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Cleaning Cleaning Up Your Up Your

Research Research Essay!Essay!

Cleaning Cleaning Up Your Up Your

Research Research Essay!Essay!

It’s time to clean up any sloppy It’s time to clean up any sloppy phrasing in your paper!phrasing in your paper!

Sweep up unnecessary words.Sweep up unnecessary words.Sweep up unnecessary words.Sweep up unnecessary words.

In this day and age in which we liveIn this day and age in which we live TodayToday

In order to understandIn order to understand To understandTo understand

Researchers began to discoverResearchers began to discover Researchers discoveredResearchers discovered

Tuna start to migrateTuna start to migrate Tuna migrateTuna migrate

Plaque proceeds to clog the arteriesPlaque proceeds to clog the arteries Plaque clogs the arteriesPlaque clogs the arteries

Vacuum up “word dirt.”Vacuum up “word dirt.”Vacuum up “word dirt.”Vacuum up “word dirt.”

A multitude ofA multitude of manymany A plethora ofA plethora of manymany

An immense number ofAn immense number of

manymany A great deal ofA great deal of manymany

A myriad ofA myriad of manymany

Multitudinous examples ofMultitudinous examples of manymany

More mice survived More mice survived due to the fact due to the fact that that they received treatment in a they received treatment in a hyperbaric chamber.hyperbaric chamber.

Researchers Researchers came to find out came to find out that a that a pacemaker could control the arrhythmia.pacemaker could control the arrhythmia.

Many people Many people are caught by the fact are caught by the fact that laser tattoo removal can leave that laser tattoo removal can leave permanent scars.permanent scars.

More mice survived More mice survived because because they received treatment in a they received treatment in a hyperbaric chamber.hyperbaric chamber.

Researchers Researchers learned learned that a that a pacemaker could control the arrhythmia.pacemaker could control the arrhythmia.

Many people Many people discoverdiscoverthat laser tattoo removal can leave that laser tattoo removal can leave permanent scars.permanent scars.

Scrub out weak verb-adverb pairsScrub out weak verb-adverb pairsScrub out weak verb-adverb pairsScrub out weak verb-adverb pairs

The patients The patients walked awkwardlywalked awkwardly after the surgery.after the surgery. The patientsThe patients stumbled stumbled after the after the surgery.surgery.

The anacondaThe anaconda squeezed squeezed the the deer deer forcefullyforcefully.. The anacondaThe anaconda strangled strangled the the

deer.deer. Congress Congress considered considered the options the options

carefullycarefully.. Congress Congress studied studied the options.the options.

In order to ensure respiratory In order to ensure respiratory health in these modern polluted health in these modern polluted times, humans must begin to start times, humans must begin to start to proceed to reduce the immense to proceed to reduce the immense amount of air contaminants.amount of air contaminants.

In order to ensure respiratory In order to ensure respiratory health in these modern polluted health in these modern polluted times, humans must begin to start times, humans must begin to start to proceed to reduce the immense to proceed to reduce the immense amount of air contaminants.amount of air contaminants.

To ensure respiratory health To ensure respiratory health today, humans must reduce air today, humans must reduce air contaminants.contaminants.

Trash pretentious language.Trash pretentious language.Trash pretentious language.Trash pretentious language.

Viewers can Viewers can more fully more fully appreciate the appreciate the pulchritude pulchritude of Van Gogh’s of Van Gogh’s paintings when paintings when they understand they understand his innovative his innovative techniques.techniques.

That has got to go!That has

got to go!

Use a thesaurus with care!

Use a thesaurus with care!

Viewers can Viewers can more fully more fully appreciate the appreciate the beauty beauty of Van Gogh’s of Van Gogh’s paintings when paintings when they understand they understand his innovative his innovative techniques.techniques.

Eliminate the dust bunnies of writing.Eliminate the dust bunnies of writing.Eliminate the dust bunnies of writing.Eliminate the dust bunnies of writing.

Scan Scan the surfaces of your paragraphs, the surfaces of your paragraphs, removing any sentenceremoving any sentence errors errors..

