Meeting 2: Tosspon’s

English 105Building

FoundationsReview: Diagnostic

Thesis Statements – Chpt 2Narrative – Chpt 12

Quiz on Week 1 & 2’s Info

Homework due: Freewrite

(can turn in online or on paper)

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Today we will start w/ 2 websites open:

http://ttosspon.wikispaces.com/English+105

– Open “ How to Grammar Log” +

Grammar Log.docx

http://healdlogin.com – go do “Drop Box”

Grammar Log Overview1. Collect supplies: syllabus, handbook, Grammar Log

(digital copy), How to Grammar Log (digital copy) Writing utensil, and the .docx file (from http://healdlogin.com ).

2. Use the “Review” tab and click “next” to look at each comment.

3. For the comments that have “#” symbols, write the # on the grammar log.

4. Write the sentence on the grammar log. 5. Correct the sentence on the grammar log.

– Use the green handbook, the internet, and classmates to help you figure out how to change.

Your Diagnostic Essays• Open the attachment.

– You should be able to open it in word by right clicking on it, or by simply clicking on it.

• Review my comments by clicking on “Review” and then clicking “Next” or “Accept” on the menu bar.

• For each # error (not ALL comments), correct using the Grammar Log, Syllabus pg 7, + green handbook

– In this example, the error is #5 • This is worth 10 points per paper. No errors means you automatically get the 10 points.

Grammar Log

#5

In the beginning the dog wasn’t sure what he wanted to do.

In the beginning, the dog wasn’t sure what he wanted to do.

Correct the error

Find how toCorrect your Errors by using the syllabus and links provided. We will go over each major error type

Common ErrorsWe will be adding one of these “cracks in our

foundation” to our lesson each week. • Confused words (#2)

– there=/= their• Fragments/Run Ons (#16/17)• Professional Language (#9)• Hook/Introductions • Wordiness (#4/#3)• Semicolons (#11)• ESL? Verb Tense Shifts? See pages 337-358 (handbook)• USE SPELL CHECK!!!!!

Include: Each type of error you tend to makeHow to Correct that type of errorSample sentences w/ the corrections

CREATE YOUR OWN GRAMMAR GUIDE

REVIEW CHPT 1Awesome. PreWrites, etc

When You Write

Select a subject

Find the best space for you

Select something in which you currently have a strong interest

Narrow a large topic

Start early

Discover your Audience• Identify your readers

Who is the audience?

Why are they reading it – what do they hope to gain?

What knowledge does your audience have about the subject?

What is your audience’s attitude towards your subject?

Special qualities of your audience?

1. They don’t like to be bored. (if you are bored writing it, they’ll be bored reading it)

2. They hate confusion and disorder3. They WANT to think and learn4. They want to see/feel what YOU

see/feel5. They are turned off by

pretentious/phony voices.

Chapter 2

Thesis!The foundation

Pg 31

The Thesis• A thesis MUST tell the reader what they’re

going to be reading. • Can change/be refined between draft and final!

Working thesis!

• All of your main points must fall under it!• It is your topic + your point about it.

Poster Competition! Prizes!!• Read pgs 31-39• Discuss with your group & create a poster

“The Rules of the Thesis”• Vote on the poster you like the best, you may NOT vote for your own. Side note: A working thesis is a thesis that can change

Good thesis- States opinion (pg 33)- Asserts 1 idea (pg 33-34)- Has something to say (pg 34-

35)- Is limited to fit (pg 35-36)- Clearly/specifically stated (36)- 1st or 2nd paragraph (36-37)

Avoid Common Errors1. Don’t just announce topic

(37)2. Don’t clutter with “I think”

(37)3. Don’t just state a fact (38)4. Don’t ask it as a question (38)

Game! Pin the Thesis• Get in groups of 4-5 (you may NOT work with the people

from your poster group)

• Groups each will get a set of thesis statements. Record the #’s you have!

• Decide which are “adequate” and which are “inadequate”– Use tape to put statements onto the corresponding

location. – Be prepared to justify your

choice to the class. • On 1 page per group, rewrite the inadequate

thesis statements.

Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33)

• States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subject

• Assert ONE main idea• Have something worthwhile to say• Limit thesis to fit the assignment• State thesis clearly, in specific terms• In first or second paragraph.• Does NOT use “I/this paper will tell/show”,

Ask a question, just state a fact, OR have “I think/believe/feel.”

Thesis Statement Answers• Identify whether each is adequate

or not, explain the problem1. Adequate2. Inadequate3. Inadequate4. Inadequate5. Adequate6. Adequate7. Inadequate8. Inadequate9. Adequate10.Inadequate11.Adequate12.Inadequate13.Adequate

14.Inadequate 15.Inadequate16.Inadequate17.Inadequate18.Adequate19.Inadequate20.Inadequate21.Inadequate22.Adequate23.Inadequate

24.Inadequate25.Inadequate26.Adequate27.Inadequate28.Inadequate29.Inadequate30.Inadequate31.Adequate32.Inadequate33.Inadequate

Chapter 12

Narrative:Telling a story

Narrative (Chpt 12 pg 343)• A narrative is a story with characters and

there is a definite plot line. A narrative normally has a beginning, a middle and an end.

• It can also be used in piecesto make a point or supporta point

Telling a story- can be fact or fiction.

Key things to remember when writing a Narrative

• Know your purpose• Make your main point clear• Follow a logical time sequence• Use sensory details to

hold interest• Create authentic characters• Use dialogue realistically

(pg 344-345, Green handbook pg 100)

• Choose your subject carefully• Limit your scope • Don’t let your story lag with insignificant detail

Problems to avoid

• Do a pre-write of your choice (see Chpt 1)– Must be completed before you leave today (but you can change your topic if

you need to – I just need to see that you can do a pre-write!)

• Choose your own story (fiction, non-fiction, doesn’t matter!)

• Things to consider as you write• Describe the setting and character’s appearance• What unusual noises, colors, smells• What does facial expression show?• What might each person SAY• What mood/tone will you create?

Narrative Pre-Write

Homework• Narrative Essay 1st Draft (2 printed copies)

DUE @ beginning of NEXT MEETING (50 points)– Final draft due in 2 weeks submitted to

http://healdlogin.com– Name file: Lastname_Narrative

• Grammar log for Diagnostic Essay• Read: Book pgs 349-353 (sample narratives)• Vocabulary 1 –(10 points each): Select 10 words from your

narrative. Try to challenge yourself, use your thesaurus! What definitions do we need to read your narrative?

• May get in groups of 4 (MUST be people you have not worked with yet today), each person may use 1 item from this list: notes/book/syllabus/handouts

Categories:• Syllabus, Chpt 1, Chpt 2 (Thesis),

Narratives (chpt 12), Classmates

One person go to http://healdlogin.com

Quiz is under Meeting 2