. The achievement of these goals would require strong analytical, business, economy and managerial skills and I believe an MBA degree would be appropriate to work towards these skills. The 19 months stint with my current organization has developed in me an inquisitiveness in knowing the organizational aspects in addition to the technical aspects. I have developed the qualities like team work, efficient coordination of activities as is evident from my stint in the Tsunami Relief Camp at Tamil Nadu where I have led a team that took care of activities like building huts and distributing provisions. An MBA degree will not only help me in acquiring business knowledge but also helps in enhancing my leadership, planning and managerial skills. IITD DMS with its fineness in teaching methodology, superb industry interaction, world-class infrastructure, experienced faculty and excellent research base will definitely provide me a platform that can give me a head start to achieve my goal. Hence, I find this place worth

investing my two years for gaining strong business knowledge and hence work towards realization of my goal. SOP170 - IIFT "What are your broad career objectives and how does IIFT fit into them"(word limit 100) My short term goal is to be in the middle managerial level, while in the long run I plan to become an entrepreneur after gaining adequate experience and garnering in depth knowledge about the industry. My course at the graduate level i.e. Production & Industrial Engineering has prepared the necessary foundation for me to acquire a managerial perspective to supplement my technical knowledge. Geographical constraints have ceased to exist and India is rapidly becoming a global player in the economic arena. Thus the need of the hour is for managers with a global perspective. I believe the well rounded curriculum at IIFT will assist in enablingme to fulfill that need. SOP171 - IITKgp Having been brought up by father in a managerial position and a lecturer mom, I have always experienced a conducive family environment where all-round excellence is a norm. Other than excelling in academics throughout, I have also won numerous awards in extra curricular activities and have loved to organize these events at various stages. I was selected in the very 1st company I applied for in campus-placements and during the extensive TCS training, I realized my potential in managing and leading people effectively, which was further recognized by TCS as they awarded me “Outstanding” for life skills & personality. In TCS I ve been contributing effectively to my project for US Pharma major “Eli Lilly & Co” by providing continual enhancements to the system . Direct interaction with the U.S clients & application of technical skills needed to solve the system issues in a stringent time frame have added to my self confidence & capabilities to manage demanding situations effectively . Few years down the line, I aspire to be a part of the senior management in a leading corporate house & contribute effectively by leading change, applying thought and creative ideas and setting an example by my excellence. I wish to explore the unlimited dimensions of the corporate world where I can use my experience in software industry and thus apply technology in managing challenging situations better. To achieve my career goals, I need to learn much more about current developments and acquire hands-on experience of business analysis. MBA at VGSOM will provide me with theoretical understanding, an in depth idea of practical approaches in aiding managerial decision-making and research skills to enable me to develop an expertise in the core areas of business strategies and global corporate operations. My self confidence, acumen & good communication skills have been my winning edge throughout. I have the potential waiting to be explored, exploited and polished by a premier

educational institute like IIT-Kgp where I can learn, interact with the best brains of the nation, get brilliant guidance & use the state-of-the-art facilities to realize my goal. Personally I wish to strike a perfect balance between my professional & family life, continue to make my parents proud & live my life with integrity. Also in my own way, I wish to pay back to the society by some community service to spread smiles all around. Following my passions & hobbies deeply, I would strive to live my life to the fullest. The feedback from my acquaintances at VGSOM makes me believe that they are perfectly able to balance the grilling academic pressures with loads of fun-filled activities leading to an immense personal growth at an individual level by being surrounded by excellence all around. SOP172 - IIMK Q- Why do u wish to go for a managerial career? Ans. - Attending the Entrepreneurship Development Workshop program in college aroused a keen interest in me towards the managerial field.I realized that an MBA would give me the multidisciplinary approach needed to excel in the corporate world.As a manager i would get an oppurtunity to interact an learn from people with diverse backgrounds. Moreover it will equip me with new(varied?) ideas,skill sets and help me appreciate different perspectives to a situation.These are the reasons as to why i wish to for a management career. Q.2)What alternative careers are you considering and why? Ans.- Alternatively i would work for a couple of years in the industry and learn the nuances of everyday working of an organisation.This would go a long way in helping me acquire the required knowledge,idea needed for the realisation of my dreams which is to start my own company. Q.3)Describe your strengths and wewakneses as identified by you. Ans.- I am a man of initiative.This was best exemplified in me taking the lead in forming the ISTE Students Chapter in my college.Also i have a good sense of humour and make friends easily. I wish i were a little more assertive. Q.4)What is your most significant accomplishment so far? Ans. My most significant accomplishment so far, apart from clearing CAT, has been clearing the SSB interview for admission to National Defence Academy.I secured an All India Rank 129 out of approximately 75000 students who appeared for this exam. SOP173 - General Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. I would take this one step further and say Shoot for the moon. If you aim well enough you will surely hit it.

That is feeling that drives me. I believe that nothing is impossible to achieve, if you want it bad enough and are willing to work hard for it. I started my own business when I was in class XI and had it running on profit after a few months. It was not easy considering I was just out of school maybe a bit immature, however with true dedication and pure hard work we were among the top in the entire city. I continued to study and work at the same time. When I joined Engineering I handed over the business to my family members and joined Impact Inc. which is a leading advertising agency in Shillong. During my tenure at the company I learnt many things worked in various projects, competed with the best in their fields , lost a few and won a few. However the treasure that I gained was the ton of experience and self confidence. I got the wonderful opportunity to join Seng Samla, a charitable based NGO in Shillong and as a volunteer offered my duties to the maximum. I was also a part of the team that organized and executed relief operations in riot affected Block 1 of Meghalaya. At the same time I passed my BE (Information Technology) with an overall percentage of 70.60. After the completion of my degree I came to Delhi and joined Wipro BPO as an outsourced technical consultant for Washington Mutual. This was my first chance to work with one of the big names in IT sector. I got to work learn and develop soft skills like customer service and how to work in a group. I made the most of this opportunity and was selected to be a part of a pilot team for a test in quality assurance. I was then promoted and made an Internal Quality Analyst for the entire process managing a team of about 20 agents. However now I want to take my learning curve to the next level and develop skills such as good decision making, leadership along with my academic qualification .A B-School would be the best place to learn this , since events like group discussions, case studies , group trips are a part of the daily routine. You get to work in teams and learning groups and get a chance to apply your theoretical knowledge. I aspire to get into <institution name> because of <details about B school>. On graduating from <institution name> I would apply my knowledge in the real life arena and strive to make my institution proud SOP174 - IIMB The importance of good education has always been stressed upon in my family. Also, simplicity, hardwork and a constant endeavour to try and broaden my horizon of skills and knowledge are some of the ideals that i have always cherished. I have always found great thrill in being a part of a team and working towards a common goal. While in college i participated in a number of team events. But inspite of having a great desire to succeed we often failed to perform to our true potential. This made me realise that there are a host of other skills that are required inorder to build a great team.After finishing my Engineering i started working in my company where interactng with my colleagues and manager further strengthened my beleifs in the importance of management education.

I think management education with it's roots in a wide range of social sciences including economics, psychology, mathematics, statistics etc will give me a fresh perspective towards the events around me and will further help me devolope myself as a complete and better individual. SOP175 - IIMB The opportunity to pursue a management course at IIM Bangalore brings me closer to the realization of my long term goals – the application of technology for mass consumption. Such a goal requires a synergy of technology and corporate understanding. The foundations of this have been laid by the virtue of my family background, strong emphasis on values and motivation to excel academically. The passion for computers and analytical abilities drove me to pursue B.Tech. in Computer Science. Apart from academics I forayed into organizing events, forming technical clubs and participating in sports. I also developed and implemented the softwares “Online Registration” and “Automated Registration System” for use within MNNIT. Such activities brought to focus the importance of management techniques and skills thereof. I think a PGP course would provide me with the right set of tools along with a competitive and learning environment. This would help in developing an eclectic blend of technology, logic and management – all packaged into one. SOP175r somehow the passion seems to be missing in this one. its got pretty much everything..why u want to go for MBA, what u wish to do..what you have done etc.. but somehow the zip is missing :mg: other than that, the sop is pretty much ok. not any holes to poke in. but i recall IIMB has a questionnaire rather than just a SOP..or have they revised it this year? if its only the "why MBA" sop, you might wanna put in some more stuff about the career progression..which specialization etc. if u have ur goals in mind, then use this to ur advantage. most people wouldnt know what they want to do..on the other hand, you could probably chart out a timeline; which companies you'd go for..how much time would u typically spend there..which sector woul you be looking at..when would you break away to do your own thing etc. SOP176 - GLIM How a management degree fits in with your personal goal for the future? (450w) My personal long-term goal for the future is closely related to my dream of becoming a distinguished academician and much sought-after business consultant. As an academician, I will have the chance to mentor young leaders and to pursue academic research in my area of interest.In the role of consultant, I will be associated with the crucial decision-making processes that would shape the destiny of a firm. I believe that these two roles are complementary since

both require the ability to convert the specific expertise into reality. To chase such a dream, I need a great deal of experience and a sound footing in the fundamentals. Thanks to my present assignment as a Piping design engineer, I am well aware of the technical aspects of a project.In this role I had to meet design deadlines, make presentations and hold technical negotiations with the clients, motivate my junior colleagues as well as handle the overall co-ordination of the project. The field assignments at Tamilnadu Petroproducts Ltd(TPL) and ShRiram Fibres(SRF)have made me adept in dealing with semi-skilled labourers and commissioning problems. In short, a stint of 3 1/2 years in the field of engineering has given me the confidence that I can contribute to solving complex real-time problems both as a team member and as a team leader. Apart from my regular role as Pipng Lead Engineer at IDEA Ltd and subsequently now at Alstom Projects, I was also involved in mentoring trainee engineers.Though infact I relish being a technical expert, to pursue my long-term goal I must enhance my skill sets and acquire more business domain knowledge. Borrowing words from Great Lakes' brochure, "Post-graduate program in business management is intended to prepare the students to understand the key interactions among the functional areas of a business system, appreciate the need to have a cross-functional perspective to analyzing issues in business systems and apply key concepts in addressing these issues to arrive at meaningful solutions." Striking a chord, I expect this management degree with my technical background will facilitate me in accomplishing my long-term dreams. I believe the opportunity for networking and peer-to-peer learning during a formal management degree would be tremendous. My short-term goal after this program is to work with an organization for a considerable amount of time since I want to apply the knowledge and skills I learned through the course and leverage my experience. Then, after gaining reasonable managerial experience, I would like to move towards my long-term ambition by pursuing a doctorate in management and part-time teaching assignments. SOP176r My personal long-term goal for the future is closely related to my dream of becoming a distinguished academician and much sought-after business consultant. As an academician, I will have the chance to mentor young leaders and to pursue academic research in my area of interest.In the role of consultant, I will be associated with the crucial decision-making processes that would shape the destiny of a firm. I believe that these two roles are complementary since both require the ability to convert the specific expertise into reality. To chase such a dream, I need a great deal of experience and a sound footing in the fundamentals. If you really want to be an academician plus industry consultant types you need to have a Phd from one of the top Bschools of the world. So you need to be very clear about when you want to do that etc. etc. Thanks to my present assignment as a Piping design engineer, I am well aware of the technical aspects of a project.In this role I had to meet design deadlines, make presentations and hold technical negotiations with the clients, motivate my junior colleagues as well as handle the overall co-ordination of the project. The field assignments at Tamilnadu Petroproducts Ltd(TPL) and ShRiram Fibres(SRF)have made me adept in dealing with semi-skilled labourers and commissioning problems. In short, a stint of 3 1/2 years in the field of engineering has given me

the confidence that I can contribute to solving complex real-time problems both as a team member and as a team leader. Apart from my regular role as Pipng Lead Engineer at IDEA Ltd and subsequently now at Alstom Projects, I was also involved in mentoring trainee engineers.Though infact I relish being a technical expert, to pursue my long-term goal I must enhance my skill sets and acquire more business domain knowledge. Hmm.......are you sure you want to put what you have done over here ? This essay should talk about LA-LA LAND and your plan to get there. You are talking about past. Check if this thing can be put in any other place (Im sure there are multiple essays) Borrowing words from Great Lakes' brochure, "Post-graduate program in business management is intended to prepare the students to understand the key interactions among the functional areas of a business system, appreciate the need to have a cross-functional perspective to analyzing issues in business systems and apply key concepts in addressing these issues to arrive at meaningful solutions." Striking a chord, I expect this management degree with my technical background will facilitate me in accomplishing my long-term dreams. I believe the opportunity for networking and peer-to-peer learning during a formal management degree would be tremendous. My short-term goal after this program is to work with an organization for a considerable amount of time since I want to apply the knowledge and skills I learned through the course and leverage my experience. Then, after gaining reasonable managerial experience, I would like to move towards my long-term ambition by pursuing a doctorate in management and part-time teaching assignments. Whoaaa !! You are wasting too much real-estate space on your essays. What value addition is it when you are quoting something from their brochure ? Is your objective to impress them with the fact that you have done your research ? Even if yes, then it does not meet the objective. Okay so you do get to your doctorate plans. But why wait this long, the curiosity is up there and Im waiting for you to get it. But you do not write even a single line about it !!! That is criminal. You should be telling exactly what your plans for a Phd is and ALSO why MBA before that and maybe how many years you want to work before the Phd. Get the drift ? Also, no one of the stuff you put in the last para actually need to be in this essay. You are talkign about "Why GLAKES ?" whereas the essay question is not about that. SOP177 - Nirma Having an analytical and creative bent mind I have pursued my graduation in electrical and electronics engineering. The course has improved my analytical skills and developed my ability to visualize situations and arrive at a practical solution. I have done my final year project in Embedded systems called “Universal Buffer” which is mainly applied in the field of Biometrics. I was the team leader in my project and my role was to build the hardware and edit the project report. My hobbies are listening music, cooking, dancing and watching TV. I stood second at a dance competition called “Rhythms” held at my college.

