DO NOW 10/6/15 Write responses to the questions below in CN write at least 2-3 sentences per question. 1) Which is the better sentence (explain why)? a.John grew red and yellow flowers outside. b.John planted roses and tulips in the garden. 1) Which is the better sentence (explain why)? a.John grew red and yellow flowers outside. b.John planted roses and tulips in the garden. Topic / Objective & Essential Question Topic / Objective: 1) To practice adding sensory details to sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives. Essential Question: 1) How can I improve my sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives? Topic / Objective: 1) To practice adding sensory details to sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives. Essential Question: 1) How can I improve my sentences by naming, changing verbs, and adding adjectives? Look over the feedback cheatsheet 1) Dont be too harsh build confidence. 2) Dont be too easy be constructive. 3) Look at specific phrases for different purposes. 1) Dont be too harsh build confidence. 2) Dont be too easy be constructive. 3) Look at specific phrases for different purposes. How would you improve this passage? (write changes on the handout) I was nervous. My teammates were doing different things. Then the coached walked in. He was serious. He started the prayerthis was routine. After the prayer, he led us out to play the game. (2 minutes) Great writing uses sensory details Why? A: Because it helps to bring the reader into the story. We live through our senses sight, sound, taste, smell, and touch. Make your writing N.A.S.T.Y 1) Names. 2) Actions. 3) Senses. 4) Talking. 5) WhY does this matter? Make your writing N.A.S.T.Y 1)Names Add names to things. Strive for proper nouns first (a 747 instead of a plane), and then revise for more descriptive nouns. What are descriptive nouns? * Descriptive nouns are nouns (persons, places, things, ideas) that have details built-in. Which is more descriptive? 1)Fruit or 2) Apple Make your writing N.A.S.T.Y 2) Actions Change simple verbs to descriptive, action verbs. Action Verbs Which is better? 1)Susy went over to her father and helped him up from the floor. 2)Susy ran over to her father and lifted him up from the floor. Action Verbs Which is better? Susy ran over to her father and lifted him up from the floor. Q: Why are ran and lifted better verbs than went and helped? Well continue with making our writing NASTY... Lets practice revising sentences to make them more interesting and engaging by adding NAMES and by changing simple verbs into strong, ACTION verbs. On your handout, rewrite sentences 1-4 by adding names and rewriting the verbs. Lets practice revising sentences to make them more interesting and engaging by adding NAMES and by changing simple verbs into strong, ACTION verbs. On your handout, rewrite sentences 1-4 by adding names and rewriting the verbs.