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The Scholarship EssayThe Scholarship EssayAnd the Writing Process
Jennifer McBride & Vincent Piro
Adapted from: www.mccd.edu/faculty/pirov/agsscholarshipessay.ppt
The Writing ProcessThe Writing Process1. Step One: Triggering and Analyzing the
Situation2. Step Two: Gathering and Brainstorming3. Step Three: Shaping by Writing an
Outline4. Step Four: Writing Your Rough Draft5. Step Five: Revising & Editing
STEP ONE: STEP ONE:
Triggering and Triggering and Analyzing the Analyzing the SituationSituation
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Step One: Triggering and Analyzing the Step One: Triggering and Analyzing the SituationSituation
Usually, the desire for financial assistance triggers your need to write a personal statement or essay as part a scholarship process.
The goal of an this is to convince someone that you are worthy to be granted a scholarship or receive financial aid.11
AudienceAudience It is important to consider the audience of
your personal statement or essay. ◦ Are you writing to a national scholarship
committee? ◦ Are you writing to a state-wide scholarship
committee? ◦ Are you writing to a local scholarship committee?
Research the organization giving the scholarship for which you are applying. ◦ Who is offering the scholarship? ◦ Who are the judges? ◦ For what is the organization known? ◦ What is the organization’s mission? 11
STEP TWO: STEP TWO:
Gathering and Gathering and BrainstormingBrainstorming
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Carefully Analyze the Carefully Analyze the DirectionsDirections If you are to write using a specific set of
directions, then carefully read the directions several times.
◦ Are there different parts to the directions?◦ Are you asked to provide different types of
information about yourself?
Divide the question into its parts and make an exhaustive list or cluster that answers each part of the question…
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……example:example:
“Discuss how your interest in your field or major developed and describe your experience in the field – such as volunteer work or internships – and what you gained from this involvement.”
There are three parts to these directions, each highlighted above.22
exampleexampleGood Student Scholarship Directions:
“a one or two page autobiographical essay by the applicant that includes information about who the applicant is and what the applicant hopes to accomplish. “
Question: How many parts are there to the directions above? What are they?22
answer:answer:Good Student Scholarship
Directions:“a one or two page autobiographical essay by the applicant that includes information about who the applicant is and what the applicant hopes to accomplish. “
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Brainstorm your ideas!Brainstorm your ideas!Write down any idea that comes into your
head when you think about your topic (words, phrases, symbols, etc.)
Methods: 1. Freewriting2. Listing3. Clustering
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FreewritingFreewritingFreewriting is like talking to yourself on paper. Write as much as
you can in connected sentences (not lists) about your topic. Write as quickly as you can without stopping to think about grammar or organization.
Helpful when you have too many ideas or no ideas about your topic.
Options:◦ Write for a specific time period◦ Write for a specific amount of paper
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FreewritingFreewritingExample:
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“My favorite book… I don’t know where to start. I read so many books that are interesting that it’s hard to choose just one. I guess I could start by talking about the kinds of books I really like. I like biographies and autobiographies the best. I really enjoy reading about another person’s life. One of my favorite books is called Roots by Alex Haley. How the author was able to trace his family history all the way back to Africa was amazing! Another book I really enjoyed was Carl Sandburg’s biography of Abraham Lincoln. What an incredible president! There are also some very interesting books about leaders like Napoleon, Churchill, and Stalin. Well, I guess that gives me a few ideas about where I can start on my topic…”
ListingListingStart with the main topic of your essay. Write
that word or words at the top of your paper.
Write down any word or phrase that might relate to your main topic underneath. Don’t worry about spelling or grammar. Your goal is to write down as many ideas as quickly as possible!
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ListingListingExample:
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Why I Want to Become a Nurse
Like science
Like problem solving
Many jobs available in nursing
Good salary
Like working in a hospital
Want to help other people
Challenging job
Opportunities for promotion
Interested in study of diseases
Interested in study of human body
Flexible hours
Will always learn something new
ClusteringClusteringStart with the main topic of your essay.
Write that word in the center of your paper.Write down any sub-topics that are
connected to that main topic. Draw arrows to the sub-topics from the main topic.
Similar to a “mind map”
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ClusteringClusteringExample:
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General Questions for General Questions for BrainstormingBrainstorming What's special, unique, distinctive, and/or impressive about you or your life
story?
What details of your life (personal or family problems, history, people or events that have shaped you or influenced your goals) might help the committee better understand you or help set you apart from other applicants?
When did you become interested in this field and what have you learned about it (and about yourself) that has further stimulated your interest and reinforced your conviction that you are well suited to this field? What insights have you gained?
What are your career goals?
Have you had to overcome any unusual obstacles or hardships (for example, economic, familial, or physical) in your life?