My short-term goal is to be in the middle managerial level. After gaining adequate experience and garnering in depth knowledge about the industry, in the long run I plan to become an entrepreneur in technology. The achievements of these goals require strong analytical, business, economy and managerial skills. I believe an MBA degree would be appropriate to work towards these skills. Also a MBA would mean an opportunity to interact with a variety of people, coming from varied backgrounds. As some of my batch mates may have work experience, they can give me valuable inputs about the industry. I believe Nirma University with its excellent faculty, infrastructure, course and competitive environment will help me achieve my career objective. SOP178 - Nirma 250words “I am just one But still I am One I cannot do everything But still I can do Something And just because I cannot do everything I will not leave the something that I can do” - Helen Keller I am driven by a zest to make things happen! I aspire to secure a significant place for myself in the corporate world so as to be at the helm of affairs and decision making situations. My long term career objective is to establish and run an indigenous software solutions company that takes up innovative ideas and converts them into marketable products and services, generating wealth for its stakeholders and lasting value for its clients. The first logical step would be to complete my MBA from a reputed institution like the Institute of management of NirmaUniversity. Through this I would gain knowledge about the various areas and spheres of management and also harness the requisite skills to run an organization like the communication as well as analytical skills. I would also benefit from the faculty, industrial interaction as well as the infrastructure of the institute, so that instead of relying only on intuition I can leverage my decisions to solve the problems in an organization through a well informed decision making process. I come from an educated industrial family and this has helped me truly understand the importance of management in all spheres of life. I am in the final year of BCA (Bachelor of Computer Applications). This program has helped me gain the requisite technical knowledge required in the development of software packages through programming in languages like C++ and JAVA.

Thus I believe that an MBA would act as a catalyst that would give me a head start in the right direction towards my short as well as long term career objectives. SOP178r I am driven by a zest to make things happen! I aspire to secure a significant place for myself in the corporate world so as to be at the helm of affairs and decision making situations Phew....Ain't that a tad aggressive attitude?? :roll: My long term career objective is to establish and run an indigenous software solutions company that takes up innovative ideas and converts them into marketable products and services, generating wealth for its stakeholders and lasting value for its clients. hehe....Replace software with any product and it still makes sense, ain't it....What does that say?? That this sentence has been lifted straight from stakeholder 101 :mg: The first logical step would be to complete my MBA from a reputed institution like the Institute of management of NirmaUniversity. Through this I would gain knowledge about the various areas and spheres of management and also harness the requisite skills to run an organization like the communication as well as analytical skills. I would also benefit from the faculty, industrial interaction as well as the infrastructure of the institute, so that instead of relying only on intuition I can leverage my decisions to solve the problems in an organization through a well informed decision making process. Again, Nirma university here could be replaced by any other college's name....And thats a scary proposition..But you definitely need to customize your SOP with respect to the unique offerings of a college and how that fits into your long-term/short-term goals.....Why say that the first logical step is doing MBA....You will be asked back how the thousands of non-MBAs have succeeded...Why not try to implement and then come back to an MBA so you could structure your internal processes much better..... I come from an educated industrial family and this has helped me truly understand the importance of management in all spheres of life. How?? I am in the final year of BCA (Bachelor of Computer Applications). This program has helped me gain the requisite technical knowledge required in the development of software packages through programming in languages like C++ and JAVA. So??? Thus I believe that an MBA would act as a catalyst that would give me a head start in the right direction towards my short as well as long term career objectives. You haven't touched upon the reasons and you conclude here that MBA is the catalyst.....

SOP179 - Nirma Born and brought up in a business class family I was always curious about two fundamental things. * How things work? * How to make things work? To find answer to first of these questions I went for my technical course and completed Electronics Engineering from Pune University. Now as far as the second is concerned, I think a MBA degree will help me answer that. Making things work for one needs lot of discipline, integrity and knowledge about how to manage? Management is the most important part of ones life be it managing ones time, finances or business. I firmly believe that a MBA degree will help me learn the principles and fundamentals of management and improve in every sphere of life by increasing my efficiency and productivity. Working as a Channel Development Specialist for over one and a half year in DirectI I have been exposed to various facets of management, but these learnings are only part of what makes a good manager. Nirma promises to prepare professionals who are effective, socially responsible and can manage and lead in the increasingly complex and dynamic global business scenario. Synchronous with this vision of creating world class leaders, I want to be in such a position myself. The Electronics engineering course and my work experience as a professional has given me not only technical know how of my subjects but also an opportunity to interact and learn from highly competitive personnel. Nirma would surely provide even better opportunities because of the diverse academic background if its students. I believe MBA from NIRMA would increase my productivity manifolds and provide the right impetus to my career. SOP180 - IITB My strengths are my virtues, without which I would not have been in a position where I am now. I am a person well-groomed with the qualities like hard-working nature, self-motivating, optimism and strong will power. I look at my life as an opportunity to succeed and also an esteemed institution to learn from my everyday experiences. I always believe that technology plays a key role in the growth of an organization and further through the efficient management of technology, an organization can grow in leaps and bounds and technological and managerial aspects within an organization go hand-in-hand. My goal has always been to become a key player in the growth of an organization. The four-year engineering course at National Institute of Technology, Surat has developed logical and creative thinking abilities in me. After my graduation, I joined Computer Sciences Corporation, an IT company where I am presently working as a system support engineer. The 19 months experience in the company has exposed me to various business related aspects and organizational aspects in

addition to the technical aspects. Moreover, my stints in the past where I was a co-coordinator of my hostel mess and also leading a team at Tsunami Relief Camp in Pondicherry that took care of activities like Huts-building and provision distribution made me to understand the importance of leadership, planning, delegation and time management skills. A techno-managerial profile will definitely help me to play a key role in the industry. This profile needs a holistic idea of various business functions and also the skill and knowledge to face the challenges thrown by the ever changing business environment. I feel an MBA degree will make me equipped with these skills and knowledge. SJMSOM, with its esteemed and research focused faculty characterized with versatile areas of interest, diverse backgrounds and rich industrial experiences, eclectic student community, excellent academic curriculum with an additional focus on Technology Management and superb industry interaction can definitely help me to achieve my goal. So, I find this place much worthy to invest my two years to bridge the gap between where I am and what I want to be. SOP181 - FMS My long term career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can utilize my managerial skills and play the lead role in the success of the organisation. I have always enjoyed handling huge responsibilities and facing challenging assignments throughout my student life, more so during my professional life. My two years work experience as a Software suite design engineer in XXX has enabled me to understand the dynamic nature and various challenges involved in today’s corporate world. It has also made me realize the necessity of strong leadership for the success of an organization however technologically advanced the organization might be. In order to realize my long term goal I believe along with my strong technical background i should also hone my intellectual and interpersonal skills and have a proper understanding of the indian and global business scenario. Also I intend to use the B school education to identify and spread the solutions for our country’s social problems and persuade the entire society to take new leaps For achieving my career aim I want to pursue the Management programme in FMS, specializing in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase my ability to handle dynamic, unpredictable business world and real life situations and help me realize my dream. SOP181r My long term career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can utilize my managerial skills and play the lead role in the success of the organisation. => Any IDea about which kind/type of organization? I have always enjoyed handling huge responsibilities and facing challenging assignments throughout my student life, more so during my professional life. => Any examples to supplement this ?

My two years work experience as a Software suite design engineer in XXX has enabled me to understand the dynamic nature and various challenges involved in today’s corporate world. It has also made me realize the necessity of strong leadership for the success of an organization however technologically advanced the organization might be. => After using a decent amount of words allotted to you, now you've come up with your point.. Leadership. IF this is the crux of your SOP, then stress it early and strongly. Dont make genreric statements like "dynamic nature" and "challenegs" and the likes. Use powerful terminology to get your point across; just dont quote something for the heck of it ! In order to realize my long term goal I believe along with my strong technical background i should also hone my intellectual and interpersonal skills and have a proper understanding of the indian and global business scenario. => & why is an MBA programme essential for that. Where's the connection pal ? Also I intend to use the B school education to identify and spread the solutions for our country’s social problems and persuade the entire society to take new leaps => hmm..where does this come from? Out of the blue types. Doesnt gel at all with the rest of the SOP For achieving my career aim I want to pursue the Management programme in FMS, specializing in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase my ability to handle dynamic, unpredictable business world and real life situations and help me realize my dream. => generic lines. Pretty ok. Nothing wrong with them But no differentiating factor!! SOP181rr My career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can capitalize on my managerial skills and apply various business concepts and strategies learnt during the MBA programme to the success of the organization and to my own career growth. As a Software Design engineer in XXX, I worked in a rapidly evolving technology,YYY. During this work experience, I had the chance to see for myself the dynamic nature of today's market and competition among various leading MNCs to gain market share. Further, it made me understand the importance of strong leadership for the success of an organization irrespective of the brand value of the product or growth of the sector. The challenges I faced during my professional life made me realize that, in order to achieve my long term career goal I should hone my business and interpersonal skills and have a proper understanding of the way the world does business today. Further, since business problems span multiple domains, its essential for me to have a sound knowledge in various fields like

marketing, finance, human resource, operations, economics etc. in order to successfully handle them. Towards achieving my career aspirations, I understand it is imperative to pursue a Management programme, specializing in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase my ability to handle dynamic and unpredictable real life, business situations and help me realize my dream. SOP181rrr My career goal is to become the top executive of a firm where I can capitalize on my managerial skills and apply various business concepts and strategies learnt during the MBA programme to the success of the organization and to my own career growth. I would still like you to be a bit more objective, however as a 21-year old I guess that's all one can afford to be objective about :mg: Thoda over the top types sound karta hai. But its okay. As a Software Design engineer in XXX, I worked in a rapidly evolving technology,YYY. During this work experience, I had the chance to see for myself the dynamic nature of today's market and competition among various leading MNCs to gain market share. Further, it made me understand the importance of strong leadership for the success of an organization irrespective of the brand value of the product or growth of the sector. Good. The challenges I faced during my professional life made me realize that, in order to achieve my long term career goal I should hone my business and interpersonal skills and have a proper understanding of the way the world does business today. Further, since business problems span multiple domains, its essential for me to have a sound knowledge in various fields like marketing, finance, human resource, operations, economics etc. in order to successfully handle them. Good. Towards achieving my career aspirations, I understand it is imperative to pursue a Management programme, specializing in Systems or Operations. I strongly believe FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards and corporate exposure will broadbase my ability to handle dynamic and unpredictable real life, business situations and help me realize my dream. Excellent !!! You knock the ball out of the park. Just that the first paragraph sounds too bombastic and doesn't fit into the the clarity and articulation that you have shown with the rest of the essay. SOP182 - FMS-MS

Ever since my school days I have a great fascination towards services sector, IT industry in particular. I have always dreamt of being in a powerful managerial position in an IT or IT related company. After having worked as Software suite designer for two years, I believe a MBA course focused in IT service sector management will be the proper next step in my career. It will enable me to understand business problems at the highest level and improve my ability to connect technology to business. Having a keen business acumen, awareness of technologies and a strong penchant for continuous learning I believe I have the qualities needed to excel as a manager in the Services sector. I would like to pursue the programme focused towards service sector in FMS as its one of the most reputed management institutes in India and also the first one to come up with such a focused programme SOP183 - FMS I want to pursue an MBA programme in Finance to integrate my IT skills with the Domain knowledge which I will be getting by this program.I have been working in XXX for nearly one year in finance and securites vertical.Though ,I was very much interested in finance in general right from the start but my stint at securities vertical in XXX has given a newdimension to my hobby of following financial markets.During the induction at XXX,I had undergone a lots of trainings which were helpful in taking this decision of purusuing an MBA in finance. Today,technology is being adopted in every sector and most prominently in financial sector.Its virtually impossible to think of financial sector operating without technology. .I think with my technology background and having worked in one of india’s top most IT companies will give me a very goodheadstart in terms of work profile after pursuing MBA in finance from FMS which will complement my technology specialization. After working in IT sector for one year,I have noticed that my natural inclination lies towards domain specialization in finance.So ,the best way forward for me is to do an MBA in finance.I have selected FMSas one of programmes for simple reason of being its strong background,brand name,placements and the work profile being offered to students from FMS. SOP184 - FMS-MS After spending ayear in IT services sector for nearly one year,I have noticed a storng natural inclination to integrate my IT skills with domain specialization.I think an MBA(MS) will help in achieving my long term goal .Today,its time for technology adoption,no sector can remain immune to this and especially the financial services sector.

The course MBA(MS) is a very niche course which is aimed at growing services sector .This course will help me in my long term goal of combining my technology skills with my domain knowledge which i ll be getting thr this course. SOP185 - FMS “The person who makes a success of living is the one who see his goal steadily and aims for it unswervingly. That is dedication.” This quote by Cecil B. DeMille, perhaps, best sums up me and my life so far. Since childhood, machines have always fascinated me and with passage of time, it became by dream and passion to start my own firm, preferably in the manufacturing sector. As a huge step in this direction, I was fortunate enough to be admitted, by merit, into the department of mechanical engineering of the prestigious College of Engineering, Guindy in Chennai. However, during my internship at Hyundai Motor India Limited, I realised that moulding a great idea into a successful and practically viable project requires a diverse range of skills, revolving around both technology and management. An engineering background has provided me the vital technical expertise in my field of study, mechanical engineering, apart from honing my ability to analyze and reason. However, the nuances of managing my own enterprise can only be learnt through an MBA. This realisation coupled with my basic penchant for management made 'Marketing management' my first choice, when it was offered to me as an elective in my 7th semester' With its excellent infrastructure, experienced faculty and a well established alumni network, FMS provides the perfect setting for a budding entrepreneur like me to do my MBA. With an MBA from your institute, I feel, I would possess the business acumen pertinent to undertake a successful and rewarding career in the highly arduous corporate world. SOP185r “The person who makes a success of living is the one who see his goal steadily and aims for it unswervingly. That is dedication.” This quote by Cecil B. DeMille, perhaps, best sums up me and my life so far. Okay !! You are a dedicated guy. Point noted. Wondering to see if the same thread follows in the entire essay AND you can afford the extra words of the quote. Since childhood, machines have always fascinated me and with passage of time, it became by dream and passion to start my own firm, preferably in the manufacturing sector. As a huge step in this direction, I was fortunate enough to be admitted, by merit, into the department of mechanical engineering of the prestigious College of Engineering, Guindy in Chennai.

