how do you finally start writing your essay once you’ve outlined all of it?

How do you finally start writing your essay once you’ve outlined all of it?

In this lesson you will learn how to write the first draft of

your essay by using the boxes and bullets outline as your

guide.

Let’s Review

The Writing Process

Planning Drafting Revising

1 2 3 4Editing

A Common Mistake

Writing your outline in full sentences

The final draft!

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Let’s Review Essay Outline

Introduction

Body

One way to invent something new is by studying nature.

Another way to invent new things is by accident. New objects are also invented through trial and error.

There are many ways to invent new things.


• Biomimicry is creating a new design by studying nature.

• The Wright brothers’ plane was designed through biomimicry.

• George de Mestral created Velcro by studying burrs.

• Lots of scientists are trying to solve problems today by observing nature.

Another way to invent new things is by accident.

• Frank Epperson made the popsicle.• Cornelius Vanderbilt made the potato chip by

complaining• Dr Harry Coover tried to make a kind of plastic but

it came out as super glue.• Spencer Silver and Arthur Fry invented post-its

together

New objects are also invented through trial and error.

• Post-its: the glue wasn’t as strong as Silver wanted it, so Fry tried it out as page notes.

• The motor didn’t work on the Wright brothers’ airplane twice, but Orville fixed it himself.

• Plane was damaged after falling to ground during the first attempt, but they kept making attempts.

Core Lesson

Write each set of boxes and bullets out as a new paragraph, in full sentences.

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2 After each body paragraph, ask yourself, “How does my evidence prove my thesis?”

3 Write your explanation after each piece of evidence.

Core Lesson


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There are many ways to invent new things. One way to invent something new

is by studying nature. Another way to invent new things

is by accident. New objects are also invented

through trial and error.

Introductory Outline

It turns out that there are many ways to invent new things, including by studying nature, by accident, and through trial and error.

Have you ever been frustrated when you get to the end of the peanut butter jar and your knife just barely scrapes up what’s left? Most peanut butter eaters have had similar experiences, but how many people have actually come up with solutions to this problem? Many people don’t try their luck at inventing because they don’t know how to start or where to get their ideas.

Core Lesson


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Body Paragraph 1One way to invent something new is by studying nature and trying to copy its design. This is called Biomimicry. The Wright brothers’ plane was designed by observing the way birds fly. George de Mestral created Velcro by studying burrs. Lots of scientists are trying to solve problems today by observing nature.


• George de Mestral created Velcro by studying burrs

• Biomimicry is creating a new design by studying nature.

• Lots of scientists are trying to solve problems today by observing nature.

• The Wright brothers’ plane was designed through biomimicry.

As I draft, what should I delete and add so my

reader best understands what I am

teaching?

Core Lesson


One way to invent something new is by studying nature and trying to copy its design. This is called Biomimicry. The Wright brothers’ plane was designed by observing the way birds fly. George de Mestral created Velcro by studying burrs. Lots of scientists are trying to solve problems today by observing nature.

How does this evidence prove

my thesis?

The Wright brothers based the airplane body design on a bird’s body.

Mestral noticed that hooks at the end of burrs legs helped them stick to things.

Anyone can be like scientists by observing.

Core Lesson


One way to invent something new is by studying nature and trying to copy its design. This is called Biomimicry. The Wright brothers’ plane was designed by observing the way birds fly.

The Wright brothers based the airplane body design on a bird’s body.

Mestral noticed that hooks at the end of burrs legs helped them stick to things.

Anyone can be like scientists by observing.

The Wright brothers based the airplane body design on a bird’s body. George de Mestral created Velcro by studying burrs. Mestral noticed that hooks at the end of burrs legs helped them stick to things, so he used hooks in his Velcro design. Lots of scientists are trying to solve problems today by observing nature. Anyone can be like scientists by observing. What can we observe in nature that might help us solve the peanut butter jar problem?

Core Lesson

Have you ever been frustrated when you get to the end of the peanut butter jar and your knife just barely scrapes up what’s left? Most peanut butter eaters have had similar experiences, but how many people have actually come up with solutions to this problem? Many people don’t try their luck at inventing because they don’t know how to start or where to get their ideas. It turns out that there are many ways to invent new things, including by studying nature, by accident, and through trial and error.

One way to invent something new is by studying nature and trying to copy its design. This is called Biomimicry. The Wright brothers’ plane was designed by observing the way birds fly. The Wright brothers based the airplane body design on a bird’s body. George de Mestral created Velcro by studying burrs. Mestral noticed that hooks at the end of burrs legs helped them stick to things, so he used hooks in his Velcro design. Lots of scientists are trying to solve problems today by observing nature. Anyone can be like scientists by observing. What can we observe in nature that might help us solve the peanut butter jar problem?

