THE HAPPY RAINBOW FUN-TIME REVISION SLIDE SHOW

BADDA-BING

PERIOD 1

2BurnsHeTentilucciAllenChildHoeferMcCullough

1Blankmeyer

FrankelSiekmannWoodBurschlagEcheverriaLe

3DayLederTienBrooksCollinsLaitmanRichards

4EdelmanRabinowitzWestBurkeConnorsLawSolarz

PERIOD 3

1

BunkeGallantHuddyVan AkenFinnReilly

2Frankel

GaoAdams

RowenCardonaJhaveriRubin

3CohenCaboShelby-GlickDeleheyLambSheungVoutsinas

4DelahantyCampbellShultzDeonPeriThorpe

PERIOD 4/5

1ALARYENGELT. HUGHESMcCRANEYRUPPEL

WESTSHAKT

2ATTANASIOFINNEYFROCK

KINGMYERS

SKINNERWHITE

3AVCIFRICKERLEHMANNGUYENSTROMINGER

GRISWOLDPINCIOTTI

4BRODHOLLAWELLMcANDREWS

RANDTHORBURNRUTKOWSKI

PERIOD 9

1BAGNELL

DEMSKOGRUNDYSHIPON

BREINERKASOFFPEREPICZKA

2BONASGOLDSTEINKENNY

SUKUNDAFOOTEMEINSTERRUMMEL

3COLLITOGOROSHKO

LEVYWATKINS

FORDMITCHELLSACHACZENSKI

4D’ANJOLELLGOUBEAUD

SANDMANWILLISHULIHANNOWMOSSINGH

GREEN = GO FOR IT!Excellent Critical Writing With

Researched, Well-Reasoned Arguments• Uses original ideas (doesn’t let the critic

take the lead)• Uses Text {PROOF} from the short story

in their arguments. Expands and analyzes that {proof} often.

• Frames all quotes from critics. • Uses present tense when criticizing

literature.

Yellow = Slow Down and Revise

Unbalanced, Unproven Arguments With Possible Faulty Reasoning. • Allows the critics to lead at times.

• Needs more detailed Text {PROOF} from the short story.

• Needs to cite author in detail. • Needs to cite author and page number

when paraphrasing. • An alarming number of grammatical and

formatting errors.

Red = Stop and Rethink. Inadequate Evidence and/or Failed

Reason• The critics take the lead. Article is

basically a summary of what critics think, rather than an original literary research article.

• Little to no actual textual {PROOF} to back up arguments.

• Appears rushed and unclear often.• Contains multiple typos and mechanical

errors.

CONCISE• MAKE “TO BE” YOUR ENEMY. • “IS” “ARE” “WAS” “WERE” • WRITING BECOMES CLEARER• LESS PASSIVE VOICE (PV)

CONCISEThe plot of the story is basedalmost entirely on a group of three young girls that enter the store. [20 words]

CONCISEThe plot follows a group ofthree young girls who enter the store. [13 words]

[FRAMES]• Make it clear if a critic or the

author is writing the quote. • Make you sound clearer and

prepared for your reader.

[FRAMES]

[FRAMES]

[FRAMES]

[FRAMES]

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[FRAMES]

TEXT {PROOF}• Increases your LOGOS

• Makes your argument more convincing

• Makes it clear that you KNOW the story and you KNOW your stuff!

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

TEXT {PROOF}

PARAPHRASEHelps your reader follow the important action. Cites the AUTHOR’s last name, not the critic’s.

Cites the PAGE NUMBER also.

EX: (London 7).

Keeps you from sounding pretentious

Effective use of Conciseness (C)

PARAPHRASE

PARAPHRASE

INTRO HOOKHelps your reader engage the material.

Uses a plausible connection. - Author quote- Metaphor- Comparison

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