september 17, 2014 session: freshman composition

September 17, 2014 Session: Freshman Composition

What to Expect Today

• Revised Course Schedule• Analysis and Discussion of Readings• Lecture notes: Characteristics of a Descriptive Essay• “Once More to the Lake” by E.B. White – read in class• Take in-class quiz “Once More to the Lake” by E.B. White• Discussion of Assignment Requirements for Essay #2:

Descriptive Essay• Brainstorming Session for Essay

Bring Textbook 75 Readings Plus EVERY Class

Analysis of Readings

•Maya Angelou “Grandmother’s Victory”• Langston Hughes “Salvation”•Martin Ginsberg’s “37 Who Saw

Murder Didn’t Call the Police”


Maya Angelou “Grandmother’s Victory”

Background on author:• Maya Angelou was born in 1928 • Known as a celebrated poet, memoirist,

novelist, educator, dramatist, producer, actress, historian, filmmaker, and civil rights activist.

• I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings (1970) was published to international acclaim and enormous popular success


Maya Angelou

Awards/Honors:• Presidential Medal of Arts in 2000• Lincoln Medal in 2008• Received 3 Grammy Awards• Has received over 50 honorary degrees • President Clinton requested that she compose a poem to

read at his inauguration in 1993



Background on short story:• Grew up and went through difficult and painful experiences

in the state of Arkansas where her family store was. • In this "Grandmother's Victory" essay, Angelou talks about

her childhood experience and the time she spent with her grandmother.



Discuss in Pairs – write down your answers

What do you think is the theme of this story?

What details does Angelou use to create this obviously unflattering picture of "po whitetrash children"?

Compare 10 year old Maya’s response to the children to the Grandmother’s response




Potential responses:

How to deal with the issue of racism – broader theme – it is not the situation, it is how you deal with the situation that mattersGrandmother teaches Maya to ignore the harassment and not to sink to their level. If you lose your cool and start fighting back, the problem will never go away. The best method of defense is to ignore the harassment and the harassers will lose interest.

Maintaining personal integrity, strength of character and core values in the face of challenge is victory




“Proof that with strength of character we can rise above the world, no matter how vile and stupid it may sometimes be"


Review Maya Angelou “Grandmother’s Victory”

Turn To A Partner

What details does Angelou use to create this obviously unflattering picture of "po whitetrash children"? Jot down several words or phrases.

Po White Trash Children



What details does Angelou use to create this obviously unflattering picture of "po whitetrash children"?

Po White Trash Children

Crawled over the shelves and into the potato and onion bins, twanging all the time in their sharp voices like cigar-box guitars

Greasy, uncolored hair hung down, uncombed with a grim finality.

Grimy, snotty-nosed;scruffy

Dirt of the girls’ cotton dresses continued on their legs, feet, arms, and faces to make them all of a piece.



10 Year Old Maya’s Response Grandmother’s Response

rage, indignation, humiliation, helplessness

“I wanted to throw a handful of black pepper in their faces, throw lye on them, to scream that they were dirty, scummy peckerwoods”

“ I thought about the rifle behind the door….”



10 Year Old Maya’s Response Grandmother’s Response

rage, indignation, humiliation, helplessness

once the girls leave, young Maya realizes that her grandmother has achieved something “Something had happened out there, which I couldn't completely understand ... Whatever the contest had been out front, I knew Momma had won" (26-27). Angelou claims that her ten-year-old self could not fully understand what had happened, though she did understand that there had been a contest of wills and that her grandmother had won it.


Langston Hughes “Salvation”

Background on the story:

"Salvation"--which appears in our Essay Sampler: Models of Good Writing (Part Three)--is an excerpt from The Big Sea (1940), an autobiography by Langston Hughes (1902-1967).

http://grammar.about.com/od/developingessays/a/essaysampler3.htm

http://grammar.about.com/od/ab/g/autobioterm.htm


Langston Hughes “Salvation”

Background on Hughes:• Poet, novelist, playwright, short

story writer, and newspaper columnist

• Best known for his insightful and imaginative portrayals of African-American life from the 1920s through the 1960s


The first sentence of "Salvation"--"I was saved from sin when I was going on thirteen"--proves to be an example of irony. After reading the essay, how might we reinterpret this opening sentence?