TheThe best best method:method: Cover Cover your essay your essay with a sheet of paper, and scanwith a sheet of paper, and scan line line byby lineline..

Read the essayRead the essay aloud aloud to catch to catch phrasing that doesn’tphrasing that doesn’t sound right sound right..

For your research essay,For your research essay, remove remove unnecessary second-person pronouns:unnecessary second-person pronouns: youyou,, your your,, yours yours, etc. unless they are , etc. unless they are part of your quotations.part of your quotations.

Use Use CtrlCtrl + + FF to to search for problems..

Mop up documentation errors.Mop up documentation errors.Mop up documentation errors.Mop up documentation errors.

Use a highlighter to mark all of the quotations in

your draft.

Use a highlighter to mark all of the quotations in

your draft.

Parenthetical References Parenthetical References with Bookswith Books

Parenthetical References Parenthetical References with Bookswith Books

If you do If you do notnot  mention the author in the mention the author in the authority phrase, use the author's last authority phrase, use the author's last name name andand  the page number in the the page number in the reference. reference.

If you use the If you use the authorauthor  in the authority in the authority phrase, include only the phrase, include only the page numberpage number   in in the parenthetical reference.the parenthetical reference.

The The oneone period that ends the entire period that ends the entire sentence sentence followsfollows  the reference.the reference.

NoNo author in the authority phrase:author in the authority phrase:NoNo author in the authority phrase:author in the authority phrase:

According to Drug War Facts, “methadone treatment reduced

participants’ heroin use by 70%, their criminal activity by 57%,

and increased their full-time employment by 24%” (McVay 197).

According to Drug War Facts, “methadone treatment reduced

participants’ heroin use by 70%, their criminal activity by 57%,

and increased their full-time employment by 24%” (McVay 197).

Author in the authority phrase:Author in the authority phrase:Author in the authority phrase:Author in the authority phrase:

According to Douglas McVay, author of Drug War Facts,

“methadone treatment reduced participants’ heroin use by 70%,

their criminal activity by 57%, and increased their full-time

employment by 24%” (197).

According to Douglas McVay, author of Drug War Facts,

“methadone treatment reduced participants’ heroin use by 70%,

their criminal activity by 57%, and increased their full-time

employment by 24%” (197).

Parenthetical References with Parenthetical References with Online SourcesOnline Sources

Parenthetical References with Parenthetical References with Online SourcesOnline Sources

If you do If you do notnot  mention the author in the authority mention the author in the authority phrase, use the author's phrase, use the author's last namelast name..

If you use the If you use the authorauthor  in the authority phrase, in the authority phrase, no no parenthetical reference is necessary.parenthetical reference is necessary.

If you do not have an author, use an If you do not have an author, use an abbreviated abbreviated titletitle in quotation marks, like this: in quotation marks, like this: (“Few (“Few Successes”)Successes”)

The The oneone period that ends the entire period that ends the entire sentence sentence followsfollows  the parenthetical reference.the parenthetical reference.

If the quotation does not have a reference, the If the quotation does not have a reference, the period comes period comes beforebefore the closing quotation mark.the closing quotation mark.

No No author in the authority phrase:author in the authority phrase:No No author in the authority phrase:author in the authority phrase:

According to The New York Times, Matt Harding’s dance video is

“an almost perfect piece of Internet art” (McGrath).

According to The New York Times, Matt Harding’s dance video is

“an almost perfect piece of Internet art” (McGrath).

Author in the authority phrase:Author in the authority phrase:Author in the authority phrase:Author in the authority phrase:

Charles McGrath, a reporter for The New York Times, considers

Matt Harding’s dance video “an almost perfect piece of Internet

art.”

Charles McGrath, a reporter for The New York Times, considers

Matt Harding’s dance video “an almost perfect piece of Internet

art.”

No No author for the article = abbreviated author for the article = abbreviated title in the referencetitle in the reference

No No author for the article = abbreviated author for the article = abbreviated title in the referencetitle in the reference

According to The New York Times, the drug company “agreed to

pay Louisiana $45 million to settle lawsuits” (“Glaxo to Pay”).

