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Issue # 1
March 21st, 2013
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PAGE 1 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 1, Panel 1.
Wide Panel at the top of the page, taking up the upper fourth of the pages space. The shape of
ABBI FRYES eyes are seen in the shadows, with a single phrase over her face...
CAPTION 1:
Get away.
PAGE 1, Panel 2.
This, and the rest of the panels on the first page, share the same shape; a wide panel that takes
up a fourth of the page. This, however, shows a blurry image of JUN IWASE, focusing
awkwardly on his green jacket and we only get a fleeting glimpse at the rest of his body, only
seeing his chin as he rushes through an alley in the middle of the day.
PAGE 1, Panel 3.
This panel focuses on Abbis mouth, screaming out, as yet again, two words are imposed over
the panel.
CAPTION 2:
GET AWAY.
PAGE 1, Panel 4.
Its a close-up of the left half of DOMINO VINLANDs face in the foreground. Domino is a
punk kid, seventeen years old with bleach blond hair, a wiry frame and teeth like a shark. He
doesnt have much of a stature, but hes looking into the background, clearly running down the
alley, running away from Jun Iwase. Jun Iwase is far back into the background, running
forward.
JUN IWASE 1: (SHOUTING)
Hold it!
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PAGE 2 (FIVE PANELS)
PAGE 2, Panel 1.
A wide panel, taking up the top third of the page, Abbi sits up in a bed made of cardboard and
musty blankets, reaching out as she yells. Domino is in the background, looking back at the
sudden appearance of Abbi, stunned, with Jun in the foreground.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Away!
PAGE 2, Panel 2.
A series of three square panels take up the middle third of the page. This first panel in that
sequence shows Juns surprised look.
PAGE 2, Panel 3.
Jun is in this panel, moving his face into a smile.
JUN IWASE 1:
Thanks for the help! GET READY FOR-
PAGE 2, Panel 4.
Domino yells in an extremely overexaggerated fashion, head point upward.
DOMINO VINLAND 1: (SHOUTING)
HENCHMEN!
PAGE 2, Panel 5.
A wide panel, taking up the bottom third of the page, with the same size as Page 2, Panel 1.
Jun stands battle-ready, with a confused look on his face as two large figures loom over him...
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PAGE 3 (FIVE PANELS)
PAGE 3, Panel 1.
The first panel is a long one, with the width of half the page and the length of roughly 2/3rds of
the page. In it, two gigantic, square-shaped cliched goons appear in front of Jun, each wearing
a suit and with idiotic sunglasses, though with an interested look on each of their faces. The
only real difference is in their hair styles; the one on the left is bald and the one on the right has
a buzz cut. Each of them flex, and combined, theyre a wall of mass that tower over Jun.
Behind Jun is Abbi, her head just barely seen before being cut off by the panel.
GOON ONE 1:
Say, isnt that the girl the Orgs want?
GOON TWO 1:
Talk about easy money!
PAGE 3, Panel 2.
The next two panels are altogether the size of Page 3, Panel 1. Each are roughly the same size,
square, and they take right 2/3rds of the page. This first panel is Jun and Abbi, Abbi slightly
behind Jun. Jun has a curious look on his face, as Abbi wears fear, beads of sweat going down
her face.
JUN IWASE 1:
Orgs?
PAGE 3, Panel 3.
The two goons converse in this panel, the bald one talking to the one with the buzz cut.
GOON ONE 2:
I hear somethings up with her brain-
PAGE 3, Panel 4.
A wide panel, taking up the bottom third of the page, but leaving room on its right side for asmall rectangular panel. Jun punches the bald goon in the face, spit and blood coming out of
his mouth.
SFX 1:
BAM!
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PAGE 3 (CONTINUED)
PAGE 3, Panel 5.
A small, long horizontal panel, showing the top of Juns head with the speech bubble over
him.
JUN IWASE 2:
Thats the issue with hired meat these days. Too eager for the slaughter.
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PAGE 4 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 4, Panel 1.
A wide panel takes the top third of the page, the bald goon dropping to the ground with some
of his teeth missing.
SFX 1:
THUM!
PAGE 4, Panel 2.
A wide panel takes the middle third of the page. Jun looks back to Abbi, putting on a polite
smile as Abbi looks dazed, amazed Jun managed to take that guy down.