(a) As it turns out, Hughes was actually only ten years old when he was saved from sin.(b) Hughes is fooling himself: he may think that he was saved from sin when he was a boy, but his lie in church shows that he did not want to be saved.(c) Although the boy wants to be saved, in the end he only pretends to be saved "to save further trouble."(d) The boy is saved because he stands up in church and is led to the platform.(e) Because the boy has no mind of his own, he simply imitates the behavior of his friend Westley.

http://grammar.about.com/od/il/g/ironyterm.htm


The first sentence of "Salvation"--"I was saved from sin when I was going on thirteen"--proves to be an example of irony. After reading the essay, how might we reinterpret this opening sentence?

(c) Although the boy wants to be saved, in the end he only pretends to be saved "to save further trouble."

http://grammar.about.com/od/il/g/ironyterm.htm


Who has told young Langston about what he will see and hear and feel when he is saved?

(a) his friend Westley(b) the preacher(c) the Holy Ghost(d) his Auntie Reed and a great many old people(e) the deacons and the old women


Who has told young Langston about what he will see and hear and feel when he is saved?

(d) his Auntie Reed and a great many old people

My aunt taught me when you were saved you saw a light, and something happened to you inside!...She said you could see and hear and feel Jesus in your soul (11).


Why does Westley get up to be saved?

(a) He has seen Jesus.(b) He is inspired by the prayers and songs of the congregation.(c) He is frightened by the preacher's sermon.(d) He wants to impress the young girls.(e) He tells Langston that he is tired of sitting on the mourner's bench.


Why does Westley get up to be saved?

(e) He tells Langston that he is tired of sitting on the mourner's bench.


Why does young Langston wait so long before getting up to be saved?

(a) He wants to get revenge against his aunt for making him go to church.(b) He is terrified of the preacher.(c) He is not a very religious person.(d) He wants to see Jesus, and he is waiting for Jesus to appear.(e) He is afraid that God will strike him dead.


Why does young Langston wait so long before getting up to be saved?

(d) He wants to see Jesus, and he is waiting for Jesus to appear.

“I wanted to see him, but nothing happened to me. Nothing! I wanted something to happen to me, but nothing happened.”


At the end of the essay, why was Langston crying?


At the end of the essay, why was Langston crying?

“I was really crying because I couldn’t bear to tell her that I had lied, I had deceived everybody in the church, that I hadn’t seen Jesus, and that I didn’t believe there was a Jesus any more, since he didn’t come to help me”


Martin Ginsberg’s “37 Who Saw Murder Didn’t Call the Police”

Facts about the Case

• Kitty Genovese was walking home from work in Queens, N.Y. on March 13, 1964

• Winston Moseley stabbed Kitty twice in the back• She screamed “Oh My God, he stabbed me. Help me!”• Her cry was heard by neighbors• Mosely chased her down and stabbed her again. As she lay dying, he raped her and stole $49 from her• On Monday, June 15, 1964, Moseley was sentenced to

death



Facts about the Article

• Martin Gansberg wrote an article on March 27, 1964, published in the New York Times, two weeks after the murder with the headline “Thirty-Seven Who Saw the Murder Didn’t Call the Police”

• Quote in the article that stood out: - neighbor telling the police “I didn’t want to get involved”

Discussion – Find a Partner


1. Gansburg's article first appeared in 1964-- how do you think the article, and the events it describes, would be received by readers if it were published today? Explain your rationale.

2. How would you explain the witnesses' abstention from action in calling the police, based on the evidence in the text and your understanding of human behavior?

3. What is Gansburg's purpose in writing the piece and who is his audience? Is he writing towards a bias or opinion? Provide textual evidence.

4. What effect do the descriptions and dialogue have on the overall message the text delivers? Are there any words, phrases, ideas that stood out to you while reading the text? Write them down. Explore why they had an impact.



