F.O.A. 9.18.14F.O.A. 9.18.14• WRITE A PHENOMENAL THESIS STATEMENT ABOUT WRITE A PHENOMENAL THESIS STATEMENT ABOUT

WHY STUDENTS SHOULD OR SHOULD NOT BE WHY STUDENTS SHOULD OR SHOULD NOT BE ALLOWED TO WEAR PAJAMAS TO SCHOOL ALL THE ALLOWED TO WEAR PAJAMAS TO SCHOOL ALL THE TIME.TIME.• REMEMBER THE TRAITS OF A THESIS STATEMENT!REMEMBER THE TRAITS OF A THESIS STATEMENT!• ONLY THIRD PERSONONLY THIRD PERSON• AN ARGUMENTAN ARGUMENT• SHOW HOW YOU WILL SUPPORT ITSHOW HOW YOU WILL SUPPORT IT• FORMAL LANGUAGEFORMAL LANGUAGE

THESIS REVIEWTHESIS REVIEW1.1. WORLD HUNGER HAS MANY CAUSES AND WORLD HUNGER HAS MANY CAUSES AND

EFFECTS.EFFECTS.

2.2. FARMING PERSISTS IN APPALACHIA BECAUSE JOBS ARE SCARCE FARMING PERSISTS IN APPALACHIA BECAUSE JOBS ARE SCARCE AND FARMING IN THE INFERTILE SOIL IS RARELY PROFITABLE.AND FARMING IN THE INFERTILE SOIL IS RARELY PROFITABLE.

3.3. GRADES SHOULD BE ELIMINATED BECAUSE THEY CAUSE GRADES SHOULD BE ELIMINATED BECAUSE THEY CAUSE ANXIETY AND PUT TOO MUCH PRESSURE ON STUDENTS.ANXIETY AND PUT TOO MUCH PRESSURE ON STUDENTS.

4.4. WHAT CAN BE DONE TO REDUCE VIOLENCE IN SCHOOLS? WHO IS WHAT CAN BE DONE TO REDUCE VIOLENCE IN SCHOOLS? WHO IS TO BLAME – THE SCHOOLS, THE PARENTS, OR SOCIETY IN GENERAL?TO BLAME – THE SCHOOLS, THE PARENTS, OR SOCIETY IN GENERAL?

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• TRANSITIONS FROM THE HOOK TO THE TRANSITIONS FROM THE HOOK TO THE THESIS. THESIS. • COULD BE MORE THAN ONE SENTENCECOULD BE MORE THAN ONE SENTENCE• USUALLY JUST ADDITIONAL INFORMATION USUALLY JUST ADDITIONAL INFORMATION

THESIS STATEMENTTHESIS STATEMENT

•YOU ALREADY YOU ALREADY KNOW THIS ONE!KNOW THIS ONE!• BUT WHAT SHOULD WE WRITE IN OUR BUT WHAT SHOULD WE WRITE IN OUR

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• THE FINAL BELL RINGS. IT’S THE LAST DAY OF THE FINAL BELL RINGS. IT’S THE LAST DAY OF SCHOOL, AND SUMMER HAS FINALLY COME! SCHOOL, AND SUMMER HAS FINALLY COME! STUDENTS DON’T HAVE TO THINK ABOUT SCHOOL STUDENTS DON’T HAVE TO THINK ABOUT SCHOOL FOR AT LEAST ANOTHER 2 1/2 MONTHS. THAT IS FOR AT LEAST ANOTHER 2 1/2 MONTHS. THAT IS THE WAY IT SHOULD ALWAYS BE. SCHOOLS THE WAY IT SHOULD ALWAYS BE. SCHOOLS SHOULD CONTINUE USING THE TRADITIONAL SHOULD CONTINUE USING THE TRADITIONAL CALENDAR AND NOT A YEAR-ROUND SCHEDULE. CALENDAR AND NOT A YEAR-ROUND SCHEDULE. THERE ARE NUMEROUS DOWNSIDES TO YEAR-THERE ARE NUMEROUS DOWNSIDES TO YEAR-ROUND SCHOOLING. IT HAS NO POSITIVE EFFECTS ROUND SCHOOLING. IT HAS NO POSITIVE EFFECTS ON EDUCATION, IT ADDS TO COSTS, AND IT ON EDUCATION, IT ADDS TO COSTS, AND IT DISRUPTS THE LONG-AWAITED SUMMER VACATION.DISRUPTS THE LONG-AWAITED SUMMER VACATION.

• THE FINAL BELL RINGS. IT’S THE LAST DAY OF THE FINAL BELL RINGS. IT’S THE LAST DAY OF SCHOOL, AND SUMMER HAS FINALLY COME! SCHOOL, AND SUMMER HAS FINALLY COME! STUDENTS DON’T HAVE TO THINK ABOUT SCHOOL STUDENTS DON’T HAVE TO THINK ABOUT SCHOOL FOR AT LEAST ANOTHER 2 1/2 MONTHS. THAT IS FOR AT LEAST ANOTHER 2 1/2 MONTHS. THAT IS THE WAY IT SHOULD ALWAYS BE. SCHOOLS THE WAY IT SHOULD ALWAYS BE. SCHOOLS SHOULD CONTINUE USING THE TRADITIONAL SHOULD CONTINUE USING THE TRADITIONAL CALENDAR AND NOT A YEAR-ROUND SCHEDULE. CALENDAR AND NOT A YEAR-ROUND SCHEDULE. THERE ARE NUMEROUS DOWNSIDES TO YEAR-THERE ARE NUMEROUS DOWNSIDES TO YEAR-ROUND SCHOOLING. ROUND SCHOOLING. IT HAS NO POSITIVE EFFECTS IT HAS NO POSITIVE EFFECTS ON EDUCATION, IT ADDS TO COSTS, AND IT ON EDUCATION, IT ADDS TO COSTS, AND IT DISRUPTS THE LONG-AWAITED SUMMER VACATION.DISRUPTS THE LONG-AWAITED SUMMER VACATION.