JUN IWASE 1:You okay back there?
ABBI FRYE 1:
Uh, yeah.
PAGE 4, Panel 3.
A set of two square panels finish off the bottom third of the page. In this first, Juns grin
widens, though a blurred fist is coming toward his face...
JUN IWASE 2:
Good to hear i-
PAGE 4, Panel 4.
Jun has a grip onto the fist, his arm quivering as he stays in position, eyes intensifying, the
eyes focusing on something off-panel to the right.
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PAGE 5 (THREE PANELS)
PAGE 5, Panel 1.
The first panel is a rectangular one, taking up the top half of the page. We see Jun locked into a
fight with the remain goon, the one with the buzz cut, as he holds back the ham-sized fist with
only one hand. We mostly see Jun from his back, though we do see his face, eyes meeting with
the goons...
GOON TWO 1:
Ha, youre pretty strong, kid...
PAGE 5, Panel 2.
Panel 2 and Panel 3 are a set of two square panels of equal size, side by side, taking up the rest
of the page. In this first panel, we see the goons hand reach into his coat pocket...
PAGE 5, Panel 3.
The goon takes a butterfly knife out of his coat, with a similar shot as Panel 2.
GOON TWO 2:
But lets see if you can dodge-
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PAGE 6 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 6, Panel 1.
Panels 1 and 2 take up the top half of the page, each long horizontally-shaped rectangles. In
this first one we see Jun punch the second goon in the face, blood coming out of his mouth
like the other one did.
SFX 1:
KRAK!
PAGE 6, Panel 2.
The goon drops like a load of bricks onto the ground, his face bruised and swollen as this
happens.
SFX 2:
DON!
PAGE 6, Panel 3.
The next two panels are equally-sized square panels that take up the bottom half of the page
side by side. In this first panel, Abbi sighs, completely drained, facing to the right.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Youve got to be kidding me...
PAGE 6, Panel 4.
Jun raises his eyebrow, looking curiously as he stares directly forward, almost to the reader.
JUN IWASE 1:
Hm?
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PAGE 7 (SEVEN PANELS)
PAGE 7, Panel 1.
The panel layout of this page is similar to the grid layout used in stuff like Watchmen, though
in this case the top row is merged into one long panel in the form of panel one, taking up the
top third of the page. The panels shot widens, showing an overhead view of the alley, the two
goons bodies collapsing onto Abbis home of cardboard and blankets as Jun and Abbi stand
over it, each on opposite sides of the panel, Abbi on the left side and Jun on the right. Abbi is
frusturated with Jun, while Jun just stands there with an awkward smile on his face, not sure
how to get out of this situation.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Your fight completely destroyed my house!
JUN IWASE 1:Oh, um, sorry?
PAGE 7, Panel 2.
From here on out, the panels are all square and are grouped into threes, three for every third of
the page. In this panel, we focus on Abbis face, whos completely furious about what just
happened.
ABBI FRYE 2:
Sorry?! Sorry is all you have to say?!
PAGE 7, Panel 3.
Jun looks more cornered as Abbi looks more and more angry, their expressions exaggerated as
Jun continues his embarrassed smile, sweating quite a bit, not sure how to handle this situation.
JUN IWASE 2:
I swear, Ill make it up to you. Um, Im kind of with the police so maybe they can help you
out.
PAGE 7, Panel 4.
Abbi goes from angry to curious in a blink of the eye, raising an eyebrow curiously.
ABBI FRYE 3:
The police? What do you do?
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PAGE 7 (CONTINUED)
PAGE 7, Panel 5.
Jun finally is relieved of some of the pressure Abbis putting on him, happy to answer her
questions.
JUN IWASE 3:
Im a member of KIAF, The Kinzoku Individualized Anti-Hacking Force.
PAGE 7, Panel 6.
Abbi thinks for a moment, rubbing her chin thoughtfully.
ABBI FRYE 4:
Never heard of it. Wouldnt it be KIAHF?
PAGE 7, Panel 7.
Jun gives off a confused look.
JUN IWASE 4:
Youve never heard of KIAF? All right, here...
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PAGE 8 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 8, Panel 1.
This square panel and the vertical panel to the right of it take up around the top half of the page.
