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DESCRIPTIVEESSAY

ASSIGNMENTTo describe a familiar object utilizing SENSE DETAILS only (sight, sound, smell, taste, touch);

To describe only the physical characteristics;

To appeal to the senses; to use concrete details

TOPICS1) Your dorm room or bedroom (the room in your home where you spend the most time);

2) Your automobile;

3) Your favorite place visited (funhouse, park, arena, beach, woods)

INTRODUCTION PURPOSE of INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPHS1) To INTRODUCE your subject

2) To IDENTIFY your central issue (thesis)

3) To ENGAGE the readers attention/interest

4) To PLOT the path of the essay: state purpose, justify argument, mention ideas forthcoming, establish order of those ideas

INTRODUCTIONHow to Write a Proper IntroductionGeneralize First: Do not just jump into your topicEase into the conversationGQS: Generalization QuoteQuipQuestionStatisticIntroduce your subject and then narrow to your particular topic with its specific focus (THESIS)

INTRODUCTIONFUNNEL EFFECTThis narrowing process is a form of DEDUCTIVE Reasoning, moving from the general to the specific.

It allows the writer to introduce a subject, focus on a particular topic, and express a thesis on that narrowed topic in a concise statement.

INTRODUCTIONFUNNEL EFFECTFrom this specific thesis statement, the writer then begins the process of supporting his/her claim throughout the body of the essay.

All of this is good for the reader, who can easily follow the train of thought, can establish accurate expectations, and can know exactly where the essay is going.

INTRODUCTIONFUNNEL EFFECTI have termed this deductive process the FUNNEL EFFECT

Here, the writer slowly narrows and logically progresses towards his/her thesis statement.

The transition then to the first Body paragraph is seamless, moving from the thesis statement to the first means of support (e.g., reason)

Visually, it looks like this

INTRODUCTIONFUNNEL EFFECT

INTRODUCTIONFUNNEL EFFECT: EXAMPLES

1) Owning a car these days is a necessity, for none more than the community college student. (OR) Everybody needs a car these days, especially students at a community college. Looking around the parking lot at Luzerne County Community College, I usually see three types of cars: the new, high-end graduation-gift cars, the modified sports cars, and the run-down first cars. Unfortunately, my car is one of the latter.... (thesis with clear Dominant Impression: My gray 1986 Oldsmobile Omega is a Bondo Buggy, especially in terms of its exterior, interior, and trunk.)


2) Most people have a place to go to feel refreshed when life gets too tough. (OR) Most people have a place they visit to get away from everyday life. It could be a car, a place in nature, or a room at home. For me it is my bedroom. (then comes the thesis with clearly stated Dominant Impression)


3) Each of us has seen a trashy car, maybe even in our own driveways.

4) Everyone today needs some sort of transportation. However, on a college students salary, that does not always work out to be the most attractive car. For instance, my car should be pictured in the dictionary next to the word junker.

INTRODUCTIONTHESIS STATEMENTComes at the end of the first paragraph (Funnel Effect)

TOPIC + MAIN IDEA + SUPPORTGeneral Example: Metallica (topic) is my favorite band (main idea) because of their lyrics, their live shows, and their distinctive sound (3 means of support).

INTRODUCTIONTHESIS STATEMENT

Example of a Thesis Statement for the Descriptive essay:

Three aspects of my car that make it a junker are the front seat, the back seat, and the trunk.

Contains the Dominant Impression (junker) and the aspects of your object that support it.

INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION*CHARACTERISTICS of a Dominant Impression:

*ADJECTIVE or NOUN* Declared in thesis statement Unifying or controlling aspect; this will link all of your sense details. Without this, your details are like marbles without a jar. The first adjective that comes to mind when you think of your car.

DOMINANT IMPRESSIONSENSE DETAILSENSE DETAILSENSE DETAILALL SENSE DETAILS RELATE TO & SUPPORT DOMINANT IMPRESSION

INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION*HOW TO CREATE a Dominant Impression:

Write the 5 senses on a blank sheet of paper with room beneath each to write; Then, list as many details that appeal to a particular sense under its name;Go from the front of the car to the back & from the outside to the inside;Then, see which details are related to each other, that paint a similar picture of the object, and group them together; What these details relate to will be your Dominant Impression.

INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION: EXAMPLESROOM: oasis of peace, tranquil refuge, feminine/masculine, reflects personality (*you must briefly define your personality; use the appropriate adjective before the word personality: creative personality, artistic temperament), reflects my musical tastes, disaster area, pig sty

INTRODUCTIONDOMINANT IMPRESSION: EXAMPLESCAR:total embarrassment, Bondo Buggy, off-road monster, Junk Mobile, typical college students (in terms of mess, neglect, ...), typical first car (in terms of price, efficiency...), The Black Beauty, The Polar Beargiant toy, sporty car, Daddys car, accessorized car (Pimp My Ride) (tricked out)

INTRODUCTIONHelpful Websites When Writing Introductionshttp://www.gmu.edu/departments/writingcenter/handouts/introcon.html

http://www.taft.cc.ca.us/newTC/Academic/LiberalArts/OWL/INTRO.HTML

http://web.mit.edu/writing/Writing_Types/introstrategies.html

http://depts.gallaudet.edu/englishworks/writing/introconslu.html

INTRODUCTIONBy the END of the INTRODUCTORY PARAGRAPH, the reader should know exactly:

What your thesis is;How you will support your thesis;How you will order that support;What type of essay you are writing;What your purpose is for writing on this particular topic;

INTRODUCTION3 FINAL HINTS TO GET STARTEDFREEWRITING:Just start writing. Give yourself ten minutes and write whatever comes to mind. Do not worry about spelling, grammar, or punctuation. Do not even worry if you text makes sense; just write. Once you are done at the end of the ten minutes, then you can read what you have written, searching for the proverbial diamond in the rough, that redeemable idea with which to begin your essay.

INTRODUCTION3 FINAL HINTS TO GET STARTED2) WRITE THE BODY FIRST:Rather than not writing a word because you are having difficulty writing the Introduction, start by writing the Body of the essay first. This way, you at least have something written. When you are done with the bulk of the paper, return the Introduction and Conclusion paragraphs. Perhaps something arose in the Body that suggests a way to begin and end the paper, or perhaps a context logically follows from what you wrote. If you are still stuck, ask ME.

INTRODUCTION3 FINAL HINTS TO GET STARTED3) WORKING BACKWARDS FROM THE THESIS STATEMENT:What is your THESIS? topic + main idea + supportMy favorite types of video games include first-person shooters, stealth-action games, and fantasy games.What is your TOPIC? (video games)What CATEGORY would your topic fall under? (hobbies, spare time, recreation)

INTRODUCTION3 FINAL HINTS TO GET STARTED*Now GENERALIZE on this CATEGORY. Everybody has a hobby with which to occupy his/her spare time. Some people enjoy playing sports, like running, basketball, and hockey, and others prefer non-physical recreation, such as chess and painting. Then narrow towards you. (For me, my favorite hobby is playing video games. My bedroom is littered with all types of games, from sports to superhero games.) Lastly comes your thesis. (However, my favorite types of video games include first-person shooters, stealth-action games, and fantasy games) EverybodySome peopleMeThesis

BODY: DOsQualities of a Strong Descriptive Essay

1)*** DESCRIBEDO NOT LIST!! Describe items found in your car/room; Lists do not describe; lists are more exemplary than descriptive;This is a descriptive essay using sense details, not an illustrative essay using reasons;Show rather than tell

BODYOTHER CHARACTERISITICS OF A STRONG DESCRIPTIVE ESSAY

2) SENSE DETAILS only: appeal to 5 senses, not just sightnumber, size, shape, texture, material, odor/scent, taste, sound


3) SIMILES & METAPHORS:use similes & metaphors to reinforce your D.I.EX: The smell is like OR The smell reminds me of wet, moldy leaves soaking in a crammed rain gutter for a month. (not a pleasing D.I.)rust=cancer, leprosy, flesh-eating bacteria; angry red beast: headlights= giant glaring eyes, grill=hungry chrome jaws, bumper=chin with battle scars (continue the metaphor throughout, only those details that support beastly)