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• A DICTIONARY CONTAINS A DEFINITION OF A DICTIONARY CONTAINS A DEFINITION OF FRIENDSHIP SOMEWHERE IN THE F’S BETWEEN FRIENDSHIP SOMEWHERE IN THE F’S BETWEEN THE WORDS “FEAR” AND “FRIDAY.” AN THE WORDS “FEAR” AND “FRIDAY.” AN ENCYCLOPEDIA SUPPLIES INTERESTING FACTS ON ENCYCLOPEDIA SUPPLIES INTERESTING FACTS ON FRIENDSHIP. BUT ALL THE DEFINITIONS AND FRIENDSHIP. BUT ALL THE DEFINITIONS AND FACTS DO NOT CONVEY WHAT FRIENDSHIP IS FACTS DO NOT CONVEY WHAT FRIENDSHIP IS REALLY ALL ABOUT. IT CANNOT BE UNDERSTOOD REALLY ALL ABOUT. IT CANNOT BE UNDERSTOOD THROUGH WORDS OR EXAGGERATIONS. THE THROUGH WORDS OR EXAGGERATIONS. THE ONLY WAY TO UNDERSTAND FRIENDSHIP IS ONLY WAY TO UNDERSTAND FRIENDSHIP IS THROUGH EXPERIENCE. IT IS AN EXPERIENCE THROUGH EXPERIENCE. IT IS AN EXPERIENCE THAT INVOLVES ALL THE SENSES.THAT INVOLVES ALL THE SENSES.

• A DICTIONARY CONTAINS A DEFINITION OF A DICTIONARY CONTAINS A DEFINITION OF FRIENDSHIP SOMEWHERE IN THE F’S BETWEEN FRIENDSHIP SOMEWHERE IN THE F’S BETWEEN THE WORDS “FEAR” AND “FRIDAY.” AN THE WORDS “FEAR” AND “FRIDAY.” AN ENCYCLOPEDIA SUPPLIES INTERESTING FACTS ON ENCYCLOPEDIA SUPPLIES INTERESTING FACTS ON FRIENDSHIP. BUT ALL THE DEFINITIONS AND FRIENDSHIP. BUT ALL THE DEFINITIONS AND FACTS DO NOT CONVEY WHAT FRIENDSHIP IS FACTS DO NOT CONVEY WHAT FRIENDSHIP IS REALLY ALL ABOUT. IT CANNOT BE UNDERSTOOD REALLY ALL ABOUT. IT CANNOT BE UNDERSTOOD THROUGH WORDS OR EXAGGERATIONS. THE THROUGH WORDS OR EXAGGERATIONS. THE ONLY WAY TO UNDERSTAND FRIENDSHIP IS ONLY WAY TO UNDERSTAND FRIENDSHIP IS THROUGH EXPERIENCE. THROUGH EXPERIENCE. IT IS AN EXPERIENCE IT IS AN EXPERIENCE THAT INVOLVES ALL THE SENSES.THAT INVOLVES ALL THE SENSES.

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THOUSANDS OF YEARS OF HUMAN HISTORY. EMBEDDED IN ITS HISTORY ARE THE MANY ERAS OF MAN WHICH HAVE CONSTRUCTED OUR MODERN LEARNING, ART, BELIEFS, AND ORDER. THE MIDDLE AGES, ALTHOUGH REPRESENTED AS “DARK”, BACKWARDS, AND IDLE, WERE IN FACT A BRIDGE LINKING THE CLASSICAL AND MODERN WORLD. MEDIEVAL SOCIETY MAY NOT HAVE BEEN IN A SENSE GLORIOUS, BUT THE ERA OF ITSELF WAS A PRIME FOUNDATION OF THE MODERN WORLD’S NEWFOUND STABILITY, A REVIVAL OF THE LAW AND TEACHINGS FROM THE CLASSICAL ERA, A REINVESTMENT AND REFORM IN THE CHURCH, AND A PRECURSOR TO THE GOLDEN AGE OF ART.

• THE HISTORY OF THE MODERN WORLD DERIVES FROM THOUSANDS OF YEARS OF HUMAN HISTORY. EMBEDDED IN ITS HISTORY ARE THE MANY ERAS OF MAN WHICH HAVE CONSTRUCTED OUR MODERN LEARNING, ART, BELIEFS, AND ORDER. THE MIDDLE AGES, ALTHOUGH REPRESENTED AS “DARK”, BACKWARDS, AND IDLE, WERE IN FACT A BRIDGE LINKING THE CLASSICAL AND MODERN WORLD. MEDIEVAL SOCIETY MAY NOT HAVE BEEN IN A SENSE GLORIOUS, BUT THE ERA OF ITSELF WAS A PRIME FOUNDATION OF THE MODERN WORLD’S NEWFOUND STABILITY, A REVIVAL OF THE LAW AND TEACHINGS FROM THE CLASSICAL ERA, A REINVESTMENT AND REFORM IN THE CHURCH, AND A PRECURSOR TO THE GOLDEN AGE OF ART.