The square panel is wider than the vertical panel. This panel shows some sort of futuristic
device, circular in design, with Jun presenting it. A hologram emits from the top, showing off
Juns identification. Its got a photo of Jun, his name, some form of bar code and at the top
theres a virtual badge with text on it reading K.I.A.F, Certified Agent, Kinzoku Police
Department.
JUN IWASE 1: (OFF-PANEL)
KIAFs a branch of the police department who specialize in arresting big time criminals and
notable hackers that are hazardous to the citys digital infrastructure.
PAGE 8, Panel 2.
The long, vertical panel next to Panel 1. Abbi stands there with a dumbfounded look on her
face.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Is cybercrime really so important to warrant an entire specialized department?
PAGE 8, Panel 3.
A series of two rectangular panels take up the bottom half of the page, the right, being a bitwider than the left one (meaning this panel). Jun stares at Abbi in disbelief, pressing something
on his circular gadget. Abbi is on the left, Jun is on the right.
JUN IWASE 2:
Youre not from around here, are you?
PAGE 8, Panel 4.
Jun moves to the right, putting his device in his pocket. Abbi moves forward, reaching for him
with an angry look on her face.
JUN IWASE 3:
Anyway, Im out of here.
ABBI FRYE 2:
Hey! What about my house!?
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PAGE 9 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 9, Panel 1.
This page is made up of six equally-sized rectangular panels, two side by side taking up the
top, middle, and bottom thirds of the page. We see Jun from his back, as he puts his hand up,
waving goodbye to Abbi.
JUN IWASE 1:
I geotagged this point, the police should be here to give you your ham sandwich or whatever
the hell youre entitled to. Trust me, you wont be getting much.
PAGE 9, Panel 2
Abbi looks down, sadly.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Oh, well there goes my home...
PAGE 9, Panel 3.
We see Jun, the back of his head faced to us like in Panel 1, but hes not waving this time.
PAGE 9, Panel 4.
Jun looks back, his face now toward us, a guilty expression on his face, but a slightly irritated
one too.
JUN IWASE 2:
Damn it.
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PAGE 10 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 10, Panel 1.
A slim, horizontal panel is across the top of the page, showing an expositional shot of Juns
triple-decker apartment.
PAGE 10, Panel 2.
Panels 2-4 are a series of horizontal panels of Jun and Abbi walking up the streets. Theyre
divided into panels to achieve a panning affect when the reader looks at it. The stairs go up
from left to right, getting high and high as Jun and Abbi climb them. Abbi is in this panel,
walking up the stairs...
JUN IWASE 1: (OFF-PANEL)
Listen, Im only doing this because I have a spare apartment I happen to be paying rent for,okay?
ABBI FRYE 1:
Is that a normal thing people do?
PAGE 10, Panel 3.
This is entirely empty stairs, without anyone on them going up.
JUN IWASE 2: (OFF-PANEL)Not really, but its too complicated to talk about it here... thats off-topic, just know this is a
temporary set-up.
ABBI FRY 2: (OFF-PANEL)
Yeah, I get it already.
PAGE 10, Panel 4.
Jun is at the top of the stairwell, holding a doorknob that, next page, hell use.
JUN IWASE 3:Good, now without further ado, my humble home.
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PAGE 11 (THREE PANELS)
PAGE 11, Panel 1.
This is a rectangular panel taking the top half of the page. Its shows Juns rather dirty home.
His computer and desk is covered in soda cans, an ashtray and wires. His coffee table is
covered in similar things while his couch is covered in snack packages and chip bags. On the
wall there are a pair of Japanese swords. Jun and Abbi are seen from the side of this panel, Jun
with a normally happy face and Abbi with a look of disgust. On the opposite side of the panel,
theres a door.
JUN IWASE 1:
Feel free to make yourself comfy, your home is past that door over there, if you want to go
check it out.
PAGE 11, Panel 2.
Two wide panels take up the bottom of the page. This one shows off Abbis face, still sickened
by Juns messiness.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Trust me, it beats the alterna-
PAGE 11, Panel 3.
Something shiny is coming from off panel, as Abbi looks at it, wide-eyed and amazed.
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PAGE 12 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 12, Panel 1.
The whole left third of the page is taken up by this long, horizontally-oriented panel. The panel
shows Abbi looking up at the katana and wakizashi on display, Abbi staring at them with a
mesmerized look on her face.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Where did you get these? Are they real?
