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Academic Literacies 2
Lecture Week 10
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Lecture outline
Feedback on drafts
Revision
Editing and proofreading Sentence structure
Word choice/language use
Conciseness
Clarity Editing and proofreading a reference list
Tutorial
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Portfolio Stage 3 (Week 12)
Following the peer-review sessions (Weeks7 and 9), you will be expected to take onboard the feedback from your peer and
the feedback from your tutor whenredrafting the assignment. This redraft willcomprise Stage 3 of the portfolio.
A copy of the redraft of both assignments
should be e-mailed to your tutor beforeclass in Week 12.
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Feedback on draftsIntroductions No context given No clear organising principle (thesis statement,
research question) No indication of the organisation Overstating your aimStructure Poor paragraphing
Poor sentence structure Pronoun reference unclear Poor signposting Short paragraphs ...
Referencing
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Examples
³I chose to study this because « I decidedthat I would analyse and describe « I amstudying « I felt it was important for me
to understand « ³
³I chose this statement because I wasvery intrigued by « I have been fascinatedby « I believe that « I thoroughly lookforward to researching and investigatingthis theory further for the purpose of thisproject.´
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Examples
³For this assignment I must write acritique of an argument written in the IrishTimes.´
³This paper and I will «´
³I will undergo an analysis «´
³« which I feel is an important feature of
«´ ³« I will see if I can see if these theories
«´
³ « we look at « ³
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Examples
Anarchy like Machiavellianism usuallyconjures up unflattering images such asthe hooded individual holding explosives
ready to destroy the foundations of society, however there is also thepoliticised and secure version of anarchy,anarchism first conceived in the
awakening of the French Revolution andcarried on by numerous academics andadvocates of anarchy into its modernrepresentation.
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Examples
³Although the tool which was used soeffectively to spread these views rapidlywas the printing press.´
³There are frequent references to thearchitecture, and the social functions of the house.´
³The Backing for the Warrant is evident in
the fifth paragraph.´ ³As Behn is the narrator we only see
Oroonoko through her eyes and throughher eyes we as the reader learn that the
main character is a true great hero.´
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Examples
³I believe this is the most affective way forher«´
³« language and gender and how it effects
our society´ ³Its difficult to deduce whether or not « ´
³³Many researchers «´ ³Many scientistsbelieve´
³This issue«´
³Alpha Behns shot novel «´
³Some would describe media violence as a
µdrug¶. (Murray, J.P. (2008) µMedia Violence¶)´
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The writing process
Drafting
RevisionEditing and
proofreading
Pre-writing
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Revision
What is the thesis?
Who is the audience?
Have you fulfilled the assignment¶srequirements?
Have you written the paper according tothe required conventions?
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Revision
Revising the structure
Introduction
A clear logical structure
Your arguments / evidence
Conclusion
Revising the research methodology/designand methods
Revising the content
Accuracy
Style
Use of words
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Revising the structure
Introduction
Have you stared what you are doingand why?
Have you outlined the structure? Have you mapped the plan?
Does the introduction engage thereader¶s interest?
Does the essay introduce issues that itdoes not develop?
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Revising the structure
A clear logical structure
Did you lead the reader clearly through thepaper?
Did you follow the map outlined in theintroduction?
Did you give directions to the reader?(check coherence, topic sentences and
transition signals)
Have you delivered on all your promises?
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Revising the structure
Your arguments / evidence
Is each argument developed sufficiently?
Do you give enough evidence to support
your argument? Do you use the appropriate language to
reflect the evidence?
Is the content of each paragraph relevant?
Does irrelevant information get in the way? Is their anything that might damage your
credibility?
Conclusion
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Revising the
research methodology/design
Is the methodology appropriate?
Are the following clear and appropriate?
Sampling strategy
Data collection
Data analysis
Are the findings presented clearly?
Are the findings supported by sufficientdata?
How important are the findings?
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Revising the content
Accuracy
Facts: Is the content accurate?
Quotations: Is it clear which ideas aremine / those of others?
Are all sources and referencesacknowledged?
Is everything in thebibliography/reference list?
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Revising the content
Style / use of words Are there words, phrases, sentences or
paragraphs that are unnecessary? Will the reader get lost in long sentences? Are there any obscure / ambiguous
words? Is the appropriate voice used? Are there unnecessary modifiers?
Final read Does it flow smoothly / read well? Is it interesting? Is the pace / rhythm appropriate? Does it look neat and professional?
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Editing and proofreading
This is the careful editing of each line andeach graphic to ensure that the material isexpressed in simple, clear correct English
Checking errors in spelling, punctuation,grammar, format, sentence structure
Proofreading is not editing in the broadersense ± it is an effort to achieve
correctness in the elements mentionedabove
Correctness is the most importantcriterion of excellence
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Editing a reference list
Check that in-text dates and pagenumbers match reference list
Only enter names in reference list that
you have mentioned in your text ± it¶snot a bibliography
Make sure that if a name is mentionedin the document that is in included in
the reference list Do a separate edit of your reference
list, checking everything matches,everything is included and it is
consistent