now wonder what was this paper supposed to accomplish ...€¦ · planning the best vacations when...
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Andriana
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This tittle still looks interesting to me, so even today after knowing a lot more about writing, I would keep the tittle.
Andriana
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This is a terrible conclusion. It sure and it doesn't give the reader any background information as to why this will be the best vacation. From the assignment sheet there is not indication who is the audience of this paper other than the teacher. Also I now wonder what was this paper supposed to accomplish.
Andriana
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This paper has my voice but its focus is all over the place.
Andriana
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Clearly the structure of this paper was terrible. No transition here at all.
Andriana
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If I had to rewrite this paper again, I would change many things. I would find out who the audience of this paper is and what purpose it supposed to accomplish. I would not address people so directly unless it call for it.