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Weekly English
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Summer 2
Week 6
5/7/20
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LI: To add comments from readers of your review in a more informal voice.
When you write a review,
people who have read it and
have also visited the
establishment often add their comments underneath.
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning
LI: To add comments from readers of your review in a more informal voice.
Today’s task: You are going to be other people who have visited The Crow’s
Nest and add your own comments underneath your original review.
These will need to be in a more informal voice to show that you as a writer
can adapt your writing voice from formal to informal when needed.Here are some examples:
Really bad! I have called and emailed for months to get my money back from a trip in March, they just postpone and blame other people. They used to be really good but not anymore! Rachel, York.
The Crow’s Nest are a bunch of scammers! Their rooms are smelly and gross. They put you through tons of useless paperwork and at the end of it you get nothing.Opeyemi, Kent.
Ugly old hotel and sub-human service to boot. Hope you like sleeping in a squashed, dirty room and eating half-cooked food. Won’t be surprised if this hotel goes bust.Boris, London.
I think this hotel has bed bugs – my daughter came home pale and tired with two big bite marks on her neck. DO NOT BOOK A HOLIDAY HERE!Jim, Essex.
Summer 2
Week 6
6/7/20
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning
LI: To publish and present work on a professional manner
Why do we publish work?
• It gives our writing a purpose.
• It gives the audience the opportunity to see all the
different genres and styles we can write in.
• It shows how much we have improved over time.
• An audience can read and appreciate the time and
effort it took to write it.
• Others can be inspired by it and begin to use
vocabulary they have learned from our writing in
their own work.
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LI: To publish and present work on a professional manner
Chek ur spelin an punctuashonUr ordience needs t b able 2 read itUl be jujed on ya litracyBad spellin an punctuashon maks ur werk luk unprofeshional
Frist Chek ya spellin.
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LI: To publish and present work on a professional manner
Once you are certain that your writing is the best it can
be, and you have corrected all errors, you may want to
research how you would like to present it.
Because we are writing reviews for Trip Advisor, you
may want to look at some reviews on:
https://www.tripadvisor.co.uk/Hotel_Review-g186345-
d1860878-Reviews-The_White_House_Inn-
Whitby_Scarborough_District_North_Yorkshire_England.
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Summer 2
Week 6
7/7/20
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning
LI: To publish and present work on a professional manner
How shall I publish my work?
There are many ways you can choose to publish your work:
Hand write it in your best
handwriting to show your
presentation skills.
Type it up on the computer to
show your keyboard skills.
Create a PowerPoint to show your
computing skills.
Read it out and get a friend to video it
to show your speaking and listening
skills.
Take a few minutes to think which one shows off
your work and skills the best or choose a different
way if you have another idea.
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You could
create a
realistic Trip
Advisor page of your own…
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https://www.bing.com/videos/search?q=children+reviewing+holidays&&view=detail&mid=13DA0FF7596B271088E613DA0FF7596B271088E6&&FORM=VRDGAR&ru=%2Fvideos%2Fsearch%3Fq%3Dchildren%2Breviewing%2Bholidays%26FORM%3DHDRSC3
If you want to video your review, watch this video to get an idea of how to present it.
Choose TWO ways to publish
your review and these will be
your tasks for today and the next
two lessons.
Summer 2
Week 6
8/7/20
Publish your review
Summer 2
Week 6
9/7/20
Publish your review
Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning
LI: To evaluate my writing.
Plenary your published work:
•I have presented my work they way I wanted to.•I am happy with the outcome.•I think my review will be persuasive
Now upload BOTH your published reviews to Showbie.