PAGE 12, Panel 2.
Panels 2, 3, and 4 are a series of square panels, each of the same size that take up the right two-
thirds of the page. In this first panel Juns face is focused upon.
JUN IWASE 1:
A friend gave them to me and yes.
PAGE 12, Panel 3.
Abbi still has a star-struck, mesmerized look on her face.
ABBI FRYE 2:
Can I have them?
PAGE 12, Panel 4.
Jun looks completely dumbstruck at this question.
JUN IWASE 2:
No! Of course not!
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PAGE 13 (SIX PANELS)
PAGE 13, Panel 1.
Two square panels take up the top fourth of the page. Abbi with an overexaggerated
expression, her eyes blob-like and her tears large and fake.
ABBI FRYE 1:
P-Pretty Please?
PAGE 13, Panel 2.
Jun groans, looking more tired than ever.
JUN IWASE 1:
Listen, I dont have time for this, Ive got to figure out my targets next move. He has to havesome sort of goal hes working toward...
PAGE 13, Panel 3.
A wide, vertical panel focusing on Abbis eyes, with words superimposed over the panel,
much like at the beginning of the book...
CAPTION 1:
GET AWAY.
PAGE 13, Panel 4.
A wide, vertical panel, focusing closer onto Abbis eyes, moving in closer with words over it...
CAPTION 2:
TAKE IT.
PAGE 14, Panel 5.
Two square panels take up the bottom of the page. This panel has a shadowy, male figure with
his mouth open...
CAPTION 1:
Okay?
PAGE 14, Panel 6.
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The details of the figure come in, and its Jun, worried for Abbi.
JUN IWASE 2:
Are you okay?!
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PAGE 14 (NINE PANELS)
PAGE 14, Panel 1.
All nine panels are square panels in rows of three, each row taking a third ofthe page. In this
first panel we focus in on Abbi, covered in sweat.
ABBI FRYE 1:
I must have made contact...
PAGE 14, Panel 2.
Jun has a mix of confusion and fear on his face.
JUN IWASE 1:
Huh?
PAGE 14, Panel 3.
Abbis composure is better now, as she speaks with urgency, her face completely serious.
ABBI FRYE 2:
I have sort of a special gift, something that certain people want from me.
PAGE 14, Panel 4.
Abbi continues her serious discussion...
ABBI FRYE 3:
My name is Abbi Frye, and I have the power to read minds... sort of.
PAGE 14, Panel 5.
Jun raises his eyebrow, quizzically.
JUN IWASE 2:
Sort of?
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PAGE 14 (CONTINUED)
PAGE 14, Panel 6.
Abbi stands in front of a door.
ABBI FRYE 4:
I cant really explain in detail but what matters is I know where Domino Vinland is and I can
bring you there.
PAGE 14, Panel 7.
Jun sits there on his couch, completely puzzled by what this girl said...
PAGE 14, Panel 8.... before finally just giving up on trying to rationalize this as he begins to stand up.
JUN IWASE 3:
God damn it, get the swords then.
PAGE 14, Panel 9.
We focus on Abbis star-struck face, moving her hands to greedily grasp the sheathed katana.
JUN IWASE 4:
No way youre going on the field without a weapon and I dont have a spare gun.
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PAGE 15 (THREE PANELS)
PAGE 15, Panel 1.
We open with a wide expositional panel taking up the top third of the page. This time, it shows
some sort of techno-y club called the HELIX NEBULA, with plenty of lights outside of the
place. However, the look isnt really that of a techno atheistic; its combined with that of an 8-
bit, retro game design.
PAGE 15, Panel 2.
A rectangular, splash panel taking up most of the page with space on its right side for a small,
wide panel. We see the interior of the place, people dancing while large, LCD screens float
around, showing off various strange and pixillated images as the floors change color with the
music. The place feels large, with people not just on one floor; many people dance on smaller
platforms floating around.
PAGE 15, Panel 3.
A thin, tall, horizontal panel showing a rather shifty-looking, paranoid Domino Vinland,
covered in some sort of hoodie.
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PAGE 16 (5 PANELS)
PAGE 16, Panel 1.
This is the first in a series of three tall, horizontal panels that take up half of the page. We see
Domino Vinland sit at a bar as the chaos remains in the background. There isnt anyone near
him at the bar.
