a kinesthetic makeover in writing:

Tearing Down and Rearranging to Reveal

survey on learning styles

at the sentence level (Teresa)at the paragraph level (AnnMarie)

via appositive phrases

via participial phrases

re-identify

nouns, not adjectives

Bush Both Obama

changing a verb to an adjective usually ends in –ing can end in –ed or –en

twist twisting road help helping hand break broken glass stun stunned silence

Bart Simpson caused the mishap. exasperated Marge. outsmarted Homer. rode his skateboard in the street. set the school on fire.

Causing the mishap, Bart Simpson__________.

Bart Simpson __________, causing the mishap.

*can help build sentence fluency

*NOT REAL WRITING—IS SKILL BUILDING THAT IS ADJACENT TO WRITING

*teacher should model decision making skills

*students move from oral rehearsal to written transcription

Options: Use sentence strips. Create your own with some help from

sentence strips. Create your own.

And for the grammarian warrior. . . Create your own. Rewrite each sentence

you create by moving, adding, or eliminating phrases. To what extent is the meaning of your sentence changed?

Nina

Before: Odysseus makes several heroic moves. Taking care of himself and crew for twenty years is amazing.

After: At Castle Rock the conch is broken, showing there is no more organization left on the island.

Isabella

Before: Taunting the Cyclops, Odysseus angers him and causes him to throw a “hilltop” after the boat.

Isabella, cont.

Post: While Romeo is in black most of the time, showing his brooding attitude about love, Juliet is almost always clothed in white, conveying her innocence and purity.

Post: In the [film] shot, the sun represents Juliet, or the filler of the void in Romeo’s dark heart.

*kindergarten *thesis*paragraphs