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ASSESSMENT FOR EDUCATION ESSAYS

Assessment for TOBI essay

It is the someones ability to teach something, to get

knowledge to someone and so on = is the ability to teach

and get knowledge to someone.

In some government the education = in some

governments education.

This government development teachers competitive =

these government, develop teachers competitionsbetween them.

this government development teachers competitive but

in this competitive the teacher and other professionals

present the same test, professionals go to teach as the

last option to find a jog, many professionals like this

getting a jog as a teacher but to be precise they do not

have any idea to be a teacher the government becomes

a profits of money and leaving totalment forgat thisbeautiful profession to be teacher.

You have to organize your ideas, because I couldnt

understand what you tried to say. Be careful when you write,

the words are not well written (jog, totalment forgat).

This question in detail = this question in a deep way.

Let us look at the degrees are the professions such as,economist, engineers they cam spend a little time to get

graduations. Than a degree of chemistry, mathematics or

foreign language = the degrees are the professions such

as: economist, engineers, etc. Which spend a little time

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for finishing them than a degree of chemistry,

mathematics or foreign language.

Has or hag? Owing to this situation the teachers school

hag to equalize.You have to use punctuation marks, because the sentences

lose the sense. Read more about the topic, you have to

support your point of view.

Assessment for JHONKYS essay

In this essay I didnt find any mistakes, but I think that shouldread it.

Assessment for YESSICA essay

This essay is good, but has a lot of information. You have to

summarize it and write the principal ideas.

Assessment for JOHNNACAROLINA essay

In this essay I didnt find any mistakes, but I think that shouldread it.

Assessment for DELACUESTA essay

In this essay I didnt find any mistakes, but I think that should

read it.

Assessment: for Keyla Merio Perea essay

- Well the first paragraph is a run on, no sentences, it shouldbe broken up in separate statements (someone learns in afaster way)

- It kind of reads like rambling

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- Or also in a pleasant and solid form that is the didactic.Another theme is the education as.- The questions marks how does it transmit? Can bechanged to commas, lower case (and) to make onecomplete sentence.

- First of all instead of at teacher teaches (actually that

sentence is no correct It rambles)

- The following stage not follow stage whose interaction- In the 3rd paragraph after the word process there should be

a period. Then start a new sentence.

- There are many differences in 4th paragraph

- The last paragraph has minimal error. But in the 4th

and 5th

she needs to look for a place to end the sentences.

Assessment: for Karen Rojano essay

THE CONSEQUENCES OF THE NEW SHIFTS..

In the last years, the word is has experimented (has

experimented (without is) a complex process of shifts

in the economic, social/../ and therefore educative

organization. On the base of this process is found an

accelerate and permanent development of knowledge.

Those shifts increase the circulation of all kind of

information. Normally, it means globalization. On the

other hand this process implies deep shifts in the

educative structure in general as:

Firstly, in the frequent renovation of skills and

competences needy (needy competences. First

adjective and after the noun) for a successful

performance in the most of occupations, and secondly

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the increasing requirement of a minimum degree or (of)

certificate to jobs of low work profile. Thanks to this

speed of change in the world economic, social and

educative structures, it is extremely necessary and

relevant to modify the international educative system. It

is evident that the international educative was not

prepared to affront this unexpected global situation. One

of the horrible consequences of this process for global

education is the rising increase of educative inequalities

due to the social inequalities because the list of

requirements from the alimentation until pedagogical

strategies different (different pedagogical

strategies) for different situations. The educative

inequality is originated for a rising gulf between rich and

poor.

Thus we can see that to pass knowledge and techniques

it is not enough. It assume that the necessity of

development of skills and competences, which allow

incorporate others through the rest of life. It is also

known that the educative system produce inequalities in

a tolerant way for a social cohesion. In this context what

is the ideal educative system for the currently?

Consequently, I suggest that it is necessary and relevant

from a politic and pedagogic point of view to work in

(on) an educative system in which strengthens the

schools like environments that allow the direct

interaction between social class and the existence of

multiple community scenes. For this new system it

requires professionals of teaching with different profiles,

knowledges (speeling)competences to promote the

individual learning like cooperative teachers who create

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a new didactic allow (a new didactic that allow to

use )use the new technologies available ( the new

available technologies). To promote the learning is

infinitively more difficult than transmit information, but it

is not a new challenge it has being the challenge to

affront from the earlier years of teaching research.

You should work on the punctuation marks.

Remember that in English, the adjective that qualifies

the noun goes first.

