suzy mcansh, 24.3.2010 booby traps for finnish writers of academic english
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Suzy McAnsh, 24.3.2010
Booby Traps for Finnish Writers of Academic English
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Academic Writing in English
• In which areas do you consider you are likely to make “mistakes” when you write?
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By the end of the session, you should
• have a good awareness of typical language problems for Finnish scholars writing for publication in English
• have sharpened your ability to repair your own texts – structuring information– grammar– punctuation– appropriate style.
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info structure
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Creating flow and unity
• “given-before-new” principle• creating focus
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What kind of organisation do you strive for?
or
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The “given-before-new” principle • provides readers with a framework on which to organise
concepts
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The “given-before-new” principle
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Creating focus
What is the painting “about”?
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The University of Oulu offers high quality teaching and excellent programmes in six faculties. Every year hundreds of foreign exchange and degree students come to Oulu - would you like to be one of them? We here at the International Relations want to make everyone's stay special. These pages include a vast amount of information and are designed for your benefit. We hope you find what you are looking for - please, contact us if you have any questions!
International Relations web site http://www.oulu.fi/intl/ Accessed 17.3.2010
What is this text about?
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Keeping the topic in focus
The University of Oulu offers high quality teaching and excellent programmes in six faculties. Every year hundreds of foreign exchange and degree students come to Oulu - would you like to be one of them? We here at the International Relations want to make everyone's stay special. These pages include a vast amount of information and are designed for your benefit. We hope you find what you are looking for - please, contact us if you have any questions!
International Relations web site http://www.oulu.fi/intl/ Accessed 17.3.2010
Advantages of University
of Oulu
What we canoffer
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Creating Flow and Unity
Keep two things in mind:
1. Place familiar information at the start of a sentence, newsworthy information at the end.
2. Select appropriate topics and use strategies to keep the text topic "in the spotlight" as the text develops.
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The “light-before-heavy” principle
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The light-before-heavy principle
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To explain the light-before-heavy principle, we need the concept, ‘noun phrase’
brick a noun, but not a noun phrase, since a noun phrase can function as the sentence subject
a brick
a brick in the wall
a brick in the wall of an ivy-covered tower
a sad, crumbling brick in the wall of an ivy-covered tower
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1. ‘Light” noun phrases before the verb.
2. If you must use “heavy” noun phrases, use them at the end of a sentence.
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How would you improve these “heavy-before-light” monsters?
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Make a text easy to grasp ‘light” noun phrases before “heavy”
• light = short and simple• heavy = long and complex
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Logical consistency: comparing like with like
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methods forassessing
performance used inthe previous study
methods forassessing
the previous study
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Comparing apples and pears
The tests were assessed similarly to the previous study [4].
The performances were assessed using methods similar to those used in the previous study.
methods forassessingthe tests
methods forassessing
performance inthese tests
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The most important thing is to concentrate on personal achievement and give a feeling of competence to all the pupils instead of competing against each other.
The most important aim is to concentrate on personal achievement and give a feeling of competence to all the pupils instead of the sense of competing against each other.
to concentrate on personal achievement and give
a feeling of competence to all the pupils
competing against each other
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Maintain logical consistency
place like with like in parallel structures
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grammar
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The article
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Find the missing articles:• In teaching and learning the basic ideas of the number line
it would be essential to pay attention to the lengths of the intervals ...
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General principle
• If you have a singular, countable noun, you need an article (or other determiner, such as “this”, “that”, “hers”, “its”):
Find the missing articles:• In teaching and learning the basic ideas of number line it
would be essential to pay attention to the lengths of the intervals...
student
concept
term
• A common feature in the books is that the measurement of length is left to the first year spring clearly after the presentation of the number line.
• Common feature in the books is that the measurement of length is left to the first year spring clearly after the presentation of the number line.
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Where are the unnecessary articles?:• Moreover transferring the arithmetic sentences into
the number line diagrams and reverse will easily lead to the rote learning.
Where are the unnecessary articles?:• Moreover transferring the arithmetic sentences into
the number line diagrams and reverse will easily lead to rote learning.
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General principle
• If you have a singular, uncountable noun which you are discussing in general terms, you do not need an article:
understanding
biology
research
• If pupils fail on the number line problems it does necessarily mean that they fail in understanding addition or subtraction.
• If pupils fail on the number line problems it does necessarily mean that they fail in understanding the addition or subtraction.