PAGE 16, Panel 2.
A strong-looking, tattooed barkeep speaks to him. Hes not like the henchmen in the comical
amount of muscle mass they had, but still, hes a ripped guy wearing nothing but a tank top.
BARKEEP 1:
Anything I can help you with?
PAGE 16, Panel 3.
Dominos hooded face looks upward, coming a bit into the light as his shark-like mouth opens
up.
DOMINO VINLAND 1:
Im looking for information, particularly, a certain piece of data. Does Spotlight ring any
bells?
PAGE 16, Panel 4.
A wide panel, taking up the left half of the bottom of the page. The once-friendly barkeep looks
more grim all of a suddn, looking at Domino as if a rat had suddenly entered his bar and started
speaking to him.
BARKEEP 2:
Im afraid it doesnt, and even if it does, you shouldnt bring up things like that here. Quite
frankly, Im sick of your type running around here, looking for information.
PAGE 16, Panel 5.Another one in the similar set of wide panels. This focuses on Dominos hand, as he reaches
into his hoodie and pulls a gun out from it.
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PAGE 17 (6 PANELS)
PAGE 17, Panel 1.
This is the first in a series of six rectangular panels, two by two, each taking up a third of the
page. Dominos gun is pointed into the stomach of the Barkeep.
DOMINO VINLAND 1:
Maybe this will change your mind, then?
PAGE 17, Panel 2.
The Barkeep has a defeated look on his face, surprised by how drastic this kid is getting.
BARKEEP 1:
Fine, just ... why would you ever want that thing? Its useless to-
PAGE 16, Panel 3.
We focus on Dominos face as hes got a made smile and a furious spark in his eye.
DOMINO VINLAND 2:
What matters is that whoever is paying me wants this pretty bad, and he was willing to give me
some hired muscle and firepower to get the job done. I sure as hell dont want to upset a
customer, especially one as rewarding as this one. All that matters to me is the money, nothing
more, nothing less.
PAGE 16, Panel 4.
The Barkeep shakily reaches under the bar, where we see his masculine hand grab a USB
drive.
BARKEEP 1: (OFF-PANEL)
Fine, then; Ill give you the data. But be forewarned- therell be more than one mans blood on
your hand when you unleash this. Your clients are just using you as a puppet by throwing you
some shiny toys.
PAGE 16, Panel 5.
Dominos faced is focused on, clearly bored by this mans words.
DOMINO VINLAND 3:
Id thought youd get by now that I couldnt give a flying-
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PAGE 16, Panel 6.
Dominos face collides with an off-panel fist rather abruptly.
DOMINO VINLAND 4: (SHOUTING)
FU-!
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PAGE 17 (1 PANEL)
PAGE 17, Panel 1.
A splash page, showing Jun with a magnificant smile on his face, his lefth and clenched into a
fist as Abbi peeks over. Domino is in the foreground on the floor, a bit of his beaten face
shown as he groans. The chaos of the dance floor is seen in the background.
JUN IWASE 1:
Domino Vinland, youre under arrest for various charges of cyber crime by the Kinzoku
Individualized Anti-Hacking Force. You have the right to remain silent and get your face
promptly destroyed.
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PAGE 18 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 18, Panel 1.
A wide panel, one of two, this one thinner than the second. We see Dominos beaten face,
angry as all hell.
DOMINO VINLAND 1:
God...
PAGE 18, Panel 2.
Domino rises in this wide panel, pointing his gun forward with his face more crazed than ever.
DOMINO VINLAND 2: (SHOUTING)
DAMMIT!
PAGE 18, Panel 3.
The rest of the page is taken up by two equally-sized horizontal panels. In this one, we see Jun
uppercut Domino, his gun dropping to the floor as the Barkeep looks in the background,
confused.
SFX 1:
BAM!
PAGE 18, Panel 4.
Abbi is looking at something with an odd look in her eye; no, her entire eye is strange, dilated,
and also seem to be a different color...
ABBI FRYE 1:
Jun, weve got some trouble.
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PAGE 19 (FIVE PANELS)
PAGE 19, Panel 1.
A wide panel takes the top third of the page, showing Abbi being face with several goons.
Abbi holds her blade steady, expertly...
PAGE 19, Panel 2.
