feedback on the opening sequence

8/13/2019 Feedback on the Opening Sequence

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Feedback on the opening sequence

Only 18 people has completed the survey

Question 1 – Did you like the opening sequence?

17 out of 18 said ‘Yes’

1 out of 18 said ‘No’

Question 2 – What did you like about it?

Good introduction , instantly sets an uncomforting atmosphere that gets the audience to

question the situation; in conjunction with the quick switches of frames it created a urgent

feel that makes the viewer expect something sudden to take place

The opening sequence allowed the audience to understand the plot immediately. Along with

the camera angles which zoomed in on the actor/actresses faces to provide dramatic effect.

This would immediately intrigue the audience through its story line, and its dramatic cameraangles.

the drama

I liked how camera shots and props were used to make a connection between the doctor

being the father. Instead of dialogue used to explain that

It heads the follieing scenes in the film, the location, lighting, dialogue and filming are good.

It heads the follieing scenes in the film, the location, lighting, dialogue and filming are good.

the story and the way it was done

With a few images you are able to understand a whole story and its background

I liked the acting and the story line.

The acting was good however the doctor could have spoken in a more suttle tone as he's

seeing a patient to make it look more realistic.

The acting is quite good though Doc not very convincing!

It was straight to the point, you could immediately understand the situation

The flash backs

I liked the use of camera angles going from a birds eye view into normal views and close up

on the paper etc. The use of camera angles improves the look of professionalism.

The flashbacks

I thought the storyline was very interesting. I liked how we could see her flashback's, so we

know what happened exactly in the past and why she's in that place. I also really liked the

acting and the camera angles used.

The flashbacks that the patient was having

It was mysterious and even though I had no clue what this was about, it made me want to

keep watching it, so I liked the way the flashbacks and the conversation with the doctor

were structured.

Question 3 – What did you dislike?

To improve it i think the rapidness of the frames from the doctor taking off his glasses to the

nurse coming perhaps can be cut down , otherwise it seems just a bit rushed and does not

give enough time to impact the audience. If doctor is supposed to be frustrated with romina

i think he needs to show a bit more anger when he repeats himself with the are you still

having flashbacks dialogue.



There was nothing I disliked about the opening sequence because I enjoyed everything

about it.

that gunshot sound wasnt very convincing

The dialogue in the flashbacks were cut just a bit too short that's it :) I liked the bit with the

scream at the end, put it in

Nothing but perhaps a bit more of an explanatory introduction for the film will help theaudition to understand what the film is all about.

Nothing but perhaps a bit more of an explanatory introduction for the film will help the

audition to understand what the film is all about.

the noise of the gun wasnt very convincing

Everything's great

There wasn't anything I disliked.

I didn't really understand what was going on in the video. It was too difficult to understand

the plot.

The Doctor was very aggressive and confrontational in his manner towards the patient. The

room was very cold and not conducive to having a Psychological Consultation. The patient

was in a horrible hospital gown and should have been in her own clothes She should. havebeen given her meds before to relax her.

Nothing

The writing wasn't clear.

I sometimes felt the transitions into the flashbacks and the main scene were a little 'jumpy'.

The fake sounding gun shoot

nothing

Maybe if there was some music in the background it would help make it more dramatic

I didn't like that there was no music. The scene appeared kind of "empty" Also, at some

points the movement from the doctor to Olivia was very sudden-which makes it more

"sharp" and "tense"-which is great- but it could be improved, I think.

Question 4 – What do you like the story line is about? Please explain.

I think the doctor is the father which killed the mother and took the ring , the girl went

through trauma and had a memory loss as a result of seeing her mother being shot. The

doctor is trying to see if she knows his true identity and trying to decide wether she is a

danger to him or not.

The story line is based on a vulnerable girl who is seen to be sick. She is shown with a doctor

who asks her a lot about a dark event that she witnessed. The audience later find that it was

the doctor himself who committed the murderous act that the actress witnessed.

a girl sees her mother murdered shes in a hospital or a mental asylum and the doctor is the

person that killed her mum The story was good it was clear and would fit in the thriller genre

I like it, it is good as it keeps audition interested and engaged.

I like it, it is good as it keeps audition interested and engaged.

murder

This girl is shocked by some events in the past. First of all the doctor seemed reliable but at

the end of the story, when you see his ring, everything changes

The story line is a girl who went to a mental institution because she witnessed something in

her passed that traumatised her.

Honestly I am really unsure about the plot.

Patient suffering with mental illness caused by a traumatic past experience. Possibly to do

with her Father stabbing mother?? Is the Doctor part of the plot or he just reminds her of

her Father.



A girl who has some mental issues because of a murder that happened in the past

The women is mentally ill and the person who killed her mother is her doctor

A girl who has experienced a traumatic experience within a family environment, possibly the

murder of her mother. She hasn't dealt with it well, constantly having flashbacks of the

ordeal and has been diagnosed with depression and placed in a mental asylum for round the

clock care. She has regular councilling sessions with a pyschiatrist who tries to get to thebottom of her depression.

Girl with mental problems after seeing/being part of a murder?

Olivia has been sent to a psychiatric ward because she keeps on having flashbacks of her

father killing her mother. In the end, the doctor that was talking to Olivia has the same ring

as the father, which could mean that the doctor is possibly her father.

