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Show Don’t Tell
Thinking About Emotions
What do you think it
means to show but not
tell?
LO: To empathise with a character’s feelings using emotive language
Think of an emotion in your head
Now, think of an action to represent that
emotion
E.g. angry- making fists into balls, pacing up
and down and frowning
Emotion Examples:
Excited, anger, amused, shock, fear, curiosity,
relief, embarrassment, sadness
The next slides show an emotion and then things someone might do if they
are experiencing this emotion.
You could get your acting hats on and act out what each emotion shows as
you read through the slides.
Only spend 5 – 10 minutes on this as this is a starter activity – your main
task will come later
Excited
talkative,
pacing around,
rubbing hands,
eyes darting around,
big smiles,
hugging,
shaking hands,
punching someone on the arm,
giggles,
victory dance,
staring into the distance,
group feeling of joy.
Amused
smiling,
eyes wide,
head up,
walking quickly,
friendly,
talkative,
using arms a lot,
throwing head back,
cupping the cheeks,
holding ribs,
holding hand up to stay stop,
covering the mouth,
trying to keep a straight
face,
bouncing on toes,
breathlessness,
tapping with fingers.
Fear
dry mouth,
biting lip,
wanting to run,
gasping for air,
cold sweat,
talking non stop,
dizziness,
shivery skin,
flinching at noises,
shaking,
shrill voice,
stuttering voice.
crouching
tip-toeing
hands up
Anger
breathing deeply,
picking fights,
sarcasm,
pounding fists,
prodding finger,
deeper louder voice,
shoulders and head
forward,
eyes wide and glaring,
hands forward in fists,
red face.
Shock
yelp or light scream,
stiffening posture,
sudden coldness,
eyes wide and water,
head darting left and right
hand against chest,
hand against throat,
shaky soft voice,
grabbing someone’s arm for
comfort,
heavy feeling in the stomach,
tingling skin,
asking who, what, why questions.
Curiosity
straining to see,
ears and head pointing to
hear,
shushing others to be quiet,
head moving left and right,
wide eyes,
slower breaths,
lips parted slightly,
gasp of wonder,
small smile,
soft voice,
moving from left to right foot
Relief
smiling
wide grinning eyes
eyes closed
hand holding brow
blowing air out of mouth
holding hair with both hands
mouth open, hands wide
shaking head, disbelief
laughter
Embarrassment
looking down,
can’t look at other’s eyes,
hiding face with long hair,
walking quickly away,
grasping things against chest,
gritting teeth,
keep swallowing,
face goes red,
stammering,
panicky thoughts,
shoulders slumped,
glancing around anxiously for an
exit.
Sadness
downcast eyes,
red or watery eyes,
slow walk,
feeling sick,
crying, not wanting to talk,
jerky breathing,
shoulders slumped,
rubbing face,
rubbing hair,
downturned mouth,
avoiding other’s eyes.
A good writer shows emotions through describing actions
rather than using the emotional word.
Emotion Actions
Amused Smiling, eyes wide, head up, walking quickly, friendly, talkative, using arms a lot, throwing
head back, cupping the cheeks, holding ribs, holding hand up to stay stop, covering the
mouth, trying to keep a straight face, bouncing on toes, breathlessness, tapping with fingers.
Fear Dry mouth, biting lip, wanting to run, gasping for air, cold sweat, talking non stop, dizziness,
shivery skin, flinching at noises, shaking, shrill voice, stuttering voice.
Anger Breathing deeply, picking fights, sarcasm, pounding fists, deeper louder voice, shoulders and
head forward, eyes wide and glaring, hands forward in fists, red face.
Shock or
Surprise
Yelp, stiffening posture, sudden coldness, eyes water, hand against chest, hand against
throat, shaky soft voice, grabbing someone for comfort, heavy feeling in the stomach,
tingling skin, asking who, what, why questions.
Curiosity Straining to see, ears and head pointing to hear, shushing others to be quiet, wide eyes,
slower breaths, lips parted slightly, gasp of wonder, small smile, soft voice
Excited for
what’s to come
Talkative, pacing around, rubbing hands, eyes darting around, big smiles, hugging, shaking
hands, punching someone in fun on the arm, giggles, victory dance, group feeling of joy.
Embarrassment Looking down, can’t look at others eyes, hiding face with long hair, walking quickly away,
grasping things against chest, gritting teeth, keep swallowing, stammering, panicked
thoughts, shoulders slumped, glancing around anxiously for an exit.
Sadness Downcast eyes, slow walk, feeling sick, crying, not wanting to talk, jerky breathing, shoulders
slumped, rubbing face, avoiding others eyes.
How could we write sentences that
SHOW (through description) what was
happening in the canteen, without using
the word ‘chaos’.
Through activities like this, we
are building your imagination
and developing your descriptive
skills
Could change to…
In the canteen, empty chairs and tables were
strewn all over the place, sticky footprints
covered the floor and a mass of litter covered
the ground like a matted blanket. Conversation
filled the air and people were constantly
adding to the problems as each minute passed.
How is this better?
Why is emotive language important?
Using descriptive and emotive language creates
mental images in the reader’s mind
When readers are given a clear picture, they are
more engaged in the story (this draws them in
and makes them want to keep reading)
It will make your writing more descriptive and
interesting
As the footsteps tapped closer and closer,
Jack felt his stomach muscles tighten. He
flattened himself to the wall, the gritty
bricks against his cheek. Sweat chilled his
palms. He used both hands to steady
himself.
What is this description actually telling
us?
Why is it effective?
As the footsteps tapped closer and closer,
Jack felt his stomach muscles tighten. He
flattened himself to the wall, the gritty
bricks against his cheek. Sweat chilled his
palms. He used both hands to steady
himself.
The words in red help us to imagine and
picture what was happening to Jack as a
result of the worry he was feeling.
It is more effective than writing, ‘Jack was
nervous when he heard footsteps’
What is this description actually telling
us? Why is it effective?
TASK 1:Choose at least 3 emotions from the grid. For each one, write sentences that SHOW how the person is feeling.
Think about facial expressions, body language and actions that you can describe.
To challenge yourself, use a thesaurus
to use more sophisticated vocabulary
EXT: Include similes and
metaphors as part of your
descriptions
LO: To empathise with a character’s feelings using emotive language
TASTE
TEXTURE
– in your
fingers
and your
mouth
SMELL
SOUND 15 MINUTES
To challenge yourself, use a thesaurus
to use more sophisticated vocabulary
(Try to avoid opinions e.g ‘they are
delicious’, stick to informative
descriptions only)
TASK 2:
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