evaluating peer feedback

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Evaluating Peer Work

Name; Emily Turton

Activity 1

Use the mark scheme below and work in pairs to grade the 4 exemplar pieces of work. You must try and place the work into the correct level. Wherever possible you should use a best fit model, this means that you take an overall view rather than harshly penalising for one fault. Use the space provided to give specific examples and write a summary comment at the bottom of the page. You are examining the ENTIRE MAGAZINENON STOP POP

Minimal Level 110 23 marksBasic Level 2 2435 marksProficiencyLevel 3 3647 marksExcellenceLevel 44860 marks

framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate25- Bad positioning and framing eg. Cutting off arm on double page

using a variety of shot distances as appropriate22- mostly mid shots

shooting material appropriate to the task set24- clear but could be better quality photos

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting26- basic mise-en-scene and no props used

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizing27- Most photos are sized OK but some have been cropped too much eg. Arm is cut off on double page

accurately using language and register23- register appropriate but some grammar use is incorrect eg. was instead of were

appropriately integrating illustration and text35- well laid out, text is organised but is slightly messy/too busy

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page design35- organised lay out, slightly messy

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size28- too many fonts used, however this is also good because it shows variation

using ICT appropriately for the task set36- Photoshop is used well

Summary CommentI marked this magazine too harshly as it is actually level 3. However I realise now that it did tick the correct boxes and did the things that the exam board like. For example, multiple images and busy covers.

FLAWD


framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate37- well framed shots and have excluded elements eg backgrounds, well

using a variety of shot distances as appropriate35- mainly mid shots but a longer shot is also used

shooting material appropriate to the task set25- front cover photo is good quality but the others arent as good quality, looks like a phone camera could have been used

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting35- Basic mise-en-scene but slight variation in different photos. Guitar used as a prop

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizing27- Photos are resized and cropped to an appropriate size

accurately using language and register36- register used is appropriate, however some grammatical errors eg carnt

appropriately integrating illustration and text30- contents page text and images are laid out well, quote on double page hasnt been embedded correctly and cover page has been laid out well

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page design33- layout has been organised and structured well. Slight alterations could be made eg text on double page

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size33- slight variety of fonts but could be more. Good variety of sizes.

using ICT appropriately for the task set33- Photoshop used well

Summary CommentI marked this magazine slightly too harsh as it reached level 3. I realise now that it does deserve level 3 especially because of the amount of images used and the bust style to it.

STACK


framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate38- well framed photos, cover photo edited well

using a variety of shot distances as appropriate40- Close up, mid shots and longer shots are used, showing a variety of shot distances

shooting material appropriate to the task set36- appropriate camera used, but to gain more marks, cover photo could have been better quality

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting45- Variety of mise-en-scene and props used. Colours used complement each other well, so well thought out

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizing38- well manipulated, the sizing has been done well. The cover photo has been manipulated very neat and professionally

accurately using language and register40- appropriate register for article, formal with a good use of jargon eg EP. Grammatical error present whose instead of whos

appropriately integrating illustration and text48- Well positioned text and images, looks very professional and organised.

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page design48- Layout is well positioned which shows awareness of page design.

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size36- variety of fonts but could be more to gain more marks

using ICT appropriately for the task set45- ICT used well, Photoshop is used well, eg cutting out image on front cover

Summary CommentThis magazine received level 3, therefore I was correct mostly with my marking. I can see now why it might not reach level 4, its professional but not quite excellent, especially the layout of the images.

DUBZONE


framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate36- well framed shots but slightly similar

using a variety of shot distances as appropriate40- slight variation but could be other shots

shooting material appropriate to the task set35- good camera used but quality could be improved

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting35- basic mise-en-scene but prop used. Colours all link well together which makes the magazine flow nicely.

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizing35- cutting out of images well, resizing appropriate.

accurately using language and register34- relatively appropriate language with the correct register for the piece of writing and audience

appropriately integrating illustration and text35- Images and text integrating well but slight alterations could be appropriate eg text on double page could be laid out so it doesnt cover the images as much

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page design34- Layout is appropriate, the images and text work well together. However there is some overlapping which could be changed.

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size35- A few different font and sizes are used however to improve mark, a bigger variety could be used.

using ICT appropriately for the task set34- Photoshop is used well, however basic things have been done eg using a coloured text box

Summary CommentI marked this magazine too highly as it actually only reached level 1. I realise now that the overall magazine is very basic and doesnt have a structure to it. There arent enough images and the fonts dont link together well. The text layout on the double page hasnt been done well as some of the text go over the box that they are meant to be in.