Is it possible to be admitted in Guindy without merit ? If no, then knock off the "by merit" word. Else its okay. Overall your focus is on the past and I dont know if it really warrants so much focus. However, during my internship at Hyundai Motor India Limited, I realised that moulding a great idea into a successful and practically viable project requires a diverse range of skills, revolving around both technology and management. An engineering background has provided me the vital technical expertise in my field of study, mechanical engineering, apart from honing my ability to analyze and reason. However, the nuances of managing my own enterprise can only be learnt through an MBA. This realisation coupled with my basic penchant for management made 'Marketing management' my first choice, when it was offered to me as an elective in my 7th semester' Viable means practical. So "practically viable" is redundant. Also, if its successful then its obviously practical. So just keep it as "a successful project". Otherwise its a very good paragraph. I liked the idea that you have mentioned you took a course in Management. Something definitely that merits a mention in the SOP to show your interest, not in the resume. With its excellent infrastructure, experienced faculty and a well established alumni network, FMS provides the perfect setting for a budding entrepreneur like me to do my MBA. With an MBA from your institute, I feel, I would possess the business acumen pertinent to undertake a successful and rewarding career in the highly arduous corporate world. Fine, but frankly this paragraph looks like - you read one and you read 'em all :mg: However there is nothing much you can do. Even if I were to write something it would similar so don't sweat :mg: My feedback: In retropsect the "dedication" waala quote seems out of place as I do see the thread in the essay that you are but nothing to substantiate such an opening line. Neither does it give you any food for thought. So knock it off. Para 1 dwells too much in your childhood. Anyone in India will say that people rarely get the ephiphany fairy to visit them at such an early age. So I would put it frankly and say that I was good in studies and very focussed and hence managed to get a seat in Guindy in my preferred branch or something like that. Para2 is the strongest point in your essay, whereas Para3 suffers from having very commonly used words. Maybe its a good idea to use a thesaurus and replace some words such as - "a successful and rewarding career in the highly arduous corporate world." SOP186 - FMS My Long term career Goal is to lead an organization of dynamic professionals to success in every endeavor. From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by series of appointments in positions of responsibility ever since school days (Class Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society, Computer Society President Etc). My experience in positions of responsibility has taught me how much I love to lead people, for instance, recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of my college’s National Level Techfest.

I excelled in my engineering studies (including topping the college) which gave me a technical grounding and helped me in developing a problem solving ability. However, I realize that the solution to most problems is seldom purely technical. During my internship at PricewaterhouseCoopers I was impressed by the clarity and razor-sharp insight demonstrated by my MBA Bosses. My second internship in a startup exposed to greater variety of functions – An experience I thoroughly enjoyed. I therefore concluded that Management Education is a correct stepping stone for a career in industry. I foresee myself leading a team of highly motivated professionals trying to solve exciting problems by leveraging technical and managerial talent. I believe in innovation, excellence and entrepreneurship. FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty. I have a passion for learning and have always tried to be around smart people so that I may learn from them. I believe that I will grow in such an exemplary environment. FMS is also reputed to have a very rigorous academic program and coupled with its excellent industrial associations is an ideal starting point of my journey. SOP186r My Long term career Goal is to lead an organization of dynamic professionals to success in every endeavor. From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by series of appointments in positions of responsibility ever since school days (Class Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society, Computer Society President Etc). My experience in positions of responsibility has taught me how much I love to lead people, for instance, recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of my college’s National Level Techfest. "how much i love to lead people" kinda stuck me as odd. You sound like Hitler re-born. "lead an organization of dynamic professionals to success in every endeavour" Ouch !! Lets clear the air a bit and bring in Mr.Objectivity :mg: Seriously though, you might want to be specific what you want to do. This statement is empty and on the verge of being too idealistic. A true leader might not have "dynamic" professionals all the time :mg: I excelled in my engineering studies (including topping the college) which gave me a technical grounding and helped me in developing a problem solving ability. However, I realize that the solution to most problems is seldom purely technical. Good enough. You might want to cut the redundancy by stating either you "excelled" or you "topped the college". During my internship at PricewaterhouseCoopers I was impressed by the clarity and razor-sharp insight demonstrated by my MBA Bosses. My second internship in a startup exposed to greater variety of functions – An experience I thoroughly enjoyed. I therefore concluded that Management Education is a correct stepping stone for a career in industry. I foresee myself leading a team of highly motivated professionals trying to solve exciting problems by leveraging technical and managerial talent. I believe in innovation, excellence and entrepreneurship.

".....exposed to greater variety of functions – An experience ..." awkward sentence construction. "Management Education" why the camel caps ? "correct" stepping stone ?? Its a stepping stone or its not. There is nothing like an "incorrect" stepping stone :mg: "career in industry" ?? With a technical qualification you cannot have a "career in industry" ? "I foresee myself leading a team of highly motivated professionals trying to solve exciting problems by leveraging technical and managerial talent." Again sounds too bombastic. Without being clear and objective. "I believe in innovation, excellence and entrepreneurship." Why introduce this now? You are sounding more like Anil Ambani :mg: FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty. I have a passion for learning and have always tried to be around smart people so that I may learn from them. I believe that I will grow in such an exemplary environment. FMS is also reputed to have a very rigorous academic program and coupled with its excellent industrial associations is an ideal starting point of my journey. "have always tried to be around smart people so that I may learn from them." ?? And what happens if you need to lead a team of dullards? The underlying theme seems to be that you hate idiots like me :mg: Very bland last paragraph. QE might know better but I wouldn't rate FMS as a "rigorous academic program". Overall here is my take: Keep the overall structure, be more objective. You come across as someone who is dazzled by the power of an MBA and wants to be associated only with "smart" people. Can you throw some light into what you want to do post-MBA? How about something less lofty like saying project management to begin with and going on to being an CxO with cross-functional skills that an MBA would provide you. Be clear to articulate both your short-term and long-term goals. SOP106rr My Long term career Goal is creating and leading a world class enterprise of dynamic professionals focusing on innovation, cutting edge technologies, excellence and entrepreneurship. From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by series of appointments in positions of responsibility ever since my school days, for instance as Class Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society Member, Computer Society President and most recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of college’s National Level Techfest. Excelling in my engineering studies (including topping the college) has given me a good technical grounding and a problem solving ability. During my internship at

PricewaterhouseCoopers the clarity and razor-sharp insight demonstrated by my mentors with management background greatly impressed me. My second internship in a startup exposed me to the many functional aspects of business, of which I had very limited knowledge and experience. I therefore concluded that management education would be a vital aid in achieving for my goal. I believe working as a Project Manager / Leader after my MBA for a few years would give me the adequate experience before starting out on my own. FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty and has a history of producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. FMS is also reputed to have a very rigorous academic program with innovative teaching methodology and coupled with its excellent industrial & academic associations as well as a strong alumni network is an ideal starting point of my journey. I have a passion for learning and believe that I will grow in such an exemplary environment. SOP106rrr My Long term career Goal is creating and leading a world class enterprise of dynamic professionals focusing on innovation, cutting edge technologies, excellence and entrepreneurship. I don't think its still very focussed. Say that you want to lead a enterprise which focuses on "innovation, cutting edge technologies" leading dynamic professionals towards "excellence". From early on I realized an innate leadership capability as is demonstrated by series of appointments in positions of responsibility ever since my school days, for instance as Class Representative, Student Council Member, Debating Society Member, Computer Society President and most recently as the Chief Student Coordinator of college’s National Level Techfest. Good enough. Excelling in my engineering studies (including topping the college) has given me a good technical grounding and a problem solving ability. During my internship at PricewaterhouseCoopers the clarity and razor-sharp insight demonstrated by my mentors with management background greatly impressed me. My second internship in a startup exposed me to the many functional aspects of business, of which I had very limited knowledge and experience. I therefore concluded that management education would be a vital aid in achieving for my goal. I believe working as a Project Manager / Leader after my MBA for a few years would give me the adequate experience before starting out on my own. Good. FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty and has a history of producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. FMS is also reputed to have a very rigorous academic program with innovative teaching methodology and coupled with its excellent industrial & academic associations as well as a strong alumni network is an ideal starting point of my journey. I have a passion for learning and believe that I will grow in such an exemplary environment. Good.

Great improvement from your last attempt. This one looks good to go. SOP187 - FMS The markets are moving towards an ever-increasing need for change makers. This has placed a dramatic premium on those who take the time to properly equip themselves with the required skills. I foresee my own career moving towards people management. This foresight along with my entrepreneurial bent and affinity for technology will play a large role in the evolution of my career. For me, the FMS programme is a significant component of this training. I have discovered that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an analytical nature inherent to MBA, which I believe is duplicable only by committing 2 years to the academic study of business. It’s a preparation before embarking on a real thing. FMS presents a right opportunity for this preparation with its career development facilities of world-class infrastructure, a high quality team of pedagogy, excellent industry interaction and a very competent environment. With my hands on experience of working with people under different conditions like organizing various technical symposiums or leading my college Chess team successfully in various tournaments, I believe that I have learnt more in trying to understand people and overcame certain misconceptions. My achievements are obvious as is indicated in the other sections of this application. But if I could lay claim to my greatest achievement, it would be the understanding of the people. ”Put yourself in their shoes and act accordingly ”. I learnt my lessons. MBA, for me, would be a source of ‘practice, practice, practice’ before stepping onto the field, life included. Based on my observations of FMS MBAs in action and the reputation of the school, a FMS MBA would be a ‘perfect training’, so to speak. SOP187r The markets are moving towards an ever-increasing need for change makers. This has placed a dramatic premium on those who take the time to properly equip themselves with the required skills. I foresee my own career moving towards people management. This foresight along with my entrepreneurial bent and affinity for technology will play a large role in the evolution of my career. For me, the FMS programme is a significant component of this training. "Change management" and "People Management" are 2 different (though inter-related concepts). So though your starting talks about the former, the latter comes across as a dampner. Otherwise, kinda okay. I might want to reduce the first 2 sentence into one for brevity. I have discovered that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an analytical nature inherent to MBA, which I believe is duplicable only by committing 2 years to the academic study of business. It’s a preparation before embarking on a real thing. FMS presents a right opportunity for this preparation with its career development facilities of world-class infrastructure, a high quality team of pedagogy, excellent industry interaction and a very competent environment.

How did you "discover" that MBA provides that advantage? The second sentence looks good but frankly i'm confused. I know the "purpose" of this paragraph but feel you need to bring it out with better words. With my hands on experience of working with people under different conditions like organizing various technical symposiums or leading my college Chess team successfully in various tournaments, I believe that I have learnt more in trying to understand people and overcame certain misconceptions. My achievements are obvious as is indicated in the other sections of this application. But if I could lay claim to my greatest achievement, it would be the understanding of the people. ”Put yourself in their shoes and act accordingly ”. I learnt my lessons. How did you overcome the "misconceptions" ? As before, if you cannot tell a story then spare the "bait" words. I think you have touched upon the quality of "empathy" very well. You can tell a short story to drive the point home. It will gell well with your starting para as well, when you attempted to talk something about people skills. MBA, for me, would be a source of ‘practice, practice, practice’ before stepping onto the field, life included. Based on my observations of FMS MBAs in action and the reputation of the school, a FMS MBA would be a ‘perfect training’, so to speak. Good point. Somehow, the nitpicker is worried about the intracasies of the choice of words and sentence construction, but don't bother too much. Overall its good but you need to be more crisp. SOP188 - FMS Growing up in a business family has exposed me to the intricacies and complexities of business dynamics. I found that running a business was not only challenging but also highly satisfying and rewarding. Hence I aspire to be a successful entrepreneur. To acquire sound technical knowledge I did my engineering in Electronics and Communication .I always strive for excellence in whatever I do and this is reflected in my academic records in which I have consistently secured distinction. My enthusiasm to learn new things and explore new ideas led to my presenting a paper in the National Conference on Image Processing held at Indian Institute Of Science, Bangalore. I have won prizes in a number of inter-college and intramural chess tournaments. Juggling between academics and extra-curricular activities has taught me effective time management, multitasking and prioritizing. Organizing technical events at the college level has helped me hone my organizational ability. These qualities I believe are essential in the making of a successful business person. In addition to the technical knowledge and right skill set, a formal management education will equip me to face the challenges of the business environment and take decisions confidently. As I have wanted to do my management studies in the best institute, FMS is my natural choice. The presence of faculty of international standards, small batch size, and strong alumni network make FMS unique. With its emphasis on excellence and leadership and innovative courses which match my interests I believe that FMS will help me achieve my career goals.

SOP188r Growing up in a business family has exposed me to the intricacies and complexities of business dynamics. I found that running a business was not only challenging but also highly satisfying and rewarding. Hence I aspire to be a successful entrepreneur. Very good opening lines. Crisp and to the point. Immediately piques the interest of the reader. To acquire sound technical knowledge I did my engineering in Electronics and Communication .I always strive for excellence in whatever I do and this is reflected in my academic records in which I have consistently secured distinction. My enthusiasm to learn new things and explore new ideas led to my presenting a paper in the National Conference on Image Processing held at Indian Institute Of Science, Bangalore. I have won prizes in a number of inter-college and intramural chess tournaments. Juggling between academics and extra-curricular activities has taught me effective time management, multitasking and prioritizing. Organizing technical events at the college level has helped me hone my organizational ability. These qualities I believe are essential in the making of a successful business person. I cannot believe that I still don't have any flaws to pick. Excellent. In addition to the technical knowledge and right skill set, a formal management education will equip me to face the challenges of the business environment and take decisions confidently. As I have wanted to do my management studies in the best institute, FMS is my natural choice. The presence of faculty of international standards, small batch size, and strong alumni network make FMS unique. With its emphasis on excellence and leadership and innovative courses which match my interests I believe that FMS will help me achieve my career goals. Hats off !! This SOP is perfect. SOP189 - TISS The MBA program of TISS provides the perfect training to achieve my entrepreneurial ambitions. I am currently pursuing my bachelors in computer science engineering from XXX and enjoy acquiring new skills and information, which help me to adapt to the fast-changing world, as well as pique my interest in innovation. My goal is to acquire skills and work in IT-enabled services companies or management consultancies in a challenging environment. I feel that a business school would balance theory with real world application and such a program would deepen my expertise and broaden my perspectives. It would add value to my skill set and give a direction to my career. I value the fact that learning does not stop at classroom level but rather continues through fieldwork and extra-curricular activities. I have actively participated in workshops and hosted events at school and college level apart from serving as the Joint Secretary of IEEE-Student's chapter at our college. I was also the Head Prefect of my school. All these have given me

insights into management. Apart from listening to music and reading books, I also enjoy watching sports like Formula 1 and have represented my school in CBSE zonal basketball matches. I love meeting new people and making new friends. SOP189r The MBA program of TISS provides the perfect training to achieve my entrepreneurial ambitions. I am currently pursuing my bachelors in computer science engineering from XXX and enjoy acquiring new skills and information, which help me to adapt to the fast-changing world, as well as pique my interest in innovation. You talk about (a) Why MBA (b) Why TISS (c) Entrepreneurship (d) Innovation (e) Your current undergrad (f) What you like in a whirlwind 2 sentences. 10 on 10 for brevity but a 0 on 10 for getting your point across. Take it slowly. What is the introduction you want to start with? Focus on one point and take it ahead. My goal is to acquire skills and work in IT-enabled services companies or management consultancies in a challenging environment. I feel that a business school would balance theory with real world application and such a program would deepen my expertise and broaden my perspectives. It would add value to my skill set and give a direction to my career. Frankly, this second para is a lot better. I might be cynical if I say it sounds very hackeneyed but I think its pardonable :mg: I value the fact that learning does not stop at classroom level but rather continues through fieldwork and extra-curricular activities. I have actively participated in workshops and hosted events at school and college level apart from serving as the Joint Secretary of IEEE-Student's chapter at our college. I was also the Head Prefect of my school. All these have given me insights into management. Very good. Though you might want to cut down the details a bit. Apart from listening to music and reading books, I also enjoy watching sports like Formula 1 and have represented my school in CBSE zonal basketball matches. I love meeting new people and making new friends. Isn't this mentioned in your resume. Even if no, then this looks incomplete. You might want to merge it with some other part of the essay. Not like a coccyx. SOP190 - FMS I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand.My endeavour has always been to become a successful manager occupying a significant position in an organization where i utilize and use my knowledge to guide a team of individuals in achieving the team goal and thereby driving my firm to new heights of success.

