2014 Candidate Record FormAQA Level 1/2 Certificate in English Language (8705)Coursework Project (8705/CP)

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To be completed by the candidate

1 TaskEnter the full task as agreed by you and your teacher.

Write the text of a speech in which you explore the risks of cybercrime and argue that it poses a greater threat to our society than conventional criminal acivity.

2 Sources (Reading – evidence base)

Record below the different sources used, with details of title, author, pages or website.Briefly explain what type of source it is e.g. factual, promotional, fictional, biographical literary, journalistic, historical, statistical, original questionnaire.

Note you must attach one A4 size copy of a page you found useful in each of the five sources (or the whole short text if less than a page).

Source Source type

1 Cybercrime hits more than 9 million UK web users

http://www.theguardian.com/technology/2013/aug/23/cybercrime-hits-nine-million-uk-web-users This newspaper article provides a large bulk of statistics on Cybercrime which proved extremely useful for quantifying.

2 Cyber criminals stole more than £1billion last year

http://uk.news.yahoo.com/cyber-criminals-stole-more-than-%C2%A31billion-last-year-111601044.html#vDT9akzVery useful source for overall statistics supplying a mix of assertions which are then backed up by numeral values. On the subject of the damage to our society from cybercrime.

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3 News Corp Phone Hacking Scandal: A Timeline Refresher for the Trial

http://www.thewrap.com/news-corp-phone-hacking-scandal-timeline/ Specific newspaper study on phone hacking scandal, providing a contrast to big businesses being the victim of cybercrime.

4 Norton online survey on cybercrime

http://uk.norton.com/cybercrimereport This is an online survey, giving an insight to the percentages of people affected by cybercrime, e.g. the likelihood of cybercrime affecting people of different age-ranges.

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5 How Britain is becoming a SAFER place to live: Rate of murders and violent crime falling faster than anywhere in Western Europe

http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/article-2313942/UK-Peace-Index-Rate-murders-violent-crime-falling-faster-Western-Europe.html An optimistic view on general crime statistics to use as a comparison between conventional and cyber-crime.

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3 Commentary: Reading/research process (Note, this is an assessed part of your project)

Assessment will be based on:a) Evaluation of sources: you must explain why you selected these sources, and why you chose to select or

reject parts from them eg similarities or differences in ideas and perspectives, and in evidence and interpretation of evidence.

b) Management of sources: you must explain your method of using the sources eg note-making, highlighting, annotation, key-word-finding, with an example of annotated or highlighted text and/or your notes included in the copies attached.

a)I chose many different types of sources for a variety of reasons. While the specific subject matter of them varies greatly, they each provide a key element to my speech. For example, the source attached below (and first in the list) has no particular individual focus, but provides the core of the statistics used in my article. This gave me an overall view on the issues of cybercrime, and was even key to the selection of other, more narrowly focused sources. These more specialised articles ranged from the general crime statistics of source five (to compare cybercrime with conventional crimes), to business articles. The main example of which is the fraud conference, which demonstrated how companies often fell victim to cyber-attacks. These business articles were used by me to investigate how much some companies really were affected by cybercrime, particularly in comparison with other illegal activities. Another key example of source types was individual case studies; such as my third one, which focused directly on the phone hacking scandal. This may not have given me an overall view on the obstacles faced with regard to cybercrime but it did instead emphasize the issues created by large firms, and gave an effective counter to the newspaper article on fraud.

b)I used these sources in a variety of ways, but for each one I first printed off a paper copy. I then annotated them in different ways depending on their source type. For the very statistically dense articles I first underlined, and then copied down the key statistics on the back of the paper, in their own separate categories. My technique was different when it came to specific articles however (such as the phone hacking scandal and the fraud conference). In these cases I tended more to circle sections and label them with terms such as “quotations’’ and “overview” to quickly extract information to use in my speech. There was also one which did not allow itself to be printed off, this

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was the Norton survey described in source four. For this I created a word document and simply listed the key figures in order of perceived importance. Although this took time, it meant I could then integrate this data into my work with ease.

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4. Commentary: Writing process (Note, this is an assessed part of your project)

You will be assessed on your ability to reflect on and explain your purpose and methods in presenting your project. You should show understanding of audience and purpose, and give examples of your use of form and language to match.You should explain:a) how and why you organized and presented your writing for your chosen audience(s) and purpose(s) eg

paragraph structure and sequence, and presentational devices to engage, appeal to and influence your readers

b) how and why you chose language and tone for audience & purpose eg to engage, appeal to and influence your readers

I decided to write my piece as a speech, rather than a message to Theresa May. This allowed me to use a wider variety of emotive and dramatic techniques, in contrast to the relative blandness of formal writing. However, despite the freedom given to me by the diversity of persuasive speech I still encountered a few particular dilemmas. The first of these was quantity; while I was limited to 1000 words, the sources I had found gave me scope for an article of thousands. This meant that the first part of my writing involved cherry picking my annotated sources in order to find information which fitted in particularly well with the rest, or gave a more developed argument, such as a specific case study I wanted to expand on.

My article was set up very deliberately to both lure the reader into a false sense of security, and to give them a valuable insight into the fall in the use of conventional crime. In order to do this I used the fifth source exclusively in my first paragraph, to paint the picture of a crime free society. With my subsequent paragraphs I then shattered the optimism conveyed by my introduction. The aim of this was to replace the enthusiastic belief that “crime is on its way out” with a feeling of dread more in sync with the disconcerting title of my speech. I did this simply because the more comfortable my audience are at the beginning of my rhetoric, the further their confidence has to fall.

I deliberately used the freedom given to me by the task in my speech. Notably including a one-sentence and a one-word paragraph in order to stress certain elements. For example “but is this really the case” is the one sentence paragraph which I used within the talk. This followed the introduction and aimed to immediately sow the seeds of doubt in the minds of those reading, as to how safe we really are. I also used a variety of different language techniques in order to engage the reader more fully. I deliberately included an extensive amount of adjectives and adverbs. During the more emotive parts of my speech I brainstormed superior synonyms for ‘large’, and ‘ominous’ to avoid unnecessary repetition.

Overall however the most difficult part of the assignment was managing my statistics which involved knowing when and how to insert statistics, without letting my speech become too factually based by being dominated by them. Eventually I settled for reading through all of the articles I had gathered, and then simply writing freely about the subject. I then attempted to integrate the sources into my already written address, hopefully seamlessly.

To conclude my speech I aimed simply to do exactly the opposite to my introduction. While in the opening paragraph I stated bluntly that crime would soon be gone. To end my speech I

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aimed to persuade people that the opposite was true, and therefore used a much wider vocabulary range, (including more advanced language techniques such as imagery). This was expected to subconsciously make the reader feel that this conclusion of the imminent destruction of our society was a much more sophisticated opinion than the original utopian one.

To be completed by the teacherMarks must be awarded in accordance with the instructions and criteria in the specification.

Assessment criteria Maximummark

Markawarded

Reading 27 27

Writing 27 27

Total mark 54 54

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