sentence patterns 9-10 with variations. pattern 9 formula repetition of a key term __ s v key term...
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Sentence Patterns 9-10
with variations
Pattern 9 Formula
Repetition of a Key Term
__
S V key term or repeated key term.
,
(use dash or comma before repetition)
Explanation• Repeat a key word in a modifying phrase
attached to the main clause.• Repeat the word exactly as it is, or you may use
another form.– brute brutal; breath breathtaking; battle
battling
• Key term– Important– Anywhere in the sentence, but usually at the end
• Dash or comma– dash = longer pause, a greater break in thought
• Note 1: Key word must be worth repeating– Ineffective, uninteresting repetition:
• He was a good father, providing a good home for his good children.
• Note 2: Be sure attached phrase with the repeated key tern is NOT a complete sentence (or else you will create a comma splice)–Wrong: He was a cruel brute of a man, he
was brutal to his family and even more brutal to his friends.
– Correction: He was a cruel brute of a man, brutal to his family and even more brutal to his friends.
Examples
• We live in an uncertain world—the inner world, the world of the mind.
• We all have problems but we can find a solution, a solution that works, a solution that is equitable.
• She suddenly felt filled with joy—a joy she could not explain but that she gladly embraced.
Checkpoints
Double check that the repetition is a phrase, not a clause. –Wrong: He was part of the older generation,
his generation was born before the Depression.
– Correct: He was part of the older generation, a generation born before the Depression.
Don’t use a period or semicolon where the comma should be. • Wrong: He praises the beauty of his love. A
love that is unfortunately hopeless because it is not mutual.
• Correct: He praises the beauty of his love, a love unfortunately hopeless because it is not mutual.
Variation 9a Formula
Same word repeated in parallel structure
S V repeated key word in same position of the sentence.
Explanation of Ways to Repeat
1. Repeat an effective adjective or adverb in phrases or clauses with parallel construction:
• She has an incredible satisfying life, satisfying because of her career and satisfying because of her family.
2. Repeat the same preposition in a series:• He has known her for many years, before she went
to college, before she was a star, before she won the Oscar.
3. Repeat the same noun as the object of different prepositions:
• This government is of the people, by the people, and for the people.
4. Repeat the same modifying word in phrases that begin with different prepositions:
• Sidney devoted his life to those selfish people, for their selfish cause, but clearly with his own selfish motives dominating his every action.
5. Repeat the same intensifiers:• The baseball game was very exciting, very
enjoyable, but very long.6. Repeat the same verb or alternative forms of
the same word:• In order to survive in war, a person needs training, a
person needs courage, and, most of all, a person needs luck.
Examples
• If you have unrealistic dreams, you may need to find other goals, other desires.
• Venice presents great gifts to the visitor—great history, great art, great crafts.
• His greatest discoveries, his greatest successes, his greatest influence upon the world’s daily life came to Edison only after repeated failures.
Pattern 10 Formula
Emphatic appositive at end, after a colon
S V word: the appositive (the second naming)
(with or without modifiers)
Explanation
• Withholding the repetition until the end of the sentence builds to a climax and provides a forceful, emphatic appositive that concludes the sentence and shouts for attention.
• Colon marks a full stop – Use only after a complete statement – Anticipates an explanation
Examples
• Her room contained a collection of trash: old clothes, soda cans, McDonald’s wrappers.
• When I go to the movies, I need two things to really enjoy it: popcorn and a soda.
• Airport thieves have a common target: unwary travelers.
Checkpoints
Check the words before the colon; be sure they make a full statement (sentence).
After the colon, be sure to write only a word or a phrase—not a full statement.
Variation 10a Formula
Appositive after a dash
S V word — the appositive.
(echoed idea or second naming)
Explanation
• Instead of colon, use a dash.– Dash almost always precedes a short
climactic appositive– Colon generally precedes a longer appositive
• Second naming is usually climactic or emphatic
Effects of Punctuation• Adjusting to a new job requires one quality,
humor.– (common usage but not emphatic)
• Adjusting to a new situation requires one quality: humor.– (significant pause, but not so dramatic)
• Adjusting to a new job requires one quality above all others—a sense of humor.– (dramatic signaling)
• Adjusting to a new job requires one quality: the ability to laugh at oneself. – (more dramatic, more stylistically complete)
Examples
• Many traditional philosophies echo the ideas of one man—Plato.
• Pandas eat only one food—bamboo shoots.
• These big burgers taste great but they have lots of calories—over 1,000.
CheckpointsThe second naming must be a true appositive
• Poor: One class of teenagers can be labeled—students.
• Correct: One label would fit almost any teenager—student.
A dash cannot separate complete thoughts.• Wrong: Mary Shelley spent a full year at Marlow
writing Frankenstein—her monster has survived better than some of her husband’s poems.
• Correct: Mary Shelley spent a full year at Marlow writing Frankenstein—creating a monster that has survived better than some of her husband’s poems.