Psychological Research

• Diffusion of Responsibility• Bystander Effect

Contrary to common expectations, larger numbers of bystanders decrease the likelihood that someone will step forward and help a victim. The reasons include the fact that onlookers see that others are not helping either, that onlookers believe others will know better how to help, and that onlookers feel uncertain about helping while others are watching.



It Happened Again

According to The New York Times, in an article dated December 28, 1974, ten years after the murder, 25-year-old Sandra Zahler was beaten to death early Christmas morning in an apartment of the building that overlooked the site of the Genovese attack. Neighbors again said they heard screams and "fierce struggles" but did nothing.

What is a Descriptive Essay ?

an essay that describes something or someone by appealing to the reader’s senses: sight, sound, touch, smell and taste.

Steps for Structuring a Descriptive Essay

• Select a subject (for example, a person, place or thing)• Brainstorm details about the subject• Take notes on sights, sounds, smells• Keep in mind your are painting a picture for the reader,

using descriptive devices and the senses

• Create a thesis statement that informs the reader who or what you are describing and what insight or meaning you have drawn from that subject.


1. Select dominant details (select only the details that support the dominant impression – your thesis statement)

2. Organize details in paragraphs

3. Draw a logical conclusion


• Use descriptive words

• Do not use vague words or generalities (such as good, nice, bad, or beautiful). Be specific and use sensory, descriptive words (adjectives).

• Provide sensory details: • Smells that are in the air (the aroma of freshly brewed coffee) • Sounds (traffic, honking horns) • Sights (“The sun scattered tiny diamonds across dew-covered grass as it

peeked out from beyond the horizon.”) • Touch (“The texture of the adobe hut’s walls resembled coarse

sandpaper.”) • Taste: sweet, sour, salty, bitter, tart (“Giant goose bumps formed on my

tongue when I accidently bit into a sliver of lemon.”)

Example Descriptive Words - Color

Senses Descriptive word and phrases

Emotion Orange is joy. optimistic, sociable and extrovertedTaste:

Taste Orange is the taste of pumpkin pie on Thanksgiving

Smell Orange is the smell of citrus fruits growing on Florida trees

Sound Orange is the sound of a tabby cat meowing

Touch Orange can be smooth, cool, and round in the palm of your hand or give the sensation of heat like flickers in the flame of fire.

Sight Orange is the color of saffron, carrots, pumpkins and apricots. It is the color of sunshine, fire and harvest. It is between red and yellow on the spectrum of light

Show Not Tell

Telling:The empty room smelled stale and was devoid of furniture or floor covering; the single window lacked curtains or blinds of any kind.

Showing:The apartment smelled of old cooking odors, cabbage, and mildew; our sneakers squeaked sharply against the scuffed wood floors, which reflected a haze of dusty sunlight from the one cobwebbed, gritty window.

Use Figurative Language

SimileUsing the words such as “like” or “as” when comparing.

Example: A ride to North Hutchinson Island is like a flight to a Caribbean getaway.

MetaphorImplying a comparison between two things that are essentially

different.

Metaphors - Examples

• Time is a thief. • He has a heart of gold. • His head was spinning with ideas.• John is a real pig when he eats. • Authority is a chair, it needs legs to stand up. • Her home was a prison. • Life is a journey. • You are my sunshine.

Use Figurative Language

Personification Giving human characteristics to inanimate objects.

Example: The truck, covered with mud and love bugs, cried out for a wash.

What type?

“The fog tiptoes into the streets. It walks like a great cat through the air and slowly devours the city.”

"Memory is a crazy woman that hoards colored rags and throws away food."

"The Duke's moustache was rising and falling like seaweed on an ebb-tide."

What type?

“The fog tiptoes into the streets. Personification

It walks like a great cat through the air and slowly devours the city.” Simile

"Memory is a crazy woman that hoards colored rags and throws away food.“ Metaphor

"The Duke's moustache was rising and falling like seaweed on an ebb-tide.”Simile

Give it a Try - Figurative Language

With a Partner – Complete Figurative Language Activity Sheet

Formal Voice

The following guidelines should help you maintain a formal writing voice in your essays.• Do not use first-person pronouns ("I," "me," "my,"

"we," "us," etc.)• Example

I think that this character is confused.This character is confused.(The second sentence is less wordy, sounds more formal, and conveys a more confident tone.)

