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You have written a good essay with a decent style of expression. Your content appears coherently connected with each other and it was a pleasant experience reading your paper, especially with excellent handwriting and neat & clean presentation. However, on conceptual front you could have added a discussion over, why is the case in India that everyone expect the government to empower people whereas, ideally speaking, the empowered people should be choosing/forming the government to safeguard their interest. This way, you could have targeted socio-political-cultural attitude behind this issue in Indian context. Something new with fresh appeal always keeps you on an advantaged side! Alignment Competence - Good! Context Competence - Good! Content Competence - Good! Language Competence - Good! Introduction Competence - Good! Structure-Presentation Competence - Excellent! Conclusion Competence - Good! Total Marks - 135/250 AMIT SHEKHAR