Introduction

Body paragraph 1

Core Lesson

Have you ever been frustrated when you get to the end of the peanut butter jar and your knife just barely scrapes up what’s left? Most peanut butter eaters have had similar experiences, but how many people have actually come up with solutions to this problem? Many people don’t try their luck at inventing because they don’t know how to start or where to get their ideas. It turns out that there are many ways to invent new things, including by studying nature, by accident, and through trial and error.

One way to invent something new is by studying nature and trying to copy its design. This is called Biomimicry. The Wright brothers’ plane was designed by observing the way birds fly. The Wright brothers based the airplane body design on a bird’s body. George de Mestral created Velcro by studying burrs. Mestral noticed that hooks at the end of burrs legs helped them stick to things, so he used hooks in his Velcro design. Lots of scientists are trying to solve problems today by observing nature. Anyone can be like scientists by observing. What can we observe in nature that might help us solve the peanut butter jar problem?

Another way to invent new things is by accident. In fact, one of the best summertime treats, the popsicle, was created by accident when Frank Epperson made the popsicle. He wanted a refreshing drink one summer, so he mixed soda powder and water and left it on his porch to cool but then forgot about it and left it there all night long. In the morning, his straw was frozen in his pop, but he enjoyed eating it anyway. Mr. Epperson did not mean to create something so delicious, but people ended up loving his refreshing dessert. Cornelius Vanderbilt made the potato chip by complaining about the thick, soggy fries at a restaurant. He kept sending the fries back to the kitchen telling the chef to make them thinner, until the fries were so thin that they were crunchy. Even though they were no longer fries, people have enjoyed this accidental invention across the world.

New objects are also invented through trial and error. Although the Wright brothers’ initial design idea came from nature, they had to test out many designs and fail a lot before they found something that worked.

Essay Draft 1

Core Lesson

Twice the motor didn’t work on the Wright brothers’ first airplane design, but Orville fixed it himself. Also, the Plane was damaged after falling to ground during the first attempt to fly it, but they kept making attempts even with a damaged plane. The Wright brothers found that they needed to change some parts of their design when they ran into problems. They kept trying and made a successful first airplane. With Post-its, the trial was making a really strong glue, but the error was that the glue ended up being really weak. The next trial was using the glue on the back of note paper so that it could stick to sheet music and be moved easily from page to page. This time, the trial worked, and post-it notes were made. : the glue wasn’t as strong as Silver wanted it, so Fry tried it out as page notes.

Essay Draft 1

Core Lesson


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In this lesson you have learned how to write the first draft of

your essay by using the boxes and bullets outline as your

guide.

Guided Practice

Write the outline below in full sentences to make body paragraph 2.

The mosquito larva lives in water. It breathes through a tube that it places on the

surface of the water to inhale oxygen. The larva sucks food like bacteria through its tube

from the surface of the water. The larva moves by wiggling its body.

The second stage of the mosquito life cycle is the larva stage.

Guided Practice

Review the body paragraph you just wrote.

1. Ask yourself, “How does this evidence prove the thesis?”

2. Write your explanation at the end of the paragraph.

Extension Activities


Write out the introduction below in full sentences. Don’t forget to flip the introduction on its head and leave the thesis last.

Eggs are the first stage of the mosquito life cycle. Second, mosquitos go through the larva stage. The next stage of the life cycle is the pupa stage. The last stage of the cycle is the adult stage.

The lifecycle of mosquitos consists of four stages.



Work backwards!

• Look at a completed student essay.• Circle the evidence the writer uses to

prove his point.• Underline the parts of the essay that

explain how the evidence supports the thesis.

Let’s Review

Quick Quiz

Write the first draft of your own essay by using your boxes and bullets outline as a guide.

Lesson Slides Rubric

Use this rubric to ensure your lesson plan is great!

Writing Lesson Rubric Criteria for Success Things to avoid

Storyline or Arc of the Lesson

There is a clear arc to the lesson. One slide leads naturally to the next so that there is a flow and a building of meaning

All the components of the lesson are there but they seem disconnected, as if the author wrote each without thinking about how they fit into the whole.