Having completed my bachelors in Information Technology from XYZ, this field has always fascinated me. After my degree studies, I started working with ABC. This opened up a totally new and fascinating world of science and technology to me. The flat orgranizational structure of ABC provided me with some crucial insights on how various business decisions are taken in an organization. I could easily realize that I need a comprehensive academic program to develop the necessary management skills in myself. In my view a leader can be successful only when he exhibits abilities like vision, strategy management, risk management and most importantly belief in himself. He should be able to effectively comprehend the current business requirements and should have the vision to analyse direction of changing business requirements in future.When i explored the PGDBM program in FMS, i could feel that this program can quench my thirst for a degree in business administration. FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards,corporate exposure and rich alumni network can develop and enhance my abilities to handle the ever-changing and unpredictable business world.I believe that together with the knowledge i acquired in my undergraduation and with the new skills, thinking and knowledge i would gain at FMS, i can lay down a stable foundation for myself to succeed in my dream role. SOP190r I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand.My endeavour has always been to become a successful manager occupying a significant position in an organization where i utilize and use my knowledge to guide a team of individuals in achieving the team goal and thereby driving my firm to new heights of success. Very generic but then sounds pretty okay. Having completed my bachelors in Information Technology from XYZ, this field has always fascinated me. After my degree studies, I started working with ABC. This opened up a totally new and fascinating world of science and technology to me. The flat orgranizational structure of ABC provided me with some crucial insights on how various business decisions are taken in an organization. I could easily realize that I need a comprehensive academic program to develop the necessary management skills in myself. "Having completed my bachelors in Information Technology from XYZ, this field has always fascinated me. After my degree studies, I started working with ABC" is redundant as its already found in your resume. "totally new and fascinating world of science and technology to me" = what were you doing all the while in college then :mg: Good point on the flat structure part. In my view a leader can be successful only when he exhibits abilities like vision, strategy management, risk management and most importantly belief in himself. He should be able to effectively comprehend the current business requirements and should have the vision to analyse direction of changing business requirements in future.When i explored the PGDBM program in FMS, i could feel that this program can quench my thirst for a degree in business administration.

"business requirements" repeated twice, doesn't look good. Your view of the leader blah blah is all fine. But thats exactly why you don't need an MBA - because these are skills you can never gain in 2years :mg: So you might want to put something else before you say "When i explored the PGDBM program in FMS, .... blah blah" FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards,corporate exposure and rich alumni network can develop and enhance my abilities to handle the ever-changing and unpredictable business world.I believe that together with the knowledge i acquired in my undergraduation and with the new skills, thinking and knowledge i would gain at FMS, i can lay down a stable foundation for myself to succeed in my dream role. Good finish. My feedback: Generally nothing glaringly "wrong" except for the last but one para. SOP191 - FMS "Play to win". Something that has been imprinted on my mind always. That, combined with my passion and tendency to be a perfectionist has always driven me to be one of the best, whether it has been a football field or a classroom, and I have achieved that. My diverse interests have given me an oppurtunity to experience and handle pressure in numerous aspects of life. A B.E from Mumbai University, advanced my technical know-how. It also honed my time management and analytical skills and taught me to work harder. Following my graduation, I was placed with Patni Computer Systems. Following that, I joined Capgemini India Pvt Ltd. Two and a half years in the software industry made me face up to daunting challenges, and tested me greatly, be it my adaptability, my knowledge, my decision making or my inter-personal skills. It also exposed me to the ERP package (SAP) which gave me an insight to the workings of a business. Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me, and I desire to acquire a management degree in the field of Finance. This makes it ridiculously easy to aim for FMS, which would be the unanimous first choice of every MBA-Finance aspirant. The excellent summer placements are evidence enough to prove that "emphasis on concepts, and efficient feedback" are more than mere claims, and I am sure that an MBA from FMS is a trump card in todays market. SOP191r "Play to win". Something that has been imprinted on my mind always. That, combined with my passion and tendency to be a perfectionist has always driven me to be one of the best, whether it has been a football field or a classroom, and I have achieved that. My diverse interests have given me an oppurtunity to experience and handle pressure in numerous aspects of life. How are you the "best" ? Quantify it ? Have you always stood 1st in each exam you have taken right from the childhood ? Have you played football for India at the highest level? How do you

say you are the "best" ? You are passionate and like what you do is a different thing, but to say you are the "best in everything you have done" is an overstatement. The opening lines is very arrogant and shows that you cannot be a good team-player. A B.E from Mumbai University, advanced my technical know-how. It also honed my time management and analytical skills and taught me to work harder. Following my graduation, I was placed with Patni Computer Systems. Following that, I joined Capgemini India Pvt Ltd. Two and a half years in the software industry made me face up to daunting challenges, and tested me greatly, be it my adaptability, my knowledge, my decision making or my inter-personal skills. It also exposed me to the ERP package (SAP) which gave me an insight to the workings of a business. Club the 1st 2 setences into one. "A B.E .... advanced my ..., honed my ... and taught me to work harder" There seems to be a disconnect between Patni and Capgemini. I presume you quit early. I am rephrasing it for you: "I have worked in companies such as PCS Capgemini which has made me face daunting challenges - be it testing my adaptibility, my knowledge, my decision making or my inter-personal skills" "It exposed me to ERP (SAP) which ....." Though I pursued a technical degree, monetary matters have always interested me, and I desire to acquire a management degree in the field of Finance. Aap pair pe khuladi nahee maar rahe ho but khuladi pe pair maar rahe ho :mg: Just say that you need to have a holistic view of how business works and for that its imperative that you know the financial side of things. This makes it ridiculously easy to aim for FMS, which would be the unanimous first choice of every MBA-Finance aspirant. The excellent summer placements are evidence enough to prove that "emphasis on concepts, and efficient feedback" are more than mere claims, and I am sure that an MBA from FMS is a trump card in todays market. "Ridiculously easy" ?? Extremely casual. "unanimous first choice of every MBA-finance aspirant" ?? So if you had a choice between IIM-A fin and FMS Fin you would choose the latter?? Who are you trying to kid? :mg: "The excellent summer placements" are evidence that your reasons to do an MBA are f***ed up :mg: SOP192 - FMS If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them. __ Henry David Thoreau

Acquiring an MBA will be an important step towards laying the foundations under my airborne castle i.e. my goal of becoming an entrepreneur. I foresee my own career moving in the direction of Indian as well as in the international business, initially from a managerial post to a leadership role within a manufacturing entity, preferably a startup venture. The first step which I took in the pursuit of my goal was to join an Engineering course. I learned several things while pursuing my Diploma and Bachelor’s in Mechanical Engineering and then working as a trainee Engineer in RaychemRPG. While being a Mechanical Engineer has made me analytically strong, the short stint at RaychemRPG introduced me to the real world of manufacturing. Though both my experiences first at college and then at work were vastly different, the one common thing that I learnt was the importance of being well versed with the management aspects for running a business. In light of my entrepreneurial bent there is no doubting that FMS with over fifty years of vast experience of shaping managers into leaders is quite appropriate for my purposes. I believe that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an analytical nature inherent to MBA’s which is duplicable only by committing two years to the academic study of business. With my inherent skills and the unique program structure at FMS, it is my belief that I shall ultimately succeed in laying a strong foundation under my airborne castle. SOP192r If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them. __ Henry David Thoreau Acquiring an MBA will be an important step towards laying the foundations under my airborne castle i.e. my goal of becoming an entrepreneur. I foresee my own career moving in the direction of Indian as well as in the international business, initially from a managerial post to a leadership role within a manufacturing entity, preferably a startup venture. Managerial to Strategic role sounds better. The first step which I took in the pursuit of my goal was to join an Engineering course. I learned several things while pursuing my Diploma and Bachelor’s in Mechanical Engineering and then working as a trainee Engineer in RaychemRPG. While being a Mechanical Engineer has made me analytically strong, the short stint at RaychemRPG introduced me to the real world of manufacturing.

You are wasting too many words talking about stuff in your resume. Best way to get it down to 250. Though both my experiences first at college and then at work were vastly different, the one common thing that I learnt was the importance of being well versed with the management aspects for running a business. In light of my entrepreneurial bent there is no doubting that FMS with over fifty years of vast experience of shaping managers into leaders is quite appropriate for my purposes. You talk about entrepreneurship and then jump to manager/leadership thingy that FMS is doing. Seems disconnected. Talk about some famous entrepreneurs who have passed out of FMS. I believe that an MBA provides a distinct advantage over those without. There is an analytical nature inherent to MBA’s which is duplicable only by committing two years to the academic study of business. With my inherent skills and the unique program structure at FMS, it is my belief that I shall ultimately succeed in laying a strong foundation under my airborne castle. Why is FMS having a "unique program structure" ? I don't know if it has. Good point is the way you have ended - with a reference to the quote. Overall my feedback is that, it has a lot of good elements, but lacks a cohesiveness. So a person reading it will end up wondering "who" you really are and what you want to do. SOP193 - FMS I completely believe in the powerful adage "If you keep doing what you've been doing you'll keep getting what you've been getting". My objective in life is to grow in every aspect – be it personal or professional. In the next few years I see myself high up the corporate ladder and to achieve this objective I want to continously upgrade myself by learning from every oppurtunity. The various roles and responsibilities I assumed like that of ‘House Prefect’ in school or ‘Class Representative’ in junior college or organizing events like ‘Concepts’ (National Level Techfest) helped me to discover my innate leadership qualities. Working as college Magazine Secretary and more recently leading a team of fifteen members for a social cause of collecting funds amounting to 1.5 lakhs to donate to Army Paraplegic Rehabilitation Centre in Pune gave me a brief experience of managing a team. After my degree studies, working with the IT firm of HSBC group, one of the largest banking and financial services organizations in the world, a thoroughly learning experience of working in a truly global environment. My job gave me an opportunity to travel to the USA that gave me a first hand experience of interacting with the customers. During this period I realized that apart from having strong leadership qualities and good communication capabilities, which I definitely possess, a manager must have an in-depth understanding of utilizing technology efficiently and thorough domain knowledge in order to lead and execute global projects. An MBA from FMS,

through its various well-designed courses will teach me the nuances of management and gain precious domain knowledge as well as enhance my capability to face challenges. I am sure, FMS with its world class faculty, strong alumni network and a highly competitive peer group would bring the best out of me and help me to realize my dream of reaching the highest echelons in the industry. SOP193r I completely believe in the powerful adage "If you keep doing what you've been doing you'll keep getting what you've been getting". My objective in life is to grow in every aspect – be it personal or professional. In the next few years I see myself high up the corporate ladder and to achieve this objective I want to continously upgrade myself by learning from every oppurtunity. Okay !! But you need to quantify it. What do you want to do ? "high up the corporate ladder" sounds juvenile. The various roles and responsibilities I assumed like that of ‘House Prefect’ in school or ‘Class Representative’ in junior college or organizing events like ‘Concepts’ (National Level Techfest) helped me to discover my innate leadership qualities. Working as college Magazine Secretary and more recently leading a team of fifteen members for a social cause of collecting funds amounting to 1.5 lakhs to donate to Army Paraplegic Rehabilitation Centre in Pune gave me a brief experience of managing a team. Why mention all this here ? Isn't it there in your resume ? Also I think you are exceeding the word limits. After my degree studies, working with the IT firm of HSBC group, one of the largest banking and financial services organizations in the world, a thoroughly learning experience of working in a truly global environment. My job gave me an opportunity to travel to the USA that gave me a first hand experience of interacting with the customers. During this period I realized that apart from having strong leadership qualities and good communication capabilities, which I definitely possess, a manager must have an in-depth understanding of utilizing technology efficiently and thorough domain knowledge in order to lead and execute global projects. An MBA from FMS, through its various well-designed courses will teach me the nuances of management and gain precious domain knowledge as well as enhance my capability to face challenges. Good enough. Nice that you mentioned your US travel here. I am sure, FMS with its world class faculty, strong alumni network and a highly competitive peer group would bring the best out of me and help me to realize my dream of reaching the highest echelons in the industry. Why again talk about FMS when you have already done so in the last sentence of the previous paragraph ? SOP194 - FMS-MS

