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Topic (14 Mar): Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think child care centres provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.Today, fast-paced lifestyles regularly forces parents to leave their children withto relatives or kindergartens. It is often argued that children should be looked after by their family. However, wWhile reasons can be given to justify this, I would contendt that nursery schools provideshould be the best congenial environment for kids.On the otherone hand, there are those who believe that busy children should let other family members take care of their children. Firstly, cChildren abuse is an increasing problem withinin the society and therefore , family members should be the most reliable source to keep their children safe. Family members are likely to devote their time and energy to take a good care of their children. Secondly, sending children to relatives houses makes children closer to their family. Children will can build up and cement their relationship with other members of their family besides their parents. This also helps to make up for the loss of parentals care.AlternativelyOn the other hand, I agree with those who argue that childrenkids should be sent to nursery schools. Primarily, childcare centers supply ideal facilities for the development of children. In professional schools, childrenkids can learn useful lessons or take part in physical activities which are designed to maximize childrens ability. Another justification is that children can meet a lot of friends who are around their age at school. This will help them to build relationships withknow new people and become more sociable. Furthermore, being away from parents and family members encourages children to be more independent. ChildrenKids will be taught the rule of class, acceptable levels of behaviour and social norms rather than spoiled by their parents.In conclusion, it seems to me that childrenparents should be enrolled in schools despite the undeniable advantage of having them cared forkept by family members.