show-don’t tell “the bigger the issue, the smaller you write. remember that. you don ’ t write...
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“The bigger the issue, the smaller you write. Remember that. You don’t write about war. No. You write about a kid’s burnt socks lying on the
ground. You pick the smallest manageable part of the big thing, and you work off the resonance.”
-Richard Price
“Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass.”
–Chekhov
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How to SHOW, not TELL1. Create a visual for the reader2. Focus on the 5 senses3. Make comparisons4. Use strong adjectives
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Sample : We were anxiously waiting for the news of my father’s test results.
Face- The crease in the middle of my mother’s forehead showed the cumulative worry of a long life lived.
Body- I couldn’t help the tremble of my upper body.
Voice- As he answered the phone, the tremble in his voice was apparent.
Scene- My family wore paths in the carpet with their pacing.
Observation- It felt like an out of body experience and I was hovering, weightless over my living room.
Comparison- Time wore on as if Earth’s own rotation clicked forward like the slow hand of a clock.
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Practice : We waited at the hospital for 5 hours.
Show Time
Show Appearance
Show Scene
Compare
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Activity:You will be given a topic, scene,
emotion, etc.
Draft a phrase that shows, not tells an audience about it.
Every 30 seconds….we switch.
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Worry
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Nervousness
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Embarrassement
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Anger
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Happy
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Worry
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Worry
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Worry
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Hot
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Shocked
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Tired
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Cold
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Excited
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Hunger
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Shy
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Teenager
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Child
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Beautiful day
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Winter
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Summer
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City life
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At school
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At home
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Death
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Birth
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Pets
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First date
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School dance
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Classroom
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First F on a test
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Cell phone (new, dies, rings, etc.)