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PrepGenie GAMSAT Sample Essays Evaluated Sample Essay - 001
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The best social program is a good job.
Title: A good job has countless benefits
In todays society, it is difficult to define a good job. I say this because it can sometimes be wrongly assumed that jobs in a certain sector or category are better than others. However, in reality, this is not the case. In order to have a successful economy and country, we need to have people who can fit a variety of jobs. As we are all individuals, with our own interests and skills, this can make the range of job roles positively variable. Although this is true, I believe that the structure of a good job (as deemed by society) has many benefits for the people who work in them. When you consider mental heathhealth, crime and the economy of a country-the benefits are tangible.
Unfortunately, in society there is a stigma associated with certain roles. I will not give endless examples, but we are preconditioned to respect a CEO of a multinational company more than a cleaner working in one of their premises. However, despite this distinction, having any job is better than not having a job at all. We are aware from endless reports on this matter and clear links made between unemployment and mental health problems. Without a job, your place in society is not among the majority and may leave you feeling isolated. Of course this is only one problem; I have not mentioned that unemployed people will not feel as financially stable as someone with a job. Thus, although there are plenty of reasons why people have difficulties in life, I believe that it is made more difficult without a job.
A friend of mine works for a charity that helps fund local charities in Scotland. One project she is working on at the moment is to help train and aid people from notoriously deprived areas of Glasgow. This area is known for high crime rates and gangs. However, one extremely positive story she mentioned to me is that she helped one man from this group find a job and how his whole life has turned around because of this intervention. This story is the one which my friend uses when she looks for more funding from local companies. Finding a job may not help in every case, but it could certainly help and maybe even decrease the crime rate.
Finally, good jobs in certain sectors can prove to be extremely advantageous for certain countries. Ireland, for example, is known for excellent science, engineering and IT graduates. As we are known for this, we have benefitted from an influx of multinational companies including Dell, which have decided to have a factory in Ireland. This was part of the reason Ireland was so prosperous during the Celtic tiger when our country benefitted economically. It was this prosperity that attracted more companies to locate in Ireland; an almost domino effect which gave us an international name for excellence.
In conclusion, have mentioned that it is difficult to define what a good job is-but having a job in todaystodays society can be a wonderful asset for a country and its people.
Total: 64/100
Concept and Expression: 27/40
The essay has been overall well-written. The ideas have been expressed pretty well and your coherence of thought comes through clearly. There are a few areas with scope for improvement, but you can deal with them with a little more attention.
Whenever you present a hypotheses in your essay, make sure you have explained the same. For instance, in the introduction to the essay, you have stated that a good job has many benefits when the mental health, crime rate and economy of a country are concerned; however, you have not explained why you think this essay. Unless you explain a hypothesis with ample arguments and illustrations, there is nothing to validate the hypothesis, which means that you have not been able to convince the examiner of the same.
Illustrations must be used appropriately in an essay, that is, you must put them relevantly and also know where to place them. For instance, in the second paragraph of the essay, you have stated that we are aware from various reports that having any job is better than having none, and that joblessness and mental illness have often been linked. In both these cases, you would have made your argument stand really strong had you added some examples of such reports. Even a case that you have seen yourself or heard from someone- that is, a personal example- would have been really appropriate in this respect.
Using the personal example of the friend was a great idea. It makes the impression that you understand the topic well enough to be able to identify with and relate to it.
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domino effect which gave us an international name for excellence.
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PrepGenie GAMSAT Sample Essays Evaluated Sample Essay - 001
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It is incorrect to assume that the examiner will be able to understand every reference you make; in fact, it is advisable that you write with the assumption that the examiner knows nothing of them. Whatever reference you make, make sure that it is accompanied with a brief explanation. This will make your arguments stronger since the relation between the argument and the illustration will become clearer. Of course, do keep in mind that you must not get carried away; write only what is absolutely necessary. This is something that was required in the example of the Celtic tiger.
Avoid expressing too many ideas in a single paragraph. In the second paragraph of this essay, you have stated that certain jobs are stigmatised, while others are venerated. This is a very good example of seeing the topic from various perspectives. However, it would have been much better structuring if you had not moved from this idea to the fact that any job is better than none- all in the same paragraph. Both ideas are very suitable for this essay, but since they are almost contradictory, placing them in the same paragraph makes the impression that you are contradicting yourself.
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Ideally, there is one paragraph allotted to each idea. Merging of ideas, on the other hand, is extremely important. When you make the transition from one paragraph to the next and hence to a separate idea, it is essential that you end the previous paragraph on a note that allows scope for the next paragraph to begin. In short, the ending of one paragraph/idea should hold the germ of the next.
