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Career Documents Showcase Zhang Jiguang

Albukhary International UniversitySHL1013 Professional English G01

27 November 2013

ZHANG JIGUANG (CHINA)

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CAREER DOCUMENT 1

CAREER DOCUMENT 2

JOB AD 1

LETTER 1

CV

JOB AD 2

LETTER 2

RESUME

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PASS FAIL01. IMAGE FILE: Two job advertisements are selected PASS FAIL02. IMAGE FILE: Each job ad can be attached or uploaded as a separate image file PASS FAIL03. CV PRACTICE: One job ad requires a CV PASS FAIL04. RESUME PRACTICE: One job ad requires a resume PASS FAIL05. LETTER FORMAT 1: A one-page letter in full block format PASS FAIL06. LETTER FORMAT 2: A one-page letter in modified block format PASS FAIL07. SENDER FORMAT 1: One letter uses a letterhead PASS FAIL08. SENDER FORMAT 2: One letter uses a full signature PASS FAIL09. PERSUASION: Reader is convinced to interview the sender PASS FAIL10. CV: A short CV targets all the receiver’s needs PASS FAIL11. RESUME: A short resume targets all the receiver’s needs PASS FAIL12. ORIGINALITY: Nothing in the documents can be proven as plagiarized PASS FAIL13. VERACITY: All contents can be proven true by certificates, documents, etc. PASS14. ATTACHMENTS: All attachments are mentioned in the letter (no “please find”) PASS

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Letter 1 Letter 201. CONTENT: There are no content errors PASS PASS02. FORMAT: There are no formatting errors PASS PASS03. MECHANICS: There are no errors in mechanics PASS FAIL04. LANGUAGE REGISTER: A professional tone is used PASS FAIL05. ADDRESSEE: The letter addresses a specific person PASS FAIL06. FOCUS: The letter focuses on receiver and benefits to receiver PASS PASS07. TARGET: Each item in the job ad is addressed FAIL FAIL08. TARGET: Any unconnected item is clearly connected PASS FAIL09. STRUCTURE: First and last paragraphs include a positive idea + something

about the receiver’s company or institution PASS PASS

10. STRUCTURE: One paragraph summarize receiver needs (job specs) PASS PASS11. STRUCTURE: One paragraph summarizes what sender can do PASS FAIL12. STRUCTURE: One paragraph summarizes what receiver can do to benefit

from the sender’s offerings or abilities PASS PASS

13. BREVITY & CONCISENESS: There no unnecessary words or elements PASS FAIL14. PROFESSIONALISM: The overall effect is clean and business-like. PASS PASS

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APPLICATION WITH CVCAREER DOCUMENT 1



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Albukhary International UniversityJalan Tun Abdul Razak, 05200 Alor Setar,Kedah Darul Aman, Malaysia

26 November 2013

National Public School228, Avvai Shanmugam RoadGopalapuram, Chennial-86. PH: 28351974

Dear Sir/Madam,

Your job advertisement about the enrollment of National Public School has highly captivated me. I am writing with regard to apply the position of Administrative Executives with free internship work for two month. The position seems fit very well with my education, experience and career interests.

I believe that to excellently fulfil the responsibilities as an Administrative Executive requires outstand administrative abilities. My fits this position because I am junior, majoring in Business Administration, and I have relevant knowledge, corresponding experiences and administrative skills which the position requires. Moreover, these abilities will undeniably play a crucial role in attaining expansion and development for your school. Besides, I have excellent experience regarding those administrative functions, which are Reception, HR, Public Relation and Marketing you required. Furthermore, your positions prefer ladies to apply, however, I can confidently say that I can perform as great as ladies do in this position and even much better as the skills and experiences I have.

Would you mind to consider my request to have a personal interview? I am very eager to discuss my career goals and provide additional information as needed. Thank you for your consideration and I am looking forward to talk to you.