A small, square panel, with Juns face, looking back.
JUN IWASE 1:
No! Run Ill-
PAGE 19, Panel 3.A panel in the shape of a square, showing clothing being ripped by the katana.
PAGE 19, Panel 4.
A square panel, showing one of the thugs dropping like a fly....
PAGE 19, Panel 5.
A wide panel at the bottom of the page, Abbi sitting with a blade in her hand with her enemies
defeated.
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PAGE 20 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 20, Panel 1.
A wide panel at the top fourth of the page. Jun looks at Abbi, amazed.
JUN IWASE 1:
How did you do that? Who are you?
PAGE 20, Panel 2.
Another wide panel below that shows Abbi, giving a weak smile as she clings to her sword.
ABBI FRYE 1:
Do you really want to know the truth?
PAGE 20, Panel 3.
Another wide panel. Jun has a concerned look on his face, wondering what secrets this girl
could really hide.
JUN IWASE 2:
Yes.
PAGE 20, Panel 34.
Final wide panel, as Abbi looks down, a little nervous to tell her story...
ABBI FRYE 2:
All right, I guess I owe that much...
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PAGE 21 (FIVE PANELS)
PAGE 21, Panel 1.
The first panel isnt necessarily a panel, per se. Its an image of Abbi, head to toe, as she
speaks. It takes up the a large amount of the right portion of the page As she tells her story, a
panel accompanies each part of it, each piece of dialogue attached the accompanying panel
within the script.
PAGE 21, Panel 2.
Each of these panels are small, and are somewhat faded, the shapes vague, but clear enough to
convey an image. This panel is square, and more toward the top of the page. In this image we
see Abbi, begging to a person for help.
ABBI FRYE 1:I woke up six months ago without any personal memories but one; that I was Abbi Frye. I
went from house to house, living with anyone who would take someone like me... penniless
and without any memory.
PAGE 21, Panel 3.
This panel is at the same height of Abbis head, a wide panel only showing her eyes similar to
the ones at the beginning of the story.
ABBI FRYE 2:Soon, I discovered I had a vast amount of knowledge I couldnt remember learning and had
some sort of telepathy. I showed my abilities to my roommate and she sold me out.
PAGE 21, Panel 4.
This panel is square, at around the same height as Abbis waist. Its square, showing Abbi
running toward the reader.
ABBI FRYE 3:
The criminal organizations of the city had some use for my power, and so I was running away
from people who were tracking me down, living in a new cardboard home every night...
PAGE 21, Panel 5.
A wide panel, breaking away from the format of the page. It takes up the bottom fourth of the
page, showing the Katana being dropped.
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PAGE 21 (CONTINUED)
SFX 1:
CLANK!
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PAGE 22 (THREE PANELS)
PAGE 22, Panel 1.
A wide, horizontal panel taking up the top fourth of the page, showing Abbis back as she
leaves.
ABBI FRYE 1:
I was planning on leaving tonight, but I guess now will do. Dont want to burden you with all
my baggage. See you-
JUN IWASE 1:
Not another word.
PAGE 22, Panel 2.A long, horizontal panel, with the width of a fourth of the page and length of three fourths of it.
It focuses on Abbi again, turning around...
PAGE 22, Panel 3.
This rectangular panel takes up the rest of the page, with the same length as Panel 2. We see
Jun from the waist-up, to the left of his panel, with a serious look on his face as he shoves his
hands into his pockets.
JUN IWASE 2:Im not that easy to burden and Im not that quick to be dismissed. We havent known each
other very long, but you can trust me. I- I mean, we, can protect you, we can help you use your
abilities to get yourself off your feet and into a better life. Ill even make you my partner if you
want.
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PAGE 23 (FOUR PANELS)
PAGE 23, Panel 1.
The top third of the page is made up of two square panels, this first showing Abbis own look
of amazement and confusion...
PAGE 23, Panel 2.
Abbis look of confusion turns into a genuine smile...
PAGE 23, Panel 3.
A wide, horizontal panel takes up the middle third of the page, showing Abbi, offering a
handshake.
ABBI FRYE 1:
All right, then...
PAGE 23, Panel 4.
A wide, horizontal panel takes up the bottom third of the page, showing only the handshake
between the two.
ABBI FRYE AND JUN IWASE: (SHOUTING)
Partners!
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