Do role models have an impact on one’s life? Introduction: Role models whether they are figures of high authority, parents, siblings or even peers can have either positive or negative impact on one’s life. There is some point in life when every child desires to live up to the standards set upon by their role models. In the conquest to be more like one’s role model, we strive to outline our better qualities, we acknowledge our flaws and try to conceal them or we may even lose parts of ourselves in the course of trying to be someone we are not. Role models have an impact on one’s life as it can motivate one to be a better individual, cause one to lose one’s identity and it can have a negative influence on one’s character.

Point 1 : Role models entice a person to work towards his or her goals. The role models here have provided people with a glimpse of their vision and by doing so, people are able to recognize, comprehend and relate to their role figure. Seeing their role models successfully confronting hardships will motivate people to endure difficulties and crises. In fact, role models can embed the quote, “If I can do it, so can you” in one’s life. The life experiences of one’s role model will teach and educate us in the lessons of life which cannot be found anywhere else. Gandhi made a difference by liberating India. He believed in independence and the freedom of speech. His beliefs were not shattered despite being subjected to numerous obstacles like being thrown into jail. He now serves as an inspiration to the liberal minded who are not afraid to stand up for their rights.

Conclusion: Role models can either benefit a person by serving as a source of inspiration or cause detrimental effects to a person. We can never adequately express the influence role models have on one’s life but what must be highlighted is that role models should always be positive ones. We need role models that remind us of what being a human means those who can prepare us to take the world by storm, in a positive way that is.

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Does academic excellence guarantees a successful life?

Introduction 1: Nowadays academic excellence among the young is given much importance. While it is perfectly acceptable to strive to achieve good academic results, the notion that only academic excellence guarantees a successful life is not true. Students are pressured into taking more subjects than they can handle and this causes immense pressure among our young. The question is – can this endeavour absolutely confirm a dynamic future.

Introduction 2: Within the last century or so, people have come to place much importance on academic excellence. The same can be said about academia in Malaysia. The government has placed priority in educating the young generation with the increase of funding and a more applicable standardized testing system. Even with all these improvements, does academic excellence guarantee a successful life? To some success is embodied in the 5c’s that includes tangible things which is cash, car and comfort. To others success may not be material assets but the legacy they leave behind for their children and future generations. For example when John F. Kennedy once said, “Ask not what your country can do for you but what you can do for your country”. Such inspiring stories can be viewed as success.

Point 1- Agrees : With that said, if success to a person is measured in assets, academic excellence will not hurt. For example if a person decides to become a medical doctor, he or she is almost guaranteed a successful life. This is because whether the country is at war or in an economic crisis or the country is prosperous; a doctor is bound to have work that can generate income to live a comfortable life. However, if a different profession is chosen such as business, there are too many variables for a guaranteed successful life even with a business degree. Life might be sailing at one point but as soon as something occurs, such as an economic recession, life might not be successful anymore. Although admittedly, for a person with academic excellence there is a better chance of starting over and picking up pieces with academic excellence, it opens doors to different countries and different job opportunities compared to someone without.

Point 2 – Disagrees : Many students are now pushed into striving for academic excellence by their parents and teachers. Thus the hunger for learning and knowledge does not come from within.

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Rather it is forced upon them and borne reluctantly. This intense pressure could cause severe psychological and emotional problems in the future. Therefore, instead of only pursuing academic excellence, perhaps, children should be given a chance to explore other fields such as sports and music? It cannot be denied that individuals who are daring enough to stray into other callings have also found success in life. For instance, good management skills and a never-say-die attitude has kept Sir Alex Ferguson’s position, as manager to one of the most successful football clubs in the world, secure. Therefore by cultivating different skills and passions, individuals can still lead a successful and fulfilling life.

Conclusion 1 : Based on the points above, I would like to reaffirm my stand that academic excellence alone does not guarantee a successful life. Indeed it has been proven that an individual with varied interests and hobbies fares much better than one who is constantly studying. After all, as the saying goes “All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy”.

Conclusion 2 : In conclusion, academic excellence does guarantee a successful life but only until a certain extent. In order to live a successful life a person may need to be educated but academic education is not the only way although it is the most publicized way. The individual first needs to find fulfillment and a niche in order to be truly successful.

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