During my two year stint with HSBC-GLT, one of fastest growing software firm dedicated to work for the HSBC group I realized my liking towards IT services industry. I wish to continue a career in the IT industry with special emphasis on financial sector. I also realized that while working in an IT company it is just not enough to be able to write thousands of line of code. We need to have strong interpersonal and communication skills. We need to able to make full use of technology and be ready to adapt to the latest technical innovations. We also need thorough domain knowledge of the sector we are catering to. An MBA would help me to have a 360 degrees approach before suggesting a solution to a problem. An MBA-MS from FMS with specialization in IT & ITES along with functional specialization in Finance would empower me with what it takes to reach the top in the IT industry. SOP194r Well written. Short and to the point. BTW, change the sentence "thousands of lines of code" - sounds too flippant. Also "We need to have strong interpersonal and communication skills" is something I really don't think you are going to do an MBA for. So drop it. SOP195 - FMS Being brought up in a business family I naturally wanted to be a successful entrepreneur like my maternal grandfather who was my idol. Staying in his vicinity for years I gathered that even for people with talent a strong desire to succeed combined with the necessary dedication is a must for being successful. Even in my childhood I tried to inculcate these attributes in me. Fortunately I cannot I cannot recall a year in senior school when I didn’t excel in studies. Apart from that I was always active in various co-curricular activities and I was the House Captain for three consecutive years and also the Secretary of Science Club for two consecutive years. My analytical abilities and rational thinking led me to pursue physics at Presidency College Kolkata arguably the best basic science college in India. I then went on to do my master’s from none other than I.I.T. Kanpur. Having completed my Master’s I wanted to work towards my dream of being an entrepreneur. But before starting off on my own I wanted to gain the requisite experience and competence .I therefore wanted to be a part of the driving force of a company which has strong growth potential. However in spite of my innate leadership and strong analytical skills I felt I needed the grooming from a good B-school to be a successful manager. Hence I wanted to pursue a general MBA program from one of the premier B schools in India.FMS Delhi with its five decades of reputation in the corporate world, excellent faculty and small batch size provides the perfect

learning oppurtunity fits the bill. Hence I strongly believe that will help me mould myself into a successful manager and ready to live my dreams. SOP196 - FMS "An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come"- Victor Hugo Idea and imagination is the driving impulse for mankind. Having believed in this right from childhood, I always had the zeal to learn new things, formulate and realize new ideas . A degree in electronics engineering gave me a good platform during which I took part in national level paper presentations, hardware designs & project exhibitions where I showcased my innovative ideas in the fields of telemedicine & circuit electronics and won many awards. Add to this, a meritorious record in academics and as a student representative and an organizing member of technical events, student meets viz., I ve developed interpersonal skills, eloquence and leadership qualities proving my versatility. Even after college my zest for learning did not dampen. As a software developer in XXX, I worked on a rapidly evolving technology where I learnt the mantra of developing an idea into business and how critical is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an idea & Organization. Now back into family business , I have deveoped and marketed a new brand product fostering profits and brand value of my firm. This diverse work experience has helped me understand the nuances of business both at corporate and grass root levels. My long term career goal is to become the head of an organisation that is driven by ideas and innovations where I can utilize my managerial & technical skills to play the lead role in the growth of the firm. To realize this goal an MBA @ a revered institute like FMS is an imperative and a logical first step. MBA is more for giving structure to your thoughts. . With over 5 decades of academic excellence, a wide industry interface, renowned faculty and vibrant alumni network, FMS will give me a rich source of wisdom and a well needed foundation to enhance my abilities to handle the unpredictable and never stagnant world of business. SOP196r "An invasion of armies can be resisted, but not an idea whose time has come"- Victor Hugo Anyway..to ur admitted CCP'ed SOP ;) Idea and imagination is the driving impulse for mankind. Having believed in this right from childhood, I always had the zeal to learn new things, formulate and realize new ideas . nice old stole lines

A degree in electronics engineering gave me a good platform during which I took part in national level paper presentations, hardware designs & project exhibitions where I showcased my innovative ideas in the fields of telemedicine & circuit electronics and won many awards. Consider making this sentence shorter, eh ! hard to believe that there is only a sentence which is staring up at us right now. Secondly, Which awards ? Unless you won some seriously nice stuff, it could backfire Add to this, a meritorious record in academics and as a student representative and an organizing member of technical events, student meets viz., I ve developed interpersonal skills, eloquence and leadership qualities proving my versatility. fair enough Even after college my zest for learning did not dampen. As a software developer in XXX, I worked on a rapidly evolving technology where I learnt the mantra of developing an idea into business and how critical is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an idea & Organization. mantra of developing an idea into business..are you sure about this ? Nothing wrong in claiming this, ofcourse. But thoda sa humility would be nice Now back into family business , I have deveoped and marketed a new brand product fostering profits and brand value of my firm. This diverse work experience has helped me understand the nuances of business both at corporate and grass root levels. brand product, eh ? wazzat ?? and how is this diverse workex ?? Unless ur family firm is not into software.. My long term career goal is to become the head of an organisation that is driven by ideas and innovations where I can utilize my managerial & technical skills to play the lead role in the growth of the firm. Whats stopping ur current biz from being that organization. You can utilize whatever managerial/tech skill et al you want to To realize this goal an MBA @ a revered institute like FMS is an imperative and a logical first step. MBA is more for giving structure to your thoughts. . How is the underlined line relevant to the point of discussion ? With over 5 decades of academic excellence, a wide industry interface, renowned faculty and vibrant alumni network, FMS will give me a rich source of wisdom and a well needed foundation to enhance my abilities to handle the unpredictable and never stagnant world of business.

Dude, creative writing nahi hai. Do write something which is nice, sensible, logcial & BORING..but not this. its a SOP, take it seriously ;) SOP197 - FMS In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative original thinker unless you can also sell what you create.&quot; David M. Ogilvy I, first realized the significance of these words while assisting the sponsorship secretary during my college fest. With proper marketing and presentation, one can easily convert a good idea to a successful idea. And this is what I plan to learn by doing MBA from FMS. In today’s world of outsourcing, most of Companies/individuals want to outsource whatever they are not skilled at. Beit a big event like organizing All India competitions ora small marriage function by an individual. And this is where I see a tremendous potential. In long term I want to own an event management company. My four years of engineering helped me gain the necessary academic potential. The second phase started with the application of the potential and building a foundation for management by interacting with clients and managing team members. With this strong groundwork I think I am ready to move into the third phase of learning managementand FMS provides the perfect setup for it. FMS, with all its advantages...........(blah blah blah... some stories abt FMS)...........Thus,FMS emerges as my first choice B-school. SOP197r In the modern world of business, it is useless to be a creative original thinker unless you can also sell what you create.&quot; David M. Ogilvy I, first realized the significance of these words while assisting the sponsorship secretary during my college fest. With proper marketing and presentation, one can easily convert a good idea to a successful idea. And this is what I plan to learn by doing MBA from FMS. Good starting. To the point and crisp. In today’s world of outsourcing, most of Companies/individuals want to outsource whatever they are not skilled at. Beit a big event like organizing All India competitions ora small marriage function by an individual. And this is where I see a tremendous potential. In long term I want to own an event management company. Good. Don't start a sentnece with a conjuction "and" My four years of engineering helped me gain the necessary academic potential. The second phase started with the application of the potential and building a foundation for management by interacting with clients and managing team members. With this strong groundwork I think I am ready to move into the third phase of learning managementand FMS provides the perfect setup for it. Good.

FMS, with all its advantages...........(blah blah blah... some stories abt FMS)...........Thus,FMS emerges as my first choice B-school. If you dont have the time to write a decent SOP ending then I dont have time to review it. Overall - very well written. Short and crisp and definitely very different than others. Notice how you have not mentioned any points from your resume here. A definite plus. SOP198 - FMS I perceive myself as a ‘Problem Solver’. From an early age problems of all sorts, be it a complex problem involving multiple dimensions or a simple matter of crossing a road in Delhi, have interweaved me and drive me towards finding a solution. I am happiest when I have a problem at hand that needs a solution. To satisfy this need in me, that is, to understand problems and to device solutions for them, I had pursued engineering degree and after that joined Infosys Technologies Ltd to understand technology as a tool for the same. However, after 4 years pursuing my degree and over a year working, I have come to realize that the most compelling issues faced by the world today cannot be solved by Technology alone. What is required is an ability to leverage technology effectively to attack a problem in an organized and efficient manner. What my technical background has left me with is a set of highly efficient tools but limited knowledge about the multiple facets involving a problem. To help bridge this gap between being a tool and becoming a complete entity, I feel a formal course in a premium management institute like FMS could be a great push in the right direction. With its great blend of strong basic fundamentals and the ability to utilize them in a ever changing world, I feel FMS would prepare me for any situation that I might face, be it on a professional or personal front. Keeping in mind my interests and career goals, FMS would be a great place for me to grow intellectually as well as personally. With an international standard faculty, strong alumni network and highly energetic students as peers, I would have a huge knowledge base to draw upon to achieve my goals in life. SOP199 - FMS Right from my childhood I always dreamt of making it big in life. Being brought up in a business family I naturally wanted to be a successful entrepreneur like my maternal grandfather who was my idol. Staying in his vicinity for years I gathered that even for people with talent a strong desire to succeed combined with the necessary dedication is a must for being successful. I always tried to

inculcate these attributes in me. Fortunately I cannot recall a year in senior school when I didn’t excel in studies. Apart from that I was always active in various co-curricular activities and I was the House Captain for three consecutive years and also the Secretary of Science Club for two years at a stretch. My analytical abilities and rational thinking led me to pursue physics at Presidency College Kolkata arguably the best basic science college in India. I then went on to do my master’s from none other than I.I.T. Kanpur. Having completed my Master’s I wanted to work towards my dream of being an entrepreneur. But before starting off on my own I wanted to gain the requisite experience and competence .I therefore wanted to be a part of the driving force of a company which has strong growth potential. However in spite of my innate leadership and strong analytical skills I felt I needed the grooming to be a successful manager. Hence I wanted to pursue a general MBA program from one of the premier B schools in India. FMS Delhi with its five decades of reputation in the corporate world, excellent faculty and small batch size thereby providing perfect learning oppurtunity, fits the bill. Apart from that being a part of the Numero Uno Delhi University gives a chance to interact with pupils of various disciplines enabling one to have a holistic view of this world. Hence I strongly believe that a general MBA program from FMS will help me mould myself into a successful manager and make me ready to live my dreams. SOP200 - FMS “For others management is a course, for me it is a way of life”. Truly speaking, I have been a manager since my childhood days where I have been organizing and leading teams effectively. While maintaining excellent academic record, I have loads of extra curricular activities in my basket. Managing people was more of a habit, then a hobby. Moreover the five months of work experience at IBM has further made me realized that a complete knowledge of business helps understand the functional details better and accelerates decision making process. All these experiences have made me realize my goal in life-to lead an organization driven by ideas and innovations where I can utilize my managerial and technical skills to play the lead role in the growth of the firm. I desire to attain a top notch position in an industry where I can boost the decision making process and enhance its productivity thereby enabling my company to become the market leader. I believe given a platform, I can enhance my skills better and achieve my goals. I understand that my true potential will get utilized where I can tune my management skills from an institute like FMS, which “believes in pushing the boundaries”. I believe that my stint at FMS will help me in developing my managerial skills and hone my business acumen. Also at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork between the students, faculty staff and alumni, I will have the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. It is with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life. SOP200r

“For others management is a course, for me it is a way of life”. Whose quote is this ? If it is someone elses say who it belongs to. If its yours it sounds desperate. Knock it off. Truly speaking, I have been a manager since my childhood days where I have been organizing and leading teams effectively. While maintaining excellent academic record, I have loads of extra curricular activities in my basket. Managing people was more of a habit, then a hobby. Arrey bhai - what you have done? You sound over the top when you say "Managing people was more of a habit, then a hobby". Matlab aapke saath raho toh aap mujhe bhi "manage" karne lago ge :mg: Scary thought :mg: (BTW its "than" not "then" :wink:) Moreover the five months of work experience at IBM has further made me realized that a complete knowledge of business helps understand the functional details better and accelerates decision making process. Boring but finally you are atleast sounding SOP-istique !! :mg: All these experiences have made me realize my goal in life-to lead an organization driven by ideas and innovations where I can utilize my managerial and technical skills to play the lead role in the growth of the firm. I desire to attain a top notch position in an industry where I can boost the decision making process and enhance its productivity thereby enabling my company to become the market leader. "All these experiences" = which ones ? You have not quantified them "Top notch position in an industry where I can ........" = reeks of immaturity and lack of clarity. So please be more specific - which industry, why. I believe given a platform, I can enhance my skills better and achieve my goals. I understand that my true potential will get utilized where I can tune my management skills from an institute like FMS, which “believes in pushing the boundaries”. I believe that my stint at FMS will help me in developing my managerial skills and hone my business acumen. Also at FMS, with its emphasis on teamwork between the students, faculty staff and alumni, I will have the opportunity to be a leader and a team player. It is with this in mind I am looking forward for an experience that could shape my life. Its not a "stint at FMS". "teamwork between students faculty staff and alumni" = I think you got something wrong here. Or maybe I didnt understand how. Overall my feedback is that this SOP lacks two essential components - CLARITY and OBJECTIVITY. So what you do is rework on coming up with atleast a relatively clear post-MBA goal. I think then things will fall into place. SOP201 - FMS

“A dream becomes a goal when action is taken towards its achievement.” – Bo Bennet. A graduation in Electrical and Electronics engineering has given me a strong foundation from technical side. It has also honed my interpersonal skills like leadership qualities and team management by providing me opportunities to be a chairman of a national level technical symposium and secretary of Social service league. Being a part of Global Consulting Practices (Infrastructure Services) group in TCS for the past one year has helped me develop my interpersonal skills, team management skills and ability to handle pressure. My experiences with consulting assignments for the past six months have made me realize that technical knowledge and business knowledge are cross functional. The first logical step to acquire domain knowledge would be to pursue an MBA. Having a vision of starting an IT services organization in the next 7-8 years and developing it into a successful one, I have to learn the management principles and methods to apply them. An MBA in systems or operations would help me understand the nuances of management and guide me acquire good business knowledge to convert my dream into goal. I believe that FMS with its world class faculty and Infrastructure offers me a unique opportunity to learn the management principles and give me relevant experience and interaction with competitive and dynamic people. An MBA from FMS would provide me the necessary foundation to prepare myself to enter into the corporate world with confidence and exposure. SOP201r “A dream becomes a goal when action is taken towards its achievement.” – Bo Bennet. A graduation in Electrical and Electronics engineering has given me a strong foundation from technical side. It has also honed my interpersonal skills like leadership qualities and team management by providing me opportunities to be a chairman of a national level technical symposium and secretary of Social service league. Okay. Being a part of Global Consulting Practices (Infrastructure Services) group in TCS for the past one year has helped me develop my interpersonal skills, team management skills and ability to handle pressure. My experiences with consulting assignments for the past six months have made me realize that technical knowledge and business knowledge are cross functional. The first logical step to acquire domain knowledge would be to pursue an MBA. You have not addressed How its made you. Maybe you want to put some specific, quantifiable things you have done in TCS - but outside the scope of your resume. Having a vision of starting an IT services organization in the next 7-8 years and developing it into a successful one, I have to learn the management principles and methods to apply them. An

