touching the void lesson 1 and lesson 2

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Touching theVoid is a book,published in 1988,by Joe Simpson.

In it, he recountshis disastrous and

nearly fatal climb inthe Peruvian Andeswith his companionSimon Yates.



Lesson1



Touching theVoid is a book,published in 1988,by Joe Simpson.

In it, he recountshis disastrous and

nearly fatal climb inthe Peruvian Andeswith his companionSimon Yates.



Catapulted Fierce Grotesque

Distortion Nausea Eploded

!uptured !ationalDispassiona

tel"

Trail #$stacle Cautiousl"

Tautened !ational Searing

Desperatel" Screamed Terri$le



Eplore ho% Joe Simpson is a$le tosuccess&ull" create tension in theetract &rom Touching the Void'



hat happens in the e!tract"

hat challenges do #oe $impson and $imon %ates face"

hat are the key language &eatures"

&ow do they help to shape meaning and $uildtension"



(hat isa )oid*



hat happened to Joe"

hat happened to Simon"

+, %ords &or each



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(hat arethe 0e"

language



EllipsisShort

sentence

d2ecti)e

Ver$ d)er$ !epetition

3etaphor Eclamation 4uestion



ith a partner, usin' the key

words on the previous slide, allI want you to do is &eaturespot. (se a hi'hli'hter.

im to 5nd at least one

eample o& each &eature'



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In the )rst para'raph, I*vechosen to focus mainly on #oe

$impson*s use of ad2ecti)es and)er$s. &owever, I*ve alsoidenti)ed where he has used a

short sentence in the



7o% do the

language&eatures help to

shape meaning

and $uild



+he verb hit connotes )iolence and con8ict. +his indicates to

us that #oe $impson*s collisionwith the slope has put him indanger.



+he adective shattering su''ests that the collision has

had a disastrous impact on #oe$impson-s knee. +his createstension because, at this sta'e,

we don*t know if he has lost



+he short sentence on thepenultimate line of the para'raph

slows the pace of the narrative. +his helps to rein&orce theserious, dramatic tone that

was established in the openin'



ith a partner, makes notes

on the A paper provided andprepare to feedback. (se theanal"tical )er$s.

im to put &or%ard at

least &our separate



9mplies mpli5es Clari5es

7ighlights Co)e"s Esta$lishes

Suggests Emphasises !e)eals

9ndicates 9n&orms !epresents



Spea0 clearl"'

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Lesson.



Eplore ho% Joe Simpson is a$le tosuccess&ull" create tension in theetract &rom Touching the Void'



&ow can we use our notes to construct a %rittenresponse"

hat are the &eatures of successful anal"tical

%riting"

hat are the 0e" %ords"



4uic0recap:



(hat are the

&eatures o&success&ulanal"tical



(hatare the

0e"

Short



EllipsisShort

sentenced2ecti)e

Ver$ d)er$ !epetition

3etaphor Eclamation 4uestion

9mplies mpli5es Clari5es

7ighlights Co)e"s Esta$lishes

Suggests Emphasises !e)eals

9ndicates 9n&orms !epresents



&ow is #oe $impson able to

successfully create tensionin the e!tract from Touchingthe Void"

Statement 4uote nalysis

Development

#oe $impson uses t%o eclamation



S #oe $impson uses t%o eclamationmar0s at the end of the secondpara'raph. At this sta'e, the reader is an

aware of the e!act nature of his inury.

4u $impson writes, /3" leg; : 3" leg;*

+he e!clamation marks used by $impson

ampli&"his sense of distress at the pain he isunder. +he serious nature of his inury,and the dan'er he is in, is clearly

signi5ed.

D

+he ellipsis used by $impson helps toadd to this e0ect his thou'ht process is

&ragmented, highlighting that he can



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4ook closely at lan'ua'e andcontent

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Is the writin' technical accurate"

Is the writin' precise"

Are the points rele)ant and credi$le"

Are the points epansi)e enou'h"

Are the quotations appropriate"

&ow does the work compare to yours"



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