The title you have used in this essay can be improved upon greatly. While it is quite short, it fails to invoke the interest of the reader. You need to ensure that the title that you use is an intriguing one. Remember that the title is the first place in the essay where you can grab the attention of the reader. A such, it is essential that you make the title a thought-provoking one. It should set the tone of your essay and give the reader a glimpse of what is coming, while at the same time, it must not give away too much. Playing with words is a good idea when you are formulating the title. Take a quote or a proverb, and twist it around to suit your purpose.
Avoid using phrases like in conclusion, in summary, wrapping up etc in your conclusion. Such phrases make the write-up look wooden. The conclusion should be written in such a way that it becomes obvious that you are wrapping up the essay, without you having to say so explicitly.
Apart from this, you have maintained the ideal structure of an essay, complete with the title, introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion.
Linguistic Accuracy: 15/20
Grammatically speaking, there are no errors in this essay. You need to take care of your spellings. There are very few, but they stand out all the more because of the fact that the write-up is good in so many other aspects. It would be a good idea to review your essay once you are done with it; such mistakes are common when you are writing in a flow, and you will be able to eliminate the in a review. Letting such mistakes remain makes the impression of negligence, which is NOT GOOD.
Practising time management is a good way of ensuring that you have at least 5 minutes at the end of section 2 to review your write-ups. For this, practise writing by hand, so that you can increase your writing speed. Keep tab on your progress until you are able to write coherently and still have some time left at the end.
Of course, the language and style of the essay can be considerably improved. You can certainly work toward making the sentences more interesting. Adding some humour never goes amiss! Remember that the examiner will be reading through a lot of essays, and the more interesting and lucid your write-up is, the better chance you have of improving your score. Fluidity of language is much desired here.
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PrepGenie GAMSAT Sample Essays Evaluated Sample Essay - 002
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Task A
History and Learning
"History" is a greekGreek word which means, literally, just "investigation" Arnold Toynbee
In the above assertion Arnold Toynbee suggests that history is about learning, findings and investigating. However, contrary to the above assertion, a lot of people use history as an excuse for war, tribalism and ethnocentric superiority. People can learn from history but history should never dictate the future.
In support of my a bove contention, I remember one day in Afghanistan, when I was a bout five years of age. My older brother took me to watch dog fighting, which was a common tradition in Afghanistan in those days. I have asked my brother that why those dogs were fighting with each other. He replied " It is because one dog says to other dog that his father and ancestors were more powerful and superior than the other dog, while the other dog disagree and says that no it is other way round, that his father and ancestors are more powerful than other dog and thus they start to fight with each other over this discussion". Sometimes, I relate the above analogy to people who are trying to fight with each other based on race, ethnicity and social background. Since Afghanistan is a multi-ethnic and multicultural society, I have often observed this type of mentality. Where people think that their culture, way of life and language is superior than others and often time they refer to historical events.
Throughout history and quite often people fight with each other based on the notion that " where did you come from or where did I come from" or " You don't belong here and I belong here or I am native or you are not native ". Once Albert Einstein said that " The mean main reason for the Second World War was Nationalism". If people were really to investigate history, they should use it as means for learning and to avoid the mistakes of the past.
AlthoughHowever, the trend toward looking at history might be changing in the west and more civilized civilised countries, as they have built EurpeanEuropean Union and they would not want to repeat the mistakes of the past. However, in a lot of the thirldthird world countries and specifically in my country Afghanistan this trend of worshipiingworshipping past heroes and history is very common and often times leads to incite hatrethatred and discrimination, which produce completely opposite results than what one would expect.
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stance outright is quite acceptable, the statement itself looks more like an answer to a question, losing out on spontaneity. An illustration is a highly essential component of an essay. However, an example acts as a support of the arguments you present in the essay, and not as the argument itself. It is essential to make sure that you dont fill up too much of the essay with the description of a single argument. That space can be sued to introduce another idea. State only that much of an illustration that is absolutely essential to bring out your stance. In the final sentence of the essay, you have stated that history has incited hatred and discrimination, which is opposite to what it had originally intended to do. However, you have not stated what this opposite effect is that it was supposed to achieve. If you are stating a hypothesis in the essay, you must ensure that you have elaborated on it with relevant arguments and illustrations. This is absolutely essential because without an argument, your hypothesis remains unsupported. Framework: 18/40 You have provided a title to the essay that is short and crisp, but it needs more of the interest factor. The title should be short and engaging. It should give an idea of what the essay is about without giving away too much. The topic provided is often a quote or a proverb. Using the same or a rephrasing of the same is not acceptable. The conclusion is pretty good, but at the end, you have stated another hypothesis, and you have not said anything further to support the same. This makes the essay rather incomplete, leaving the reader with the feeling that there is more to come. The sense of completion is lacking here. The ideal structure of the essay has been followed here. Kudos on that! Linguistic Accuracy: 10/20 There are some language issues in the essay, although the improvement has been drastic! Keep writing; there is no alternative to making your language better. You should also keep conversing in the language to ensure better command, and grammar exercises will be useful as well. Remember that short sentences are always better and easier to read than the lengthy ones. Active voice sentences are more desirable than passive voice, but that is again a relative assumption. Throughout the essay, the sentences should be well-constructed and organised and excessively long and complex sentences are to be avoided.