MBA in systems or operations would help me understand the nuances of management and guide me acquire good business knowledge to convert my dream into goal. Good shows atleast you are focussed on what you want. I believe that FMS with its world class faculty and Infrastructure offers me a unique opportunity to learn the management principles and give me relevant experience and interaction with competitive and dynamic people. An MBA from FMS would provide me the necessary foundation to prepare myself to enter into the corporate world with confidence and exposure. Yaada yaada ........ :mg: Overall, its okay. Ready to go. SOP202 - FMS “I will act as if what I do makes a difference”- William James Business and entrepreneurship has always inspired fascination in me. Apart from the exciting and challenging prospect of starting and running ones own business, the aspect of entrepreneurship that appeals to me the most is that it provides a great opportunity to put ones ideas and principles into practice, make a difference in ones own way, in short ‘to matter’. Entrepreneurship, I feel, is my calling and my career goal in the long term. While doing engineering from the prestigious Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology (NSIT), Delhi, I have been introduced to the world of technology, which is integral to most businesses today. However, along with my strong academic education, I consider a significant part of my learning to have come from interactions with my peers, seniors and teachers in college. Being involved in group project taught me the virtues of discipline, dedication and team work. Organizing events in college fests have taught me vital people skills. These qualities, along with many others, are essential for business leadership. I now wish to pursue formal MBA education to augment my skills further and attain a thorough understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world. I believe education to be a continuous process of learning that can be best achieved in an intellectually congenial environment FMS with its world-class faculty, infrastructure, and with a history of attracting the best minds in the country, is thus a natural choice of mine for doing my MBA. I feel convinced that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my goal. SOP202r “I will act as if what I do makes a difference”- William James

Business and entrepreneurship has always inspired fascination in me. Apart from the exciting and challenging prospect of starting and running ones own business, the aspect of entrepreneurship that appeals to me the most is that it provides a great opportunity to put ones ideas and principles into practice, make a difference in ones own way, in short ‘to matter’. Entrepreneurship, I feel, is my calling and my career goal in the long term. You are very crisp in your begining. While doing engineering from the prestigious Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology (NSIT), Delhi, I have been introduced to the world of technology, which is integral to most businesses today. However, along with my strong academic education, I consider a significant part of my learning to have come from interactions with my peers, seniors and teachers in college. Being involved in group project taught me the virtues of discipline, dedication and team work. Organizing events in college fests have taught me vital people skills. These qualities, along with many others, are essential for business leadership. "While doing Engineering" while suffice. Very well written. I now wish to pursue formal MBA education to augment my skills further and attain a thorough understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world. I believe education to be a continuous process of learning that can be best achieved in an intellectually congenial environment FMS with its world-class faculty, infrastructure, and with a history of attracting the best minds in the country, is thus a natural choice of mine for doing my MBA. I feel convinced that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my goal. Excellent !! Overall, a very well-written essay. You have a way with words, and Im pretty sure you know that :wink: SOP203 - FMS "We have a hunger of the mind which asks for knowledge of all around us, and the more we gain, the more is our desire; the more we see, the more we are capable of seeing", remarked Maria Mitchell. I have always believed in the power of learning. A successful academic jaunt with XX % in Bachelor of Technology and an active participation in extra-curricular field, which included being part of the college YYY team, have sublimated their own set of values and lessons. I have learnt a lot on my present job as a software developer in ZZZ where I have been consistently rated amongst the top 10% talent pool. Working in a knowledge based industry I realized that there is a small demarcation line between generation of thoughts and transforming them into reality and in order to implement my ideas taking into account the profit motive of an organization, I need a better understanding of the various facets of management; the interlinks between different functional areas and between

different business entities. Presently it has not been possible for me to get the vast knowledge about specific business and technology - related issues. I believe that FMS with its faculty of international standards, international exposure, excellent infrastructure and corporate interaction can provide me with the skills and knowledge, required to fulfill my objectives. I am confident that my learning capability and corporate experience will help me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better to deliver innovative solutions in the competitive business environment. SOP203r "We have a hunger of the mind which asks for knowledge of all around us, and the more we gain, the more is our desire; the more we see, the more we are capable of seeing", remarked Maria Mitchell. I have always believed in the power of learning. A successful academic jaunt with XX % in Bachelor of Technology and an active participation in extra-curricular field, which included being part of the college YYY team, have sublimated their own set of values and lessons. I have learnt a lot on my present job as a software developer in ZZZ where I have been consistently rated amongst the top 10% talent pool. Can't you put all this in your resume ? Why put it in your SOP ? Working in a knowledge based industry I realized that there is a small demarcation line between generation of thoughts and transforming them into reality and in order to implement my ideas taking into account the profit motive of an organization, I need a better understanding of the various facets of management; the interlinks between different functional areas and between different business entities. Presently it has not been possible for me to get the vast knowledge about specific business and technology - related issues. Presently means something that will happen in a short while i.e. "the speaker will be arriving presently". Currently means happening now which is what you intend. More importantly the last line is too casual, general and doesnt fit in. Just say that you want to connect the dots or see the forest instead of the trees or some other stuff like that. I believe that FMS with its faculty of international standards, international exposure, excellent infrastructure and corporate interaction can provide me with the skills and knowledge, required to fulfill my objectives. I am confident that my learning capability and corporate experience will help me understand and correlate the theoretical aspects better to deliver innovative solutions in the competitive business environment. Overall it is decent. Ready to go with some minor changes. SOP204 - FMS Success is a journey – a journey of destinations. There are several goals on the road to success. The intent is not to stop; the intent is to move ahead and reach the next milestone with ever

greater enthusiasm. My long-term career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment efficiently and effectively. Numbers have always fascinated me and I want to pursue a career that will give me an opportunity to work with numbers. I did my graduation in Commerce from SRCC, Delhi University, which gave me a good foundation in the field of finance. After completing my degree studies, I entered the corporate world, and learnt the various subtle nuances that go into the functioning of an organisation. However, as I go higher up in the corporate ladder, I will have the responsibility of building strong teams, making critical decisions, and coordinating with other team members to work towards a common goal. For this, I need to strengthen my graduate degree with formal management education. The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals. FMS, with its diverse student community, highly acclaimed curriculum, exceptional faculty, and a strategic location, offers a unique opportunity to enrich myself with numerous perspectives. Graduating from here with flying colors is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through my hard work and dedication. As Confucius said, "I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand." I strongly believe that to manage efficiently, action is important, which comes from learning and listening. This learning and listening is what I seek from FMS. SOP204r Success is a journey – a journey of destinations. There are several goals on the road to success. The intent is not to stop; the intent is to move ahead and reach the next milestone with ever greater enthusiasm. My long-term career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment efficiently and effectively. Good start. shud try to make it a bit crisp though. me feel ur using too many words describing success. (and it's even in place of ever.) Numbers have always fascinated me and I want to pursue a career that will give me an opportunity to work with numbers. I did my graduation in Commerce from SRCC, Delhi University, which gave me a good foundation in the field of finance. After completing my degree studies, I entered the corporate world, and learnt the various subtle nuances that go into the functioning of an organisation. However, as I go higher up in the corporate ladder, I will have the responsibility of building strong teams, making critical decisions, and coordinating with other team members to work towards a common goal. For this, I need to strengthen my graduate degree with formal management education. OK. First things first. Im an engineer, so i shud be the one asking u this.... is commerce just about nos., well surely an mba in finance isn't. May be the NINJA cud help.http://www.pagalguy.com/forum/../cat...ons/icon10.gif Also me think this is the para were u can keep a check on the word limit.

How abt "My immediate career goal is to become a proffesional (U might write something like a consultant or investment banker, depends on interest) in the field of finance. To pursue this end, I did my graduation in Commerce, which equipped me with the basic starting tools. On it's completion, I entered the corporate world and learnt the various nuances (me think subtle nuances is not proper, and vaisa speaking, wasn't nuances the trademark word of THE Simba, grrrrr) that go into the functioning of an organisation. However, I believe that the ability to work in a team and to think critically are the ones which matter the most in today's global busines scenario. To inculcate such abilities in me, I feel that a formal education in management is a must." See.... u can cut around 15 words here. That brings it round to 265.:satisfie: hehe... that's a more acceptable wordcount, isn't it. Ofcourse u might not like the above para, and u shudnt. It's ur SOP, how can an engg. nerd decide what u wanna write, right?:sly: OK, kiddin. But i hope u got what i meant!!! The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals. FMS, with its diverse student community, highly acclaimed curriculum, exceptional faculty, and a strategic location, offers a unique opportunity to enrich myself with numerous perspectives. Graduating from here with flying colors is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through my hard work and dedication. As Confucius said, "I hear and I forget. I see and I remember. I do and I understand." I strongly believe that to manage efficiently, action is important, which comes from learning and listening. This learning and listening is what I seek from FMS. The start of the para doesn't seem to be connected to the previous one. U cud start with "I believe that the key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals acquired from a globally recognised business school. FMS,...." Also what has FMS' strategic location got to do with unique oppurtunities coming ur way. arre sister, fms mumbai mein bhi hota toh bhi same oppurtunities atte. (Although then I wud have been able to see my dream college with my eyes.) Also, according to me the confucius quote has been added just to make the conclusion eye-catching.:twisted: Wrong approach. Me think it sounds better if u end it at the penultimate para. Overall, me thinks that ur SOP will be ready when u have added my suggestions:twisted::twisted::twisted: hehehe..... but still give it a read and if it sounds good, well i can only say that i don't believe in the copyright crap.:sly: although do wait for Psychoninja's:twisted: comments. Well that's it. OKYDOKY SOP205 - FMS

My long term goal is to reach the higher levels of the managerial ladder of a company and make it grow using my skills and learning. How FMS can help me in realising my goal can be related as follows: The true leader During my graduation days at XYZ(one of the NITs) I was drawn towards organising various college and department level activities. From this, the most critical realisation for me was the importance of a leader. If a leader leads from the front by being dedicated and motivating then these qualities tend to rub on to the people following her/him. This leads to an efficient execution of the plan. The same lesson I learnt while working under inspiring managers at ABC(company i work for). How does FMS help me in honing my leadership skills? Being a part of FMS can make me shine my leadership qualities by giving me exposure, to the various extra curricular activities at FMS. Since, FMS attracts people from all over India with varied backgrounds and experience, I can learn from there experiences as well Global awareness While working for ABC company and serving a world recognised client, ASDF(very well know software company) gave me a feel of the dynamics in global business. FMS with its well tailored curriculum and international exposure will help me in learning the global corporate behaviour in a better way. The need to keep updating yourself Being in the software industry for the past 16 months I realised the importance of learning and updating myself with the latest information. Again, being at FMS with its highly acclaimed and quality conscious faculty and curriculum, will be the right exposure for me on this front. All these are the very basic fundamentals of being a manager. But, to achieve my goal I require in depth knowledge and exposure to the corporate mechanims. FMS being the fore runner in providing quality management education in India and having intensive coroporate linkages is the answer to all my needs in achieving my goal. SOP206 - FMS

“No business can succeed in any great degree without being properly organized.” James Cash Penney I have always been a firm believer of Penney’s words. The importance of organization and management skills in all walks of life cannot be overemphasized. An inquisitive character led me to earn a Bachelor’s Degree in Electrical Engineering from VNIT Nagpur. Organizing an Inter Collegiate cricket tournament Krikmania has helped me to understand the nature and purpose of organisation goals and how they are integrated into organisational activity. My interpersonal skills developed as a result of participation in various team and individual competitions like Kung-Fu, Cricket and Software Competitions. I’ve developed a considerable control over

emotions and stress level during my training in Kung-Fu which eventually helped me to earn a black belt. My present job at Bristlecone India Ltd. has helped me to understand that a workplace is the best teacher in one’s life. I’m sure I’m going to learn many corporate skills like client communication, decision making, etc. in due course of time. Being a son of a Chartered Accountant, I’ve always been fascinated by Management and Economics. I’ve always aspired to become a successful entrepreneur and be an integral part of the Economic Revolution that India is going through instead of just being a witness to it. I am sure the excellent pedagogy, abundant resources, industry strong alumni network and a proven track record of FMS together with its continuous run towards perfection will eventually help me to make a mark in the corporate world. SOP206r

“No business can succeed in any great degree without being properly organized.” James Cash Penney I have always been a firm believer of Penney’s words. The importance of organization and management skills in all walks of life cannot be overemphasized. My first thoughts WTF is James Cash Penny :mg: But I guess it fits in with your starting. An inquisitive character led me to earn a Bachelor’s Degree in Electrical Engineering from VNIT Nagpur. Organizing an Inter Collegiate cricket tournament Krikmania has helped me to understand the nature and purpose of organisation goals and how they are integrated into organisational activity. My interpersonal skills developed as a result of participation in various team and individual competitions like Kung-Fu, Cricket and Software Competitions. I’ve developed a considerable control over emotions and stress level during my training in Kung-Fu which eventually helped me to earn a black belt. My present job at Bristlecone India Ltd. has helped me to understand that a workplace is the best teacher in one’s life. I’m sure I’m going to learn many corporate skills like client communication, decision making, etc. in due course of time. For starters this seems abrupt when you are discussing how companies should be run and then you jump to talk about yourself. Can you snip off collegestuff a bit and talk more about your workexp. More about why its imp for a teacher to do an MBA, what qualities you bring to the table etc. etc. Being a son of a Chartered Accountant, I’ve always been fascinated by Management and Economics. I’ve always aspired to become a successful entrepreneur and be an integral part of the Economic Revolution that India is going through instead of just being a witness to it. I am sure the excellent pedagogy, abundant resources, industry strong alumni network and a proven track record of FMS together with its continuous run towards perfection will eventually help me to make a mark in the corporate world.

