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Copyright 20 06 All rights reserved to www.IELTS-Blog.com In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules? Freedom plays a mandatory role in everybody’s life. We can see in today’s modernized era nobody likes to get some restrictions upon them, whether it would be a child or an adult. Some people think that there should have some strict rules of  behaviour for children, but I disagree with this statement. Wherever  it is a reality that sometimes more restrictions can cause more frustration in children, which leads to many other mental diseases as well .Morever they can be,  behave like a stubborn .Sometimes they feel themselves under pressure, which can be a main reason, for their poor performance in their field.  In some cases children would be crazier to do these things from where we’ll try to keep them away . In other words() we have to look  for  other aspects as well, like if we usually ignore our children’s bad habits, then they can’t  be good human beings in their future life. Moreover() if we never draw attention upon the children’s main activities then they may be acquiring bad company. They can know regarding  the value of respect for their elders.Theycan knows the importance of relationships .They can know regarding their cultural values as well. In a nutshell, I would like to say that children should be teach regarding  the value of their customs, rituals and respect towards their elders for their future life, but most of the extra restriction should be being avoided .  It would be better to make them good human beings in their coming future. A good essay, set out well. Nicely done. Comment: be Comment: unnecessary. It is a reality……. Comment: Unnecessary mental diseases. Comment: “like a stubborn” a stubborn what? Comment: I do not understand? Comment: , Comment: at Comment: might not Comment: , Comment: to Comment: must understand Comment: They need to understand the importance of relationships and their cultural values as well Comment: taught Comment: be avoided Comment: It would be better for helping them to be good human beings in the future.

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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries

they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should

children have to follow rules?

Freedom plays a mandatory role in everybody’s life. We can see in today’s

modernized era nobody likes to get some restrictions upon them, whether it would be

a child or an adult. Some people think that there should have some strict rules of

 behaviour for children, but I disagree with this statement.

Wherever  it is a reality that sometimes more restrictions can cause more frustration in

children, which leads to many other mental diseases as well .Morever they can be,

 behave like a stubborn .Sometimes they feel themselves under pressure, which can be

a main reason, for their poor performance in their field.  In some cases children would

be crazier to do these things from where we’ll try to keep them away.

In other words() we have to look  for  other aspects as well, like if we usually ignore

our children’s bad habits, then they can’t  be good human beings in their future life.

Moreover() if we never draw attention upon the children’s main activities then they

may be acquiring bad company. They can know regarding   the value of respect for

their elders.Theycan knows the importance of relationships .They can know regarding

their cultural values as well.

In a nutshell, I would like to say that children should be teach regarding  the value of

their customs, rituals and respect towards their elders for their future life, but most of

the extra restriction should be being avoided .  It would be better to make them good

human beings in their coming future.

A good essay, set out well. Nicely done.

Comment: be

Comment: unnecessary. It is a

reality…….

Comment:Unnecessary mental

diseases.

Comment: “like a stubborn” a swhat?

Comment: I do not understand?

Comment: ,

Comment: at

Comment:might not

Comment: ,

Comment: to

Comment:must understand

Comment: They need to understthe importance of relationships and

cultural values as well

Comment: taught

Comment: be avoided

Comment: It would be better for

helping them to be good human bthe future.