Yours truly,

Zhang Jiguang (Mr.) Business Administration Scholar School of Business

Albukhary International UniversityAlor Setar, 05200 Malaysia


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26 November 2013

Dr. K P. GopalKrishnaChairman and Founder PrincipalNational Public School228, Avvai Shanmugam RoadGopalapuram, Chennial-86. PH: 28351974

Dear Dr. K P. GopalKrishna,

You seem to be in urgent need of an Administrative Executive for public relations of “development, expansion and ... for the proposed NPS International School” (Your advertisement, Sept 2013).

You may be pleased to know that I am offering you two weeks of free service; I can be your unpaid apprentice effective 17 January to 02 February 2014. Your school can benefit from my experiences as marketing team manager, head of radio station and World Expo receptionist (See attached CV).

It would be good to meet with you and exchange some ideas. For instance, your SEWA (Social Empowerment through Welfare and Action) programme can be a powerful public relations platform to promote, develop and expand the institutional vision of the National Public School.

For your convenience, the attached CV includes my contact details: phone, Skype, LinkedIn, and email.

Yours truly,

Zhang Jiguang (Mr.) Business Administration Scholar School of BusinessAlbukhary International UniversityAlor Setar, 05200 Malaysia


Modified Block (REVISED)GOOD. This means that you researched the company website to find the name of a real person.

GOOD. Addressing the letter to a real person increases the chances of personal attention to your message.

GOOD. Focusing on the receiver as the subject of the sentence can show importance to the receiver.

GOOD. You summarize the reader’s need in one paragraph.GOOD. You quickly identify the source of your information.

GOOD. Focusing on the reader as the subject of the sentence can show importance to the reader.

GOOD. You offer an answer to the reader’s needs.

GOOD. You mention an attachment and its contents without saying “please find”.

VGOOD. You state a positive benefit that the reader can have + what you can do for the reader.

V GOOD. You show that you have researched the reader’s company + you say something positive about it

VGOOD. You state what you want + what the reader can do to get the benefit you offer.

V GOOD. You mention an attachment and its contents without saying “please find” + You state what you want

BAD: The indention is not correct for the modified block letter.

Zhang JiguangJalan Tun Abdul Razak, Alor Setar 05200, Kedah, MalaysiaEmail: [email protected]. (60) 12 267 9059

Career ObjectiveProactive and responsible junior student who is currently enrolled in Student Representative Council, proves administrative awareness, leadership skills, self-motivation and flexibility. Seeking an internship work associated with administrative work.

Experience

Treasurer, SRC Entrepreneurship & Career Development Sub-Committee May 2013 – Present

Organized Career Exploratory Trip (CET) as Program Manager, CET consists of 4 batches trip and 156 students participated to visit international corporations such as IBM, DELL, and Nestle in Kuala Lumpur Managed and took the lead in the Sejahtera Market Event October as main organizer, handled meeting with committee members to successfully hold the event and performed well in the position.Prepared for Jobstreet.com Career Talk in Albukhary International University and maintained the whole process in order and praised by 90% of participants.

Marketing Team Manager, My Pride Project of Enactus AiU March 2013 – Present

Represented Enactus AiU to participate in Enactus National Exposition 2013 in Putra World Trade Center (PWTC) at Kuala Lumpur with other 23 universities of MalaysiaAchieved excellent selling performance which obtained income RM3000 in four days by selling furniture made by prisoners of Penjara Pokok Sena. Managed the selling process and encouraged members to actively work.Participated in Enactus AiU Enrollment Training 2013 as a dynamic member.

Group Leader, Community Service in Pendang, Alor Setar April 6, 2013

Headed preparation for Community Service in an orphanage and encouraged group members to be responsible for their duty.Devised working in the form of department to work effectively and accountably for each member and arranged specific duty for each of 40 students.Conducted meetings with group members and interpreted objectives of community serviceCooperated with group advisor to operate the program successfully.

Head, Radio Station, Gansu Electronic & Technical CollegeOctober 2010 – August 2011

Launched Daily News, Your Voice which students could be able to express their thoughts and Messaging which delivered message from one to another publiclyEnhanced the reputation and popularity of College Radio Station among students and staffs.Built strong cohesiveness for team and increased the efficiency of teamwork

Receptionist, Palestine Pavilion, World Expo Shanghai 2010 May – September 2010

Interpreted geographical, cultural and historical information of Palestine to international touristsCooperated with Pavilion Manager and Expo Security Department to recreated President Hamid Karzai of Afghanistan.Further developed and consistently demonstrated excellent communication and administrative skills.