My dad is a CA too, and trust me its not about Management and Economics. So being inspired by a dad is different. To quote him as being a CA doesn't make sense. My feedback on the SOP is overall its okay but you need to be more specific about your goals, you need to add stuff which talk about what tangible skills you bring to the table. You have a lot of "fluff" stuff in the SOP which can be cut down e.g. "become a successful entrepreneur and be an integral part of the Economic Revolution that India is going through instead of just being a witness to it" SOP207 - FMS

My long term career objective is to become a successful top executive in an organization and make the most of my managerial and leadership qualities to contribute significantly towards the success of the organization. Being the Event Coordinator for the XXX (XXX Society of India) Student Chapter of my engineering college as well as an organizing committee member for XXX03-XXXNational Student Convention gave me a number of learning opportunities to nurture and hone my inter-personal, managerial and leadership skills. My work experience as an Associate Systems Analyst at XXX Infotech Services Ltd. (formerly AAA), one of whose major clients is the NSE, has given me a chance to ameliorate my knowledge in the financial business domain. Having obtained a practical insight into the challenges confronted by the corporate world has made me realize the crucial role played by management towards the successful accomplishment of any activity. In order to achieve the in depth understanding of the diversified domains such as marketing, financial services, Operations, Economics etc. and to develop the ability to apply such learning to business decision-making and formulation of strategies, I understand it is imperative to pursue a Management program. I strongly believe that pursuing the MBA program at FMS would provide me with the necessary exposure and the right atmosphere for intellectual growth and self-development. The highly experienced faculty, the network of distinguished alumni and the collaborative exchange programs offered through the international associations reaffirm my belief in FMS to be the Business School of choice. SOP207r

My long term career objective is to become a successful top executive in an organization and make the most of my managerial and leadership qualities to contribute significantly towards the success of the organization. Some objectivity please. Being the Event Coordinator for the XXX (XXX Society of India) Student Chapter of my engineering college as well as an organizing committee member for XXX03-XXXNational

Student Convention gave me a number of learning opportunities to nurture and hone my inter-personal, managerial and leadership skills. Hmm...... My work experience as an Associate Systems Analyst at XXX Infotech Services Ltd. (formerly AAA), one of whose major clients is the NSE, has given me a chance to ameliorate my knowledge in the financial business domain. Having obtained a practical insight into the challenges confronted by the corporate world has made me realize the crucial role played by management towards the successful accomplishment of any activity. You should drum this up more. This should be the reason why you need to do an MBA. In order to achieve the in depth understanding of the diversified domains such as marketing, financial services, Operations, Economics etc. and to develop the ability to apply such learning to business decision-making and formulation of strategies, I understand it is imperative to pursue a Management program. I strongly believe that pursuing the MBA program at FMS would provide me with the necessary exposure and the right atmosphere for intellectual growth and self-development. The highly experienced faculty, the network of distinguished alumni and the collaborative exchange programs offered through the international associations reaffirm my belief in FMS to be the Business School of choice. Bland and too generic but atleast you are playing it safe. Overall, it was okay. I don't know maybe after reading all these essays I just had a sense of deja vu. SOP208 - FMS

As a pass out of NSIT, Delhi, I think my engineering in Information Technology has not only provided me good technical knowledge but also given me the zeal to learn more, to learn whatever I can,that's why I have always participated in extracurricular activities at the college .Mixing academics with responsibilities of being a coordinator, in college fests, has helped me in learning time management skills, ability to manage individuals, prioritize things and stick to schedules which are a must for a management course. While working as a Software Engineer at Aricent I am getting the exposure to the ambience of corporate world, learning how to work in a professional team of experts, how to understand the requirements of our clients and how to fulfill their needs.

My long term goals includes developing myself more as an individual, to create differences for the organization I would be working in, to become a successful manager in three or four years from now, to play a major role in the decision making process of my organization. I think that a good knowledge of management skills is must for achieving these goals Technical knowledge in software coupled with a good knowledge of management skills will help me achieve my goals. As one of the leading management institute in India, that has been producing world class managers for more than half a century, having a rich alumni network that has been spread over different organizations network, I see FMS as an institute providing its students with one of the best carrier developing facilities to explore, to be bold, to be creative and to learn as much as they can. FMS will provide me with both skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. FMS will play a key role in developing my managerial skills. SOP208r

As a pass out of NSIT, Delhi, I think my engineering in Information Technology has not only provided me good technical knowledge but also given me the zeal to learn more, to learn whatever I can,that's why I have always participated in extracurricular activities at the college .Mixing academics with responsibilities of being a coordinator, in college fests, has helped me in learning time management skills, ability to manage individuals, prioritize things and stick to schedules which are a must for a management course. While working as a Software Engineer at Aricent I am getting the exposure to the ambience of corporate world, learning how to work in a professional team of experts, how to understand the requirements of our clients and how to fulfill their needs. Not having a quote looks like a refreshing change :mg: "exposure to corporate world" not "ambience of corp world" My long term goals includes developing myself more as an individual, to create differences for the organization I would be working in, to become a successful manager in three or four years from now, to play a major role in the decision making process of my organization. I think that a good knowledge of management skills is must for achieving these goals Technical knowledge in software coupled with a good knowledge of management skills will help me achieve my goals. Good As one of the leading management institute in India, that has been producing world class managers for more than half a century, having a rich alumni network that has been spread over different organizations network, I see FMS as an institute providing its students with one of the best carrier developing facilities to explore, to be bold, to be creative and to learn as much as they can. FMS will provide me with both skills and knowledge required to fulfill my objectives. FMS will play a key role in developing my managerial skills. Good again. I see this SOP might be slightly below the "best" but it is good because it sounds geniune. And you are objective at places and more importantly sound honest.

SOP209 - FMS

Success means having the courage, the determination, and the will to become the person you believe you were meant to be”-george sheehan I did my graduation in bcom(hons), Delhi University, which gave me a good foundation in the field of finance.The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to adapt to the changes I now wish to pursue formal MBA education to augment my skills further and attain a thorough understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world so that I can embark upon a fulfilling career in this field. I believe education to be a continuous process of learning that can be best achieved in an intellectually congenial environment. My long-term career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment efficiently and effectively. The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals FMS is the ideal business school for me because of its world class faculty, flexible curriculum, and its inter-disciplinary environment and most importantly its relatively small batch size. I feel convinced that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my goal. Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work and decication. SOP109r

Success means having the courage, the determination, and the will to become the person you believe you were meant to be”-george sheehan Please don't give quotes just for the heck. It has no relevance to your resume. This is not an email signature to not have any significance to the content. I did my graduation in bcom(hons), Delhi University, which gave me a good foundation in the field of finance.The world is changing rapidly and the more i learn, the more i will be able to adapt to the changes I now wish to pursue formal MBA education to augment my skills further and attain a thorough understanding of the nuances of business and corporate world so that I can embark upon a fulfilling career in this field. I believe education to be a continuous process of learning that can be best achieved in an intellectually congenial environment. My long-term career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment efficiently and effectively. The key to being a successful entrepreneur lies in having a sound knowledge of business fundamentals

Put it this way - first list down the gaps that you identified without an MBA then say why an MBA would fill that gap. You are mixing both of them here. So start with saying you want to be an entrepreneur, then go on to say why an MBA can help you there. FMS is the ideal business school for me because of its world class faculty, flexible curriculum, and its inter-disciplinary environment and most importantly its relatively small batch size. I feel convinced that undertaking an MBA program in FMS will be a step in the right direction for my goal. Graduating from here in flying colours is something that I have dreamed of and hope to achieve through sincere hard work and decication. Remove the last line in blue font. Its funny to say the least. Rest fine. SOP210 - FMS

Since my young age , I have always been fascinated by the way the world around me has evolved with advent of science and technology . My admiration led me to develop a natural affinity to the field of engineering and I landed in at N.S.I.T. , D.U. ; pursuing B.E. in Manufacturing Processes & Automation Engineering . During the course, I have acquired vital skills of team work and independent thinking which have greatly influenced my style of thinking and personality as a whole. Now as I look to join the corporate world after my studies , I feel the need to acquire the necessary skills required to excel in a world where corporations constantly deal with incessant change and respond to various technical and global challenges. My long term goal is to be able to head such a corporation after gaining the necessary expertise in the field. With this in mind I wish to enroll for an MBA program which will enable me to get a holistic perspective on business and industry. I am confident that an MBA from FMS , comprehensive with excellent faculty and opportunities to interact with diverse disciplines in the university will develop a global outlook and future readiness at a time when Indian economy is opening up to fresh challenges and opportunities . I am confident that my involvement and commitment would stand me in good stead to the academics challenges and high expectations at FMS. I am certain that FMS with its distinct brand equity and a history of producing distinguished alumini , will enrich my opportunities of being in the right place , at the right time with the right skills. SOP211 - FMS-MS

Why do you want to pursue a programme focused towards service sector?(150 words)

India's movement towards global economy and an unprecedented explosion of free trade and exchange have brought about immense opportunities in service sector. The sector provides a challenging work environment and great scope of growth .Progress in manufacturing sector and the advent of BPO, IT & ITES sectors has created demand for trained technical professionals with analytical and mangement skills. I , therefore believe in addition to my technical background (B.E. ,NSIT), a masters degree in service management will provide a good theoretical understanding and an in depth idea of practical approaches of managerial decision making along with the required people skills.I hope my ability to work in teams and familiarity with computer applications coupled with a strong commitment will prove to be assets in the course. I am confident that FMS with its pioneering approach and outstanding track record will help me build a strong foundation for my career. SOP212 - FMS

I strongly feel that technical and management aspects within an organization go hand in hand.My endeavor has always been to become a successful manager occupying a significant position in an organization where i utilize my knowledge to guide my team in achieving its goals and thereby driving the organization to new heights of success. After engineering, my decision of joining not so large organization proved to be the right step for me towards my goal.The flat organizational structure of ABC provided me with some crucial insights on how various business decisions are taken in an organization. Working in a small team in the organization taught me to handle big responsibilities. In our regular team meetings i learned that how the team leader was planning and organizing different tasks by prioritizing them. I could now realize that I need a comprehensive academic program to develop the same necessary management skills in myself to achieve my goals. In my view a leader can be successful only when his thoughts are structured and planned. He should possess the sense of vision so as to analyze the direction of ever changing business requirements in the future.When i explored the PGDBM program in FMS, i could feel that this program can quench my thirst for instilling management skills in myself. FMS with its strong teacher student’s ratio, faculty of international standards,corporate exposure and rich alumni network can develop and enhance my abilities to handle the ever-changing and unpredictable business world.I believe that together with the knowledge i acquired in my undergraduation and with the new skills, thinking and knowledge i would gain at FMS, i can lay down a stable foundation for myself to succeed in my dream role. SOP213 - FMS

The world of Computers and management fascinated me from my school days. So I choose to pursue B.Tech in Information Technology from the famous ‘ XXX of Engineering ‘, XYZ. My involvement in the technical and cultural events at the graduation always improved my talents as a good team player, organizer and event coordinator.

Following my graduation I joined ‘ ABC Technologies ‘ as software Engineer. My experience with ABC improved my technical, analytical and time management skills. I learned how critical is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an organization. My ultimate career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur in the IT industry who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment effectively and efficiently. Since the technical degree alone is not adequate to achieve my goal, I need formal education in the principles of Business management to achieve my goals. After MBA at FMS working at a managerial position in a Multi National company will provide me with necessary practical experience and expertise required to meet my ultimate Objective. With over 50 years of academic excellence, world class faculty, wide industry interface, flexible curriculum and with vibrant alumni networks FMS will enrich my source of wisdom and will sharpen my skills to create an extra edge needed for the highly competitive business world. I believe that FMS with over fifty years of experience in shaping managers into leaders is the best institute that I can afford for achieving my Goal. SOP213r

The world of Computers and management fascinated me from my school days. So I choose to pursue B.Tech in Information Technology from the famous ‘ XXX of Engineering ‘, XYZ. My involvement in the technical and cultural events at the graduation always improved my talents as a good team player, organizer and event coordinator. "world of computers" would suffice. Management ko abhi beech mein mat laao bhai. No one is going to say "You were not interested in management from school days ? Bah ! No MBA for you!!" :mg: Also tell how your technical expertise in computers has helped you grow. Yeh organizer, coordinator waali cheez baad mein rakho. Following my graduation I joined ‘ ABC Technologies ‘ as software Engineer. My experience with ABC improved my technical, analytical and time management skills. I learned how critical is teamwork, leadership and management skills for the success of an organization. My ultimate career objective is to become a successful business entrepreneur in the IT industry who is ready to face the complex and dynamic business environment effectively and efficiently. Yeah, now tie in the fact that though you always knew that being a teamplayer was important from school time, your workexp further solidified the same. Also, "learned how critical is teamwork" is wrong grammar. "I learned how critical teamwork, ... is" Otherwise good. Atleast you are hitting the nail on the head. Since the technical degree alone is not adequate to achieve my goal, I need formal education in the principles of Business management to achieve my goals. After MBA at FMS working at a

managerial position in a Multi National company will provide me with necessary practical experience and expertise required to meet my ultimate Objective. Don't write a negative i.e. "Since....." start with "I feel to achieve my goal, I need formal...." Rest good. I like your objectivity. With over 50 years of academic excellence, world class faculty, wide industry interface, flexible curriculum and with vibrant alumni networks FMS will enrich my source of wisdom and will sharpen my skills to create an extra edge needed for the highly competitive business world. I believe that FMS with over fifty years of experience in shaping managers into leaders is the best institute that I can afford for achieving my Goal. Yaaawn :mg: Okay, otherwise one of the better written SOPs. SOP214 - FMS

To will is to select a goal, determine a course of action that will bring one to that goal, and then hold to that action till the goal is reached. The key is action Believing and following this philosophy has helped me achieving goals in my life. To work in any organization in this ever changing and shrinking world where people from different regions of world are working together for a common goal of organization, it is necessary to understand the Principles of management and the models and philosophy that various successful organizations have followed. And to understand these principles an MBA from a good Business School is necessary. I have done schooling at Kendriya Vidyalaya No.3 Jaipur, being a part of such school helped me in knowing people of not only different cults but also people from families of different professional background. After schooling being an average student, I worked hard to get into National Institute of Technology. Atmosphere there, once again gave me an opportunity to work with people of different states countries, and cultures. During four years of engineering, I learned different aspects of Mechanical Engineering, ranging from Automobiles, Mechanics, Structures, Metallurgy and Design. As I got selected in campus interviews in final year and since then working for Essar Steel Ltd. Being a part of a progressive organization which is acquiring facilities abroad and some joint ventures in the line, I realized that after 4 -5years, I need not only to manage technical aspects, but also to build teams, coordinate with different departments, communicate with customers from different geography and culture. As I am interested in Project management and this will require knowledge of various other aspects like Budgeting, Resource Utilisation, and Logistics.

