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CSI Sample Essay
Thesis: Despite evidence suggesting that affirmative action may help minorities
receive greater academic opportunities, this practice often causes racial
discrimination, deprivation of academic opportunity, and a double standard of
student qualification.
Admission
Mr. Henry Sullivan reminisced back to his senior year of high school. He was
young and passionate, thinking that one day, after he graduated from high school, he
would make something of himself.
*****
It was 1:58 p.m. on December 15, 2008. Henry was sitting at the back of his
Calculus BC class, and his teacher was lecturing about the derivatives of inverse
trigonometric functions, but Henry didn’t know that. His eyes had been glued to the
clock for the past 5 minutes, because he knew that the results of Princeton
University’s Early Action applications were set to be announced at 2:00. Tick, tick,
tick. Henry rapped his fingers against the desk in fervent anticipation. Now it was
1:59, but Henry could wait no longer. “Mr. Rubenstern, can I use the restroom?”
Henry interrupted. After rolling his eyes, Mr. Rubenstern said yes. Making sure his
phone was in his pocket, Henry walked out of the classroom, trying to appear as
calm as possible.
As soon as he heard the door shut behind him, he immediately whipped out
his phone. A few taps of the screen later, Henry found himself at the loading screen
of the letter he so highly anticipated. Load already, why won’t you load?!? Henry
barely resisted the temptation to scream at his phone. 57 agonizing seconds later,
the letter loaded. Henry read the first word, “Congratulations ... “ and failed to stifle a
yell of euphoria.
*****
Now here Mr. Sullivan was, six years after his graduation from Rocky
Mountain High School. Here he was, deciding the fate of young 17 and 18yearolds
that really were not much different than he had been at one time. Mr. Sullivan
imagined that they were bright and zealous, just as he had once been. Most of all, he
imagined that they had the vigorous ambition and drive that he had once felt as a
young man. This ambition made Mr. Sullivan pause for a moment to appreciate the
power the decisions he made in his job had and the implications they would have on
others. He was responsible for deciding the futures of these students; he could fulfill
their dreams or crush them. With this in mind, Mr. Henry Sullivan glanced down at
one of the many applications he had received in the mailbox. It read:
Legal Name: Chen, Jason Date of Birth:03/14/1997 Gender: MaleMailing Address:
23 Oak View Drive, Chicago, IL, USA Race: Asian
The Princeton University admissions officer nodded with approval as his
eyes scanned the student’s application. SAT score: 2360. ACT score: 35. GPA: 3.9. He
placed the papers aside in his “Maybe” pile without giving it much thought, however.
Mr. Sullivan had seen countless other applications almost identical to this one, and
although the student’s resume was impressive, he knew the university had a strict
policy on admitting only a certain number of each racial group. He acknowledged
that raceconscious policies significantly damaged the prospect of Asian-
American applicants at many universities (Lim), but rules were rules. Of course
he knew Asians had been discriminated against in the past, but he felt that he
did not have time to think about such issues (Kahlenberg). He moved on to the
next application on his desk.
Legal Name: Smith, Mark Date of Birth:09/12/1996 Gender: MaleMailing Address:
142 Baxter Street, St. Louis, MO, USA Race: Black/AfricanAmerican
Mr. Sullivan’s eyes lit up. The university had been pestering him about
finding qualified applicants from racial minority groups to provide diversity at
Princeton, and this was exactly what he had been looking for. SAT score: 2190. ACT
score: 33. GPA: 3.85. He need not look much further. This one belonged in the “For
Sure” pile. He had read somewhere that black students were two and a half
times as likely to flunk out, but the university valued diversity and Mr. Smith
would certainly provide that. (Kahlenberg). Mr. Sullivan felt a few needles of
doubt pierce his resolve, however. In fact, he knew that minority students with
fewer credentials often became discouraged in challenging classes and
sometimes even dropped out (Heriot).