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Where is the unnecessary article?: The physical education teachers felt that activity
monitors suit best the secondary school students but not primary school pupils, because activity monitors were not designed for small children.
Where is the unnecessary article?:• The physical education teachers felt that activity
monitors suit best secondary school students but not primary school pupils, because activity monitors were not designed for small children..
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General principle
• If you have a plural noun which you are discussing in general terms, you do not need an article:
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Quickie assignment
• Choose a paragraph (or two) from your own article.• Identify all the singular nouns (highlight or underline)
1. Do all the countable nouns have an article (or determiner)?
2. Are all the uncountable nouns written without an article when they are discussed in general, non-defined terms?
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“A” or “the”?
a man
the man • familiar• known• identified
• unfamilar• vague• unidentified
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When do we use “the”?
With nouns standing for “known” concepts– singular or plural– countable or uncountable
Known because– already mentioned in the text (same word or synonym)– shared knowledge of (expected, expert) community of readers– unique (biggest, best, only one)– defined by
• premodification (the new chairman)• postmodification (the chairman of the board, the chairman who
was recently appointed)
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If a specified concept is mentioned add an article where necessary.If a general concept is mentioned remove an unnecessary article.
1. All the themes included some other activities besides just working with technological tools such as the computers and digital cameras.
2. Twenty-four six-year-old children took part in this study. The kindergarten was located close to the university. A research permit was asked from children’s parents...
3. On the inverse problem type the pupil has to draw “correct amount of circles” to correspond the points on the number line.
4. In addition to these also a skill to draw the arrows of given length is needed.5. Second essential research problem was to find out how the second graders can
shift from the arithmetic sentences to the number line diagrams and vice versa. 6. The six-year-olds can list the numbers from one to twenty with ease, they can
count the number of items in a discrete set, and they can compare discrete sets.7. Most common mistake was to write 4+12 or 4+12=16 (24%).8. Because most of the first and second grade pupils seem to learn decimal system
and basic arithmetic operations without the use of the number line, it seems to be a bad idea to interfere this process with number line diagrams in the first two classes.
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If a specified concept is mentioned add an article where necessary.If a general concept is mentioned remove an unnecessary article.
1. All the themes included some other activities besides just working with technological tools such as computers and digital cameras.
2. Twenty-four six-year-old children took part in this study. The kindergarten was located close to the university. A research permit was asked from the children’s parents...
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If a specified concept is mentioned add an article where necessary.
If a general concept is mentioned remove an unnecessary article.
3. On the inverse problem type the pupil has to draw the “correct amount of circles” to correspond the points on the number line.
4. In addition to these also a skill to draw the arrows of a given length is needed.
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If a specified concept is mentioned add an article where necessary.If a general concept is mentioned remove an unnecessary article.
5. The second essential research problem was to find out how the second graders can shift from the arithmetic sentences to the number line diagrams and vice versa.
6. Six-year-olds can list the numbers from one to twenty with ease, they can count the number of items in a discrete set, and they can compare discrete sets.
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If a specified concept is mentioned add an article where necessary.If a general concept is mentioned remove an unnecessary article.
7. The most common mistake was to write 4+12 or 4+12=16 (24%).
8. Because most of the first and second grade pupils seem to learn the decimal system and basic arithmetic operations without the use of the number line, it seems to be a bad idea to interfere this process with number line diagrams in the first two classes.
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Countables and uncountables
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Research and study
Study: countable / Research: uncountable
SPOT THE ERRORS• This study had also some features similar to an action
research• From the prior researches … there is every likelihood
that even the second graders do have problems with length measurement…
Research and study
Study: countable / Research: uncountable
SPOT THE ERRORS• This study also had some features similar to action
research• From the prior research, … there is every likelihood
that even the second graders do have problems with length measurement…
HOW ABOUT THIS?• …the material that they produced was used as shared reading
material.
HOW ABOUT THIS?• …the material that they produced was used as a
shared reading material.
• Almost half of the pupils noticed the points and counted simply their number starting from 5cm and hence ending with one unit too many.
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countable uncountablefewer less
number amount
many much
• It is also remarkable that only four children knew fewer than 15 letters (uppercase).
• Almost half of the pupils noticed the points and counted simply their number starting from 5cm and hence ending with one unit too much.
• It is also remarkable that only four children knew less than 15 letters (uppercase).
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Possessives
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Possessives
Don't use the "s" possessive unless the noun refers to a person (or something which is treated as though it had human qualities)
"Jim's mouth" vs "the mouth of the river“
"Pam's foot" vs "the foot of the device“
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How would you fix the possessive forms in the following?