Hook Slide

The teacher poses a simple question that illicits the response, “yeah, I do wonder how that works…”

The question is short A relevant example is included when it is short and

further pulls the learner in The question mirrors what the student will do in

the guided practice

The question seems formulaic, inauthentic, or overly “school-ish” (message: you have to learn this because you’re in school rather than, this is genuinely interesting)

The hook is overly-complicated and potentially confusing The question does not parallel the guided practice

questions

Objective Slide

The objective follows the form (you will learn X by doing Y)

Is concise and follows the form provided in the examples

Does not follow the form Is overly vague in describing either the X or the Y Is too long Is written for teachers but not students

Let’s Review

Reminds the student of how this lesson fits within the writing process

Is as concise as possible

Is either too detailed or not detailed enough in connecting the lesson to other lessons

Leaves out important touch points Makes the lesson overly dependent on the other lessons

(student will be confused or feel like they’ve made a mistake, if they watch this lesson alone)

Is too elaborate

Common Mistake Points out a “common mistakes” that students

make and quickly explains why that is a mistake The mistake is overly simplistic or complicated. Does

not feel authentic

Steps

Clearly connects with the objective Includes 2-3 steps that a writer can take to achieve

the objective Is student focused (the steps accurately imagine

what a student who has never done this before will need to do)

Is logical and specific (you can visualize the act of doing the step. There is no magic leap that happens between steps)

The connection with the objective is unclear Includes 4+ steps (and therefore should be split into two

or more lessons) Involves a magic leap that assumes a student can make

a leap between steps that is natural to an adult

Modeling

Is in “think aloud” format. The teacher is opening up his/her thought process to the student and modeling the struggle; showing how he/she drafts and revises ideas in his/her mind

Engages the learner by asking questions along the way to build suspense

Examples are authentic - they show empathy for the learner and his/her interests, concerns, problems without speaking down the learner

Fails to explain his/her thinking along the way. The teacher effortlessly runs through the steps as if it’s all obvious and easy

Does not ask any questions along the way to pull the learner in

Uses examples which are unlikely to connect with the learner’s life

Steps and Objective Review

Reviews the steps and objective in a “see what I just did” way

Serves as a “let’s pull this all together” moment that helps organize the lesson in the learner’s mind

Creates abrupt feeling between the modeling and the reviewing (subtext: “we’re done modeling, let’s quickly bring this lesson to a close.”)

Guided Practice Challenges the learner to carry out the same steps Is at the same difficulty level modeled in the lesson

Seem unrelated to the hook question Is at a different difficulty level than that modeled in the

lesson

Extension Activity Suggestions

Includes suggestions for at least 2 extensions Includes a suggestion for a struggling student who

needs more opportunities for practice as well as a student ready to be challenged more

Suggestions should clearly build from the approach in the core lesson

Does not include differentiation Does not thoughtfully connect or flow from the lesson Does not clearly build from the approach in the core

lesson

Aesthetics

The slides use the correct colors (blue, green, red) in the correct sequence

The slides use the correct fonts The slides use handwriting and the handwriting

appears as written in the right places The slides only use the headers/titles provided The slides use the provided visuals or include

visuals created by the author or LearnZillion The slides use animation, highlighting, and circling

to scaffold the learning, keeping the eye focused on what the teacher is introducing/explaining

The slides clean and uncluttered. The visuals and text do not exceed the maximum amount (see tutorial for example of maximum)

The slides use other colors or vary the order of the colors

The slides add new headers/titles that aren’t part of the template

The slides use clip art The slides are cluttered Animation is distracting and feels more like sizzle than

part of the steak

Graphic and Image Templates

Copy and Paste items from these slides to make your presentation look great!

You can copy and paste these items into any slide

Green text box that appears letter by letter

Green text box that fades in

Blue text box that appears letter by letter

Blue text box that fades in

Red text box that appears letter by letter

Red text box that fades in

You can copy and paste these items into any slide—make sure you copy both the bubble and

the text!Do I feel strongly about it?

Do I have a lot to say?

Do I feel strongly about

it?

Do I have a lot to say? Do I have a lot to

say?

You can copy and paste these items into any slide. You can resize them as

needed!Use black text when you write in me please! Also, keep my text left-justified rather than centered!

Use black text when you write in me please! Also, keep the text left-justified rather than centered!

All arrows can be recolored by changing the “shape fill.” You can also resize them or rotate

them!

[Write first step here…]1

2 [Write second step here…]

3 [Write third step here…]

You can use these when discussing main ideas or steps in a process…

You can resize any of these boxes and use them to highlight text or ideas.

Let’s Review

A Common Mistake

Guided Practice

Quick Quiz


Core Lesson

how do you finally start writing your essay once you’ve outlined all of it?

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