ASSIGNMENT 11: REDRAFT #5.

GETTING INTO GROUPS.

Key Code:

Abigail:

Gledis:

Joanne:

Vera:

Group Work: Group work:

Teacher assessment of our second opening

sequence:

Feedback of our first opening sequence:

Decisions and Revisions.

• While we were making draft two, we came across a

problem that we would face – this was the filming of

the curtains opening.

• We decided not to do this, as when the curtains

opened quickly, too much light flooded into the room

which affected the lens of the camera.

• Also, originally we wanted to have a gust of wind blow

papers from our character’s desk. This proved too

hard to film as we didn’t have a powerful enough

electrical fan.

Decisions and Revisions.

• Another decision we had to make whilst filming was

the idea of a shadow figure being seen in the

character’s laptop.

• We couldn’t do this as the laptop couldn’t be switched

off any other way than manually.

• To combat this, we reverted back to the initial idea of

the shadow being seen in the television.

New Idea. (for draft three)

• Abigail

New Storyboard.

New Script.

• Gledis

New Shot list.

• Abigail

Transitions and special effects.

• For draft three, we want to use cross

dissolve over the text, so it flows nicely.

• We have also considered using a special

effect for the video camera when the

character records herself.

•

Changes in character and mise en scene.

• For draft three, we want to make our character

look more nerdy.

• We will accomplish this by using large

oversized glasses, and a simpler costume that

makes her look even less confident than in

the first and second drafts.

Titles.

• After making draft two, we realised that the titles on a

black screen didn’t work as well as we initially

thought it would.

• It made the opening sequence too disjointed and

wasn’t appropriate for the type of opening sequence

that we wanted to make as we had a linear narrative.

• For draft three, we want to put our titles on screen

alongside our footage. This will work better as it won’t

break away from what is happening.