Education

Albukhary International University PresentBachelor of AdministrationMinor: Bhasa Melayu

Gansu Electronic & Technical College August 2011Diploma in Information TechnologyCGPA: 93/100

Achievements and AwardsAll Star Team 7, 8, 9 July 2013In Enactus National Exposition, our team has achieved and been rewarded medal and certificate as All Star Team due to applicability, sustainability and excellence of projects we have done.

The Best Speaker 08 November 2012Won the prize of The Best Speak in panel discussion with Insaniah University regarding Introduction to Business course. Demonstrated marvelous communication skill and outstanding ability of teamwork

UTAR Perak Campus Run 15 July 2012Completed 12 Kilometers within 49 minutes as the 46th one among 200 member in one category.Received Finishing Medal and Certificate of Participation Languages

Chinese, native language.English, speak fluently and read/write with high proficiencyBahasa Melayu, speak and read with basic competence

Reference

Mr. Jaime Alfredo CabreraLecturer, Professional EnglishSchool of Humanities and Social ScienceAlbukhary International UniversityAlor Setar, MalaysiaPhone: (60) 16 478 7874Email: [email protected]


ORIGINAL

Zhang JiguangCurrent Address: Jalan Tun Abdul Razak, Alor Setar 05200, Kedah, MalaysiaPermanent Address: No. 8, Zuola Village, Chengguan Town, Lintan, Gansu Province, China, 747500Website: My Career Showcase Email: [email protected] (Malaysia): +60 12 267 9059

Experience

Marketing Team Manager, My Pride Project of Enactus AiUMarch 2013 – Present

Represented Enactus AiU to participate in Enactus National Exposition 2013 in Putra World Trade Center (PWTC) at Kuala Lumpur with other 23 universities of MalaysiaAchieved selling performance which obtained income RM3000 in four days by selling furniture made by prisoners of Penjara Pokok Sena. Managed the selling process and encouraged members to work.

Head, Radio Station, Gansu Electronic & Technical College October 2010 – August 2011

Launched Daily News, Your Voice which students could be able to express their thoughts and Messaging which delivered message from one to another publiclyEnhanced the reputation and popularity of College Radio Station among students and staffs.Built cohesiveness for team and increased the efficiency of teamwork Receptionist, Palestine Pavilion, World Expo Shanghai 2010

May 2010 – September 2010Interpreted geographical, cultural and historical information of Palestine to international touristsCooperated with Pavilion Manager and Expo Security Department to recreated President Hamid Karzai of Afghanistan.Further developed and consistently demonstrated excellent

communication and administrative skills.

Education

Albukhary International University OngoingBusiness Administration Scholar

Gansu Electronic & Technical College August 2011Diploma in Information Technology

Achievements and Awards

The Best Speaker 08 November 2012Won the prize of The Best Speaker in panel discussion with Insaniah University

Languages

Chinese, native language.English, speak fluently and read/write with high proficiencyBahasa Melayu, speak and read with basic competence


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Albukhary International UniversityJalan Tun Abdul Razak, 50200 Alor SetarKedah, Malaysia

November 18, 2013

Icon MarketingD-Ground, FaisalabadContact: 041-8718473

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am junior at Albukhary International University and in degree of Business Administration. Your job advertisement has extremely attracted me to work as Tele Sales Representative (TSR) in your company. I am keen to associate with communication and would welcome the opportunity to contribute my abilities to this position.

To be a successful TSR, the first thing should be highlighted is communication skill which is also one of your requirements. Confidently to express, I fit for this position since I have trained myself and attained excellent communication skills through the activities I have organized and participated. At the same time, I am 21 years old which matches your age limit. Furthermore, your job also requires minimum Bachelor’s qualification and I fulfil it that I am majoring degree of Business Administration. Surprisingly, I have achieved marvelous grade in my English study during Intensive English Program and Foundation Studies Program so that I speaks fluent English. It would cause any inconvenience that your customer will be in UK because I am able to use online calling which is cost efficient and can directly reach customers.