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I strongly disaggredisagree with the assertion in relation to democracy by Robert Byrne that " Democracy consists of choosing your dictators, after they have told you what you think it is you want to hear". After all, democracy is the government of people, by the people and for the people, therefore, deomocarcydemocracyshould not be blamed for dictator ship but rather people should be blamed for electing a dictator and allow dictators to dictate their life and property.
From the dawn of human history there hasn't been a completely flawless society, if there was one, it would havewas probably been Adam and Eve in the gardenGarden of Eden. The Hhuman being is a very aggressive animal by nature., tThroughout history they killed each other over land, religion, tribalism and pride but I assume that their skulls have evolved enough to overcome its aggressive nature by use of reason, logic and rationalising situations through use of science.
If humankind have has evolved enough to overcome its extinctive nature of violanceviolence then why do we still see systemic manipulation of man to by man or man by government to man?. The main problem forcause behind this is pouverty and lack of resoucesresources. If a country does not have economical freedom, they it will never achieve their political freedom; thus certain portion of people, who expect economical freedom opt to elect a dictator to rule them and the rest of people suffer as a consequence of this disproportionality of weatlhwealth. Take the example of Iraq,. Saddam hussainHussein was hated by many people but he also had a huge group of supporters. Had there been economical equality in Iraq the majority of people would have never supported Saddam hussainHussein. In addition to wealth, economical freedom also brings education and enlightenment to society, so that the people get educated and not being manipulated.
To sum it up, it is not the fault of democracy for dictatorshipdictatorship is not the fault of democracy, but it is rather peoples fault and peoples fault can be associated to lack of education and awareness due to bad economy.
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Concept and expression: 13/40
You started the essay by stating your stance on the given topic. While it is acceptable, it is always better to let your arguments reflect your stance instead of stating it outright. A direct statement of your stance will take away the readers interest as there is not really much left to know.
Make sure you completely understand the statement you are taking up as your topic. In this case, you chose Corens comment. The quote states that the system of democracy is nothing but a way of choosing dictators for yourself, by allowing them to manipulate our allegiances first.
In the introduction, you have stated that you disagree with the statement. However, you have gone on to say that it is not the system per se, but the people that are responsible for using the system in the wrong way and choosing dictators. While it is true that democracy in theory is not to be blamed for this misuse, you have stated yourself that it is a system of the people, by the people and for the people. This way, you have made it clear that the practical application of democracy, that is, its use by the people, is incorrect. This way, you have actually agreed with Corens statement.
Comment [NS1]: This is Alan Corens quote.
Comment [NS2]: You seem to have misinterpreted the statement.
Comment [NS3]: You have not stated what you mean by a completely flawless society. Did you mean a truly democratic society, where there is no manipulation and hence, no dictatorship, is completely flawless? Without an elaboration on this point, your thought does not come across very clearly.
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Comment [NS5]: Destructive is a better word here.
Comment [NS6]: Contradictory statement. You have stated that man has evolved enough to overcome its aggressive nature, but then you go on to say that despite this, man is still manipulative and, subsequently, destructive.
Comment [NS7]: Economical means frugal, that is, not being extravagant. Economic is related to economy, that is, finances.
Comment [NS8]: The logic of this statement is not clear.
Comment [NS9]: If you are citing a public figure, make sure you get the name absolutely right.
Comment [NS10]: You have not explained how education can enable a person to avoid manipulation.
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As a result, your statement has become contradictory at the very beginning of the essay. It is essential never to contradict your own statements, especially since you have already stated a very strong stance. If you are writing a discursive essay, it is necessary to present different aspects of the topic and discuss the pros and cons of each side, but then you cannot state a definitive standpoint of your own. Contradicting your own statement, either with the arguments you present to support it, or by another statement you make later on, gives the impression that your thoughts are incoherent.
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Framework: 15/40
You have not provided a title to your essay. This is extremely important and can lose you valuable marks. A title to the essay is what gets the reader intrigued to read further. The title should be short, catchy and immediately get the readers attention. It should give the reader a glimpse of what is coming in the essay and be clear about the topic, but it should not give away too much.
You have separated your essay in different body paragraphs, but no new idea has been introduced in any of them. As a result, the essay has become slightly repetitive. Avoid this at all costs; it is better to write a 250-word short article instead of a meandering tirade on the same ideas.
The introduction to the essay is like the title; it should be something intriguing that hooks the reader to go further and see what you have to say. It is best to start an essay with an interesting piece of information as the introduction. Alternately, it can also be an anecdote or an intriguing question.
Linguistic accuracy: 5/20
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