He felt like he might be doing something wrong; once, one of his friends had
even branded affirmative action policies as racism (Wise). His friend had
pointed out that Asians suffering from racial discrimination in the past were
harmed by affirmative action policies, calling the policy’s rationale into
question (Kahlenberg). Mr. Sullivan pondered the idea further. What if the NBA
enacted policies based on racial preference? What if professional sports leagues
limited the number of blacks or whites that could compete? (Elder) He decided
that this was an issue he could think about later; right now he had to focus on his
work. Mr. Sullivan sifted through the large stack of papers until he encountered
another interesting application:
Legal Name: Maria Espinosa Date of Birth: 12/28/1996 Gender: FemaleMailing
Address: Calle 28 No 1220, Monterrey, Mexico, Nuevo León, Mexico
Race: Hispanic/Latino
Princeton had received plenty of foreign applications, but each one was still
treated with pleasant surprise. Mr. Sullivan had a habit of always reading the essay
of any foreign applicants; often they contained interesting anecdotes and stories of
unfamiliar places. Maria Espinosa’s essay described the unbearable heat of her tall,
rundown apartment building and its contrast to the “lavish” conditions of “big
American houses.” Mr. Sullivan knew that Maria’s 1950 SAT score and 29 ACT score
were far lower than the usual Princeton standard of students, but he was reluctant
to reject an applicant that stood out so much from the others. He classified the
application as a “Maybe” and placed it on top of Chen’s application. Jason Chen was
just one of many Asian Americans to be placed at the back of the line through
the university's unannounced policies of affirmative action (Elder). The
hopeful Chicago student’s nearperfect SAT score and surplus of qualifications were
all but forgotten by Mr. Sullivan at this point.
Right then, Mr. Sullivan noticed an article on his desk that he had neglected
to read. It read: “University of California, Berkeley: A Unique Take on Affirmative
Action”. He scanned the article, not paying much attention to the details, but a few
statistics stood out to him. 3% AfricanAmerican, 39% Asian, 29% White (Elder).
That was strange. This was a school that believed purely in student qualification, a
school that didn’t take race into account.
He looked at the clock, which read 6:42 p.m. Mr. Sullivan realized he was the
only one left in the office. Well, I guess just one more can’t hurt, he thought to himself.
Her name was Kate Winston. Haven’t we had another Winston that just graduated a
few years ago? Sullivan thought. Ahh yes, Anna Winston. Bright girl, that Anna. Kate’s
2250 SAT score made Mr. Sullivan think that Kate might not be too different. Legacy
was a big deal to Princeton University (Heriot), so Kate had a good chance of
being admitted in any case. Mr. Sullivan yawned and made a new “Probably” pile for
Kate’s application. He decided he would look over it tomorrow, even though he
knew he would almost certainly end up moving it to the “For Sure” pile.
Works Cited
* NOTE: This writer did NOT use hanging indentation. Be sure you do!
Elder, Larry. "AffirmativeAction Programs Discriminate Against Asians."
Discrimination.Ed. Jacqueline Langwith. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2008. Opposing
Viewpoints. Rpt. from "What If the NBA Had Quotas?" Townhall.com. 2006. Opposing
Viewpoints in Context. Web. 7 Dec. 2014.
Heriot, Gail. "Affirmative Action Does Not Help Minority Students." Multiracial
America. Ed. Noah Berlatsky and Lynn M. Zott. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2014.
Opposing Viewpoints. Rpt. from "Opinion: Does Affirmative Action Help College
Students?" 2010. Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 16 Dec. 2014.
Kahlenberg, Richard. "Asian Americans Complicate the Argument for Affirmative
Action." Multiracial America. Ed. Noah Berlatsky and Lynn M. Zott. Detroit:
Greenhaven Press, 2014. Opposing Viewpoints. Rpt. from "Asian Americans and
Affirmative Action." Chronicle of Higher Education 1 June 2012. Opposing Viewpoints
in Context. Web. 4 Dec. 2014.
Lim, Elvin. "Affirmative Action Is Racial Profiling." Racial Profiling. Ed. Carol
Ullmann and Lynn M. Zott. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2013. Opposing Viewpoints.
Rpt. from "Why Racial Profiling Is Like Affirmative Action." www.elvinlim.com 28
Nov. 2010. Opposing Viewpoints in Context. Web. 19 Nov. 2014.
Wise, Tim. "Affirmative Action Is Not Racial Profiling." Racial Profiling. Ed. Carol
Ullmann and Lynn M. Zott. Detroit: Greenhaven Press, 2013. Opposing Viewpoints.
Rpt. from "Affirmative Action for Dummies: Explaining the Difference Between
Oppression and Opportunity." Timwise.org. 2010. Opposing Viewpoints in Context.
Web. 19 Nov. 2014.