• "One," "the reader," "readers," "the viewer," or something similar sometimes can be used effectively in place of first-person pronouns in formal papers, but be careful not to overuse these expressions.

• Avoid the use of contractions.• Avoid colloquialism and slang expressions.

Let’s Read and Analyze a Descriptive Essay

"Once More to the Lake" • essay first published in Harper’s Magazine in 1941 by

author E.B. White• chronicles his pilgrimage back to a lakefront resort,

Belgrade Lakes, Maine, he visited as a child

As you read:

Notice the sensory details, figurative language, and theme of the work

Let’s Read and Analyze a Descriptive Essay

• Read “Once More to the Lake”• Complete the “Once More to the Lake” Quiz

Assignment: Write a Descriptive Essay

Your task:

Essay 2: Analysis of a Photograph or Painting• For this essay you need to describe and analyze a

photograph or a painting of your own choosing in an essay of at least 800 words.

Pass out the following Handouts:• Assignment Sheet for Descriptive Essay• Brainstorming Sheet for Descriptive Essay • Vivid Sensory Adjective Sheets

Let’s Look at a Sample Painting and Brainstorm How We’d Pre-Write a Descriptive Essay – The Scream by Edward Munch

Sight

Color Interpretation

Red and orange "red" sky "tongues of fire"

Blue and black “bluish black" fjord

Brush strokes Swirling, whirling

Subject – What details do you see?

Unclear whether it is a man or woman

Sense Interpretation

Sound – Does it make noise? Does it bring up a memory involving sound?

Wailing, crying

Emotions: Anxiety, Isolation, FearPhysical and mental suffering

Facts about Munch

• In his diaries, the artist Edvard Munch admits that he struggled with insanity not only on a personal level during his life, but also through his family.

• His sister was hospitalized for insanity at the time The Scream was painted in 1893a

• slaughterhouse was within earshot of the the spot illustrated in The Scream painting

Munch’s personal interpretation of “nature” below was very different than you might imagine.

"I was walking down the road with two friends when the sun set; suddenly, the sky turned as red as blood. I stopped and leaned against the fence, feeling unspeakably tired. Tongues of fire and blood stretched over the bluish black fjord. My friends went on walking, while I lagged behind, shivering with fear. Then I heard the enormous infinite scream of nature."

Vincent van Gogh: Starry Night

What details can you See? Do you Hear noise? Or does it bring up a memory involving sound?What does the scene Taste like? Or does it remind you of something you can taste?What do you Smell? Does it bring up a memory involving smell?What can you Touch? Does it seem bumpy, hard, smooth?

How does it make you feel?


What do you See? • Cool dark colors • night sky filled with swirling clouds• stars • bright crescent moon• Church steeple and village• Effect: sky keeps the viewer's eyes

moving about the painting, following the curves

What do you Hear?Calmness, rustle of trees, wind

What do you Taste?What do you Smell?Scent of trees, fresh air

What can you Touch?Tree, grass

How does it make you feel?Peaceful, calm


Facts about the Painter and Painting

• oil painting that was created in June of 1889 while Van Gogh was in the Saint Remy of Provence Psychiatric Hospital

One interpretation: • The swirling brushstrokes represent Van

Gogh’s churning state of mind and spirit• Finding light in darkness (of his own

mind)• Artist is in chaos but finds joy and hope

Migrant Mother - Dorothea Lange (1936)

What do you See? What do you Hear?What do you Taste?What do you Smell?What can you Touch?

How does it make you feel?


Sample Introduction- Thesis“The photograph depicts a family suffering from extreme poverty, but it also demonstrates the determination of a mother to do her best to care for her children and endure through difficult times”


Sample Paragraphs –Sensory Details

Sample Supporting Paragraphs Based on Photograph


Sample Conclusion Based on Photograph

Homework - Read

75 Readings Plus James Baldwin’s “Fifth Avenue Uptown”Judith Cofer “A Partial Remembrance of a Puerto Rican Childhood”

Due Next Week

• Draft of Descriptive Essay on Painting or Photograph• Brainstorming Sheet

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