An institute like FMS, having associations with reputed universities and business schools of world like Harvard Business schools, University of California, Berkeley, USA will not only provide me the academic knowledge of different aspects of management, but also the other inputs, that I will gain during interaction with the experienced faculties there and discussion with students of different background will be a great value addition. SOP215 - FMS

I Am What I Am. This line from rebook defines & signifies that one should be aware of what one is and be proud of it. At the cost of sounding a little arrogant I am total agreement with the statement. As a graduate in commerce I started working from 3rd year of my graduation as grad. was a correspondence course from D.U. In the past 4+ years I have been able to carve a place for myself where I have the knowledge and standing in my workspace. The goal is to be the best in what I do and achieve it by either being a successful leader or entrepreneur. More importantly my goal is to be a successful human being. Success is a elative term and for me it means to progressively grow as a professional and human being. The burgeoning economy has given the option for today’s generation to chart their own path of success and I have found my calling in the field of Sales and marketing. An MBA degree from FMS shall help put in perspective my learning’s of the professional world. Being one of the oldest MBA programmes in the country, FMS has an exemplary record in churning business leaders. Being at FMS can help me understand not just the technical but also the social and humane aspects of management. I look at FMS MBA as a programme which shall prepare me for the future challenges by pedagogic approach through which I can relate my experiences and take the learning’s for future. SOP215r

I Am What I Am. This line from rebook defines & signifies that one should be aware of what one is and be proud of it. At the cost of sounding a little arrogant I am total agreement with the statement. Though I think I can guage what you are trying to say the structure of the sentences makes it hopeless difficult for anyone to understand what you are trying to say. Or maybe the problem is with me. Read it to your dad. If he understands then go ahead else change it :mg: (The dad thingy works a lot for me. Many a times when I am labouriously doing some word-smithing I shoot it across to him. His replies are usually terse "Ok" or "??". I get my job done :mg:) Also, why would you be "arrogant". As a graduate in commerce I started working from 3rd year of my graduation as grad. was a correspondence course from D.U. In the past 4+ years I have been able to carve a place for

myself where I have the knowledge and standing in my workspace. The goal is to be the best in what I do and achieve it by either being a successful leader or entrepreneur. I understand the workexp part. Knock off the last line. I really didnt understand it. More importantly my goal is to be a successful human being. Yeh human being kahan se aa gaya. Im lost yet again. Success is a elative term and for me it means to progressively grow as a professional and human being. The burgeoning economy has given the option for today’s generation to chart their own path of success and I have found my calling in the field of Sales and marketing. Quit all the blah blah and put this "The burgeoning......." thing high up there so people know your area/goal. After this put the entrepreneurship waala funda. An MBA degree from FMS shall help put in perspective my learning’s of the professional world. Being one of the oldest MBA programmes in the country, FMS has an exemplary record in churning business leaders. Being at FMS can help me understand not just the technical but also the social and humane aspects of management. I look at FMS MBA as a programme which shall prepare me for the future challenges by pedagogic approach through which I can relate my experiences and take the learning’s for future. "learning's" ?? Also in the earlier para I saw "elated". So please run it through a spellcheck. Also, what is "humane" ?? Rest (of whatever left) is fine. SOP216 - FMS-MS

Services sector today is the largest contributor to the national income. As with all the developed economies the phase of growth sees the share of services increasing same is with India. On the threshold of economic supremacy the Indian economy has shown a strong growth esp. in the services sector such as finance, IT, ITES etc. With 4+ years of experience exclusively in the services sector I feel that studying this course is the next logical step in my career path. With the world looking at India especially in the services sector thanks to our well-educated and youthful generation the services sector is where the action would be. This course should serve as the platform from where I can leverage my learning in the corporate sector and become a better professional and a human being. SOP216r

I see everyone who writes this essay does a lot better than the "FMS general" essay. So is the case with you. No changes here. Send it off as it is. Don't use abbreviations like "esp." as I said run a spell-check.

SOP217 - FMS

“The freethinking of one age is the common sense of the next” Knowledge is supreme especially in the globalized world where actions of one spell consequences for the other. Resources are scarce and knowledge is the key to using them optimally. Hence it is augmenting my knowledge base is what I aspire for the next two years so that I can have a successful foray in the corporate world henceforth. I have been exposed to dynamic disciplines of Business Economics, International business and International Marketing alongside many others during my Graduation and Post graduate diploma from the University of Delhi. The understanding of the world from the perspective of these subjects and holding various posts of responsibility during my student life has widened my domain of thinking and helped me acknowledge the things that are of cardinal importance for my growth into a thorough professional and a future leader. I expect to learn more and widen my horizon further at F.M.S given the legacy of its magnificent reputation and quality of education from the last 52 years. Being strategically located in the Delhi University, F.M.S offers a fantastic resource base that entails state of the art infrastructure and a very experienced and competent faculty that can shape me to become a better professional. Also the batch diversity that a batch in general has at F.M.S in respect of distinct student profiles promotes inter-cultural learning that is a very important attribute for the omnipresent multinationals operating in distinct cultural environments. Taking all these factors into account F.M.S poses to be the most appropriate choice for continuing my education in the field of management studies. SOP217r

“The freethinking of one age is the common sense of the next” Knowledge is supreme especially in the globalized world where actions of one spell consequences for the other. Resources are scarce and knowledge is the key to using them optimally. Hence it is augmenting my knowledge base is what I aspire for the next two years so that I can have a successful foray in the corporate world henceforth. Very well indeed !!

I have been exposed to dynamic disciplines of Business Economics, International business and International Marketing alongside many others during my Graduation and Post graduate diploma from the University of Delhi. The understanding of the world from the perspective of these subjects and holding various posts of responsibility during my student life has widened my domain of thinking and helped me acknowledge the things that are of cardinal importance for my growth into a thorough professional and a future leader. "along side many others" = why do you want to mention that. Otherwise its good. I expect to learn more and widen my horizon further at F.M.S given the legacy of its magnificent reputation and quality of education from the last 52 years. Being strategically located in the Delhi University, F.M.S offers a fantastic resource base that entails state of the art infrastructure and a very experienced and competent faculty that can shape me to become a better professional. Also the batch diversity that a batch in general has at F.M.S in respect of distinct student profiles promotes inter-cultural learning that is a very important attribute for the omnipresent multinationals operating in distinct cultural environments. Taking all these factors into account F.M.S poses to be the most appropriate choice for continuing my education in the field of management studies. (a) 52 years ? Someone said 50 just a couple of posts ago (b) Strategically located in DU ? Is DU like Silicon Valley ? It could be in Chinchpokhli for all that it matters (c) Diversity ? I can only see fresh-out-college-no-where-else-to-go guys (with due respects to QE - I think he knows what I mean :mg:) So apart from the last paragraphs which has many potential things which might bomb, everything else looks good. SOP218 - FMS

"Great players do not necessarily make great managers". Being a passionate football player myself, I have heard commentators use this line on numerous occasions. The game also makes it evident that a good manager makes his top-level players deliver well, but a great manager is one who brings out the best even in an average 'Joe'. It isnt hard to draw a parallel between the sport and the corporate world. Having been in the industry for more than two years, I have also realised, that though hard work pays exceptional dividends, it is essential to possess the necessary specialisation to be able to derive the most out of any oppurtunity. Working closely with managers and interacting with clients led me to believe that an academic thrust is imperative to succeed in today's highly competitive market. A technical degree and further work experience has enhanced my capabilities and added much to my profile. To be an active participant in the emerging business environment, I find it mandatory to equip myself with an MBA. FMS has a history of producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. The reputed academic program coupled with its excellent industrial associations as well as a strong alumni

network make FMS the ideal institute to impart the training I need, to mould me from a player into a great manager. SOP218r

"Great players do not necessarily make great managers". Being a passionate football player myself, I have heard commentators use this line on numerous occasions. The game also makes it evident that a good manager makes his top-level players deliver well, but a great manager is one who brings out the best even in an average 'Joe'. It isnt hard to draw a parallel between the sport and the corporate world. Very good opening. Very fresh and innovative. Though I dont know if you have time to "play around" when the word limit is 250 words Having been in the industry for more than two years, I have also realised, that though hard work pays exceptional dividends, it is essential to possess the necessary specialisation to be able to derive the most out of any oppurtunity. Working closely with managers and interacting with clients led me to believe that an academic thrust is imperative to succeed in today's highly competitive market. Do a spellcheck I can see some typos. Again you need to be specific "WHY MBA" you are beating around the bush. Since I won't review it a 3rd time, ensure that your final version has atleast 1 sentence by this time which clearly articulates what you want to do post MBA and how an MBA will help you fill the gap. Also, what is an "academic thrust" ? A technical degree and further work experience has enhanced my capabilities and added much to my profile. To be an active participant in the emerging business environment, I find it mandatory to equip myself with an MBA. Aha !! I was wondering when it was coming :mg: Copy paste this before the start of 2nd paragraph after the 1st sentence and there will be no loss in continuity. I still don't know the "Academic thrust" ? Sounds fun though :mg: FMS has a history of producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. The reputed academic program coupled with its excellent industrial associations as well as a strong alumni network make FMS the ideal institute to impart the training I need, to mould me from a player into a great manager. Yadda Yadda :mg: Looks good to go !!!

SOP219 - FMS

My analytical skills and a strong foundation in accounting and mathematical skills have showed me a light in me to pursue a career for myself. My B.com (Hons) degree helped me recognize my potential and has strengthened my basic knowledge. I was also awarded with a scholarship after my graduation for being a rank holder. After my graduation, I pursued Post Graduation in Foreign Trade from Pune University for a year, which gave me an insight on how the international market works and also about India’s Economy. After PGDFT, an MBA will provide me with theoretical understanding and an in-depth idea of practical approaches in aiding managerial decision making and to develop an expertise of myself. I need training and education in terms with an organization which will help me become a successful manager and also a successful person. Your esteemed institution with small batch size, excellent infrastructure and the diversity of students with respect to their educational background and work-ex would provide the right impetus to my career. As a person anything I do, I always give it my all. I am passionate about reading and I enjoy cooking and playing tennis a lot. I believe that “Effort is important, but knowing where to make an effort in one’s life makes all the difference.” SOP219r

My analytical skills and a strong foundation in accounting and mathematical skills have showed me a light in me to pursue a career for myself. My B.com (Hons) degree helped me recognize my potential and has strengthened my basic knowledge. I was also awarded with a scholarship after my graduation for being a rank holder. First sentence is a dampner. What do you mean by that? Agar yeh do nahee hote toh tumhara career nahee ban paata ? :mg: Start from your "My BCom" degree wala After my graduation, I pursued Post Graduation in Foreign Trade from Pune University for a year, which gave me an insight on how the international market works and also about India’s Economy. After PGDFT, an MBA will provide me with theoretical understanding and an in-depth idea of practical approaches in aiding managerial decision making and to develop an expertise of myself. I need training and education in terms with an organization which will help me become a successful manager and also a successful person. Your esteemed institution with small batch size, excellent infrastructure and the diversity of students with respect to their educational background and work-ex would provide the right impetus to my career. Is PGDFT a one-year course or are you leaving it midway ? If the latter then this is good. Knock of "esteemed institution" and put in FMS instead. As a person anything I do, I always give it my all. I am passionate about reading and I enjoy cooking and playing tennis a lot. I believe that “Effort is important, but knowing where to make an effort in one’s life makes all the difference.”

Put it up there after your PGDFT thingy and before why FMS. SOP220 - FMS

[not reviewed] From my past experience working as a Planning Engineer in Hydel & Nuclear Projects in L&T, I realized that technical and management aspects of life are cross functional and are conjoint entities and only strong technical background synergistically with good project management skills, is the success mantra to climb up the ladder to the top in the corporate world - And this is my goal. My first step in the pursuit of my goal was to join Thapar Institute of Engineering and Technology, which has given me a good technical grounding and a problem solving ability. As a Class Representative at school level, Member Student Consultative Committee at college level or a Finance Convener of an event held at college, I have always demonstrated innate leadership capabilities. It’s the time to put another step forward and therefore management education would be a vital aid in achieving for my goal. I believe this would help me working as a Project Manager / Leader after my MBA. FMS is known to attract some of the best talent in its student and faculty and has a history of producing world-class business leaders for the past 50 years. FMS is also reputed to have a very rigorous academic program with innovative teaching methodology and coupled with its excellent industrial & academic associations as well as a strong alumni network is an ideal starting point of my journey. I have a passion for learning and believe that I will grow in such an exemplary environment. SOP221 - FMS

[not reviewed] "Citius, Altius Fortius": Faster, Higher, Stronger - Olympic motto In the contemporary business world this is what every organization and professional aims for and so do I. Since a young age entrepreneurship and business have fascinated me. I feel that running ones own business is not only challenging but highly rewarding and satisfying. Hence I aspire to become an entrepreneur, an effective leader; one who can take his organization to global levels of excellence. In this dynamic and technology driven world, I feel it is essential to have a basic knowledge of technology and thus I pursued engineering from the prestigious Netaji Subhas Institute of Technology, Delhi University. Here apart from enhancing my technical skills, I have also learnt virtues such as dedication, perseverance and team work. Organizing events in the college fests have taught me vital people skills. Doing the summer internship at Maruti Udyog Ltd. gave me

first hand understanding of technological as well as management aspects of a large enterprise. These skills and qualities, along with many others, are essential for achieving my goals. I now want to augment my skills with the vital theoretical and practical business knowledge. I want to learn skills such as marketing, finance and people management which will help me become a successful entrepreneur. Towards this end I wish to pursue an MBA course from FMS. FMS, with its rich history, innovative style of teaching, world class infrastructure and a strong alumni network, in addition to excellent faculty, is my natural choice. I feel convinced that an MBA program in FMS will catapult me in the right direction towards my goal.