KALISHA HODGE AND

BLAIR HAGGARDECED 4300-C

DR. TONJA ROOTFALL 2010

4th Simulated Journal

BLAIR HAGGARDPREWRITING

GPS:ELA4W4 The student consistently uses a writing process to develop, revise, and evaluate writing. The student

a. Plans and drafts independently and resourcefully.

BLAIR HAGGARDPREWRITING

PLO: Students will plan and use a graphic organizer to create an entry for a simulated journal.

FORM OF WRITING: SIMULATED JOURNAL

Pretending to take the role of a historical/famous person or a character.

Create a journal entry from that person’s point of view.

Entries in the journal should include details and/or facts about that particular person.

STAGE OF WRITING: PREWRITING

Gather Ideas/ Brain StormInform yourself or the audience about your character

Use resources to find information about your character/historical person

Complete the graphic organizer by including important words and phrases

Name of character:

Event you are writing about:

Problem during the event:

Place of the event:

How do you feel during this event:

Ending:

Simulated journal graphic organizer

Name: ________________ Date: _______________

Haggard, B. and Hodge, K.(2010). Simulated journal graphic organizer. Valdosta State University, Valdosta, GA.

APA CITATION

Tompkins, G. E. (2009). Language Arts Patterns of Practice. Upper Saddle River, NJ: Pearson Prentice Hall.

The following is one of a series of diary entries created by a 5th grader assuming the role of Betsy Ross

June 16, 1776Dear Diary,Today General Washington visited me about making a flag. I was so surprised. Me making a flag! I have made flags for the Navy, but this is too much. But I said yes. He showed me a pattern of the flag he wanted. He also wanted six-pointed stars but I talked him into five-pointed stars.

PRACTICE ACTIVITY4TH GRADE

After the story is read, write about the first day of school as a kindergartener

Use the graphic organizer to write down your thoughts and ideas

Include details about your first day experiences

ASSESSMENT ACTIVITY4TH GRADE

After the story is read, pretend you are the character in the story

Write down thoughts and ideasMake sure you use ideas and facts from the story

Be sure to include all components of the graphic organizer

KALISHA HODGEDRAFTING, REVISING, EDITING

GPS: ELA4W4 The student consistently uses a writing process to develop, revise, and evaluate writing. The student a. Plans and drafts independently

and resourcefully.

KALISHA HODGEDRAFTING, REVISING, EDITING

PLO: Student will create a draft using the graphic organizer from the prewriting stage.

KALISHA HODGEDRAFTING, REVISING, EDITING

GPS: ELA4W4 The student consistently uses a writing process to develop, revise, and evaluate writing. The student

b. Revises selected drafts to improve coherence and progression by adding, deleting, consolidating, and rearranging text.

KALISHA HODGEDRAFTING, REVISING, EDITING

PLO: Students will revise their created drafts by rearranging, adding, or deleting text.

KALISHA HODGEDRAFTING, REVISING, EDITING

GPS: ELA4W4 The student consistently uses a writing process to develop, revise, and evaluate writing. The student

c. Edits to correct errors in spelling, punctuation, etc.

KALISHA HODGEDRAFTING, REVISING, EDITING

PLO: Student will edit the draft of his or her classmate by correcting errors in spelling, punctuation, etc. He or she will also use the worksheet provided to use proper editorial marks.

FORM OF WRITING: SIMULATED JOURNAL

Pretending to take the role of a historical/famous person or a character.

Journal entry from that person’s point of view.

Journal entry should include details and/or facts about that person.

STAGE OF WRITING: DRAFTING, EDITING, REVISING

Writing is for a journalInforming yourself or the audience about your character

Use the graphic organizer to create a draft

Skip lines for draftForm complete sentences and details for draft

STAGE OF WRITING: DRAFTING, EDITING, REVISING

Revision stage is for adding, deleting, and changing text

Editing stage is for correcting spelling, punctuation errors, etc.

Dear Diary, Name: _________ Date: ____________ _____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X_____________________________________________________________________________________X  

Haggard, B. and Hodge, K.(2010). Simulated journal graphic organizer. Valdosta State University, Valdosta, GA.

APA CITATION

Root, T. (2010). Revising and editing: Proofreader’s marks. Retrieved from http://www.valdosta.edu/~troot/eced4300revising_&_editing.htm

Use the following to find editor marks for your drafts after you have completed revision

APA CITATION

Tompkins, G. E. (2009). Language Arts Patterns of Practice. Upper Saddle River, NJ: Pearson Prentice Hall.

The following is one of a series of diary entries created by a 5th grader assuming the role of Betsy Ross

June 14, 1777Dear Diary,Today was a happy but scary day. Today the flag I made was adopted by Congress. I thought for sure that if England found out that a new flag was taking the old one’s place something bad would happen. But I’m happy because I am the maker of the first American flag and I’m only 25 years old!

PRACTICE ACTIVITY4TH GRADE

Use the graphic organizer form the previous activity to create a draft

After you have completed your draft, read through the journal entry to add, delete, or change the text

PRACTICE ACTIVITY4TH GRADE

When you are done with revising your journal entry, pass it to your neighbor for editing

Use the proofreaders editorial marks while editing

ASSESSMENT ACTIVITY4TH GRADE

Using the graphic organizer from the previous activity create a draft

Use complete sentences with the draft

Revise the draftPass the revised draft to your neighbor for editing