Slave Speech Assessment

Aim: To write a good quality assessment – aiming for ATG

You need four different colours. Use a different colour to underline/ highlight each of these techniques in the animal farm speech:

Repetition – repeating the same word

Lists of three – eg. School is exciting, fun and brilliant

Questions – look for the punctuation

Addressing the audience – “you cows”

Slave Speech

IntroductionExplain who you are and why you are speaking – what do you want the other slaves to do?

Paragraph OneExplain the problems slaves face – link causes and consequences.Give examples of how different slaves faced different problems.What impact does this have on your mental state/ self esteem?

Paragraph TwoWho is to blame for your problems? Why? Discuss overseers and owners.

Paragraph ThreeWhat should the slaves all do? What could the future be like?

ConclusionMake this really convincing, summing up what you want and why it is so important.

Slave Speech

Punishments

HousingWorking day

Different slaves face different problems

Who was to blame?

Mental state/ self esteem

Have I written about these points in my assessment?

You can use this writing frame for your assessment if you want to:

IntroductionExplain who you are and why you are speaking – what do you want the other slaves to do?• Fellow slaves, my name is...• I have come to speak to you about...

Paragraph OneExplain the problems slaves face – link causes and consequences.Give examples of how different slaves faced different problems.What impact does this have on your mental state/ self esteem?

• The biggest problem we face is...• This means... and leads to...• Another problem is...• This is bad because...• Different slaves face different problems. Grandmother slaves...• However, younger slaves...• Whereas the women...• All these things impact the way we feel about ourselves. Such poor treatment

makes us feel...

Paragraph TwoWho is to blame for your problems? Why? Discuss overseers and owners.

• The people to blame for our problems are...• The overseers are...• The owners treat us like...

Paragraph ThreeWhat should the slaves all do? What could the future be like?

• We should...• In the future we could...

ConclusionMake this really convincing, summing up what you want and why it is so important.

• Ladies and gentlemen, you should run away with me because...

Cause Consequence

Late to work Whipped

Run away Never see family members again

Work long hours Exhausted/ can’t work harder

Sold to another plantation No punishment

Slave killed by an overseer Part of foot chopped off

Match up the causes to the consequences – you can use these examples in your assessment

When you think you’ve finished:

Check your speech for spelling, grammar and punctuation.

Check your speech against the mark scheme. Tick the boxes you have completed so you can see what else to add.

Glue your mark scheme into your book, near your assessment.

Write a sentence at the end of your speech to explain which level you think you have achieved and why.

ExtensionRead pg 26-7 and answer the questions