The idea of the whole programme is to investigate, elaborate and innovate pedagogical practices.
1. The whole programme’s idea is to investigate, elaborate and innovate new pedagogical practices.
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How would you fix the possessive forms in the following?
2. This exercise was formed using a task from Laskutaito 2b book's measurement part (Rikala et al. 2003, 68).
This exercise was formed using a task from the measurement section of the Laskutaito 2b book (Rikala et al. 2003, 68).
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Scan your own text for– Quantifiers with countables– Possessive forms
Everything in order?
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Prepositions: always a challenge
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Prepositions
• Unsure about a preposition?• Can Google help?
preposition?
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search string: “may result * learning difficulties”
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punctuation
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Comma with introductory phrase
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Comma with introductory phrase
WHILE HE WAS EATING TIGER WOODS CAME INTO THE ROOM.
In physical education teaching equipment selection is a key issue.
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• Help your readers find the subject immediately comma after intro phrase
• Don’t make your readers work too hard!
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Where should the comma go?
1. According to the guidelines teachers organize meaningful opportunities for children to become acquainted with written and oral language.
2. At the same time the preschoolers experienced a new way of practicing letter-sound correspondence.
3. In teaching and learning the basic ideas of number line it would be essential to pay attention to the lengths of the intervals and to meanings of the numerals marked on the number line
4. Again judging from the answers the pupils noted only the endpoints ...
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Where should the comma go?
1. According to the guidelines, teachers organize meaningful opportunities for children to become acquainted with written and oral language.
2. At the same time, the preschoolers experienced a new way of practicing letter-sound correspondence.
3. In teaching and learning the basic ideas of number line, it would be essential to pay attention to the lengths of the intervals and to meanings of the numerals marked on the number line
4. Again, judging from the answers, the pupils noted only the endpoints …
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Comma to combine complete sentences
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Comma to combine complete sentences
Put a comma before coordinating conjunctions between sentences which are complete in themselves.
• and• but• nor• yet• or• so (and so)
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Comma to combine complete sentences
• The analysis was carried out by the first author. PLUS
• It started from analysing the observational notes which were recorded after each session.
• The analysis was carried out by the first author, and it started from analysing the observational notes which were recorded after each session.
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Comma to combine complete sentences
• In the spelling test there were ten words. PLUS
• Each word was scored separately.
• In the spelling test there were ten words, and each word was scored separately.
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No comma before essential clause
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No comma before essential clause
1. My brother who is an engineer lives in Germany.
2. My brother, who is an engineer, lives in Germany.
IN EACH CASE, HOW MANY BROTHERS DO I HAVE?
1. More than one brother
2. One brother
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This info defines which
brotherI mean.
This is extra infoabout my brother.
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Essential or non-essential: comma or no comma?
1. In many cases a peer helped the other child, when they had some difficulties with the technological devises.
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2. These development ideas for the activity monitor have been also been reported to the producer of the monitor who has been collaborating with researchers.
3. It is justified to argue that this kind of exercise enhances the sequencing skills which have been learned with the discrete sets.
1. In many cases a peer helped the other child when they had some difficulties with the technological devices.
2. These development ideas for the activity monitor have been also been reported to the producer of the monitor, who has been collaborating with researchers.
Assumption: there isonly one producer
CORRECT: The relative clause defines
the sequencing skills
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Hyphen with compound adjectives
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Hyphen with compound adjectives red brick work vs red-brick work
To prevent ambiguity, hyphenate a compound adjective before a noun.
• (noun + noun) + noun a teacher-education institute• (adjective + noun) + noun a physical-education teacher• (noun + present or past participle) + noun a work-related study• (adverb + participle) + noun well-functioning systems
– (but not “ly” adverbs: a rapidly developing field
• (number + unit) + noun a 45-minute test
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4. … according to this pilot study technology can support pedagogical practises that support a task orientated [14] motivational climate.
4. … according to this pilot study technology can support pedagogical practises that support a task-orientated [14] motivational climate.
3. The teachers also saw an opportunity for cross-curricular teaching when teaching health related issues to children and adolescents.
3. The teachers also saw an opportunity for cross-curricular teaching when teaching health-related issues to children and adolescents.
2. We also wanted to … distribute research based knowledge about technology based learning environments to educators.
2. We also wanted to … distribute research-based knowledge about technology-based learning environments to educators.
1. Literacy in the 21st Century is a three year (2009-2011) project funded by the European Social Fund (ESF).
1. Literacy in the 21st Century is a three-year (2009-2011) project funded by the European Social Fund (ESF).
Missing hyphens?
