how can i make sure my answer is strong?. in this lesson you will learn how to polish your answer by...
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How can I make sure my answer is strong?
In this lesson you will learn how to polish your answer by avoiding repetitive words and phrases.
Let’s Review
Analyze the Prompt
Prepare the Case
Judge the Evidence
Find the Evidence
Finalize the Case
A Common Mistake
Not polishing your response
I’m done!Yahoo!
Assessment of Writing
Criteria Score
Response
Evidence
Writing
Is the response
complete?
Is the response
well written?
Core Lesson
Ask yourself, “Do my sentences have varied beginnings?”
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2 Ask yourself, “Is my word choice varied?”
Core Lesson
In my opinion, the Grays did not feel like Alexis, their
dog, was “just like a member of the family” because
Mr. Gray hit her and sold her puppy. In the story, Mr.
Gray struck Alexis with his cane. In the second
paragraph on page 5, it says Mr. Gray sold Alexis’s
puppy. Even though the Grays treated Alexis kindly, a
member of a family should never have to worry
about being beaten or sold.
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The story tells us that
On page 5 in the second paragraph,
Core Lesson
In my opinion, the Grays did not feel like Alexis, their dog, was “just like a member of the family” because Mr. Gray hit her and sold her puppy. The story tells us that Mr. Gray struck Alexis with his cane. On page 5 in the second paragraph, it says Mr. Gray sold Alexis’s puppy. Even though the Grays treated Alexis kindly, a member of a family should never have to worry about being beaten or sold.
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Core Lesson
In my opinion, the Grays did not feel like Alexis, their dog, was “just like a member of the family” because Mr. Gray hit her and sold her puppy. The story tells us that Mr. Gray struck Alexis with his cane. On page 5 in the second paragraph, it says Mr. Gray sold Alexis’s puppy. Even though the Grays treated Alexis kindly, a member of a family should never have to worry about being beaten or sold.
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Core Lesson
In my opinion, the Grays did not feel like Alexis,
their dog, was “just like a member of the family”
because Mr. Gray hit her and sold her puppy. The
story tells us that Mr. Gray struck Alexis with his
cane. On page 5 in the second paragraph, it says
Mr. Gray sold Alexis’s puppy. Even though the Grays
treated Alexis kindly, a member of a family should
never have to worry about being beaten or sold.
2they
he
Core Lesson
In my opinion, the Grays did not feel like Alexis, their
dog, was “just like a member of the family” because
they hit her and sold her puppy. The story tells us
that Mr. Gray struck Alexis with his cane. On page 5
in the second paragraph, it says he sold Alexis’s
puppy. Even though the Grays treated Alexis kindly,
a member of a family should never have to worry
about being beaten or sold.
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took money in exchange for
given away
Core Lesson
In my opinion, the Grays did not feel like Alexis, their dog, was “just like a member of the family” because they hit her and sold her puppy. The story tells us that Mr. Gray struck Alexis with his cane. On page 5 in the second paragraph, it says he took money in exchange for Alexis’s puppy. Even though the Grays treated Alexis kindly, a member of a family should never have to worry about being beaten or given away.
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Core Lesson
Ask yourself, “Do my sentences have varied beginnings?”
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2 Ask yourself, “Is my word choice varied?”
In this lesson you have learned how to polish your answer by avoiding repetitive words and
phrases.
Guided Practice
Polish this response by asking yourself the questions used in today’s lesson.
I think Alexis was sad that her puppy went away because she was afraid and could not eat. On page five in the third paragraph, the author tells us that Alexis felt sick because she was afraid for her puppy. The story, “A Dog’s Tale,” also says that she is so afraid that she cannot eat.
Extension Activities
Extension Activities
I know the Grays are wealthy because they live in a big, beautiful house and employ a nurse for the baby. When Alexis, the dog, moves into the house, she describes it as “a fine great house.” The narrator also talks about the nurse hired to care for the baby on pages two through five. I know wealthy people have big houses and nurses so the Grays are wealthy.
Polish this response by asking yourself the questions used in today’s lesson.
Extension Activities
Extension Activities
Even after the godmother gave her a coach and beautiful gown, Cinderella had the nerve to ask for glass slippers. The famous folktale also tells us that transportation and finery for one ball wasn’t enough. Cinderella had to go to three! Selfish people ask for more and more so I know Cinderella was selfish.
Polish this response by asking yourself the questions used in today’s lesson.
Let’s Review
Quick Quiz
Alexis proved that she was brave by going through flames, dragging the baby from her crib, and dragging her to safety. In the story, Alexis fell to the floor and dragged the baby through thick smoke. When someone risks their own safety to help someone else, they are brave.
Polish this response by asking yourself the questions used in today’s lesson.