english 105, week 3
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English 105, Week 3. By PresenterMedia.com. Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33). States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subject Assert ONE main idea Have something worthwhile to say Limit thesis to fit the assignment State thesis clearly, in specific terms - PowerPoint PPT PresentationTRANSCRIPT
Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33)
States the writer’s clearly defined opinion on some subjectAssert ONE main ideaHave something worthwhile to sayLimit thesis to fit the assignmentState thesis clearly, in specific termsIn first or second paragraph.
Does NOT use “this paper”, “I”, or “you; does NOT ask a question; Does NOT state a fact no one can argue with.
Game! Pin the ThesisEach group (1-4 people) need a paper to record the #’s you have!Send 1 person to front to drawDecide which are “Adequate” and which are “Inadequate”
• Write the # on your paper. Write A or I, and if its I, tell why *use the book*
• Use tape to put statements onto the corresponding location.
• If you are incorrect, I will send you back to your group
The group with the most answered wins.
Thesis Statement AnswersIdentify whether each is adequate or not, explain the problem
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COMMAS PG 86 GREEN HANDBOOK
The Dreaded COMMA – handbook pg 86
1.Set off independent clauses
• The comma joins 2 complete sentences. MUST use a comma and a FANBOY
The House approved the bill but the Senate rejected it.
Either the hard drive is full or the modem is too slow.
Set off item in a series
Set off item in a series (will discuss parallel structure later).
You may pay by check, with a credit card, or in cash.
We took my grandparents, aunts, uncles, and cousins.
Commas – Introductory Elementspg 88When your sentence starts with a dependent clause, verbal phrase, or prepositional phrase, use a comma after.
When war came to Baghdad, many victims were children. Many victims were children when the war came to Baghdad. During the depression, movie attendance rose.
Setting off nonessential materialWhen you add info that is not essential, or vital, to the sentence’s meaning, it should go between two commas. If it seems to interrupt, use 2 commas. • He rand for the bus, which was late as usual. • The clerk, with a nod, dismissed me. • The marathoner, running his fastest, beat his previous record.
• Citizen Kane, Orson Welles’s first film, made him famous.
Fast Rule: don’t use a comma in front of that.
Misused commas: Don’t use
To set off a restrictive modifierThe film, Malcom X, was directed by Spike Lee. They planned a picnic, in the park.
Between a subject and its verbA woman with dark red hair, opened the door.
Between a verb and its indirect quote/question
The landlord asked, if we would sign a two year lease.
Before a dependent clause at the end of a sentence.
Jane Addams founded Hull House, because she wanted to help Chicago’s poor
Good rule of thumb:
Read the section aloud. Where do you NEED a pause? That is where a comma belongs. If you do NOT need a pause, the comma does NOT belong.
Comma Worksheet1. “Gas is too expensive” said the experienced
driver.2. I like to run but not when it’s hot.3. My three favorite foods are pasta pizza and ice
cream.4. Paris France is my favorite place to visit.5. Today is Tuesday June 10th 1992.6. Tomorrow Wednesday we will take a trip to the
zoo.7. When I get to the mall I will go to the food court.8. Yes we can find a place for you to stay over the
weekend.9. You will need milk sugar flour and eggs.
The rest of the answers will be available online.
If money wasn’t an object, which of these houses would you buy?
Why?
Beginnings and Endings. Chapter 4, pg 81.
Lead Ins: The “front door” to your paper. 1. paradoxical/
intriguing statement2. Shocking/arresting
statistic3. A question4. Quote5. Joke/story/anecdote6. Description,
emotional7. Factual statement8. Analogy/comparison
9. before-after scenario10. Personal experience11. List of facts (catalog)12. Statement of problem or misconception13. Brief dialogue14. Proverb, maxim, motto15. Insight, revelation16. Appeal to common experience
Avoid Errors in Lead-Ins
Make sure your lead-in introduces your thesisKeep your lead-in briefDon’t begin with an apology or complaintDon’t assume your audience already knows your subject matterStay clear of overused lead-ins (dictionary definitions anyone?!)
Practicing what you’ve learned: pg 85 Describe the lead-ins in the paragraphs.
May be more than one “type” that has been blended!
1. proverb
Concluding paragraphs: pg 86 1. A Summary of the
thesis and the essay’s major points
2. An evaluation of the importance
3. A statement of broader implications
4. A recommendation or call to action
5. A warning based on the essay’s thesis
6. A quotation from an authority
7. An anecdote/brief example that emphasizes/sums up
8. Image or description9. Rhetorical question10. Forecast11. Ironic twist, pun,
witticism, playful use of words
12. Return to the technique you used in the lead-in
Avoid Errors in Conclusions
Don’t introduce new points/irrelevant material
Don’t just tack on a conclusion.
Don’t change your stance.
Avoid trite expressions
Don’t insult or anger your reader.
“What Is Poverty”
Group Assignment (1 pg per group) “What is Poverty” (see handout or website)
1. Identify a quote for each of these 5 areas:
1. Sight2. Sound3. Smell4. Taste5. Touch/Texture
2. Respond to the piece – Did you like it? Dislike it?
3. Is this a “Narrative” essay? Why/why not?
Done? Turn in work.
Words to avoid in college writing
Really Now-a-days
You ThinkFeelBeingAs
A lotSort of/ KindaLikeJust
Peer Revision
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Always remember these lessons:• A good peer editor makes a
better self-editor because you learn by correcting other peoples’ work!
• Treat your peer’s paper like you’ll be graded on his/her errors and weaknesses.
Peer Editing
Do’s-Take this serious, you will be graded on the quality and quantity of your comments.
-Comment in a polite, respectful language/tone-Explain your comments, so if you say “I Liked it,” explain why! If you say “this is bad” explain how to improve it.
Don’ts-Correct every spelling/ grammar mistake (the author should use spell check!)
-Fill the paper with vague comments like “great job” and “interesting”
-Insult the author- Phrases such as “this
sucks”, instead phrase as “This could be better if you added in…”
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Follow the Handout1. Read aloud to paper owner. (allow
markup by paper owner, but editor/reviser don’t do anything but read).
2. Peer Revision: read peer paper to yourself. • Sensory Descriptions• Lead Ins• Conclusion
3. Return to paper’s author to complete then handout.
• Logic/organization•MLA format
Homework
Narrative Essay Final Draftemail to [email protected] by beginning of next class.
• File name: Lastname_Narrative.docx • Please do not type in the .docx – it is the file
extension.
Read: “Salvation” pg 352Vocabulary 2 – Choose 10 vocabulary words from “Salvation” or from the link online.