How do you use a timeline in a personal narrative?

In this lesson, you will learn how to improve your personal

narrative by using a timeline to remember important details.

Let’s ReviewLet’s Review The Writing Process:

Revise Edit

Publish

DRAFT

Brainstorm

Let’s ReviewA Common MistakeWriting without using important details

makes a weak story for the reader.

Let’s ReviewCore LessonList the events of your story along a timeline.1

2 Eliminate the parts of the story that are not important to the story.

3Add in parts that may be missing that are important by writing in events on the timeline, and use them to create your draft.

Let’s ReviewCore LessonList the events of your story on the timeline1

Got a mini bike from my godfatherThe bike was a Honda z50 bright redInvited my cousin and friends over to ride my mini bike.Lost control of the mini bikeRode the mini bike into my neighbor's carMy friends were shockedMy friends laughedI told my motherMy mother told me to tell Mr. RobinsonI told Mr. Robinson

Let’s ReviewCore Lesson2 Eliminate parts of the story that are not

important to the story.Got a mini bike from my godfatherThe bike was a Honda z50 bright redInvited my cousin and friends over to ride my mini bikeLost control of the mini bikeRode the mini bike into my neighbor's carMy friends were shockedMy friends laughedI told my motherMy mother told me to tell Mr. Robinson I told Mr. Robinson

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3 Add in parts that were missing that are important to the story.

Got a mini bike from my godfatherInvited my cousin and friends over to ride my mini bike in my

neighborhood

Lost control of the mini bikeRode the mini bike into my neighbor's car

My mother told me to tell Mr. RobinsonI told Mr. Robinson

I forgot that the mini bike was in gear

I told my mother, she grounded me.

He appreciated that I told him.He called me a man.

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It was my first day with my new mini bike that my god father gave me. My cousin and I were having fun riding the little motorcycle up and down the street. I was afraid of it at first, but as I rode more I became more confident. I was being cocky and forgot that I had put the bike in gear when I let go of the clutch to rest. The bike popped a wheelie with me holding on for dear life. I didn’t see anything until the last minute, then WHAM! I rode the bike into the side of Mr. Robinson’s new car. I looked at his car and felt bad for what I did. As I scraped myself off of the ground I knew I was in for it. I told my mother what had happened and she made me put the bike away. I was not allowed to ride it for a month. .

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Then she made me do something even worse…she made me tell Mr. Robinson. I knew he was going to explode. I crept up to his door and knocked, praying he wasn’t home, but I knew he was. He came to the door smiling and greeted me. From that point on everything went into slow motion. I could not hear myself tell him what I had done, but from his reaction I knew that I had told him. After he got over the initial shock, he put his hand on my shoulder and said “thank you for telling me, it takes a real man to admit his mistakes.” I didn’t know what to say, I felt bad for what I had done, but I also felt proud that Mr. Robinson called me a man.

Let’s ReviewCore Lesson

12 Eliminate parts of the story that are not

important to the story

3

List the events of your story along a timeline

Add in parts that may be missing that are important by writing in events on the timeline, and use them to create your draft

In this lesson you have learned how to improve your personal

narrative by using a timeline to remember important details.

Let’s ReviewGuided PracticeOk it’s your turn…..List the events of your story along a time line.

Let’s ReviewGuided PracticeStep 2Eliminate parts of the story that are not

important to the story

Step 3……..Put in important events of your story on

the timeline, and use them to create your rough draft.

Let’s ReviewExtension Activities

Make a timeline of the last field trip you took with your class or an outing with your family. Be sure to include all the important actions!!

Let’s ReviewExtension Activities

Write a timeline for an event that used an OBJECT that is important to you.

Let’s ReviewQuick Quiz

Think of another person that is important to you, decide on an event or memory you have of that person, and write a timeline for a personal narrative.