What personal characteristics (for example. integrity. compassion. persistence) do you possess that would improve your prospects for success in the field or profession? Is there a way to demonstrate or document that you have these characteristics?
From Purdue’s OWL. <http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/pw/p_perstate.html>22
STEP THREE:STEP THREE:Shaping by Writing an Shaping by Writing an OutlineOutline
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An OutlineAn OutlineTurning your brainstorming into an
informal outline may help you organize your thoughts and make sure you have addressed all parts of the directions
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ExampleExample1. Introduction: mention that I need a scholarship to
Cochise College because I want to be a teacher. Cochise has excellent Education classes.
2. Body Paragraph: Mention how I have always wanted to be a teacher since junior high when I tutored elementary students.
3. Body Paragraph: Mention that I have experience as a teacher’s assistant in Mr. Smith’s biology class.
4. Conclusion: Note that my desire and experience make be an ideal student for Cochise College.
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OrganizationOrganization
There are three parts to a personal Statement or essay: 1. The Introduction2. The Body Paragraphs3. The Conclusion
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The IntroductionThe IntroductionIntroduction: Many personal statements
or essays begin with a catchy opening, often a distinctive personal example, as a way of gaining the reader's attention. From there you can connect the example to the actual scholarship for which you are applying. Mention the specific name of the scholarship, as well as the degree you are seeking, in the first paragraph.
Adapted from Indiana University’s Tutorial Services < http://www.indiana.edu/~wts/pamphlets.shtml >.
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Body ParagraphsBody ParagraphsDetailed Supporting Paragraphs:
◦Subsequent paragraphs should address any specific questions from the application, which might deal with your own qualifications or your long-term goals or some combination.
◦Each paragraph should be focused and should have a topic sentence that informs the reader of the paragraph's emphasis.
◦The examples from your experience must be relevant and should support your argument about your qualifications.
Adapted from Indiana University’s Tutorial Services < http://www.indiana.edu/~wts/pamphlets.shtml >.
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The ConclusionThe ConclusionConclusion: Tie together the various issues
that you have raised in the essay, and reiterate your interest in receiving the scholarship. You might also mention how receiving this scholarship will be a step towards a long-term goal in a closing paragraph.
Adapted from Indiana University’s Tutorial Services < http://www.indiana.edu/~wts/pamphlets.shtml >.33
STEP FOUR:STEP FOUR:Writing your Rough DraftWriting your Rough Draft
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DraftingDraftingWrite several drafts of your
personal statement or essay:◦Using your outline as a guide.◦Working within the word limitations
on the scholarship application.◦Following an special formatting
directions given on the application.
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STEP FIVE: STEP FIVE: Revising and EditingRevising and Editing
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ReviseReviseAs you revise your essay:
◦Cut out any repetitious ideas or words.◦Add in specific examples and details
that make your experiences stand out from other applicants.
◦Change the order of paragraphs so that your most interesting ideas and best writing are at the beginning and end.
◦Replace irrelevant information that does not address the directions with relevant information that stays focused on the directions.55
EditingEditingEdit several times for the
following:◦Spelling errors◦Grammar errors◦Punctuation errors◦Typos◦Contractions and abbreviations
Have other people proofread your work, preferably a professional, such as a teacher.55
ExampleExample
Before editing:
I am highly aware of the rebutation of your school, and my conversation with several of your former students have served to deepen my interest in attending. In addition to your excellent faculty, your computer facilities among the best in the state. I hope you me the this scolarship from your university so that I may persue my studies at your fine institution.
After editing:I am highly aware of the superb reputation of Cochise College, and my conversations with several of your alumni have served to deepen my interest in attending. I know that, in addition to your excellent faculty, your computer facilities are among the best in the state. I hope you will award me the this scholarship from your university so that I may pursue my studies at your fine institution.55
In Conclusion…In Conclusion…
The Writing ProcessThe Writing Process
1. Analyze the Situation2. Brainstorm3. Write an Outline4. Write Your Rough Draft5. Revise & Edit
Provide All MaterialsProvide All MaterialsOften scholarships will ask for
additional materials:◦Transcripts◦Lists of Accomplishments or Awards◦Letters of Recommendation
Be sure to include all materials in the application packet, or more than likely, your application will be rejected.
ResourcesResourcesThe Personal Statement. Merced College. 20
April 2011. <www.mccd.edu/faculty/pirov/agsscholarshipessay.ppt>.
Writing the Personal Statement. Purdue University. 22 Mar. 2004 <http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/pw/p_perstate.html>.
Personal Statements and Application Letters. Indiana University. 20>. Apr. 2011.<http://www.indiana. edu/~wts/pamphlets.shtml>.