What is the matter with this sentence?

Eric Brady wrote Time Fails to lessen title IX Furor.

Punctuation and capitalization of article title are incorrect!

Incorrect:

Eric Brady wrote Time Fails to lessen title IX Furor.

Correct:

Eric Brady wrote “Time fails to lessen Title IX furor.”

Which sentence makes the better topic sentence?

Eric Brady discusses the pros and cons of Title IX.

Eric Brady says that some people agree with Title IX and some do not.

According to Eric Brady, many people opposed Title IX because of its vague regulations.

Be sure the topic sentence makes a clear point to focus the paragraph!

WEAK: Eric Brady discusses

the pros and cons of Title IX.

Eric Brady says that some people agree with Title IX and some do not.

STRONG: According to Eric

Brady, many people opposed Title IX because of its vague regulations.

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Topic sentence Clear wording Source reference Completeness and accuracy Student voice Transitions and clear wording Correct spelling and punctuation

What is the matter with this sentence?

Those in favor of Title IX believe it has resulted in decreased gender discrimination, and has given more women opportunities to participate in competitive sports.

Punctuation is incorrect

Those in favor of Title IX believe it has resulted in decreased gender discrimination, and has given more women opportunities to participate in competitive sports.

This is not a compound sentence or a list of three or more, so this “and” does not require a comma!

What is wrong with this source reference?

This article appeared in USA TODAY.

Magazine or newspaper titles should be either underlined or italicized!

This article appeared in USA TODAY.

This article appeared in USA TODAY.

What is the matter with this sentence?

Advocates of Title IX question American society, they ask why women are easily let into medical and law schools but not onto athletic teams.

Comma Splice. Divide independent clauses with periods or semi-colons!

Advocates of Title IX question American society. They ask why women are easily let into medical and law schools but not onto athletic teams.

Advocates of Title IX question American society; they ask why women are easily let into medical and law schools but not onto athletic teams.

Remember to QUALIFY your sources! Donna Lopiano,

executive director of the Women’s Sports Foundation, states that . . .

Author and former Bush staff member, Jessica Gavora, believes . . .

What is wrong in this sentence?

A school must show that they are continually working to add women’s sports.

Pronoun Agreement Error!

Incorrect:

A school must show that they are continually working to add women’s sports.

Correct:

A school must show that it is continually working to add women’s sports.