Olivia is crazy and traumatised because she witnessed her mother being killed. The

psychiatrist she's speaking to has something to do with the incident because he is wearing

the same ring as the hand in her flashback touching her mums bloody hand. But she doesnt

know her doctor has something to do with it.

Before I watched the video I had no clue what it was about, but within the very first seconds

I did understand the main plot. Apparently Olivia is a patient in a mental institution-or atleast I hope she is- and the doctor is trying to figure out what memories she has from her

traumatic experience of witnessing her father killing her mother. Also, we saw that the

doctor was wearing the same ring as the father in the video, which makes him more

suspicious and makes us think that maybe he is the father and he is trying to control Olivia

and her memories by being her doctor.

Question 5 – What do you think needs improving?

Wrote it in the dislike section

Although the video is required to be maximum 2 minutes, it would be favourable to have an

extended sketch of the sequence instead of leaving the audience with a shocking cliffhanger. just that gunshot sound

Just the cutting of the flashbacks to be made a little longer so the dialogue doesn't cut. And

a small small thing, when you cut from a different shot when "rolivia?" Leaves the room the

shots jumps slightly that's it though :) Don't forget music in the background to make things

more tense, maybe a sinister sound when the doctor is writing on his pad and feeling the

ring, then maybe put the music back on when the father takes the ring off the mothers hand

so people who might not have figured it out get that it was the father

The cut between one scene and another sometimes feels too abrupt/ sharp.

The cut between one scene and another sometimes feels too abrupt/ sharp.

maybe the cange into opening new scenes

the focal of the camera in some scenes Probably adding more sound effects or music other than that it was great.

The plot needs to be much more obvious it was too hard to understand. The ending with the

ring was really confusing. But the acting was really good so that doesn't need improving at

all. Just make the plot more obvious. :)

The Psychiatrist needs to improve his bedside manner and treat \Olivia like a person who is

suffering if he is genuinely trying to help her.

Lighting

More emotion from the actors

Transitions into scenes/flashbacks Possibly set design, for example blue taccing paper over

displays looks cheap and nasty. This brings down the professionalism of the piece.

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nothing



I think theres a bit where it looks like olivia is laughing in what seems to be a serious

moment

Well, as I said it was very well-structured. Perhaps Olivia could be more "in the role" and try

and look more unstable and dangerous, since she has mental issues. I would like to see some

tension! Also, in the crime scene in the kitchen-when the "father" took the engagement ring

off Olivia's mother hand- you could tell that the "father" was not played by a male actor. Thehands were not masculine, and I think that is very important as it has to be convincing.

Question 6 – If this was your video, what things would you add/change to it? (E.g. music, company

logo, etc.)

I would cange the rate of frames as stated above. Convey more frustration in the doctor and

as the girl is leaving he could say something along the lines of ' we are not finished relivia '

etc but over all looks very good

Music would make the short video more effective and dramatic. Due to the video have a

sad, murderous effect, it would interesting to have dark theme songs to create the mood of

the video. maybe suspenseful music when the guy with the ring bent down over her mothers body

Just the name of the thriller somewhere, maybe between the doctor asking questions it

flashes up, or over the screen it flashes up, or at the start it comes up that's it

The sceen cuts.

The sceen cuts.

more dramatic music

some more details

Perhaps add some music or sounds.

I would add music and make the flashbacks look much darker and gloomy as its meant to be.

Theme of story needs to be a bit clearer.Maybe the setting could have a clip starting at her

home showing flashbacks Ist before she sees Psychiatrist.

I would add the logo of the producer/school

Edit the gun shot

I'd perhaps add thoughts/pressures that the girl has going in her head. I would record her

saying these and have these as a VoiceOver whilst the doctor asks her questions. I'd do it so

you can still hear the doctor speaking in the background but he could be faded out and you

could have the girl shouting "no, no! stop it!" or you could have other thoughts for the girl as

to what her father has done to give more of an insight to the audience.

Scary music

I would probably add some mysterious background music at the end of the video.

I would add more music that changed depending on how intense the scene was supposed to

be

Again, background music is always a good way to start off a movie. I would turn up the

volume during the flashbacks-just to make it more dramatic and drag the viewer's attention

and curiosity. I also think that the room was too bright for a mental institution, and I didn't

like that the nurse was sitting down. I think it would be best if she stood up next to the door

wearing a full white doctor coat, instead of a white shirt. Also, when she tried to pick up

Olivia and get her out of the room, I was waiting for some uncontrollable reaction or a very

sudden move from Olivia, which disappointed me. I think it would be awesome if while the

nurse was getting her out of the room Olivia started screaming the same things she was

screaming in the flashbacks, during the crime scene. So for example" Stop!" or "No, don't do

that, what's that?!" I think this would really show how traumatized and unstable she is!

Finally, since it's obvious that the father is the doctor, when the doctor says: "You've never



spoken of your father before. What else? Do you remember what he looks like?" he doesn't

show he is scared that the truth will come out. That's of course if I got the plot right.....

Question 7 – So far from what you’ve seen, do you think you would watch this film at the cinema?

9 of out 18 said ‘Yes’

8 of out 18 said ‘Maybe’

1 of out 18 said ‘No’

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