Essay 7People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kinds of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

It is true that people tends to refuse to adjustments which are popularly believed to bring more risks than benefits to their lives. Although there will be undoubtedly be some negative consequences of this trend, societies can take steps to mitigate this problem.

The biggest threat caused by changes resistance is limited opportunity for personal development and organization’s growth. It is evident that chances for individual’s improvement would be restrained if one was hesitant to accept to new ideas or innovative technological advances. Smart-phone, for instance, is obviously a magical yet handy gadget these days. If we refused to switch from using feature phones to smart-phones, our work and study’s productivity and efficiency might have been affected. Another area of concern might include the lack of success for organizations. Research findings have shown that employers generally face difficulties managing the corporations in which employees are reluctant to changes. Consequently, their businesses gradually fall behind the competitors.

I believe that there are several useful actions to solve the above mentioned problems. Firstly, the most feasible solution would be to encourage changes little by little. In other words, they can be divided into small steps or phases. By doing this, we can hopefully measure the effects that these changes bring us; therefore, step-by-step modifications for these changes would be provided timely. A further step could be to promote innovations together with clear rationale. As a result, people can probably be more convinced that these alternatives are far better compared to the current ones and they can be more receptive to new ideas in the future.

In conclusion, the areas of concerns when people resist to changes are clear. However, there are various methods that can be taken to tackle the problem.

Comments: IELTS Marking Criteria My comments Band score

Task Fulfilment Presents a clear position throughout the response. You addressed the task well giving an argument which was well supported. The introduction and conclusion were quite clear and concise. A balanced piece of writing with a clear opinion as to what the writer

7.0

thinks. Your third paragraph is a little unclear and it would benefit from a clearer context.

‘We should encourage people to make changes little by little/ changes should be encouraged to people’s lives in the following ways……..’

Cohesion and Coherence Logically organises information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout. Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph. Good cohesion within sentences and between paragraphs. Everything is very well connected. The flow is good and logical.

7.5 / 8.0

Lexical resource Uses a wide range of vocabulary fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings. Good use of collocation and more uncommon phrases. A high level of sophistication and a very good range of vocabulary. Some care is needed with using nouns as adjectives – this is not always possible. Occasional mistakes with collocation.

7.5

Grammatical Range

and accuracy

Uses some complex structures. Has good control of grammar and punctuation but makes a few errors – these are not big mistakes. Some

issues with plural +s. 7.0

Overall grade 7.5 – A very good with a very high level of language. In terms of consistency we need to keep in mind the context – in paragraph 3 – the tone and context seems more general; you need to make sure the reader knows: who; how; where; when.