JOURNAL PROMPT:

Write about the worst injury or pain you have ever had in your life. Tell the story as if you were retelling it to your best friend, making sure not to leave out any details.

The car landed awkwardly, causing it to roll.

The car blasted through the guardrail, went into a free-fall, then spun around in the air and landed sideways, causing the weight to shift. Freddy felt the momentum pulling the car forward. The car kept rolling, and with each flip, Freddy felt more and more helpless.

SHOWING VS. TELLING

EXAMPLE:

Telling Sentence:

The old man stood in the grass and relaxed as the sun went down.

Showing Sentence:

The grass caressed his feet and a smile softened his eyes. A hot puff of air brushed against his wrinkled cheek as the sky paled yellow, then crimson, and within a breath, electric indigo.

SENTENCE #1:

The boy pulled a large fish out of the river.

SENTENCE #2:

The girl stood on the corner of the busy intersection and witnessed the accident as it happened.

SENTENCE #3:

The woman had a terrible headache.

SENTENCE #4:

The meadow slowly came to life as the sun came up.

SENTENCE #5:

The hunted creature ran through the thick forest and screamed as the thorns cut into his skin.