Voice

You need to be in groups of five or more.Self-EditExcerpted and adapted from Brilliant Revision WorksheetNote to paper authorsYou are about to put a lot of work into this paper. Grumble silently.

By the time your paper gets to me, it should be as near to perfection as you can make it.1st readReview your thesis. Give yourself something to prove. If the thesis is obvious, then there is no reason for the reader to continue with the rest of the paper.

Underline all literary devices explained (i.e. setting, characterization, atmosphere, structure, figurative language, etc.)2nd readCross out the words you and I.

Cross out all weak language like I think or I believe.3rd readRead through it again. Make sure all your verbs are present tense.

Eliminate run on and fragment sentences.

4th readBe sure that its is used as it is and that its shows possession.

Be sure that there, their, and theyre are used correctly.5th readUse the authors complete or last name when you refer to him/her.

Underline the title of full-length works (if we were typing this, youd italicize them).Pass your paper to the right.Peer EditSilent time if you are talking, youre not giving enough of your attention to the work.Instructions for peer editors Write your name on the top of the paper next to a number indicating which peer editor you are.

You may find it easier to read through once, highlighting all the issues of the types youre looking for, and then making suggestions next to those areas afterwards.

If you do highlight, try to use a different color for each editor.

If you see any misspellings, circle them (regardless of which editor you are).

Comments may be made directly on the authors paper.Peer Editor 1: ___________Look for weak words that dont embody the idea. An outstanding paper has powerful vocabulary that stimulates the reader and conveys the intended meaning in an interesting and natural way. Give suggestions.

Look for weak sentences that dont flow well or are too long to make any sense. An outstanding paper has an easy flow and sentence sense that makes the text easy to read aloud. Give suggestions.

Pass your paper to the right.Peer Editor 2: ____________ Look for language or sentence structure that is too informal for an academic essay. Fix it.

Look for big statements that are not supported. These statements should either be cut or developed. Make suggestions.

Pass the paper to the right.Peer Editor 3: ______________ Look at the structure of the essay. Should the paragraphs be switched around? The piece should have a strong sense of direction, balance, and flow. This is more complicated than it sounds in this essay that may use many different quotations. They should be artfully woven together.

Look at the transition sentence at the beginning of every body paragraph and the conclusion. Does it link the two paragraphs in a logical and fluent way? Give suggestions.Pass the paper to the right.Peer Editor 4: ____________ Look at the introduction. It should be inviting and should make a statement that is beyond the obvious, that has to be proven. Make some evaluative comments.

Look at the conclusion. It should be satisfying and should not simply repeat the introduction. Make it thoughtful and leave the reader with a new idea to ponder. Make some evaluative comments.Pass the paper back to the owner.ReflectionRead through your comments and reflect:What you did wellWhat you still need to improve onIf you need clarification from an editor, ask quietly.Read through the rubric and score yourself against the each criterion.Someone pass out the MS/MN and SAR handout.More reflectionReview the comments for your specific question.Reflect on how you performed in comparison. Score your paper again (next to the boxes).

Final draft requirementsYour final draft must be:typed with proper MLA formattingsubmitted to Edmodo (group code: 6g14tf) before the start of class:

You must also return your rough draft and self/peer editing.A-day23 AprilB-day24 AprilIf I were you:Id spend some time this weekend going through my notebook/journals and organizing everything that is relevant to:Paper 1Paper 2Writing in general (since both papers are writing assignments)Dont throw everything else away; store it until the end of the year. But if you dont need it for the exams, you wont need it until after the exams.Homework (due next class):Read the sample paper 1 essaysFor each:Score using the correct rubricProvide rationales for each score.