Assessment : for Efigenia essay

Education includes a series of instructions and disciplineswhich it is attempting to enlighten the knowledge, where itspecifies to know to do something and in what form, for thisreason it necessary to understand the role of the teacher inthe learning-teaching process.

The scholar institution has to modify the old methods that we

can meet (maybe you could use another verb as: find) inthe academic period as the canal of the transformations,(.)The old methods does not exist because, nowadaysteachers would find many strategies to do (apply, carry outor execute) inside the classroom with the innovative toolsthat the new society proposes.

To emphasize, the education(must ,has ,should?) to facemany challenges, that is to say, the education would be anindispensable tool to humanity and it permit to progresstowards the ideals of peace, freedom and social justice, nowthe question is the follow :Are new teachers going to changethe establish education?

The answer is not easy but I think that today's teachers havenew ideas and take into account the actual situation of the

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education, for example, a math teacher, in him class not onlyteach number nor(but) the way in which this knowledge willbe practice and useful in the daily life.

In this order of ideas, the education in Colombia representsthe only wayto defeat the poverty and it need a deep changein the administrative structure and the way to develop theclass because, it is fundamental that the national governmentpromotes the coverage and quality of the Colombianeducation, where whose are engaged to learning-teachingprocess will be a vehicle between the innovation and thepolitical institution for beating the scholar desertion that is agrave problem in our country.

In conclusion, the education requires promoting thesocialization of the person to obtain a fair society to everyonefinding to learn values and rights of the citizen without anydiscrimination.

Avoid repeating the same word; you should use a synonym of

WAY as: mode, manner, style.

And use synonyms of some verbs that are so much common.

Assessment: for RENE essay

EDUCATION: A GREAT TOOL FOR PEOPLEDEVELOPMENT

Education is a fundamental element for the optimaldevelopment of both individuals and communities of a

country. Although there are educational institutions inColumbian high quality, most of them are not accessible tothe mass of the population. Moreover, the coverage isinsufficient and, in general, the quality is very low, whichmakes the process of education can not develop even in anacceptable manner. Taking into account, the demands of the

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globalized world in which we live. The situation is quitecritical, because a significant percentage of the populationcan only access to public education, which is awful. This is abig problem in our country, it is the main cause of mosteconomic and social problems we have, and can be due tomany others. Thus, the poor education provided at Columbianot only represents a current problem of great importance,but also represents a potential problem that most likely willaffect us in the future.

The statistics published in the institutions that compete thesubject of education in Columbian, show the serious crisisbeing experienced by formal education. According to somestudies published by some magazine (s) (DINERO), the 5827

public schools rated 63% of the total, only 7.6% are found inmuch higher level and higher, while 64.1% are in the middleand lower levels. This coupled with the 4 million children andyoung people who do not attend school, the lack of coverage,displacement or violence and the fact that 79.4% of thepopulation of school age have to go to public education, is oneof the biggest problems facing today's Colombia.

Moreover, much of the importance of education lies in the role

it has on the construction of civic culture and communitydevelopment in general. In other words, we tend to expectmuch more of this man who is educated, that he who has noteducation or very little. To start, following a rational attitude,most people who are educated do not because they pretendto be thieves, or rapists, or thugs, but because they want toachieve their individual goals by socially acceptable means.Also, if it is true that some people with high levels ofeducation, for example, stealing state property, much lesscontrollable even people who have no(not) education arecorrupt because they are not just for vanity, but by their ownignorance and lack of opportunity, are more vulnerable tocommit injustice. This is one way that education makesindividuals better and helps to make a better community.

Another important factor is the poor quality and insufficient

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coverage of public education, this is a problem that affects allof society by the influence this has on the state that we mustbear in mind that nearly 20 million Colombias people live inpoverty and extreme poverty. Then, this deficiency makes thewhole system works poorly, because for optimal performanceof democracy is necessary plurality in thought, and the modelof Colombian public education this system is designed for theopposite, to standardize the ways of thinking and thus makeeasier the exercise of government by the authorities.Moreover, low levels of expertise given the lack ofmanagement by the official sector, as a country we are alsoaffected, increasing the lawlessness and social problems, andmakes us a country incompetent(an incompetent country)to today's globalized world.

However, it is known by all Colombians, that the issue ofpublic education crisis is not the only issue that needsattention and a speedy solution, because there are veryserious problems like drug trafficking, violence anddisplacement. But in this sense, education also plays animportant role, because it is the root cause of all socialproblems being experienced in our country. That is,lawlessness, lack of opportunity, and injustices that arehighlighted in the list of causes of the problems mentioned

above and many others also have low quality background inpublic education and the inequity in distribution thereof.