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Scan 1-3 paragraphs of your own text. Have you used– commas to separate off introductory phrases?– commas to combine complete sentences joined by “and”, “but”,
“or”, etc.?– commas with non-essential clauses, but NOT with essential
clauses?– hyphens to join words in compound adjectives?
Everything in order?
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style
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“Run on” expressions and abbreviations
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• Avoid ending your list with such expressions as – etc.– and so forth– and so on
• Instead, use a superordinate term followed by "including", "such as", or the verb "to include"
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They wanted to show e.g. how to make the whole background of a drawing change colour.
They wanted to show techniques such as how to make the whole background of a drawing change colour.
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1. Teachers organize meaningful opportunities for children to become acquainted with written and oral language e.g. by listening to stories, expositions, poems, nursery rhymes.
2. For example, a project on bugs … included different kinds of activities such as painting, drawing, making stone-bugs, storytelling etc.
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1. Teachers organize meaningful opportunities for children to become acquainted with written and oral language by means such as listening to stories, expositions, poems, nursery rhymes.
2. For example, a project on bugs … included different kinds of activities such as painting, drawing, making stone-bugs, storytelling. (Remove the “etc.”)
or
For example, a project on bugs … included painting, drawing, making stone-bugs, storytelling and different kinds of activities.
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e.g. and i.e
• Abbreviated forms most often used in parentheses • In running text, use
– for example– that is
• Don’t forget to separate these expressions off with commas
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Teachers organize meaningful opportunities for children to become acquainted with written and oral language e.g. by listening to stories, expositions, poems, nursery rhymes.
Teachers organize meaningful opportunities for children to become acquainted with written and oral language, for example, by listening to stories, expositions, poems, and nursery rhymes.
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Almost half of the pupils noticed the points and counted simply their number starting from 5cm and hence ending with one unit too much i.e. 12cm (44%).
Almost half of the pupils noticed the points and simply counted their number starting from 5cm, hence ending with one unit too many, that is, 2cm (44%).
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Vocabulary shift
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Vocabulary shift
• Recognise the difference between formal and informal vocabulary.
• Informal words: generally inappropriate in academic papers.
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Verbs
Replace everyday verbs with more precise (Latinate) equivalents• be be located, be situated, …• do carry out, perform, implement, …• get obtain, gain, receive, achieve, …• give provide, supply, offer, …• make produce, generate, …• put place, insert, attach, …
Avoid phrasal (multiword) verbs• look at study, investigate• find out determine• get rid of eliminate• take care of manage
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Verbs
1. The first column in the tables stands for the total points for the tests.
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2. As the project went on the preschoolers were not that afraid of making mistakes and they worked harder.
3. For active pupils, …there are other technologies which can be used to get more detailed information of their performance.
Verbs
1. The first column in the tables represents the total points for the tests.
2. As the project proceeded, the preschoolers were less afraid of making mistakes, and they worked harder.
3. For active pupils, …there are other technologies which can be used to obtain more detailed information about their performance.
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Nouns
– a lot a great deal, a considerable amount, …
– a lot of, lots of many, numerous, a large number of, …
– a way an approach, a means, a method, …
– an idea a concept, a plan, a notion, …
– the meaning (of...) the purpose, aim, objective, interpretation, …
– a thing a factor, an object, a point, an aspect, …
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Nouns 1. If necessary, the observational notes were compared with the video
material to check unclear things ...
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2. For example, when the children confronted a problem, the first thing they were told to do was to think together if they could solve it.
3. Another thing worth mentioning is that a number track starting from zero is not introduced in the other books.
4. The most important thing is to concentrate on personal achievement and give a feeling of competence to all the pupils ...
5. The study showed that introducing new technology to the school environment requires a lot of time and motivated teachers.
6. There is still a lot to improve in our pedagogical practices in the direction of emergent literacy.
1. If necessary, the observational notes were compared with the video material to check unclear points / aspects ...
2. For example, when the children confronted a problem, the first instruction they were given was to think together if they could solve it.
3. Another point / issue worth mentioning is that a number track starting from zero is not introduced in the other books.
4. The most important concern is to concentrate on personal achievement and give a feeling of competence to all the pupils …
5. The study showed that introducing new technology to the school environment requires a considerable amount of time and motivated teachers.