According to The New York Times, the drug company “agreed to

pay Louisiana $45 million to settle lawsuits” (“Glaxo to Pay”).

No No reference if you have already reference if you have already mentioned the title.mentioned the title.

No No reference if you have already reference if you have already mentioned the title.mentioned the title.

According to the article “Glaxo to Pay $45 Million to State Over

Drug Marketing,” the company “agreed to pay Louisiana $45

million to settle lawsuits.”

According to the article “Glaxo to Pay $45 Million to State Over

Drug Marketing,” the company “agreed to pay Louisiana $45

million to settle lawsuits.”

All parenthetical All parenthetical references must references must

flawlessly matchflawlessly match the the entry on the works entry on the works

cited page.cited page.

McVay, Douglas. Drug War Facts. Toronto: Chelsea

House Publishers, 2010.

McVay, Douglas. Drug War Facts. Toronto: Chelsea

House Publishers, 2010.

According to Drug War Facts, “methadone treatment

reduced participants’ heroin use by 70%, their criminal

activity by 57%, and increased their full-time

employment by 24%” (McVay 197).

According to Drug War Facts, “methadone treatment

reduced participants’ heroin use by 70%, their criminal

activity by 57%, and increased their full-time

employment by 24%” (McVay 197).

Establish a flawless match Establish a flawless match between parenthetical reference between parenthetical reference and the works cited page entry:and the works cited page entry:

Establish a flawless match Establish a flawless match between parenthetical reference between parenthetical reference and the works cited page entry:and the works cited page entry:

“Glaxo to Pay $45 Million to State Over Drug

Marketing.” New York Times 26 July 2013. Web.

22 Feb. 2014.

“Glaxo to Pay $45 Million to State Over Drug

Marketing.” New York Times 26 July 2013. Web.

22 Feb. 2014.

According to The New York Times, the drug company

“agreed to pay Louisiana $45 million to settle lawsuits”

(“Glaxo to Pay”).

According to The New York Times, the drug company

“agreed to pay Louisiana $45 million to settle lawsuits”

(“Glaxo to Pay”).

Even for sources with no Even for sources with no authors:authors:Even for sources with no Even for sources with no authors:authors:

Write the ConclusionWrite the ConclusionWrite the ConclusionWrite the Conclusion

Write Write oneone sentence that summarizes sentence that summarizes the the main idea main idea of the paper.of the paper.

Write Write oneone sentence of summary for sentence of summary for eacheach of your four main points. Remind of your four main points. Remind your reader of the your reader of the good ideas good ideas you you covered.covered.

End with a End with a thoughtful thoughtful last statement. last statement. You can have an You can have an opinion opinion here or here or address the reader directly.address the reader directly.

The conclusion must be at least The conclusion must be at least 6 6 sentencessentences. Longer is fine.. Longer is fine.

Final VersionFinal VersionFinal VersionFinal Version

Your essay is due in class on Your essay is due in class on Tuesday, Tuesday, March 18March 18..

You must put the essay You must put the essay in my in my handshands..

Remember to bring your Remember to bring your score score sheetsheet..

You must also submit a copy to You must also submit a copy to SafeAssignSafeAssign. No SafeAssign copy = . No SafeAssign copy = zerozero..

Is Your Essay Toxic?Is Your Essay Toxic?Visit the Writing Center for Help.Visit the Writing Center for Help.

Is Your Essay Toxic?Is Your Essay Toxic?Visit the Writing Center for Help.Visit the Writing Center for Help.

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West Campus!

Building 5, Room 155,

West Campus!

Call 4 0 7 – 5 8 2

– 5 4 5 4 to schedule an

appointment.

Call 4 0 7 – 5 8 2

– 5 4 5 4 to schedule an

appointment.

The goal is to tidy up any The goal is to tidy up any messiness, going from this messiness, going from this

disaster …disaster …

… … to this neat and orderly to this neat and orderly production!production!

The End.The End.The End.The End.