I am confident that my background and skills match what you are looking for. Please do not hesitate to contact me with any additional questions at phone number or email. Your time and consideration are highly appreciated.

Yours faithfully,

Zhang Jiguang (Mr.)Business Administration ScholarSchool of BusinessAlbukhary International UniversityAlor Setar, 05200 Malaysia


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Albukhary International UniversityJalan Tun Abdul Razak, 50200 Alor SetarKedah, Malaysia

November 18, 2013

Icon MarketingD-Ground, People's Colony No1, Faisalabad

Dear Sir/Madam,

You seem to be in need of Tele Sales Representative (TSR) to “generate sales for operations department” (Your advertisement, 2013). Your job requires minimum bachelor qualification, fluent spoken English, communication skills and age between 18 to 30 years old (Your advertisement, 2013).

You may interest to know that I am providing one month of internship service. I apply to work for you from 10 August 2014 to 10 September 2014. I can fulfil all the conditions required (see detail in attached resume).

Your company can benefit from my communication skills and experiences as marketing team manager, receptionist and the best speaker (see attached resume).You can directly contact me through Email, twitter and Linkedin at any time (details in attached resume).

Your marketing service seems to be excellent performance to generate more sales.

Yours faithfully,

Zhang Jiguang Mr.）


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Zhang [email protected]

(+60) 12 267 9059Current AddressJalan Tun Abdul Razak, 05200 Alor Setar, Kedah, Malaysia

ObjectiveTo seek an work for which could apply and enhance communication skills

Education

Albukhary International University February 2012 - PresentBachelor of Business AdministrationGPA: 3.42/4.00

Gansu Electronic & Technical College September 2011Diploma in Information TechnologyCGPA: 93/100

Skills

Language: Fluent English, ChineseComputer: Proficient with Adobe Flash, Adobe Photoshop, Microsoft word, Excel, Powerpoint

ExperienceCareer Exploratory Trip (CET)Program Manager November 10 2013Organized 152 students to visit 12 international corporation in Kuala LumperPrepared documents needed for the programManaged whole process of registration and manipulated data

World Expo 2010 Shanghai (Palestine Pavilion)

Receptionist May 2010 – Sep 2010Represented Palestine Pavilion to present International Culture Night as best workerWell maintained the opening time of pavilion as crucial part of its reputation

Activities

Sejahtera Market in AiUCommunity Service in PedangEnactus National Exposition 2013 at PWTC, Kuala LumpurNational Singing & Dancing Competition 2012 at Nilai University


ORIGINAL

ZHANG JIGUANGCurrent Address: Jalan Tun Abdul Razak, Alor Setar 05200, Kedah, Malaysia

Permanent Address: No. 8, Zuola Village, Chengguan Town, Lintan, Gansu Province, China, 747500Website: My Career Portfolio Email: [email protected] Phone (Malaysia): +60 12 267 9059

WORK EXPERIENCES• Marketing Team Manager Enactus AiU March 2013 – Present• Represented Albukhary International University at the Enactus National

Exposition, Putra World Trade Centre, Kuala Lumpur• In four days sold RM3,000 worth of furniture made by prisoners of Penjara Pokok

Sena • Receptionist Shanghai World Expo May-Sep 2010• Awarded as Best Worker 2010

FORMAL TRAINING• Bachelor of Business Administration

Albukhary International University (Ongoing)• Diploma in Information Technology

Gansu Electronic & Technical College (Sept 2011)

CAREER SKILLS

• LanguagesFluent in EnglishFluent in Chinese Mandarin

• Information TechnologyFluent in Adobe FlashFluent in PhotoshopFluent in Microsoft Word, Excel and PowerPoint

AWARDS• Best Worker Award

Awarded by the World Expo Palestine Pavilion, Shanghai , Sep 2010• Best Speaker Award

Awarded by Insaniah University , Kuala Lumpur, Nov 2012


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mailto:[email protected]

ZHANG JIGUANG: LETTER OF TRANSMITTAL

Use second slice of bread.

Some people don’t like the use of “please find”.

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