6. There is still a great deal to improve in our pedagogical practices in the direction of emergent literacy.
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Adjectives
– big large, great, high, major, … – hard difficult, arduous, laborious, … – really extremely, considerably, …– good appropriate, effective, advantageous, … – bad poor, inappropriate, unsatisfactory, … – different various, a variety of, …
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Adjectives
1. It was really easy to spot the children who had never used a mouse before, as their mouse using skills were less developed.
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2. Of course, the problem was often so big that the children could not sort it out by themselves.
3. 23 per cent felt that their physical condition was quite bad or bad (5 %) compared to their peers.
Adjectives
1. It was extremely easy to spot the children who had never used a mouse before, as their skills in using the mouse were less developed.
2. Of course, the problem was often so unsurmountable that the children could not sort it out by themselves.
3. 23 per cent felt that their physical condition was quite poor or poor (5 %) compared to that of their peers.
The pupils just searched for the number symbols and circled them using the nearest number as a starting point.The pupils simply searched for the number symbols and circled them using the nearest number as a starting point.
The historical starting points for development of different number systems, like the decimal system, lie apparently in the counting and comparison of discrete sets
The historical starting points for development of different number systems, such as the decimal system, lie apparently in the counting and comparison of discrete sets
like and such– like = equal to or similar to– such as = include
just only, simply
remarkable and significant• remarkable = worthy of attention because it is in some way extraordinary.
• significant = scientific word, used to indicate that something is worthy of attention in a statistically meaningful way.
Odds and ends
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It is also remarkable that only four children knew less than 15 letters (uppercase).
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Nominalisation
Nominalisation• Academic language uses nominalisations• Nominalisation turns verbs into nouns • Text more concise: a lot of info packed into a few words
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Children play with language, and this is encouraged to enforce phonological awareness.
Children’s playing with language is encouraged to enforce phonological awareness.
Avoidance of “-ing” forms where possible:
Children’s play with language is encouraged to enforce phonological awareness.
rather loose
2. Most of the children needed a lot of help and encouraging in the beginning.
2. Most of the children needed a great deal of help and encouragement in the beginning.
1. The analysis was carried out by the first author and it started from analysing the observational notes which were recorded after each session.
1. The analysis was carried out by the first author and it started from an analysis of the observational notes which were recorded after each session.
Find another noun form to replace the ”-ing” forms
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Weak verbs
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Don't overuse weak verbs
Where possible, • inject action into your verbs.• increase the information content.
Avoid static verbs such as "to be", "there is/are", or "to have".
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4. In the room there were two round tables with ten to twelve chairs.
4. The room contained two round tables with ten to twelve chairs.
3. The second questionnaire … covered questions on their experiences with the use of the activity monitors in school and in leisure. There were also questions on the pupils’ conceptions of the activity monitor and its effects on their physical activity.
2. The FSR’s aim is to investigate, elaborate and foster innovative pedagogical practices.
2. The FSR aims to investigate, elaborate and foster innovative pedagogical practices.
1. In the spelling test there were ten words and each word was scored separately.
1. The spelling test consisted of ten words and each word was scored separately.
How would you change the following?
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3. The second questionnaire … covered questions on their experiences with the use of the activity monitors in school and in leisure. It also included questions on the pupils’ conceptions of the activity monitor and its effects on their physical activity.
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Informal connectors
Choose sentence connectors that create an appropriate academic tone
INFORMAL
And, …
But, …
So, …
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APPROPRIATE
In addition, …
However, …
Therefore, …
3. They were able to spot children’s difficulties more easily and their advice changed, so they did not tell them the right answer immediately.
3. They were able to spot children’s difficulties more easily and their advice changed, and so they did not tell them the right answer immediately.
2. The fourth part of the test included two extra problems not directly related to the number line. So we do not consider them here more exactly.
2. The fourth part of the test included two extra problems not directly related to the number line. Therefore, we do not consider them here more exactly.
1. They were not able to write anything without the help of an adult. But sometimes it helped when the teacher was sitting next to the child …
1. They were not able to write anything without the help of an adult. However, sometimes it helped when the teacher was sitting next to the child …
Find a more appropriate sentence connector
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4. Some children told they had used digital cameras before and they were able to tell what the function of each button was. Anyhow, the instructions for the use of the technological devises were first given to small groups.
Suzy McAnsh, 24.3.2010
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• Swap articles with a partner.
• Do a style check for about 2-4 paragraphs of the text.
Suzy McAnsh, 24.3.2010
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