Task 2Now using the skills youve acquired in task 1, evaluate your own work and then two pieces of work from classmates. Use the space provided to give specific examples and write a summary comment at the bottom of the page.

Magazine title: CHORD


framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriatePictures framed well, however some things eg feet, have been cut off

using a variety of shot distances as appropriateGood variety of shot distances, including mid and long shots

shooting material appropriate to the task setLights and camera used is appropriate and makes the images look very professional

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and settingLighting is good in all images, the colours fit together well and the use of the guitar fits genre well. The mise-en-scene used allows your magazine to flow well

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizingImages are manipulated to the correct size and shape. To gain more marks, they could have not have cut feet etc off the image

accurately using language and registerRegister is appropriate and fits target audience well. No grammar mistakes can be found

appropriately integrating illustration and textText and images are appropriately integrated well. Looks organised and structured

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page designLayout is very appropriate. Images and text are laid out in a structured way which fits the indie genre well

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text sizeTwo different fonts which could be increased. Good size differences though

using ICT appropriately for the task setICT has been used appropriately. Photoshop has been used well

Summary CommentOverall I think the magazine is very good. The layout of images and text works very well and looks organised but also fits the indie genre. Only slight alterations could be made, including a bigger variation of fonts and sizes.

Magazine title: ASY


framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriateShots are framed well, the images have been cut out well, excluding the background

using a variety of shot distances as appropriateSlight variety of shot distances, however more need to be added

shooting material appropriate to the task setAppropriate camera and lighting equipment used for the tasks, makes the images look clear

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and settingLighting is appropriate and the colours in the clothing link well together. However background scenery would make the mise-en-scene better

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizingCropping and resizing fits the pages well. The cutting out of the images looks very professional

accurately using language and registerRegister links well with audience and language is appropriate. No mistakes found

appropriately integrating illustration and textText and images integrated well. Contents could be altered to remove blank space

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page designLayout and page design is organised and well designed

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text sizeSlight variation of fonts but could be more. Good size variations however

using ICT appropriately for the task setICT used appropriately. Photoshop used well

Summary CommentOverall the magazine looks very professional and well laid out, especially the cover page. The contents page could be made slightly busier as there is empty space at the minute, but the double page and cover page layout looks good and works really well.

Magazine title:


framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriateWell framed photos, elements are appropriately excluded

using a variety of shot distances as appropriateNot much of a variety of shot distances, more could be put in

shooting material appropriate to the task setLighting equipment is appropriate as well as the camera used. Both contribute to making a good quality image

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and settingColours used link well together. The lighting is very appropriate in creating a good quality image. Props could be used

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizingVery appropriate, cropping and resizing has been manipulated in a stylish way

accurately using language and registerRegister appropriate and no mistakes found

appropriately integrating illustration and textImages and text are integrated well. They complement each other well

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page designLayout has been designed in a stylish way, works very well

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text sizeGood variety of fonts and sizing, more could still be added however

using ICT appropriately for the task setPhotoshop has been used well to create the magazine

Summary CommentOverall the magazine is very impressive. Only slight alternations could be made, including changing shot distances in the images used.

Task 3 Target setting

Use the feedback from your classmates to set targets to improve your work. Use the grid below to focus your areas for improvement. Try to be as specific as possible and where possible create one target for each area of the mark scheme. Remember to be realistic, that means making sure your targets are achievable and realistic for your ability.

Magazine title: SOLO


framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriateFramed well but could include more depth into images

using a variety of shot distances as appropriateA small variety of shot distances but more could be added eg long shots

shooting material appropriate to the task setCamera used creates good quality pictures but more lighting equipment could be used to improve quality even more

selecting mise-en-scne including colour, figure, lighting, objects and settingBigger variety of mise-en-scene could be used. Scenery backgrounds used is good though

manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizingPhotos are manipulated well but some images (top one on contents) is cropped too small

accurately using language and registerAppropriate register and manner used. Some spelling mistakes to change

appropriately integrating illustration and textBasic integrating of text and images, especially on contents page

showing understanding of conventions of layout and page designBasic layout and design which could be improved eg more text on contents and images arranged in an original way

showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text sizeNot a big variety of fonts-it stays consistent throughout the whole magazine. Big variety of sizes

using ICT appropriately for the task setPhotoshop is used appropriately, but more complicated things could be done

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