4) Relate all SENSE DETAILS to your DOMINANT IMPRESSION: Repeat Thesis: Another aspect of my room that makes it a pig sty is ... (at start of paragraph)ADJECTIVES and ADVERBS that are synonymous with your Dominant Impression ADJ: busy=hectic, energetic, bustling, crowded, swarming, packed, jammed, overrun, popular, populous, active, lively


5) Use TRANSITIONS: between sentences (logically or spatially connect details in each sentence) AND between paragraphs (repeat thesis)

6) Use proper PN REFERENCE: *especially when generalizing in IntroductionEveryone has a place he/she could call his/her own. (see how the use of he/she gets old fastso go plural: Most people have a place they could call their own.)


7)DICTIONuse creative, selective, and pointed details & words (employ concrete/specific word choice)

8) Include an INTRODUCTION (see above) and a CONCLUSION (see below or consult the textbook)

9) Have a CLEAR VISION of the object (best to visit the place you will describe)


10) Have a CAREFUL SELECTION of DETAILS only those that support your DI

11) Maintain a consistent point-of-view (POV) no second person POV you


12) Develop a logical flow of ideas/detailsCOHERENCEcamera angle

13) *REMEMBER: this is NOT a why or because essay which is supported with reasons instead, use aspect, feature, characteristic, portion

BODYTAKE THE HINTSENSE DETAILS ONLY

ONLY THOSE SENSE DETAILS THAT SUPPORT YOUR DOMINANT IMPRESSION

IF ANY DETAIL DOES NOT SUPPORT YOUR DOMINANT IMPRESSIONNO MATTER HOW COOL OR INTERESTING IT MAY BEOMIT IT FROM THIS ESSAY

BODY: DONTs

1) ***DO NOT LIST items found in your car/room; this does not describe; lists are more exemplary than descriptive (this is a descriptive essay using sense details, not an illustrative essay using reasons) (show rather than tell)

2) Do NOT just throw ideas onto the page; make sure you have a Dominant Impression -- a clear purpose, a point; be a movie director and limit what you want the audience to see, to see it/them from your perspective

BODY: DONTs3) Do NOT describe attributes, feelings, personality (these are not sense details)

4) Do NOT use pat expressions/clichs (rough around the edges), contractions (Ive, its), poor diction (things, a lot), or abbreviations (especially CD=compact disc)

5) *NUMBERS: 3+ syllables/numerals=350, 1 or 2 syllables/numerals=six, twenty-five; year =1998, 2005)

CONCLUSIONPURPOSE of CONCLUDING PARAGRAPHS

To stress the importance/relevance of your thesis (SO WHAT?!)To repeat your purposeTo repeat your thesis (moral, point, lesson, Dominant Impression)To repeat your main ideasTo give the essay a sense of completeness/finalityTo leave the reader with a final impression (*this is your last chance to convince/persuade the reader, so make the most of it!)

CONCLUSION SUGGESTIONS

Discuss in full the lesson learnedSuggest larger implications of your findingsSuggest future papers or researchRefer back to your purpose and/or scenario mentioned in your IntroductionPose rhetorical questionsOffer a 3rd side to the issueEnd with a CLINCHER SENTENCE

CONCLUSIONCLINCHER SENTENCEJust as you ended each Body paragraph with a concluding sentence that wrapped up that point/paragraph, so too will you end the entire essay (Thesis Statement : Topic Sentence :: Clincher Sentence : Paragraph Clincher Sentence)Avoid the empty clichWrap it all upRelate to your point (for example, if you wrote a process paper on making a PB&J sandwich, end by saying that you are now hungry for one)

CONCLUSION Helpful Websites When Writing Conclusionshttp://www.gmu.edu/departments/writingcenter/handouts/introcon.html

http://depts.gallaudet.edu/englishworks/writing/introconslu.html

http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handoutsconclusions.html

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/conclude.html

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