So, if we improved and we extended the Colombian publiceducation in our country there would be more justice andequity, and therefore more peace. When people are educated,it is natural to gain status in society for the merit which meanstheir knowledge, thus a doctor sees as its necessarycounterpart to another doctor, regardless of other conditionsthey live both. Likewise, when most people have a good levelof education, opportunities are given a more equitablebecause it does not exist so markedly the factors that make apoor person cannot access high office. Similarly, there wouldbe more justice because it is much more complicated cheat orsteal from an educated person than an ignorant, becausewhen someone has studied knows your rights and tools they

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have to enforce them, and it is also very convenient to avoidcorruption which damages both the Colombian state. Not tomention the countless positive effects in our country to investand promote more education, because this would (be?),without doubt, the best deal that could make our country.

Education is a great tool or means to solve the problems of asociety, however, I think this should be strictly linked to a fieldof ethics and moral self-oblige the individual to put intopractice.

Your writing is well organized; it is obvious that it was writtenwith your own words. Congratulations. But there are somemistakes that you have to take into account. For example

COLOMBIA (it is a noun that you cannot translate, Columbianis a state of EE.UU so it is different) and remember that inEnglish the adjective that qualifies the verb goes first.

Assessment: for Bayron essay

FINANCIAL EDUCATION

One time(Once), I made myself one question, why must we

study? So that, many people said to me (I should ) become alawyer, a teacher, a doctor or(something else) someone in life,others advise(me to) "Go to school, get good grades, and lookfor a safe, secure job." My own opinion is the truth(none senseat all); it is difficult to believe we have that to prepare us five,six, seven or eight years to obtain a title at the university afterto get a job in order to earn money. But I have talked withprofessional people who have graduated, they have worked intheir careers, however they possess financial problems. Themain difficulty is to manage the money; they said the wage is

not enough. I want to write about it.

The school is an important institution where we are going toeducate (us), but does school prepare children for the realworld? The university give (s=third person) us tools fordefending (us) in professional life, however we have problemsin finance.

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Robert Kiyosaki stresses financial literacy as the means toobtaining wealth. He says that life skills are often best learnedthrough experience and that there are important lessons nottaught in school. He says that formal education is primarily forthose (who are seeking, maybe) seeking to be employees orself-employed individuals, and that this is an "Industrial Ageidea." And according to Kiyosaki, in order to obtain financialfreedom, one must be either a business owner or an investor,generating passive income.

"The main reason (why) people struggle financially is becausethey have spent years in school but learned nothing aboutmoney." Robert KiyosakiFor example: A student graduates, he finds that (a) job,

maybe as a (an) enginner (engineer) or a lawyer. Generally,the student begins to make money, credit cards, start (s) toarrive in mass, and the shopping begins.

"Having money to spent, the student knows his girlfriend andthey get married, both men and women work. Two incomesare bliss.

They feel successful, their future is bright, and they decide tobuy a house, a car, a television, take vacations and have

children. The raise come, and so does (do) another child(another child what?) and the need for a bigger house. Theywork harder (to) become better employees, even morededicated.

They go back to school to get more specialized skills, so theycan earn more money. Maybe they take a second job. Theirincomes go up, but so does the tax bracket they're in and thereal estate taxes on their new large home, and their SocialSecurity taxes, and all the other taxes.

They buy some mutual funds and buy groceries with theircredit card. The children reach 5 or 6 years of age, and theneed to save for college increases as well as the need to savefor their retirement. .

"That happy couple, born 35 years ago, is now trapped in a

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vicious circle or Rat Race called by Robert Kiyosaki for the restof their working days. They work for the owners of theircompany, for the government paying taxes, and for the bankpaying off a mortgage and credit cards.

Then, they advise their own children to study hard, get goodgrades, and find a safe job or career. They learn nothing aboutmoney.

Here is where(the ploblem is) is the problem, money theschool only we teach us academic topics, to be employeesand not finance, the government must invest in financialeducation to eradicate poverty, which is the ability tounderstand finance more specifically, it refers to anindividual's ability to make informed judgments and effective

decisions about the use and management of their money.I suggest that the educative institutions could take the ideaabout finance for implementing in the classroom, in that wayin order to guide to the students in a financial future and to beentrepreneurs. It is not easy to apply financial education inlife, but little to(by) little it could improve with habits, just wehave to begin knowing to manage 50 pesos and to become itin 100 pesos and so on.Maybe I am not the best giving advises, but it would be a

project in order to improve our education Another thingmore I already am working to have financial freedom.